九年级英语写作复习研讨课

课件32张PPT。复习研讨课
English Writing By Li Qian
No.68 Middle SchoolSaturday Sept 20 , 2008 Sunny
　　Today is Saturday. I get up at 7:45 this morning. I had a quickly breakfast and then went to school in a hurry, but we no classes on Saturday. Then I telephoned some classmate and ask them to have a picnic. They were very pleasing. We were got to the park and enjoyed ourselves. At about 5:00 in the afternoon, we by bus to home. I am too tired, but I’ll go to bed early. 请你当老师Give it a score!评分标准Saturday Sept 20 , 2008 Sunny
　　Today is Saturday. I get up at 7:45 this morning. I had a quickly breakfast and then went to school in a hurry, but we no classes on Saturday. Then I telephoned some classmate and ask them to have a picnic. They were very pleasing. We were got to the park and enjoyed ourselves. At about 5:00 in the afternoon, we by bus to home. I am too tired, but I’ll go to bed early. 请你当老师Give it a score!How to correct English compositions一、名词的单复数问题：1. We study Chinese, maths, English and other subject.2. The water was so clear that they could see all kinds of
fish.3. Many place are very dry. The water was so clear that they could see all kinds of
fishes.Many places are very dry.We study Chinese, maths, English and other subjects.
二、主谓一致问题1. And now many rivers becomes very dirty.2. Everything are going very well.3. David with his little brother go to the park every Sunday.4. There are a man teacher and two women teachers in the
office. And now many rivers become very dirty. Everything is going very well. David with his little brother goes to the park every Sunday. There is a man teacher and two women teachers in the
office.三、时态和语态问题1. Her mother jumped into the lake and swimed to Joy.2. Tom’s mother jumped into the water. She saves
her daughter at last.3. On Tree Planting Day,many trees planted in Xinchen Park. Her mother jumped into the lake and swam to Joy. On Tree Planting Day,many trees were planted in
Xinchen Park. Tom’s mother jumped into the water. She saved
her daughter at last.4.The 29th Olympic Games will hold in China.The 29th Olympic Games will be held in China.四、Chinglish 现象Last Sunday,Ann with her mother and brother went to a park. 3. I and my classmates by bus to Dayang Foreign Language
School.Last Sunday,Ann went to a park with her mother and brother. My classmates and I took a bus to Dayang Foreign Language School.2. I very like playing basketball.
I like playing basketball very much.
四、Chinglish 之缺少动词现象在汉语中没有动词的句子是允许的，但英语中每个完整的句子都必须有动词来构成，如：“我累了。”这个句子没有动词作谓语，而用形容词，但英语形容词不能作谓语，一定要写成：I'm tired.
I happy I can come to Beijing Zoo.
I am happy I can come to Beijing Zoo.
The apples cheap. I'll take some.
The apples are cheap. I'll take some.四、Chinglish 之缺少介词、冠词等现象还有一些考生因为没有熟练掌握介词或者冠词的用法，不了解中英文语言习惯的不同，也会出现明显的错误，造成丢分现象。
Because heavy rain we can't hold the sports meeting.
Because of the heavy rain we can't hold the sports meeting.四、Chinglish 之代词的误用英语中代词的形式很多，包括主格、宾格、物主代词、反身代词等。而汉语中没有主格和宾格、形容词性物主代词和名次性物主代词之分；此外汉语中很多时候不用物主代词，而英语中物主代词是不可省略的，代词的误用是考生最容易发生的错误。
I mother and I went to the shop to buy a present for I father.
My mother and I went to the shop to buy a present for my father.五、行文的逻辑性问题1. At once, she jumped into the water to save her daughter with her mother’s help.2. But she wasn’t careful, so that she fell into the river. At once, she jumped into the water to save her daughter.She wasn’t careful, and she fell into the river.六、词类错用1.When I was sadly, I played with it. 　 When I was happily, I played with it.
2. All of us are excited in it. Because it can make we happy and healthy. When I was sad, I played with it.
When I was happy, I played with it. All of us are excited about it. Because it can make us
happy and healthy.典型病例名词的单复数问题
主谓一致问题
时态和语态问题
Chinglish 现象
行文的逻辑性问题
词类错用You say!I say!Everybody say!Saturday Mar3,2005 Sunny
　　Today is Saturday. I get up at 6:45 this morning. I had a quickly breakfast and then went to school in a hurry, but we no classes on Saturday. Then I telephoned some classmate and ask them to have a picnic. They were very pleasing. We were got to the park and enjoyed ourselves. At about 5:00 in the afternoon, we by bus to home. I am too tired, but I’ll go to bed early. Let's have a try!Can you find the mistakes in the composition?Saturday Mar3,2005 Sunny
Today is Saturday. I got up at 6:45 this morning. I had a quick breakfast and then went to school in a hurry, but we don’t have classes on Saturday. Then I telephoned some classmates and asked them to have a picnic. They were very pleased. We got to the park and enjoyed ourselves. At about 5:00 in the afternoon, we went home by bus. I am too tired, so I’ll go to bed early. Bicycle are still popular on the streets in Beijing. It’s easy to by bike go to school or go to work. Now more and more people plans to buy cars instead of bike. But I think that running cars make air dirty. It was harmful to our healthy. Riding bicycles can help people keep healthy, but energy can be save. Because ride bikes will always make we happy, so I prefer to go to school by bike.Competition !Find the mistakes as soon as quickly. Bicycles are still popular on the streets in Beijing. It’s easy to go to school or go to work by bike. Now more and more people plan to buy cars instead of bikes. But I think that running cars makes air dirty. It is harmful to our health. Riding bicycles can help people keep healthy, and energy can be saved. Because riding bikes will always make me happy, I prefer to go to school by bike.Writing skills (写作技巧)：正确区分名词的单复数
保持主谓一致
正确使用时态和语态
避免Chinglish 现象
行文要符合逻辑性
词类的准确使用现场小练笔描写人物的经典词汇：
1）表示发型：short, long, curly, straight, brown,
red…hair
2）表示身材体态：short, medium height/build,
thin, fat, tall, heavy, strong,
athletic…
3）表示爱好：playing basketball/the piano…
fishing, hiking, reading, singing…
4）表示性格：outgoing, quiet, calm, serious,
funny, kind, smart, friendly,
singing, dancing, collecting stamps…描写人物的经典句型：
1）He/She is really…
He/She looks like…
He/She used to be/have/do…
He/She likes …best.
His/Her favorite …is/are…
He/She is good at…/does well in…
6) …
体裁细说：
在写人的记叙文中，我们的主要任务是描写人物的外貌，爱好，性格特征等，借此表达一定的思想感情。
技巧方法：
1.确定文章中心（人物的思想品质，性格特征……)
2.抓住人物特征（外貌，行动，语言，心理……)
3.选择典型事件 （人物有代表性的重大行为，或展示人物思想，
性格的生活琐事……)
4.点评人物形象 （表达一定的思想感情……) 写人记叙文学以致用吧！
现场小练笔 可以写你的朋友，家人，老师，同学，喜欢的歌手，影星，名人，运动员，让你难忘的人……
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句子不通畅训练学生记住批改符号Look the book read。 。 。 。 。。看个例文吧！
My favorite player is Yao Ming.He was born on September
12th,1980, in Shanghai. He is 2.26 metres tall and weight 134
kilograms.

He is son of two great basketball players and learned how
to play basketball when he was very young. At the age of 18,
he joined China Men’s Basketball Team. In 2002, he joined
the NBA. From then on he is on Houston Rockets. He works
hard and plays very well. He has great skills. Now he is trying
to making his dream come true.

Yao Ming is also warm-hearted. He is friendly to his fans
and his teammates. And he tries to help the AIDS patients.
Now he is a superstar. We all like him, and we all proud of him.
Write a composition：
A letter to Miss Li
今天，Miss Li给你们上了一堂英语作文课，她和你们一起讨论,发现错误并修改错误，教给你们写好作文的技巧(Writing skills)，如果她的课对你们写作能力有帮助,请你给她写一封英文信。(helen326613@sohu.com)HomeworkHomework1.Finish writing this letter to
Miss Li.
2.Exchange your compositions and
correct them.Do not be afraid of writing English compositions.After you finish one composition, please remember to correct it.Thank you for listening !