2022届二轮复习高考英语读后续写写作指导：采用Sept.+ 2C原则续写花样滑冰初体验” 学案

2022届二轮复习高考英语读后续写写作指导：
采用Sept.+
2C原则续写花样滑冰初体验”
（2021.9浙江七彩阳光返校考）
利用Sept.+
2C原则续写浙江省“七彩阳光”新高考研究联盟
2021-2022学年高三上学期返校考英语试题之“花样滑冰初体验”
????很多学生拿到续写的文章，无从下手，慌慌张张就开始下笔写作，不注意所给文章的语言风格，急于把自己积累的一些语料生搬硬套。或者有些同学完全不顾文章中的clue，
只按自己的主观意愿续写，陶醉于自己的创作。还有的同学提炼不出文章主旨，也不懂得续写该如何结尾。因此，在前人总结的续写经验之上，我总结出了Sept.+
2C?的续写理念，S代表的是故事的setting，
E
代表
主角的情绪变化
?P
是整个文章的情节
?T
就是文章主旨。2C指得是
conflict
（冲突）和clue（线索）
学完本课学生的收获
1
学会分析所给文章的语言风格特点，并学会模仿延续；
2
学会解决文章中的冲突环节，提炼出本文的主旨；
3
善于寻找文章中的线索，快速安排两段分别需要什么样的故事情节
本节课特色
1?，
学会一个不落入俗套的结尾句
2
，
快速准确布局续写的2段内容，
每段3个场景，每个场景1-3句话，长短句夹杂。且固定自己得思绪不会写着写着就变了，提高效率。
教学步骤
1?谋篇：带领学生至少读文章3遍：第一遍粗读文章，得知故事大概情节，第二遍细读，抓住文章的冲突和线索，知道两段分别要安排什么内容，以什么样的方式做精彩结尾。第三遍，品味文章的语言特点，对好词好句做出标记，便于后续引用回扣原文和模仿
2?布局：引导学生列出本文的SEP.+2C，分别列出接下来2段要写的3个情境，提前把结尾句写好
3?遣词造句：根据自己所设的3个情境，开始写句子，在非谓语，动作链，语言描写，心理描写，环境描写，情绪描写之间交替进行，注意参照文本的语言特点
4?润色修改：某些句子是否可以用倒装，强调，虚拟，双重否定，修辞手法
5?撰写成文：参照自评标准自评或与同学互评
案例分析
2021年9?月?七彩阳光续写?“花样滑冰初体验”
Wrapping
paper
flew
everywhere
as
Cali
opened
her
gift.
The
box
had
a
picture
of
a
pretty
girl.
She
was
wearing
white
ice
skates
and
turning
around
a
frozen
pond.
Cali?looked
up
at
her
aunt
and
uncle
with
her
big
brown
eyes.
“Figure
skates?
Wow!
How
nice
of
you!
But,"
the
little
girl
hesitated,“...
but
I
don't
know
how
to?skate.”
She
looked
embarrassed.
“Don’t
worry”
said
Aunt
Lisa.
“That's
the
fun
part
-
learning
how
to
do
it!”
“That's
right
said
Uncle
George“
We
will
take
you
to
the
ice?rink(冰场)
and
all
go
skating
together.”
“I
don't
know..."
said
Cali.
She
wasn't
too
sure
she
was
going
to
be
able
to
do
it.
Sometimes
she
had
a
hard
time?learning?new
things.
She
looked
again
at
the
happy
girl
on
the
box.
It
did
look
like?fun.
Cali
imagined
herself
moving
and
turning
on
the
ice
like
a
real
figure
skater
“Okay"
she
agreed.
“Let's
do
it!”
The
next
day
Cali
went
to
the
skating
rink
with
her
aunt
and?uncle.
Her
eyes
twinkled
and
her
face
lit
up
with
excitement
as
she
looked
at
the
other?skaters?around
her.
She
sat
down
on
the
bench
and
slipped
her
feet
into
the
skates.
Holding
the
strings
in
her
fingers,
she
could
not
figure
out
how
to
tie
them
up.“
I
don’t
know
how
to
do
it,"
she
said.
She
felt
sad
that
this
was
another
thing
she
couldn't
do.
“Let
me
show
you."
Her
aunt
bent
down
on
one
knee,
explaining
how
to
put
the
strings
around
the?small?hooks(钩子).
Then
she
tied
them
into
a
tight
bow.
"Now
you
do
the
other
skate
yourself.
I’ll
help?you
if
you
need
it.”
Cali?bent?over
the
skate
and
did
what
her
aunt
had
showed
her.
Her
tongue
stuck
out
of
the
side
of
her
mouth
as
she
paidattention.
After
a
few
tries,
she
worked
out
how
to
cross
the
strings
around
the
hooks.
Her
aunt
helped
make
sure
the
strings
were
nice
and
tight.
“You
did
it!”?smiled?her
aunt,
patting
Cali
on
the
back.
注意:
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好:
4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph1:“Time
to
hit
the
ice,"
her
uncle
said.
Paragraph
2:
Oof!
She
fell
down,
hard.
构思过程
第一?、该文本的语言风格及特色
1)?侧面描写，?突出人物的情绪
1
Wrapping
paper
flew
everywhere
as
Cali
opened
her
gift.
