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读后续写之如何延续故事高潮
故事中的高潮(climax)也通常是故事的转折点(turning
point)，是指故事达到最紧张或扣人心弦的那一部分。高潮有时候是剧情中的“危机”点。有时它只是达到关键时刻或者转折点时，发生了一些事情，或者人物必须做出决定，从而导致一个结果或其他。营造故事发展的高潮可以通过营造冲突实现。冲突带来紧迫感，因此营造冲突是一种有效地将故事推向情节发展的高潮的方式。
在英语读后续写中，我们可以可通过营造：①人物之间的冲突(人物观点不同，竞争需要等)；②人物与环境之间的冲突；③增加障碍，让人物克服挑战；④放大内心活动冲突也有助于设置一个高度紧张和不确定的气氛。
例如，如2020浙江高考7月卷中，续写第二段首句中提到that
very
moment，那么第一段可营造一个冲突，把此刻设计为整个经历中最危险的时刻，即北极熊马上要突破围栏冲进来了。
【典例赏析】
1.常见故事高潮
A
little
girl
has
been
searching
for
her
lost
dog.
All
of
a
sudden,
she
hears
a
bark
coming
from
around
the
corner,
and
she
looks
around
to
see
.
.
.
Kevin
has
worked
very
hard
to
try
out
for
the
soccer
team
at
school.
The
coach
has
posted
a
list
of
this
year's
team
members
on
his
office
door.
Kevin
walks
forward
to
look
at
the
list
.
.
.
.
Mary's
parents
have
been
discussing
whether
or
not
to
move
to
another
state.
They
call
Mary
and
her
sister
down
to
talk
with
them
about
their
decision
.
.
.
Lois
has
performed
in
the
state
gymnastics
finals.
She
waits
anxiously
to
hear
the
names
of
the
winners.
The
announcer
says,
"And
first
place
goes
to
.
.
."
2.文学名著中的一些故事高潮
The
deaths
of
Romeo
(who
kills
himself
because
he
thinks
Juliet
is
dead)
and
Juliet
(who
kills
herself
when
she
awakes
and
sees
Romeo
dead).
Romeo
and
Juliet,
Shakespeare
（《罗密欧和朱丽叶》）
When
Gaston
and
the
townspeople
come
to
attack
the
beast,
and
Belle
admits
her
love
for
the
beast.
Beauty
and
the
Beast,
Disney
（《美女与野兽》）
In
"The
Three
Little
Pigs,"
suspense
builds
up
until
the
confrontation
between
the
third
pig
and
the
wolf.
This
confrontation
is
the
climax.（三只小猪）
How
to
create
a
climax
of
a
story?
一、高潮冲突思维1：.增加外部冲突增加外部冲突是一种明显有效的可以达到故事高潮的方式。冲突带来紧迫感,
将故事推向必要的解决或崩溃。
1.角色之间的冲突
(人物观点差异,
竞争需要等)
【真题再现】
（2017年11月浙江英语高考）On
the
fourth
or
fifth
night,
we
had
trouble
finding
a
hotel
with
a
vacancy.
After
driving
in
vain
for
some
time,
Mom
suddenly
got
a
great
idea:
Why
didn't
we
find
a
house
with
a
likely-looking
backyard
and
ask
if
we
could
set
up
tent
there?
David
and
I
became
nervous.
开车找旅馆---徒劳无功---母亲建议搭帐篷在他人后院---David和我倍感紧张，心有不悦（母子的观点不一）
2.角色与环境之间的冲突
【真题再现】
（2017年6月浙江英语高考）
Then
Mac
heard
quick
and
loud
breathing
behind
him.
……he
saw
instantly
that
it
wasn't
a
dog
at
all,
but
a
wolf:
quickly
catching
up
with
him.
Mac's
heart
jumped.
……,
he
fired
the
spray
at
the
wolf.
A
bright
red
cloud
enveloped
the
animal,
and
to
Mac's
relief,
it
fell
back,
shaking
its
head.
But
a
minute
later,
…….
Then
it
……,
tearing
open
his
tent
bag.
He
fired
at
the
wolf
a
second
time,
and
again,
it
fell
back
……
Mac骑车独自行，路遇饿狼，与之搏斗，险象环生。（人（角色）----狼（环境）大战）
3.时间依赖的发展
：决策变得紧急
【真题再现】
（2017年6月浙江英语高考）The
car
abruptly
stopped
in
front
of
him.
"Get
into
the
car."
Paul
shouted
at
Mac.
Mac
jumped
off
the
bike
and
slid
into
the
car
without
delay
as
the
wolf
was
just
two
steps
away
and
was
about
to
tear
Mac
into
pieces.
What
a
narrow
escape!
骑车突停面前---急喊上车---Max上车避险---饿狼近在咫尺（此情此景，刻不容缓）
4.增加的障碍：人物角色必须克服
挑战,
以达到他们的目标
【真题再现】
（2018年6月浙江英语高考）But
before
we
jumped
off
the
horses,
we
found
that
we
had
been
off
the
beaten
track
and
got
lost.
We
had
no
idea
where
we
were
and
it
got
dark.
Exhausted
and
hungry,
I
wondered
if
we
could
find
our
way
back.
小兔突现---马儿受惊---草原迷路（障碍1）----天色渐黑（障碍2）----又累又饿（障碍3）----心理恐慌（障碍4）
二、高潮冲突思维2：放大内心冲突
放大内心冲突（你的角色的内心斗争）也有助于建立一个高度紧张和不确定的时刻。
【真题再现】
（2016年10月浙江英语高考）
Immediately,
an
absolute
darkness
ruled
the
forest.
Jane,
exhausted
and
scared,
lay
down
near
a
stone,
missing
her
family
at
a
distance.
All
the
fantastic
memory
crowded
in
and
she
couldn't
help
crying,
"Hadn't
I
quarreled
with
Tom,
walked
away
and
climbed
to
the
high
place,
I
wouldn't
be
trapped
in
this
awful
place,
confronted
with
the
danger
of
dying.”
She
regretted
with
endless
anxiety,
and
then
became
asleep
with
shining
tears
in
her
eyes.
夫妇争吵---独自行走---荒野走散---夜色渐黑---独处森林---阴森恐怖---后悔莫及（内心冲突的刻画）内心独白（往昔对比+虚拟语气使用+旁边描写是常见技巧之一）
三、高潮冲突思维3：使用环境描写增加不确定性
充分利用环境描写可以起到烘托故事高潮的作用，具体方法可以看上期读后续写微技能。当故事角色在碰到困难时候，我们往往要加大笔墨来描写故事环境的黑暗，恐怖和不祥。强化环境描写增强了高潮元素。我们感受到了紧张的倍增。
【典例赏析】
Immediately,
an
absolute
darkness
ruled
the
forest(黑暗).
Even
worse,
the
temperature
suddenly
dropped
dramatically.
(寒冷）
It
didn’t
take
long
for
the
forest
to
be
enveloped
in
darkness（黑暗）.
Her
rasping
breath
steamed（寒冷）
in
the
moonlight
and
her
throat
was
parched
from
thirst.
【检测训练】
1.
阅读下面材料,
根据其内界和所给段落开头语续写两段,
使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I
have
kept
a
watch
from
my
grandfather.
When
I
was
a
schoolboy，the
watch
hung
by
my
grandfather's
bed.
The
face
was
marked
with
elegant
Roman
numerals
and
the
case
was
gold.
It
was
a
splendid
watch
and
I
often
stared
at
it
longingly
sitting
with
my
grandfather.
He
would
often
ask
about
my
progress
at
school.
The
day
I
told
him
my
success
in
the
examinations，he
was
overcome
with
pleasure.
“You'll
be
going
to
a
new
school
next.
And
then
you'll
go
to
university，will
you？”he
asked.
“But
you'll
need
plenty
of
patience.
