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读后续写之情感情绪细节刻画
情感细节包括人物的感受、情绪，是续写中必不可少的细节描写之一。合理的情感情绪描写与刻画，可以凸显人物的性格、人际关系的特征、以及烘托故事高潮进而突出语篇主题等。因此，合理的情感情绪刻画在续写中是非常必要的。以下就是读后续写过程中，刻画人物情感情绪的四个方法：
一、直接利用恰当的表情感的形容词、副词或名词、介词短语等表达人物的喜怒哀乐
例如：快乐(happy,
delighted,
pleased,
joyful,
enjoyable等)、吃惊(surprised,
shocked,
amazed,
astonished)等形容词或介词短语(to
one's
surprise,
in
relief,
in
panic)等描述人物的情绪。
二、利用环境细节“融情于景”烘托人物的情感
例如：Della
finished
her
crying
and
dried
her
face.
She
stood
by
the
window
and
looked
out
unhappily
at
a
gray
cat
walking
along
a
gray
fence
in
a
gray
back
yard.(小说《麦琪的礼物》中利用3个形容词gray，体现了Della的难受和不开心。)
三、利用恰当的动作描写反映人物的情绪
例如：下面文章片段中的句子：
With
no
path
to
follow,
Jane
just
walked
on
for
quite
a
long
time.
After
she
had
climbed
to
a
high
place,
she
turned
around,
hoping_to_see_the_lake.
(动作描写，说明Jane满怀期望)
To
her
surprise,
(利用介词短语体现Jane的吃惊)
she
saw
nothing
but
forest
and,
far
beyond,
a
snow?capped
mountain
top.
(寓情于景，体现Jane的无望失落)
She
suddenly
realized
that
she
was
lost.
四、利用高级句式和修饰成分细化情感细节
例如：①“Absolutely！”
replied
John,
excitement
shinning
in
his
eyes.
(利用名词excitement和独立主格结构，描写John的兴奋激动)
约翰答道，“一定”，他两眼兴奋地闪闪发光。
②So
angry
was
the
bear
that
it
roared
and
smacked
the
fence
violently.
(so
...
that倒装句型)
熊怒火中烧，开始咆哮并用爪子猛烈地拍击护栏。
③You
can
not
imagine
how
frightened
we
were
at
the
approach
of
the
polar
bear.
(how引导的宾语从句，介词短语)
你无法想象北极熊向我们逼近时我们多么的恐惧。
【策略微练】
Ⅰ.按要求补全下面动作、情感和心理细节的句子
1．简又害怕又无助，靠着一棵树坐下，歇歇疼痛的双脚。
,
Jane
sat
against
a
tree,
.
(形容词短语/非谓语动词作状语)
2．“如果我没有和汤姆吵架，我现在就不会被困在这里了，”她想，悔恨的泪水模糊了她的眼睛。
“
，”
she
thought
to
herself
.
(虚拟语气的倒装句，
with复合结构)
3．她挣扎着站起来寻找那个湖。
4．她精疲力竭，她爬上一块大石头，躺了下来，很快睡着了。
(so
...
that状语从句，一连串的动作)
5．简醒来时天已经亮了。
6．尽管很沮丧，她还是决定继续前进。
,
she
decided
to
continue
forcing
her
way
ahead.
(让步状语从句)
,
she
decided
to
continue
forcing
her
way
ahead.
(状语从句的省略句)
7．随着小溪的声音，她向水边走去。
,
she
walked
toward
the
water.
(非谓语动词作状语)
8．突然，她注意到远处有一个熟悉的身影向她走来。
(非谓语动词作宾补)
Ⅱ.将以上补全后的各句合并为短文，注意恰当的衔接过渡
【典例示例】
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
Sam
Watts
was
a
37?year?old
fisherman
living
and
working
in
Canada.
One
day,
Sam
planned
to
head
out
into
the
Pacific
at
9
am
and
work
straight
through
until
5pm
the
next
day.
Joining
Sam
would
be
his
crewman,
24?year?old
Tom
Buck.
Although
Sam
had
been
warned
that
a
storm
was
coming,
there
was
little
that
would
keep
him
from
going.
As
he
sailed
through
the
waves
some
120
kilometers
from
land,
Sam
let
out
his
three?kilometer?long
fishing
line.
The
storm
was
gaining
strength
on
land
but
had
yet
to
reach
the
men
far
offshore.
That
changed
around
1
am.
Waves
rocked
the
small
boat,
which
began
to
turn
sideways
like
an
amusement
park
ride.
“Get
us
out
of
here！”
Tom
screamed
to
Sam.
“Let's
go
back！”
With
the
winds
and
waves
kicking
up,
the
boat
began
to
fill
with
water.
Sam
and
Tom
tried
to
pull
in
the
fishing
line
together,
but
the
high
waves
filled
the
boat
with
water,
forcing
Sam
to
make
a
hard
decision.
He
cut
the
line,
losing
thousands
of
dollars'
worth
of
equipment
and
fish
in
the
sea.
He
then
pointed
the
boat
toward
a
port
five
hours
away.
Sam
then
called
his
boss,
William
Fox,
to
report
his
position.
With
dawn
coming,
Sam
spotted
the
rise
of
the
mountains
on
the
horizon.
He
was
figuring
out
a
route
through
the
dangerous
waters
when
suddenly
the
motor
stopped.
“I
couldn't
believe
it，”
Sam
said.
“We
were
24
kilometers
off
the
coast,
and
the
motor
died.”
High
waves
raised
and
dropped
the
boat,
sending
the
men
crashing
into
the
sides.
“William,
William！”
Sam
yelled
into
the
radio.
“If
you're
coming
to
get
me,
come
now！”
“We're
coming！”
William
shouted
back.
Paragraph
1
Shortly
after,
the
radio
died
and
the
wind
continued
to
blow
straight
offshore,
driving
the
men
farther
out
to
sea.
Paragraph
2
The
next
morning,
Sam
spotted
a
fishing
boat
in
the
distance.
【写作分析】
文章主旨：原文叙述Sam
Watts和船员
Tom
Buck去海上捕鱼时，突遇风暴，在危险之际Sam
Watts做出了艰难的抉择：割断鱼线，损失了价值数千万美元的设备和鱼。虽然和老板报告了自己的位置，然而Sam
Watts和Tom
Buck船上的发动机熄火。
续写部分应叙述他们被救出的过程。
续写第一段：根据首句关键信息“the
radio
died”和“driving
the
men
farther
out
to
sea”可知该段应叙述Sam和Tom在发动机熄火和无线电死机的情况下，被困海上面临死亡。
此时应用心理活动描写，描写他们的恐惧以及Sam
后悔的心情，
后悔自己不顾风暴的警告固执地出海的决定。
续写第二段：根据首句关键信息“a
fishing
boat”结合原文中提到到海上寻找他们的William可知，该段应叙述他们最终获救。该段的叙述可利用动作描写显示他们见到来营救他们的船只时高兴的心情。
【参考范文】
Paragraph
1
Shortly
after,
the
radio
died
and
the
wind
continued
to
blow
straight
offshore,
driving
the
men
farther
out
to
sea.
Fear
seized
Tom
and
he
was
trembling,
for
the
water
had
not
only
wet
his
clothes
but
also
ruined
his
hope
of
surviving.
Sam
murmured,
“I
was
warned
that
a
storm
was
coming.
Had
it
not
been
for
my
stubbornness,
we
would
not
have
lost
our
equipment
and
had
to
face
such
a
terrible
situation.”
His
voice
gradually
disappeared
as
waves
rocked
the
boat,
making
terrifying
sounds.
After
what
seemed
to
be
a
century,
a
great
darkness
fell.
Exhausted,
they
fell
asleep.
Paragraph
2
The
next
morning,
Sam
spotted
a
fishing
boat
in
the
distance.
He
excitedly
woke
Tom
up.
Tom
rubbed
his
eyes
and
stared.
Once
he
caught
sight
of
the
boat,
he
was
also
lit
up.
The
chance
of
surviving
made
them
regain
strength
and
they
began
to
shout
loudly.
The
boat
saw
them
and
they
went
aboard.
