2022届高考英语作文：读后续写高考真题分析实践讲义（含答案）

读后续写高考真题分析
1.阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
The
Meredith
family
lived
in
a
small
community.
As
the
economy
was
in
decline,
some
people
in
the
town
had
lost
their
jobs.
Many
of
their
families
were
struggling
to
make
ends
meet.
People
were
trying
to
help
each
other
meet
the
challenges.
Mrs.
Meredith
was
a
most
kind
and
thoughtful
woman.
She
spent
a
great
deal
of
time
visiting
the
poor.
She
knew
they
had
problems,
and
they
needed
all
kinds
of
help.
When
she
had
time,
she
would
bring
food
and
medicine
to
them.
One
morning
she
told
her
children
about
a
family
she
had
visited
the
day
before.
There
was
a
man
sick
in
bed,
his
wife
who
took
care
of
him
and
could
not
go
out
to
work,
and
their
little
boy.
The
little
boy—his
name
was
Bernard—had
interested
her
very
much.
"I
wish
you
could
see
him,
"
she
said
to
her
own
children,
John,
Harry,
and
Clara.
"He
is
such
a
help
to
his
mother.
He
wants
very
much
to
earn
some
money,
but
I
don't
see
what
he
can
do."
After
their
mother
left
the
room,
the
children
sat
thinking
about
Bernard.
"I
wish
we
could
help
him
to
earn
money."
said
Clara.
"His
family
is
suffering
so
much.
"So
do
I,
"
said
Harry.
"We
really
should
do
something
to
assist
them."
For
some
moments,
John
said
nothing,
but,
suddenly,
he
sprang
to
his
feet
and
cried,
"I
have
a
great
idea!
I
have
a
solution
that
we
can
all
help
accomplish（完成）."
The
other
children
also
jumped
up
all
attention,
When
John
had
an
idea
it
was
sure
to
be
a
good
one.
"I
tell
you
what
we
can
do,
"
said
John.
"You
know
that
big
box
of
corn
Uncle
John
sent
us?
Well,
we
can
make
popcorn（爆米花）,
and
put
it
into
paper
bags,
and
Bernard
can
take
it
around
to
the
houses
and
sell
it."
注意：
1.
所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
When
Mrs.
Meredith
heard
of
John's
idea
she
though
it
was
a
good
one
too.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
With
everything
ready,
Bernard
started
out
on
his
new
business.
____________
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
文本解读
这是2020年7月份山东省新高考读后续写真题，是一篇记叙文。文章记叙了
Mrs.Meredith
和她的三个孩子帮助贫困家庭的
Bernard
赚钱的故事。在阅读文本时，我们要牢牢把握故事发展的三条线，即时间线、故事情节线和情感发展线。
时间线∶①One
morning，the
day
before→②after
their
mother
left
the
room→③for
some
moments→④when
John
had
an
idea...
故事情节线∶Mrs.Meredith住在一个小社区里，由于经济萧条;很多人都失业了，但是大家互相帮助共渡难关。好心的
Mrs.Meredith
经常去看望小区的穷人们，给他们送食物和药。有一天，她把可怜的一家人的情况讲给三个孩子（John，Harry，Clara）听;男主人生病，女主人在家照顾不能出去工作，他们的孩子Bernard想挣钱，但是不知道能做什么。听了妈妈的话，三个孩子都想帮助
Bernard，最后John
想到了一个好主意——做爆米花…
情感发展线：本文的情感应该是以"共情"、高兴为主。前四段写
Mrs.Meredith
帮助穷人，呈现的是一种热心、同情的心境;第五六段写的是三个孩子John，Harry，Clara
听了Bernard
的故事后，心中产生了共情，很想帮助他但是不知道怎么做，情绪低落;最后两段写的是
John想到了帮助
Bernard
的好主意，需要大家共同完成（we
can
all
help
accomplish），这时候孩子们的心情变得异常兴奋。而文章续写部分最后的结果从主线上来看应该是
Mrs.Meredith
和三个孩子们最后成功地帮助
Bernard赚了钱。所以整篇文章的情感线应该是常见的
Up一Down一Up模式。
关键信息、段首句解读
1.关键信息的解读
阅读是读后续写的起点，起点的质量高低直接影响着续写能达到的高度，所以要高质量地完成阅读理解。在梳理故事情节时，我们要带着5W1H（when、where、who、what、why、how）去厘清文本的内容和故事情节的发展脉络，把握住文本的关键信息。（如下表）
Who
Mrs.Meredith，John，Harrys
Bernar，Uncle
Johnt
,Claral
When
One
morning
Where
In
the
room
What
The
children
helped
Bernard
to
earn
money.
