重庆中考作文预测指导(共26张PPT)

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How I’ve changed!
中考作文指导
NK English Magazine
书面表达
时光荏苒，初中三年转瞬即逝，跟三年前的自己相比较，你会有很多变化。你的改变或许是因为一个人、一本书、一堂课、一件事 ……为了记录同学们三年来的成长变化过程，南开英语杂志社正在开展以“How I’ve changed!”为主题的征文活动。请你写一篇征文，讲述生活中亲历的一次改变。
参考信息：
1.描述你三年来最大的一次改变；
2.描述这次改变是如何发生的；
3.……
英语书面表达评分参考意见（理解版）
1．本题总分为20分，按各档次打分。
2．评分时，先根据文章的逻辑和内容初步确定所属档次，再根据语言准确打分。
第五档（优秀） （19—20分） 高水平完成了试题规定的任务 逻辑严密、条理清晰、结构完整、过渡自然
内容充实、中心突出、符合题意、思想健康
语言流畅、词汇丰富、感情真挚、富有创意
第四档（良好）（16—18分） 较好完成了试题规定的任务 逻辑清晰、条理分明、结构完整、过渡自然
内容详实，中心明确、符合题意、思想健康
语言较流畅、词汇较丰富、感情真实
第三档（中等） （13—15分） 基本完成了试题规定的任务 有一定逻辑性、结构明确
内容较为充实，符合题意、思想健康
较合理地使用词汇、能比较清楚表达意思
第二档（较差） （8—12分） 未恰当完成试题规定的任务 文章结构能够基本符合试题写作要求
词汇和语言结构不能完全满足写作任务的要求、思想健康
语言不够连贯，影响对写作内容的理解
第一档（差） （0—7分） 未完成试题规定的任务 结构混乱
内容严重缺失、思想健康
词汇和语言不能满足写作任务的要求，语言错漏太多，无法传达有效信息。
（与规定内容无关的抄袭或思想不健康，均为0分。）
第一档（差）
（0—7分）
第二档（较差）
（8—12分）
第三档（中等）
（13—15分）
第四档（良好）（16—18分）
第五档（优秀）
（19—20分）
Which level do you want to reach
有一定逻辑性、结构明确
内容较为充实，符合题意、思想健康
较合理地使用词汇、能比较清楚表达意思
逻辑清晰、条理分明、结构完整、过渡自然
内容详实，中心明确、符合题意、思想健康
语言较流畅、词汇较丰富、感情真实
逻辑严密、条理清晰、结构完整、过渡自然
内容充实、中心突出、符合题意、思想健康
语言流畅、词汇丰富、感情真挚、富有创意
英语书面表达评分参考意见（理解版）
Brainstorm
What do they have in common
How to mark(评分)
第三档(中等): 13—15分 基本完成了试题规定的任务
有一定逻辑性、结构明确
内容较为充实，符合题意、思想健康
较合理地使用词汇、能比较清楚表达意思
第四档(良好):16—18分 较好完成了试题规定的任务
逻辑清晰、条理分明、结构完整、过渡自然
内容详实，中心明确、符合题意、思想健康
语言较流畅、词汇较丰富、感情真实
第五档(优秀):19—20分 高水平完成了试题规定的任务
逻辑严密、条理清晰、结构完整、过渡自然
内容充实、中心突出、符合题意、思想健康
语言流畅、词汇丰富、感情真挚、富有创意
内容 题意
内容 中心 题意
内容 中心 题意
逻辑
逻辑
逻辑
Logic (Content)
Language
Culture
英语书面表达评分参考意见（理解版）
思想
思想
思想
Logic (Content)
Language
Culture
How I’ve changed!
