2022年高考3月宁波十校联考英语读后续写讲解课件：catching crabs for supper

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宁波十校202203
Catching crabs for supper
Part 1. 文本分析
blue crabs
bucket
net &
dead fish
bay
What should you prepare for catching crabs
bait
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Dad handed me the bucket and the net with a long, wooden handle. He gave Paulie two dead fish wrapped in newspaper. They were tied up with string like a present. I held my nose, but Paulie held those fish like they were his best baseball cards.
"Since we all want crabs for supper, catch a whole bunch. But just in case you don't, we have leftover broccoli（花椰菜）." Dad said with a wink. (眨眼)
The salty air from Chesapeake Bay filled our noses. This was the best place in the world to catch blue crabs. They like grassy, shadowy water, so Paulie and I headed for our old wooden dock. It was hot, and I sat down and swung my legs over the edge, into the cool water. Paulie struggled to tie the string to one of the slippery fish. Then he slid the extra fish into the bucket and set it in the dark water under the dock for later.
"Here." Paulie handed me the baited string. "Dangle（提着）this down in the water to call the crabs."
Crabs love smelly, old fish, so our first crab didn't take long to come. Its big claw clamped（紧夹住）the bait, and I raised the string real slow so Paulie could net it. But my legs swishing（发出刷刷声）in the water startled that crab, and it let go and floated back to the bottom like a leaf off a tree. Paulie brought up the net and stood there with the handle on the dock.
"Kathy, I can't believe you're going to be in third grade and can't sit still for one minute," he said.
"And I can't believe you're going to be in sixth grade and haven't caught any crabs yet."
I went back to dangle the fish.
Paragraph 1:
"Well, get ready," he urged. “Here comes another one.”________________________________________
Paragraph 2:
The sun began to set. __________________________________________________________________
The salty air from Chesapeake Bay filled our noses. This was the best place in the world to catch blue crabs.
It was hot, and I sat down and swung my legs over the edge, into the cool water.
The salty air filling my nose, reminded me this was the best place to catch crabs, confidence flooding in my heart.I kept telling myself, patience,patience, trying all my best to sit _____ on the dock steadily.
The burning sun now made us feel even hotter, ______I couldn't swing my legs in the water as I wished, ________ (avoid) startling another crab away.
借用原句，拓展细节动作描写：
still
but
avoiding
Dangle（提着）this down in the water to call the crabs."
Dangling the string in the water carefully, I tried my best to attract the crabs hopefully, murmuring to the water, “come,come, we're waiting for you.”
Its big claw clamped（紧夹住）the bait, and I raised the string real slow so Paulie could net it. But my legs swishing（发出刷刷声）in the water
Suddenly, I saw another crab coming ,felt its big claw clamping the bait again and I began to drag the string little by little cautiously. My hands were sweating a lot,and I felt like I couldn't even breathe,with my heart pounding like a drum.
I raised the string real slow so Paulie could net it. and it let go and floated back to the bottom like a leaf off a tree. Paulie brought up the net and stood there with the handle on the dock.
Just as I tried to raise the crab, it seemed to feel the danger, letting go as quickly as possible. But this time Paulie had already got the net ready, and he put it into the water as fast as he could. Eventually, he got the crab before it could float away. What a big success, which gave us confidence to get more for our big crab feast!
语料积累
“小心翼翼”相关亮点表达
原文：I raised the string real slow so Paulie could net it.
Sparing no effort to hold my breath, I carefully watched the crab, my heart pounding wildly.
Eyes glued to the water and holding my breath, I waited nervously, not daring to move a bit.
Holding my breath, I clasped(抓紧) the tightened string, every dragging second witnessing my mighty effort to steady my hand.
Upon hearing this, I held my breath and went all out to sit still, with my eyes glued to the big blue crab.
Eyes fixed on the approaching crab, I raised the string cautiously, hoping Paulie could net it.
Get the gist
Who
When
Where
What
I (Kathy), Paulie, Dad
In the afternoon
Chesapeake Bay
Paulie and I tried to catch blue crabs for supper with a bucket, a net and two dead fish.
