2023年中考英语 作文易错点突破 课件 (共23张PPT)

(共23张PPT)
How to write better
Learning ojectives
1.通过学习，能够对照本节所学检查自己作文中是否出现跑题，主体部分逻辑不清晰，文意难以理解等问题，并加以纠正。
2.通过学习强化在写作中的审题和列提纲意识，以及平时的积累意识，避免首段翻译题干的现象。
What are the problems in your writing
Do you know
Yes or No
论语中说：“工欲善其事必先利其器”在平时生活中，有时一件“利器”能带给我们自信，对我们产生积极影响，甚至在一些重要场合助我们一臂之力。请以“The best thing I have owned”为题，并根据以下要点和要求用英语写一篇短文，描述你拥有的一件“利器”
要点：1.你的一件“利器”是什么；
2.描述与它相关的一段经历；
3.谈谈你拥有它的感受
要求：1.文中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称
2.词数100词左右。
Friend is the best thing I have owned for me.
stray from the point跑题
审题潦草，匆忙下笔
Read and find!
why
写作
步骤
第一步：审
体裁，要点
人称，时态
至少读题两遍，用笔画出关键词，找出话题要点,确定（题材，选材，时态，人称）
怎么审题？
论语中说：“工欲善其事必先利其器”在平时生活中，有时一件“利器”能带给我们自信，对我们产生积极影响，甚至在一些重要场合助我们一臂之力。请以“The best thing I have owned”为题，并根据以下要点和要求用英语写一篇短文，描述你拥有的一件“利器”
要点：1.你的一件“利器”是什么；
2.描述与它相关的一段经历；
3.谈谈你拥有它的感受
要求：1.文中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称
2.词数100词左右。
题材：记叙文 时态：过去式 人称：第一人称
选材：实物（例如 ;一支笔 ）非实物（例如友谊）
something
experience
feeling
结构：三个段落
掌握这些信息之后才可以动笔！
练一练
Pay attention to para.2
Read and find!
At first, my English pronunciation was not good. I was upset and my English listening wasn't good, either. So I asked my English teacher help. Then I bought a radio and listen to English on it. My English grades improved a little and I was happy. I stuck to listening to English every day.My English improved a lot. Now, my English pronunciation has greatly improved by it.
At first, because my English pronunciation was not good, my English listening wasn't good, either. So I was upset and I asked my English teacher help. My English teacher advised me to listen to English more. Then I bought a radio and stuck to listening to English on it every day. Several months later, my English pronunciation improved a lot. Now, my English grades has greatly improved . I am happy and proud of myself.
句与句之间联系紧密，文章逻辑更清晰，更容易看懂。
比一比 Which one is better Why
逻辑不清晰，内容虽然是围绕一件事写的，但句子间缺乏内在联系，导致表意混乱，理解困难。
没有提纲，
想到一句写一句
why
写作
步骤
第一步：审
体裁，要点
人称，时态
第二步：列
用简单的句子或短语列出文章要点。
用简单的句子或短语列出文章要点，设计框架结构
怎么列提纲？
Outline
your best thing
Lorem ipsum dolor sit
Lorem ipsum dolor sit
Lorem ipsum dolor sit
what is your best thing
an event about it
why is it your best thing
feeling
the radio helps me improve my English
(radio)
in the past (not good)
asked the teacher
for help
gave advice got a radio
now English improved
？
？
写作
步骤
第三步：加
加首尾，使结构完整。开头结尾句子要简洁。
第一步：审
体裁，要点
人称，时态
第二步：列
用简单的句子或短语列出文章要点。
在主干完成后加上首尾，使结构完整。开头或结尾的句子
应注意简洁，漂亮尤其是要点题。
如何加首尾两段？
1.The best thing is others' encouragement for me. It gives
me power to do something.
2. The best thing I have owned is my teacher's encouragement.
3.Everyone have their best things.The best thing I have owned is my confidence. It helped me a lot.
First paragraph
能够点题，但太过简洁生硬，缺乏过渡
句子啰嗦，且点题不够准确。
能够点题,句子有一定的变化,但是有语法错误，且句子不够出彩。
优秀的首段：The best thing I have owned is my confidence. It has a great influence on me.
开篇点题，简明扼要，且能引出下文
Read and find!
1. When I have others' encouragement I will have power.
It helps me win.
2. I'm really happy and happy to have this best “thing”
3.When I meet with difficulities. I always face them bravely, because I believe I can do it.
Last paragraph
简单的陈述，不起总结作用，没有点题
句子幼稚，点题生硬
句子表意虽清晰，但是没有呼应主题。
优秀的尾段：Thanks to my confidence, it makes me face difficulities bravely.
It is really the best thing I have owned.
总结全文，抒发感受，再次呼应主题
Read and find!
为什么你写不出优秀的开头和结尾呢？
1.写作顺序不对，略过了主干部分，上来就写首段。
2.缺乏积累，习惯性翻译题干。
3.不重视尾段，没有再次点题的意识。
Outline
your best thing
Lorem ipsum dolor sit
Lorem ipsum dolor sit
Lorem ipsum dolor sit
what is your best thing
an event about it
why is it your best thing
feeling
be thankful to my teacher
because she gave me the best thing to help me learn English
the radio helps me improve my English
(radio)
in the past (not good)
asked the teacher
for help
give advice got a radio
now English improved
the best thing I have owned is ... It has a big influence on me.
先主干，后两头
记叙文常用句型：
开头：
1.There are always many unforgettable things in my life,
but one thing impressd me most.
2.The thing I will never forget is that...
结尾句：
1.I have learned a lot from this experience,I realized that
nothing is impossible if we put our hearts into it.
2.Thanks to the experience,I understood:no matter what
difficuties we meet,we should face them bravely and work
them wisely.
重积累
多背诵
What have we learnt
英语写作中常见的
三种问题：跑题，主体部分逻辑不清，首尾两段不能起到点睛作用并且给出了解决方法
正确的英语写作步骤
中的前三个：审题，列提纲，加首尾
第六步：查
是否有误
第五步：写
书写工整，卷面整洁
写作
步骤
第三步：加
加首尾，使结构完整。开头结尾句子要简洁。
第一步：审
体裁，要点
人称，时态
第四步：连
恰当运用关联词语，
层次清晰，衔接自然。
第二步：列
用简单的句子或短语列出文章要点。
我们的写作中暴露的各种问题其实是我们对英语写作步骤的不重视，不熟悉造成的。只要能够认真按照写作步骤进行，并且重视平时积累，我相信同学们的书面表达肯定能越写越好！
教师寄语
Homework
1.对照本节课的内容找出自己作文中的问题，并改正后提交。
2.用今天的学习写作方法，完成下面练习。
俗话说：“滴水之恩，当涌泉相报。”感恩是中华民族的传统美德，作为中学生的我们应该常怀感恩之心。请以“The person I thank most",并根据以下要点和要求用英语写一篇短文，介绍你最感激的人。
要点: 1.你感激谁；
2.你感激他（她）的原因；
3.你想对他（她）说什么。
Thanks for listening!