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How do we write a good
composition
Writing Task
同学们,初中生活即将结束。假期就要到来!请你根据以下提示,制定出度假计划。可以结合自己的实际发挥。
写作内容:
1.和家长/同学一起旅游,享受大自然的美景,放松心情;
2.参加志愿者活动,帮家长做家务;
3.读自己喜欢的书;
4.远离有危险的地方。
写作要求:
1.不少于80词,开头部分已给出,但计入总词数;
2.内容合理;要点齐全;句子及篇章结构正确、连贯,书写规范;
3. 不得出现校名和自己的姓名等个人信息。
My junior high school years are coming to an end. The summer holiday is on the way. Here are my plans for the long exciting holiday...
To examine
1.Person(人称)
2.Tense(时态)
3.Main Points(要点)
To build
To examine
Outline
Beginning:
Lead in your topic. 提出话题。
Body:
Set examples to show your vacation plan.
举例说明你的假期计划。
Ending:
Tell your expectation about the coming
vacation.说明你对即将到来的假期的期望。
To examine
To build
To connect
My junior high school years are coming to an end. The summer holiday is on the way. Here are my plans for the long exciting holiday.
First of all, I’d like to travel with my parents or friends to relax myself. I will enjoy the beauty of the nature. After that, I will take possible chances to be a volunteer to do something helpful to people. At home, I will help my parents to do some housework that I can do. At the same time, I will read the books that I am interested in, and get ready for further study in senior high school. No matter what I do and where I go, I will get away from the places that are not safe.
In short, I’m looking forward to spending a happy summer holiday.
One possible version:
Beginning
开头
Body(正文)
Ending结尾
transitions 过渡词
1.表文章结构顺序:first of all, firstly/first, to begin with, secondly/second… and then, finally, in the end, at last, last but not least…
2.表并列补充关系:what is more, besides, moreover, in addition, not only…but (also),in other words …
3.表转折对比关系:however, but, although, on the one hand…,
on the other hand…,so…that…
4.表 因 果 关 系:because, as, so, therefore, thus, as a result
5.表换一种方式表达:in other words, that is to say, that is…
6.表进行举例说明:for example, such as+n/doing, take…for example…
7.表 陈 述 事 实:in fact, as a matter of fact…
8.表达自己观点:as far as I know, in my opinion, according to my knowledge, personally…
9.表总结:in short, in a word, all in all, on the whole, to sum up, generally speaking…
Transitions 过渡词
My junior high school years are coming to an end. The summer holiday is on the way. Here are my plans for the long exciting holiday.
First of all, I’d like to travel with my parents or friends to relax myself. I will enjoy the beauty of the nature. After that, I will take possible chances to be a volunteer to do something helpful to people. At home, I will help my parents to do some housework that I can do. At the same time, I will read the books that I am interested in, and get ready for further study in senior high school. No matter what I do and where I go, I will get away from the places that are not safe.
In short, I’m looking forward to spending a happy summer holiday.
One possible version:
To examine
To build
To connect
To beautify
Attention!!
Divided passages(分段)
Grammar mistakes(语法错误)
Beautiful hand-writing(漂亮的书写)
Are you ready to start writing
假如你是李华,你的英国笔友Bob得知你校最近开展了“光盘行动”,提倡节约,反对浪费,想了解更多活动细节,请你给他回一封电子邮件介绍相关情况,内容包括:
1.活动目的;
2.活动内容(至少两点,如:演讲、张贴海报、发传单……)
3.你的感受。
要求:1.短文须包含以上内容,可适当发挥;
2.短文中不提及真实的人名、地名和校名;
3.词数不少于80词,题目和开头已给出,不计入总词数。
参考词汇:光盘行动“clear your plate”campaign
海报: poster 传单:notice
Dear Bob,
I have known that you are interested in our school’s “clear your plate” campaign from your last E-mail…
Yours,
Li Hua
Writing Task
Finish the outline first!
Enjoy writing!
一档:20—25分 包含所有信息要点,能围绕信息适当
发挥,内容丰富。使用了较丰富的语言结构和词汇,用词准
确句子通顺,行文连贯,表达清楚,没有或几乎没有语言错误,
具备较强的语言运用能力,完全达到了预期的写作目标。
二档:13—19分 包含所有信息要点,并能有所发挥,内容欠丰富。使用的语言结构和词汇能满足任务要求,句子较通顺,表达清楚,有少量语言错误,达到了预期的写作目标。
三档:7—12分 漏掉一两个主要信息要点,或只是简单说明了信息要点,内容不够丰富,字数较少。语言表达过于简单,句子不够通顺,行文不够连贯,有较多语言错误。
四档:0—6分 漏掉多个信息要点,所写内容和提供信息关连小,内容过少。语言不规范,句子无条理,行文不连贯,语言错误多。
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