四川省眉山市彭山区2022-2023学年高一上学期半期考试英语作文讲评课件（18张PPT）

(共17张PPT)
高24届高一上期半期考试
作文讲评
书面表达的五步骤
一、看要求
二、审题
1，格式/体裁
2，时态
3，人称
4，要点
三、打草稿
四、改错，分段，加过渡词、过渡句
五、抄写
注意：
1，要点通常为4-5个。
2，一般情况，要点需要平均着墨。
3，每个要点要用1＋1模式，一般写2-3个句子。
好作文的标准（20分以上）
1，要点全；
2，错误没有或几乎没有；
3，流畅，即有过渡词，过渡句；
4，有一些高级的词汇，短语，句型或表达（能用高中的，不用初中的；短语比单词好，句型比短语好！）；
5，书写漂亮，卷面整洁。
一、看要求
假定你是某校学生李华。你的英国笔友Bob在英语学习上给了你很多帮助。他上周发来电子邮件，询问你现在的英语学习情况。请你用英语给他写一封邮件，内容包括：
1，感谢帮助；
2，英语学习的进步；
3，目前面临的问题。
注意：1，词数100左右；
2，可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
二、审题
1，格式/体裁
2，时态
3，人称
4，要点
回信
一现
第一人称
1，收到来信，表明写信目的
2．感谢帮助
3．英语学习的进步
4，目前面临的问题
5，恰当的结尾
三、打草稿
第一个要点：收到来信，表明写信目的
I'm glad to receive your letter.In it you asked me about my English study at present . Now I'm writing to tell you about it.
I'm glad to receive your letter, in which you asked me about my English study at present . Now I'm writing to tell you about it.
第二个要点：感谢帮助
I want to / would like to / feel like thanking / thank you for helping me with English.
With you helping me / With your help / , I have made great progress in English study.
It's with your help that I have made great progress in English study.
第三个要点：英语学习的进步
听力
语法
口语
考试第一名
词汇量
…
头脑风暴
选择的原则是：
能用英语正确的表达出！
最好写两个安排
My listening has improved so a lot that I understand what my foreign teacher says in class.
I have known more English grammars. As a result, there're few grammar mistakes in my exercises.
I can communicate with others in English fluently.
In the last English test, I got the second place / full marks.
I have such a wide vocabulary that it's easy for me to read English newspapers.
第四个要点：目前面临的问题
听力
语法
口语
书写
词汇量
…
头脑风暴
选择的原则是：
能用英语正确的表达出！
最好写两个安排
However, there're still some problems for me to solve / I'm faced with right now.(过渡句)
My English handwriting isn't wonderful enough to leave a good impression on teachers.
第五个要点：恰当的结尾
I wish you could give me more help / advice.
Would you like to give me more help / advice
I'm looking forward to your reply.
四、改错，分段，加过渡词、过渡句
最好三段！
五，抄写
范文说明：
红色：较高级表达
蓝色：过渡词，过渡句
紫色：回信的模板句型
Dear Bob,
I'm glad to receive your letter, in which you asked me about my English study at present . Now I'm writing to tell you about it.
I feel like thanking you for helping me with English. It's with your help that I've made great progress in English study.My listening has improved so a lot that I understand what my foreign teacher says in class easily.Besides,in the last English test, I got full marks. However, there're still some problems for me to solve .My English handwriting isn't wonderful enough to leave a good impression on teachers.What's worse, my vocabulary is too poor.
I wish you could give me more help .Looking forward to your reply.(117)
Yours
Li Hua