Patience
and
hard
work.
That's
the
way
to
succeed.”
He
took
off
the
watch
and
wound
it.
“It
was
given
me
for
fifty
years
of
faithful
service
with
my
firm，”
he
said
proudly.
Finally，he
handed
me
the
watch
due
to
the
progress
in
school.
I
held
it，feeling
its
weight.
As
I
was
leaving
him，he
said，“And
you'll
not
forget
what
I
told
you？”
I
was
suddenly
very
moved.
“No，Granddad，”
I
promised，“I'll
not.”
Arriving
home，my
mother
was
to
hold
it
in
trust
until
she
considered
me
old
enough
to
look
after
it，but
I
protested
so
strongly
that
she
finally
agreed
to
hang
it
where
I
could
always
see
it.
The
summer
ended
and
it
was
time
for
me
to
enter
the
new
school.
I
never
made
friends
easily
there.
One
boy，Crawley，was
a
well?to?do
fellow
whose
way
of
impressing
us
was
to
show
off
his
possessions.
His
bicycle
was
new；his
boots
were
of
the
best
hide；everything，in
fact，was
better
than
ours—until
he
brought
a
watch.
Crawley
said
his
watch
was
absolutely
the
finest
watch.
“I
have
a
better
watch，”
I
announced.
“Well，show
it
to
us，”Crawley
said
sneeringly(讽刺地).
“I'll
bring
it
this
afternoon，”
I
said.
“Then
you'll
see.”
I
rode
my
bike
home，wondering
how
I
would
persuade
my
mother
to
let
me
take
the
watch.
Luckily，she
stepped
outside
and
I
slipped
the
watch
into
my
pocket.
1.
续写词数应为150左石：
2.
请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph
1：
I
rode
my
bike
fast
to
school
after
lunch，excitement
through
me.
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Paragraph
2：
When
I
said
my
mother
couldn't
let
me
bring
the
watch，they
burst
into
laughter.
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2.
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
No
One
Will
Ever
Know
Karen,
Judy
and
I
were
the
last
ones
back
in
the
classroom
after
lunch.
All
of
the
other
sixth
graders
were
already
outside,
since
it
was
a
pleasant
spring
day.
“Look
at
what
I
found
this
morning
in
the
storage
cupboard
when
I
was
getting
out
some
art
supplies
for
Mrs.
Eiffler.”
said
Karen,
holding
up
a
wooden
box
filled
with
short
pieces
of
chalk
in
every
color
of
the
rainbow.
"Wow!
What
fun
it
would
be
to
write
on
the
chalkboard
while
everyone
is
outside.”
Judy
said.
“But
M
“s.
Eiffler
doesn't
allow
us
to
write
on
the
chalkboard.”
I
responded,
already
feeling
guilty.
“Don't
be
afraid,
Janet.
No
one
will
ever
know,”
said
Karen.
I
unwillingly
joined
my
friends
in
the
artwork,
but
was
afraid
of
being
caught.
I
knew
well
that
we
were
breaking
not
one,
but
two
class
rules.
The
second
rule-was
that
no
one
was
allowed
to
stay
inside
at
noon
without
a
written
excuse
from
home
if
the
weather
was
nice.
Trying
various
colors,
we
drew
houses,
trees
and
three-dimensional
boxes.
It
was
fun!
Then
Judy
had
an
idea.
"We're
all
right-handed.
Let's
see
who
can
write
our
names
best
using
our
left
hands.
Judy
and
Karen
picked
up
their
chalk
and
started
writing.
I
chose
a
white
piece
from
the
box
and
wrote
my
name.
“I
think
Judy
is
the
winner,”
said
Karen.
“Hers
is
the
best.”
“We’d
better
get
this
board
cleaned
off
before
Mrs.
Eiffler
comes
back,”
said
Judy,
erasing
our
artwork
from
the
board.
Everything
came
off
but
my
name!
In
disbelief;
I
looked
carefully
at
the
chalk
I
held
in
my
sweaty
hand.
It
wasn't
chalk
at
all,
but
a
small
piece
of
white
color
crayon.
My
mother
had
a
saying:
"
Fools,
names
and
faces
always
appear
in.
public
places.”
I
never
understood
fully
what
it
meant
before.
Now
I
did!
My
knees
felt
weak.
What
would
Mrs.
Eiffler
do
to
me?
And
the
teacher
would
be
returning
soon.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph
1
“Quick,
let’s
get
some
wet
paper
towels,”
said
Judy.
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Paragraph
2
We
were
just
slipping
into
our
desks
when
the
bell
rang.
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3.
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
In
December
2020,
Flores
Gonzalez
had
her
4-year-olds,
Luna
and
Gianella,
tie
their
lists
to
two
balloons
and
release
them
into
the
sky
above
their
home
in
Liberal,
Kansas.
It
was
their
way
of
reaching
Santa
Claus.
Flores
Gonzalez
thought
it
was
important
to
do
something
special
for
her
daughters
because
of
the
hard
year
they
had
during
the
pandemic
(大流行病).
The
schools
were
shut
down
and
she
was
out
of
work
for
more
than
two
months.
Everyone
seemed
to
be
in
low
spirits.
She
wanted
to
cheer
the
family
up
and
wanted
the
girls
to
feel
that
2020
was
another
year
spent
with
mom
making
beautiful
memories.
It
was
never
with
the
purpose
that
someone
would
find
the
balloons.
She
thought
the
balloons
would
just
float
away
and
disappear
somewhere
in
a
tree
nearby.
But
one
of
the
balloons
did
make
it
to
Alvin
Bamburg,
who
was
deer
hunting
in
Grand
Cane,
Louisiana,
in
late
December
when
he
spotted
a
balloon
tangled
(纠缠)
in
a
tree.
He
told
himself
he
needed
to
get
the
trash
out
of
the
woods.
However,
when
he
got
it,
he
noticed
a
folded
yellow
piece
of
paper
sealed
with
a
red
star
and
it
was
a
Christmas
list
from
a
girl
named
Luna.
She
had
asked
Santa
to
bring
her
candy,
a
Spider
Man
ball,
a
Frozen
doll
and
a
dachshund
(腊肠狗)
puppy,
which
was
her
most
desired
present.
The
holidays
kept
Alvin
Bamburg
and
his
wife
busy.
They
had
family
reunions
and
organized
several
charity
parties
to
help
whoever
needed
help
but
they
didn’t
forget
about
the
list.
In
early
January,
Bamburg
shared
his
discovery
with
family
and
friends
on
Facebook.
“I
would
love
to
know
when
it
was
launched.
It
looks
like
it
travelled
600
miles,”
he
wrote.
注意：
1.
续写词数应为
150
左右；
2.
请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
So
many
people
shared
the
post
that
it
eventually
reached
Flores
Gonzalez.
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After
months
of
communication,
it
was
time
for
the
Bamburgs
to
give
them
one
last
present.
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4.
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Father’s
Day
Chess
It
was
Dale's
third
Sunday
volunteering
at
the
retirement
home.
He
had
thought
it
would
be
a
good
way
to
give
back.
But
today
he
just
felt
tired.
While
on
a
short
break,
Dale
took
a
walk
through
the
garden.
There
were
people
sitting
on
benches,
chatting
together.
A
woman
sat
knitting,
looking
very
pleased
with
herself.
The
strands
of
brightly-colored
yarn
disappeared
quickly
through
her
hands.
Across
the
courtyard,
there
was
a
man
sitting
alone
at
a
table
with
a
chessboard
in
front
of
him.
Dale
watched
with
curiosity
as
the
man
would
stare
at
the
pieces,
then
move
them,
and
then
would
do
the
same
from
the
other
side
of
the
board.
On
his
way
home
after
the
day
had
ended,
Dale
found
himself
thinking
about
the
man.
