2022届高考英语写作之读后续写：荒野求生（word版，有范文）
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2022高考英语写作之读后续写：荒野求生
原题
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom "I'm going to find a better spot for us to camp" and walked away.
With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snow capped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost.
"Tom!" she cried. "Help!"
No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.
Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落) somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake.
As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.
注意:1)所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2)续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好。
Paragraph 1:But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.
Paragraph 2:It was daybreak when Jane woke up.
参考范文一
Para 1:
But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Disappointed and sad, Jane sat by the stream, resting her aching feet. “If I hadn’t quarrelled with Tom, I wouldn’t have to be here.” Jane thought regretfully, with tears welling up in her eyes. She wanted to say sorry to Tom for losing her temper. However, the only thing she could do was lie by the stream and wait for help. It was getting late and Jane fell asleep.
Para2:
It was daybreak when Jane woke up. She stood up to find something to eat but in vain. She walked and walked until she came to an open area where water and berries are available. Suddenly, she heard a helicopter. In no time, she took off her yellow blouse and began waving it wildly. To her great joy, she was spotted and the helicopter soon landed. With the door open, Tom ran out first. Seeing Jane, he was so excited that he couldn’t contain his joy. “Honey, I won’t lose my temper again. I want to stay with you forever.” Jane said in tears.
参考范文二
Para 1:
But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. All at once, the forest was enveloped in silence. Jane, exhausted and scared, lay down near a stone, missing her family in the distance. All the fantastic memories crowded in and she couldn’t help crying, “Had I not quarreled with Tom, walked away and climbed to the high place, I wouldn’t be trapped in this awful place, faced with the danger of dying.” She regretted and burst into tears. A moment later, she fell asleep with shining tears in her eyes.
Para2:
It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Weak as she was, she struggled to her feet, continuing searching for assistance. To her great joy, a helicopter was flying overhead again and again. Eager and excited, she waved her yellow blouse and spared no effort to yell so as to attract others’ attention. Fortunately, she was eventually noticed and brought into the helicopter. There, she saw her husband staring at her, wearing an expression of relief. As tightly as possible, she hugged him and was too thrilled to say anything. Besides, they agreed never to quarrel again, determined to live the life to the fullest.
写作注意问题
格式：有且只有两段，字数分配合理。
情节：①避免再出现矛盾冲突,节外生枝 (狼/虎/熊齐上阵，猎人老农村民齐帮忙...）②避免拉长时间线 (极少需要写几天后/几周后/几年后,除非段首明确给出)③故事发展合理化(天都黑了, 又爬山,又找湖,又挂衣服...）④问题解决合理化 (眼一闭，一睁，Tom出现了; 上树/爬雪山无所不能.)
语言：①时态、语态准确无误。②丰富句子结构(副词放句首,with复合结构, v-ing/ed作状语, adj做状语, 各种从句...）③完善语言表达(To show. Not to tell;如害怕伤心，只写“He was scared and sad”而缺少害怕伤心的原因、害怕伤心的表现。细节: 语言/动作/神态/心理)
写作素材积累
He rose to his feet and ran outside.他站起来跑到外面。
We stood there crying and hugging each other.
我们站在那里哭着互相拥抱。
She went to her daughter and hugged her tightly.
她走向女儿，紧紧地搂住了她。
Jack warmly embraced his son.
杰克热烈地拥抱了儿子。
I recalled / recollected that we were all gathered in the kitchen.我记得当时我们都被召集到厨房里。
I recollect/recall him / his saying that it was dangerous. 我记得他说那很危险。
The old family photo reminds the girl of the good old times with her grandparents.这幅老照片让女孩想起来和祖父母一起的美好时光。
The painting brings to mind some of Picasso's early works.这幅油画使人想起了毕加索早期的作品。
Memories came crowding into her mind.往事一齐涌上她的心头。
He couldn't hold back his anger. 他再也控制不住他的怒火。
She held back her tears. 她强忍着没让眼泪流出来。
There were sudden tears in his eyes and he paused, fighting for control.泪水突然夺眶而出，他停了下来，竭力控制住自己。
Davidson lost control of himself and started yelling.戴维森的情绪失去了控制，开始怒吼。
Hanging/ her head in shame, she didn’t know what to say next.
Holding a firm belief that Tom, her husband must be looking for her, she kept on walking regardless of the back breaking work.
Feeling hopeless and regretful, she couldn’t hold back her tears anymore.
Spotted with stars, sky seems like a blanket full of jewels.
Seeing Jane, he was so excited that he couldn’t contain his joy.
Disappointed and sad, Jane sat by the stream, resting her aching feet.
Jane was finally rescued, safe and sound.
Eager and excited, she waved her yellow blouse and spared no effort to yell so as to attract others’ attention.
