Unit 3 Times change！读后续写 场景描写（72张PPT）
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外研版 选择性必修第二册
Unit 3 Times change！
读后续写 场景描写
续写练习重点——场景描写
Ⅰ 外刊输入——悟语言之道
Local Take on Home Food
Food, glorious food! Eating local cuisine is an important part of any trip abroad. Sampling a country's delicacies can help you understand its culture, its exceptional customs and its people.
However, when you are abroad for a prolonged (漫长的) period of time, it is understandable that you might start to miss the stuff that you have grown up with and that reminds you of home.
Currently I am living in Canada and I am very lucky because I can consume traditional food here, especially as some of it is similar to food in the UK. It consists of food such as baked beans, meat pie with onion, bacon, ham and fish and chips, which are all British staples (主食). Yet it can be somewhat different. For example, the fish and chips here are not as greasy (油腻的) as at home because olive oil is adopted.
Of course, this is an ideal thing for my health, but not for my taste. Also, mushy (糊状的) peas and vinegar are not a main part of the elegantly cooked fish and chip supper in Quebec; once when I ordered the dish in a cafeteria, it even came with salad and rice.
Regardless of the differences, globalization means that large quantities of recipes have spread to other countries and associations are built in one form or another. The UK has a lot of Indian, Chinese and Italian restaurants. Local people from these countries may not always think that the food cooked here is authentic (地道的) enough, but the meals are very popular all the same. Eager to experience diverse food cultures, I always can't wait to give it a try.
Of course, having stayed in Canada for so many years, there will be food I am going to miss when I return home, not least the delicious maple syrup (枫糖浆). I will make sure that I have enough room in my suitcase to pack a few large bottles of the country's tastiest treat prior to my departure.
1.重点词汇再现
(1)cuisine n. 菜肴
(2)exceptional adj. 特别的
(3)stuff n. 东西
(4)consume v. 吃；喝
(5)consist of 由……组成
(6)onion n. 洋葱
(7)bacon n. 熏猪肉
(8)ham n. 火腿
(9)somewhat adv. 有点
(10)ideal adj. 理想的
(11)vinegar n. 醋
(12)elegantly adv. 讲究地
(13)cafeteria n. 自助餐厅
(14)regardless of 不管
(15)quantity n. 数量
(16)recipe n. 烹饪法
(17)association n. 关联
(18)prior to 在……之前
2．重点句型再现：形容词(短语)作状语
Eager to experience diverse food cultures, I always can't wait to give it a try.
渴望体验不同的饮食文化，我总是迫不及待地尝试一下。
Ⅱ 迷你语料库(Mini Corpus)
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
1 Prior to coming to China, my only experience with Chinese cooking was in America, with Chinese food that had been changed to suit American tastes. 描写来中国之前对中国烹饪了解不深的情况。prior to 意为“___________”， 其中to为______，后跟v. ing形式；that引导______从句，修饰名词Chinese food，从句中had been changed 为过去完成时的______语态；suit为动词，意为“________”。
在……之前
介词
定语
被动
适合于
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
2 For example, America's most popular Chinese dish is General Tso's chicken, which consists of fried chicken covered in a sweet sauce, flavoured with hot red peppers. 描写国外流行的中国菜。which引导_____________从句，修饰先行词General Tso's chicken；consist of 意为“___________”，不能用于_______语态；covered 为过去分词作______，修饰名词 fried chicken。
非限制性定语
由……构成
被动
定语
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
3 Later, I had a chance to experience authentic Chinese food by coming to China. 描写有机会体验中国美食。to experience作_______，修饰名词chance; by coming to China作________状语。
定语
方式
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
4 Tired, hungry, and not knowing a word of Chinese, we had no idea how to order, so the chef just began filling our table with the best food we have ever eaten. Tired, hungry为形容词作________，表示主语的状态；we have ever eaten为_________从句，修饰先行词 the best food，此处省略关系代词that。
状语
定语
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
5 The food was wonderful and different, but what was even more important was the friendship offered us. 描写美食所代表的意义。what 引导________从句。
主语
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
6 It has become a favourite traditional dish of the people in North China, where making dumplings has always been a family affair with everyone—from the youngest to the oldest—joining in to help. 描写饺子的历史和文化意义。where引导____________从句，修饰先行词North China; “with everyone...to help”为with 的复合结构，其中joining充当_____，和宾语everyone构成_______关系。
非限制性定语
宾补
主动
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
