(共18张PPT)
When did it happen
1
Where did it happen
2
How did it make him feel
3
Why did it make him feel so
4
What happened
5
What did he learn from the experience
6
What can you get from the passage
某英文网站正举办以 ”My Unforgettable Experience” 为主题的征文活动。假如你是李华，请你叙述发生在校园里的一次难忘的经历，并谈谈你的感受。
注意:(1)词数：80--100;(2)短文开头仅供选择使用，不计入总词数；(3)文中不得出现真实的人名和校名等相关信息。
短文开头：The school life in junior high is coming to an end, but there is one thing that I'll never forget.
examining(审题)
style(体裁)
person (人称)
tense(时态)
key points(要点)
A. narration(记叙文)
B. argumentation(议论文)
C. description(说明文)
narration
A.the first person
B.the second person
C.the third person
the first person
A.the present tense
B.the future tense
C.the past tense
the past tense
1)an experience
2)feelings
Careful examining is the first step to the writing.
My Unforgettable Experience
The school life in junior high is coming to an end, but there is one thing that I'll never forget.
During an exam, I heard a low voice from behind. I turned back and saw my friend, James. He wanted to have a look at my answers. I put my hands on my paper. So he couldn’t see my answers at all.
After the exam, James looked upset. For a moment, I stood there and wondered what to say. “Don’t worry, James. Let me help you with your study.” “Thanks, Paul. You’re right.” James smiled.
It was lucky that our friendship wasn’t over. This experience was unforgettable!
lucky, unforgettable
How
feelings
process(过程)
effect(结果)
cause(起因)
in the classroom
during an exam
Paul & James
wanted to cheat
put hands on..., said...
took Paul's advice
Reading
2
The narration should include
“When, where, who and what ( clause, process, effect),how...”
My Unforgettable Experience
The school life in junior high is coming to an end, but there is one thing that I'll never forget.
During an exam, I heard a low voice from behind. I turned back and saw my friend, James. He wanted to have a look at my answers. I put my hands on my paper. So he couldn‘t see my answers at all.
After the exam, James looked upset. For a moment, I stood there and wondered what to say. “ Don’t worry, James. Let me help you with your study.” “Thanks, Paul. You‘re right.”
It was lucky that our friendship wasn’t over. This was really an unforgettable experience!
Beautify
1. I turned my head and saw my friend, James.
I turned my head quickly and saw my friend, James..
2. It was lucky that our friendship wasn't over.
_______, our friendship wasn't over.
3. He wanted to have a look at my answers. ____________, I put my hands on my paper. So he couldn't see my answers at all.
4. For a moment, I stood there and wondered what to say.
For a moment, I stood there, _________ what to say.
He now treats everyone with kindness and warmth, spreading love and joy everywhere he goes.
We often just walk around the town, seeing as many of our friends as we can.
Luckily
Without thinking twice
wondering
(add advs.)
(add phrases 词组)
(use concomitant adverbials伴随状语)
Beautify
5. I saw my friend, James. He wanted to have a look at my answers.
I saw my friend, James who wanted to have a look at my answers.
6. I put my hands on my paper and he couldn’t see the answers at all.
I put my hands on my paper _______he couldn't see the answers at all.
7. After the exam, James looked upset.
After the exam, James was upset ________________________.
8.This was really an unforgettable experience.
_______________ this experience was!
(use exclamatory sentence感叹句)
so that
How unforgettable
(use attributive clause 定语从句)
as if
(use adverbial clause 状语从句)
there was a black cloud hanging over his head.
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The school life in junior high is coming to an end, but there is one thing that I'll never forget.
During an exam, I heard a low voice from behind. I turned back quickly and saw my friend, James who wanted to have a look at my answers. Without thinking twice, I put my hands on my paper so that he couldn‘t see my answers at all.
After the exam, James was upset as if there was a black cloud hanging over his head. For a moment I stood there, wondering what to say. “ Don’t worry, James. Let me help you with your study.” “Thanks, Paul. You‘re right.”
Luckily our friendship wasn’t over. How unforgettable this experience was!
Beautiful words or sentences can make the writing more attractive(吸引人的)
(B8 P3) The bus driver, 24-year-old Wang Ping, stopped the bus _______________.
Enjoy
without thinking twice
(B8 P11)I get such a strong feeling of ___________ when I see the animals get better and the look of joy on their owners' faces.
satisfaction
(B8 P27)When they argue, it's like a big, black cloud__________ our home.
hanging over
(B8 P38)The news reporter said, 'Dr.King died just 10 minutes ago.' My parents were________________!
completely shocked
(B8 P38)I was so ________ that I could _______ think _______ after that.
(B9 P91)As I was waiting in line with other office workers, I heard a loud sound...We__________________the black smoke rising above the burning building. I felt lucky to be alive!
scared hardly
clearly
stared in disbelief at
(B9 P86)Peter kept his eyes on the ground. He felt like there was_________________ on his shoulders… .
a heavy weight
Enjoy
(B9 P83)He slept badly and didn't feel like eating. His face was always______________. He often cried ___________.
pale as chalk
(B9 P70)The music was_____________, but under the beauty I sensed___________________...The erhu sounded so sad that I almost cried along with it.
strangely beautiful
a strong sadness and pain
for no reason
Refusing to help cheat in a test makes Paul unforgettable.
Sharing
What makes you unforgettable
1.joining a sports meeting
2.going hiking with classmates
3.having a physical training
4.taking part in a competition
5.getting good/bad grades
6.getting help from classmates
7.getting into a fight with friends
...
cause 。
process 。
effect .
an
experience
Make an outline(提纲) to help you.
How .
feelings
topic
The school life in junior high is coming to an end, but there is one thing that I'll never forget.
Writing
experience
When 。
Where 。
Who 。
What
1.going hiking with classmates
2.taking part in a competition
2.joining a sports meeting
3.performing in an art festival
4. getting good/bad grades
5.getting into a fight with friends
...
Writing
某英文网站正举办以 “My Unforgettable Experience” 为主题的征文活动。假如你是李华，请你叙述发生在校园里的一次难忘的经历，并谈谈你的感受。
注意:(1)词数：80--100;(2)短文开头仅供选择使用，不计入总词数；(3)文中不得出现真实的人名和校名等相关信息。
短文开头：The school life in junior high is coming to an end, but there is one thing that I'll never forget.
Linking Words:
First,/At first,…
Next,…
Then…
Later,…
After that,…
Finally,/At last,/In the end,…
After…
Before…
When…
During…
From then on,
At the same time,…
At that time,…
… …
Evaluating
Checklist (Use your red pen)
The whole score is 20, and yours is__________.
1. Finish and polish your writing and share it with your classmates.
2.Find out wonderful expressions in your classmates' writing and write them down.
