Module 1 Geniuses Unit 1 Writing 课件(共26张PPT)
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(共26张PPT)
How to revise a piece of writing
Oxford English 9A
Unit1 Wise men in history
Writing
Four steps
1. Focusing on structure and clarity
2. Analyzing the content of your writing
3. Editing spelling, grammar and punctuation mistakes
4. Reading your work out loud
1. Focusing on structure and clarity
A well-organized essay or article leads the reader through a clear line of thinking. Generally speaking, a short essay consists of three parts:
Paragraph 1
Paragraph 2
Paragraph 3
Each of the paragraphs should relate to some aspects of your topic
…
state the topic
state the topic again
Introduction :
Body :
Conclusion :
My Hobbies
I have a lot of hobbies and enjoy doing many things in my free time.
__________________. I often read in my free time. I read many kinds of books. And I like the stories that have good endings.
___________________. I like all kinds of music. I often listen to the music programs on radio. Although I can’t sing English songs well, I listen to them a lot, which help me learn English.
________________. I often play ping-pong after classes. When I am doing sports, I forget all my trouble.
In short, I enjoy my hobbies and they are very helpful to my health and my studies.
I am a lover of reading
I am also a music lover
I like sports as well
Example
Title:
to
to
general
specific
specific
general
state the topic: I have a lot of hobbies and enjoy doing many things in my free time.
Topic sentence: I am a lover of reading.
Topic sentence: I am also a music lover.
Topic sentence: I like sports as well.
restate the topic: In short, I enjoy my hobbies and they are very helpful to my health and my studies.
My Hobbies
Introduction
Para 2
Para 1
Conclusion
Body
Para3
2.Analyzing the content of your writing
Does the writing have a unified point of view Are all the points developed logically
Are the topic sentences and supporting details arranged properly
Is the writing coherent with good transitions
Analyse your logic by constructing a backwards outline.
Go through the outline to make sure all of your points are supporting the topic of the essay, and remove any information that doesn’t contribute to the main focus.
Topic
Analyse your logic by constructing a backwards outline.
(I have a lot of hobbies.)
(I am a lover of reading.)
(I am also a music lover.)
(I enjoy my hobbies.)
(I like sports as well.)
Topic
My Hobbies
My Hobbies
I have a lot of hobbies and enjoy doing many things in my free time.
____________________ . I often read in my free time. I read many kinds of books. And I like the stories that have good endings.
______________________. I like all kinds of music. I often listen to the music programs on radio. Although I can’t sing English songs well, I listen to them a lot, which help me learn English.
_________________ . I often play ping-pong and basketball after classes. When I am doing sports, I forget all my trouble.
In short, I enjoy my hobbies and they are very helpful to my health and my studies.
I am a lover of reading
I like sports as well
I am also a music lover
Body: topic sentence+ supporting detail(s)
Topic sentence1: I am a lover of reading.
Supporting details (sentences):
I often read in my free time.
I read many kinds of books.
And I like the stories that have good endings.
The most important comes first!
Para1
Body: topic sentence+ supporting detail(s)
Topic sentence1: I am a lover of reading.
Supporting details (sentences):
I often read in my free time.
I read many kinds of books.
And I like the stories that have good endings.
Topic sentence2: I am also a music lover.
Supporting details (sentences):
I like all kinds of music.
I often listen to the music programs on radio.
Although I can’t sing English songs well, I listen to them a lot, which help me learn English.
Topic sentence3: I like sports as well.
Supporting details (sentences):
I often play ping-pong and basketball after classes.
When I am doing sports, I forget all my trouble.
The most important comes first!
Para1
Para2
Para3
In my opinion, electricity is very precious in our life. We cannot see it, but it contained in batteries. The chemicals inside it produce it. If we do not use it properly, we might be killed. With electricity, people can watch TV and play PC games. We must be careful with it.
useful
dangerous
What do you think of the paragraph
amazing
dangerous
Topic sentence:
In my opinion, electricity is very precious in our life.
Supporting details:
It needs lots of time and money to build a power station.
Electricity comes to our flats from the power station far away.