7 As a result, their traditional foods are what you can cook over an open fire... 描写游牧民族的传统美食。as a result意为“_________”；what引导_________从句，并且在从句中充当______。
因此
表语
宾语
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
8 There is much debate nowadays as to what makes up a healthy diet. 描写对健康饮食的争论。as to意为“_______”； what 引导______从句；make up 意为“______”。
关于
宾语
构成
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
9 However, there is increasing evidence that the real driver of poor health is not so much fatty food, as it is sugar. 描写饮食趋势。此处increasing为形容词，意为“___________”；evidence意为“_____”，为_______名词；其后that引导______从句，that在从句中不作成分；此处driver为熟词生义，意为“_________”。
越来越多的
证据
不可数
同位语
驱动因素
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
10 Beyond this, you can keep healthy by consuming different categories of fresh foods, especially fruit and vegetables, which are full of vitamins and fibre, rather than processed foods. 描写如何通过饮食保持健康。此处beyond意为“____________”；by consuming作______状语；此处consume为熟词生义，意为“_______”，其名词形式为_____________；which引导_______________从句，修饰先行词fruit and vegetables; rather than意为“__________”。
除此之外
方式
吃，喝
consumption
非限制性定语
而不是
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
11 As with everything in life, moderation is key. 描写适度是关键。
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
12 Finally, a fundamental key to healthy eating is to eat slowly. 描写健康饮食的关键。
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
13 In addition, studies show that consistent eating habits, for example, taking three meals a day at the same time each day, are better for our health. 描写健康饮食习惯——规律饮食。in addition 意为“__________”； consistent eating habits 意为“_____________”。
此外
规律饮食
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
14 It is also better to eat a modest amount of food each time, rather than to eat a lot in one meal, and then a little in the next. 描写健康饮食习惯——适量饮食，不要暴饮暴食。
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
15 It is up to you to decide how you want to live, and to make the right decisions about your diet. 描写对生活方式做出的决定。
Ⅲ 读后续写精炼篇：场景描写
一、写作微技能：场景描写
场景是由人、物、事相互活动构成的，既包括整件事情发生的社会场景也包括事情发生的具体场景。由写作视角的变化，也可分为第一人称视角观察到的场景和客观视角描述的场景。
在读后续写中，最常涉及的第一人称视角所观察、体验到的场景，其主要目的是交代故事发生的背景、衬托人物心理、提示情节发展和烘托故事发展的气氛。
【即学即练】
分析以下例句，体会场景描写的功能
1．Her dad worked at job away from the farm and her mom ran the farm with the little kids. After high school, she could only choose a local technical college, working to pay her tuition, because there was no extra money set aside for her college education.
分析：本段以______视角描述女主角并不富裕的家庭状况；并且直接影响女主角的______方面。由此可以推测，下文故事会着重就这一方面展开。
客观
教育
2．Their efforts have been proven fruitful.
分析：本句为概括性的场景描写。efforts总结了上文，fruitful引出下文，故起到__________的作用。
3．When the movie was first shown to the public last month, a group of excited people gathered at the entrance.
分析：本句交代了故事发生的______。
承上启下
背景
4．I quickly realized the situation could get very serious.
分析：本句以_____人称描写场景：情况会很糟糕。由此，下文故事情节应该是：“我”会想办法______这个情况。
5．At last they came to the library. It was lined with books and there were pictures and statues, and wide tables, comfortable chairs and best of all, a great open fireplace giving off warmth constantly.
分析：本段描写室内场景——________，详细描述了室内的布置，不仅体现了环境的______，而且烘托了人物的心情：______、______。
第一
处理
图书馆
舒适
开心
愉悦
6．How dark the rooms seemed now！How sad and lonely the house!
分析：此处直接描写室内场景，烘托出______、______、______的气氛。
黑暗
悲伤
孤独
7．Quite flushed with excitement were their red faces, as the girls whispered to one another what they had seen. Some climbed up to see the bride, while others waved a welcome to those who just came .
分析：本段描写快乐的______场景。通过抽象意义名词______________________描写人们的兴奋；通过动词________________、____________及__________描写人们的开心。
婚礼
excitement
whisper
climb
wave
8．There was a long pause. The unbearable silence felt like an invisible hand, holding everyone tightly.
分析：此处描写______的场景。felt like an invisible hand 是一个______，更加生动地描写出这种令人难以忍受的场景。
沉默
比喻
二、牛刀小试：策略引领，演练读后续写“6＋3”模式
【典题精析】
阅读下面的材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Fortune Cookie Friends
Mei Mei frowned as she helped her mother and father set out the cooking supplies in the shiny steel kitchen. Her family had just moved here from San Francisco, having bought a small restaurant, which was set to open in the next few days.
“Moving here was a stupid idea. I have lost all my friends in San Francisco. What should I do now ” Mei Mei grumbled, mostly to herself.
