中小学教育资源及组卷应用平台
Unit 1 Growing up
读后续写 刻画人物
外刊输入——悟语言之道
Spirit of a Hero
In the fight against the severe SARS epidemic 19 years ago, Zhong Nanshan became a hero in the hearts of many Chinese people for his courage in assuming responsibility and solving the crisis once and for all. Today, this hero came to the fore once again in 2020 and continued to be in charge while people were defending themselves against the novel coronavirus pneumonia (NCP).
When the NCP broke out in late December, the National Health Commission called on a group of outstanding experts to investigate the novel coronavirus. As a leading Chinese respiratory (呼吸科的) expert, Zhong was appointed the head of the expert team to process the statistics and work out the intervention measures. Despite being 84, he took on the task without any hesitation and headed to Wuhan.
Due to the upcoming Spring Festival, Zhong failed to book any airline or high speed train tickets. Instead of being frustrated, he willingly settled for a temporary seat in the dining cab of an overnight train. Even so, he didn't take a rest that day and studied the information of infected patients.
Over the next two days, he maintained his busy schedule. Apart from numerous meetings, Zhong also worked as a messenger to inform the public of the situation because people were at a loss what to blame. While seeking effective measures to handle and control the disease's spread, Zhong also tried his best to stop the public's panic amid the NCP outbreak. His efforts turned out to be so successful that the tension steadily decreased.
When many couldn't get N95 face masks, which were believed to be the best to prevent the virus, Zhong wore a surgical mask (外科口罩) in an interview, which was a proof to show people that surgical masks can also work well. It shifted people's attitude towards the mask.
In 2003, Zhong became a trusted expert thanks to his devotion to truth in the fight against SARS. Many were calmed by his words and listened to his advice.
Still leading the fight against the novel coronavirus, Zhong maintained his role of telling the truth and reassuring the public. He transformed the negative thinking into a substantial strength to connect everyone. In that critical situation, besides morale (士气), solidarity (团结) and cooperation were very important.
As Zhong Nanshan put it, with help from across the country, Wuhan, a heroic city, pulled through.
1.重点词汇再现
(1)severe adj. 十分严重的
(2)once and for all 彻底地
(3)be in charge 掌管
(4)defend v. 防守
(5)break out 爆发
(6)outstanding adj. 杰出的
(7)statistic n. 统计资料
(8)intervention n. 干预
(9)frustrated adj. 沮丧的
(10)infected adj. 感染病菌的
(11)blame v. 责怪
(12)handle v. 处理
(13)steadily adv. 稳定地
(14)decrease v. 减少
(15)virus n. 病毒
(16)proof n. 证据
(17)shift v. 改变
(18)thanks to 由于
(19)transform v. 改变
(20)thinking n. 思想
(21)substantial adj. 大量的
(22)besides prep. 除……之外
2.重点句型再现:“so...that...”意为“如此
……以至于……”
His efforts turned out to be so successful that the tension steadily decreased.
他的努力结果非常成功,紧张局势逐渐缓和下来。
迷你语料库(Mini Corpus)
序号 佳句呈现 赏析
1 Cholera used to be one of the most feared diseases in the world, until a British doctor, John Snow, showed how it could be overcome. 描写重大危机被某人终止。used to 意为“过去常常”;feared为形容词,表示“producing fear in others”。fear 的派生词fearful 意为“担心的”,fearless 意为 “无畏的”;until引导时间状语从句;how引导的是宾语从句。
2 In the early 19th century, when an outbreak of cholera hit Europe, millions of people died from the disease. 描写灾难侵袭的场景。特别注意积累灾难语境相关词汇:hit意为“(灾难/疾病)侵袭”;die from 意为“死于”。
3 As a young doctor, John Snow became frustrated because no one knew how to prevent or treat cholera. 描写人物心情及原因。frustrated adj. 意为“沮丧的;懊恼的”。
4 However, he never lost his desire to destroy cholera once and for all. 描写人物性格坚韧,永不放弃。
5 Snow began by marking on a map the exact places where all those who died had lived. 描写调查开始的方式。by marking 作方式状语;where引导定语从句,修饰先行词the exact places。