On
the
boat
they
met
William
and
other
crew
members.
Although
they
had
lost
thousands
of
dollars,
they
came
to
understand
the
value
of
hope.
【检测训练】
1.
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Toby
the
cat
was
in
a
small
cardboard
box
marked
“free
kittens”
when
Daisy
met
him
and
took
him
home.
And
from
that
moment
on,
he
loved
boxes.
He
slept
in
hatboxes,
gift
boxes
and
takeout
food
boxes.
He
slept
in
Daisy’s
sock
drawer,
if
she
left
it
open.
When
he
was
a
kitten,
the
size
of
a
small
loaf
of
bread,
he
had
slept
in
shoeboxes.
But
he
grew
and
grew,
and
now
he
was
a
lot
bigger
than
a
loaf
of
bread.
When
he
tried
to
sleep
in
a
shoebox,
his
furry
stomach
hung
over
the
sides.
Toby
didn’t
just
sit
in
boxes,
though.
Sometimes
he
sat
in
flowerpots,
or
laundry
baskets.
Daisy
had
a
beautiful
dollhouse
for
her
birthday,
a
dark
green
three-story
house
with
lots
of
furniture.
Daisy
loved
it.
So
did
Toby.
He
liked
to
push
the
furniture
out
of
all
the
rooms
and
sit
in
the
bedroom
on
the
second
floor.
One
day
Daisy
came
home
from
school,
and
she
couldn’t
find
Toby.
He
wasn’t
in
the
dollhouse,
or
her
sock
drawer,
even
though
she’d
forgotten
to
close
it.
“Mom,
Dad!”
Daisy
wailed.
“Toby
is
gone!”
Daisy’s
mom
looked
in
the
attic.
There
were
boxes
and
dust
bunnies,
and
even
a
mouse
that
had
escaped
Toby’s
notice,
but
no
Toby.
Daisy’s
dad
looked
in
the
kitchen
cabinets.
There
were
pots
and
pans,
and
cans
of
soup,
but
no
Toby.
Suddenly—“I
found
him!”
Daisy
cried.
The
big
cat
was
inside
her
mom’s
new
glass
vase,
and
he
didn’t
look
happy
at
all.
Daisy
tipped
the
vase
over
gently
and
tried
to
pull
him
out,
but
Toby
just
howled.
“We’ll
have
to
break
the
vase
to
get
him
out!”
Daisy
cried.
Now
her
mom
didn’t
look
happy.
It
was
a
beautiful
vase.
“No,”
said
her
dad.
“If
we
break
it,
the
glass
pieces
might
hurt
Toby.
Maybe
we
can
put
butter
on
the
inside
of
the
vase
and
slide
him
out,
like
the
time
you
got
that
ring
stuck
on
your
finger.”
注意：
1.
续写词数应为150左右；
2.
请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph
1:
Immediately,
Daisy
fetched
some
butter.
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Paragraph
2:
Soon
they
were
at
the
vet's
office.
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2.
阅读下面材料，根据所给内容进行续写,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It
was
deep
into
the
night
many
years
ago.
The
rain
just
came
pouring
down
outside.
An
elderly
man
and
his
wife
entered
the
lobby
(大厅)of
a
small
hotel
in
Philadelphia,
USA.
Trying
to
get
out
of
the
rain,
the
couple
approached
the
front
desk
hoping
to
get
a
room
to
stay
in
for
the
night.
“Could
you
possibly
give
us
a
room
here?”
the
husband
asked.
The
clerk,
a
friendly
young
man
with
a
winning
smile,
looked
at
the
couple
and
explained
that
there
were
three
conferences
in
the
town.
"All
of
our
rooms
are
taken,"
the
clerk
said.
“But
I
can’t
send
a
nice
couple
like
you
out
into
the
rain
at
one
o'clock
at
night.
Would
you
perhaps
be
willing
to
sleep
in
my
room?
It's
not
exactly
a
suite,
but
it
will
be
good
enough
to
make
you
comfortable
for
the
night.”
When
the
couple
declined,
the
young
man
pressed
on.
"Don't
worry
about
me.
I'll
make
out
just
fine,"
the
clerk
told
them.
So
the
couple
agreed.
As
he
paid
his
bill
the
next
morning,
the
elderly
man
said
to
the
clerk,
“You
are
the
kind
of
manager
who
should
be
the
boss
of
the
best
hotel.
Maybe
someday
I'll
build
one
for
you.”
The
clerk
looked
at
them
and
smiled.
The
three
of
them
had
a
good
laugh.
As
they
drove
away,
the
elderly
couple
agreed
that
the
helpful
clerk
was
indeed
exceptional,
as
finding
people
who
are
both
friendly
and
helpful
isn't
easy.
Three
years
passed.
The
clerk
had
almost
forgotten
the
thing
when
he
received
a
letter
from
the
elderly
man.
It
recalled
that
stormy
night,
when
he
offered
his
kind
help
to
the
elderly
couple.
In
the
envelope,
there
was
a
round-trip
ticket
to
New
York,
and
a
letter
asking
the
young
man
to
pay
them
a
visit.
The
young
man
decided
to
set
out
immediately.
注意:
1
.续写词数应为150左右；
2
.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好。
Paragraph
1:
“Do
you
still
remember
my
promise
years
ago?”
the
elderly
man
said
to
the
young
man.
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Paragraph
2:
“You
must
be
joking,”
the
young
man
said.
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3.
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Mr.
Taylor
checked
again:
water,
food,
bandage,
medicines,
a
compass,
and
a
map
wrapped
in
plastic...
Bingo!
He
put
all
that
he
prepared
for
the
coming
hiking
into
his
backpack.
Mr.
Taylor
was
fond
of
hiking,
this
time
in
particular,
for
it
was
the
first
time
for
him
to
hike
with
his
two
sons,
Harry
and
Joel.
Joel
liked
reading
books
about
explorers
and
Harry
joined
the
hiking
club
in
his
school
this
term.
It
will
be
an
unforgettable
experience,
definitely,
he
whispered
to
himself
unconsciously
a
smile
spreading
over
his
face.
Harry
and
Joel,
however,
argued
for
the
first
three
miles
of
their
hiking
trip.
Harry
accused
Joel
of
wearing
smelly
old
shoes.
Joel
blamed
Harry
for
using
all
of
the
bug
spray（喷雾防虫剂）.Harry
told
Joel
he
smelled
terrible.
Joel
called
Harry
a
coward（懦夫）.
“Will
the
two
of
you
just
quiet
down
and
enjoy
our
hike
together?”
their
father
said.
"You’re
missing
all
of
the
beautiful
scenery!"
It
was
true.
Neither
Joel
nor
Harry
had
taken
notice
of
the
bear
their
father
had
spied
at
the
start
of
their
trip.
They
hadn’t
looked
up
at
the
eagle
he
pointed
out
overhead.
Worst
of
all,
they
hadn’t
paid
any
attention
to
the
turns
and
twists
along
the
way
while
they
continued
their
argument.
“Joel
threw
a
stick
at
me!”
Harry
screamed.
"That’s
not
true!”
Joel
shouted
back.
Mr.
Taylor
could
no
longer
contain
his
anger.
"And
both
of
you
need
to
stop
arguing!"
he
erupted.
As
he
turned
to
face
them,
his
left
foot
caught
on
a
root.
He
slipped
backward
and
down
muddy
bank,
falling
into
the
river
that
ran
alongside
the
path,
Harry
and
Joel
raced
to
their
father’s
assistance.
They
helped
him
up
out
of
the
water,
and
then
dragged
his
wet
backpack
up
onto
land.
Fortunately,
their
wet-through
father
found
himself
just
slightly
injured.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在相应位置作答。
Paragraph
1:
But
his
glasses
came
off
when
he
fell
in
the
water.
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Paragraph
2:
“Just
calm
down."
Mr.
Taylor
shouted,
"Without
my
glasses,
we
need
to
work
together
to
find
our
way.
"
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4.
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Jesse
Dufton
was
born
with
a
genetic
condition,
retinitis
pigmentosa
(色素性视网膜炎),
and
over
the
years,
his
eyesight
gradually
worsened.