Main idea:_________(hand) us the bucket, the net with a long, _______(wood) handle and two dead fish ___baits, Dad asked Paulie and me to catch _____ (crab) for supper. When we got to our old dock, Paulie gave me the ______ (bait) string __________ he struggled to make and I dangled it ____ in the water. ________, when our fist crab clamped the bait, the slight sound of my legs in the water_______(scare) that crab away. Paulie began to blame me _____the failure and I also fought back…
Handing
wooden
as
crabs
baited
which/that
down
However
scared
for
Beginning
Climax
Ending
Develop the plot
Dad handed us equipment to catch crabs
We cooperated to catch crabs but I sacred the first one away
Here came another crab

Key sentence: Since we all want crabs for supper, catch a whole bunch
Develop the plot
Para.1:“Well, get ready,”he urged. “Here comes another one.”
Para.2: The sun began to set.
I went back to dangle the fish.
According to the sentence “The sun began to set”, did “we” successfully catch any crabs in this paragraph
What happened when we caught another one (action)
How did we feel when we caught again (feeling)
Did we have any quarrel again What would we say to each other (dialogue)
Did we go on or stop catching (action or dialogue or feeling)
Did we catch any crab at last (action)
What was father’s reaction to our catching (action or dialogue)
What’s the theme of the story
划线词分类 Character Dad, Paulie, Kathy (I)
Incident (about catching crabs) fish, string, crabs, water, bucket, net
Action sat
What theme can you explore in the text
Good cooperation makes success.
Persistence and determination lead to success.
The most tasty crab is the one caught with your own effort.
Impossible is nothing if we put our heart in it.
Patience is one of the key to success.
No pains, no gains.
A tough time pushes one to move forward
Love counts the most in the world.
cooperation
persistence
The joy of DIY
interesting
experience
Explore the theme
Part 2. 学生习作及范文赏析
习作点评：
本篇考场作文最大的亮点是衔接非常自然，逻辑合理，情节充实有趣，环境描写恰到好处，最后顺理成章地点明了主题。语言层面，对于主角及螃蟹丰富的动作描写，如“held one’s breath”, “clamp”, “inch”等，体现了考生扎实的词汇基本功，with复合结构、定语从句、状语从句省略、分词与环境的烘托描写，使文章读起来通俗流畅。个别词句，如“he was somehow stepped on a slippery stone”有错误。
“Well, get ready," he urged. "Here comes another one." The sun was hot on our backs. My clothes were already sticking to me, and sweat dripped down our faces. A fly buzzed around my head. I remembered what Paulie had said and sat perfectly still as the new crab clamped onto the fish. But as Paulie scooted forward on his belly to lower the net, he knocked a stone off the dock and scared that crab away, too. We thought about the big pot waiting and Dad dropping the crabs into the spicy(加香料的), boiling water. They would turn a beautiful bright red after a few moments, and we'd have a crab feast, cracking the shells and pulling out the sweet, white meat. We had to keep trying.
The sun began to set. We couldn't see into the water anymore. “Remember to get the bucket with the spare bait,” I reminded him, slumping along with the net dragging behind me. Suddenly, Paulie grabbed my arm. "Listen," he whispered. Noises came from the bucket Paulie was carrying. There, in the bucket, was a mountain of beautiful blue crabs fighting over our extra fish. We raced to give Dad the crabs. “Whoa!" he said. "You caught a lot!” I looked at Paulie. "Yes!" we mouthed silently to each other with huge grins.
Original ending
亮点：作为一篇趣事类续写，范文中“hot”,“a crab feast”的想象, “spare bait”等的细节与原文融合度非常高，使续写与原文完美地融为一体。
Part 3. 相似话题续写链接
2021嘉兴市高三教学测试读后续写
The first hunting
Part 4. 语料积累
“小心翼翼”相关亮点表达:原文：I raised the string real slow so Paulie could net it.