6 Snow suspected that the water pump was to blame. 描写事情发生的原因。句型be to blame,意为“应负责任,应受指责”。
7 It seemed that the woman liked the water from the pump so much that she had it delivered to her house every day. 描写喜欢某事的程度。so...that...意为“如此……以至于……”;had it delivered 是“have+宾语+宾补”结构,其中由过去分词充当宾补,意为和宾语构成被动关系。
8 Accordingly, he had the handle of the pump removed so that it could not be used. 描写采取实际的措施。had the handle of the pump removed是“have+宾语+宾补”结构,其中由过去分词充当宾补,和宾语构成被动关系;so that 引导目的状语从句。
9 Through Snow's tireless efforts, water companies began to sell clean water, and the threat of cholera around the world saw a substantial decrease. 描写成功战胜困难,最终危险得到控制。through Snow's tireless efforts意为“通过斯诺的不懈努力”;使用了无灵主语,其中saw意为“见证”;a substantial decrease意为“大幅减少”。
10 Described by the authors of the Story of Qian Xuesen as a man with “great scientific thought and scientific spirit” who was patriotic and served his homeland with effort, achievement, and devotion, Qian was an extremely well respected man. 描写人物及对其的评价。v. ed作状语,和句子的主语Qian构成被动关系;be described as意为“被描述为”;who引导的定语从句,patriotic 意为“爱国的”;served his homeland with effort,achievement, and devotion意为“以努力、成就和奉献精神为祖国服务”,描述人物奉献及爱国的行为。
11 He received a hero's welcome from his homeland... 描写对人物的欢迎。received a hero's welcome 意为“受到英雄般的欢迎”。
12 Nevertheless,Qian did not let that discourage him from taking on the challenge. 描写人物乐于坚持,不愿放弃的精神。注意积累高级词汇及语块:nevertheless 意为“然而”;discourage sb. from doing sth. 为熟词生义,意为“阻止某人做某事”; take on the challenge 意为“接受挑战”。
13 Qian read a lot and was extremely knowledgeable, especially in the area of frontier science research. 描写人物。注意积累高级词汇:knowledgeable 意为“知识渊博的”。
14 However, what might have made him such an outstanding and creative scientist was probably his strong interest in other things, such as music and drawing. 描写人物成功的原因。what引导的主语从句;“make+宾语+宾补”结构,其中宾补为such an outstanding and creative scientist。
15 His deep appreciation for art often gave him inspiration in his scientific research. 描写业余爱好对人物成功的积极影响。注意积累高级词汇:appreciation 意为“欣赏,理解”;inspiration 意为“灵感”。
16 He was willing to say what others were afraid to say, and to dream of what others were afraid to dream about. 描写人物敢说敢做,勇于梦想。动词后跟宾语从句,构成动宾关系;介词of后跟宾语从句,构成介宾关系。
读后续写精炼篇:刻画人物
一、写作微技能:刻画人物
【即学即练】
1.刻画人物可以通过以下几个方法:
A.动作描写 B.心理描写 C.外貌描写 D.有效对话
E.修辞手法 F.高级词汇、语块及句型 G.令人印象深刻的升华
请阅读以下句子,并选择所使用的刻画人物的方法
(1)She could hardly contain the joy filled her heart, like a bird flying into the family.E
(2)A ripple of sadness welled up inside him.B
(3)So ashamed was she that she could feel the blood rush to her face._F
(4)When we handed him the bag of food,he lit up and thanked us with watery eyes.A
(5)Larry went above and beyond the call of duty by getting so close to the burning vehicle!G
(6)Beth was a rosy, smooth haired, bright eyed girl of thirteen, with a shy manner, a timid voice, and a peaceful expression which was seldom disturbed.C
(7)“I don't see how you can write and act such splendid things, Jo. You are a regular Shakespeare!” exclaimed the little girl. “Not quite,” replied Jo modestly.D
2.请分析以上句子的亮点,并选择背诵默写。
(1)She could hardly contain① the joy filled her heart②, like a bird③ flying④ into the family.
①意为“几乎抑制不住”;②过去分词作定语;③修辞:比喻;④v. ing作状语。
(2)A ripple of sadness welled up inside him.
表示“感情的涌起”。
(3)So ashamed was she that① she could feel the blood rush② to her face.
①句式:so+adj.置于句首引起的部分倒装;②“feel+宾语+宾补”结构。
(4)When we handed① him the bag of food, he lit up② and thanked us with watery eyes③.
①意为“递给”;②原形为“light_up”,意为“露出喜色”;
③with介词短语作状语。
(5)Larry went above and beyond the call of duty① by getting② so close to the burning vehicle!
①意为“超越本职职责”;②by getting作方式状语。
(6)Beth was a rosy, smooth haired, bright eyed① girl of thirteen, with a shy manner, a timid② voice, and a peaceful expression which was seldom disturbed③.