By
the
time
he
got
to
university
in
Bath
to
study
Chemistry
it
had
got
to
the
point
where
he
couldn’t
really
see
images
at
all,
only
the
difference
between
light
and
dark.
And
a
few
years
later,
he
was
almost
100%
blind.
Jesse’s
mum
was
a
teacher
and
his
dad
ran
a
charity,
and
they’ve
always
encouraged
and
supported
him
in
everything.
Jesse
started
climbing
when
he
was
young.
His
dad
took
him
up
his
first
rock
route
when
he
was
two.
All
his
early
climbing
was
outdoor
traditional
climbing.
His
dad
had
been
in
the
Mountain
Rescue
and
was
part
of
a
mountaineering
club,
so
they
would
go
for
weekends
away
climbing
throughout
the
UK.
Jesse’s
father
taught
him
everything
and
guided
his
first
route
outside
when
he
was
11.
At
this
time
he
had
about
30%
blurry
(模糊不清的)
central
vision.
He
could
just
see
well
enough
to
place
rock
equipment,
but
not
well
enough
to
pick
out
the
routes
from
the
ground.
At
university
he
joined
the
Mountaineering
Club
and
was
able
to
climb
much
more
frequently.
They
had
regular
trips
to
indoor
walls
and
weekends
away
outdoors.
He
developed
a
great
circle
of
climbing
friends
and
went
on
multiple
trips
to
Europe.
On
these
he
started
Alpine
climbing
and
ice
climbing
too.
But
when
his
sight
dropped
to
a
level
where
he
could
no
longer
read,
it
started
to
be
difficult
to
place
equipment
as
he
couldn’t
see
whether
it
was
properly
seated.
He
also
stopped
being
able
to
pick
out
the
holds
at
indoor
walls.
Jesse
thought
he
might
have
to
give
up
climbing
as
his
eyesight
got
worse.
But
his
parents
never
give
up
hopes
for
him.
They
planned
a
climbing
for
the
family
and
encouraged
Jesse
to
have
a
try
again.
Jesse
smiled
because
he
knew
his
parents
would
always
be
his
best
guide.
注意：
1.
续写词数应为150左右；
2.
请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
It
was
route
like
milestone
(里程碑)
and
it
was
not
easy.
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Some
people
asked
Jesse
why
he
chose
to
try
climbing.
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5.
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
“Meet
one
more
and
I’ll
definitely
ask
a
favour.”
Gina
thought,
looking
up
at
the
street
lights,
everything
immersed
(沉浸在)
in
the
dark
night.
“Alas!
This
unlucky
stuffi”
She
said
to
herself,
helpless.
Behind
her
came
the
jingling
of
bicycle
bells.
Hardly
had
Gina
let
out
“ah”
when
a
cycling
young
man
swept
past.
“Why,
the
cyclist
was
back?”
Gina
whispered
to
herself.
The
young
man
suddenly
returned
and
was
already
in
front
of
Gina
before
she
knew
it.
Gina’s
heart
was
pounding
under
high
tension.
“What
will
he
do
on
such
a
dark
night?”
“Called
me
just
now?”
The
young
man
got
off
his
bike.
Gina
shook
her
head
repeatedly
but
gently.
A
strong
sense
of
self-defense
overcame
her
and
she
refused
to
say
yes.
“Something
wrong
with
your
bike?”A
pair
of
smiling
eyes
met
hers.
Gina
became
somewhat
calm.
“The
front
tire
has
gone
flat.”
she
responded,
head
down,
a
ray
of
hope
arising.
“Well,
I
can’t
help
it
with
no
tools.”
The
young
man
managed
a
smile.
Gina’s
heart
sank
again.
“Do
you
live
far?”
the
young
man
searched
her
face
for
an
answer.
“Me?”
she
asked,
keeping
pushing
her
bike
forward.
“Well,
on
the
left
side
of
the
street
end
is
a
repair
shop.
Wish
you
luck!”
With
these
words,
the
young
man
rode
away.
Gina
almost
burst
into
tears.
“It’s
almost
midnight.
Where
can
I
find
a
repair
shop?
A
liar.”
She
started
to
hate
the
young
man.
Almost
at
the
end
ofthe
street,
Gina
couldn’t
help
but
look
up.
Near
the
sidewalk,
there
was
really
a
shop
with
the
light
still
on.
1.
续写词数应为150左右；
2.
请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
She
paused
hesitantly,
and
out
of
the
shop
came
a
girl
in
her
twenties.
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With
the
help
of
the
young
man
and
the
girl,
the
tire
was
soon
repaired.
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6.
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
On
a
beautiful
Thursday
of
this
April,
Amy
and
Alan
Green
took
their
daughter
Abbey
out
for
a
walk
in
the
neighborhood.
On
their
way
back,
Amy
picked
up
a
kite
for
Abbey
from
the
Dollar
Tree,
blue
with
rainbows—there
are
a
lot
of
rainbows
decorating
homes
around
the
region
these
days,
which
helps
make
life
less
dull
during
the
coronavirus
pandemic.
In
the
afternoon,
Abbey
took
the
kite
out
for
its
first
flight.
At
first,
the
wind
was
perfect.
It
took
the
kite
high
in
the
sky.
However,
suddenly,
the
wind
became
much
stronger
and
whipped
the
kite
out
of
Abbey's
hands
in
a
moment.
It
sailed
farther
and
farther
and
finally
got
stuck
on
the
power
lines
next
to
a
big
tree,
wrapping
itself
over
and
over
again
around
the
wires.
Since
the
kite
was
too
high
for
them
to
reach,
the
Greens
could
do
nothing
about
it.
Worried
less
about
the
kite
than
the
potential
danger
it
might
present
to
the
lines,
Amy
called
National
Grid
to
report
the
incident.
About
one
hour
later,
Mike,
a
worker
from
the
power
company
arrived.
He
carefully
unwound
the
kite
line
from
the
wires.
After
about
10
minutes'
effort,
he
successfully
freed
it.
But
unfortunately,
as
the
kite
was
wrapped
so
tightly,
there
was
some
unpreventable
damage.
Still,
he
presented
it
at
the
door
to
Alan
Green.
As
he
left,
he
noticed
Abbey
took
the
kite
to
the
backyard.
Out
of
curiosity,
he
stood
there
for
a
while
to
see
how
the
girl
would
deal
with
it.
Surprisingly,
she
dug
a
hole
and
buried
the
kite
in
a
shoebox!
Even
though
he
could
not
see
the
girl's
face
clearly,
he
knew
exactly
how
sad
Abbey
could
be.
He
really
felt
bad
for
her.
And
it
was
at
that
moment
that
he
decided
to
do
something.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
The
next
day,
Alan
went
out
to
get
the
mail
as
usual.
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Deeply
moved
by
this
act
of
kindness,
Alan
posted
the
whole
story
on
the
Internet.
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读后续写之情感情绪细节刻画
情感细节包括人物的感受、情绪，是续写中必不可少的细节描写之一。合理的情感情绪描写与刻画，可以凸显人物的性格、人际关系的特征、以及烘托故事高潮进而突出语篇主题等。因此，合理的情感情绪刻画在续写中是非常必要的。以下就是读后续写过程中，刻画人物情感情绪的四个方法：
一、直接利用恰当的表情感的形容词、副词或名词、介词短语等表达人物的喜怒哀乐
例如：快乐(happy,
delighted,
pleased,
joyful,
enjoyable等)、吃惊(surprised,
shocked,
amazed,
astonished)等形容词或介词短语(to
one's
surprise,
in
relief,
in
panic)等描述人物的情绪。
二、利用环境细节“融情于景”烘托人物的情感
例如：Della
finished
her
crying
and
dried
her
face.
She
stood
by
the
window
and
looked
out
unhappily
at
a
gray
cat
walking
along
a
gray
fence
in
a
gray
back
yard.(小说《麦琪的礼物》中利用3个形容词gray，体现了Della的难受和不开心。)
三、利用恰当的动作描写反映人物的情绪
例如：下面文章片段中的句子：
With
no
path
to
follow,
Jane
just
walked
on
for
quite
a
long
time.
After
she
had
climbed
to
a
high
place,
she
turned
around,
hoping_to_see_the_lake.