1.竭尽全力屏住呼吸，我仔细地看着螃蟹，心狂跳。
___________________________, I carefully watched the crab, __________________
2.眼睛死死盯着水面屏住呼吸，我紧张地等待着，一动也不敢动。
Eyes___________ the water and _____________, I waited nervously, ______________
3.屏住呼吸，我握紧绷紧的绳子，每一秒都在见证我努力稳住自己的手。
______________, I clasped the tightened string, __________________________
4.听到这话，我屏住呼吸，拼命坐着不动，眼睛死死盯着大蓝蟹。
______________, I held my breath and _____________, with my eyes ____________
5.眼睛盯着靠近的螃蟹，我小心翼翼地拉起绳子，希望Paulie能把它网住。
Eyes ____(fix) on the approaching crab, I raised the string cautiously, ______(hope) Paulie could net it.
6.额头冒出汗来，我小心翼翼地把鱼吊在水里
Sweat ______(ooz) from my forehead, I ________________________
my heart pounding wildly.
Sparing no effort to hold my breath
focused on
not daring to move a bit.
Holding my breath
every dragging second witnessing my mighty effort to steady my hand.
holding my breath
On hearing this
glued to the crab
fixed
hoping
oozing
dangled the fish in the water gingerly/cautiously.
went all out to sit still
语料积累：
“螃蟹逃脱”相关亮点表达
原文：But my legs swishing（发出刷刷声）in the water startled that crab, and it let go and floated back to the bottom like a leaf off a tree.
But it was so alarmed that it vanished down into the water before I could even touch it.
Startled, the crab loosed its grip and ran away.
Hardly had he netted it when the string was so loose that the crab slipped from our hands.
Just at this critical moment, however, the handle slid out of my hands, thus scaring the crab away.
“螃蟹逃脱”相关亮点表达
原文：But my legs swishing（发出刷刷声）in the water startled that crab, and it let go and floated back to the bottom like a leaf off a tree.
1.但它是如此警觉以至于我还没来得及触碰它，它就消失在了水里。
But it was ____________________ into the water __________ I could even touch it.
2.螃蟹吃了一惊，松开了抓子，逃走了。
_________(Startle), the crab _________ its grip and ran away
3.他刚把网盖上去，绳子就松了，螃蟹就从我们手里滑落了。
Hardly ________ he netted it ______ the string was so loose______ the crab slipped from our hands.
4.就在这个关键时刻，把手从我手中滑落，把螃蟹吓跑了。
Just at this ________moment, however, the handle ____________ my hands, thus ________________ the crab away.
before
so alarmed that it vanished down
Startled
let go
when
had
that
critical
slid out of
scaring/ startling
语料积累：
“环境烘托”相关亮点表达
原文：It was hot, and I sat down and swung my legs over the edge, into the cool water.
The sun overhead was like a branding iron, robbing our patience and tolerance.
However, it was so hot that I felt my neck was almost sunburnt and a bead of sweat just rolled down, which fueled my impatience.
The sky, orange and pink, was dotted with small clouds, but we were not in the mood to appreciate the afterglow.
Bathed in the gentle and beautiful golden sunlight, we two boys dangled the gift of Chesapeake Bay and walked towards our home hand in hand.
The last glim of sunshine casting on our faces, we finally tasted the delicious crabs.
Silver moonlight slanted down, witnessing our family sharing the delicious crab soup, talking merrily about the thrilling experience.
原文：It was hot, and I sat down and swung my legs over the edge, into the cool water.
1.头顶的太阳就像烙铁，夺走了我们的耐心与忍耐力。
The sun overhead was like a branding iron, _________________________________.
2.然而，太热了，我感觉脖子都快被晒黑了，一滴汗就滚了下来，让我不耐烦了。However, it was so hot that I felt my neck was almost sunburnt and _____________________, _________fueled my ___________.
3.橙色和粉红色的天空，点缀着小云，但我们没有心情欣赏余晖。
The sky, orange and pink, ____________________, but we ___________________ to appreciate the afterglow.
