中考英语高分作文“六步法”秘诀课件

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高分作文“六步法”
中考作文评分标准
第一档（13-15分）
信息完整，表达流畅，无语言错误或基本无语言错误。
第二档（10-12分）
信息基本完整，表达较流畅，有少量语言错误，但不影响意思表达。
第三档（7-9分）
能传达部分信息，表达不够流畅，语言错误较多，但句子基本可读。
第四档（4-6分）
只能传达少量信息，表达不流畅，语言错误多，只有少量句子可读。
第五档（0-3分）
只能传达个别信息，表达不清楚，只有个别句子可读。
思考文章的形成过程
文章的形成过程：
单词 短语，结构 +符号 句子 段落 文章
如何把这些组织一篇文章？
首先，我们必须在头脑中构成一幅mind map.
在map的帮助下，我们就能有效的到达我们的
目的地。
分析结构
Safety is important to us all. As teenagers, we must learn to protect ourselves.
When we are at home, we should be careful when we use electricity . Before answering the door, we first see whether she/he is a stranger. On the way to school, we must pay special attention to the traffic and obey the rules in the street. We must always ride the bicycles on the right and stop when the lights are red. When we are at school, we should never run around the hallway. It's no good for us to fight with each other over small matters.
In a word, life is important，we should keep us safe all the time
总述
分述
Conclusion
审--审要点：不漏要点
列--列提纲：拟定提纲
扩--扩句子：充实要点
连--连成文：丰富细节
美--美文章：文质兼美
抄--写工整：卷面整洁
写作步骤
写作步骤
第一步:审要点
细审题目隐含，不漏要点
近来，青少年学生的安全备受社会关注。在全国中小学安全教育宣传日来临之际，当地报社请你以“How to keep us safe”为题，写一篇英语短文，谈一谈青少年学生应该如何保障自身的安全。：
主题
时态
要点及字数
以一般现在时为主
要求：1.短文中不得出现任何真实人名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分；2.不少于60词。提示：
What should you do at home
2. What should you do on the way to school
3. What should you do at school
具体做法：
根据题目要点，拟定提纲
第二步：列作提纲（Outline）。
总 述
Main body
Conclusion
分 述
在家 at home
去学校的路上：on the way
to school
3.在学校： at school
Write an outline
第三步：扩句子：适当补加语句，充实要点
在家用电的安全
不给陌生人开门
......
Be careful when we use electricity
Answer the door,make sure it is not a stranger
some keywords about at home,on the way to school,at school
be careful when we use electricity
answer the door, we first see whether she/he is a stranger
pay special attention to the traffic and obey the rules
ride the bicycles on the right and stop ;the lights are red
never run around the hallway.
It's no good for us to fight with each other.
并列关系：and，or，either ... or，both ...
and，
转折关系：but，however，
条件关系：if, whether，
时间关系：when，as，before，after，
while，
因果关系：because，as，since，for，so
第四步：连成文：增加连接词语，丰富细节
第五步：美文章：使用好词佳句，文质兼美
When we are at home, we should be careful when we use electricity . Before answering the door, we first see whether she/he is a stranger. On the way to school, we must pay special attention to the traffic and obey the rules in the street. We must always ride the bicycles on the right and stop when the lights are red. When we are at school, we should never run around the hallway. It's no good for us to fight with each other over small matters.
第六步：写工整：重新抄写文章，卷面整洁
1、规范书写，字母饱满圆润，格式正确。 作文答题纸一般为单线，我们应将单线作为“四线格”中的第三线并以此为基准书写，不要把它作为第四线，让字母吊在线上。
2、坚决不能在试卷上出现乱涂、乱写、或用修正液覆盖现象——给人一种凌乱的感觉。
3、一旦写错，规范修改——用一条斜线划掉即可。
常见错误
时态是否正确
主谓是否一致
要点是否全面
人称是否正确
语序是否有问题
语言是否符合习惯　
固定短语是否恰当
Summary
总述
Main body
分述
Conclusion
At home
On the way to school
At school
范文
Safety is important to us all. As teenagers, we must learn to protect ourselves.
When we are at home, we should be careful when we use electricity . Before answering the door, we first see whether she/he is a stranger. On the way to school, we must pay special attention to the traffic and obey the rules in the street. We must always ride the bicycles on the right and stop when the lights are red. When we are at school, we should never run around the hallway. It's no good for us to fight with each other over small matters.
In a word, life is important，we should keep us safe all the time
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