(动作描写，说明Jane满怀期望)
To
her
surprise,
(利用介词短语体现Jane的吃惊)
she
saw
nothing
but
forest
and,
far
beyond,
a
snow?capped
mountain
top.
(寓情于景，体现Jane的无望失落)
She
suddenly
realized
that
she
was
lost.
四、利用高级句式和修饰成分细化情感细节
例如：①“Absolutely！”
replied
John,
excitement
shinning
in
his
eyes.
(利用名词excitement和独立主格结构，描写John的兴奋激动)
约翰答道，“一定”，他两眼兴奋地闪闪发光。
②So
angry
was
the
bear
that
it
roared
and
smacked
the
fence
violently.
(so
...
that倒装句型)
熊怒火中烧，开始咆哮并用爪子猛烈地拍击护栏。
③You
can
not
imagine
how
frightened
we
were
at
the
approach
of
the
polar
bear.
(how引导的宾语从句，介词短语)
你无法想象北极熊向我们逼近时我们多么的恐惧。
【策略微练】
Ⅰ.按要求补全下面动作、情感和心理细节的句子
1．简又害怕又无助，靠着一棵树坐下，歇歇疼痛的双脚。
,
Jane
sat
against
a
tree,
.
(形容词短语/非谓语动词作状语)
2．“如果我没有和汤姆吵架，我现在就不会被困在这里了，”她想，悔恨的泪水模糊了她的眼睛。
“
，”
she
thought
to
herself
.
(虚拟语气的倒装句，
with复合结构)
3．她挣扎着站起来寻找那个湖。
4．她精疲力竭，她爬上一块大石头，躺了下来，很快睡着了。
(so
...
that状语从句，一连串的动作)
5．简醒来时天已经亮了。
6．尽管很沮丧，她还是决定继续前进。
,
she
decided
to
continue
forcing
her
way
ahead.
(让步状语从句)
,
she
decided
to
continue
forcing
her
way
ahead.
(状语从句的省略句)
7．随着小溪的声音，她向水边走去。
,
she
walked
toward
the
water.
(非谓语动词作状语)
8．突然，她注意到远处有一个熟悉的身影向她走来。
(非谓语动词作宾补)
Ⅱ.将以上补全后的各句合并为短文，注意恰当的衔接过渡
参考答案
Ⅰ.1．Scared
and
helpless,
Jane
sat
against
a
tree,
resting
her
aching
feet.
(形容词短语/非谓语动词作状语)
2．“Had
I
not
quarreled
with
Tom,
I
wouldn't
have
been
trapped
here，”
she
thought
to
herself
with
regretful
tears
clouding
her
eyes.
(虚拟语气的倒装句，
with复合结构)
3．She
struggled
to
her
feet
to
search
for
the
lake.
4．She
became
so
exhausted
that
she
climbed
up
onto
a
big
rock,
lay
down
and
fell
fast
asleep.
(so
...
that状语从句，一连串的动作)
5．It
was
daybreak
when
Jane
woke
up.
6．Although
she
was
depressed,
she
decided
to
continue
forcing
her
way
ahead.
(让步状语从句)
Although
depressed,
she
decided
to
continue
forcing
her
way
ahead.
(状语从句的省略句)
7．Following
the
sound
of
the
stream,
she
walked
toward
the
water.
(非谓语动词作状语)
8．Suddenly
she
noticed
a
familiar
figure
at
a
distance
coming
towards
her.
(非谓语动词作宾补)
Ⅱ.参考范文
Scared
and
helpless,
Jane
sat
against
a
tree,
resting
her
aching
feet.
“Had
I
not
quarreled
with
Tom,
I
wouldn't
have
been
trapped
here，”
she
thought
to
herself
with
regretful
tears
clouding
her
eyes.
She
struggled
to
her
feet
to
search
for
the
lake.
However,
she
became
so
exhausted
that
she
climbed
up
onto
a
big
rock,
lay
down
and
fell
fast
asleep.
It
was
daybreak
when
Jane
woke
up.
Although
depressed,
she
decided
to
continue
forcing
her
way
ahead.
Following
the
sound
of
the
stream,
she
walked
toward
the
water.
Suddenly
she
noticed
a
familiar
figure
at
a
distance
coming
towards
her.
【典例示例】
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
Sam
Watts
was
a
37?year?old
fisherman
living
and
working
in
Canada.
One
day,
Sam
planned
to
head
out
into
the
Pacific
at
9
am
and
work
straight
through
until
5pm
the
next
day.
Joining
Sam
would
be
his
crewman,
24?year?old
Tom
Buck.
Although
Sam
had
been
warned
that
a
storm
was
coming,
there
was
little
that
would
keep
him
from
going.
As
he
sailed
through
the
waves
some
120
kilometers
from
land,
Sam
let
out
his
three?kilometer?long
fishing
line.
The
storm
was
gaining
strength
on
land
but
had
yet
to
reach
the
men
far
offshore.
That
changed
around
1
am.
Waves
rocked
the
small
boat,
which
began
to
turn
sideways
like
an
amusement
park
ride.
“Get
us
out
of
here！”
Tom
screamed
to
Sam.
“Let's
go
back！”
With
the
winds
and
waves
kicking
up,
the
boat
began
to
fill
with
water.
Sam
and
Tom
tried
to
pull
in
the
fishing
line
together,
but
the
high
waves
filled
the
boat
with
water,
forcing
Sam
to
make
a
hard
decision.
He
cut
the
line,
losing
thousands
of
dollars'
worth
of
equipment
and
fish
in
the
sea.
He
then
pointed
the
boat
toward
a
port
five
hours
away.
Sam
then
called
his
boss,
William
Fox,
to
report
his
position.
With
dawn
coming,
Sam
spotted
the
rise
of
the
mountains
on
the
horizon.
He
was
figuring
out
a
route
through
the
dangerous
waters
when
suddenly
the
motor
stopped.
“I
couldn't
believe
it，”
Sam
said.
“We
were
24
kilometers
off
the
coast,
and
the
motor
died.”
High
waves
raised
and
dropped
the
boat,
sending
the
men
crashing
into
the
sides.
“William,
William！”
Sam
yelled
into
the
radio.
“If
you're
coming
to
get
me,
come
now！”
“We're
coming！”
William
shouted
back.
Paragraph
1
Shortly
after,
the
radio
died
and
the
wind
continued
to
blow
straight
offshore,
driving
the
men
farther
out
to
sea.
Paragraph
2
The
next
morning,
Sam
spotted
a
fishing
boat
in
the
distance.
【写作分析】
文章主旨：原文叙述Sam
Watts和船员
Tom
Buck去海上捕鱼时，突遇风暴，在危险之际Sam
Watts做出了艰难的抉择：割断鱼线，损失了价值数千万美元的设备和鱼。虽然和老板报告了自己的位置，然而Sam
Watts和Tom
Buck船上的发动机熄火。
续写部分应叙述他们被救出的过程。
续写第一段：根据首句关键信息“the
radio
died”和“driving
the
men
farther
out
to
sea”可知该段应叙述Sam和Tom在发动机熄火和无线电死机的情况下，被困海上面临死亡。
此时应用心理活动描写，描写他们的恐惧以及Sam
后悔的心情，
后悔自己不顾风暴的警告固执地出海的决定。
续写第二段：根据首句关键信息“a
fishing
boat”结合原文中提到到海上寻找他们的William可知，该段应叙述他们最终获救。该段的叙述可利用动作描写显示他们见到来营救他们的船只时高兴的心情。
【参考范文】
Paragraph
1
Shortly
after,
the
radio
died
and
the
wind
continued
to
blow
straight
offshore,
driving
the
men
farther
out
to
sea.
Fear
seized
Tom
and
he
was
trembling,
for
the
water
had
not
only
wet
his
clothes
but
also
ruined
his
hope
of
surviving.
Sam
murmured,
“I
was
warned
that
a
storm
was
coming.
Had
it
not
been
for
my
stubbornness,
we
would
not
have
lost
our
equipment
and
had
to
face
such
a
terrible
situation.”
His
voice
gradually
disappeared
as
waves
rocked
the
boat,
making
terrifying
sounds.
