《如何写好经历与感受类作文？》【2023中考英语备考公开课课件】

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2023中考英语
备考公开课课件
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2023年中考英语备考公开课课件
写好经历与感受类作文
学习目标
通过以读促写，能够运用五指法描写个人经历。
通过分析中考范文，能够运用常见的衔接与连贯手段，撰写个人经历与感受类作文。
通过运用五指法与常见的衔接与连贯手段撰写经历与感受类作文，培养逻辑思维。
Cindy and Mike are best friends. Today, they will finish some homework together.
如何写好经历与感受类作文？
写前活动
Now they are finishing the first task together.
Please make the best choice after analyzing.
【2021年山西中考】
在我们成长的过程中，会遇到各种各样的选择，选择读一本喜欢的书；选择做感兴趣的事情；选择与志趣相投的人交朋友……在选择面前，如何做到客观、理性，并且遵从自己内心的感受，这是我们应有的处事态度。
请根据以上内容，结合图片信息，写一篇英语短文。
内容包括：
1．从以上提示中选择某个方面，谈谈你对这个选择的观点；
2．围绕以上观点，描述你曾经历过的一件事；
3．这件事带给你的思考。
要求：1.词数不少于80词；
2．提示词汇仅供参考；
3．文中不得出现真实的人名、校名。
见学案一
【2021年山西中考】
在我们成长的过程中，会遇到各种各样的选择，选择读一本喜欢的书；选择做感兴趣的事情；选择与志趣相投的人交朋友……在选择面前，如何做到客观、理性，并且遵从自己内心的感受，这是我们应有的处事态度。
请根据以上内容，结合图片信息，写一篇英语短文。
内容包括：
1．从以上提示中选择某个方面，谈谈你对这个选择的观点；
2．围绕以上观点，描述你曾经历过的一件事；
3．这件事带给你的思考。
要求：1.词数不少于80词；
2．提示词汇仅供参考；
3．文中不得出现真实的人名、校名。
见学案一
抓要点1：结合图片信息，谈谈你的观点
There is no denying that it is important for us to make a reasonable choice in life. I am a volleyball fan, __1__, which is beneficial to my growth.
so I choose to join the school volleyball club,
because I choose to join the school volleyball club,
but I choose to join the school volleyball club,
By choosing connecting words.
How do you find it
见学案一
There is no denying that it is important for us to make a reasonable choice in life. I am a volleyball fan, so I choose to join the school volleyball club, which is beneficial to my growth.
Let’s read it aloud.
In my childhood, I fell in love with volleyball. __2__
First when I was in Grade 8, I was eager to be a member of the school volleyball club.
Then when I was in Grade 8, I was eager to be a member of the school volleyball club.
Last when I was in Grade 8, I was eager to be a member of the school volleyball club.
By choosing time words.
How do you find it
见学案一
In my childhood, I fell in love with volleyball. Then when I was in Grade 8, I was eager to be a member of the school volleyball club. __3__
Therefore, my parents wanted me to focus time and energy on schoolwork.
However, my parents wanted me to focus time and energy on schoolwork.
Besides, my parents wanted me to focus time and
energy on schoolwork.
By choosing connecting words.
How do you find it
In my childhood, I fell in love with volleyball. Then when I was in Grade 8, I was eager to be a member of the school volleyball club. However, my parents wanted me to focus time and energy on schoolwork. __4__
I had a long talk with her calmly.
I had a long talk with them calmly.
I had a long talk with him calmly.
According to reference.
How do you find it
见学案一
…I had a long talk with them calmly. __5__ Meanwhile, I reviewed my schoolwork as long as I finished training.
Before that, I trained hard with persistence in the club and learned what the true meaning of the teamwork was.
During that, I trained hard with persistence in the club and learned what the true meaning of the teamwork was.
After that, I trained hard with persistence in the club and learned
what the true meaning of the teamwork was.
By choosing connecting words.
How do you find it
After that, I trained hard with persistence in the club and learned what the true meaning of the teamwork was. Meanwhile, I reviewed my schoolwork as long as I finished training. __6__
To my joy, I got a satisfying result in the test.
To my joy, I got a unsatisfying result in the test.
To my sadness, I got a satisfying result in the test.
According to writing logic.
