8B Unit 2 Travelling Revision(Writing-Travelling in China)课件(共23张PPT)

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Revision（Writing）
8BU2 Travelling
Kitty’s trip to Hong Kong Disneyland
When
during the winter holiday
Where
Who
Kitty and parents
What
How
fantastic time
parade
4-D film
fireworks
Space Mountain
moved at high speed
screamed and laughed
ran after &
took photos
shopping
Time order :
first,
next,
after that,
then,
last,
...
Writing in order is important.
Beautiful language is needed.
Para. 1
Para. 2
Para. 3
Para. 4
Para. 5
Para. 6
When, Where, Who
Details
Main
points
How
What
Beautiful language is needed.
1
2
3
Introduction
Main body
Conclusion
It took us... to fly to...
The next day, we went to ….
I loved watching the interesting ….
… was very exciting/beautiful/ fantastic.
On the third/fourth day, we visited ….
We went to … on the fifth day.
… was the best part of the day.
We enjoyed
this trip very much.
Organize ideas with main points and give details to support
I loved watching the interesting parade of Disney characters.
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Organize ideas with main points and give details to support
A fact file
Practice
Main points Details
When
Where
Who
What
How
A fact file
Practice
Main points Details
When
Where
Who
What
How
Last summer holiday
Qingdao by train
My friends and I
Visiting places of interest
Eating
Other activities
Interesting, exciting, fun, nice
Enjoyed the trip
Delicious seafood
Zhanqiao Pier ---bought gifts for relatives
Laoshan Scenic Area---enjoy the view and took photos
Bathing Beach--- had fun by the sea and near the beach
Qingdao Underwater World--- all kinds of sea animals
Want to visit it again
Sample Writing
Last summer holiday, my friends and I went to Qingdao by train. It was a long way from Suzhou to Qingdao, so we spent about six hours getting there.
As soon as we arrived, we went to the famous Qingdao Underwater World. We saw differnt kinds of amazing sea animals. They were so cute.
Later in the afternoon, we went to the Bathing Beach. The water in the sea is so cool that we had water fights with each other. Then we had fun on the beach.I even made a sand castle with my friends.
The next day, we went to Laoshan Scenic Area. The beautiful scenery was so attractive to me that I couldn't stop taking photos.
On the third day, we went to Zhanqiao Pier. We bought a lot of gifts for our friends and relatives. Then we went to a seafood restaurant and had a delicious meal. The seafood was so fantastic.
It was the most amazing trip I have ever had. I am looking forward to visiting it once more.
clear structure
Sample Writing
Last summer holiday, my friends and I went to Qingdao by train. It was a long way from Suzhou to Qingdao, so we spent about six hours getting there.
As soon as we arrived, we went to the famous Qingdao Underwater World. We saw differnt kinds of amazing sea animals. They were so cute.
Later in the afternoon, we went to the Bathing Beach. The water in the sea is so cool that we had water fights with each other. Then we had fun on the beach.I even made a sand castle with my friends.
The next day, we went to Laoshan Scenic Area. The beautiful scenery was so attractive to me that I couldn't stop taking photos.
On the third day, we went to Zhanqiao Pier. We bought a lot of gifts for our friends and relatives. Then we went to a seafood restaurant and had a delicious meal. The seafood was so fantastic.
It was the most amazing trip I have ever had. I am looking forward to visiting it once more.
time order
Sample Writing
Last summer holiday, my friends and I went to Qingdao by train. It was a long way from Suzhou to Qingdao, so we spent about six hours getting there.
As soon as we arrived, we went to the famous Qingdao Underwater World. We saw differnt kinds of amazing sea animals. They were so cute.
Later in the afternoon, we went to the Bathing Beach. The water in the sea is so cool that we had water fights with each other. Then we had fun on the beach.I even made a sand castle with my friends.
The next day, we went to Laoshan Scenic Area. The beautiful scenery was so attractive to me that I couldn't stop taking photos.
On the third day, we went to Zhanqiao Pier. We bought a lot of gifts for our friends and relatives. Then we went to a seafood restaurant and had a delicious meal. The seafood was so fantastic.
It was the most amazing trip I have ever had. I am looking forward to visiting it once more.
details
Sample Writing
Last summer holiday, my friends and I went to Qingdao by train. It was a long way from Suzhou to Qingdao, so we spent about six hours getting there.
As soon as we arrived, we went to the famous Qingdao Underwater World. We saw differnt kinds of amazing sea animals. They were so cute.
Later in the afternoon, we went to the Bathing Beach. The water in the sea is so cool that we had water fights with each other. Then we had fun on the beach.I even made a sand castle with my friends.
The next day, we went to Laoshan Scenic Area. The beautiful scenery was so attractive to me that I couldn't stop taking photos.
On the third day, we went to Zhanqiao Pier. We bought a lot of gifts for our friends and relatives. Then we went to a seafood restaurant and had a delicious meal. The seafood was so fantastic.
