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2022年1月浙江高考英语读后续写试题分析
——挖掘协同因素 力争续文高分
高考真题
第二节(满分25分) 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
When Dr. Henderson was assigning(指定) project mates for his psychology class, I secretly hoped that he would pair me with my best friend or at least a classmate I could have some fun with. Above all, I hoped he wouldn’t assign me to work with the fiercely competitive and extremely serious fellow who always wore dark clothes and apparently had a personality to match. As fate(命运) would have it, Dr. Henderson very deliberately matched everyone in class and announced that I would be working with the one person in class I wanted to avoid.
I went up to my new teammate and introduced myself. He looked at me as though I weren’t there. I felt he treated me as though I would hold him back and probably make him fail to get an A in the course. He wasn’t mean or abusive; he just gave me the impression he could do whatever project we dreamed up better if he did it alone.
Needless to say, I didn’t look forward to an entire team of being brushed off, but I tried to make the best of it and didn’t say anything for fear that I would make things worse.
The project required each team to develop a hypothesis(假设), set up an experiment to test the hypothesis, do the statistical analysis and present the findings. Whatever grade the team received would be shared by both students.
When my teammate and I met to discuss our project, I was uneasy. Here was this challenging student who had a reputation for single-mindedness and good grades—the exact opposite of me. I actually wanted to drop the class at one point, but stopped short because I didn’t want to give him the satisfaction of my chickening out. I decided to stick to it no matter what.
After long discussions we somehow agreed to do a study on the psychological well-being of teenagers. I wasn’t sure what it meant exactly, but at least we had a topic.
Para.1 We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans.
Para.2 Then one day I got word that he was admitted to the hospital for a serious disease.
Read for basic information
(Para.1) When Dr. Henderson was assigning(指定) project mates for his psychology class, I secretly hoped that he would pair me with my best friend or at least a classmate I could have some fun with. Above all, I hoped he wouldn’t assign me to work with the fiercely competitive and extremely serious fellow who always wore dark clothes and apparently had a personality to match. As fate(命运) would have it, Dr. Henderson very deliberately matched everyone in class and announced that I would be working with the one person in class I wanted to avoid.
Who
What
When
Where
Dr. Gullickson, I, my teammate
I was paired with my classmate to do a project.
When doing our project
in the school
Read for plots
Dr. Henderson paired me with my classmate.
I introduced myself to my teammate.
How did I feel
I: unwilling to be paired with him
I: felt slighted
My teammate: unwilling to cooperate
I: uneasy; determined
Although outmatched, I still decided to stick to the project.
Read for character
My teammate
I
academically outstanding; serious; a little arrogant; determined; uncooperative
average; determined
When Dr. Henderson was assigning(指定) project mates for his psychology class, I secretly hoped that he would pair me with my best friend or at least a classmate I could have some fun with. Above all, I hoped he wouldn’t assign me to work with the fiercely competitive and extremely serious fellow who always wore dark clothes and apparently had a personality to match. As fate(命运) would have it, Dr. Henderson very deliberately matched everyone in class and announced that I would be working with the one person in class I wanted to avoid.
I went up to my new teammate and introduced myself. He looked at me as though I weren’t there. I felt he treated me as though I would hold him back and probably make him fail to get an A in the course. He wasn’t mean or abusive; he just gave me the impression he could do whatever project we dreamed up better if he did it alone.
Needless to say, I didn’t look forward to an entire team of being brushed off, but I tried to make the best of it and didn’t say anything for fear that I would make things worse.
The project required each team to develop a hypothesis(假设), set up an experiment to test the hypothesis, do the statistical analysis and present the findings. Whatever grade the team received would be shared by both students.
When my teammate and I met to discuss our project, I was uneasy. Here was this challenging student who had a reputation for single-mindedness and good grades—the exact opposite of me. I actually wanted to drop the class at one point, but stopped short because I didn’t want to give him the satisfaction of my chickening out. I decided to stick to it no matter what.
After long discussions we somehow agreed to do a study on the psychological well-being of teenagers. I wasn’t sure what it meant exactly, but at least we had a topic.
Read for theme
academically outstanding;
serious;
a little arrogant;
determined
uncooperative
average;
determined
learn to cooperate with each other
win respect & develop the friendship
主题协同
(Para.1)We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans.
(Para.2)Then one day I got words that he was admitted to the hospital for a serious disease.
What’s the ending of the story
about the project
about our relationship
possible ending
We succeeded in finishing the project.