How do you find it
见学案一
... To my joy, I got a satisfying result in the test. __7__
All this showed that my choice was right.
Not all this showed that my choice was right.
All this showed that my choice was wrong.
According to writing logic.
How do you find it
In my childhood, I fell in love with volleyball. Then when I was in Grade 8, I was eager to be a member of the school volleyball club. However, my parents wanted me to focus time and energy on schoolwork. I had a long talk with them calmly. After that, I trained hard with persistence in the club and learned what the true meaning of the teamwork was. Meanwhile, I reviewed my schoolwork as long as I finished training. To my joy, I got a satisfying result in the test. All this showed that my choice was right.
Let’s read it aloud.
Needless to say, no matter what the choice is, if it is reasonable, just make it to follow your heart. __8__
Only in these ways can it bring out the best in you.
Only in this way can it bring out the worst in you.
Only in this way can it bring out the best in you.
According to writing logic.
How do you find it
见学案一
Needless to say, no matter what the choice is, if it is reasonable, just make it to follow your heart. Only in this way can it bring out the best in you.
Let’s read it aloud.
全文见学案二
衔接与连贯
Cohesion and coherence
见学案一
In my childhood, I fell in love with volleyball. Then when I was in Grade 8, I was eager to be a member of the school volleyball club. However, my parents wanted me to focus time and energy on schoolwork. I had a long talk with them calmly. After that, I trained hard with persistence in the club and learned what the true meaning of the teamwork was. Meanwhile, I reviewed my schoolwork as long as I finished training. To my joy, I got a satisfying result in the test. All this showed that my choice was right.
What elements are included in the story
见学案二
When& where
When and where did the story happen
When: when I was in Grade 8
Where: in the school volleyball club
When& where
Who
Who was/were the main character(s)
The writer & his/ her parents.
When& where
Problem
Who
What’s the problem
The writer was eager to be a member of the school volleyball club. However, his/her parents wanted him/her to focus time and energy on schoolwork.
When& where
Who
Problem
Events
What did the writer and others do
The writer had a long talk with his/her parents calmly.
When& where
Who
Problem
Events
Solution
How did the writer solve the problem
The writer trained hard with persistence in the club.
The writer reviewed his/her schoolwork as long as he/she finished training.
The writer got a satisfying result in the test.
When&where
Who
Events
Problem
Solution
How to make a choice
1.1 When I was in Grade 8
1.2 In the school volleyball club
2. The writer & his/ her parents.
3. The writer was eager to be a member of the school volleyball club. However, his/her parents wanted him/her to focus time and energy on schoolwork.
4.The writer had a long talk with his/her parents calmly.
5. (1) The writer trained hard with persistence in the club; (2) The writer reviewed his/ her schoolwork as long as he/ she finished training; (3) The writer got a satisfying result in the test.
见学案一
They’ve finished the first task.
Now they are finishing the second task together.
Please help them put the sentences in order after analyzing.
【2020年山西中考改编】
教育就是善意的干预。在我们成长过程中，时常会面对来自父母或老师的提醒与批评，有的同学不理解，有的甚至会有过激的反应。如何客观、冷静地对待这种问题，需要我们认真、理性地思考，并做出合理应对，这正是教育要达到的目的。
请针对以上现象，结合生活中的经历，写一篇短文。
内容包括：
·an experience you had/heard/saw
·what you have learned from it
要求：
1. 词数不少于80词，开头已给出，不算入字数；
2. 参考词汇仅供参考；
3. 文中不得出现真实的人名、校名。
见学案一
定主题：如何面对提醒与批评
【2020年山西中考改编】
教育就是善意的干预。在我们成长过程中，时常会面对来自父母或老师的提醒与批评，有的同学不理解，有的甚至会有过激的反应。如何客观、冷静地对待这种问题，需要我们认真、理性地思考，并做出合理应对，这正是教育要达到的目的。
请针对以上现象，结合生活中的经历，写一篇短文。
内容包括：
·an experience you had/heard/saw
·what you have learned from it
要求：
1. 词数不少于80词,开头已给出，不算入字数；
2. 参考词汇仅供参考；
3. 文中不得出现真实的人名、校名。
见学案一
As far as I'm concerned, it is of great importance to stay calm and reasonable when our parents and teachers blame or criticize us, which is beneficial for our lifelong development.