①意为“眼睛明亮的”;②意为“羞怯的”;③which引导的是定语从句。
(7)“I don't see how you can write and act such splendid① things, Jo. You are a regular② Shakespeare!” exclaimed the little girl. “Not quite,” replied Jo modestly③.
①意为“非常好的”;②熟词生义,意为“完全的”;③意为“Jo 谦虚地回答”。
二、牛刀小试:策略引领,演练读后续写“6+3”模式
【典题精析】
阅读下面的材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Godzilla Kong, a science teacher from Yulee, Florida, entered panic mode when he reached the cash register at Walmart and realized his wallet was missing. Fortunately he had some small cash in the pocket to complete his purchase. But his wallet contained other necessities such as his driver's license, military ID and several bank cards. He was in extremely low spirits when he thought of the low likelihood of recovering the wallet.
While at home preparing for tomorrow's lessons, he heard some knocks on the front door. Pulling open the door, he saw a man in rags standing before him, his right hand grasping a wallet. And Kong saw that although he was trembling because of the cold weather, there was a charming smile on his face. “You must be Mr. Kong,” the unidentified man said with sparkling eyes, adding that he found his wallet at Walmart. Hearing this, Godzilla couldn't control his excitement, amazed by the stranger's willingness to personally deliver his wallet to his home. “Wow, this is unbelievable! You are so...sweet!” Godzilla responded with emotions. Then the man asked Godzilla to check out the wallet and make sure everything was inside.
With a brief inspection and a beating heart, Godzilla found all the stuff was stationed inside safe and sound.“Hey, brother! Thanks a...million for returning...my wallet! You are my...guardian,” Godzilla said with a choking voice, tears rolling down his face. “It's no big deal. I just did what others would have done in my position,” the ragged man replied, ready to leave. But Godzilla was determined to invite this virtuous man inside to have a cup of coffee to show his gratitude, which the ragged man didn't decline.
注意:续写词数应为150左右。
Inside the house Godzilla knew his name was Ultraman._________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Godzilla shared the story to social media and it became popular.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
1.一审——审要素
时态 一般过去时
六 要 素 When When Godzilla Kong reached_the_cash_register_at_Walmart...
Where While at_home_preparing_for_tomorrow's_lessons
Who Godzilla Kong, a_science_teacher from Yulee, Florida; a man in_rags called Ultraman
What Godzilla Kong's wallet was_missing,_which contained other_necessities such as his_driver's_license,_military_ID_and_several_bank_card.So he entered panic_mode and was in extremely low_spirits.A man personally delivered_his_wallet to his home.So Godzilla Kong invited him inside to have a cup of coffee to_show_his_gratitude.
Why Though in rags, the man got great qualities.
How How would people react to the man's kindness?
2.二定——定主题
主题:A man in rags returned the lost wallet and people praised and helped him in return.
3.三推测——推测段首句定基调
(1)标出段首句的关键词
第一段:Inside the house Godzilla knew_his_name_was Ultraman.
第二段: Godzilla_shared_the_story to social media and it became popular.
(2)推测第一段和第二段的结局。尤其关注第二段的段首句,做到第一段和第二段的逻辑性衔接。
根据第一段的段首句可知,奥特曼(Ultraman)和哥斯拉(Godzilla)进行交谈。交谈的内容最有可能是关于 奥特曼的情况。
根据第二段的段首句,哥斯拉分享了故事,并且得到了大家的关注。可知,大家关注奥特曼的情况,并且帮助了他。
通过以上可推测:
第一段的结局:哥斯拉感动于奥特曼的善良诚实,并且同情奥特曼,打算帮助他。
第二段的结局:奥特曼得到了大家的帮助,并且决定将爱传递下去。
4.四构思——每段3分天下
按照每段三个层次,构思每一段的情节。
第一段 哥斯拉进一步了解了奥特曼的情况
奥特曼身处窘境,仍然乐于助人
哥斯拉打算帮助他
第二段 奥特曼的故事备受关注,并且大家帮助了奥特曼
善良的奥特曼决定分享他得到的帮助
升华:善有善报,互相关爱
5.五遣词造句——连词成句,连句成文
(1)高级词汇及语块
①struggle v. 努力;挣扎
②awe n. 崇拜;敬畏
③build n. 体格
④character n. 性格
⑤offer v. 自愿给予
⑥refuse/decline v. 拒绝
⑦stir n. 轰动
⑧fundraising n. 筹款
⑨campaign n. 运动
⑩launch v. 发起
community n. 社区
alleviate v. 缓解
financially adv. 财务地
live_from_hand_to_mouth/
make_ends_meet 勉强糊口
lose_hope 失去希望
extend_a_helping_hand 伸出援助之手
flood_into 涌入
put_sb._under_the_spotlight 把某人置于聚光灯下
within_days 几天之内
job_offer 工作机会
the_joint_efforts 共同的努力
manage_to_do 设法做到
a_chain_of_love 爱的链条
(2)亮点句型及高级结构
①by doing作方式状语
通过在社区里捡和卖塑料瓶
by__picking_up_and_selling_plastic_bottles in the neighborhood
②what引导的主语从句
令人吃惊的是……
What_was_amazing was that...