?突出作者迫不及待拆礼物的热切情绪
2
Her
tongue
stuck
out
of
the
side
of
her
mouth
as
she
paid?attention。突出作者专注且紧张的情绪
2)?语言或心理活动形成强烈的反差/矛盾心理
Cali?looked
up
at
her
aunt
and
uncle
with
her
big
brown
eyes.
“Figure
skates?
Wow!
How
nice
of
you!
But,"
the
little
girl
hesitated,“...
but
I
don't
know
how
to?skate.”
She
looked
embarrassed.
3)?语言描写，?非谓语带出相应的动作
“You
did
it!”?smiled?her
aunt,
patting
Cali
on
the
back.
为了避免出现?马尾巴猫式的续写，可以沿用文本的语言风格和特点
第二?Sept.+2C
Setting：???the
ice?rink(冰场)
Emotion：???I:
excited
??unconfident??hesitated
?imaginative
?expected
?scared
???proud
and
confident
?Uncle
and
aunt:??encouraging
??patient
??delight
Plot
:?收到花样滑冰鞋礼物开心又不安，Cali担心自己学不会新鲜事物，但礼盒上的照片实在诱人，想象自己就是那位花样滑冰的仙女，在叔叔和婶婶的鼓励下，Cali决定去尝试，怎么穿上滑冰鞋就让她够呛，好在婶婶示范教导，总算搞定。叔叔催着要开启滑冰啦…..
?她重重地摔倒………
Theme:??主旨确定之前我们应的留意文章中的clue和?conflict
?
?Conflict?：?Sometimes
she
had
a
hard
time?learning?new
things.
“I
don’t
know
how
to
do
it,"
she
said.
She
felt
sad
that
this
was
another
thing
she
couldn't
do.
一面是不自信，学不会新鲜事物的Cali，一面是鼓励学习花样滑冰的叔叔婶婶。
Clue：她学会了穿滑冰鞋，最后也一定学会，并有可能爱上花样滑冰，变成那个想象中在冰上滑行、旋转自如的仙女?。???
综上，本文的主旨??Cali?通过花样滑冰的尝试，打破心魔---学不会新鲜事物，最终变得自信、勇敢
Seeing
the
new
brand
skate,
she
felt
as
if
it
had
been
praising
her
and
saying
“Actually
,
you
are
quite
good
at
learning
new
things”
布局：续写2段内容安排，?每段3个场景，每个场景1-3句话，长短句夹杂
Paragraph1:“Time
to
hit
the
ice,"
her
uncle
said.
场景1?循声看去，叔叔已经滑到远处去了，
我跃跃欲试
场景2?婶婶耐心地教我滑冰动作
场景3?看到别人优雅地旋转，我也贸然尝试高难度动作
Paragraph
2:
Oof!
She
fell
down,
hard.
场景1?叔叔婶婶赶来，确认我没受伤
场景2?叔叔教我如何在冰上转圈
场景3?结尾升华主题
遣词造句?润色修改+撰写成文
下水作文?
Paragraph1:“Time
to
hit
the
ice,"
her
uncle
said.?Attracted
by
the
inspiring
words
,
she
turned
her
head
,
seeing
her
uncle
had
been
skating
skillfully
on
the
ice?rink.??（动作链）“Wow!
How
cool
it
is
!
But,"
the
little
girl
stared
at
the
new?skate?on
her
feet,“...
but
I
don't
know
how
to
start
”
She
looked
confused.
(语言描写，反差刻画矛盾心理)。Then
her
aunt
encouraged
her
to
step
on
the
frozen
pond
and
keep
both
knees
bending
down
slightly
to
keep
balanced.
（具体溜冰的细节动作）Following
the
tips
,
she
managed
to
glide
on
the
rink
smoothly
.
Glancing
other?ice?skaters,
singly
or
in
pairs,
perform
freestyle
movements
of
jumps,
spins,
lifts,
and
footwork
in
a
graceful
manner,
she
couldn’t
help
turning
around
on
the
frozen
ice,
with
her
arms
stretching
out
like
a
dancer.
(侧面描写她情绪由谨慎变得大胆)
Paragraph
2:?Oof!
She
fell
down,
hard.?Hearing
the
sound
of
splash
and
my
scream
,
my
uncle?and
aunt
charged
like
a
flash
towards
me.
Having
carefully
checked
me
to
be
fine,
they
got
to
know
the
reason
why
I
fell
down.
“It’s
not
impossible
for
you
to
turn
and
dance
like
a
real
figure
skater”
encouraged
my
uncle
,
patting?Cali?on
the
back
and
lifting
her
up
.?(语言描写，
非谓语带出相应的动作)?The
next
half
an
hour
witnessed
the
patient
guidance
from
uncle
offered
to
Cali—how
to
glide
,
how
to
shift
your
weight
and
how
to
Practice
the
one-foot
glide.(具体溜冰的细节动作描写)?Finally
,
to
her
great
surprise
,
she
made
it
.
?She
felt
a
great
sense
of
achievement
and
gratitude
welling
up
in
her
heart
and
surging
through
her.
（情绪描写）Seeing
the
new
brand
skate,
she
felt
as
if
it
had
been
praising
her
and
saying
“Actually
,
you
are
quite
good
at?learning?new
things”（赋予溜冰鞋人格化结尾，诙谐的语言提炼本文主旨，不落入俗套）