Exhausted but determined, Jane rose up to her feet, dragging (费力拖着走) herself to the stream.
原题
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom "I'm going to find a better spot for us to camp" and walked away.
With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snow capped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost.
"Tom!" she cried. "Help!"
No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.
Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落) somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake.
As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.
注意:1)所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2)续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好。
Paragraph 1:But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.
Paragraph 2:It was daybreak when Jane woke up.
参考范文一
Para 1:
But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Disappointed and sad, Jane sat by the stream, resting her aching feet. “If I hadn’t quarrelled with Tom, I wouldn’t have to be here.” Jane thought regretfully, with tears welling up in her eyes. She wanted to say sorry to Tom for losing her temper. However, the only thing she could do was lie by the stream and wait for help. It was getting late and Jane fell asleep.
Para2:
It was daybreak when Jane woke up. She stood up to find something to eat but in vain. She walked and walked until she came to an open area where water and berries are available. Suddenly, she heard a helicopter. In no time, she took off her yellow blouse and began waving it wildly. To her great joy, she was spotted and the helicopter soon landed. With the door open, Tom ran out first. Seeing Jane, he was so excited that he couldn’t contain his joy. “Honey, I won’t lose my temper again. I want to stay with you forever.” Jane said in tears.
参考范文二
Para 1:
But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. All at once, the forest was enveloped in silence. Jane, exhausted and scared, lay down near a stone, missing her family in the distance. All the fantastic memories crowded in and she couldn’t help crying, “Had I not quarreled with Tom, walked away and climbed to the high place, I wouldn’t be trapped in this awful place, faced with the danger of dying.” She regretted and burst into tears. A moment later, she fell asleep with shining tears in her eyes.
Para2:
It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Weak as she was, she struggled to her feet, continuing searching for assistance. To her great joy, a helicopter was flying overhead again and again. Eager and excited, she waved her yellow blouse and spared no effort to yell so as to attract others’ attention. Fortunately, she was eventually noticed and brought into the helicopter. There, she saw her husband staring at her, wearing an expression of relief. As tightly as possible, she hugged him and was too thrilled to say anything. Besides, they agreed never to quarrel again, determined to live the life to the fullest.
写作注意问题
格式：有且只有两段，字数分配合理。
情节：①避免再出现矛盾冲突,节外生枝 (狼/虎/熊齐上阵，猎人老农村民齐帮忙...）②避免拉长时间线 (极少需要写几天后/几周后/几年后,除非段首明确给出)③故事发展合理化(天都黑了, 又爬山,又找湖,又挂衣服...）④问题解决合理化 (眼一闭，一睁，Tom出现了; 上树/爬雪山无所不能.)
语言：①时态、语态准确无误。②丰富句子结构(副词放句首,with复合结构, v-ing/ed作状语, adj做状语, 各种从句...）③完善语言表达(To show. Not to tell;如害怕伤心，只写“He was scared and sad”而缺少害怕伤心的原因、害怕伤心的表现。细节: 语言/动作/神态/心理)
写作素材积累
He rose to his feet and ran outside.他站起来跑到外面。
We stood there crying and hugging each other.
我们站在那里哭着互相拥抱。
She went to her daughter and hugged her tightly.
她走向女儿，紧紧地搂住了她。
Jack warmly embraced his son.
杰克热烈地拥抱了儿子。
I recalled / recollected that we were all gathered in the kitchen.我记得当时我们都被召集到厨房里。
I recollect/recall him / his saying that it was dangerous. 我记得他说那很危险。
The old family photo reminds the girl of the good old times with her grandparents.这幅老照片让女孩想起来和祖父母一起的美好时光。
The painting brings to mind some of Picasso's early works.这幅油画使人想起了毕加索早期的作品。
Memories came crowding into her mind.往事一齐涌上她的心头。
He couldn't hold back his anger. 他再也控制不住他的怒火。
She held back her tears. 她强忍着没让眼泪流出来。
There were sudden tears in his eyes and he paused, fighting for control.泪水突然夺眶而出，他停了下来，竭力控制住自己。
Davidson lost control of himself and started yelling.戴维森的情绪失去了控制，开始怒吼。
Hanging/ her head in shame, she didn’t know what to say next.
Holding a firm belief that Tom, her husband must be looking for her, she kept on walking regardless of the back breaking work.
Feeling hopeless and regretful, she couldn’t hold back her tears anymore.
Spotted with stars, sky seems like a blanket full of jewels.
Seeing Jane, he was so excited that he couldn’t contain his joy.
Disappointed and sad, Jane sat by the stream, resting her aching feet.
Jane was finally rescued, safe and sound.
Eager and excited, she waved her yellow blouse and spared no effort to yell so as to attract others’ attention.
Exhausted but determined, Jane rose up to her feet, dragging (费力拖着走) herself to the stream.