How
he
was
hunched
over
in
deep
thought,
playing
a
game
against
himself.
How
odd,
he
thought.
Each
Sunday,
Dale
would
see
the
man
doing
the
same
thing.
While
everyone
else
talked
with
one
another
or
happily
carried
on,
the
man
would
sit,
slightly
bent
over
and
scratching
his
chin.
His
eyes
rarely
came
off
of
the
chessboard.
One
Sunday,
Dale
went
to
the
garden
on
his
break
expecting
to
see
the
man
at
his
normal
spot.
But
he
wasn't
there.
It
was
Father's
Day
and
there
were
many
visitors
at
the
home.
Dale
shrugged
and
thought
the
man
must
be
busy
with
his
family.
That
afternoon,
Dale
was
mopping
the
hallways
when
he
happened
to
pass
by
the
man's
room.
The
door
was
slightly
open
and
he
could
see
the
man
sitting
in
a
chair
next
to
the
window,
peering
out
at
the
courtyard.
Dale
knocked
lightly
and
asked
to
come
in.
The
man
nodded.
Dale
saw
a
collection
of
framed
photographs
on
the
bedside
table.
“Are
those
your
children?”
he
asked.
“Yes,
they’re
all
grown
and
live
far
away.
They
have
their
own
kids
now,”
he
replied.
Dale,
not
wanting
the
man
to
be
alone
on
Father's
Day,
had
an
idea.
注意：1.
续写词数应为150左右；
2.
请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Para.
1:
He
went
outside
and
got
the
chessboard
from
the
table.
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Para.
2:
Dale
was
glad
that
he
volunteered.
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5.
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Pam
Bales
planned
a
six-hour
hike
through
New
Hampshire^
Mount.
On
the
dashboard
（汽车仪表板）
was
a
detailed
plan
ensuring
she
could
return
before
the
arrival
of
some
forecasted
bad
weather.
Different
from
former
hike,
though,
this
time,
she
had
packed
for
almost
every
accident
and
intended
to
walk
alone.
At
about
8
a.m.,
she'd
checked
the
weather
forecast.
Bales
knew
from
experience
that
her
hike
was
realistic.
Besides,
she
had
two
emergency
plans
and
extra
layers
of
clothing
to
better
protect
her
core
temperature
as
conditions
changed.
Bales
felt
excited
as
she
walked
up
into
snowy
paths.
She
was
wearing
a
fleece
tank
top
（绒衣）and
hiking
pants,
and
no
gloves
or
hat
because
the
air
was
mild.
Thirty
minutes
later,
she
climbed
into
colder
air
and
deeper
snows.
She
now
was
in
a
quarter-zip
fleece
top
and
gloves.
At
10
a.m.?
the
weather
was
showing
its
teeth.
Bales
added
more
layers
to
resist
cold
winds
and
dense
fog.
Making
her
way
across
the
snow-covered
ridge,
she
noticed
something:
a
single
set
of
footprints
made
by
a
pair
of
sneakers.
Not
giving
them
much
thought,
she
walked
on.
By
11
a.m.?
Bales
was
getting
cold.
She
decided
to
return
to
her
car.
On
her
way
down,
she
again
spotted
the
sneaker
tracks,
which
suddenly
made
a
hard
left-hand
turn
off
the
trail.
Now
she
felt
genuinely
alarmed.
She
was
sure
the
hiker
lost
his
way
in
the
low
visibility.
If
Bales
continued
to
follow
the
tracks,
she'd
add
risk
and
time
to
her
return.
But
she
couldn't
let
this
go.
She
turned
to
the
left
and
called
out,
“Hello!"
Nothing.
Bales
followed
the
tracks,
rounded
a
slight
comer
and
saw
a
man
sitting
motionless.
He
wore
tennis
sneakers,
shorts,
a
light
jacket
and
fingerless
gloves.
His
skin
was
pale
and
he
had
a
glazed
（呆滞的）look
on
his
face.
uOh5
hello/5
Bales
approached
and
said,
"What's
your
name?”
The
man
didn't
react.
Obviously,
nothing
was
connecting
for
him
and
he
was
in
really
big
trouble.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150左右；
2
.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Bales
stopped
being
a
curious
and
concerned
hiker,
and
began
a
full-on
rescue
mission.
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Over
the
next
hour,
the
man
began
to
move
and
speak.
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6.
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Like
most
children,
I
took
my
parents
for
granted.
It
wasn't
until
I
became
an
adult
that
I
realized
their
desire
to
make
a
difference
in
the
lives
of
others.
Mama
and
Daddy
performed
their
angel
magic
with
neither
fanfare
(炫耀)
nor
a
desire
for
recognition.
Because
their
kindness
to
others
was
something
I
accepted
as
a
matter
of
course,
I
might
never
have
evaluated
this
aspect
of
their
personalities
were
it
not
for
an
event
that
my
mother
mentioned
in
passing.
Arizona
in
July
ushered
in
the
monsoon
(季风)
season,
which
was
in
full
swing
and
just
that
morning
had
hit
the
Southern
Arizona
desert
with
severe
thunder,
lightining,
rain,
and
high
winds.
Mama
and
Daddy
chose
to
spend
the
day
wandering
the
dry,
air-conditioned
mall,
having
a
bite
to
eat,
and
taking
in
a
movie.
It
seemed
a
nice
way
to
spend
a
Saturday
afternoon
while
leaving
the
storm
outdoors.
They
chose
a
casual
restaurant
for
lunch
and
were
reading
the
menu
when
their
waitress,
a
young
woman
in
her
mid-twenties,
approached
the
table
to
introduce
herself
and
take
their
order.
Mama
and
Daddy
noted
that
her
hair
was
damp,
as
were
her
clothes.
She
was
friendly
but
seemed
to
be
quite
tired.
Drawing
her
into
conversation,
they
learned
she
was
a
single
mother
and
a
college
student
working
two
jobs.
That
particular
day
had
been
unkind
to
her.
Her
car
broke
down,
forcing
her
to
walk
to
work
in
the
rain
and
wind.
She
was
concerned
about
how
being
without
a
vehicle
would
affect
her
ability
to
care
for
her
daughter
and
go
to
college.
Her
frustration
was
obvious,
and
the
day's
events
had
certainly
left
her
in
a
certain
amount
of
despair.
Yet,
her
comments
centered
on
ideas
for
solving
her
problems
rather
than
complaining
about
them.
Her
attitude
aroused
my
parents'
interest.
When
Mama
and
Daddy
finished
with
lunch,
they
said
goodbye
to
their
waitress
and
wished
her
well.
Her
plight
(困境)
and
attempt
at
a
positive
attitude
touched
them,
and
they
wondered
what
they
might
do
to
help
注意：1.
续写词数应为150左右；
2.
请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
They
had
time
before
the
movie
started
to
do
some
shopping;
so
they
walked
into
a
bookstore.
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The
waitress
opened
the
bag
and
found
some
bills
in
a
book.
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读后续写之如何延续故事高潮
故事中的高潮(climax)也通常是故事的转折点(turning
point)，是指故事达到最紧张或扣人心弦的那一部分。高潮有时候是剧情中的“危机”点。有时它只是达到关键时刻或者转折点时，发生了一些事情，或者人物必须做出决定，从而导致一个结果或其他。营造故事发展的高潮可以通过营造冲突实现。冲突带来紧迫感，因此营造冲突是一种有效地将故事推向情节发展的高潮的方式。
在英语读后续写中，我们可以可通过营造：①人物之间的冲突(人物观点不同，竞争需要等)；②人物与环境之间的冲突；③增加障碍，让人物克服挑战；④放大内心活动冲突也有助于设置一个高度紧张和不确定的气氛。
例如，如2020浙江高考7月卷中，续写第二段首句中提到that
very
moment，那么第一段可营造一个冲突，把此刻设计为整个经历中最危险的时刻，即北极熊马上要突破围栏冲进来了。
【典例赏析】
1.常见故事高潮
A
little
girl
has
been
searching
for
her
lost
dog.