After
what
seemed
to
be
a
century,
a
great
darkness
fell.
Exhausted,
they
fell
asleep.
Paragraph
2
The
next
morning,
Sam
spotted
a
fishing
boat
in
the
distance.
He
excitedly
woke
Tom
up.
Tom
rubbed
his
eyes
and
stared.
Once
he
caught
sight
of
the
boat,
he
was
also
lit
up.
The
chance
of
surviving
made
them
regain
strength
and
they
began
to
shout
loudly.
The
boat
saw
them
and
they
went
aboard.
On
the
boat
they
met
William
and
other
crew
members.
Although
they
had
lost
thousands
of
dollars,
they
came
to
understand
the
value
of
hope.
【检测训练】
1.
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Toby
the
cat
was
in
a
small
cardboard
box
marked
“free
kittens”
when
Daisy
met
him
and
took
him
home.
And
from
that
moment
on,
he
loved
boxes.
He
slept
in
hatboxes,
gift
boxes
and
takeout
food
boxes.
He
slept
in
Daisy’s
sock
drawer,
if
she
left
it
open.
When
he
was
a
kitten,
the
size
of
a
small
loaf
of
bread,
he
had
slept
in
shoeboxes.
But
he
grew
and
grew,
and
now
he
was
a
lot
bigger
than
a
loaf
of
bread.
When
he
tried
to
sleep
in
a
shoebox,
his
furry
stomach
hung
over
the
sides.
Toby
didn’t
just
sit
in
boxes,
though.
Sometimes
he
sat
in
flowerpots,
or
laundry
baskets.
Daisy
had
a
beautiful
dollhouse
for
her
birthday,
a
dark
green
three-story
house
with
lots
of
furniture.
Daisy
loved
it.
So
did
Toby.
He
liked
to
push
the
furniture
out
of
all
the
rooms
and
sit
in
the
bedroom
on
the
second
floor.
One
day
Daisy
came
home
from
school,
and
she
couldn’t
find
Toby.
He
wasn’t
in
the
dollhouse,
or
her
sock
drawer,
even
though
she’d
forgotten
to
close
it.
“Mom,
Dad!”
Daisy
wailed.
“Toby
is
gone!”
Daisy’s
mom
looked
in
the
attic.
There
were
boxes
and
dust
bunnies,
and
even
a
mouse
that
had
escaped
Toby’s
notice,
but
no
Toby.
Daisy’s
dad
looked
in
the
kitchen
cabinets.
There
were
pots
and
pans,
and
cans
of
soup,
but
no
Toby.
Suddenly—“I
found
him!”
Daisy
cried.
The
big
cat
was
inside
her
mom’s
new
glass
vase,
and
he
didn’t
look
happy
at
all.
Daisy
tipped
the
vase
over
gently
and
tried
to
pull
him
out,
but
Toby
just
howled.
“We’ll
have
to
break
the
vase
to
get
him
out!”
Daisy
cried.
Now
her
mom
didn’t
look
happy.
It
was
a
beautiful
vase.
“No,”
said
her
dad.
“If
we
break
it,
the
glass
pieces
might
hurt
Toby.
Maybe
we
can
put
butter
on
the
inside
of
the
vase
and
slide
him
out,
like
the
time
you
got
that
ring
stuck
on
your
finger.”
注意：
1.
续写词数应为150左右；
2.
请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph
1:
Immediately,
Daisy
fetched
some
butter.
__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph
2:
Soon
they
were
at
the
vet's
office.
__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
【参考范文】
Immediately,
Daisy
fetched
some
butter.
Her
mom
buttered
as
much
of
the
inside
of
the
vase
as
she
could
reach,
and
her
dad
tried
to
pull
the
unhappy
cat
out.
To
their
disappointment,
Toby
put
his
paws
against
the
sides
of
the
vase
in
protest.
Now
they
had
an
angry,
buttery
cat
stuck
in
a
vase.
They
were
almost
desperate
when
suddenly
Daisy's
dad
hit
upon
an
idea.
“We
could
call
the
vet,”
he
suggested.
Soon
they
were
at
the
vet's
office.
Seeing
an
annoyed,
frightened,
buttery
cat
in
a
vase,
the
vet
almost
laughed
out
loud
but
she
managed
to
clear
her
throat
instead.
“Possibly
one
of
the
stranger
things
I've
seen,”
she
admitted.
She
had
Daisy
and
her
parents
stay
in
the
waiting
room
while
she
gave
Toby
a
shot
to
make
him
sleepy.
An
hour
later,
a
very
sleepy
and
washed
Toby
was
brought
out
to
his
anxious
family.
Not
only
Toby,
but
the
vase,
still
in
one
piece!
【写作分析】本文以故事为线索展开，讲述了小猫Toby被主人Daisy收养后，它喜欢待在各种盒子里，有时还会坐在花盆、平底锅或洗衣篮里，妈妈建议给小猫建一个自己的猫舍，可是Daisy没有在意，有一天Daisy发现Toby不见了，原来它蜷缩在花瓶里面，肥胖的身体几乎卡住了。
【写作步骤】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“Daisy立刻拿来一些黄油。”可知，第一段可描写Daisy一家人为救出小猫所遇到的困难和做出的努力，最终决定向兽医求助。
②由第二段首句内容“很快他们就到了兽医办公室。”可知，第二段可描写在兽医的帮助下，Toby得救了，花瓶也完好无损。
2.续写线索：把猫拉出来——猫不出来——向兽医求助——等待——猫出来了
3.词汇激活
行为类
①突然想出：hit
upon
/came
up
with
②建议：suggested
/advised
③给……注射：give…a
shot
/
give…an
injection
情绪类
①生气的：angry
/
annoyed
②绝望的：desperate
/
in
despair
【写作步亮点】
[高分句型1].
Seeing
an
annoyed,
frightened,
buttery
cat
in
a
vase,
the
vet
almost
laughed
out
loud
but
she
managed
to
clear
her
throat
instead.（现在分词短语作状语）
[高分句型2].
“Possibly
one
of
the
stranger
things
I've
seen,”
she
admitted.（省略关系代词that的限制性定语从句）
2.
阅读下面材料，根据所给内容进行续写,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It
was
deep
into
the
night
many
years
ago.
The
rain
just
came
pouring
down
outside.
An
elderly
man
and
his
wife
entered
the
lobby
(大厅)of
a
small
hotel
in
Philadelphia,
USA.
Trying
to
get
out
of
the
rain,
the
couple
approached
the
front
desk
hoping
to
get
a
room
to
stay
in
for
the
night.
“Could
you
possibly
give
us
a
room
here?”
the
husband
asked.
The
clerk,
a
friendly
young
man
with
a
winning
smile,
looked
at
the
couple
and
explained
that
there
were
three
conferences
in
the
town.
"All
of
our
rooms
are
taken,"
the
clerk
said.
“But
I
can’t
send
a
nice
couple
like
you
out
into
the
rain
at
one
o'clock
at
night.
Would
you
perhaps
be
willing
to
sleep
in
my
room?
It's
not
exactly
a
suite,
but
it
will
be
good
enough
to
make
you
comfortable
for
the
night.”
When
the
couple
declined,
the
young
man
pressed
on.
"Don't
worry
about
me.
I'll
make
out
just
fine,"
the
clerk
told
them.
So
the
couple
agreed.
As
he
paid
his
bill
the
next
morning,
the
elderly
man
said
to
the
clerk,
“You
are
the
kind
of
manager
who
should
be
the
boss
of
the
best
hotel.
Maybe
someday
I'll
build
one
for
you.”
The
clerk
looked
at
them
and
smiled.
The
three
of
them
had
a
good
laugh.
As
they
drove
away,
the
elderly
couple
agreed
that
the
helpful
clerk
was
indeed
exceptional,
as
finding
people
who
are
both
friendly
and
helpful
isn't
easy.
Three
years
passed.
The
clerk
had
almost
forgotten
the
thing
when
he
received
a
letter
from
the
elderly
man.
It
recalled
that
stormy
night,
when
he
offered
his
kind
help
to
the
elderly
couple.
