寒假八下要点回顾- 叙事描写类作文写作辅导（含解析）

叙事描写类作文写作辅导
、叙事描写类的书面表达是以叙述和描写为主要表达方式，以写人、叙事和经历、写物、绘景等为主要内容的文体：
这一类的书面表达动词使用率最高，且富于变化，用得最多的是动词的过去时态，其他各种时态为辅。合理使用丰富多彩的动词时态是这类书面表达的首要语言特征。人物类书面表达如果是对人的性格、外貌等叙述常用一般现在时，如果通过事件来刻画人物的性格，那么就要用过去时。写好这类书面表达要注意以下几点：
1. 头绪分明，脉络清楚
写好书面表达，首先要头绪分明，脉络清楚，明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析，弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程，然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都要围绕五个＂W＂和一个＂H＂来展开，分别是why, what, when, where, who及how。
2. 突出中心，详略得当
在文章的框架确定后，对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的一步。选材要注意取舍，应该从表现文章主题的需要出发，分清主次，定好详略。详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节，略写或粗述那些非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而会使情节罗列化，使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题，也需要一定的技巧。
3. 用活语言，准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的叙事描写类书面表达的语言既要准确、生动，又要表现力强，这样才能把人、事物描写得具体生动。
常用表达
1. Among various kinds of things/persons in my mind ... is the most unforgettable one.
2. On a sunny/rainy morning, while I was...First of all... Then ... After that... In the end ...
3. He/she/this was one of the most meaningful/enjoyable/unforgettable persons/things that I have ever met/ experienced, I will remember him/her forever.
加分句子：
1. Sth impressed me greatly...
2. What impressed me most is that...
经典句型：
1. Last Sunday（Saturday...）, it was sunny（rainy, windy, foggy）
2. I got up very early （late）. After breakfast I went to with my friends by bike, bus...
3. We enjoyed ourselves.
4. We forgot the time. We didn’t come back until 5 o’clock.
5. We all felt very tired, but we were happy.
6. I thought I would never forget this trip.
7. Last summer, my parents and I went to Beijing for our holidays.
8. We visited a lot of places of interest.
9. We had a good time there.
10. We bought a lot of things. The clothes here are good and cheap.
写作模板
人物类书面表达主要通过刻画人物性格，塑造人物形象，反映生活，表现主题，模版如下：
叙事和经历类书面表达通过叙述事件的起因、经过和结果表现主题。
写景状物类书面表达通过对事物和景点的描述表现主题。文章宜采用总—分—总的结构或总—分的结构，模版如下：
第二部分 叙事描写类作文专项训练（含范文解析）
（一）
假如你有机会和任何一个名人共进午餐。请根据以下要点和要求用英语写一篇短文。
1.要点：
1）这个名人是谁；
2）你为什么想和他或她共进午餐；
3）你想和他或她谈论什么。
2.要求：
1）文中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称；
2）词数80左右。
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【写作思路】
这是一篇材料作文，根据材料中的相关信息介绍一下你想和哪位名人共进午餐。主要从1）这个名人是谁；2）你为什么想和他或她共进午餐；3）你想和他或她谈论什么。这三个方面去介绍。注意时态应为一般现在时或一般将来时。人称为第一人称。注意作文中必须包含材料上的所有信息，并适当发挥。写作时，避免使用汉语式的英语，尽量使用我们熟悉的句子或短语。语法要正确，表达要符合英语习惯，注意时态、时间状语的搭配及主谓一致问题。写作中适当使用连词，注意上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系，表达具有条理性。
【参考范文】
I’d like to have lunch with Ren Zhengfei, the founder of the well-known Chinese tech company Huawei.
Mr. Ren is considered as a great man who always has everything mapped out ahead. And under his leadership, Huawei has become a high-tech giant worldwide. Over the lunch, I will listen to his success story. Then I will ask him what is important to make it happen. If time permits, I’ll ask for his advice for us teenagers today.
I’m expecting this lunch already.
【名师点评】
【高分句型一】
Mr. Ren is considered as a great man who always has everything mapped out ahead. 任先生被认为是一个伟大的人，他总是把一切都安排在前面。
句子who always has everything mapped out ahead.是由who引导的定语从句。
【高分句型二】
If time permits, I'll ask for his advice for us teenagers today. 如果时间允许的话，我今天就为我们青少年征求他的意见。
句子If time permits, 是由if 引导的条件状语从句。
（二）
“你养我长大，我陪你变老”父母亲一直在为我们的成长默默付出，成长要学会感受爱、回报爱。今天你即将毕业，是向父母表达感激的好机会。请根据以下所给要点，写一篇英语短文。
要点：
(l)给我生命，一直照顾我成长；
(2)努力工作，为我提供良好 生活和教育条件；
(3)拥有爱心，教我学会……；
(4)今天，我要为你们……（自主发挥一至少两点）a
注意事项：
(l)词数80左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数；
(2)文中不得出现真实的地名、校名、人名等信息。
You bring me up. I will be with you in your life. You are important persons in the process of my growth. ____
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【写作思路】
本题是一篇给材料作文，在毕业之际向父母表达自己的“情感”。人称以第二人称为主，时态以一般现在时为主。写作思路：考生需要首先审清主题，围绕主题展开作文，其次考生可根据要点提示去写作。文章必须包括要点中所给的信息，但不要逐句翻译，并补充两条个人的观点。注意表达的条理性，用好连接词，可适当发挥使行文连贯，多种句式交叉使用来丰富文章的文采。
【参考范文】
You bring me up. I will be with you in your life. You are important persons in the process of my growth.