All
of
a
sudden,
she
hears
a
bark
coming
from
around
the
corner,
and
she
looks
around
to
see
.
.
.
Kevin
has
worked
very
hard
to
try
out
for
the
soccer
team
at
school.
The
coach
has
posted
a
list
of
this
year's
team
members
on
his
office
door.
Kevin
walks
forward
to
look
at
the
list
.
.
.
.
Mary's
parents
have
been
discussing
whether
or
not
to
move
to
another
state.
They
call
Mary
and
her
sister
down
to
talk
with
them
about
their
decision
.
.
.
Lois
has
performed
in
the
state
gymnastics
finals.
She
waits
anxiously
to
hear
the
names
of
the
winners.
The
announcer
says,
"And
first
place
goes
to
.
.
."
2.文学名著中的一些故事高潮
The
deaths
of
Romeo
(who
kills
himself
because
he
thinks
Juliet
is
dead)
and
Juliet
(who
kills
herself
when
she
awakes
and
sees
Romeo
dead).
Romeo
and
Juliet,
Shakespeare
（《罗密欧和朱丽叶》）
When
Gaston
and
the
townspeople
come
to
attack
the
beast,
and
Belle
admits
her
love
for
the
beast.
Beauty
and
the
Beast,
Disney
（《美女与野兽》）
In
"The
Three
Little
Pigs,"
suspense
builds
up
until
the
confrontation
between
the
third
pig
and
the
wolf.
This
confrontation
is
the
climax.（三只小猪）
How
to
create
a
climax
of
a
story?
一、高潮冲突思维1：.增加外部冲突增加外部冲突是一种明显有效的可以达到故事高潮的方式。冲突带来紧迫感,
将故事推向必要的解决或崩溃。
1.角色之间的冲突
(人物观点差异,
竞争需要等)
【真题再现】
（2017年11月浙江英语高考）On
the
fourth
or
fifth
night,
we
had
trouble
finding
a
hotel
with
a
vacancy.
After
driving
in
vain
for
some
time,
Mom
suddenly
got
a
great
idea:
Why
didn't
we
find
a
house
with
a
likely-looking
backyard
and
ask
if
we
could
set
up
tent
there?
David
and
I
became
nervous.
开车找旅馆---徒劳无功---母亲建议搭帐篷在他人后院---David和我倍感紧张，心有不悦（母子的观点不一）
2.角色与环境之间的冲突
【真题再现】
（2017年6月浙江英语高考）
Then
Mac
heard
quick
and
loud
breathing
behind
him.
……he
saw
instantly
that
it
wasn't
a
dog
at
all,
but
a
wolf:
quickly
catching
up
with
him.
Mac's
heart
jumped.
……,
he
fired
the
spray
at
the
wolf.
A
bright
red
cloud
enveloped
the
animal,
and
to
Mac's
relief,
it
fell
back,
shaking
its
head.
But
a
minute
later,
…….
Then
it
……,
tearing
open
his
tent
bag.
He
fired
at
the
wolf
a
second
time,
and
again,
it
fell
back
……
Mac骑车独自行，路遇饿狼，与之搏斗，险象环生。（人（角色）----狼（环境）大战）
3.时间依赖的发展
：决策变得紧急
【真题再现】
（2017年6月浙江英语高考）The
car
abruptly
stopped
in
front
of
him.
"Get
into
the
car."
Paul
shouted
at
Mac.
Mac
jumped
off
the
bike
and
slid
into
the
car
without
delay
as
the
wolf
was
just
two
steps
away
and
was
about
to
tear
Mac
into
pieces.
What
a
narrow
escape!
骑车突停面前---急喊上车---Max上车避险---饿狼近在咫尺（此情此景，刻不容缓）
4.增加的障碍：人物角色必须克服
挑战,
以达到他们的目标
【真题再现】
（2018年6月浙江英语高考）But
before
we
jumped
off
the
horses,
we
found
that
we
had
been
off
the
beaten
track
and
got
lost.
We
had
no
idea
where
we
were
and
it
got
dark.
Exhausted
and
hungry,
I
wondered
if
we
could
find
our
way
back.
小兔突现---马儿受惊---草原迷路（障碍1）----天色渐黑（障碍2）----又累又饿（障碍3）----心理恐慌（障碍4）
二、高潮冲突思维2：放大内心冲突
放大内心冲突（你的角色的内心斗争）也有助于建立一个高度紧张和不确定的时刻。
【真题再现】
（2016年10月浙江英语高考）
Immediately,
an
absolute
darkness
ruled
the
forest.
Jane,
exhausted
and
scared,
lay
down
near
a
stone,
missing
her
family
at
a
distance.
All
the
fantastic
memory
crowded
in
and
she
couldn't
help
crying,
"Hadn't
I
quarreled
with
Tom,
walked
away
and
climbed
to
the
high
place,
I
wouldn't
be
trapped
in
this
awful
place,
confronted
with
the
danger
of
dying.”
She
regretted
with
endless
anxiety,
and
then
became
asleep
with
shining
tears
in
her
eyes.
夫妇争吵---独自行走---荒野走散---夜色渐黑---独处森林---阴森恐怖---后悔莫及（内心冲突的刻画）内心独白（往昔对比+虚拟语气使用+旁边描写是常见技巧之一）
三、高潮冲突思维3：使用环境描写增加不确定性
充分利用环境描写可以起到烘托故事高潮的作用，具体方法可以看上期读后续写微技能。当故事角色在碰到困难时候，我们往往要加大笔墨来描写故事环境的黑暗，恐怖和不祥。强化环境描写增强了高潮元素。我们感受到了紧张的倍增。
【典例赏析】
Immediately,
an
absolute
darkness
ruled
the
forest(黑暗).
Even
worse,
the
temperature
suddenly
dropped
dramatically.
(寒冷）
It
didn’t
take
long
for
the
forest
to
be
enveloped
in
darkness（黑暗）.
Her
rasping
breath
steamed（寒冷）
in
the
moonlight
and
her
throat
was
parched
from
thirst.
【检测训练】
1.
阅读下面材料,
根据其内界和所给段落开头语续写两段,
使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I
have
kept
a
watch
from
my
grandfather.
When
I
was
a
schoolboy，the
watch
hung
by
my
grandfather's
bed.
The
face
was
marked
with
elegant
Roman
numerals
and
the
case
was
gold.
It
was
a
splendid
watch
and
I
often
stared
at
it
longingly
sitting
with
my
grandfather.
He
would
often
ask
about
my
progress
at
school.
The
day
I
told
him
my
success
in
the
examinations，he
was
overcome
with
pleasure.
“You'll
be
going
to
a
new
school
next.
And
then
you'll
go
to
university，will
you？”he
asked.
“But
you'll
need
plenty
of
patience.
Patience
and
hard
work.
That's
the
way
to
succeed.”
He
took
off
the
watch
and
wound
it.
“It
was
given
me
for
fifty
years
of
faithful
service
with
my
firm，”
he
said
proudly.
Finally，he
handed
me
the
watch
due
to
the
progress
in
school.
I
held
it，feeling
its
weight.
As
I
was
leaving
him，he
said，“And
you'll
not
forget
what
I
told
you？”
I
was
suddenly
very
moved.
“No，Granddad，”
I
promised，“I'll
not.”
Arriving
home，my
mother
was
to
hold
it
in
trust
until
she
considered
me
old
enough
to
look
after
it，but
I
protested
so
strongly
that
she
finally
agreed
to
hang
it
where
I
could
always
see
it.
The
summer
ended
and
it
was
time
for
me
to
enter
the
new
school.
I
never
made
friends
easily
there.
