高考英语书面表达概要写作——智能手机上瘾综合症 课件（25张PPT）
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(共25张PPT)
Summary Writing Review
Review for genre(体裁):
A. exposition(说明文)
B. narration(记叙文)
C. argumentation(议论文)
玉城中学 侯芳
Nowadays ,the Spring Festival parties are quite different from before.People are not together in the same home but in cyberspace.It is another symptom of the so-called smartphone reliance syndrome （智能手机依赖症）.For many people,they use the smartphone in office,at home,even on the road;they play with it while eating ,drinking,even while bathing.But really it is not the fault of our smartphones,which were created to help us communicate with one even thousand of kilometers away and bring more convenience to our lives.
Ironically,we feel more distanced from each other in the real world.The reason is that we have more choices now,and we have to keep up with virtual conversations for fear of missing something.Smartphones and other smart devices have revolutionized the way we interact with each other.We have adapted to the technology.
However,one group risks being left behind by this trend.The elderly do not accept new technologies as fast as the younger and they can not enjoy the convenience of new technologies either.They even don’t access the Internet much.According to a survey released by China Internet Network Information Center,there wer731 million netizens in China by the end of 2016,but only 4percent were above the age of 60.The elderly face the loneliness of being “left behind”by their children working in cities far away. Spring Festival is almost the only chance for them to talk with the younger,yet smartphones rob them of this opportunity.
The only way the younger and elder generations can meaningfully interact is that the former put down their smartphones during this holiday and talk with the elderly face to face.And it will also do us a favor.Actually, we won’t be the digital pioneers in 30years.It is our children that will create and apply the latest technologies,and we,slow to accept new things,will be left to our own devices.If we hope our children will talk with us 30years later,we need to set a good example for them now.
Review for topic:
1Nowadays ,the Spring Festival parties are quite different from before.People are not together in the same home but in cyberspace.It is another symptom of the so-called smartphone reliance syndrome （智能手机依赖症）.For many people,they use the smartphone in office,at home,even on the road;they play with it while eating ,drinking,even while bathing.But really it is not the fault of our smartphones,which were created to help us communicate with one even thousand of kilometers away and bring more convenience to our lives.
2Ironically,we feel more distanced from each other in the real world.The reason is that we have more choices now,and we have to keep up with virtual conversations for fear of missing something.Smartphones and other smart devices have revolutionized the way we interact with each other.We have adapted to the technology.
3However,one group risks being left behind by this trend.The elderly do not accept new technologies as fast as the younger and they can not enjoy the convenience of new technologies either.They even don’t access the Internet much.According to a survey released by China Internet Network Information Center,there were731 million netizens in China by the end of 2016,but only 4percent were above the age of 60.The elderly face the loneliness of being “left behind”working in cities far away. Spring Festival is almost the only chance for them to talk with the younger,yet smartphones rob them of this opportunity.
4The only way the younger and elder generations can meaningfully interact is that the former put down their smartphones during this holiday and talk with the elderly face to face.And it will also do us a favor.Actually, we won’t be the digital pioneers in 30years.It is our children that will create and apply the latest technologies,and we,slow to accept new things,will be left to our own devices.If we hope our children will talk with us 30years later,we need to set a good example for them now.
A phenomenon(现象)
Disadantage 1
Disadantage2
The solution/suggestion
_________________of this phenomenon
2 shortcomings
Review for structure:
Para.1(总)- Para.2, 3, (分)-Para.4(总)
Review for contents Para1:
Nowadays ,the Spring Festival parties are quite different from before.People are not together in the same home but in cyberspace.It is another symptom of the so-called smartphone reliance syndrome （智能手机依赖症）.For many people,they use the smartphone in office,at home,even on the road;they play with it while eating ,drinking,even while bathing.But really it is not the fault of our smartphones,which were created to help us communicate with one even thousands of kilometers away and bring more convenience to our lives.