4.沐浴在柔和美丽的金色阳光下，我们两个男孩手提着Chesapeake的礼物，手牵手走向我们的家。
________________________________________________, we two boys _________ the gift of Chesapeake Bay and walked towards our home _____________.
5.最后一缕阳光洒在我们脸上，我们终于尝到了美味的螃蟹
____________________________________ on our faces, we finally tasted the delicious crabs.
6.银色月光斜射而下，看着我们一家人分享美味的蟹汤，畅谈惊险的经历。
Silver moonlight slanted down, _________(witness) our family ____________________, talking merrily about the _____________ experience.
robbing our patience and tolerance.
a bead of sweat just rolled down,
my impatience.
which
were not in the mood
was dotted with small clouds
Bathed in the gentle and beautiful golden sunshine
dangled
hand in hand.
The last glim of sunshine casting on our faces
enjoying the delicious soup of crab
shrilling
witnessing
语料积累：
“失望泄气”相关亮点表达
I was on the verge of giving up.
Upset and frustrated, I attempted to blurt out some complaints but finally swallowed them back at the sight of his lengthened face.
Sadly, I murmured “sorry” to Paulie with my head drooping down, resembling a withered flower.
He let out a disappointing sigh, not knowing whether we should insist.
The whole afternoon witnessed our failure one after another, tension and exhaustion lingering on the air.
“重新振作”相关亮点表达
Dad’s encouragement echoing in my ears, I apologized to Paulie and began our next trial.
Feeling lit up again, I soon devoted myself to the next attempt, heart brimmed （溢满）with patience, confidence and limitless warmth.
Feeling inspired, two of us waited patiently until the crab inched closer.
“失望泄气”相关亮点表达
1.我在放弃的边缘
I was ____________________ giving up.
2.感到焦虑与沮丧，我想要脱口而出一些抱怨，但最终在看到他拉长的脸时将它们咽了回去。
________________, I attempted to ______________________ but finally swallowed them back _________________his lengthened face.
3.可悲的是，我低着头，像一朵枯萎的花一样低着头对Paulie说“对不起”。
Sadly, I __________ “sorry” to Paulie with my head ___________________, _____________(resemble) a withered flower.
4.他失望地叹了口气，不知道我们该不该坚持。
He _____________________, not ________whether we should_________.
5.整个下午见证了我们一个又一个的失败，空气中弥漫着紧张和疲惫。
The whole afternoon _____________________________________, tension and exhaustion______________ (linger) on the air.
at the sight of
Upset and frustrated,
just on the verge of
murmured
dropping down
resembling
witnessed our failure one after another
lingering
let out a disappointing sign
knowing
insist
blurt out some complaints
Take the hint
"Since we all want crabs for supper, catch a whole bunch. But just in case you don't, we have leftover broccoli（花椰菜）." Dad said with a wink.
It was hot, and I sat down and swung my legs over the edge, into the cool water.
Paulie struggled to tie the string to one of the slippery fish. Then he slid the extra fish into the bucket and set it in the dark water under the dock for later.
Question: What do the words “all” and ”in case” imply
They were eager for crabs for supper and would spare no effort to catch them.
Possible plot: Although they were likely to have difficulty catching crabs, they wouldn’t give up because they were so eager for crabs for suppers
What role did the hot weather play when we caught crabs
The hot weather would add our difficulty in catching crabs and worsen our mood.
Possible plot: The hot weather made us sweaty and I found it difficulty to sit still and wait patiently for the crab to clamp the bait.
Think: Would the extra fish be used later Under what circumstances would the extra fish be used
Yes. The baited string was cut off or the extra fish unexpectedly attracted crabs
Possible plot: The baited string was cut off by crabs and they used the extra fish. Or the extra fish unexpectedly attracted crabs
Take the hint
I raised the string real slow so Paulie could net it.
But my legs swishing（发出刷刷声）in the water startled that crab, and it let go and floated back to the bottom like a leaf off a tree.