One
boy，Crawley，was
a
well?to?do
fellow
whose
way
of
impressing
us
was
to
show
off
his
possessions.
His
bicycle
was
new；his
boots
were
of
the
best
hide；everything，in
fact，was
better
than
ours—until
he
brought
a
watch.
Crawley
said
his
watch
was
absolutely
the
finest
watch.
“I
have
a
better
watch，”
I
announced.
“Well，show
it
to
us，”Crawley
said
sneeringly(讽刺地).
“I'll
bring
it
this
afternoon，”
I
said.
“Then
you'll
see.”
I
rode
my
bike
home，wondering
how
I
would
persuade
my
mother
to
let
me
take
the
watch.
Luckily，she
stepped
outside
and
I
slipped
the
watch
into
my
pocket.
1.
续写词数应为150左石：
2.
请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph
1：
I
rode
my
bike
fast
to
school
after
lunch，excitement
through
me.
__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Paragraph
2：
When
I
said
my
mother
couldn't
let
me
bring
the
watch，they
burst
into
laughter.
__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
【参考范文】
Paragraph
1：
I
rode
my
bike
fast
to
school
after
lunch，excitement
through
me.
Then
suddenly
a
dog
ran
out
into
my
path.
I
pulled
at
the
brake
so
sharply
that
I
fell
over
heavily
to
the
ground
with
the
handles
over
me.
I
picked
myself
up，put
a
trembling
hand
into
my
pocket，and
brought
out
what
was
my
grandfather's
proudest
possession.
The
glass
was
broken，and
the
pointers
stopped
turning.
I
put
the
watch
back
and
rode
slowly
to
school，numb
with
sorrow.
Paragraph
2：
When
I
said
my
mother
couldn't
let
me
bring
the
watch，they
burst
into
laughter.“What
a
story！”
Crawley
said
sneeringly(ironically).
The
others
followed
his
cries.
I
nearly
wept，for
it
was
the
saddest
moment
of
my
young
life.
As
I
sat
quietly
at
my
desk，a
strange
feeling
stole
over
me.
It
was
not
shame
at
my
classmates'
laughing，nor
was
it
fear
of
my
mother's
anger.
All
I
could
think
of
was
my
grandfather's
words，“Patience
and
hard
work.”
I
kept
the
broken
watch
as
a
good
reminder
since
then，from
which
I
have
learned
to
be
more
patient
and
to
work
harder.
【写作分析】本文以爷爷送给作者的手表为线索，讲述了爷爷把陪伴作者50年的手表，送给了作者，并告诉作者，耐心和努力工作。这才是成功之道。作者将爷爷说话的话记在心间。回到家后，母亲强烈建议替作者保管，但作者强烈抗议，最后母亲同意把它挂在作者总能看到的地方。暑期结束作者进入了一所新学校，有个叫克劳利总喜欢炫耀，但是作者要和他比一比谁的手表更好。作者骑车回到家，趁着妈妈不注意，偷偷将表放入兜中。
【写作步骤】
1.段落续写
由第一段句首内容“午饭后作者骑自行车飞快地去学校，很是高兴”可知，第一段可以描写因为一条狗的突然窜出，发生了小事故，导致作者的手表表蒙破例，指针停止走动，作者只好把手表放回原处。
由第一段句首内容“当我说妈妈不让我带手表时，他们哄堂大笑起来”可知，第二段主要描写作者因为大家的嘲笑时以及打破表蒙后的心理状态和作者的感悟。
2.续写线索：上学路上——遇到狗打碎了表蒙表指针停止走动——作者找了个借口没有拿来表——心理状态——作者感悟
3.词汇激活
行为类
跌倒：fall/drop
大笑，嘲笑：laugh/tease/make
fun
of
放回：put…back/replace
情绪类
悲伤：sad/disappointed/
sorrow
耐心的：patient/
staminal
【写作步亮点】
[高分句型1]
I
pulled
at
the
brake
so
sharply
that
I
fell
over
heavily
to
the
ground
with
the
handles
over
me.（so…that引导的结果状语从句）
[高分句型2]
I
kept
the
broken
watch
as
a
good
reminder
since
then，from
which
I
have
learned
to
be
more
patient
and
to
work
harder.（介词+关系代词引导的非限制性定语从句）
2.
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
No
One
Will
Ever
Know
Karen,
Judy
and
I
were
the
last
ones
back
in
the
classroom
after
lunch.
All
of
the
other
sixth
graders
were
already
outside,
since
it
was
a
pleasant
spring
day.
“Look
at
what
I
found
this
morning
in
the
storage
cupboard
when
I
was
getting
out
some
art
supplies
for
Mrs.
Eiffler.”
said
Karen,
holding
up
a
wooden
box
filled
with
short
pieces
of
chalk
in
every
color
of
the
rainbow.
"Wow!
What
fun
it
would
be
to
write
on
the
chalkboard
while
everyone
is
outside.”
Judy
said.
“But
M
“s.
Eiffler
doesn't
allow
us
to
write
on
the
chalkboard.”
I
responded,
already
feeling
guilty.
“Don't
be
afraid,
Janet.
No
one
will
ever
know,”
said
Karen.
I
unwillingly
joined
my
friends
in
the
artwork,
but
was
afraid
of
being
caught.
I
knew
well
that
we
were
breaking
not
one,
but
two
class
rules.
The
second
rule-was
that
no
one
was
allowed
to
stay
inside
at
noon
without
a
written
excuse
from
home
if
the
weather
was
nice.
Trying
various
colors,
we
drew
houses,
trees
and
three-dimensional
boxes.
It
was
fun!
Then
Judy
had
an
idea.
"We're
all
right-handed.
Let's
see
who
can
write
our
names
best
using
our
left
hands.
Judy
and
Karen
picked
up
their
chalk
and
started
writing.
I
chose
a
white
piece
from
the
box
and
wrote
my
name.
“I
think
Judy
is
the
winner,”
said
Karen.
“Hers
is
the
best.”
“We’d
better
get
this
board
cleaned
off
before
Mrs.
Eiffler
comes
back,”
said
Judy,
erasing
our
artwork
from
the
board.
Everything
came
off
but
my
name!
In
disbelief;
I
looked
carefully
at
the
chalk
I
held
in
my
sweaty
hand.
It
wasn't
chalk
at
all,
but
a
small
piece
of
white
color
crayon.
My
mother
had
a
saying:
"
Fools,
names
and
faces
always
appear
in.
public
places.”
I
never
understood
fully
what
it
meant
before.
Now
I
did!
My
knees
felt
weak.
What
would
Mrs.
Eiffler
do
to
me?
And
the
teacher
would
be
returning
soon.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph
1
“Quick,
let’s
get
some
wet
paper
towels,”
said
Judy.
__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Paragraph
2
We
were
just
slipping
into
our
desks
when
the
bell
rang.
__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
【参考范文】Paragraph
1:
“Quick,
let’s
get
some
wet
paper
towels,"
said
Judy.
Everyone
sprang
into
action.
After
rubbing
pretty
hard,
my
name
still
remained.
“I
think
I
saw
a
can
of
cleaner
by
the
sink
in
the
coat
room,”
I
said
as
I
raced
to
find
it.
We
rubbed
with
the
cleaner
and
my
name
came
off
all
right,
but
in
the
process
of
removing
it,
we
left
a
friction
mark
on
the
chalkboard.
Listening
for
footsteps
coming
down
the
hall,
we
dried
the
wet
area
as
much
as
we
could
with
more
paper
towels
and
fanned
it
with
a
book
to
remove
every
tell-tale
trace
of
wetness.
Paragraph
2:
We
were
just
slipping
into
our
desks
when
the
bell
rang.
The
other
students
began
entering
the
classroom.
The
teacher
walked
in
soon
afterwards.
Mrs.
Eiffler
never
asked
about
the
friction
mark.