Coal and water—— the materials for producing electricity are precious.
The first draft
In my opinion, electricity is very precious in our life. It needs lots of time/money to build a power station. Electricity comes to our flats from the power station far away. Coal and water—— the materials for producing electricity are precious.
In my opinion, electricity is very precious in our life. It comes into our flats through wires. The wires are connected to the power station far away. Building power stations needs a lot of money and time. We usually use coal and water to make electricity and they are very precious. We must not waste electricity. We should make good use of it.
The second draft
In my opinion, electricity is very precious in our life. It needs lots of time/money to build a power station. Electricity comes to our flats from the power station far away. Coal and water——the materials for producing electricity are precious.
The First draft
new information
given information
new information
new information
new information
given information
given information
given information
In my opinion, electricity is very precious in our life. It comes into our flats through wires. The wires are connected to the power station far away. Building power stations needs a lot of money and time. We usually use coal and water to make electricity and they are very precious. We must not waste electricity. We should make good use of it.
The third draft
The second draft
In my opinion, electricity is very precious in our life. It comes into our flats through wires. The wires are connected to the power station far away. As we all know, building power stations needs a lot of money and time as well. In addition, we usually use coal and water to make electricity and they are also very precious. In a word, we must not waste electricity. We should make good use of it.
transitions
The use of transitions
To improve the fluency流畅性 and coherence连贯性 of your writing, you may need to add transitions to show how one sentence relates to another and how one paragraph leads to the next.
e.g.
furthermore, moreover, in addition …
firstly, secondly, thirdly…
Many students have difficulty taking a test. They get poor grades on their quizzes. They must work harder in class. They should spend more time reviewing and doing homework. They’d better ask teachers for help if they have any questions.
Many students have difficulty taking a test. As a result, they get poor grades on their quizzes. They must, therefore, work harder in class. In addition, they should spend more time reviewing and doing homework. Finally, they’d better ask teachers for help if they have any questions.
The use of transitions
Once you have finished writing, it is essential that you re-read your paragraph two or three times to check it for spelling, grammar and punctuation mistakes.
3. Editing spelling, grammar and punctuation mistakes
Find and underline the mistakes in the following story. Discuss the mistakes and, next to each line, write what kind of mistake it is. Use the abbreviations below. (P12)
gr=grammar mistake
sp=spelling mistake
p=punctuation mistake
Julius Caesar killed by freind
Julius Caesar was warn that someone wanted to kill him and he should not speak on public He was standing on the steps of the Senate when he attacked. He said, “I must speak to my poeple.” As he died, he see his oldest friend Brutus. He was one of the killers, “You too, Brutus ” he asked, and die.
sp
gr
gr/p
gr
sp/gr
p
gr
Julius Caesar killed by friend
Julius Caesar was warned that someone wanted to kill him and he should not speak in public. He was standing on the steps of the Senate when he was attacked. He said, “I must speak to my people. ”As he died, he saw his oldest friend Brutus. He was one of the killers. “You too, Brutus ” he asked, and died.
sp
gr
gr/p
gr
sp/gr
p
gr
Other common punctuation mistakes
《Harry Potter》is my favorite series of fantasy novels.
Harry Potter is my favorite series of fantasy novels. (italics)
I like ice-cream、chocolate、gingerbread and milkshake.
I like ice-cream, chocolate, gingerbread and milkshake.
My mom prepared the fried chicken, pizza, fruit juice…
My mom prepared the fried chicken, pizza, fruit juice……
A short guide to punctuation （P14）
Common English punctuation marks :
period .
question mark
exclamation mark !
comma ,
quotation marks “ ”
apostrophes ’
hyphens –
colon :
You may catch far more mistakes by reading your work out loud!
4. Reading your work out loud
Self-check List Yes No
Does the writing have a clear structure
Does the writing have a unified point of view
Are all the points developed logically
Are the topic sentences and supporting details arranged properly
Is the writing coherent with good transitions
Are there any spelling, grammar and punctuation mistakes
Do you read your work out loud
Summary
Homework
Please evaluate a piece of your writing according to the self-check list and then revise your writing.