书面表达
时光荏苒，初中三年转瞬即逝，跟三年前的自己相比较，你会有很多变化。你的改变或许是因为一个人、一本书、一堂课、一件事 ……为了记录同学们三年来的成长与变化，南开英语杂志社正在开展以“How I’ve changed!”为主题的征文活动。请你写一篇征文，讲述生活中亲历的一次改变。
参考信息：
1.描述你三年来最大的一次改变；
2.描述这次改变是如何发生的；
3.……
审：
Brainstorm
What to write
Topic:
Purpose:
Tense(时态):
书面表达
时光荏苒，初中三年转瞬即逝，跟三年前的自己相比较，你会有很多变化。你的改变或许是因为一个人、一本书、一堂课、一件事 ……为了记录同学们三年来的变化与成长，南开英语杂志社正在开展以“How I’ve changed!”为主题的征文活动。请你写一篇征文，讲述生活中亲历的一次改变。
参考信息：
1.描述你三年来最大的一次改变；
2.描述这次改变是如何发生的；
3.……
What to write
Logic (Content)
Language
Culture
多变化
跟三年前的自己相比较，你会有很
变化与成
长
你三年来最大的一次改变
这次改变是如何发生的
past
now
change & growth
your biggest change
change & growth
changing process
How I’ve changed!
your biggest change
change & growth
past
changing process
now
一般过去时
一般过去时
一般现在时
现在完成时
一般将来时
Brainstorm
列：
a change
or changes
√
一次改变
What to write
Logic (Content)
Language
Culture
past
now
change & growth
your biggest change
changing process
Part 1
Part 2
Part 3
your biggest change
past
now
changing process
change & growth
□ Make a good comparison
(past & now).
□ Have a clear changing process.
Logic (Content)
Why to write
□Introduce your topic.
□ Make a conclusion.
策略: 精读题目，细谋详略
Points: ________
Logic (Content)
Language
Culture
What he wrote
How to mark
第三档(中等): 13—15分 基本完成了试题规定的任务
有一定逻辑性、结构明确
内容较为充实，符合题意、思想健康
较合理地使用词汇、能比较清楚表达意思
第四档(良好):16—18分 较好完成了试题规定的任务
逻辑清晰、条理分明、结构完整、过渡自然
内容详实，中心明确、符合题意、思想健康
语言较流畅、词汇较丰富、感情真实
第五档(优秀):19—20分 高水平完成了试题规定的任务
逻辑严密、条理清晰、结构完整、过渡自然
内容充实、中心突出、符合题意、思想健康
语言流畅、词汇丰富、感情真挚、富有创意
内容 题意
内容 中心 题意
内容 中心 题意
逻辑
逻辑
逻辑
思想
2022年重庆英语书面表达评分标准
Logic (Content)
Language
Culture
Logic (Content)
Culture
Language
思想
思想
较为充实 符合
清晰
详实
明确 符合
严密
充实
突出 符合
健康
健康
健康
How I’ve changed!
Time is always moving and as time moves, people change. I have changed a lot in my study since I got into my new school two years ago.
I was poor at English. I was afraid of speaking English in class. I was afraid of taking English exams. How upset I was! One day I told my parents I wanted to give up. My parents were worried about me and they asked Miss He for help. Miss He had a long talk with me. I knew she cared about me. I began to learn English harder. Now my English improves a lot.
I changed a lot. I really want to say thanks to Miss He.
--- a boy from Class 14
Points: ________
Logic (Content)
Language
Culture
What he wrote
Part 1
Part 2
Part 3
Logic (Content)
14
□ Have a clear changing
process.
□ Make a good comparison
(past & now).
□Introduce your topic.
□ Make a conclusion.
√
？
？
√
Better Logic (Content)
I was poor at English. I was afraid of speaking English in class. I was afraid of taking English exams. How upset I was! One day I told my parents I wanted to give up. My parents were worried about me and they asked Miss He for help. Miss He had a long talk with me. I knew she cared about me. I began to learn English harder. Now my English improves a lot.
Part 2
Past
Now
How to write
□ Make a good comparison (past & now).
Logic (Content)
Language
Culture
Better Logic (Content)
Past Now
be poor at English My English improves a lot.
be afraid of speaking English in class
be afraid of taking English exams
be brave enough to give a speech in English
regard tests as perfect chances to find problems and get solutions
make efforts to learn English better
□ Make a good comparison (past & now).
√
How to write
Logic (Content)
Language
Culture
Better Logic (Content)
I was poor at English. I was afraid of speaking English in class. I was afraid of taking English exam. How upset I was. One day I told my parents I wanted to give up. My parents were worried about me and they asked Miss He for help. Miss He had a long talk with me. I knew she cared about me. I didn’t want to let her down. Now my English improves a lot. I’m brave enough to give a speech in English. I also regard tests as perfect chances to improve myself. Most importantly, I will try my best to learn English better.
