高考英语复习--作文专题-读后续写 如何进行构思 野外求生话题写作 课件

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后
续
写
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如何构思续写的内容
Step 1
Read for
elements
Step 2
Read for
plots
Step 3
Gather
ideas
Step 4
Make
predictions
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Steve was the most amazing person in all of Minneapolis, and he was my cousin. By the age of 19, Steve was a star baseball player at the University of Minnesota. I wanted to be exactly like him. So when Steve asked me to go with him on a spring fishing trip in northern Minnesota, I was excited!
After planning the trip, we gathered clothes and supplies, and began our great adventure. We reached the Superior National Forest in northern Minnesota by early evening. On our way to the campsite, Steve pointed to a small house faraway in one of the mountains, saying that it was the ranger station (护林站) where the forester worked.
Finally, after a long walk, we reached the campsite and set up the camp as the sun was setting. Steve knew all the tricks of an experienced wilderness camper. After we gathered enough wood from the forest, he started the campfire using only stone and steel — no matches. For supper we feasted on freeze-dried beef, wild rice and pea soup. I ate greedily after all that work.
Tired enough, we climbed into our sleeping bags early and talked about our plans for fishing the next day. We were still talking quietly when a sudden north wind picked up; the temperature dropped and it began to snow. Steve found a way to increase the temperature inside the tent. He dragged a log from the forest to the opposite side of the campfire. Then he wrapped aluminum foil (铝箔) around the log. The heat from the fire reflected off the foil and into the tent. Soon images of lake fish were filling my dreams.
The snow had stopped, but sometime later a powerful wind must have kicked up the flames of our dying fire. I was suddenly awakened by Steve. Our tent was on fire. Frightened, I ran out of the tent immediately. The tent collapsed (倒塌) with Steve inside. Without any thought of endangering myself, I reached into the burning tent and pulled him to the icy lake. Fortunately, we were not seriously hurt.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右；
2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
Paragraph 1:
Later, as we stood by the burning tent to keep warm, we considered our difficult situation. _______________________________________
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Paragraph 2:
Suddenly, we heard a noise in the forest. _____________________
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What
Where
When
Who
I, Steve, forester
In spring
In a forest
An adventurous fishing trip
Elements
Step 1 Read for elements
Beginning
(character and setting)
Process
Climax
(the main problem or conflict)
Ending
(a time to solve the problem
/ how things end up)

Story Mountain
Step 2 Read for plots
Beginning
Process
Climax
Ending
1
2
3

What did Steve ask me to do
Steve asked me to go on a spring fishing trip.
What did we do in the forest
What happened to our tent and why
What happened next
We reached the campsite and set up the camp. We started the campfire and enjoyed a feast.

Our tent was on fire and we escaped to
the icy lake.
Because it was getting colder and Steve increase the temperature inside the tent by adding a log wrapped in foil to the fire.
Setting (time / place) Time: spring
Place: Superior National Forest in northern Minnesota
Characters I, Steve, forester
Plot Steve asked me to go on a spring fishing trip.
Problem Our tent was on fire.
Ending

Step 3 Gather ideas
信息整理：
体裁：记叙文
时态：一般过去时
原文核心信息解读：“我”和表哥去森林里露营，夜里下起了雪，天很冷，表哥生起了篝火，“我们”在温暖中入睡了。睡着后，帐篷起火了，“我们”匆忙逃了出来，但帐篷烧毁了……
情感发展线
时间线
故事情节线
By early evening
When the sun was setting
Dinner time
sleeping time
When it began to snow
When the snow stopped
Planning and preparing
Reaching the forest
Putting up the tent
Making campfire
Preparing dinner
Enjoying a feast
Going to sleep
Feeling cold and making a bigger fire
The tent was on fire

Excited
Happy& content
Tired but expectant
Frightened & panicked
读后续写试题选择的文本通常 是叙事结构的语篇，以事情发生的时间为序。关于叙事结构的分析模式包括点题，指向，进展，结局，回应，评议等六个部分。一个完整的叙述的开始点事指向，接着是进展，然后是结局，最后是回应，评议渗透在进展和结局中。当然，并不是所有的叙事结构都包括完整的六个部分。一篇好的读后续写，其写作思路的编排都得遵循文本发展的时间线，故事情节线和情感发展线。我们要先确定文章的故事情节线。然后再考虑情感的铺垫。故事情节一般两个左右的场景，任务和时间的变化。以防你可以避免情节浮于表面和混乱， 同事可以腾出空间来进行深入的细节表达。
可用于续写的已知信息：
划线词 Character Steve, forester
Setting clothes, supplies, campsite, forest, fire
Action found, endangering
Mood frightened
段首句 Para. 1: Later, as we stood by the burning tent to keep warm, we considered our difficult situation. (续写部分可详细描写具体困境，比如衣服等物品烧毁，在森林中远离人烟，无法求助等。) Para. 2: Suddenly, we heard a noise in the forest. (续写部分可写声音的来源，发出声音者可以是提供救助的人。)
Step 4 Make predictions
difficult situation
position
surrounding
situation
feeling
noise

What caused the attention

the cry
写作思路：
“我们”在荒芜人烟的森林深处，孤立无援，随身物品也都随着帐篷一起烧毁了，正当不知道该怎么办的时候，林中传来了声响，发现是护林人开着车过来了。原来护林人看到了火光，过来一探究竟，结果“我们”得救了。
构思的理由：
文章中出现过forester (护林人)，这是极其有用的信息，另外根据常识可知，护林人最重要的工作之一就是侦查火情，所以森林中有火情的话，护林人一定会一探究竟。
One possible version:
Paragraph 1:
Later, as we stood by the burning tent to keep warm, we considered our difficult situation. Our campsite was in the deep of the forest, really far away from the highway. We were in the middle of nowhere, wearing only underwear, with our supplies burnt into ashes, including our cellphones. Even Steve was unsure what to do next. The only thing we could do was just sit in the cold air and wonder how to get out of the forest.
Paragraph 2:
Suddenly, we heard a noise in the forest. Anxiously we listened and stared into the darkness. A jeep appeared. A forester had spotted the light from the fire and had come to have a check. We jumped into the warm vehicle and the forester drove us to the ranger station, where we were given clothes and were able to call our parents. Steve and I had many more camping adventures from then on, but it was on this trip that Steve began to treat me more like a friend rather than a younger cousin. Our friendship continues to this day.