Thank you for Listening!
How to revise a piece of writing
Oxford English 9A
Unit1 Wise men in history
Writing
Four steps
1. Focusing on structure and clarity
2. Analyzing the content of your writing
3. Editing spelling, grammar and punctuation mistakes
4. Reading your work out loud
1. Focusing on structure and clarity
A well-organized essay or article leads the reader through a clear line of thinking. Generally speaking, a short essay consists of three parts:
Paragraph 1
Paragraph 2
Paragraph 3
Each of the paragraphs should relate to some aspects of your topic
…
state the topic
state the topic again
Introduction :
Body :
Conclusion :
My Hobbies
I have a lot of hobbies and enjoy doing many things in my free time.
__________________. I often read in my free time. I read many kinds of books. And I like the stories that have good endings.
___________________. I like all kinds of music. I often listen to the music programs on radio. Although I can’t sing English songs well, I listen to them a lot, which help me learn English.
________________. I often play ping-pong after classes. When I am doing sports, I forget all my trouble.
In short, I enjoy my hobbies and they are very helpful to my health and my studies.
I am a lover of reading
I am also a music lover
I like sports as well
Example
Title:
to
to
general
specific
specific
general
state the topic: I have a lot of hobbies and enjoy doing many things in my free time.
Topic sentence: I am a lover of reading.
Topic sentence: I am also a music lover.
Topic sentence: I like sports as well.
restate the topic: In short, I enjoy my hobbies and they are very helpful to my health and my studies.
My Hobbies
Introduction
Para 2
Para 1
Conclusion
Body
Para3
2.Analyzing the content of your writing
Does the writing have a unified point of view Are all the points developed logically
Are the topic sentences and supporting details arranged properly
Is the writing coherent with good transitions
Analyse your logic by constructing a backwards outline.
Go through the outline to make sure all of your points are supporting the topic of the essay, and remove any information that doesn’t contribute to the main focus.
Topic
Analyse your logic by constructing a backwards outline.
(I have a lot of hobbies.)
(I am a lover of reading.)
(I am also a music lover.)
(I enjoy my hobbies.)
(I like sports as well.)
Topic
My Hobbies
My Hobbies
I have a lot of hobbies and enjoy doing many things in my free time.
____________________ . I often read in my free time. I read many kinds of books. And I like the stories that have good endings.
______________________. I like all kinds of music. I often listen to the music programs on radio. Although I can’t sing English songs well, I listen to them a lot, which help me learn English.
_________________ . I often play ping-pong and basketball after classes. When I am doing sports, I forget all my trouble.
In short, I enjoy my hobbies and they are very helpful to my health and my studies.
I am a lover of reading
I like sports as well
I am also a music lover
Body: topic sentence+ supporting detail(s)
Topic sentence1: I am a lover of reading.
Supporting details (sentences):
I often read in my free time.
I read many kinds of books.
And I like the stories that have good endings.
The most important comes first!
Para1
Body: topic sentence+ supporting detail(s)
Topic sentence1: I am a lover of reading.
Supporting details (sentences):
I often read in my free time.
I read many kinds of books.
And I like the stories that have good endings.
Topic sentence2: I am also a music lover.
Supporting details (sentences):
I like all kinds of music.
I often listen to the music programs on radio.
Although I can’t sing English songs well, I listen to them a lot, which help me learn English.
Topic sentence3: I like sports as well.
Supporting details (sentences):
I often play ping-pong and basketball after classes.
When I am doing sports, I forget all my trouble.
The most important comes first!
Para1
Para2
Para3
In my opinion, electricity is very precious in our life. We cannot see it, but it contained in batteries. The chemicals inside it produce it. If we do not use it properly, we might be killed. With electricity, people can watch TV and play PC games. We must be careful with it.
useful
dangerous
What do you think of the paragraph
amazing
dangerous
Topic sentence:
In my opinion, electricity is very precious in our life.
Supporting details:
It needs lots of time and money to build a power station.
Electricity comes to our flats from the power station far away.
Coal and water—— the materials for producing electricity are precious.