③such+名词(词组)...置于句首引起的部分倒装
它引起了如此大的轰动以至于很多网友都竖起了大拇指。
Such_a_big_stir_did_it_cause that many netizens gave thumb ups.
④with的复合结构
有些人想捐钱……
with some_wanting_to_donate_money
⑤which引导的非限制性定语从句,意为“这一点,这件事”
几家报纸蜂拥而至采访他,这使他备受关注。
Several newspapers crowded to interview him,which_put_him_under_the_spotlight.
⑥形容词作状语,表示主语的状态
被深深地感动了,奥特曼一个字也说不出来。
Deeply_moved,_Ultraman couldn't utter a single word.
⑦谚语
善有善报。
One_good_turn_deserves_another.
6.六成文——誊写清晰,字迹工整
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Inside the house Godzilla knew his name was Ultraman. Although he lived from hand to mouth by picking up and selling plastic bottles in the neighborhood, he never lost hope for the future. What was amazing was that he saved every penny to extend a helping hand to those who were struggling with life. Godzilla watched with awe the man sitting opposite him, short in build but high in character. Pulling out some money from the wallet, he offered it to this virtuous man, but as you could imagine, Ultraman declined it. After Ultraman left, many ideas flooded into Godzilla's mind. He needed to do something.
Godzilla shared the story to social media and it became popular. Such a big stir did it cause that many netizens gave thumb ups, with some wanting to donate money. Several newspapers crowded to interview him, which put him under the spotlight. A fundraising campaign was launched, and just within days $5,000 was raised. Besides that, Ultraman even got several job offers. Deeply moved, Ultraman couldn't utter a single word. With the joint efforts from the community, Ultraman managed to alleviate his poor life of financially disadvantaged. It turned out one good turn deserves another, which formed a chain of love in the community, warming people in the dark.
再次回读原文,并积累以下高级词汇、语块、亮点句型及高级结构
1.add v. 补充说
2.unbelievable adj. 难以置信的
3.respond v. 回答说
4.enter_panic_mode 陷入恐慌
5.the_low_likelihood 很低的可能性
6.recover_the_wallet 找回钱包
7.with_sparkling_eyes 眼睛闪闪发亮
8.a_brief_inspection 快速检查
9.show_his_gratitude 表示感谢
10.He_was_in_extremely_low_spirits.
他情绪非常低落。
11.He_heard_some_knocks_on_the_front_door.
他听到前门的敲门声。
12.独立主格结构
他拉开门,看见一个衣衫褴褛的人站在他面前,右手拿着一个钱包。
Pulling open the door, he saw a man in_rags standing before him, his_right_hand_grasping_a_wallet.
哥斯拉哽咽地说,眼泪顺着他的脸滚下来。
Godzilla said with_a_choking_voice,_tears_rolling_down his face.
13.动作描写
由于天气冷,他在颤抖。
He_was_trembling_because_of_the_cold_weather.
14.There be句型
他脸上有一个迷人的笑容。
There_was_a_charming_smile_on_his_face.
15.v. ing作状语,adj.作状语
听到这些,哥斯拉控制不住自己的兴奋,惊讶于陌生人愿意亲自把钱包送到家里。
Hearing_this,_Godzilla couldn't control his_excitement,_amazed by the stranger's willingness to personally deliver his wallet to his home.
16.find+宾语+宾补
哥斯拉发现所有的东西都安全地放在里面。
Godzilla found all the stuff was_stationed_inside_safe_and_sound.
17.有效对话
“没什么大不了的。我只是做了别人在我这个位置上会做的事,”衣衫褴褛的男人回答,准备离开。
“It's_no_big_deal._I_just_did_what_others_would_have_done_in_my_position,” the ragged man replied, ready_to_leave.
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