“What's that？” her mother asked, opening a box and lifting out several pots and a wok.
“Nothing，” Mei Mei mumbled. The girl had been complaining about the move, but her parents had made the decision and were now too busy getting ready for the grand opening to listen to her complaints.
The first few days at her new school hadn't been easy, either. She found it hard to talk to people she didn't know, and it seemed like the students hadn't even noticed her. Mei Mei sighed and got back to washing dishes.
On the day of the grand opening, Mei Mei's parents were all smiles, welcoming customers into the restaurant, brightly decorated in gold and red. Even Mei Mei was in a good mood as she rushed around, seating guests, handing out menus, and pouring tall glasses of water. This was a big day for her family.
At one of the tables sat a family with two daughters who were about Mei Mei's age. As she filled their glasses, Mei Mei realized the twins were in her class. Mei Mei ducked her head down so her long hair covered her face, and she turned away from the table.
Mei Mei's mother found her soon after, in the kitchen loading the dishwasher.
“Honey, what are you doing back here We need you out front with the customers.”
注意：续写词数应为150左右。
“Mom, I don't want to be out there! ” Mei Mei murmured._______________________________________________
__________________________________________________________
__________________________________________________________
__________________________________________________________
Mei Mei put a handful of fortune cookies into a small plate and left the kitchen._________________________________________________
__________________________________________________________
__________________________________________________________
__________________________________________________________
1．一审——审要素
时态 一般过去时 六要素 When ...as she helped her mother and father _______________________________________________．
Her family _______________________________________．..
The first few days __________________．..
On the day of __________________．..
Where set out the cooking supplies in the shiny steel kitchen
had just moved here from San Francisco
at her new school
the grand opening
时态 一般过去时 六要素 Who Mei Mei
her _______
a family with two daughters __________________ in her class
mother
who are the twins
时态 一般过去时 六要素 What Mei Mei had been complaining, “I have lost _______________ in San Francisco. _____________________？”
She ______________ to talk to people she didn't know, and it seemed like the students ________________________．
all my friends
What should I do now
found it hard
hadn't even noticed her
时态 一般过去时 六要素 What So while helping her parents in the front of the restaurant, she met her classmates but she _____________________ and ___________________________．
ducked her head down
turned away from the table
时态 一般过去时 六要素 Why She found it hard to make new friends.
How 合理预测：梅梅用________________交到了新朋友。
fortune cookies
2.二定——定主题
主题：If you want to make new friends, you should be brave and friendly.
3．三推测——推测段首句定基调
(1)标出段首句的关键词
第一段：“Mom, ______________________________ ” Mei Mei murmured.
第二段：Mei Mei put _____________________________ into a small plate and _________________．
I don't want to be out there!
a handful of fortune cookies
left the kitchen
(2)推测第一段和第二段的结局。尤其关注第二段的段首句，做到第一段和第二段的逻辑性衔接。
根据第一段的段首句可知，在新环境中，梅梅没有朋友，所以_______________________。
根据第二段的段首句可知，妈妈说服了梅梅，她__________，主动去交新朋友。
通过以上可推测：
第一段的结局：妈妈说服了梅梅。
第二段的结局：梅梅和同学成了好朋友。
不敢主动和同学交流
鼓起勇气
4．四构思——每段3分天下
按照每段三个层次，构思每一段的情节。
第一段 妈妈感觉到了梅梅的________
妈妈想办法鼓励梅梅，让她勇于尝试________
梅梅想到了如何和新同学开始聊天
第二段 梅梅和同学分享了________________
梅梅惊喜地发现，她的同学非常___
升华：在新的环境下，也要勇敢地去交新朋友
不开心
交新朋友
fortune cookies
友好
5.五遣词造句——连词成句，连句成文
(1)高级词汇及语块
①______ v. 低下
②____________ n. 沮丧；懊恼
③_______ adv. 轻柔地
④________ v. 安慰
⑤__________ adv. 耐心地
lower
frustration
softly
comfort
patiently
⑥________ v. 解释
⑦____________ n. 不确定
⑧_________ v. 继续
⑨________ n. 勇气
⑩___________ adv. 完全地
____________ n. 环境
__________ 抑制
explain
uncertainty
continue
courage
completely
environment
hold back
_______________ 那一刻
_________ 倾吐
_________ 突然进入
________ 向上看
___________ 扫除；清除
________________________ 不乐意做某事
at that moment
pour out
pop into
look up
sweep away
be unwilling to do sth.