I won his respect and we developed friendship.
theme
learn to cooperate with each other
win respect & develop the friendship
Tip 1: Make use of the theme, or the writing purpose to predict the ending of the story.
主题协同
Design the plots
Dr. Henderson paired me with my classmate.
I introduced myself to my teammate.
How did I feel
I: unwilling to be paired with him
I: felt slighted
My teammate: unwilling to cooperate
I: uneasy;
determined
Although outmatched,
I still decided to stick to the project.
We succeeded in finishing the project.
I won his respect &
we developed friendship.
I: happy; satisfied
My teammate:
grateful
Design the plots
(Para.1)We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans.
(Para.2)Then one day I got words that he was admitted to the hospital for a serious disease.
We succeeded in finishing the project.
I won his respect and we developed friendship.
Possible plot:
We gradually learnt to cooperate.
Tip 2: The ending of the story, and the 1st sentence of Para.2 can help you determine the ending of Para.1 .
情节协同
Design the plots
(Para.1)We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans.
(Para.2)Then one day I got words that he was admitted to the hospital for a serious disease.
We succeeded in finishing the project.
I won his respect and we developed friendship.
We gradually learnt to cooperate.
How was my reaction to him
How did I finish the project
What was his reaction to my work
How did we draw up our plans
Did we cooperate well
How did we feel at the meeting
情节协同
Design the plots
Dr. Gullickson paired me with my classmate.
I introduced myself to my teammate.
How did I feel
I: unwilling to be paired with him
I: felt slighted
My teammate: unwilling to cooperate
I: uneasy;
determined
Although outmatched,
I still decided to stick to the project.
I: happy; satisfied
My teammate:
grateful
(Para.1)We didn’t work well with each other at the beginning, but learned to cooperate later.
(Para.2) I finished the project alone.
I: uneasy–determined
My teammate:
arrogant–uneasy
We succeeded in finishing the project.
I won his respect &
we developed friendship.
情节协同
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Design the plot --Underlined words
Dr. Gullickson
teammate
project
findings
grade
satisfaction
discuss
share
serious
alone
根据文本的脉络,结合划线词所包含的信息,文末可以做如下情节构思:
paragraph1:
A.经常见面制定计划---我逐步了解并参与到project其中--他开始接受我,我们开始真正的合作teammate,有条不紊地进行--为了获得A-grade,我们拼命,累但是快乐(指向第二段生病)
B.经常见面制定计划---他直接忽略我独自alone搞,这激发我的斗志,暗地里开展project---发现了我的努力接纳我share, discuss--有条不紊地推进project。
paragraph2:
A.他生病---我去医院探望--向他保证完美完成project--课堂上呈现findings,得到想要的A- grade---share好消息,他笑了,satisfaction写在脸上--成为好朋友;
B.他生病--我经常去医院,在他的指导下,做好数据分析---在课堂上完美呈现findings--努力得到回报---share消息,很开心satisfaction收获了A-grade还有友情。
Possible version
Para.1
We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans. As expected, my ideas were completely eclipsed by his intelligence during our first few meetings and it seemed that there was no way that I could make a contribution to the project. However, my self-esteem wouldn’t allow me to yield to the challenge and I took a more active part in the test of the hypothesis. Days and nights witnessed my devotion to observing teenagers around us and interviewing them patiently and logically. My dedication gradually melted my teammate’s heart and his attitudes towards me began to change. He was no more an ice cube unwilling to discuss, and instead he listened attentively to my ideas and adopted some from time to time. It was the first time that I had perceived that we could be called a team. Everything seemed to go on so smoothly.
拟人
比喻
无灵主语
情感协同
语言协同
Possible version
Para.2
Then one day I got word that he was admitted to the hospital for a serious disease. The moment I arrive at his ward, his pale face and tired look told everything. What surprised me even more was that he still inquired about the progress of our project and begged me to finish it alone. At the sight of this pitiful boy’s pleading look, I bet no one would refuse. It was exactly at that moment that I made up my mind I would spare no effort to achieve a satisfying shared grade. In the following days, my teammate’s single-minded pursuit of academic excellence supported me in checking the statistics and having a rehearsal for a thousand times. Finally the moment to present our findings came. From Dr. Gullickson’s expression, I could tell our project was a huge success. When asked about the secret of our successful project, I grinned, exposing a set of amazingly white teeth and answered without hesitation,“Cooperation!” I just couldn’t wait to tell my teammate our shared triumph!
