中考专区 二轮专题 how to polish your writing？课件(共16张PPT)

(共16张PPT)
学习目标
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通过词汇和句式的提升提高写作语言的丰富性
能够根据所学内容自主完成一篇书面表达
学习准备：笔记本，作文纸，黑笔，红笔，你的专注
相关模块：7A Module 4; 8B Module 4; 9B Module 5; 9B Module 6
通过审题谋篇提升写作的整体意识与框架意识
How to beautify a practical writing？
checklist
in this lesson， you will...
1.今年是你外籍教师David在中国过的第一个春节。开学的第一天他很惊讶地发现很多同学变胖了。他给大家布置一个作业：写一篇文章关于大家发胖的原因，并且就如何过一个健康的春节提出建议。
2.以往大家在春节都会放烟花，但是今年大部分地区禁止烟花燃放，以至很多人认为少了些年味，你的观点。
3.燃放烟花，但是一片狼藉，火灾，空气污染，垃圾。
How to keep healthy
Have healthy eating habits
Relax and have a good mood
Develop healthy lifestyles
important
helpful
necessary
It is important/ helpful/ necessary to...
How to keep healthy
Be healthy physically and mentally.
Be healthy both in body and mind.
How to keep healthy
Have healthy eating habits
Relax and have a good mood
Develop healthy lifestyles
How
Have regular meals.
Eat the right food.
Enjoy some hobbies
Have some friends.
Be happy.
How to keep healthy
Do more exercise.
Have enough sleep.
How
How
Let's practise小练笔.
当今社会人们的生活，工作等压力逐渐加大，健康开始成为主要问题。某中学生英文报正开辟专栏讨论人们如何保持健康。请从以下几个方面，用英语写出你的建议，向该栏目投稿。
内容包括 1. 多运动 2. 合理科学饮食 3. 保持愉快心情
4. 培养良好的习惯
Beginning
Body
Ending
Body
The introduction of the topic
& the importance of health
Our hope for people to be healthy
To complete the passage.
It's important to have healthy eating habits. We should have three meals a day on time. We'd better eat more _______________________
but less_____________.
It's helpful to develop healthy lifestyles. In my opinion,________ ________every day is important. For example, we can take a walk, run and play ball games so on. It's not healthy to stay up late, so we should _______________early.
Relaxing ourselves is necessary. When we are stressed out, we can make ourselves happy by________________music or talking with our friends.
First, it's
Second, it's
fruit and vegetables
junk food
doing
go to bed
listening to
sports
What's more, relaxing
Tips：
1.适当的过渡词可以让文章要点层次鲜明，逻辑清晰。
2. 通过拓展句（details/examples/reasons/results）进一步给出建议。
Writing skills
写作提升策略一词汇提升：
a. of great help
b. do good to / be beneficial to
c. have meals regularly
d. keep in good health
e. increase the risk of ...
f. lead to bad health
g. do harm to / be harmful to
A We shouldn't eat junk food.
B We should_____________________junk food.
keep away from
1. have three meals a day on time.
2. helpful
3. be good for
4. be bad for
5. keep healthy
6. make sb fall ill easily
7. be unhealthy
Tips：
1.高级词替换
2.词性替换
3.短语替换
2 mins
a. I like to listen to music to relax myself.
b. Listening to music is a good way to relax.
写作提升策略二 句式提升：
a.We should keep a good mood every day.
b.I find it important to keep a good mood every day .
Writing skills
用特定句型或者改变句子的主语时表达更清晰
用被动语态可以加强语气。
避免中式英语（定语从句）
a. First, we should eat healthily.
b. Eating healthily should be put in the first place.
it 作形式
宾语句型
改变句子
主语
主动改被动
Which one is better
<真题试炼>现在中学生在校内能保证一定时间的运动量，但在校外普遍
缺少运动甚至不运动。请就此现象写一篇短文，谈谈你的看法。
内容包括：
1.缺少运动甚至不运动的原因；
2.缺少运动甚至不运动对学生的影响；
3.针对这种现象提出合理的改善建议。
参考词汇 be short of
1. 重点：如何增补校外实践，培养良好的运动习惯。
2. 时态：一般现在时
3. 人称：第三人称复数
How to organize your writing.
审
How to organize your writing.
列
Many students are short of exercise in their spare time now. They have to do too much homework after school, or have too many after-school classes. So there is no time for them to do exercise.
Being short of exercise may cause many problems, such as putting on weight and poor health.
Even though they are too busy with their school-work, it is still necessary to do exercise to make their bodies strong and healthy. First, they'd better ride or walk to school on weekdays. Second, they can go swimming or
take a walk in the park on weekends. What's more, they can exercise by doing daily housework.
All in all, students need to do some exercise in their spare time, which can help to refresh their mind and be more energetic.
Possible version
Reasons
Influences
Ending
Topic
sentences
Suggestions
Key words and
Linking words
如今，青少年的健康问题受到了社会的普遍关注，请仔细观察下面
两幅漫画，分析问题并提出你的合理建议。
Your turn to write.
Reasons
Influences
Advice
Teenagers' health
1. 时态：一般现在时
&现在完成时
2. 人称：第三人称
3. 分析问题的原因及其影响
并给出建议
话题复习一 书面表达篇 Food,drinks and health
Homework
根据以下提醒再次修改润饰你的文章，将它发给你的英语老师。
1. 文章的整体框架结构是否如下图所示？可以再加个Ending哦！
2. 我有没有用上适当的过渡词，我有没有就主题句进行拓展？
3. 我的语言是不是还可以更丰富？有可替换的词吗？有更好的句子吗？我尝试用被动语态和定语从句了吗？
4. 我满意我的书写吗？
Reasons
Influences
Advice
Teenagers' health
Check list (How many stars can you get ) 1. 我能了解并运用本节课写作策略。
2.我能全程参与课堂互动并擅于记笔记。
3.我对Health这个话题有了新的认识并想成为一个健康的青少年。
话题复习一 书面表达篇 Food,drinks and health