(2)亮点句型及高级结构
①couldn't help doing sth.意为“情不自禁做某事”
梅梅情不自禁哭了起来。
Mei Mei _____________________．
②What if意为“如果……怎么办？”
如果他们不喜欢我怎么办？
____________________________
couldn't help crying
What if they don't like me
③v. ing形式作状语，和句子的主语构成主动关系。
抱着梅梅，妈妈耐心地安慰她，建议她可以先采取行动去交朋友。
________ Mei Mei in her arms, her mother ____________________，while ___________ she can make new friends by taking action first.
Holding
comforted her patiently
suggesting
④动词的联动
梅梅走向那对双胞胎的桌子，放下盘子，热情地笑了，“送你们幸运饼干！”
Mei Mei _____ towards the twins‘ table, _________ the plate, and _______________，“Fortunate cookies for you！”
went
put down
smiled warmly
⑤形容词(短语)作状语
这对双胞胎抬起头来，很吃惊。
The twins looked up，__________.
⑥升华句型：it turned out that意为“结果证明是……”
结果发现，有时候仅仅需要勇气和幸运饼干就能交到朋友，即使是在一个全新的环境中。
___________________ sometimes, it just took ________ and some fortune cookies to make new friends, even ________________________________.
surprised
It turned out that
courage
in a completely new environment
6．六成文——誊写清晰，字迹工整
__________________________________________________________
__________________________________________________________
__________________________________________________________
__________________________________________________________
__________________________________________________________
“Mom, I don't want to be out there！” Mei Mei murmured. She lowered her head, holding back her tears. Feeling Mei Mei's frustration, her mother asked her what was wrong softly. At that moment, Mei Mei couldn't help crying, pouring out her troubles, “I'm so lonely but I am afraid to talk to them.” she sobbed,
“What if they don't like me？” Holding Mei Mei in her arms, her mother comforted patiently, while suggesting she can make new friends by taking action first. “But how？” Mei Mei asked. Suddenly, an idea popped into her head. “ Mom, can I use our delicious fortunate cookies？” Her mother nodded in agreement, “Of course！”
Mei Mei put a handful of fortune cookies into a small plate and left the kitchen. Mei Mei went towards the twins' table, put down the plate, and smiled warmly, “Fortunate cookies for you！” The twins looked up, surprised. “Mei Mei, why are you here？” Mei Mei was amazed that they knew her name! She explained, “It's our family restaurant.” The twins nodded and introduced her to their parents,
“This is Mei Mei, our new classmate！” Their bright smiles swept all the uncertainty away in her mind. The twins continued, “We thought you were unwilling to talk to us. But now we know, you are so nice! ” It turned out that sometimes, it just took courage and some fortune cookies to make new friends, even in a completely new environment.
再次回读原文，并积累以下高级词汇、语块、亮点句型及高级结构
1．______v. 皱眉
2．_________________ v. 发牢骚
3．_______ v. 咕哝
4．_______________ n. 顾客
5．_________ v. 装饰
frown
grumble/complain
mumble
customer/guest
decorate
6．_____________________________ 摆放烹饪用品
7．___________________________ 在闪亮的厨房里
8．__________________ 做决定
9．__________________ 盛大的开业
10．_______________ 心情好
11．__________ 分发
12．_____________________ 低下头
set out the cooking supplies
in the shiny steel kitchen
make the decision
the grand opening
in a good mood
hand out
duck one's head down
13．v. ing作状语＋which 引导定语从句
她们家刚从旧金山搬到这里，买了一家小餐馆，几天后就要开张
了。
Her family had just moved here from San Francisco，______________ a small restaurant, ______________________ in the next few days.
having bought
which was set to open
14．过去完成进行时
女孩一直抱怨搬家。
The girl _____________________ about the move.
had been complaining
15．too...to意为 “太……而不能”＋ (be) busy doing sth.意为“忙于做某事”
她的父母已经做了决定，现在正忙着为盛大的开业做准备，而没有听到她的抱怨。
Her parents had __________________ and were now _______________________ for the grand opening _____________ her complaints.
made the decision
too busy getting ready
to listen to
16．find＋宾语＋宾补
她发现很难和不认识的人说话。
She ______________ to talk to people she didn't know.
17．场景描写：梅梅的父母满面笑容。
___________________________________
found it hard
Mei Mei's parents were all smiles.
18．场景描写：就连梅梅也兴高采烈地跑来跑去，给客人安排座
位，分发菜单，倒上一大杯水。
Even Mei Mei was in a good mood as she _______ around, ________ guests, _____________menus, and_________ tall glasses of water.
19．场景描写：今天对她家来说是个大日子。
___________________________________
rushed
seating
handing out
pouring
This was a big day for her family.