It was the most amazing trip I have ever had. I am looking forward to visiting it once more.
better language
My best holiday
Writing practice
How to write an article about one of your trips
A clear structure
The proper order
Better words & expressions
Introduction: when,where, who
Main body: What
( main points & details)
Conclusion: How
My best holiday
When I was 10, I went abroad for the first time. With my parents, I spent two weeks in Japan and had a fantastic time. For me, the most interesting thing was visiting Tokyo Disneyland.
We walked there and queued for our turn to get in for a long time. My dad had great fun on a roller coaster which is really high. I could even hear the people laughing and screaming with joy. My mum and I took lots of pictures while waiting for my dad.
Then, we went to a restaurant to have lunch. The hamburger was the same shape as a shell. The food was so delicious that all of us were full.
On our way back, I was excited to see a few Disney Cartoon characters. We couldn’t stop taking photos. Later in the afternoon, we watched an amazing show. Everyone clapped hands and shouted happily in the end.
That day was full of wonderful experiences and great joy. It was the best holiday in my life!
----by 于蕊嘉 （苏州工业园区星汇学校）
My best holiday
When I was 10, I went abroad for the first time. With my parents, I spent two weeks in Japan and had a fantastic time. For me, the most interesting thing was visiting Tokyo Disneyland.
We walked there and queued for our turn to get in for a long time. My dad had great fun on a roller coaster which is really high. I could even hear the people laughing and screaming with joy. My mum and I took lots of pictures while waiting for my dad.
Then, we went to a restaurant to have lunch. The hamburger was the same shape as a shell. The food was so delicious that all of us were full.
On our way back, I was excited to see a few Disney Cartoon characters. We couldn’t stop taking photos. Later in the afternoon, we watched an amazing show. Everyone clapped hands and shouted happily in the end.
That day was full of wonderful experiences and great joy. It was the best holiday in my life!
----by 于蕊嘉 （苏州工业园区星汇学校）
v
clear structure
My best holiday
When I was 10, I went abroad for the first time. With my parents, I spent two weeks in Japan and had a fantastic time. For me, the most interesting thing was visiting Tokyo Disneyland.
We walked there and queued for our turn to get in for a long time. My dad had great fun on a roller coaster which is really high. I could even hear the people laughing and screaming with joy. My mum and I took lots of pictures while waiting for my dad.
Then, we went to a restaurant to have lunch. The hamburger was the same shape as a shell. The food was so delicious that all of us were full.
On our way back, I was excited to see a few Disney Cartoon characters. We couldn’t stop taking photos. Later in the afternoon, we watched an amazing show. Everyone clapped hands and shouted happily in the end.
That day was full of wonderful experiences and great joy. It was the best holiday in my life!
----by 于蕊嘉 （苏州工业园区星汇学校）
time order
My best holiday
When I was 10, I went abroad for the first time. With my parents, I spent two weeks in Japan and had a fantastic time. For me, the most interesting thing was visiting Tokyo Disneyland.
We walked there and queued for our turn to get in for a long time. My dad had great fun on a roller coaster which is really high. I could even hear the people laughing and screaming with joy. My mum and I took lots of pictures while waiting for my dad.
Then, we went to a restaurant to have lunch. The hamburger was the same shape as a shell. The food was so delicious that all of us were full.
On our way back, I was excited to see a few Disney Cartoon characters. We couldn’t stop taking photos. Later in the afternoon, we watched an amazing show. Everyone clapped hands and shouted happily in the end.
That day was full of wonderful experiences and great joy. It was the best holiday in my life!
----by 于蕊嘉 （苏州工业园区星汇学校）
details
My best holiday
When I was 10, I went abroad for the first time. With my parents, I spent two weeks in Japan and had a fantastic time. For me, the most interesting thing was visiting Tokyo Disneyland.
We walked there and queued for our turn to get in for a long time. My dad had great fun on a roller coaster which is really high. I could even hear the people laughing and screaming with joy. My mum and I took lots of pictures while waiting for my dad.
Then, we went to a restaurant to have lunch. The hamburger was the same shape as a shell. The food was so delicious that all of us were full.
On our way back, I was excited to see a few Disney Cartoon characters. We couldn’t stop taking photos. Later in the afternoon, we watched an amazing show. Everyone clapped hands and shouted happily in the end.
That day was full of wonderful experiences and great joy. It was the best holiday in my life!
----by 于蕊嘉 （苏州工业园区星汇学校）
better language
Writing assessment table
Writing Components (写作要素) Criteria (条件) Points
(分值)
Organization Have a clear structure. 10
Use a proper order to organize your ideas 10
Use details to support the main points in your writing. 20
Content Q1.When did you have the trip Q2.Where did you go Q3.Who did you go with Q4.How did you get there Q5.What did you do during the trip Q6.How did you feel after the trip 40
Language Try to “borrow”some nice words or expressions we talked about in this period. 10
Others Have a good handwriting. 10
Thanks for listening!