Why
Bernard's
dad
was
sick
and
his
mom
couldn't
go
out
to
work.
How
The
children
made
popcorn
and
Bernard
sold
it.
①写作中应注意，续写部分与原文在文体和语言上保持一致。本篇文章为记叙文，全文时态以一般过去时为主。
②前文中有动作描写（如
he
sprang
to
his
feet
and
cried?.
The
other
children
also
jumped
up
all
atrention.）、对话（如"I
wish
we
could
help
him
to
earn
money,"His
family
is
suffering
so
much."))等，续写时应考虑与前文语言风格一致。
2.首句的解读
第一段段首句
When
Mrs.
Meredith
heard
of
John's
idea，she
thought
it
was
a
good
one，too.表明
Mrs.Meredith
同意
John提出的建议，因此本段应该描写卖爆米花前的准备工作以及他们所需要的材料。
第二段段首句
With
everything
ready，Bernard
started
out
on
his
new
business
表明，Bernard开始要卖爆米花了。此时可以从两方面入手，其中之一是爆米花卖得很快。他很快就赚到了钱;另一方面则是爆米花卖得不顺利，但在孩子们的帮助下，Bernard最终赚到了钱。他非常感激
Mrs.Meredith
和她的孩子们。
写作思路
思路①
孩子们去
Uncle
John
家里借爆米花机器并学习怎么制作爆米花，而
Mrs.Meredith
出去买装爆米花的纸袋，并把
Bernard
带了回来。一切准备就绪，Bernard开始时很害羞;John
帮助他一起卖爆米花，然后赚到了钱，Bernard高兴并感谢他们。》思路2Mrs.Meredith
和孩子们一起去告诉
Bernard这个计划。他们买了机器和纸袋，学会了做爆米花。一切准备就绪，Bernard开始卖爆米花，赚到了钱。
运用Giyen-New
策略，我们根据原文本和首句（Given
information）提供的信息，采用围绕中心词问一些相关问题、回答问题（New
information）的方法，拓展我们的思路和角度，最终形成合理的故事情节线。
从续写第一段首句When
Mrs。Meredithhcard
of
John's
idea，she
thought
it
was
a
good
one,
too.
我们可以设问∶
①
What
did
Mrs.
Meredith
do?
??_________________________________________________________________
②
What
did
John,Harry
and
Clara
do
to
help
Bernard?
??_________________________________________________________________
③How
did
they
let
Bernard
know
their
idea?
??_________________________________________________________________
④How
did
Bernard
feel?
??_________________________________________________________________
然后进行详细地回答，我们就可以写出这样的一段文章∶
??_________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________根据续写第二段首句With
everything
ready，Bernard
started
out
on
his
new
business.
我们可以这样设问∶
①
When
Bernard
sold
popcorn,what
problem
would
he
meet?
??_________________________________________________________________
②
What
did
the
children
do?
??_________________________________________________________________
③
Did
Bernard
sell
popcorn
out?
??_________________________________________________________________
④
Was
Bernard
thankful
to
them?
??_________________________________________________________________
然后进行详细地回答，我们就可以写出这样的一段文章∶
??_________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
范文
范文1
When
Mrs.
Meredith
heard
of
John's
idea,
she
thought
it
was
a
good
one,
too.?So,
they
went
to
the
local
supermarket
together.
They
bought
a
bag
of
corn
and
some
special
bags
for
popcorn.
When
they
got
home,
they
made
a
lot
of
popcorn
and
put
it
in
the
special
bags.
With
the
popcorn,
they
went
to
Bernard's
home.
They
told
Bernard
how
to
sell
the
porn.
Bernard
and
his
parents
were
very
grateful.
