2014届高考英语读写任务段落写作之主题句+拓展句

课件27张PPT。段落写作之
主题句+拓展句开门见山，求画龙点睛高考评卷 必备神器：物： 写作时，要让压力山大的阅卷老师不用刻意寻找而能一眼就看到文章中的要点。最好是在每段的开头就点题，并且要紧靠主题句加以拓展修饰润色，以达到画龙点睛的效果。包含题目所给全部或绝大部分的内容要点。主题明确，内容丰富。词汇丰富，用词得当。能有效运用合适的语言结构，而且没有（或较少）语法错误。篇章结构的连贯性好。 得18-20分；
2.包含题目所给全部或绝大部分的内容要点。主题明确，个别内容不准确或者不相关。词汇较丰富，有个别用词错误。较好地运用了合适的语言结构，有少许的语法错误。篇章结构的连贯性较好。得14-17分。
3.包含题目所给全部或绝大部分的内容要点。主题比较明确，个别内容不准确或不相关。词汇较丰富，有个别用词错误。较好地运用合适的语言结构，有少许的语法错误。篇章结构的连贯性较好。 得11-13分。
4.包含题目所给的部分内容要点。主题基本明确，有些内容不准确或者不相关。词汇有限，有较多的用词错误。语言结构出现较多的语法错误。篇章结构的连贯性差。得7-11分。
5.只包含题目所给的个别内容要点。多数内容不相关或者不准确。文章有些地方照抄原文。词汇贫乏，有较多的用词错误。大多数的句子出现语法错误。篇章结构的连贯性差。得4-6分。广东高考读写任务写作内容部分评分细则评分标准及解题要求读写任务写作（25分）概括（5分）概括全面，表述清晰写作内容（20分）:
主题明确，内容丰富Topic sentences段落主题句，顾名思义，就是该句表达了支配全段的主导思想(controlling idea)。这一主导思想是全段的核心，统帅全段，并决定全段的发展方向。揭阳一模读写任务：
(1) 你读了这个故事后的感受；
I definitely approve of the author’s idea.
After reading the passage, I am deep impressed by the butterfly who was unable to fly.
I am sorry to know that the nice man’s kindness resulted in the butterfly’s disability.The story sets me thinking.
After reading the story, I am lost in thought.
After reading the story, I come to realize that struggles are what it takes to survive and succeed. (2) 叙述当前父母溺爱子女的现象和由此造成的后果；
Parents’ over-love to children can lead to serious results.
The old man’s action reminds me of some parent’s attitude towards their children’s life.
Nowadays, with the rapid development of economy, most children are spoiled by their parents. Nowadays, with only one child in the family, parents tend to spoil their children too much. They would go to great length to give the kids whatever they want and do what should be done by the children themselves. As a consequence, …..(3) 假如你是父母一方，你会如何磨砺自己的孩子？
If I am a parent, I will not miss any chance to exercise my kids.
So, when I become a parent, I will make my children go through some struggles by themselves. If I were a parent, I would first keep him well informed that life is never easy and that he should be ready to face any difficulties. Besides, ….
If I were a parent, instead of preventing my children from struggling in their life or study, I would encourage them to make use of every hardship they come across to train themselves.
Were I a parent, I would learn to let go of my children and allow them to face their problems by themselves. How to write a clear and good topic sentence＊重述要点
＊回答要点
＊明示观点
＊引出经历
＊引出方法、建议、措施、步骤等？1）谈谈独立的重要性。
2） 学会在逆境中感恩，对生活有何意义？
3）请谈谈你是如何理解梦想在人生中所起的作用的。Inspired by the story, I suddenly realized the importance of independence.Learning to be grateful, even when all is not so well, is of great importance to our life.Nobody will deny that dreams play a very significant part in one’s life. 一、重述要点中学生活和大学生活的差别，及你打算如何适应。（08年）
想家给学习和生活带来的影响。（11年）
你怎样看待老师对学生的影响（12年）Life in college will be greatly different from that in high school. …. Despite the difference, I will try to adapt to the life in college.Being homesick did affect myhisher study and life a lot.Teachers can have great influences on students.二、回答要点你认为是什么导致了三兄弟的薪酬差别？
假设你当时就在事故现场，你是伸出援助之手还是袖手旁观？
In my opinion, it is the three brother’s different attitudes toward their work that result in their different wages.If I had happened to be present at the scene , I would have come to his help and sent him to the nearest hospital or dial 120 for help.正面，明确的回答假如你是父母一方，你会如何磨砺自己的孩子？
If I were a parent, I would first keep him well informed that life is never easy and that he should be ready to face any difficulties.
假如你处在那些动物的处境，你会有什么反应？（2009）
If I were one of the animals in the wild park, I would feel annoyed when people keep photographing with me. 上文使你想起哪位对你帮助最大的老师？（2012）
Reading the passage, I am reminded of MissMr. _____, my ______ teacher in Grade ____, who I owe most of my achievement to. 三、明示观点明确表示对某观点支持、赞同或反对、不赞同。1、你认为阅读书籍重要吗？为什么？
I strongly believe that reading books are very important.
2、你是否赞成这种做法（熄灯一小时）并说明理由；
I am strongly for this activity, which is really meaningful and helpful for preventing our earth from getting warmer.
3、你认为是否应该禁止游客和动物拍照（2009）
I think it necessary to ban tourists’ taking pictures with animals.
4、你对用金钱鼓励孩子学习的看法。（2010）
As far as I am concerned, I am strongly against the measure of paying students to study.
四、引出经历谈谈你所经历的让你最感动或给你印象最深刻的一次微笑；
When it comes to smile, I had something to share.
The story reminds me one of the most movingimpressive smile I have ever had.
2、讲述你经历的一次困难或考验；
It reminds me of my own experience when I joined in the military training after I entered senior high school.3、时间、地点和起因。【讲述一次想家的经历】（11广东）
Like Sam, each of us may have the experience of missing our family, me included.
Once I had a similar experience to Sam’s
4、 (第一点：你想起哪位对你帮助最大的老师）
举例说明该老师对你学习或成长的影响。
I can still remember clearly that it was when I was in Senior Two. I got so disappointed with the little progress I made in study that I wanted to quit school.
五、引出建议、方法、措施、步骤等1. 说说人们为保护环境所采取的措施：
Luckily，more and more people begin to appreciate the situation and measures are being taken to protect the environment.
2. 你认为怎样才能更好地鼓励孩子学习。
To get kids motivated to learn, parents and educators can adopt many effective means. They can ….. They may …. Besides, they’d better ….3. 请你给团购者一些有用的建议。
As for suggestions for group buying, firstly, you should read the advertisements and comments from other customers carefully.
以约120个词就“熄灯一小时”活动发表看法，
包括如下要点：
1）你是否赞成这种做法并说明理由；
2）你是否动员你的家人或你周围的人参加此活动？
3）日常生活中为了保护环境我们还可以做些什么？明示观点重述要点（先不列举）回答要点重述要点/回答要点/明示观点/引出经历/引出措施以约120个词就老师影响学生的话题谈谈你的想法，内容包括：
（1） 上文是你想起哪位对你帮助最大的老师；
（2）举例说明该老师对你学习或成长的影响；
（3） 你怎样看待老师对学生的影响。重述要点/回答要点/明示观点/引出经历/引出措施回答要点引出经历重述要点Homework:
金榜夺冠二轮复习配套练习P32 记叙文型读写任务 （四）
25分钟完成作文，注意主题句明确突出！