成都市2021年二诊书面表达评讲课教学设计
课题：成都市2021年二诊书面表达评讲课 课型：评讲课
课时：1课时（40分钟） 授课人：徐铭璠
Writing Analysis 模块整体解读及分析
二、 Students' Analysis 学情分析
三、Teaching Aims: 教学目标
教学目标 knowledge and skills (知识与技能) 1. Improve students’ reading ability and the ability of cooperative study . 2. Grasp important words and phrases 3. judge the students’ attitudes towards the Internet
process and methods (过程与方法) 1 1. learning the words and sentences 2. Group discussion to make the expressions better 3. Mind-mapping to summarize the structure
emotion and values (情感态度与价值观) 1.To cultivate the right attitude towards 2.To comprehend the topic of human and society
教学重点 To help students master relevant words, phrases and sentences. To help students improve their reading skills and ability. To guide students to cultivate right attitude towards Internet.
教学难点 To help students to summarize the development of Internet. To guide students to share their ideas towards Internet.
教学方法 Task-based language teaching method & pair work
教具 Multi-media, blackboard
四. Teaching Procedures: 课堂教学过程
时间 教学环节 教师活动 学生活动 设计意图
3m Lead-in Greet the Ss and watch the advertising video of iPhone 13 Ask Ss what can we do via Internet 1.watch video 2.share what can we do via Internet Lead in the class
5m 1.pre-reading 1.share some photos of telephone and computer 1.Learn about development of Internet and technology 2.share their ideas towards technology Let students know the fast development of Internet and technology
5m show the writing requirements and guide Ss from several aspects to analyze the writing requirements including types,tense, person, writing stucture. Read the writing requirements carefully Analyze the writing demand from several aspects To enhance their ability of looking for detailed information from the writing requirements To cultivate their analysis ability
10m writing - analysis Part two while -writing guide Ss to divide the wrting structures into three parts including heading, body, ending guide Ss to brainstorm about the words and phrases that can be used in each structure task one : divide the wrting structures into three parts tasktwo:brainst-orm about the words and phrases that can be used in each structure To improve Ss’ sense of building writing structure To enhance Ss ability of thinking of and applying the words and phrases.
7m writing - analysis Part three while -writing encourage Ss to modify the sentences more correctly and formally in each structure ask Ss to conclude the transitional sentences encourage Ss to connect the sentences into a passage modify the sentences more correctly and formally in each structure conclude the transitional sentences connect the sentences into a passage Recite the final passage To improve Ss' ability of writing formally. To grasp familiar transitional phrases in order To improve the logical level of the writing.
10m Consolidation : post-writing ask Ss to write an article similar to the previous one encourage Ss to perform as different roles and discuss their writing. Make comments on Ss presentation Task one : write an article similar to the previous one Task two: discuss with partners Make a presentation To enhance their writing ability To consolidate their writing skills by doing exercises To cultivate Ss’cooperative ability
homework write down the composition Modify the composition into a better one Consolidate what Ss have learnt in class Enhance Ss writing skills
42021年成都市二诊书面表达评讲导学案
Step 1 Rethink 反思
In what aspects did I do well
In what aspects need I get changed
What can I do to get higher grades in writing
Step 2 writing
Analyze the writing requirements 审题
假如你是高三学生李华。你的英国朋友Peter正在做一项关于中国高三学生做家务的调查，想了解你的情况，请给他回一封邮件，内容包括：
1.你平时做家务的情况；
2.你对高三学生做家务的看法。
注意：
1.词数100词左右 2.可适当增加细节，使行文连贯。
人称
体裁
时态
写作对象
结构
b. Writing structure 构建框架
paragraph 段落 contents 内容要点 Words and phrases 可用到的词汇
heading 第一段
body 第二段
ending 第三段
Rewrite and optimize the details 优化细节
heading： I am Lihua, I am writing to talk to you about housework condition for the senior high school grade 3
改写：
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body: 要点1. I am a senior three students, though I have much pressure, I always help my parents whenever they need me,such as sweeping the floor and washing the dishes
改写:
要点2. I think we should do housework, because the college entrance examination is coming, we can relax ourselves and learn some life skills
改写:
ending: I will be glad if this opinion will help you
改写:
d transitional sentences 增加过渡语
因果关系
转折关系
递进关系
总结
发表个人观点
Step 3 小试牛刀Practice makes perfect
假如你是高三学生李华。你的英国朋友Peter正在做一项关于中国高三学生参加体育锻炼的调查，想了解你的情况，请给他回一封邮件，内容包括：
1.你平时参加体育锻炼的情况； 2.你对高三学生参加体育锻炼的看法。
注意：1.词数100词左右 2.可适当增加细节，使行文连贯。(共18张PPT)
成都市2021年二诊书面表达讲评
CONTENTS
Grades analysis
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1
Writing technique sharing and learning
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2
Rethinking and summarizing
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3
Practice
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4
目录
Reference standards
档次 人数
第五档 4
第四档 14
第三档 11
第二档 2
第一档 0
Grades analysis
Advantages
D
A
B
C
书写规范
要点清晰
句型得当
内容丰富
Shortcomings
卷面杂乱
拼写错误
书写潦草
语法错误
In which aspects i did well
In which aspects I need to improve
What can I do to get higher grades
Rethink
假如你是高三学生李华。你的英国朋友Peter正在做一项关于中国高三学生做家务的调查，想了解你的情况，请给他回一封邮件，内容包括：
1.你平时做家务的情况；
2.你对高三学生做家务的看法。
注意：
1.词数100词左右 2.可适当增加细节，使行文连贯。
Writing requirements
体裁
人称
时态
结构
an email
I
the present tense
three pragraphs
structure
heading
body
ending
background
contents
show appreciation and expectation for reply
你平时做家务的情况
你对高三学生做家务的看法
writing purpose
building structure
words and phrases
sentences
delighted/feel honored
/conduct a survey/detailed information
heading
insist,do cleaning,sweep floor/as usual
not only...but also.../beneficial,essencial/relax oneself/relieve pressure
body 1
body 2
appreciate /looking forward to
ending
transitional sentences
FINAL WORK
优化细节optimize details
标题数字等都可以通过点击和重新输入进行更改，顶部“开始”面板中可以对字体、字号、颜色等进行修改。
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标题数字等都可以通过点击和重新输入进行更改，顶部“开始”面板中可以对字体、字号、颜色等进行修改。
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标题数字等都可以通过点击和重新输入进行更改，顶部“开始”面板中可以对字体、字号、颜色等进行修改。
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标题数字等都可以通过点击和重新输入进行更改，顶部“开始”面板中可以对字体、字号、颜色等进行修改。
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heading
I am lihua, I am writing to talk to you about housework for the senior high school grade 3
提示：hearing that ...非谓语结构/more than delighted/ greatly honored,privileged
Hearing that you are doing a survey on the housework condition of senior 3 students, I feel greatly honored to share some detailed information.