Part 2
How to write
□ Make a good comparison (past & now).
√
Logic (Content)
Language
Culture
Better Logic (Content)
□ Make a conclusion.
How I’ve changed!
Time is always moving and as time moves, people change. I have changed a lot in my study since I got into my new school two years ago.
I was poor at English. I was afraid of speaking English in class. I was afraid of taking English exams. How upset I was! One day I told my parents I wanted to give up. My parents were worried about me and they asked Miss He for help. Miss He had a long talk with me. I knew she cared about me. I began to learn English harder. Now my English improves a lot. I’m brave enough to give a speech in English. I also regard tests as perfect chances to improve myself. Most importantly, I will try my best to learn English better.
I changed a lot. I really want to say thanks to Miss He.
--- a boy from Class 14
Points: ________
How to write
15
□ Have a clear changing
process.
□ Make a good comparison
(past & now).
Part 1
Beginning
Part 2
Body
Part 3
Ending
√
？
？
□Introduce your topic.
√
√
Logic (Content)
Language
Culture
Better Logic (Content)
14
Part 2
□ Have a clear changing process.
Changing process
How to write
Logic (Content)
Language
Culture
Better Logic (Content)
I was poor at English. I was afraid of speaking English in class. I was afraid of taking English exam. How upset I was. One day I told my parents I wanted to give up. My parents were worried about me and they asked Miss He for help. Miss He had a long talk with me. I knew she cared about me. I didn’t want to let her down. Now my English improves a lot. I’m brave enough to give a speech in English. I also regard tests as perfect chances to improve myself. Most importantly, I will try my best to learn English better.
What might Miss He say
Tip 2：Add supporting details.
Past What might Miss He say
be afraid of taking English exam
be poor at English
be afraid of speaking English in class
She told me ___________________________
_____________________________________
She told me ___________________________
______________________________________
She told me ___________________________
______________________________________
English was not that hard and she believed I could learn it well.
it was common to make mistakes when speaking English.
there was no need to focus on the scores.
Talk
How to write
Logic (Content)
Language
Culture
Better Logic (Content)
… One day I told my parents I wanted to give up. Miss He had a long talk with me. She told me English was not that hard and she believed I could learn it well. She told me it was common to make mistakes when speaking English. She told me there was no need to focus on the scores. I knew she cared about me. I began to learn English harder. Now my English improves a lot …
Body
Tip：Add supporting details.
Changing process
□ Have a clear changing process.
√
How to write
Logic (Content)
Language
Culture
Better Logic (Content)
□ Make a conclusion.
How I’ve changed!
Time is always moving and as time moves, people change. I have changed a lot in my study since I got into my new school two years ago.
I was poor at English. I was afraid of speaking English in class. I was afraid of taking English exams. How upset I was! One day I told my parents I wanted to give up. Miss He had a long talk with me. She told me English was not that hard and she believed I could learn it well. She told me it was common to make mistakes when speaking English. She told me there was no need to focus on the scores. I knew she cared about me. I began to learn English harder. Now my English improves a lot. I’m brave enough to give a speech in English. I also regard tests as perfect chances to improve myself. Most importantly, I will try my best to learn English better.
I changed a lot. I really want to say thanks to Miss He.
--- a boy from Class 14
Points: ________
How to write
15
□ Have a clear changing
process.
□ Make a good comparison
(past & now).
Part 1
Beginning
Part 2
Body
Part 3
Ending
√
？
□Introduce your topic.
√
√
√
Logic (Content)
Language
Culture
Better Logic (Content)
16
How to write
Time is always moving and as time moves, people change. I have changed a lot in my study since I got into my new school two years ago.
I was poor at English. I was afraid of speaking English in class. I was afraid of taking English exam. How upset I was! One day I told my parents I wanted to give up. My parents were worried about me and they asked Miss He for help. Miss He had a long talk with me. She told me English was not that hard and she believed I could learn it well. She told me it’s common to make mistakes when speaking English. She told me there was no need to focus on the scores. I knew she cared about me. I began to learn English harder. Now my English improves a lot. I’m brave enough to give a speech in English. I also regard tests as perfect chances to improve myself. Most importantly, I will make efforts to learn English better.