The first draft
In my opinion, electricity is very precious in our life. It needs lots of time/money to build a power station. Electricity comes to our flats from the power station far away. Coal and water—— the materials for producing electricity are precious.
In my opinion, electricity is very precious in our life. It comes into our flats through wires. The wires are connected to the power station far away. Building power stations needs a lot of money and time. We usually use coal and water to make electricity and they are very precious. We must not waste electricity. We should make good use of it.
The second draft
In my opinion, electricity is very precious in our life. It needs lots of time/money to build a power station. Electricity comes to our flats from the power station far away. Coal and water——the materials for producing electricity are precious.
The First draft
new information
given information
new information
new information
new information
given information
given information
given information
In my opinion, electricity is very precious in our life. It comes into our flats through wires. The wires are connected to the power station far away. Building power stations needs a lot of money and time. We usually use coal and water to make electricity and they are very precious. We must not waste electricity. We should make good use of it.
The third draft
The second draft
In my opinion, electricity is very precious in our life. It comes into our flats through wires. The wires are connected to the power station far away. As we all know, building power stations needs a lot of money and time as well. In addition, we usually use coal and water to make electricity and they are also very precious. In a word, we must not waste electricity. We should make good use of it.
transitions
The use of transitions
To improve the fluency流畅性 and coherence连贯性 of your writing, you may need to add transitions to show how one sentence relates to another and how one paragraph leads to the next.
e.g.
furthermore, moreover, in addition …
firstly, secondly, thirdly…
Many students have difficulty taking a test. They get poor grades on their quizzes. They must work harder in class. They should spend more time reviewing and doing homework. They’d better ask teachers for help if they have any questions.
Many students have difficulty taking a test. As a result, they get poor grades on their quizzes. They must, therefore, work harder in class. In addition, they should spend more time reviewing and doing homework. Finally, they’d better ask teachers for help if they have any questions.
The use of transitions
Once you have finished writing, it is essential that you re-read your paragraph two or three times to check it for spelling, grammar and punctuation mistakes.
3. Editing spelling, grammar and punctuation mistakes
Find and underline the mistakes in the following story. Discuss the mistakes and, next to each line, write what kind of mistake it is. Use the abbreviations below. (P12)
gr=grammar mistake
sp=spelling mistake
p=punctuation mistake
Julius Caesar killed by freind
Julius Caesar was warn that someone wanted to kill him and he should not speak on public He was standing on the steps of the Senate when he attacked. He said, “I must speak to my poeple.” As he died, he see his oldest friend Brutus. He was one of the killers, “You too, Brutus ” he asked, and die.
sp
gr
gr/p
gr
sp/gr
p
gr
Julius Caesar killed by friend
Julius Caesar was warned that someone wanted to kill him and he should not speak in public. He was standing on the steps of the Senate when he was attacked. He said, “I must speak to my people. ”As he died, he saw his oldest friend Brutus. He was one of the killers. “You too, Brutus ” he asked, and died.
sp
gr
gr/p
gr
sp/gr
p
gr
Other common punctuation mistakes
《Harry Potter》is my favorite series of fantasy novels.
Harry Potter is my favorite series of fantasy novels. (italics)
I like ice-cream、chocolate、gingerbread and milkshake.
I like ice-cream, chocolate, gingerbread and milkshake.
My mom prepared the fried chicken, pizza, fruit juice…
My mom prepared the fried chicken, pizza, fruit juice……
A short guide to punctuation （P14）
Common English punctuation marks :
period .
question mark
exclamation mark !
comma ,
quotation marks “ ”
apostrophes ’
hyphens –
colon :
You may catch far more mistakes by reading your work out loud!
4. Reading your work out loud
Self-check List Yes No
Does the writing have a clear structure
Does the writing have a unified point of view
Are all the points developed logically
Are the topic sentences and supporting details arranged properly
Is the writing coherent with good transitions
Are there any spelling, grammar and punctuation mistakes
Do you read your work out loud
Summary
Homework
Please evaluate a piece of your writing according to the self-check list and then revise your writing.
Thank you for Listening!