2023届高三英语一轮复习读后续写精讲学案

基于主题伏笔的读后续写精讲学案
一、读后续写 “三步走”
1. 阅读（_______mins）：原文阅读+信息梳理
读懂情节+体会语言+理清线索
2. 构思（_______mins）：潜心构思+情节预设+明确方向
关注“两线”---情节线&情感线
关注“四点”---四处衔接
3. 行文（________mins）：初稿勾勒+润色提升+工整誊写
Reading for thinking
读为写之先 (读出原故事的六要素, 抓住原故事的主题和重点)
1. 读______主要情节，确定故事________；
2. 读清段落________，________故事发展；
3. 读透人物________，________故事情节；
4. 读准____________，丰富故事_______。
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给的段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文; 画出伏笔句子并标出序号
I had a dream from primary school: to work in television. My parents owned a little grocery store, so we were definitely not fancy people. Thankfully, my dad had raised me to have a lot of confidence. He often said, “You can do anything you want to do.” My dad was particularly supportive. He was my steady rock—always there for me.
With his help and encouragement, I was admitted to the radio and television arts program at Ryerson in Toronto. I really loved the program and worked hard and I was named the most outstanding graduate. I felt like I was already living my dream. I began to think that maybe I could apply for an internship(实习资格) in CBC or CTV.
Luckily, Global Television had just started broadcasting in Canada that year. I thought to myself: I’m new and they’re new, so if I’m going to get to know one person at Global, it might as well be the president. I was scared, but I knew deep down inside that this was what I wanted. When I called my dad and told him my plan, he said, “Good, Faye. That’s exactly what you should do.”
With my heart just about pounding out of my body, I called up the president of Global Television. Suddenly Mr. Slaight was on the phone. “I’ve heard that your studio facilities are amazing. I could come at eleven o’clock on Monday or eleven o’clock on Sunday for a tour. What would suit you better ” I caught him totally off guard. He stuttered a bit, and then picked a day. When I hung up, I was scared but excited.
I arrived at the studio on the appointed day. When Mr. Slaight took me around, he looked at me and said, “What do you want ” He sounded furious but curious. “All I want is a chance to audition(试镜). I just want you to know my face. That's all I'm asking.”
I didn't know whether I’d ever hear from him again, but (two weeks later, his secretary called, “Mr. Slaight wants to know if you’d like to come and audition for a new school life show.” I immediately answered,“Sure!”
Paragraph 1:
When I arrived at the station, I went direct into the audition and began my short performance. ________________________________________________________________
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Paragraph 2:
Finally came the day of my first public appearance on live TV with my parents at home watching. _____________________________________________________________________
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我的反思1: 如何确定两段框架
小组内探讨具体情节构思, 并完成下表:
我们的情节构思 我们的构思依据
Para. 1
Para. 2
我的反思2 : 如何在框架下丰富两段内容 如何确定文章主题
Practice what you learnt
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给的段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Lungs nearly bursting, I struggled to lift my head out of the water. Inch by inch, my tired body reached for the end of the pool.
The extent of my swimming career was purely recreational(娱乐的;消遣的), while the competitive swimmer nearby thought nothing of the seemingly simple task of a 500-meter swim test. Pushing myself to finish what I had started, I could only think: why not take the easy way(走捷径) out
Earlier that week, I had turned in my first job application at a local pool. Overqualified(资历过高的), I was hired on the spot. However, the tasks were boring: helping confused visitors and measuring the height of children before they went down the slide, those sorts of things. I was capable of more.
So a swim test was required, establishing the mere fact that I was not completely helpless in a pool. Midway through, the manager administrating the test remarked, “ This looks really easy for you. Why aren’t you applying to become a guard ”
“The thought hadn’t crossed my mind.”
“Well, lifeguarding demands more responsibility, strength and respect. Thus the position pays $2 more per hour. Your swimming skills are strong enough. All you need to do is complete a certification class.”
Inside I was unsure of myself, but his words inspired me-- You never know what you are capable of until you force yourself to do it.
Soon I passed the swim test. All left was to practice and learn first aid, CPR and procedures for different land and water-based emergencies.
Work started soon. A well-intentioned (好意的;出于善意的) yet anxious feeling in me soon passed. Days, weeks, and months went by without incident; emergencies were rare. The skills and training I had so carefully studied and acquired seemed unnecessary.
Today appeared to be another uneventful day. However shortly after the other guards signaled to the children to exit the pool, I noticed one boy was still in the middle while the others had climbed up.
注意：
续写词数应为150词左右。
请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
“Something must have gone wrong with him,” I thought to myself.
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Having the boy on the floor, I put my ear to his mouth and my fingers at his neck.
结合本节课所学知识和技能, 与同桌进行作文互评,并给出修改意见(下列情况可帮助你评判) 是 否
是否文章理解不到位，续写情节与原文脱离。
是否情节没有得以展开，体现不出丰富新颖。
是否所创设的情境违背真实生活，缺乏合理性。
是否融洽度不高，衔接不合理。
是否大量对话无意义，段落间分布不均衡。
是否主题升华牵强或跑偏。
互评得分: _______________ 自评得分: _______________
互评点评(亮点+修改意见)
我的反思4 : 这节课我的收获是什么 我还有什么疑问
Extended writing (assignment)
阅读下面的材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Mother's Gift
I grew up in a small town where the primary school was a ten minute walk from my house. When the noon bell rang, I would race breathlessly home. My mother would be standing at the top of the stairs, smiling down at me.