生如蝼蚁当立鸿鹄之志
命如纸薄应有不屈之心
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外研版 选择性必修第二册
Unit 3 Times change！
读后续写 场景描写
续写练习重点——场景描写
Ⅰ 外刊输入——悟语言之道
Local Take on Home Food
Food, glorious food! Eating local cuisine is an important part of any trip abroad. Sampling a country's delicacies can help you understand its culture, its exceptional customs and its people.
However, when you are abroad for a prolonged (漫长的) period of time, it is understandable that you might start to miss the stuff that you have grown up with and that reminds you of home.
Currently I am living in Canada and I am very lucky because I can consume traditional food here, especially as some of it is similar to food in the UK. It consists of food such as baked beans, meat pie with onion, bacon, ham and fish and chips, which are all British staples (主食). Yet it can be somewhat different. For example, the fish and chips here are not as greasy (油腻的) as at home because olive oil is adopted.
Of course, this is an ideal thing for my health, but not for my taste. Also, mushy (糊状的) peas and vinegar are not a main part of the elegantly cooked fish and chip supper in Quebec; once when I ordered the dish in a cafeteria, it even came with salad and rice.
Regardless of the differences, globalization means that large quantities of recipes have spread to other countries and associations are built in one form or another. The UK has a lot of Indian, Chinese and Italian restaurants. Local people from these countries may not always think that the food cooked here is authentic (地道的) enough, but the meals are very popular all the same. Eager to experience diverse food cultures, I always can't wait to give it a try.
Of course, having stayed in Canada for so many years, there will be food I am going to miss when I return home, not least the delicious maple syrup (枫糖浆). I will make sure that I have enough room in my suitcase to pack a few large bottles of the country's tastiest treat prior to my departure.
1.重点词汇再现
(1)cuisine n. 菜肴
(2)exceptional adj. 特别的
(3)stuff n. 东西
(4)consume v. 吃；喝
(5)consist of 由……组成
(6)onion n. 洋葱
(7)bacon n. 熏猪肉
(8)ham n. 火腿
(9)somewhat adv. 有点
(10)ideal adj. 理想的
(11)vinegar n. 醋
(12)elegantly adv. 讲究地
(13)cafeteria n. 自助餐厅
(14)regardless of 不管
(15)quantity n. 数量
(16)recipe n. 烹饪法
(17)association n. 关联
(18)prior to 在……之前
2．重点句型再现：形容词(短语)作状语
Eager to experience diverse food cultures, I always can't wait to give it a try.
渴望体验不同的饮食文化，我总是迫不及待地尝试一下。
Ⅱ 迷你语料库(Mini Corpus)
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
1 Prior to coming to China, my only experience with Chinese cooking was in America, with Chinese food that had been changed to suit American tastes. 描写来中国之前对中国烹饪了解不深的情况。prior to 意为“___________”， 其中to为______，后跟v. ing形式；that引导______从句，修饰名词Chinese food，从句中had been changed 为过去完成时的______语态；suit为动词，意为“________”。
在……之前
介词
定语
被动
适合于
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
2 For example, America's most popular Chinese dish is General Tso's chicken, which consists of fried chicken covered in a sweet sauce, flavoured with hot red peppers. 描写国外流行的中国菜。which引导_____________从句，修饰先行词General Tso's chicken；consist of 意为“___________”，不能用于_______语态；covered 为过去分词作______，修饰名词 fried chicken。
非限制性定语
由……构成
被动
定语
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
3 Later, I had a chance to experience authentic Chinese food by coming to China. 描写有机会体验中国美食。to experience作_______，修饰名词chance; by coming to China作________状语。
定语
方式
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
4 Tired, hungry, and not knowing a word of Chinese, we had no idea how to order, so the chef just began filling our table with the best food we have ever eaten. Tired, hungry为形容词作________，表示主语的状态；we have ever eaten为_________从句，修饰先行词 the best food，此处省略关系代词that。
状语
定语
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
5 The food was wonderful and different, but what was even more important was the friendship offered us. 描写美食所代表的意义。what 引导________从句。
主语
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
6 It has become a favourite traditional dish of the people in North China, where making dumplings has always been a family affair with everyone—from the youngest to the oldest—joining in to help. 描写饺子的历史和文化意义。where引导____________从句，修饰先行词North China; “with everyone...to help”为with 的复合结构，其中joining充当_____，和宾语everyone构成_______关系。
非限制性定语
宾补
主动
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