In
the
envelope,
there
was
a
round-trip
ticket
to
New
York,
and
a
letter
asking
the
young
man
to
pay
them
a
visit.
The
young
man
decided
to
set
out
immediately.
注意:
1
.续写词数应为150左右；
2
.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好。
Paragraph
1:
“Do
you
still
remember
my
promise
years
ago?”
the
elderly
man
said
to
the
young
man.
__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Paragraph
2:
“You
must
be
joking,”
the
young
man
said.
__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
【参考范文】
Paragraph
1:
“Do
you
still
remember
my
promise
years
ago?”
the
elderly
man
said
to
the
young
man.
The
young
man
was
puzzled
and
remembered
nothing
of
what
the
elderly
man
had
said
years
before.
He
just
looked
at
the
elderly
man
in
surprise,
shaking
his
head.
“Well,”
the
elderly
man
went
on.
“I
promised
to
build
a
hotel
for
you
when
I
left
your
hotel.
You
are
so
kind
and
so
helpful.
I'm
sure
you
will
turn
out
to
be
a
good
boss
in
the
future.
I
have
firm
trust
in
you.
Paragraph
2:
“You
must
be
joking,”
the
young
man
said.
“I'm
serious,”
said
the
elderly
man
with
a
smile
around
his
mouth.
He
then
pointed
to
a
great
new
building
there.
“That,”
said
the
elderly
man,
“is
the
hotel
I
have
just
built
for
you.
I
hope
you
can
take
charge
of
it.”
Thus,
the
young
clerk
became
the
first
manager
of
the
hotel.
But
he
had
never
expected
the
turn
of
events
that
would
lead
him
to
become
the
manager
of
one
of
the
world's
most
famous
hotels.
【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了一个倾盆大雨的夜晚，一对老夫妇进入一家小旅馆想要住宿，但所有客房已经订满。一位年轻的员工将自己的房间让给了他们。多年后，这位老先生兑现当年的承诺，为这个年轻人建造了一座酒店，并邀请他出任经理的感人故事。
【写作步骤】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“这位老人询问这个年轻人是否还记得他几年前的诺言。”可知，第一段可描写这位老者重提多年前的承诺。打算要为年轻人建造一家酒店，让他做老板。
②由第二段首句内容“这个年轻人对老人的话难以置信。”可知，第二段可描写年轻人对老人的提议深感惊讶，但在老人诚恳的邀请下，承担起管理酒店的职责。
2.续写线索：重提诺言——惊讶——解释——难以置信——诚恳邀请——成功
3.词汇激活
行为类
①.管理：take
charge
of
/take
over/hold
the
reins
of
②.继续说道：go
on/add/move
on
③.信任：have
trust
in
sb/have
faith
in
sb/have
belief
in
sb
情绪类
①.惊讶地：in
surprise/in
astonishment
②.迷惑不解的：puzzled/confused/bewildered
【写作步亮点】
[高分句型1].
But
he
had
never
expected
the
turn
of
events
that
would
lead
him
to
become
the
manager
of
one
of
the
world's
most
famous
hotels.（由连接词that引导的定语从句）
[高分句型2].
The
young
man
was
puzzled
and
remembered
nothing
of
what
the
elderly
man
had
said
years
before.（由连接代词what引导的宾语从句）
[高分句型3].
He
just
looked
at
the
elderly
man
in
surprise,
shaking
his
head.（现在分词短语作状语）
3.
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Mr.
Taylor
checked
again:
water,
food,
bandage,
medicines,
a
compass,
and
a
map
wrapped
in
plastic...
Bingo!
He
put
all
that
he
prepared
for
the
coming
hiking
into
his
backpack.
Mr.
Taylor
was
fond
of
hiking,
this
time
in
particular,
for
it
was
the
first
time
for
him
to
hike
with
his
two
sons,
Harry
and
Joel.
Joel
liked
reading
books
about
explorers
and
Harry
joined
the
hiking
club
in
his
school
this
term.
It
will
be
an
unforgettable
experience,
definitely,
he
whispered
to
himself
unconsciously
a
smile
spreading
over
his
face.
Harry
and
Joel,
however,
argued
for
the
first
three
miles
of
their
hiking
trip.
Harry
accused
Joel
of
wearing
smelly
old
shoes.
Joel
blamed
Harry
for
using
all
of
the
bug
spray（喷雾防虫剂）.Harry
told
Joel
he
smelled
terrible.
Joel
called
Harry
a
coward（懦夫）.
“Will
the
two
of
you
just
quiet
down
and
enjoy
our
hike
together?”
their
father
said.
"You’re
missing
all
of
the
beautiful
scenery!"
It
was
true.
Neither
Joel
nor
Harry
had
taken
notice
of
the
bear
their
father
had
spied
at
the
start
of
their
trip.
They
hadn’t
looked
up
at
the
eagle
he
pointed
out
overhead.
Worst
of
all,
they
hadn’t
paid
any
attention
to
the
turns
and
twists
along
the
way
while
they
continued
their
argument.
“Joel
threw
a
stick
at
me!”
Harry
screamed.
"That’s
not
true!”
Joel
shouted
back.
Mr.
Taylor
could
no
longer
contain
his
anger.
"And
both
of
you
need
to
stop
arguing!"
he
erupted.
As
he
turned
to
face
them,
his
left
foot
caught
on
a
root.
He
slipped
backward
and
down
muddy
bank,
falling
into
the
river
that
ran
alongside
the
path,
Harry
and
Joel
raced
to
their
father’s
assistance.
They
helped
him
up
out
of
the
water,
and
then
dragged
his
wet
backpack
up
onto
land.
Fortunately,
their
wet-through
father
found
himself
just
slightly
injured.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在相应位置作答。
Paragraph
1:
But
his
glasses
came
off
when
he
fell
in
the
water.
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Paragraph
2:
“Just
calm
down."
Mr.
Taylor
shouted,
"Without
my
glasses,
we
need
to
work
together
to
find
our
way.
"
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
【参考范文】
Para
1
But
his
glasses
came
off
when
he
fell
in
the
water.
Harry
and
Joel
waded
back
into
the
river.
Twigs
and
leaves
swirled
around
their
ankles
before
floating
away
on
the
current.
No
glasses!
Hairy
thought
they
might
have
been
swept
downstream,
without
which
Mr.
Taylor
couldn’t
see.
Everything
was
a
blur
to
him
now.
How
could
they
get
home?
“Oh
great!
Now
we’re
lost,”
groaned
Joel,"and
it
might
be
days
before
someone
finds
us.”
"No
thanks
to
you.”
Harry
blamed.
Para
2
"Just
calm
down."
Mr.
Taylor
shouted,
"Without
my
glasses,
we
need
to
work
together
to
find
our
way."
Mr.
Taylor
fumbled
in
his
backpack
and
pulled
the
map
and
the
compass
out.
Luckily,
Joel
learned
how
to
read
a
map
from
his
books,
and
Harry
knew
how
to
use
a
compass
from
his
hiking
club.
They
stopped
arguing,
looked
down
at
the
map,
so
that
they
searched
for
the
river
and
used
the
compass
to
find
the
direction.
In
relief,
Mr.
Taylor
beamed
proudly,
"You
two
will
save
the
day.
You’re
pretty
good
hiking
partners!”
【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开。主要讲的是Taylor先生第一次和两个儿子Harry和Joel一起徒步旅行。然而，Harry和Joel为徒步旅行的前三英里而争吵。结果后来惹得Taylor先生生气了，他的左脚被树根缠住了，在泥泞的河岸上滑来滑去，掉进了路旁的河里。两个儿子前去帮助父亲，还好浑身湿透的父亲发现自己只是受了点轻伤。
【写作步骤】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“但他掉进水里的时候眼镜掉了。”可知，第一段可描写两个孩子一起帮助Taylor先生在水里找眼镜，在找寻无结果的情况下，两个孩子又相互埋怨。
②由第二段首句内容““冷静点。”Taylor先生喊道，“没有我的眼镜，我们需要一起找到出路””可知，第二段可描写Taylor先生在背包里找到了地图和指南针，两个孩子利用他们之前学过的使用知识，利用地图和指南针找到了出路。
2.续写线索：
掉进水里——寻找眼镜——埋怨——让孩子们冷静——找到指南针和地图——使用地图和指南针——找到出路——赞扬
3.词汇激活
行为类
①寻找：search
for/look
for
②抱怨：complain/grumble/murmur
at
③摸索：grope/feel
about/try
to
find
out
④使用：make
use
of/apply
⑤赞扬：praise/compliment/speak
highly
of
情绪类
①生气的：annoyed/angry
②高兴的：pleased/delighted
【写作步亮点】
[高分句型1]
Harry
thought
they
might
have
been
swept
downstream,
without
which
Mr.