Maybe
she
never
noticed
it,
but
I
did.
Every
time
I
walked
past
the
damaged
surface
of
the
chalkboard,
I
remembered
it.
Oh,
how
I
remembered
it
so
well.
The
lesson
I
learned
that
day
is
one
I
never
forgot,
even
though
40
years
have
passed
since
the
event.
"No
one
will
ever
know”
is
never
true.
Even
if
no
one
else
found
out,
I
myself
knew.
Sometimes
living
with
a
guilty
conscience
is
punishment
enough.
【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者和朋友用从老师储藏柜里拿来的粉笔在黑板上写字，并且赶在老师回来之前擦掉粉笔画的东西，结果作者的名字因为是蜡烛写的擦不掉，虽然最后用清洁剂擦掉了，但是在黑板上留下了一个擦痕，这也提醒着作者，“没人会知道”是不可能的。即使别人都不知道，自己也知道。有时候，受到良心的谴责已经是最大的惩罚了。
【写作步骤】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“‘快，我们去拿些湿纸巾。’Judy说。”可知，第一段可描写作者他们是如何擦掉黑板上名字的经过的。
②由第二段首句内容“我们正要溜进自己的课桌，铃声就响了。”可知，第二段可描写事情的后续以及作者从中得到的感悟。
2.续写线索：拿湿纸巾——用清洁剂擦名字——擦掉名字——黑板留下擦痕——老师没有发现——作者得到教训——作者感悟
3.词汇激活
行为类
采取行动：spring
into
action/
jump
into
action
进入：enter/
get
into
奔跑：race/
run
情绪类
用力：hard
/
violently
真的：true/
real
【写作步亮点】
[高分句型1]
Every
time
I
walked
past
the
damaged
surface
of
the
chalkboard,
I
remembered
it.
(运用了every
time引导时间状语从句)
[高分句型2]
The
lesson
I
learned
that
day
is
one
I
never
forgot,
even
though
40
years
have
passed
since
the
event.
(运用了even
thoug引导让步状语从句)
3.
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
In
December
2020,
Flores
Gonzalez
had
her
4-year-olds,
Luna
and
Gianella,
tie
their
lists
to
two
balloons
and
release
them
into
the
sky
above
their
home
in
Liberal,
Kansas.
It
was
their
way
of
reaching
Santa
Claus.
Flores
Gonzalez
thought
it
was
important
to
do
something
special
for
her
daughters
because
of
the
hard
year
they
had
during
the
pandemic
(大流行病).
The
schools
were
shut
down
and
she
was
out
of
work
for
more
than
two
months.
Everyone
seemed
to
be
in
low
spirits.
She
wanted
to
cheer
the
family
up
and
wanted
the
girls
to
feel
that
2020
was
another
year
spent
with
mom
making
beautiful
memories.
It
was
never
with
the
purpose
that
someone
would
find
the
balloons.
She
thought
the
balloons
would
just
float
away
and
disappear
somewhere
in
a
tree
nearby.
But
one
of
the
balloons
did
make
it
to
Alvin
Bamburg,
who
was
deer
hunting
in
Grand
Cane,
Louisiana,
in
late
December
when
he
spotted
a
balloon
tangled
(纠缠)
in
a
tree.
He
told
himself
he
needed
to
get
the
trash
out
of
the
woods.
However,
when
he
got
it,
he
noticed
a
folded
yellow
piece
of
paper
sealed
with
a
red
star
and
it
was
a
Christmas
list
from
a
girl
named
Luna.
She
had
asked
Santa
to
bring
her
candy,
a
Spider
Man
ball,
a
Frozen
doll
and
a
dachshund
(腊肠狗)
puppy,
which
was
her
most
desired
present.
The
holidays
kept
Alvin
Bamburg
and
his
wife
busy.
They
had
family
reunions
and
organized
several
charity
parties
to
help
whoever
needed
help
but
they
didn’t
forget
about
the
list.
In
early
January,
Bamburg
shared
his
discovery
with
family
and
friends
on
Facebook.
“I
would
love
to
know
when
it
was
launched.
It
looks
like
it
travelled
600
miles,”
he
wrote.
注意：
1.
续写词数应为
150
左右；
2.
请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
So
many
people
shared
the
post
that
it
eventually
reached
Flores
Gonzalez.
__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
After
months
of
communication,
it
was
time
for
the
Bamburgs
to
give
them
one
last
present.
__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
【参考范文】
Many
people
shared
the
post
and
it
eventually
found
its
way
to
Flores
Gonzalez.
He
was
so
surprised
that
his
daughter's
wish
list
was
found
and
shared.
He
replied
the
post
and
explained
what
had
happened.
Everyone
thought
it
was
a
surprise
and
a
miracle.
Over
the
Internet
,
Gonzalez
knew
new
friends
the
Bambergs.
They
often
shared
their
daily
lives
online,
as
if
they
were
old
friends
they
hadn't
seen
in
years.
After
months
of
communication,
it
was
time
for
the
Bamburgs
to
give
them
one
last
present.
The
Bamberger
never
forgot
Luna
's
to
do
list.
They
wanted
to
finish
it
the
night
before
Christmas
with
gifts
like
Santa's.
When
Luna
received
the
gifts,
she
excitedly
said
to
her
father,
"My
wish
has
come
true.
","As
long
as
you
keep
a
grateful
heart,
life
will
treat
you
kindly
and
give
you
unexpected
surprises.
All
you
have
to
do
is
passing
on
and
keeping
this
kindness.”
his
father
replied
with
a
smile.
【写作分析】本文以故事的发展顺序为线索展开，讲述了主人公弗洛雷斯·冈萨雷斯认为，为女儿们做些特别的事情很重要，于是他让女儿把心愿清单绑在气球上，随着气球飘向远方，最终卢娜的气球被乐于慈善事业的班伯格夫妇发现并帮助卢娜完成心愿的故事。
【写作步骤】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“很多人分享了这个帖子，最终传到了弗洛雷斯·冈萨雷斯这里”可知，第一段可描写弗洛雷斯·冈萨雷斯看到这个帖子的反应以及解释事情的经过。
②由第二段首句内容“经过几个月的沟通，现在是班伯格夫妇，送给他们最后一件礼物的时候了。”可知，第二段可描写班伯格夫妇完成卢娜的心愿清单。
2.续写线索：在气球上绑心愿清单——气球被发现——分享——完成心愿清单——感悟
3.词汇激活
行为类
①.回复：reply/answer
②.实现：come
true/realize
情绪类
①.感激：a
grateful
heart
/showing
one’s
appreciation
②.惊讶：surprised/amazed
【写作步亮点】
[高分句型1].
He
was
so
surprised
that
his
daughter's
wish
list
was
found
and
shared
.（由so...that引导的结果状语从句）
[高分句型2].
As
long
as
you
keep
a
grateful
heart,
life
will
treat
you
kindly
and
give
you
unexpected
surprises.（as
long
as引导的条件状语从句）
4.
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Father’s
Day
Chess
It
was
Dale's
third
Sunday
volunteering
at
the
retirement
home.
He
had
thought
it
would
be
a
good
way
to
give
back.
But
today
he
just
felt
tired.
While
on
a
short
break,
Dale
took
a
walk
through
the
garden.
There
were
people
sitting
on
benches,
chatting
together.
A
woman
sat
knitting,
looking
very
pleased
with
herself.
The
strands
of
brightly-colored
yarn
disappeared
quickly
through
her
hands.
Across
the
courtyard,
there
was
a
man
sitting
alone
at
a
table
with
a
chessboard
in
front
of
him.
Dale
watched
with
curiosity
as
the
man
would
stare
at
the
pieces,
then
move
them,
and
then
would
do
the
same
from
the
other
side
of
the
board.
On
his
way
home
after
the
day
had
ended,
Dale
found
himself
thinking
about
the
man.