I changed a lot. I really want to say thanks to Miss He.
Logic (Content)
Language
Culture
Better Language
Points: ________
16
Logic (Content)
I was afraid of speaking English in class. I was _______ of taking English exams.
I was afraid of speaking English ______ taking English exams.
I was poor at English, afraid of speaking English and taking English exams.
_____ I was poor at English, it was a big challenge for me to _____________ and English exams always ________ me.
scared
I was poor at English. I was afraid of speaking English in class. I was afraid of taking English exams.
How to write
Logic (Content)
Language
Culture
Better Language
and
Since
speak in class
worried
Tip：Avoid many short sentences.
Tip：Avoid repeating words.
Better language in the rest part.
Time is always moving and as time moves, people change. I have changed a lot in my study since I got into my new school two years ago.
Since I was poor at English, it was a big challenge for me to speak in class and English exams always worried me. How upset I was! One day I told my parents I wanted to give up. My parents were worried about me and they asked Miss He for help. Miss He had a long talk with me. She told me English was not that hard and she believed I could learn it well. She encouraged me it was common to make mistakes when speaking English. She advised me there was no need to focus on the scores. I knew she cared about me. I began to learn English harder. Now my English improves a lot. I’m brave enough to give a speech in English. I also regard tests as perfect chances to improve myself. Most importantly, I will try my best to learn English better.
Thanks to Miss He, I changed a lot.
Points: ________
16
Logic (Content)
Language
Culture
Logic (Content)
Language
Tip：Add your opinions.
17
Better Culture
Opinions
_________ from the change
Gain(收获)
You will never know what will happen unless you try.
_________ of the change
Meaning
Hope my experience can inspire you!
…
Thanks to Miss He, I changed a lot.
How to write
Thanks to Miss He, I changed a lot.
Thanks to Miss He, I changed a lot. She helped me get out of the darkness. I am not afraid of changes anymore.
Thanks to Miss He, I changed a lot. She helped me get out of the darkness. After that, I am not afraid of changes anymore, because you will never know what will happen unless you try. Hope my experience can inspire you!
Logic (Content)
Language
Culture
Better Culture
Tip：Add your opinions.
Time is always moving and as time moves, people change. I have changed a lot in my study since I got into my new school two years ago.
Since I was poor at English, it was a big challenge for me to speak in class and English exams always worried me. How upset I was! One day I told my parents I wanted to give up. My parents were worried about me and they asked Miss He for help. Miss He had a long talk with me. She told me English was not that hard and she believed I could learn it well. She encouraged me it was common to make mistakes when speaking English. She advised me there was no need to focus on the scores. I knew she cared about me. I began to learn English harder. Now my English improves a lot. I’m brave enough to give a speech in English. I also regard tests as perfect chances to improve myself. Most importantly, I will try my best to learn English better.
Thanks to Miss He, I changed a lot. She helped me get out of the darkness. After that, I am not afraid of changes anymore, because you will never know what will happen unless you try. Hope my experience can inspire you!
Points: ________
17
Logic (Content)
Language
Culture
Logic (Content)
Language
Culture
18
Summary
第三档(中等): 13—15分 基本完成了试题规定的任务
有一定逻辑性、结构明确
内容较为充实，符合题意、思想健康
较合理地使用词汇、能比较清楚表达意思
第四档(良好):16—18分 较好完成了试题规定的任务
逻辑清晰、条理分明、结构完整、过渡自然
内容详实，中心明确、符合题意、思想健康
语言较流畅、词汇较丰富、感情真实
第五档(优秀):19—20分 高水平完成了试题规定的任务
逻辑严密、条理清晰、结构完整、过渡自然
内容充实、中心突出、符合题意、思想健康
语言流畅、词汇丰富、感情真挚、富有创意
内容较为充实 符合题意
内容详实 中心明确 符合题意
内容充实 中心突出 符合题意
逻辑
逻辑清晰
逻辑严密
思想健康
思想健康
思想健康
How to get higher scores
Points: ________
18
Logic (Content)
Language
Culture
Logic (Content)
Language
Culture
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