（ ）
（
）
People_______________the smartphone.
are addicted to
are fascinated by
are keen on
are crazy about
Review for contents Para1:
Nowadays ,the Spring Festival parties are quite different from before.People are not together in the same home but in cyberspace.It is another symptom of the so-called smartphone reliance syndrome （智能手机依赖症）.For many people,they use the smartphone in office,at home,even on the road;they play with it while eating ,drinking,even while bathing.But really it is not the fault of our smartphones,which were created to help us communicate with one even thousands of kilometers away and bring more convenience to our lives.
be created to=be designed to/be intended to
communicate with=associate with/connect with
the___________________ of the invention of smartphones
original purpose初衷
Tip 1:Focus on signal words!
However,they were designed to help people associate with friends far away and offer us more convenience.
But the original aim of the invention of smartphones is to allow us to interact with others more conveniently.
Review for contents Para1:
At present,many people are addicted to smartphones.
But they were intended to help people interact with others more conveniently.
While smartphones were intended to interact with others more conveniently,many of us are addicted to smartphones presently/currently.
While/Though/Despite the fact that…
Tip 2:Be concise（简洁的）！
Review for contents Para2:
Ironically(讽刺地）,we feel more distanced from each other in the real world.The reason is that we have more choices now,and we have to keep up with virtual虚拟的 conversations for fear of missing something.Smartphones and other smart devices have revolutionized(变革v） the way we interact with each other.We have adapted to the technology.
distant/unfamiliar
catch up with/keep pace with
for fear that…
communicate with
have adjusted to
Topic sentence
In fact ,we feel distant from others because we choose to catch up with unreal communication for feat that we will miss some important things.
（
）
（
）
Review for contents Para2:
Ironically(讽刺地）,we feel more distanced from each other in the real world.The reason is that we have more choices now,and we have to keep up with virtual虚拟的 conversations for fear of missing something.Smartphones and other smart devices have revolutionized(变革v） the way we interact with each other.We have adapted to the technology.
distant/unfamiliar
catch up with/keep pace with
for fear that…
communicate with
have adjusted to
Topic sentence
Unexpectedly,we don’t feel closer to each other because we hold smartphones all the time so as not to lose virtual connections.
（
）
Tip 3:Converse thinking(逆向思维) will make your sentence more natural.
Review for contents Para3:
However,one group risks being left behind by this trend.The elderly do not accept new technologies as fast as the younger and they can not enjoy the convenience of new technologies either.They even don’t access the Internet much.According to a survey released by China Internet Network Information Center,there were731 million netizens in China by the end of 2016,but only 4percent were above the age of 60.The elderly face the loneliness of being “left behind”by their children working in cities far away. Spring Festival is almost the only chance for them to talk with the younger,yet smartphones rob them of this opportunity.
why？
1don’t accept new technologies as fast as…
2can’t enjoy the convenience of…
3don’t access the Internet much
（
）
rid …of…
out of date
surf
Review for contents Para3:
However,one group risks being left behind by this trend.The elderly do not accept new technologies as fast as the younger and they can not enjoy the convenience of new technologies either.They even don’t access the Internet much.
The elderly face the loneliness of being “left behind”by their children working in cities far away. Spring Festival is almost the only chance for them to talk with the younger,yet smartphones rob them of this opportunity.
why？
1don’t accept new technologies as fast as…
2can’t enjoy the convenience of…
3don’t surf the Internet much
how
rid …of…
Review for contents Para3:
However,one group risks being left behind by this trend.The elderly do not accept new technologies as fast as the younger and they can not enjoy the convenience of new technologies either.They even don’t access the Internet much.
The elderly face the loneliness of being “left behind”by their children working in cities far away. Spring Festival is almost the only chance for them to talk with the younger,yet smartphones rob them of this opportunity.
Nevertheless,the old can’t follow the new technologies,which rids them of the chance to talk to the young.
rid …of…
out of date
Review for contents Para3:
However,one group risks being left behind by this trend.The elderly do not accept new technologies as fast as the younger and they can not enjoy the convenience of new technologies either.They even don’t access the Internet much.
The elderly face the loneliness of being “left behind”by their children working in cities far away. Spring Festival is almost the only chance for them to talk with the younger,yet smartphones rob them of this opportunity.