And
the
Meredith
family
also
felt
very
happy
to
help
this
family.
?With
everything
ready,
Bernard
started
out
on
his
new
business.?He
took
the
popcorn
around
to
the
houses
and
sold
all
his
popcorn.
He
earned
a
lot
of
money.
Then,
he
wanted
to
be
self-dependent.
Therefore,
he
asked
Mrs.
Meredith
to
teach
him
how
to
make
popcorn.
After
that,
not
only
did
he
sell
popcorn,
but
he
also
added
cream
and
salt
to
the
popcorn
to
make
it
taste
better.
Bernard
grew
up
to
be
a
remarkable
man.
He
did
not
forget
the
help
of
Meredith's
family,
and
he
also
did
what
he
could
to
help
those
in
need.
解析
第一步：读题，提炼中心，确定文章的体裁和题材，预测故事的发展。
第二步：分析两段所给出的首句开头，进行初步的构思，得出各段的主旨大意，并预测故事的结局。
第三步：结合文中划线的关键词语拟写草稿，写出合情合理、顺理成章的内容。所续写的内容在主题、人物、线索及语言风格上要与原文保持一致，表现为上下文自然衔接，前后情节互相照应。
高级句式：
1.部分倒装的使用，如After
that,
not
only
did
he
sell
popcorn,
but
he
also
added
cream
and
salt
to
the
popcorn
to
make
it
taste
better.等；
2.宾语从句的使用，如and
he
also
did
what
he
could
to
help
those
in
need.等；
高级词汇：
1.grateful
感激的；
2.self-dependent
独立自主的；
3.remarkable
卓越的；非凡的；
范文2
锑端
When
Mrs.Meredith
heard
of
John's
idea,she
thought
it
was
a
goadone,too.So
Mrs.
Meredith
took
out
that
big
box
of
corn.At
the
sight
of
it。the
children
jumped
up
and
down
with
joy.Then,they
paid
a
visit
to
Uncle
John,
borrowed
the
popcorn
machine
and
learned
how
to
make
the
most
delicious
popcorn.
Very
soon,
they
were
busy
popping
the
corn,while
Mrs.
Meredith
went
out
to
buy
the
paper
bags.She
came
back,followed
by
Bernard.They
shared
the
idea
with
him.
His
eyes
shone
with
excitement.
With
everything
ready,Bernard
started
out
on
his
new
business.At
first,Bernard
was
too
shy.
But
John,a
smart
and
lovely
boy,helped
him
to
sell
their
popcorn
from
door
to
door,
It
was
its
sweet
smell
that
made
it
popular.
In
the
evening,
their
popcorn
was
sold
out.
Stars
appeared
in
the
sky,
twinkling
their
eyes
at
them
in
happiness.Holding
the
money,so
moved
was
Bernard
that
he
cenld
hardly
speak,but
his
bright
smiling
face
spoke
for
him.
Bernard
hugged
John
tightly.Sometimes
our
small
action
can
make
a
great
difference
to
others.
When
Mrs.Meredith
heard
of
the
idea,she
thought
it
zeas
a
gvodl
one
too.They
hurried
to
tell
Bernard
the
great
idea.
Whem
he
heard
it,an
extreme
happiness
doinated
his
heart
immediately。Then
Mrs.
Neredith
together
with
four
kids
made
their
way
to
a
supermarket,bought
a
popcorn
machine
and
some
paper
bags,and
went
home.
It
wasn't
long
before
they
could
make
delicious
popcorn.
Bathed
in
the
sunshine,they
put
the
paper
bags
filled
with
popcorn
into
a
basket
in
exciternent.
With
everything
ready,Bernard
started
owt
on
his
nerw
business.The
popcorn
was
so
sweet
that
it
was
sold
out
in
a
short
time，Berard
ret我rned
with
an
epfy
basket,sOMe
cOins
in
his
hand,He
held
the
coins
tightly,tears
rolling
down
without
control.
Since
then,every
Saturday
morning,John
saw
to
it
that
the
corn
was
all
popped,the
paper
bags
filed
and
arranged
in
the
basket
when
Bernard
arrived,Thanks
to
John,
all
things
went
well.
Even
a
small
act
of
kindness
can
make
the
world
better,