7 As a result, their traditional foods are what you can cook over an open fire... 描写游牧民族的传统美食。as a result意为“_________”；what引导_________从句，并且在从句中充当______。
因此
表语
宾语
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
8 There is much debate nowadays as to what makes up a healthy diet. 描写对健康饮食的争论。as to意为“_______”； what 引导______从句；make up 意为“______”。
关于
宾语
构成
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
9 However, there is increasing evidence that the real driver of poor health is not so much fatty food, as it is sugar. 描写饮食趋势。此处increasing为形容词，意为“___________”；evidence意为“_____”，为_______名词；其后that引导______从句，that在从句中不作成分；此处driver为熟词生义，意为“_________”。
越来越多的
证据
不可数
同位语
驱动因素
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
10 Beyond this, you can keep healthy by consuming different categories of fresh foods, especially fruit and vegetables, which are full of vitamins and fibre, rather than processed foods. 描写如何通过饮食保持健康。此处beyond意为“____________”；by consuming作______状语；此处consume为熟词生义，意为“_______”，其名词形式为_____________；which引导_______________从句，修饰先行词fruit and vegetables; rather than意为“__________”。
除此之外
方式
吃，喝
consumption
非限制性定语
而不是
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
11 As with everything in life, moderation is key. 描写适度是关键。
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
12 Finally, a fundamental key to healthy eating is to eat slowly. 描写健康饮食的关键。
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
13 In addition, studies show that consistent eating habits, for example, taking three meals a day at the same time each day, are better for our health. 描写健康饮食习惯——规律饮食。in addition 意为“__________”； consistent eating habits 意为“_____________”。
此外
规律饮食
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
14 It is also better to eat a modest amount of food each time, rather than to eat a lot in one meal, and then a little in the next. 描写健康饮食习惯——适量饮食，不要暴饮暴食。
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
15 It is up to you to decide how you want to live, and to make the right decisions about your diet. 描写对生活方式做出的决定。
Ⅲ 读后续写精炼篇：场景描写
一、写作微技能：场景描写
场景是由人、物、事相互活动构成的，既包括整件事情发生的社会场景也包括事情发生的具体场景。由写作视角的变化，也可分为第一人称视角观察到的场景和客观视角描述的场景。
在读后续写中，最常涉及的第一人称视角所观察、体验到的场景，其主要目的是交代故事发生的背景、衬托人物心理、提示情节发展和烘托故事发展的气氛。
【即学即练】
分析以下例句，体会场景描写的功能
1．Her dad worked at job away from the farm and her mom ran the farm with the little kids. After high school, she could only choose a local technical college, working to pay her tuition, because there was no extra money set aside for her college education.
分析：本段以______视角描述女主角并不富裕的家庭状况；并且直接影响女主角的______方面。由此可以推测，下文故事会着重就这一方面展开。
客观
教育
2．Their efforts have been proven fruitful.
分析：本句为概括性的场景描写。efforts总结了上文，fruitful引出下文，故起到__________的作用。
3．When the movie was first shown to the public last month, a group of excited people gathered at the entrance.
分析：本句交代了故事发生的______。
承上启下
背景
4．I quickly realized the situation could get very serious.
分析：本句以_____人称描写场景：情况会很糟糕。由此，下文故事情节应该是：“我”会想办法______这个情况。
5．At last they came to the library. It was lined with books and there were pictures and statues, and wide tables, comfortable chairs and best of all, a great open fireplace giving off warmth constantly.
分析：本段描写室内场景——________，详细描述了室内的布置，不仅体现了环境的______，而且烘托了人物的心情：______、______。
第一
处理
图书馆
舒适
开心
愉悦
6．How dark the rooms seemed now！How sad and lonely the house!
分析：此处直接描写室内场景，烘托出______、______、______的气氛。
黑暗
悲伤
孤独
7．Quite flushed with excitement were their red faces, as the girls whispered to one another what they had seen. Some climbed up to see the bride, while others waved a welcome to those who just came .
分析：本段描写快乐的______场景。通过抽象意义名词______________________描写人们的兴奋；通过动词________________、____________及__________描写人们的开心。
婚礼
excitement
whisper
climb
wave
8．There was a long pause. The unbearable silence felt like an invisible hand, holding everyone tightly.
分析：此处描写______的场景。felt like an invisible hand 是一个______，更加生动地描写出这种令人难以忍受的场景。
沉默
比喻
二、牛刀小试：策略引领，演练读后续写“6＋3”模式
【典题精析】
阅读下面的材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Fortune Cookie Friends
Mei Mei frowned as she helped her mother and father set out the cooking supplies in the shiny steel kitchen. Her family had just moved here from San Francisco, having bought a small restaurant, which was set to open in the next few days.
“Moving here was a stupid idea. I have lost all my friends in San Francisco. What should I do now ” Mei Mei grumbled, mostly to herself.