Sadly, the elderly fail to accept new things and don’t surf the Internet often,so that they are robbed of the opportunity to talk with their children face to face.
Tip 4:
Learn to use Passive Voice !
Review for contents Para4:
The only way the younger and elder generations can meaningfully interact is that the former put down their smartphones during this holiday and talk with the elderly face to face.And it will also do us a favor.Actually, we won’t be the digital pioneers in 30years.It is our children that will create and apply the latest technologies,and we,slow to accept new things,will be left to our own devices.If we hope our children will talk with us 30 years later,we need to set a good example for them now.
set down/lay down/put aside/put away
Young generations should set down smartphones and communicate with old generations frequently.
Topic sentence
（
）
Review for contents Para4:
The only way the younger and elder generations can meaningfully interact is that the former put down their smartphones during this holiday and talk with the elderly face to face.And it will also do us a favor.Actually, we won’t be the digital pioneers in 30years.It is our children that will create and apply the latest technologies,and we,slow to accept new things,will be left to our own devices.If we hope our children will talk with us 30 years later,we need to set a good example for them now.
Thus/Therefore,young parents need to put their phones aside and have more face-to- face talks with seniors,benefiting the elderly,themselves and the next generation.
Tip 5:
Proper linking words make your writing coherent
(条理分明的;
连贯的)!
Topic sentence
（
）
Structure
因果关系
并列/递进关系
Para.1
Para.2
Para.3
Para.4
因果关系
While smartphones were intended to help people interact with others more conveniently,many of us are addicted to the smartphone. _________,we feel unfamiliar from each other because we hold smartphones all the time so as not to lose virtual connections. ________,the old can’t follow the new trend,which rids them of the chance to talk with the young. _________,young generations should lay down smartphones and interact with old generations as often as possible.
Add linking words
However
Besides
Therefore
每个要点都在回应主旨！
Polish your summary
Do the key points summarize the whole paragraph properly Does each key point include all the major information
1. Nowadays,people who hold parties are not the same as before, they use smartphones when they do everything.
(要点一)
2 .If we put down smartphones now,it will help us in 30 years.(要点四)
3 .It’s impossible for kids to put down their phones to talk with parents,especially at Spring Festival.(要点四)
（1）要点归纳不到位
（2）细节误当要点
（3）与原文意思不符
contents
Polish your summary
4.Old people should make efforts to learn new technologies.(要点三)
5.In a word,it’s a normal phenomenon to be crazy about smartphones .(要点四)
（4）无中生有
（5）加入了主观看法
contents
Do the key points summarize the whole paragraph properly Does each key point include all the major information
More and more people tend to use the smartphone all the time,ignoring everything around them. However, the elderly were left by their children who are fascinated by Internet even at Spring Festival.Thus,it’s necessary for us to stop using smart devices so that we can have a steady relationship with our parents and our children.
Polish your summary
Does this summary include all the key points （complete）
存在的问题 （内容）
（6）漏要点二
contents
Polish your summary
language
Are there any mistakes in spelling, grammar or punctuation
(correct & concise,nice)
1. As time goes by, we communicate with others more convenient than before.
2. The elders can’t catch up the new tendency,which focuses them to face loneliness.
3. Recently,smartphone,which can link people everywhere,has become the common thing when people attend the parties.The smart products create a new way that people can communicate with each other even they are very far.(37 words)
conveniently词性错误
用词不当forces
表达欠精炼
Polish your summary
Is the linking word used properly (coherent)
Fearing that they will miss things is the reason why people feel strange.Thus, the old lose the chance to communicate with their children. (要点二和要点三)
存在的问题 （结构）
连词使用不当
structure
Additionally/Moreover
Appreciate your summary
content
language
structure
complete,objective
concise, cool
coherent
1
3
2
4
★ ★ ★
*Content: all the main points are contained in your summary; all the major information is contained in your each main point;all the points are objective.
*Language:correct (avoid grammatical mistakes)
concise(简洁的)(40-80 words)
*Structure: coherent（连贯的） (use correct linking words)
Suggestions:
4c +1O原则：complete,correct,concise,cohetent;
OBJECTIVE
Rewrite the summary
using “4C+1O”
principle.