One lunch time when I was in the third grade will stay with me always. I had been picked to be the princess in the school play, and for weeks my mother had rehearsed my lines so hard with me. But no matter how easily I acted at home, as soon as I stepped on stage, every word disappeared from my head. Finally, my teacher took me aside. She explained that she had written a narrator's (旁白的) part to the play, and asked me to change roles. Her words, kindly expressed, still hurt me, especially when I saw my part go to another girl.
I didn't tell my mother what had happened when I went home for lunch that day. But she sensed my pain. Instead of suggesting we practice my lines, she asked if I wanted to walk in the yard.
It was a lovely spring day and the rose vine (藤蔓) was turning green. Under the huge trees, we could see yellow dandelions (蒲公英) in the grass in bunches, as if a painter had touched our landscape with gold. I watched my mother casually bend down by one dandelion. “I think I'm going to dig up all these weeds，” she said, “pulling them up by their roots. From now on, we'll have only roses in this garden.”
“But I like dandelions，” I protested. “All flowers are beautiful—even dandelions.”
My mother looked at me seriously. “Yes, every flower gives pleasure in its own way, doesn't it？” she asked thoughtfully. I nodded, pleased that I had won her over. “And that is true of people, too.” she added. “Not everyone can be a princess, but there is no shame in that.” Relieved that she had guessed my pain, I started to cry as I told her what had happened. She listened and smiled.
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右; 2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1 “But you will be a good narrator，” she said，___________________________
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Paragraph 2 After the play, I took home the dandelion. _______________________________
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读后续写评分标准
1、评分原则
① 本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。
② 评分时，先根据所续写短文的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量、确定或调整档次，最后给分。
③ 词数少于130的，从总分中减去2分。
④ 评分时，应注意要从以下四个方面考虑。
◆与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；
◆内容的丰富性和对所标出关键词语的应用情况；
◆应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；
◆上下文的连贯性。
⑤ 拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个重要方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。
⑥ 如书写较差以致影响交际，可将分数降低一个档次。
2、各档次的给分范围和要求
档 次 描 述
第五档 (21-25分) 与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。内容丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。 所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义的表达。 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。
第四档 (16-20分) 与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接较为合理。 内容比较丰富，应用了4个以上短文中标出的关键词语。 所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但不影响意义的表达。 比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。
第三档 (11—15分) 与所给短文关系较为密切，与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接。 写出了若干有关内容，应用了4个以上短文中标出的关键词语。 应用的语法结构和词汇能够满足任务的要求，虽有一些错误，但不影响意义表达。 应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文内容连贯。
第二档 (6—10分) 与所给短文有一定的关系，与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接。 写出了一些有关内容，应用了3个以上短文中标出的关键词语。 语法结构单调，词汇项目有限，有些语法结构和词汇方面的错误，影响了意义的表达。 较少使用语句间的连接成分，全文内容缺少连贯性。
第一档 (1-5分) 与所提供短文和开头语的衔接较差。 产出内容太少，很少使用短文中标出的关键词语。 语法结构单调，词汇项目很有限，有较多语法结构和词汇方面的错误，严重影响了意义的表达。 缺乏语句间的连接成分，全文内容不连贯。
0 白卷、内容太少无法评判或所写内容与所提供内容无关。
应用文评分标准
1、评分原则
① 本题总分为15分，按5个档次给分。
② 评分时，先根据文章的内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的丰富性和准确性及上下文的连贯性，初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量、确定或调整档次，最后给分。
③ 词数少于60和多于100的，从总分中减去2分。
④ 拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。
⑤ 如书写较差，以致影响交际，可将分数降低一个档次。
2、各档次的给分范围和要求
档 次 描 述
第五档 (13-15分) 完全完成了试题规定的任务。 覆盖所有内容要点。 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。 语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。 完全达到了预期的写作目的。
第四档 (10-12分) 完全完成了试题规定的任务。 虽漏掉1、2个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容。 应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。 语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致。 应用简单的语句间连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。 达到了预期的写作目的。
第三档 (7-9分) 基本完成了试题规定的任务。 虽漏掉一些内容，但能覆盖所有主要内容。 应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。 有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，但不能响理解。 应用简单的语句间连接成分，使全文内容连贯。 整体而言，基本达到了预期的写作目的。
第二档 (4-6分) 未适当完成试题规定的任务。 漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要内容， 写了一些无关内容。 语法结构单调、词汇项目有限。 有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响了对写作内容的理解。 较少使用语句间的连接成分，内容缺少连贯性。 信息未能清楚地传达给读者。
第一档 (1-3分) 未完成试题规定的任务。 明显遗漏主要内容，写了一些无关内容，原因可能是未理解试题要求。 语法结构单调、词汇项目有限。 较多语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响对写作内容的理解。 缺乏语句间的连接成分，内容不连贯。 信息未能传达给读者。