Taylor
couldn’t
see.
（运用“介词+关系代词”引导非限制性定语从句。）
[高分句型2]
They
stopped
arguing
and
looked
down
at
the
map,
so
that
they
could
search
for
the
river
and
used
the
compass
to
find
the
direction.
（运用so
that引导目的状语从句。）
4.
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Jesse
Dufton
was
born
with
a
genetic
condition,
retinitis
pigmentosa
(色素性视网膜炎),
and
over
the
years,
his
eyesight
gradually
worsened.
By
the
time
he
got
to
university
in
Bath
to
study
Chemistry
it
had
got
to
the
point
where
he
couldn’t
really
see
images
at
all,
only
the
difference
between
light
and
dark.
And
a
few
years
later,
he
was
almost
100%
blind.
Jesse’s
mum
was
a
teacher
and
his
dad
ran
a
charity,
and
they’ve
always
encouraged
and
supported
him
in
everything.
Jesse
started
climbing
when
he
was
young.
His
dad
took
him
up
his
first
rock
route
when
he
was
two.
All
his
early
climbing
was
outdoor
traditional
climbing.
His
dad
had
been
in
the
Mountain
Rescue
and
was
part
of
a
mountaineering
club,
so
they
would
go
for
weekends
away
climbing
throughout
the
UK.
Jesse’s
father
taught
him
everything
and
guided
his
first
route
outside
when
he
was
11.
At
this
time
he
had
about
30%
blurry
(模糊不清的)
central
vision.
He
could
just
see
well
enough
to
place
rock
equipment,
but
not
well
enough
to
pick
out
the
routes
from
the
ground.
At
university
he
joined
the
Mountaineering
Club
and
was
able
to
climb
much
more
frequently.
They
had
regular
trips
to
indoor
walls
and
weekends
away
outdoors.
He
developed
a
great
circle
of
climbing
friends
and
went
on
multiple
trips
to
Europe.
On
these
he
started
Alpine
climbing
and
ice
climbing
too.
But
when
his
sight
dropped
to
a
level
where
he
could
no
longer
read,
it
started
to
be
difficult
to
place
equipment
as
he
couldn’t
see
whether
it
was
properly
seated.
He
also
stopped
being
able
to
pick
out
the
holds
at
indoor
walls.
Jesse
thought
he
might
have
to
give
up
climbing
as
his
eyesight
got
worse.
But
his
parents
never
give
up
hopes
for
him.
They
planned
a
climbing
for
the
family
and
encouraged
Jesse
to
have
a
try
again.
Jesse
smiled
because
he
knew
his
parents
would
always
be
his
best
guide.
注意：
1.
续写词数应为150左右；
2.
请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
It
was
route
like
milestone
(里程碑)
and
it
was
not
easy.
___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Some
people
asked
Jesse
why
he
chose
to
try
climbing.
___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
【参考范文】
It
was
route
like
milestone
and
it
was
not
easy.
Jesse’s
vision
was
tough
problem
and
he
himself
wasn’t
confident
enough.
That
time
he
felt
harder
to
complete
his
climbing.
He
told
himself
that
he
must
climb
on,
not
only
for
himself,
but
also
for
his
beloved
parents,
who
carefully
watched
his
steps
and
patiently
reminded
him
of
possible
danger.
As
you
expect,
Jesse
succeeded
climbing
up
to
the
top
of
the
mountain,
safe
and
sound.
Some
people
asked
Jesse
why
he
chose
to
try
climbing.
He
answered
that
he
did
that
because
it
was
difficult
and
challenging
and
he
wanted
the
satisfaction
of
success.
There
are
many
different
challenges
in
climbing.
But
the
feeling
of
accomplishment
is
incredible
He
couldn’t
see
the
view
but
he
could
feel
the
power
of
love
from
his
parents.
It
is
the
ultimate
test
of
our
brain
and
our
body.
【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，文章主要讲述了男主角Jesse有先天性的眼部疾病——色素性视网膜炎，视力逐渐下降，进入大学的时候几乎接近失明。但是他的父母自始至终没有放弃他，鼓励他走上家庭攀岩之旅。
【写作步骤】
1.段落续写：
由第一段首句内容“这条路线就像里程碑式的路线，但这并不容易。”可知，第一段可描写Jesse克服困难的心理过程以及最终成功攀岩。
由第二段首句内容“有些人问杰西为什么选择尝试攀登的原因。”可知，第二段可描写Jesse解释他努力攀岩的原因以及通过攀岩他获得的好处。
2.续写线索：遭遇的困难——克服困难——成功攀岩——选择攀岩的理由——攀岩的好处—感到父母的爱
3.词汇激活
行为类
①.提醒某人：remind
sb
of/help
sb
remember
②.完成攀爬：complete
climbing/finish
climbing
③.想要成功的满足感：want
the
satisfaction
of
success/achieve
a
sense
of
accomplishment
情绪类
①.自信：be
confident/
feel
sure
about
②.不可思议的：incredible/believable
【写作步亮点】
[高分句型1].
He
told
himself
that
he
must
climb
on,
not
only
for
himself,
but
also
for
his
beloved
parents,
who
carefully
watched
his
steps
and
patiently
reminded
him
of
possible
danger.
（连接词that引导的宾语从句，who引导定语从句）
[高分句型2].
As
you
expect,
Jesse
succeeded
climbing
up
to
the
top
of
the
mountain,
safe
and
sound.（由关系代词as引导非限制性定语从句）
5.
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
“Meet
one
more
and
I’ll
definitely
ask
a
favour.”
Gina
thought,
looking
up
at
the
street
lights,
everything
immersed
(沉浸在)
in
the
dark
night.
“Alas!
This
unlucky
stuffi”
She
said
to
herself,
helpless.
Behind
her
came
the
jingling
of
bicycle
bells.
Hardly
had
Gina
let
out
“ah”
when
a
cycling
young
man
swept
past.
“Why,
the
cyclist
was
back?”
Gina
whispered
to
herself.
The
young
man
suddenly
returned
and
was
already
in
front
of
Gina
before
she
knew
it.
Gina’s
heart
was
pounding
under
high
tension.
“What
will
he
do
on
such
a
dark
night?”
“Called
me
just
now?”
The
young
man
got
off
his
bike.
Gina
shook
her
head
repeatedly
but
gently.
A
strong
sense
of
self-defense
overcame
her
and
she
refused
to
say
yes.
“Something
wrong
with
your
bike?”A
pair
of
smiling
eyes
met
hers.
Gina
became
somewhat
calm.
“The
front
tire
has
gone
flat.”
she
responded,
head
down,
a
ray
of
hope
arising.
“Well,
I
can’t
help
it
with
no
tools.”
The
young
man
managed
a
smile.
Gina’s
heart
sank
again.
“Do
you
live
far?”
the
young
man
searched
her
face
for
an
answer.
“Me?”
she
asked,
keeping
pushing
her
bike
forward.
“Well,
on
the
left
side
of
the
street
end
is
a
repair
shop.
Wish
you
luck!”
With
these
words,
the
young
man
rode
away.
Gina
almost
burst
into
tears.
“It’s
almost
midnight.
Where
can
I
find
a
repair
shop?
A
liar.”
She
started
to
hate
the
young
man.
Almost
at
the
end
ofthe
street,
Gina
couldn’t
help
but
look
up.
Near
the
sidewalk,
there
was
really
a
shop
with
the
light
still
on.
1.
续写词数应为150左右；
2.
请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
She
paused
hesitantly,
and
out
of
the
shop
came
a
girl
in
her
twenties.