Homework:
Summary Writing Review
Review for genre(体裁):
A. exposition(说明文)
B. narration(记叙文)
C. argumentation(议论文)
玉城中学 侯芳
Nowadays ,the Spring Festival parties are quite different from before.People are not together in the same home but in cyberspace.It is another symptom of the so-called smartphone reliance syndrome （智能手机依赖症）.For many people,they use the smartphone in office,at home,even on the road;they play with it while eating ,drinking,even while bathing.But really it is not the fault of our smartphones,which were created to help us communicate with one even thousand of kilometers away and bring more convenience to our lives.
Ironically,we feel more distanced from each other in the real world.The reason is that we have more choices now,and we have to keep up with virtual conversations for fear of missing something.Smartphones and other smart devices have revolutionized the way we interact with each other.We have adapted to the technology.
However,one group risks being left behind by this trend.The elderly do not accept new technologies as fast as the younger and they can not enjoy the convenience of new technologies either.They even don’t access the Internet much.According to a survey released by China Internet Network Information Center,there wer731 million netizens in China by the end of 2016,but only 4percent were above the age of 60.The elderly face the loneliness of being “left behind”by their children working in cities far away. Spring Festival is almost the only chance for them to talk with the younger,yet smartphones rob them of this opportunity.
The only way the younger and elder generations can meaningfully interact is that the former put down their smartphones during this holiday and talk with the elderly face to face.And it will also do us a favor.Actually, we won’t be the digital pioneers in 30years.It is our children that will create and apply the latest technologies,and we,slow to accept new things,will be left to our own devices.If we hope our children will talk with us 30years later,we need to set a good example for them now.
Review for topic:
1Nowadays ,the Spring Festival parties are quite different from before.People are not together in the same home but in cyberspace.It is another symptom of the so-called smartphone reliance syndrome （智能手机依赖症）.For many people,they use the smartphone in office,at home,even on the road;they play with it while eating ,drinking,even while bathing.But really it is not the fault of our smartphones,which were created to help us communicate with one even thousand of kilometers away and bring more convenience to our lives.
2Ironically,we feel more distanced from each other in the real world.The reason is that we have more choices now,and we have to keep up with virtual conversations for fear of missing something.Smartphones and other smart devices have revolutionized the way we interact with each other.We have adapted to the technology.
3However,one group risks being left behind by this trend.The elderly do not accept new technologies as fast as the younger and they can not enjoy the convenience of new technologies either.They even don’t access the Internet much.According to a survey released by China Internet Network Information Center,there were731 million netizens in China by the end of 2016,but only 4percent were above the age of 60.The elderly face the loneliness of being “left behind”working in cities far away. Spring Festival is almost the only chance for them to talk with the younger,yet smartphones rob them of this opportunity.
4The only way the younger and elder generations can meaningfully interact is that the former put down their smartphones during this holiday and talk with the elderly face to face.And it will also do us a favor.Actually, we won’t be the digital pioneers in 30years.It is our children that will create and apply the latest technologies,and we,slow to accept new things,will be left to our own devices.If we hope our children will talk with us 30years later,we need to set a good example for them now.
A phenomenon(现象)
Disadantage 1
Disadantage2
The solution/suggestion
_________________of this phenomenon
2 shortcomings
Review for structure:
Para.1(总)- Para.2, 3, (分)-Para.4(总)
Review for contents Para1:
Nowadays ,the Spring Festival parties are quite different from before.People are not together in the same home but in cyberspace.It is another symptom of the so-called smartphone reliance syndrome （智能手机依赖症）.For many people,they use the smartphone in office,at home,even on the road;they play with it while eating ,drinking,even while bathing.But really it is not the fault of our smartphones,which were created to help us communicate with one even thousands of kilometers away and bring more convenience to our lives.