What should we pay attention to when catching crabs
Being slow as well as careful, and good cooperation
Possible plot: We continued to be patient and careful, cooperating well with each other
Would the similar situation happen again How did we avoid slight sound when catching crabs
Possible plot: Crabs were scared away again because of the sound we made and we had no choice but to stand still and wait.
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
His father said, “All set, boy ” and Jeremy nodded, picking up his gun with awkward gloved hands. His father pushed open the door and they went out into the freezing dawn together. Ordinarily Jeremy would take out his camera to record the scenery, but not this morning. This was the morning, particularly sacred, when 14-year-old Jeremy would go duck hunting for the first time.
However, he hated it, and had hated the whole idea since his father bought him a gun. But he was determined to go through with it. He loved his father, and wanted his approval more than anything in the world.
They came to a narrow and hidden place facing the bay. Jeremy sat down nervously and waited. To reduce fear, he took a picture of his father against the clean water. Then he put the camera hurriedly on the grass and picked up his gun.
Jeremy got his gun ready. “I’ll let you shoot first, ” his father said, loading his own gun. “You know, I've been waiting for a long time for this day. Just the two of us...” He broke off, bending forward, eyes narrowed. “There's a small flight heading this way now. Keep your head down. I'll give you the word.”
The sun came out. Jeremy could see everything clearly: his father's face, tense and eager; the white frost on the gun. His heart was beating wildly. He prayed, “Don't let them come, please! ”
But they kept coming. "Four black,” his father said. “One mallard(绿头鸭). ”High above, Jeremy heard the pulsing whistle of wings as the flight began to circle. The mallard was leading, his feet dropping down, reaching for the silver-colored water. Closer, closer...
“Get set, ” his father whispered.
“Now! ”cried Jeremy's father. "Take them! ”
Jeremy felt his body obey. He stood up, holding the gun. In the same instant, the wild ducks saw the gunners and flew. “Shoot!” said something sharply in Jeremy's brain. But up went the mallard higher still, until suddenly he caught the full force of the wind and flew away, out of range.
Paragraph 1:
His father asked in a controlled voice, “Why didn’t you shoot ” _______________________
Paragraph 2:
To Jeremy’s surprise, his father was handing the camera to him. _______________________
His father asked in a controlled voice. “Why didn’t you shoot ” Jeremy thumbed back the safety catch(扣回保险栓). He stood the gun carefully in the corner of the blind. “Because they were so alive,” he said, and burst into tears. He sat on the rough bench, face buried in his hands, and wept. All hope of pleasing his father and getting his approval was gone. He had had his chance, and he had failed. For a long moment, his father was silent. Then Jeremy felt him drop down beside him. “Here comes a single duck. Let’s try again.” Jeremy did not lower his hands. “It’s no use, Dad. I can’t shoot.” “Hurry,” his father said roughly. “You will miss him. Here.” Cold metal touched Jeremy. He looked up, unbelieving.
To Jeremy’s surprise, his father was handing the camera to him. “Quick,” he said softly. “He won’t hang around all day!” Jeremy’s father clapped his hands, a sound like a pistol shot. The splendid bird soared, feet retracted, wings flailing, white breast glistening. Then it was gone. Jeremy lowered the camera and exclaimed in delight, “I got him!” His father was radiant. “Did you That’s good.” He looked at his son, and Jeremy saw that there was no disappointment in his eyes, only pride and sympathy and love. “It’s okay, son. I will always love shooting. But that doesn’t mean you have to. Sometimes it takes as much courage not to do a thing as to do it.” He paused and said, “Could you teach me how to use that camera ”
Original ending
Appreciation of students’ works
习作点评：
本篇考场作文在准确把握原文的基础上，续写情节逻辑合理，充实丰富，与原文融洽度高。续写开始与给出的开头语衔接自然；语言方面，巧用了“be glued to”, “spout喋喋不休”, “soothe安慰”等高级词汇，体现了考生扎实的词汇基本功；分词的正确而灵活的使用是本篇的一大特点，加上倒装、定语从句、独立主格结构的运用使语言亮点纷呈；文章最后水到渠成地升华了内容主题，点明了意义。个别句子有小错误。