_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
With
the
help
of
the
young
man
and
the
girl,
the
tire
was
soon
repaired.
_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
【参考范文】
She
paused
hesitantly,
and
out
of
the
shop
came
a
girl
in
her
twenties.
“Hi,
there!
Come
over
here.
”the
girl
waved
to
Gina.
Gina
suddenly
lit
up,
fear
entirely
gone.
A
young
man
came
out.
Gina
became
shocked,
recognizing
it
was
the
young
man
she
had
iust
come
across.
“My
brother
came
back
from
work.
He
told
me
to
wait
for
you
here.
”The
girl
spoke
happily.
Gina
smiled
gratefully
and
thanked
them
sincerely“Nothing,
my
brother
was
afraid
you
didn’t
dare
to
come
and
iust
let
me
up
here
to
greet
you.
”The
girl
replied.
With
the
help
of
the
young
man
and
the
girl,
the
tire
was
soon
repaired.
“How
much
do
I
owe
you?”
Gina
asked.
“Money?”
The
young
man
smiled
with
a
big
dirty
hand
stretching
out.
“Fifty
dollars.”“Fifty?”
Feeling
so
shocked.
Gina
had
to
search
her
purse.
“Brother…”.
cried
the
girl
in
a
loud
voice.
“Stop
kidding!”
She
went
close
to
Gina,
“Don’t
worry,
he
was
just
kidding.
We
don’t
run
a
repair
business.
In
fact,
we
were
just
here
waiting
to
repair
your
bike.
”
【写作分析】所给文章讲述Gina夜晚独自一人在路上很无助，因为她的自行车轮胎坏掉了。这时过来一位年轻人问她是否需要帮助，Gina由于害怕没有接受。年轻人只告诉她马路左边尽头处有一家修理铺，便离开了。Gina认为他在说谎，但还是忍不住朝那个方向看了看，好像真的有一家店铺还亮着灯。
【写作步骤】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“她迟疑了一下，一个二十多岁的姑娘从商店里走了出来。”可知，第一段可描写Gina鼓足勇气走到店里寻求帮助的经过。
②由第二段首句内容“在年轻人和女孩的帮助下，轮胎很快就修好了。”可知，第二段可描写Gina得到帮助后表示感谢并且对年轻人为他人着想的品质所感动。
2.续写线索：走进店里——帮助修理——说出真相——感谢
3.词汇激活
行为类
①遇见：come
across/encounter
②回来：come
back/return
③寻找：search/look
for
情绪类
①开心起来：light
up/cheer
up
②震惊：shocked/astounded
【写作步亮点】
[高分句型1].
Gina
became
shocked,
recognizing
it
was
the
young
man
she
had
just
come
across.（现在分词作状语；省略that的宾语从句；省略关系代词的定语从句）
[高分句型2].
Nothing,
my
brother
was
afraid
you
didn’t
dare
to
come
and
just
let
me
up
here
to
greet
you.（省略that的宾语从句）
6.
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
On
a
beautiful
Thursday
of
this
April,
Amy
and
Alan
Green
took
their
daughter
Abbey
out
for
a
walk
in
the
neighborhood.
On
their
way
back,
Amy
picked
up
a
kite
for
Abbey
from
the
Dollar
Tree,
blue
with
rainbows—there
are
a
lot
of
rainbows
decorating
homes
around
the
region
these
days,
which
helps
make
life
less
dull
during
the
coronavirus
pandemic.
In
the
afternoon,
Abbey
took
the
kite
out
for
its
first
flight.
At
first,
the
wind
was
perfect.
It
took
the
kite
high
in
the
sky.
However,
suddenly,
the
wind
became
much
stronger
and
whipped
the
kite
out
of
Abbey's
hands
in
a
moment.
It
sailed
farther
and
farther
and
finally
got
stuck
on
the
power
lines
next
to
a
big
tree,
wrapping
itself
over
and
over
again
around
the
wires.
Since
the
kite
was
too
high
for
them
to
reach,
the
Greens
could
do
nothing
about
it.
Worried
less
about
the
kite
than
the
potential
danger
it
might
present
to
the
lines,
Amy
called
National
Grid
to
report
the
incident.
About
one
hour
later,
Mike,
a
worker
from
the
power
company
arrived.
He
carefully
unwound
the
kite
line
from
the
wires.
After
about
10
minutes'
effort,
he
successfully
freed
it.
But
unfortunately,
as
the
kite
was
wrapped
so
tightly,
there
was
some
unpreventable
damage.
Still,
he
presented
it
at
the
door
to
Alan
Green.
As
he
left,
he
noticed
Abbey
took
the
kite
to
the
backyard.
Out
of
curiosity,
he
stood
there
for
a
while
to
see
how
the
girl
would
deal
with
it.
Surprisingly,
she
dug
a
hole
and
buried
the
kite
in
a
shoebox!
Even
though
he
could
not
see
the
girl's
face
clearly,
he
knew
exactly
how
sad
Abbey
could
be.
He
really
felt
bad
for
her.
And
it
was
at
that
moment
that
he
decided
to
do
something.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
The
next
day,
Alan
went
out
to
get
the
mail
as
usual.
_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Deeply
moved
by
this
act
of
kindness,
Alan
posted
the
whole
story
on
the
Internet.
_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
【参考范文】
Para
1:
The
next
day,
Alan
went
out
to
get
the
mail
as
usual.
To
his
surprise,
there
was
a
new
kite—a
cute
robin
with
beautiful
feathers-in
the
box
along
with
a
note
written
on
the
National
Grid's
notepaper.
“I
felt
bad
for
your
daughter,
so
I
hope
this
new
kite
could
make
her
smile,”
it
read.
“Stay
safe
and
healthy!”
The
note
was
unsigned.
Para
2:
Deeply
moved
by
this
act
of
kindness,
Alan
posted
the
whole
story
on
the
Internet.
Soon,
word
got
back
to
National
Grid,
which
quickly
identified
Mike,
the
worker
who
had
carefully
saved
the
kite
from
the
wires.
He
told
that
as
he
saw
Abbey
burying
the
kite,
he
thought
of
his
own
little
sister
and
knew
it
well
that
the
girl
must
be
extremely
sad.
So
after
he
left
the
Greens'
house
for
more
service
calls
that
afternoon,
he
stopped
by
a
shop
to
buy
the
new
kite
and
sent
it
to
the
family.
He
didn't
expect
to
be
recognized,
but
Alan's
post
led
to
his
identity
being
revealed,
which
resulted
in
the
story
being
shared
and
liked
by
millions
of
people
throughout
the
Internet.
【写作分析】本文以风筝为线索展开，讲述了Amy给女儿Abbey买了漂亮的风筝，结果放风筝时，风筝挂在了高高的电线上，他们担心会给线路带来隐患，打电话求助于国家电网电工Mike为Abbey摘下风筝，可惜由于缠绕造成的损伤，风筝已经不能放飞了。Mike注意到了Abbey的伤心，为她网购了一个风筝。这是一个令人感动的善举故事。
【写作步骤】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“第二天，Alan像往常一样出去取邮件。”可知，第一段可描写Alan取回邮件，发现了一只漂亮的风筝，惊喜感动的心情。
②由第二段首句内容“被这一善举深深地感动了，Alan把整个故事都贴到了网上。”可知，第二段可描写Alan发帖后，故事的传播和人们对Mike善举的赞美。
2.续写线索：发现——惊喜——感动——传播——感谢——赞美
3.词汇激活
行为类
买：buy/
purchase
导致：result
in/
contribute
to
顺便访问：stop
by/
stop
in
情绪类
惊讶：to
one's
surprise/
to
one's
astonishment
悲伤：sad/
heartbroken
【写作步亮点】
[高分句型1].
Soon,
word
got
back
to
National
Grid,
which
quickly
identified
Mike,
the
worker
who
had
carefully
saved
the
kite
from
the
wires.(运用了who引导定语从句)
[高分句型2].
He
told
that
as
he
saw
Abbey
burying
the
kite,
he
thought
of
his
own
little
sister
and
knew
it
well
that
the
girl
must
be
extremely
sad.(
运用了that引导宾语从句)