（ ）
（
）
People_______________the smartphone.
are addicted to
are fascinated by
are keen on
are crazy about
Review for contents Para1:
Nowadays ,the Spring Festival parties are quite different from before.People are not together in the same home but in cyberspace.It is another symptom of the so-called smartphone reliance syndrome （智能手机依赖症）.For many people,they use the smartphone in office,at home,even on the road;they play with it while eating ,drinking,even while bathing.But really it is not the fault of our smartphones,which were created to help us communicate with one even thousands of kilometers away and bring more convenience to our lives.
be created to=be designed to/be intended to
communicate with=associate with/connect with
the___________________ of the invention of smartphones
original purpose初衷
Tip 1:Focus on signal words!
However,they were designed to help people associate with friends far away and offer us more convenience.
But the original aim of the invention of smartphones is to allow us to interact with others more conveniently.
Review for contents Para1:
At present,many people are addicted to smartphones.
But they were intended to help people interact with others more conveniently.
While smartphones were intended to interact with others more conveniently,many of us are addicted to smartphones presently/currently.
While/Though/Despite the fact that…
Tip 2:Be concise（简洁的）！
Review for contents Para2:
Ironically(讽刺地）,we feel more distanced from each other in the real world.The reason is that we have more choices now,and we have to keep up with virtual虚拟的 conversations for fear of missing something.Smartphones and other smart devices have revolutionized(变革v） the way we interact with each other.We have adapted to the technology.
distant/unfamiliar
catch up with/keep pace with
for fear that…
communicate with
have adjusted to
Topic sentence
In fact ,we feel distant from others because we choose to catch up with unreal communication for feat that we will miss some important things.
（
）
（
）
Review for contents Para2:
Ironically(讽刺地）,we feel more distanced from each other in the real world.The reason is that we have more choices now,and we have to keep up with virtual虚拟的 conversations for fear of missing something.Smartphones and other smart devices have revolutionized(变革v） the way we interact with each other.We have adapted to the technology.
distant/unfamiliar
catch up with/keep pace with
for fear that…
communicate with
have adjusted to
Topic sentence
Unexpectedly,we don’t feel closer to each other because we hold smartphones all the time so as not to lose virtual connections.
（
）
Tip 3:Converse thinking(逆向思维) will make your sentence more natural.
Review for contents Para3:
However,one group risks being left behind by this trend.The elderly do not accept new technologies as fast as the younger and they can not enjoy the convenience of new technologies either.They even don’t access the Internet much.According to a survey released by China Internet Network Information Center,there were731 million netizens in China by the end of 2016,but only 4percent were above the age of 60.The elderly face the loneliness of being “left behind”by their children working in cities far away. Spring Festival is almost the only chance for them to talk with the younger,yet smartphones rob them of this opportunity.
why？
1don’t accept new technologies as fast as…
2can’t enjoy the convenience of…
3don’t access the Internet much
（
）
rid …of…
out of date
surf
Review for contents Para3:
However,one group risks being left behind by this trend.The elderly do not accept new technologies as fast as the younger and they can not enjoy the convenience of new technologies either.They even don’t access the Internet much.
The elderly face the loneliness of being “left behind”by their children working in cities far away. Spring Festival is almost the only chance for them to talk with the younger,yet smartphones rob them of this opportunity.
why？
1don’t accept new technologies as fast as…
2can’t enjoy the convenience of…
3don’t surf the Internet much
how
rid …of…
Review for contents Para3:
However,one group risks being left behind by this trend.The elderly do not accept new technologies as fast as the younger and they can not enjoy the convenience of new technologies either.They even don’t access the Internet much.
The elderly face the loneliness of being “left behind”by their children working in cities far away. Spring Festival is almost the only chance for them to talk with the younger,yet smartphones rob them of this opportunity.
Nevertheless,the old can’t follow the new technologies,which rids them of the chance to talk to the young.
rid …of…
out of date
Review for contents Para3:
However,one group risks being left behind by this trend.The elderly do not accept new technologies as fast as the younger and they can not enjoy the convenience of new technologies either.They even don’t access the Internet much.
The elderly face the loneliness of being “left behind”by their children working in cities far away. Spring Festival is almost the only chance for them to talk with the younger,yet smartphones rob them of this opportunity.
Sadly, the elderly fail to accept new things and don’t surf the Internet often,so that they are robbed of the opportunity to talk with their children face to face.