How
he
was
hunched
over
in
deep
thought,
playing
a
game
against
himself.
How
odd,
he
thought.
Each
Sunday,
Dale
would
see
the
man
doing
the
same
thing.
While
everyone
else
talked
with
one
another
or
happily
carried
on,
the
man
would
sit,
slightly
bent
over
and
scratching
his
chin.
His
eyes
rarely
came
off
of
the
chessboard.
One
Sunday,
Dale
went
to
the
garden
on
his
break
expecting
to
see
the
man
at
his
normal
spot.
But
he
wasn't
there.
It
was
Father's
Day
and
there
were
many
visitors
at
the
home.
Dale
shrugged
and
thought
the
man
must
be
busy
with
his
family.
That
afternoon,
Dale
was
mopping
the
hallways
when
he
happened
to
pass
by
the
man's
room.
The
door
was
slightly
open
and
he
could
see
the
man
sitting
in
a
chair
next
to
the
window,
peering
out
at
the
courtyard.
Dale
knocked
lightly
and
asked
to
come
in.
The
man
nodded.
Dale
saw
a
collection
of
framed
photographs
on
the
bedside
table.
“Are
those
your
children?”
he
asked.
“Yes,
they’re
all
grown
and
live
far
away.
They
have
their
own
kids
now,”
he
replied.
Dale,
not
wanting
the
man
to
be
alone
on
Father's
Day,
had
an
idea.
注意：1.
续写词数应为150左右；
2.
请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Para.
1:
He
went
outside
and
got
the
chessboard
from
the
table.
___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Para.
2:
Dale
was
glad
that
he
volunteered.
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【参考范文】
Para.
1:
He
went
outside
and
got
the
chessboard
from
the
table.
“Shall
we
play
chess
together?"
The
man
hesitated.
He
stared
at
the
chessboard
sinking
into
his
thoughts.
It
took
a
while
before
the
old
man
finally
shared
his
thoughts
with
Dale.
In
the
past,
he
often
played
chess
with
his
children,
which
were
some
of
his
fondest
memories.
However,
they
all
died
because
of
a
car
accident
and
the
old
man
has
been
alone
ever
since.
"Sorry,
I
lied
to
you,"
the
man
choked,
eyes
brimming
with
tears.
“Thank
you
for
your
kind
help.”
Para.
2:
Dale
was
glad
that
he
volunteered.
Deeply
touched,
he
now
understood
why
the
man
preferred
to
play
chess
alone,
and
why
he
sat
silently
in
his
room
on
Father's
Day.
He
carefully
placed
all
the
pieces
on
the
chessboard
and
said,
"Sir,
I'm
sorry
for
your
loss.
But
as
you
may
notice,
I
come
here
every
Sunday.
If
you
wish,
you
can
play
chess
with
me,
as
you
did
with
your
children.
A
flicker
of
a
smile
crossed
the
man’s
face.
Taking
a
deep
breath,
he
settled
himself
opposite
to
Dale
and
moved
a
piece.
【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了Dale在养老院做志愿者时注意到了一个孤独的父亲，每天都在下棋，他还发现这个人一个人过父亲节。于是这天Dale主动提出和老人下棋，老人告诉了Dale自己的孩子因为车祸去世的事情，最后Dale提出每周都可以和他下棋。
【写作步骤】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“他走到外面，从桌上拿起棋盘。”可知，第一段可描写老人告诉Dale自己孩子去世的遭遇。
②由第二段首句内容“Dale很高兴他做了志愿者。”可知，第二段可描写Dale得知真相后的心理活动以及Dale提出每周都可以和老人下棋。
2.续写线索：Dale拿起棋盘——老人告知自己经历——Dale高兴自己当了志愿者——Dale提出陪老人下棋
3.词汇激活
行为类
陷入沉思：sinking
into
his
thoughts
/
be
lost
in
thought
去世：die/
pass
away
坐下：settled
himself
opposite
to
/
sit
down
情绪类
高兴：glad
/
happy
最爱的：fondest
/
favorite
【写作步亮点】
[高分句型1]
In
the
past,
he
often
played
chess
with
his
children,
which
were
some
of
his
fondest
memories.
(运用了which引导非限制性定语从句)
[高分句型2]
Deeply
touched,
he
now
understood
why
the
man
preferred
to
play
chess
alone,
and
why
he
sat
silently
in
his
room
on
Father's
Day.
(运用了why引导宾语从句)
5.
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Pam
Bales
planned
a
six-hour
hike
through
New
Hampshire^
Mount.
On
the
dashboard
（汽车仪表板）
was
a
detailed
plan
ensuring
she
could
return
before
the
arrival
of
some
forecasted
bad
weather.
Different
from
former
hike,
though,
this
time,
she
had
packed
for
almost
every
accident
and
intended
to
walk
alone.
At
about
8
a.m.,
she'd
checked
the
weather
forecast.
Bales
knew
from
experience
that
her
hike
was
realistic.
Besides,
she
had
two
emergency
plans
and
extra
layers
of
clothing
to
better
protect
her
core
temperature
as
conditions
changed.
Bales
felt
excited
as
she
walked
up
into
snowy
paths.
She
was
wearing
a
fleece
tank
top
（绒衣）and
hiking
pants,
and
no
gloves
or
hat
because
the
air
was
mild.
Thirty
minutes
later,
she
climbed
into
colder
air
and
deeper
snows.
She
now
was
in
a
quarter-zip
fleece
top
and
gloves.
At
10
a.m.?
the
weather
was
showing
its
teeth.
Bales
added
more
layers
to
resist
cold
winds
and
dense
fog.
Making
her
way
across
the
snow-covered
ridge,
she
noticed
something:
a
single
set
of
footprints
made
by
a
pair
of
sneakers.
Not
giving
them
much
thought,
she
walked
on.
By
11
a.m.?
Bales
was
getting
cold.
She
decided
to
return
to
her
car.
On
her
way
down,
she
again
spotted
the
sneaker
tracks,
which
suddenly
made
a
hard
left-hand
turn
off
the
trail.
Now
she
felt
genuinely
alarmed.
She
was
sure
the
hiker
lost
his
way
in
the
low
visibility.
If
Bales
continued
to
follow
the
tracks,
she'd
add
risk
and
time
to
her
return.
But
she
couldn't
let
this
go.
She
turned
to
the
left
and
called
out,
“Hello!"
Nothing.
Bales
followed
the
tracks,
rounded
a
slight
comer
and
saw
a
man
sitting
motionless.
He
wore
tennis
sneakers,
shorts,
a
light
jacket
and
fingerless
gloves.
His
skin
was
pale
and
he
had
a
glazed
（呆滞的）look
on
his
face.
uOh5
hello/5
Bales
approached
and
said,
"What's
your
name?”
The
man
didn't
react.
Obviously,
nothing
was
connecting
for
him
and
he
was
in
really
big
trouble.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150左右；
2
.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Bales
stopped
being
a
curious
and
concerned
hiker,
and
began
a
full-on
rescue
mission.
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Over
the
next
hour,
the
man
began
to
move
and
speak.
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【参考范文】
Bales
stopped
being
a
curious
and
concerned
hiker,
and
began
a
full-on
rescue
mission.
Immediately,
she
braved
the
increasingly
wild
and
fierce
weather
to
take
off
the
outer
layers
of
her
clothes
to
cover
the
motionless
man.
And
then
Bales
tried
to
help
the
man
have
some
hot
water
but
in
vain.
At
the
very
helpless
and
even
hopeless
moment,
an
idea
occurred
to
her.
Quickly
collecting
some
ice
and
snow,
she
began
to
rub
the
man’s
body,
from
hands
to
arms,
from
toes
to
legs.
Bales
knew
clearly
it
was
time-consuming
and
painstaking,
but
it
was
bound
to
be
effective.