“What's that？” her mother asked, opening a box and lifting out several pots and a wok.
“Nothing，” Mei Mei mumbled. The girl had been complaining about the move, but her parents had made the decision and were now too busy getting ready for the grand opening to listen to her complaints.
The first few days at her new school hadn't been easy, either. She found it hard to talk to people she didn't know, and it seemed like the students hadn't even noticed her. Mei Mei sighed and got back to washing dishes.
On the day of the grand opening, Mei Mei's parents were all smiles, welcoming customers into the restaurant, brightly decorated in gold and red. Even Mei Mei was in a good mood as she rushed around, seating guests, handing out menus, and pouring tall glasses of water. This was a big day for her family.
At one of the tables sat a family with two daughters who were about Mei Mei's age. As she filled their glasses, Mei Mei realized the twins were in her class. Mei Mei ducked her head down so her long hair covered her face, and she turned away from the table.
Mei Mei's mother found her soon after, in the kitchen loading the dishwasher.
“Honey, what are you doing back here We need you out front with the customers.”
注意：续写词数应为150左右。
“Mom, I don't want to be out there! ” Mei Mei murmured._______________________________________________
__________________________________________________________
__________________________________________________________
__________________________________________________________
Mei Mei put a handful of fortune cookies into a small plate and left the kitchen._________________________________________________
__________________________________________________________
__________________________________________________________
__________________________________________________________
1．一审——审要素
时态 一般过去时 六要素 When ...as she helped her mother and father _______________________________________________．
Her family _______________________________________．..
The first few days __________________．..
On the day of __________________．..
Where set out the cooking supplies in the shiny steel kitchen
had just moved here from San Francisco
at her new school
the grand opening
时态 一般过去时 六要素 Who Mei Mei
her _______
a family with two daughters __________________ in her class
mother
who are the twins
时态 一般过去时 六要素 What Mei Mei had been complaining, “I have lost _______________ in San Francisco. _____________________？”
She ______________ to talk to people she didn't know, and it seemed like the students ________________________．
all my friends
What should I do now
found it hard
hadn't even noticed her
时态 一般过去时 六要素 What So while helping her parents in the front of the restaurant, she met her classmates but she _____________________ and ___________________________．
ducked her head down
turned away from the table
时态 一般过去时 六要素 Why She found it hard to make new friends.
How 合理预测：梅梅用________________交到了新朋友。
fortune cookies
2.二定——定主题
主题：If you want to make new friends, you should be brave and friendly.
3．三推测——推测段首句定基调
(1)标出段首句的关键词
第一段：“Mom, ______________________________ ” Mei Mei murmured.
第二段：Mei Mei put _____________________________ into a small plate and _________________．
I don't want to be out there!
a handful of fortune cookies
left the kitchen
(2)推测第一段和第二段的结局。尤其关注第二段的段首句，做到第一段和第二段的逻辑性衔接。
根据第一段的段首句可知，在新环境中，梅梅没有朋友，所以_______________________。
根据第二段的段首句可知，妈妈说服了梅梅，她__________，主动去交新朋友。
通过以上可推测：
第一段的结局：妈妈说服了梅梅。
第二段的结局：梅梅和同学成了好朋友。
不敢主动和同学交流
鼓起勇气
4．四构思——每段3分天下
按照每段三个层次，构思每一段的情节。
第一段 妈妈感觉到了梅梅的________
妈妈想办法鼓励梅梅，让她勇于尝试________
梅梅想到了如何和新同学开始聊天
第二段 梅梅和同学分享了________________
梅梅惊喜地发现，她的同学非常___
升华：在新的环境下，也要勇敢地去交新朋友
不开心
交新朋友
fortune cookies
友好
5.五遣词造句——连词成句，连句成文
(1)高级词汇及语块
①______ v. 低下
②____________ n. 沮丧；懊恼
③_______ adv. 轻柔地
④________ v. 安慰
⑤__________ adv. 耐心地
lower
frustration
softly
comfort
patiently
⑥________ v. 解释
⑦____________ n. 不确定
⑧_________ v. 继续
⑨________ n. 勇气
⑩___________ adv. 完全地
____________ n. 环境
__________ 抑制
explain
uncertainty
continue
courage
completely
environment
hold back
_______________ 那一刻
_________ 倾吐
_________ 突然进入
________ 向上看
___________ 扫除；清除
________________________ 不乐意做某事
at that moment
pour out
pop into
look up
sweep away
be unwilling to do sth.
(2)亮点句型及高级结构
①couldn't help doing sth.意为“情不自禁做某事”
梅梅情不自禁哭了起来。
Mei Mei _____________________．
②What if意为“如果……怎么办？”
如果他们不喜欢我怎么办？
____________________________
couldn't help crying
What if they don't like me
③v. ing形式作状语，和句子的主语构成主动关系。
抱着梅梅，妈妈耐心地安慰她，建议她可以先采取行动去交朋友。
________ Mei Mei in her arms, her mother ____________________，while ___________ she can make new friends by taking action first.
Holding
comforted her patiently
suggesting
④动词的联动
梅梅走向那对双胞胎的桌子，放下盘子，热情地笑了，“送你们幸运饼干！”
Mei Mei _____ towards the twins‘ table, _________ the plate, and _______________，“Fortunate cookies for you！”
went
put down
smiled warmly
⑤形容词(短语)作状语
这对双胞胎抬起头来，很吃惊。
The twins looked up，__________.
⑥升华句型：it turned out that意为“结果证明是……”
结果发现，有时候仅仅需要勇气和幸运饼干就能交到朋友，即使是在一个全新的环境中。
___________________ sometimes, it just took ________ and some fortune cookies to make new friends, even ________________________________.
surprised
It turned out that
courage
in a completely new environment
6．六成文——誊写清晰，字迹工整
__________________________________________________________
__________________________________________________________
__________________________________________________________
__________________________________________________________
__________________________________________________________
“Mom, I don't want to be out there！” Mei Mei murmured. She lowered her head, holding back her tears. Feeling Mei Mei's frustration, her mother asked her what was wrong softly. At that moment, Mei Mei couldn't help crying, pouring out her troubles, “I'm so lonely but I am afraid to talk to them.” she sobbed,
“What if they don't like me？” Holding Mei Mei in her arms, her mother comforted patiently, while suggesting she can make new friends by taking action first. “But how？” Mei Mei asked. Suddenly, an idea popped into her head. “ Mom, can I use our delicious fortunate cookies？” Her mother nodded in agreement, “Of course！”
Mei Mei put a handful of fortune cookies into a small plate and left the kitchen. Mei Mei went towards the twins' table, put down the plate, and smiled warmly, “Fortunate cookies for you！” The twins looked up, surprised. “Mei Mei, why are you here？” Mei Mei was amazed that they knew her name! She explained, “It's our family restaurant.” The twins nodded and introduced her to their parents,
“This is Mei Mei, our new classmate！” Their bright smiles swept all the uncertainty away in her mind. The twins continued, “We thought you were unwilling to talk to us. But now we know, you are so nice! ” It turned out that sometimes, it just took courage and some fortune cookies to make new friends, even in a completely new environment.
再次回读原文，并积累以下高级词汇、语块、亮点句型及高级结构
1．______v. 皱眉
2．_________________ v. 发牢骚
3．_______ v. 咕哝
4．_______________ n. 顾客
5．_________ v. 装饰
frown
grumble/complain
mumble
customer/guest
decorate
6．_____________________________ 摆放烹饪用品
7．___________________________ 在闪亮的厨房里
8．__________________ 做决定
9．__________________ 盛大的开业
10．_______________ 心情好
11．__________ 分发
12．_____________________ 低下头
set out the cooking supplies
in the shiny steel kitchen
make the decision
the grand opening
in a good mood
hand out
duck one's head down
13．v. ing作状语＋which 引导定语从句
她们家刚从旧金山搬到这里，买了一家小餐馆，几天后就要开张
了。
Her family had just moved here from San Francisco，______________ a small restaurant, ______________________ in the next few days.
having bought
which was set to open
14．过去完成进行时
女孩一直抱怨搬家。
The girl _____________________ about the move.
had been complaining
15．too...to意为 “太……而不能”＋ (be) busy doing sth.意为“忙于做某事”
她的父母已经做了决定，现在正忙着为盛大的开业做准备，而没有听到她的抱怨。
Her parents had __________________ and were now _______________________ for the grand opening _____________ her complaints.
made the decision
too busy getting ready
to listen to
16．find＋宾语＋宾补
她发现很难和不认识的人说话。
She ______________ to talk to people she didn't know.
17．场景描写：梅梅的父母满面笑容。
___________________________________
found it hard
Mei Mei's parents were all smiles.
18．场景描写：就连梅梅也兴高采烈地跑来跑去，给客人安排座
位，分发菜单，倒上一大杯水。
Even Mei Mei was in a good mood as she _______ around, ________ guests, _____________menus, and_________ tall glasses of water.
19．场景描写：今天对她家来说是个大日子。
___________________________________
rushed
seating
handing out
pouring
This was a big day for her family.
生如蝼蚁当立鸿鹄之志
命如纸薄应有不屈之心
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