Tip 4:
Learn to use Passive Voice !
Review for contents Para4:
The only way the younger and elder generations can meaningfully interact is that the former put down their smartphones during this holiday and talk with the elderly face to face.And it will also do us a favor.Actually, we won’t be the digital pioneers in 30years.It is our children that will create and apply the latest technologies,and we,slow to accept new things,will be left to our own devices.If we hope our children will talk with us 30 years later,we need to set a good example for them now.
set down/lay down/put aside/put away
Young generations should set down smartphones and communicate with old generations frequently.
Topic sentence
（
）
Review for contents Para4:
The only way the younger and elder generations can meaningfully interact is that the former put down their smartphones during this holiday and talk with the elderly face to face.And it will also do us a favor.Actually, we won’t be the digital pioneers in 30years.It is our children that will create and apply the latest technologies,and we,slow to accept new things,will be left to our own devices.If we hope our children will talk with us 30 years later,we need to set a good example for them now.
Thus/Therefore,young parents need to put their phones aside and have more face-to- face talks with seniors,benefiting the elderly,themselves and the next generation.
Tip 5:
Proper linking words make your writing coherent
(条理分明的;
连贯的)!
Topic sentence
（
）
Structure
因果关系
并列/递进关系
Para.1
Para.2
Para.3
Para.4
因果关系
While smartphones were intended to help people interact with others more conveniently,many of us are addicted to the smartphone. _________,we feel unfamiliar from each other because we hold smartphones all the time so as not to lose virtual connections. ________,the old can’t follow the new trend,which rids them of the chance to talk with the young. _________,young generations should lay down smartphones and interact with old generations as often as possible.
Add linking words
However
Besides
Therefore
每个要点都在回应主旨！
Polish your summary
Do the key points summarize the whole paragraph properly Does each key point include all the major information
1. Nowadays,people who hold parties are not the same as before, they use smartphones when they do everything.
(要点一)
2 .If we put down smartphones now,it will help us in 30 years.(要点四)
3 .It’s impossible for kids to put down their phones to talk with parents,especially at Spring Festival.(要点四)
（1）要点归纳不到位
（2）细节误当要点
（3）与原文意思不符
contents
Polish your summary
4.Old people should make efforts to learn new technologies.(要点三)
5.In a word,it’s a normal phenomenon to be crazy about smartphones .(要点四)
（4）无中生有
（5）加入了主观看法
contents
Do the key points summarize the whole paragraph properly Does each key point include all the major information
More and more people tend to use the smartphone all the time,ignoring everything around them. However, the elderly were left by their children who are fascinated by Internet even at Spring Festival.Thus,it’s necessary for us to stop using smart devices so that we can have a steady relationship with our parents and our children.
Polish your summary
Does this summary include all the key points （complete）
存在的问题 （内容）
（6）漏要点二
contents
Polish your summary
language
Are there any mistakes in spelling, grammar or punctuation
(correct & concise,nice)
1. As time goes by, we communicate with others more convenient than before.
2. The elders can’t catch up the new tendency,which focuses them to face loneliness.
3. Recently,smartphone,which can link people everywhere,has become the common thing when people attend the parties.The smart products create a new way that people can communicate with each other even they are very far.(37 words)
conveniently词性错误
用词不当forces
表达欠精炼
Polish your summary
Is the linking word used properly (coherent)
Fearing that they will miss things is the reason why people feel strange.Thus, the old lose the chance to communicate with their children. (要点二和要点三)
存在的问题 （结构）
连词使用不当
structure
Additionally/Moreover
Appreciate your summary
content
language
structure
complete,objective
concise, cool
coherent
1
3
2
4
★ ★ ★
*Content: all the main points are contained in your summary; all the major information is contained in your each main point;all the points are objective.
*Language:correct (avoid grammatical mistakes)
concise(简洁的)(40-80 words)
*Structure: coherent（连贯的） (use correct linking words)
Suggestions:
4c +1O原则：complete,correct,concise,cohetent;
OBJECTIVE
Rewrite the summary
using “4C+1O”
principle.
Homework: