Unit1 Life choices 写作技巧点拨
私人电子邮件
文体感知
本单元的写作任务是写一封私人电子邮件。
英文电子邮件的基本要素是主题、称谓、正文、结尾用语及署名。
1.电子邮件最重要的部分是主题,主题应当做到言简意赅,并突出邮件的重要性。
2.私人电子邮件不用那么正式,可以用“Hello/Hi”问候对方。
3.在书写正文时,把最重要的事情写在正文最前面。邮件段落最好控制在两三段之内。
如果一封电子邮件涉及多个信息点,可以采用分条目的方法,如符号、小标题、编号来使得邮
件想要表达的内容层次清晰。
4.结尾用语在正文之后添加。注意一般结尾用语中只有第一个单词首字母大写而剩余单
词都小写,此处与称呼不同。常用结尾用语:
Regards、Best wishes、Best regards、With best wishes、With best regards...
5.在正文最后需要署名,可以写全名,也可以只写名字。
基本框架
1.开头——写信目的
2.主体——具体问题 1
具体问题 2
3.结尾——表达自己的想法
增分佳句
1.开头语
(1)Hi, there! 你好! (常用于较亲近的人)
(2)How are you doing? 近况如何?
(3)How are things going on? 事情进展如何?
(4)How are you getting on with your health/work/study 近来身体/工作/学习如何?
(5)As I have not heard from you for long, I feel anxious.很久没有你的音讯了,我甚是担忧。
(6)I must apologize for not having written to you earlier. 迟迟没有给你写信,我深表歉意。
(7)Please pardon my not replying to your letter earlier.没能及时回信,还请见谅。
(8)I feel very sorry for not being able to reply to your letter. 没能及时回信我深感抱歉。
2.引入话题
(1)I'm writing to invite you to the art exhibition/evening party on Sunday.
我写此信是要邀请你参加周日的艺术展/晚会。
(2)I'm writing to inform you that the basketball match is delayed until next week.
我写此信是要告诉你,篮球赛被推迟到下周了。
(3)I'm writing to tell you something about my recent life/study/work/health.
我写信想要告诉你我最近的生活/学习/工作/身体状况。
(4)I'm writing to introduce my friend David to you.
我写信意在向你介绍我的朋友戴维。
3.描述重要信息
(1)The exhibition starts at 7:00 until 18:00 on Sunday.
展览从星期日 7 点开始,一直持续到 18 点。
(2)Here is my advice on how to...
这是我对如何……的建议。
(3)Here, I'd like to offer you some advice/tips on how to...
在这里, 我想就如何……给你一些建议。
4.结束语
(1)I'm looking forward to hearing from you soon.
我盼望早日收到你的来信。
(2)Please give my regards to your family.
请代我向你的家人问好。
(3)Hope you will have a pleasant trip. 祝你旅途愉快。
(4)Wish you a pleasant journey. 祝你旅途愉快。
(5)I wish you a Happy New Year. 祝你新年快乐。
(6)Best wishes!祝好!
满分作文特训
写作要求
假定你是李华,刚上高中两个多星期,请你按照以下内容写一封 80
词左右的电子邮件给你的英国笔友汤姆(Tom),简单介绍你的学校、老师和自己的情况:
1.我的新学校是一所历史悠久的名校,有 50 个班,2 500 多名学生;
2.老师的教学方法与初中截然不同,上课方式很有趣;
3.课程比初中更有挑战性,但有信心学好;
4.与同学相处融洽,积极参加各种课外活动。
审题谋篇
第一步:审题构思很关键
第二步:核心词汇想周全
1.three times the size of 面积是……的三倍
2.have a long history 历史悠久
3.be different from 不同于……
4.more challenging 更有挑战性
5.in addition 此外;而且
6.get on/along well with 和……相处得好
7.take an active part in 积极参加
8.after-school activities 课外活动
9.hear from sb. 收到某人的信
第三步:由词扩句雏形现
1.我的新学校是一所历史悠久的名校。
My new school .
2.它的面积是我们初中学校的三倍。
It is our junior secondary school.
3.我们学校有 50 个班,2 500 多名学生。
There are in my school.
4.我们老师的教学方法很有趣,与以前的截然不同。
Our teachers' teaching methods those of our previous
teachers.
5.我们学习的课程更有挑战性。
The subjects we are learning .
6.我相信能把这些课程学好。
I I can learn them well.
7.我与同学相处融洽,积极参加各种课外活动。
I'm my classmates and I all kinds of
after-school activities.
第四步:句式升级造亮点
1.用非限制性定语从句连接第三步中的句 1 和句 2
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2.用让步状语从句连接第三步中的句 5 和句 6
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第五步:过渡衔接连成篇
参考答案:
1.我的新学校是一所历史悠久的名校。
My new school is famous and has a long history.
2.它的面积是我们初中学校的三倍。
It is three times the size of our junior secondary school.
3.我们学校有 50 个班,2 500 多名学生。
There are 50 classes and over 2,500 students in my school.
4.我们老师的教学方法很有趣,与以前的截然不同。
Our teachers' teaching methods are interesting and different from those of our previous teachers.
5.我们学习的课程更有挑战性。
The subjects we are learning are more challenging.
6.我相信能把这些课程学好。
I am confident that I can learn them well.
7.我与同学相处融洽,积极参加各种课外活动。
I'm getting along very well with my classmates and I take an active part in all kinds of
after-school activities.
第四步:句式升级造亮点
1.用非限制性定语从句连接第三步中的句 1 和句 2
My new school, which is three times the size of our junior secondary school, is famous and
has a long history.
2.用让步状语从句连接第三步中的句 5 和句 6
Although the subjects we are learning are more challenging, I'm confident that I can learn them
well.
第五步:过渡衔接连成篇
One possible version:
Dear Tom,
I'm writing to tell you something about my new school.
My new school,which is three times the size of our junior secondary school, is famous and has
a long history. Besides, there are 50 classes and over 2,500 students in my school. Our teachers'
teaching methods are interesting and different from those of our previous teachers. Although the
subjects we are learning are more challenging, I'm confident that I can learn them well. In addition,
I'm getting along very well with my classmates and I take an active part in all kinds of
after-school activities.
I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours truly,
Li Hua