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优化细节
标题数字等都可以通过点击和重新输入进行更改，顶部“开始”面板中可以对字体、字号、颜色等进行修改。
点击此处添加标题
标题数字等都可以通过点击和重新输入进行更改，顶部“开始”面板中可以对字体、字号、颜色等进行修改。
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标题数字等都可以通过点击和重新输入进行更改，顶部“开始”面板中可以对字体、字号、颜色等进行修改。
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body
I am a senior three students, though I have much pressure, I always help my parents whenever they need me,such as sweeping the floor and washing the dishes
Tips:As.../ filled with..../ insist /whenever....
As a senior three student, though filled with heavey study pressure, I usually insist my prents in doing housework whenever I am needed, for example,washing the dishes ,
doing cleaning.
优化细节
标题数字等都可以通过点击和重新输入进行更改，顶部“开始”面板中可以对字体、字号、颜色等进行修改。
点击此处添加标题
标题数字等都可以通过点击和重新输入进行更改，顶部“开始”面板中可以对字体、字号、颜色等进行修改。
点击此处添加标题
标题数字等都可以通过点击和重新输入进行更改，顶部“开始”面板中可以对字体、字号、颜色等进行修改。
点击此处添加标题
标题数字等都可以通过点击和重新输入进行更改，顶部“开始”面板中可以对字体、字号、颜色等进行修改。
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I think we should do housework, because the college entrance examination is coming, we can relax ourselves and learn some life skills
tips: think it +adj / essential, necessary/ with.....approaching / not only.....but also...../relieve pressure/ 定语从句（这对大学有用）
I think it essencial for students to do housework. with the college entrance examination approching, it can not only relieve my pressure, but also strengthen my life skills, which is beneficial for life in college
body
优化细节
点击此处添加标题
标题数字等都可以通过点击和重新输入进行更改，顶部“开始”面板中可以对字体、字号、颜色等进行修改。
点击此处添加标题
标题数字等都可以通过点击和重新输入进行更改，顶部“开始”面板中可以对字体、字号、颜色等进行修改。
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ending
I would appreciate it very much if my information will be helpful for you, looking forward to your earliest reply
I will be glad if this opinion will help you
transitional sentences 连接过渡语句
标题数字等都可以通过点击和重新输入进行更改，顶部“开始”面板中可以对字体、字号、颜色等进行修改。
标题数字等都可以通过点击和重新输入进行更改，顶部“开始”面板中可以对字体、字号、颜色等进行修改。
点击此处添加标题
标题数字等都可以通过点击和重新输入进行更改，顶部“开始”面板中可以对字体、字号、颜色等进行修改。
点击此处添加标题
标题数字等都可以通过点击和重新输入进行更改，顶部“开始”面板中可以对字体、字号、颜色等进行修改。
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因果关系
转折关系
递进关系
总结
表达观点
therefore, as a consequence/consequently,as a result
however, otherwise,on the contrary
besides, in addition/additionally , what's more, furthermore, more importantly
in a nutshell , all in all, in conclusion, to sum up
personally speaking, from my point of view, as far as I am concerned, from my perspective
连句成篇
标题数字等都可以通过点击和重新输入进行更改，顶部“开始”面板中可以对字体、字号、颜色等进行修改。
Dear Peter:
击 you are doing a survey on the housework condition of senior 3 students, .to share some detailed information.
a senior three student, though , I usually insist my prents in doing house work ,such as washing the dishes and doing cleaning. , I for students to do housework. , the college entrance examination , it can , but also strengthen my life skills, which will life in college
my information will be helpful for you, looking forward to your earliest reply.
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yours
Li Hua
Hearing that
I feel greatly honored
As
filled with heavey study pressure
whenever I am needed
As far as I am concerned
think it essencial
More importantly
with
approching
not only relieve my pressure
be beneficial for
I would appreciate it very much if
就我而言
更重要的是
Recite and Remember
标题数字等都可以通过点击和重新输入进行更改，顶部“开始”面板中可以对字体、字号、颜色等进行修改。
点假如你是高三学生李华。你的英国朋友Peter正在做一项关于中国高三学生参加体育锻炼的调查，想了解你的情况，请给他回一封邮件，内容包括：
1.你平时参加体育锻炼的情况；
2.你对高三学生参加体育锻炼的看法。
注意：
1.词数100词左右 2.可适当增加细节，使行文连贯。
击此处添加标题
小试牛刀Practice makes perfect
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Pairwork
spokesman
ending
heading
body
group presentation
THANK YOU!