名词短语引导时间状语从句
强调句
省略句
现在分词作状语
长短句结合
主题协同
语言协同
情感协同
情感协同
Appreciate the language
①Above all, I hoped he wouldn’t assign me to work with the fiercely competitive, extremely serious fellow who always wore dark clothes and apparently had a personality to match.
②He wasn’t mean or abusive.
③Here was this challenging student who had a reputation for single-mindedness and good grades—the exact opposite of me.
abusive adj.
rude and offensive
Tip 3: Choose precise words, especially adjectives to describe a person.
single-mindedness n. 一心一意的,专注的
have a personality to match :
have strong character
语言协同
①Above all, I hoped he wouldn’t assign me to work with the intense, fiercely competitive, extremely serious fellow who always wore dark clothes and apparently had a personality to match.
②…, I secretly hoped he would pair me with one of my good friends or at least a classmate I could have some fun with.
③…,Dr. Gullickson very deliberately matched everyone in class and announced that I would be working with the one person in class I wanted to avoid.
④ …,we somehow agreed to do a study on the psychology of teenagers’ health.
⑤I actually wanted to drop the class at one point, but stopped short because…
⑥I wasn’t sure what it meant exactly…
fiercely adv.
very
apparently adv.
according to the way sth. appears
short adv.
before the time expected or arranged; before the natural time 突然停止
Tip 4: Adverbials exploit the richness of tone and shades of meaning.
Appreciate the language
语言协同
We started to meet regularly to formulate our plans, and every time I felt the project was more his than mine. The more we met, the more I resented his intelligence and his ability to cut through to the core issues. And I was aware he was much more advanced than I. He knew technical things and approached every detail with great singularity of purpose.
I, on the other hand, must have seemed naive, with little to offer. At one point I summoned up my courage and asked him why he seemed so uptight and serious. To my surprise, he replied that he didn’t have time for small talk or petty people and things that would waste his time. He even went on to say that he didn’t have any friends because most so called friends were just a distraction. But, he added, when he did choose someone to be his friend, they would be a friend for life. I was floored by his cold and cynical response. Right then and there, I realized the end of the semester couldn’t come soon enough.
As the semester wore on, we tried to fashion a simple yet elegant experiment. Part of our job was to select students who had volunteered to be subjects for our project. I decided to devote myself to the task of working with the subjects, while he developed the scientific model. I put in my two cents’ worth whenever I could, but I still felt he was the driving force.
Excerpted from An Unluckily Hero by Tong Lu
be floored by:
unable to respond to it because you are so surprised by it 使…惊奇
approach:
to deal with it or think about it in that way 处理
put in one’s two cents’ worth
to give your opinion about sth., even if other people do not want to hear it 发表意见(即使别人不想听)
Appreciate the language
Then one day I got word that he was in the hospital. Apparently, he had been admitted for a hemorrhaging ulcer. The stress of getting the best grades, holding down a job and helping his girlfriend through the medical crisis she was going through had taken its toll on him.
When I visited him in the hospital, I noticed for the first time a sense of vulnerability on the face of my stoic lab mate. I knew that he was aware that I could blow the experiment, and our shared grade would shatter his lofty G. P. A. and possibly derail his chances for graduate school. I assured him I would not let him down and he should only concentrate on getting better. I would do my best. We both knew I’d have to do better than my best.
I had a formidable task ahead of me. I was in over my head, running the statistical data. I poured more time and energy into that project than I had ever done on any assignment in my life. I was not going to let him see me fail and have it reflect on him. I was working the graveyard shift at my job, so I used whatever quiet time from midnight to 6 a. m. to work on the project. The work consumed me. There was a sense of challenge that completely overtook me. The question remained: Was I up to it?
Excerpted from An Unluckily Hero by Tong Lu
take its toll on sb.:
to have a bad effect on sb.
Sudden panic overtook her.
Appreciate the language
Eventually, the semester came to a close, and each team had to present its findings in front of the assembled class. When it was our turn, I did my level best to present his scientific methodology with my showmanship. To my amazement, we were awarded an A!
When I told my lab mate about our shared triumph, he smiled and thanked me for carrying on. Something connected then. Something special. It had to do with trust and the exhilaration of sharing a common prize.
We have stayed close throughout the years. He went on to achieve a doctorate. He also went on to marry his college girlfriend.
I learned more than statistical analysis and experimental procedures that semester. My life has been enhanced by our encounter and challenged by this man, who became my unlikely hero.
And in the end, he was right: we have become friends for life.
Excerpted from An Unluckily Hero by Tong Lu
Try to polish your writing after appreciating the work.
Appreciate the language
Thank You!