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见学案一
It's a good idea to keep calm and think about it for a moment whenever being blamed or criticized. Sometimes a small change of yourself may lead to a big difference to your life.
Therefore, Li Ming picked up his courage and said sorry to our English teacher Miss Hu in front of the whole class.
To my surprise, Li Ming rushed out of the classroom without permission.
Later, I talked with Li Ming.
I still remember that day.
Our English teacher, Miss Hu saw Li Ming falling asleep in English class.
Our English teacher, Miss Hu, woke Li Ming up and reminded Li Ming to listen to her carefully.
It was so impolite and rude to rush out of the classroom without permission.
On that day, I had an English class.
Li Ming realized that our English teacher Miss Hu expected to help him develop a good habit and Li Ming realized that he wasn't so calm at that time.
见学案一
I still remember that day. On that day, I had an English class. Our English teacher, Miss Hu saw Li Ming falling asleep in English class. Our English teacher Miss Hu woke Li Ming up and reminded Li Ming to listen to her carefully. To my surprise, Li Ming rushed out of the classroom without permission. It was so impolite and rude to rush out of the classroom without permission. Later, I talked with Li Ming. Li Ming realized that our English teacher Miss Hu expected to help him develop a good habit and Li Ming realized that he wasn't so calm at that time. Therefore, Li Ming picked up his courage and said sorry to our English teacher Miss Hu in front of the whole class.
It's a good idea to keep calm and think about it for a moment whenever being blamed or criticized. Sometimes a small change of yourself may lead to a big difference to your life.
How do you find the answers
I still remember that day. On that day, I had an English class. Our English teacher, Miss Hu saw Li Ming falling asleep in English class. Our English teacher Miss Hu woke Li Ming up and reminded Li Ming to listen to her carefully. To my surprise, Li Ming rushed out of the classroom without permission. It was so impolite and rude to rush out of the classroom without permission. Later, I talked with Li Ming. Li Ming realized that our English teacher Miss Hu expected to help him develop a good habit and Li Ming realized that he wasn't so calm at that time. Therefore, Li Ming picked up his courage and said sorry to our English teacher Miss Hu in front of the whole class.
I still remember that day. On that day, I had an English class. Our English teacher, Miss Hu saw Li Ming falling asleep in English class. Our English teacher Miss Hu woke Li Ming up and reminded Li Ming to listen to her carefully. To my surprise, Li Ming rushed out of the classroom without permission. It was so impolite and rude to rush out of the classroom without permission. Later, I talked with Li Ming. Li Ming realized that our English teacher Miss Hu expected to help him develop a good habit and Li Ming realized that he wasn't so calm at that time. Therefore, Li Ming picked up his courage and said sorry to our English teacher Miss Hu in front of the whole class.
It's a good idea to keep calm and think about it for a moment whenever being blamed or criticized. Sometimes a small change of yourself may lead to a big difference to your life.
Can you make it better
experience
thought
I still remember that day. On that day, I had an English class.
见学案一
I still remember the day that I had an English class.
如何改善？
合并为定语从句
…Our English teacher, Miss Hu saw Li Ming falling asleep in English class. Our English teacher Miss Hu woke Li Ming up and reminded Li Ming to listen to her carefully.
见学案一
…Seeing Li Ming falling asleep in English class, our English teacher, Miss Hu, woke him up and reminded him to listen to her carefully.
如何改善？
1.利用非谓语动词、代词合并 2.删除重复词
To my surprise, Li Ming rushed out of the classroom without permission. It was so impolite and rude to rush out of the classroom without permission.
见学案一
To my surprise, Li Ming rushed out of the classroom without permission. It was so impolite and rude to do so.
如何改善？
代替重复词
Later, I talked with Li Ming. Li Ming realized that our English teacher Miss Hu expected to help him develop a good habit and Li Ming realized that he wasn't so calm at that time.
见学案一
Later, I talked with Li Ming and he realized that our English teacher/ Miss Hu expected to help him develop a good habit and Li Ming realized that he wasn't so calm at that time.
如何改善？
1.利用代词、连词合并 2.删除重复词
…he wasn't so calm at that time. Therefore, Li Ming picked up his courage and said sorry to our English teacher Miss Hu in front of the whole class.