Over
the
next
hour,
John
began
to
move
and
speak.
He
first
showed
the
sign
of
movement
through
his
fingers,
and
then
opened
his
eyes.
In
a
weak
voice,
he
thanked
Bales
and
told
her
how
he
lost
his
way
and
was
trapped
here.
Bales
kept
warming
him
up
until
he
signaled
he
could
walk.
With
the
support
of
Bales,
the
man
finally
managed
it
back
to
the
car
and
was
sent
to
the
hospital
timely.
Out
of
danger,
he
said
gratefully
but
for
Bales’
experience
and
skilled
rescue,
he
would
never
see
the
beauty
of
the
world.
【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了Bales计划6个小时内独自登雪山，在登山前Bales做了非常详细的准备，可是在登山途中发现了别人的脚印，疑似是有人走丢了，Bales没有独自离开，而是寻着脚印寻找到了一个男人，此时男人已经一动不动。
【写作步骤】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“Bales不再是一个好奇和担心的徒步旅行者，开始了全面的救援任务。”可知，第一段可描写Bales想帮助这个男人，开始采取救援措施。
②由第二段首句内容“在接下来的一个小时里，John开始走动并说话了。”可知，第二段可描写被救的男人John恢复意识后，感谢Bales的救援。
2.续写线索：发现男人——采取援救措施——男人获救——感谢Bales
3.词汇激活
行为类
①冒风险：brave/take
risks
②尝试帮忙：try
to
help/attempt
to
help
③想起一个主意：an
idea
occurs
to
sb./come
up
with
an
idea
情绪类
①费力的：painstaking/arduous②感激地：gratefully/appreciatively
【写作步亮点】
[高分句型1].
In
a
weak
voice,
he
thanked
Bales
and
told
her
how
he
lost
his
way
and
was
trapped
here.（由省略连接词that的宾语从句）
[高分句型2].
Bales
kept
warming
him
up
until
he
signaled
he
could
walk.（由until引导时间状语从句）
6.
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Like
most
children,
I
took
my
parents
for
granted.
It
wasn't
until
I
became
an
adult
that
I
realized
their
desire
to
make
a
difference
in
the
lives
of
others.
Mama
and
Daddy
performed
their
angel
magic
with
neither
fanfare
(炫耀)
nor
a
desire
for
recognition.
Because
their
kindness
to
others
was
something
I
accepted
as
a
matter
of
course,
I
might
never
have
evaluated
this
aspect
of
their
personalities
were
it
not
for
an
event
that
my
mother
mentioned
in
passing.
Arizona
in
July
ushered
in
the
monsoon
(季风)
season,
which
was
in
full
swing
and
just
that
morning
had
hit
the
Southern
Arizona
desert
with
severe
thunder,
lightining,
rain,
and
high
winds.
Mama
and
Daddy
chose
to
spend
the
day
wandering
the
dry,
air-conditioned
mall,
having
a
bite
to
eat,
and
taking
in
a
movie.
It
seemed
a
nice
way
to
spend
a
Saturday
afternoon
while
leaving
the
storm
outdoors.
They
chose
a
casual
restaurant
for
lunch
and
were
reading
the
menu
when
their
waitress,
a
young
woman
in
her
mid-twenties,
approached
the
table
to
introduce
herself
and
take
their
order.
Mama
and
Daddy
noted
that
her
hair
was
damp,
as
were
her
clothes.
She
was
friendly
but
seemed
to
be
quite
tired.
Drawing
her
into
conversation,
they
learned
she
was
a
single
mother
and
a
college
student
working
two
jobs.
That
particular
day
had
been
unkind
to
her.
Her
car
broke
down,
forcing
her
to
walk
to
work
in
the
rain
and
wind.
She
was
concerned
about
how
being
without
a
vehicle
would
affect
her
ability
to
care
for
her
daughter
and
go
to
college.
Her
frustration
was
obvious,
and
the
day's
events
had
certainly
left
her
in
a
certain
amount
of
despair.
Yet,
her
comments
centered
on
ideas
for
solving
her
problems
rather
than
complaining
about
them.
Her
attitude
aroused
my
parents'
interest.
When
Mama
and
Daddy
finished
with
lunch,
they
said
goodbye
to
their
waitress
and
wished
her
well.
Her
plight
(困境)
and
attempt
at
a
positive
attitude
touched
them,
and
they
wondered
what
they
might
do
to
help
注意：1.
续写词数应为150左右；
2.
请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
They
had
time
before
the
movie
started
to
do
some
shopping;
so
they
walked
into
a
bookstore.
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
The
waitress
opened
the
bag
and
found
some
bills
in
a
book.
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
【参考范文】
They
had
time
before
the
movie
started
to
do
some
shopping;
so
they
walked
into
a
bookstore.
While
browsing,
they
came
across
a
slim
volume
that
discussed
the
presence
of
angels
on
Earth,
and
they
immediately
knew
what
they
wanted
to
do.
After
purchasing
the
book,
they
withdrew
money
from
the
bank,
stuffed
the
bills
into
the
book,
and
put
the
book
into
a
bag,
which
they
delivered
to
the
restaurant
cashier.
They
requested
that
it
be
given
to
the
waitress
at
first
opportunity.
They
said
there
was
no
need
to
take
their
names.
The
cashier
immediately
went
up
to
the
waitress
and
told
her
that
someone
had
given
her
a
bag.
The
waitress
opened
the
bag
and
found
some
bills
in
a
book.
She
was
very
surprised
at
first,
with
a
puzzled
expression
on
her
face,
then
moved
to
tears.
She
glanced
around
for
her
benefactors,
looked
at
the
cashier
who
could
only
shrug,
and
clutched
the
book
to
her
as
if
it
were
pure
gold.
Her
unknown
angels,
pleased
with
their
spread
of
magic,
disappeared.
Mama
and
Daddy
watched
from
a
distance,
smiling
at
each
other.
Their
act
of
kindness
made
the
young
lady
understand
that
despite
the
challenges
and
cruelties
she
may
encounter,
the
world
is
blessed
with
human
beings
who
care
about
others.
【写作分析】文章以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者的父母为躲避暴风雨天气，打算在干燥、有空调的商场里度过这一天，吃点东西，看部电影，他们来到一家饭店吃饭，偶遇一位还是大学生的女服务员，经过交谈，了解到她的困境。于是，他们俩就想做一名天使来帮助这位女服务员。
【写作步骤】
1.段落续写
①由第一段首句内容“在看电影之前，他们有时间去购物”可知，第一段可描写他们在书店买书以后想到了应该为这位女服务员做些什么并付诸行动。
②有第二段首句内容“女服务员打开袋子，在一本书里发现了一些钞票。”可知，第二段可描写女服务员收到装着书和钱的袋子后的感受。
2.续写线索：偶然发现一本薄书——购买这本书——取钱并塞进书里——将袋子送到收银台——要求将袋子给女服务员——女服务员感到惊讶——感动流泪——这个善举让服务员感受到关心
3.词汇激活
行为类
①
偶然发现：come
across/run
into/encounter
②购买：purchase/buy
③取钱：withdraw
money/withdraw
cash
④递送：deliver/send
⑤
给：give/hand
in
情绪类
①惊讶的：surprised/astonished/amazed
②感动的：moved/touched
【写作步亮点】
[高分句型1]
After
purchasing
the
book,
they
withdrew
money
from
the
bank,
stuffed
the
bills
into
the
book,
and
put
the
book
into
a
bag,
which
they
delivered
to
the
restaurant
cashier.（which引导非限制性定语从句）
[高分句型2]
Their
act
of
kindness
made
the
young
lady
understand
that
despite
the
challenges
and
cruelties
she
may
encounter,
the
world
is
blessed
with
human
beings
who
care
about
others.
（that引导宾语从句，who引导定语从句）
