中考英语写作课课件（22张PPT）

(共22张PPT)
Writing
Your Home Town
假设你是李华，你的家乡在温州，你的英国笔友Mike十月份要来温州旅游。请你根据提示内容给他写一封邮件介绍你的家乡。
About Wenzhou Words and expressions for reference
Location in the southeast of Zhejiang Province
Population and history about 9.21million, more than 2,000 years
Interesting places Jiangxin Island, Yandang Mountains, Nanxi River...
Weather and others fine, but sometimes rainy;
delicious food;
...
要求：（1）尽量包含所有要点，可适当发挥；（2）条理清楚，语句通顺，行文连贯；（3）80词左右（开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数）
假设你是李华，你的家乡在温州，你的英国笔友Mike十月份要来温州旅游。请你根据提示内容给他写一封邮件介绍你的家乡。
3W审题法
When 时态
What 要点
Who 人称
一般现在时；
一般将来时
Step1: Check the question
Your
home town
1.location
2.population
4.history
3.size
5.famous places
6.famous food
7.weather
Step2: Brainstorm
in the southeast of Zhejiang
south
north
west
east
1.Location
It is ______ away from Wenzhou to Hangzhou.
300 km
Step3: Make simple sentences
2.Population
about 9.21million
Wenzhou has a ______ (large/small) population.
large
Wenzhou has a ______ of about 9.21 ______ .
population
million
_____________ Wenzhou is about 9.21____ .
The population of
3.Size
11,784 k㎡
The ______ （区域） of Wenzhou
is about 11,784 square(平方) ______ .
area
kilometres
4.History
Wenzhou has a______(long/short)history which is more than 2000 years old.
long
Dragon Lantern Dance
5.Interesting places
It is ______ for Jiangxin Island 、Yandang Mountains、Nanxi River...
famous
Jiangxin Island
Yandang Mountains
Nanxi River
6.Famous food
It is ______ for seafood .
famous
7.Weather
夏季高温多雨
冬季温和少雨
The weather here is______but sometimes ______ in
______ and ______ and ______ in ______ .
fine
rainy
summer
mild
dry
winter
Step4: Write a short passage
Wenzhou is in the southeast of Zhejiang Province. It has a history of more than 2,000 years and about 9.21 million people live here. There are many interesting places in Wenzhou, Jiangxin Island, Yandang Mountains and Nanxi River. You can also try lots of famous and delicious food in Wenzhou. The weather is fine in October, but sometimes it rains. So remember to bring an umbrella.
Structure
Beginning
Ending
Body
2
!+
Wenzhou is in the southeast of Zhejiang Province. It has a history of more than 2,000 years and about 9.21 million people live here. There are many interesting places in Wenzhou, Jiangxin Island, Yandang Mountains and Nanxi River. You can also try lots of famous and delicious food in Wenzhou. The weather is fine in October, but sometimes it rains. So remember to bring an umbrella.
Step5: Structure
Beginning
Let me tell you something about it.
Dear Mike,
I’m very happy that you’re coming to Wenzhou in October. Now, let me tell you something about my hometown. I come from Wenzhou.
2
Ending
Do you like my home town
What a beautiful place!
!+
The first draft(9-10)
Do you like my home town
long
Wenzhou is in the southeast of Zhejiang Province. It has a history of more than 2,000 years and about 9.21 million people live here. There are many interesting places in Wenzhou, Jiangxin Island, Yandang Mountains and Nanxi River.
You can also try lots of famous and delicious food in Wenzhou. The weather is fine in October, but sometimes it rains. So remember to bring an umbrella.
such as
October is a good time to visit them.
Step6: Make up
The first draft(9-10)
Final draft(12--15)
words
Sentences
Link words
good words
good sentences proverbs

Words
Link words: However;Besides;What's more;But;So;That's because;That's why...
Good words: Pretty(good);especially;more than(over)
Sentences
Good sentences: .. be the best time to+do;It is home to many places of interest;I'm sure...
Proverbs: East or west,home is the best.
There is no place like home.
As the saying goes,“...”
Step7:
self-estimate(自评)
反思订正：
1.检查作文是否包含题目要求的所有要点。
2.检查每个句子中动词的使用形式是否正确。
3.检查每个句子中名词单复数是否正确。
4.检查是否用上优美词句。
5.检查篇章结构是否合理。
6.默读全文，整体检查。
如有错写和漏写的情况，请规范订正，如：在错词上画一横线再补上正确的单词；也可以标上序号，订正在下面的横线上。
Step8: peer review(互评)
档次 分值 可给分值和采分点 一档文 13-15 2 大小写、标点符号、词数达标，书写规范整洁
2-3 行文连贯，连接词使用适当，指代清晰
5 用词适切，句型变化多样且有效，完全或基本没有语言错误
4-5 描述所有信息，内容合理、丰富
二档文 9-12 2 大小写、标点正确，词数达标，书写规范整洁
2-3 行文连贯，连接词使用适当的，指代清晰
3-4 用词基本适切，句型较为单一，有少量语言错误但不影响理解
2-3 描述了大部分信息，内容比较合理
三档文 5-8 1-2 大小写、标点正确，词数达标，书写规范整洁或尚可辨认
1 行文不够连贯，连接词使用不够恰当，指代不够清晰
1-2 有较多语言错误，一定程度上影响理解
2-3 描述了大部分信息，内容比较合理
四档文 1-4 0 大小写、标点错误较多，语言应用不规范，词数严重不足
0-1 行文不够连贯，连接词使用不够恰当，指代不够清晰
1-2 有较多语言错误，一定程度上影响理解
0-1 描述了小部分信息，内容不合理
五档文 0 0 白卷或骂人
East or west,home is the best.
homework：
结合自评和互评，修改初稿，进行二稿的书写。