见学案一
…he wasn't so calm at that time. Therefore, he picked up his courage and said sorry to our English teacher/ Miss Hu in front of the whole class.
如何改善？
1.利用代词 2.删除重复词
I still remember the day that I had an English class. Seeing Li Ming falling asleep, our English teacher, Miss Hu, woke him up and reminded him to listen to her carefully. To my surprise, Li Ming rushed out of the classroom without permission. It was so impolite and rude to do so. Later, I talked with Li Ming and he realized that our English teacher/ Miss Hu expected to help him develop a good habit and he wasn't so calm at that time. Therefore, he picked up his courage and said sorry to our English teacher/ Miss Hu in front of the whole class.
Can you use five fingers rules to describe it
全文见学案二
When& where
Who
Events
Problem
Solution
How to face criticism and blame
1.1 In an English class
1.2 In the classroom
2.Li Ming, Miss Hu & the writer.
3.(1) Seeing Li Ming falling asleep, our English teacher, Miss Hu, woke him up and reminded him to listen to her carefully; (2)Li Ming rushed out of the classroom without permission.
4.The writer talked with Li Ming and Li Ming realized that Miss Hu expected to help him develop a good habit and he wasn't so calm at that time.
5.Li Ming picked up his courage and said sorry to Miss Hu in front of the whole class.
见学案一
I still remember the day that I had an English class. Seeing Li Ming falling asleep, our English teacher, Miss Hu, woke him up and reminded him to listen to her carefully. To my surprise, Li Ming rushed out of the classroom without permission. It was so impolite and rude to do so. Later, I talked with Li Ming and he realized that our English teacher/ Miss Hu expected to help him develop a good habit and he wasn't so calm at that time. Therefore, he picked up his courage and said sorry to our English teacher/ Miss Hu in front of the whole class.
How is the story made cohesive and coherent
全文见学案二
衔接与连贯
Cohesion and coherence
见学案一
如何写好经历与感受类作文？
写中活动
Now they are finishing the last task individually.
Please write a passage after analyzing by yourself.
Remember to use five fingers rules and pay attention to cohesion and coherence.
STEP
STEP
STEP
STEP
查 检查语法、拼写、标点
充 按五指法充实故事内容，注意文章的衔接与连贯
抓 根据题目要求抓内容要点
定 文体、主题、人称、时态
经历与感受类作文步骤
When& where
Who
Events
Problem
Solution
Topic
Remember to use five fingers rules and pay attention to cohesion and coherence.
见学案一
【2016年山西中考改编】
向他人表达善意并帮助他人体现了一个人良好的品格。当你向别人表达善意并给他人提供帮助时，你希望得到回报（repay）吗？
请围绕你的观点，结合自己的亲身经历，写一篇英语短文。
要求：1. 词数不少于80词；
2. 文章的开头已给出，不计入总词数；
3. 文中不得出现真实的人名、校名。
见学案一
When I show kindness and help others, _______________________
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见学案一
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如何写好经历与感受类作文？
写后活动
评价表1 评价维度 内容 是√ 否×
After reading his/her passage, I can know… story 1.when the story happened & where the story happened
2.who the main character(s) was/were
3. what the problem is
4. what the writer and others did
5. how they solved the problem
After reading his/her passage, I can find… Cohesion and coherence 6.time words
7.reference
8.connecting words
9.writing logic (1)the fact of the experience
(2)the thought of the writer about the experience
见学案一
评价表2 评价维度 具体要求 分值 作者得分
基本分 （9） 内容 1.要点齐全有细节 3
2.词数恰当（80-120） 1
3.逻辑连贯（不生搬硬套） 2
结构 4.段落布局适合文体（3段） 1
5.衔接（恰当使用过渡词） 2
加分项 （6） 语言 6.表达符合语境且拼写正确 1
7.大量使用初中阶段所学表达 1
8.满足语言使用的多样性：短语、句型、从句等 1
9.标点符号使用正确 1
排版 10.书写干净整齐 1
11.版面布局恰当（分段/对齐） 1
见学案一
如何写好经历与感受类作文？
总结与作业
When& where
Who
Events
Problem
Solution
Topic
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