You give me life and take care of me all the time. When I have problems with my study and life, you are always patient enough to help me and encourage me. In order to let me live a pleasant life and receive good education, you always work hard from morning to evening every day. You are also persons who have a heart full of love.
You are ready to help people in need. It is you who teach me to be a kind person. In the past, I never said “I love you” to you. Today, I will graduate, so I want to say it to you loudly. I will study harder to get better results in the future.
I hope you will be happy and healthy forever.
【名师点评】
用到的主要短语：have problems with sth，be patient enough to do sth，in order to，let sb do sth，live a pleasant life，receive a good education，work hard，have a heart full of love，be ready to，people in need，teach sb to do sth，get better results。
（三）
假如你是晨光中学的学生李华，平时坚持用英语写日记．请根据以下要点，描述你星期三放学乘地铁回家路上看到的事情，并表达自己的想法．
（l）一个男孩不舒服，开始呕吐，一位穿着漂亮的女士帮着擦拭地面，男孩表达感谢．
（2）地铁到站，有人挤向座位，有人下不去车，有人因此争吵．
（3）你认为……
参考词汇： 开始呕吐 begin to vomit；挤向座位 push towards the seat；争吵 have a quarrel
要求：
（1）词数：80～100个；
（2）日记格式和开头已给出，不计入总词数；
（3）要点齐全，行文连贯，可适当发挥。
Wednesday
When I took the underground back home from school, I noticed ____________________________________
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【写作思路】
在解答写作这类试题时，要根据短文的中心思想考虑如何开头、展开和结尾，设想几个承上启下的连词，将主要句型、关键词语草草记下，形成提纲，写时切忌结构分散，废话连篇，严重跑题．
【参考范文】
Wednesday
When I took the underground back home from school, I noticed two things around me．（开篇点明题意）
The first thing I met is about a boy．The boy didn't feel well．He began to vomit．A beautiful girl saw the boy．She helped him clean the floor【高分句型一】．Then the boy thanked her for helping．The second thing is about the underground．When the underground got to the station．a lot of people pushed towards the seat．So some people couldn't get off the underground．Some had a quarreel because of this．（介绍碰到的两件事情）
In my opinion，The girl did a good thing and we appreciated her action in this society．As for the underground．It shows your quality there．If you wait in a line，others will get off the underground easily．If all of us can do in this way，our world will be more beautiful【高分句型二】．（表达自己的观点结尾）
【名师点评】
（1）高分句型一：
She helped him clean the floor.
help sb do sth 帮助某人做某事。这句话意为：她帮助他打扫干净地面。
（2）高分句型二：
If all of us can do in this way，our world will be more beautiful.
If引导的条件状语从句，遵循"主将从现"原则，即主句用一般将来时，从句用一般现在时态。这句话意为：如果我们所有人都这样做，我们的世界将会变得更加美好。
（四）
初中三年的学习生活让人难忘，毕业之际，你校将举行"感恩"为主题的英文演讲比赛，请你根据以下提示，写一篇英文演讲稿．
要点提示：
1．感谢父母，教我如何生活，……
2．感谢老师，教我许多知识，……
3．感谢同学，给我美好回忆，……
写作要求：
1．词数80左右，开头和结尾已给出（不计入总词数）；
2．可适当增减词汇，使语句流畅、完整；
3．文中不能透露个人真实信息．
Good morning， everyone． I'm glad to be here to speak in front of you． Here I'd like to thank everyone of you．
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That' s all． Thank you．
【写作思路】
在解答写作这类试题时，要根据短文的中心思想考虑如何开头、展开和结尾，设想几个承上启下的连词，将主要句型、关键词语草草记下，形成提纲，写时切忌结构分散，废话连篇，严重跑题．
【参考范文】
Good morning，everyone．I'm glad to be here to speak in front of you． Here I'd like to thank everyone of you．How time flies! We 'll graduate soon． I have so many words from my heart to say．At this moment，I want to say thanks to my parents，my teachers and my classmates．（开篇点题）
Dear dad and mom， you've taken good care of me in the past three years．When I was in trouble，you used to encourage me and cheer me up．You taught me how to get on well with my classmates．（感谢父母亲的关心，鼓励……）
Dear teachers，thank you for teaching me so well．I won't forget how interesting your lessons are and how friendly you are．I still remember when I failed in an exam， you encouraged me to keep trying． 【高分句型一】When I had trouble in life， you told me to be brave． Because of your help，I have made much progress．（感谢老师在学习上和生活上的帮助）
Dear classmates， you've helped me a lot in my studies since I came to this school．【高分句型二】 When I was in trouble，you used to encourage me and give me some advice．I never forget the days when we studied together．（感谢同学的帮助，鼓励，留下的美好回忆）
Words can't show my thanks to you!I'll remember all of you．
That' s all． Thank you．
【名师点评】
（1）高分句型一：
I still remember when I failed in an exam，you encouraged me to keep trying．我还记得当我考试不及格时，你们鼓励我继续努力．
I still remember 后跟了宾语从句，宾语从句中包含了when引导的时间状语从句，encourage sb to do sth鼓励某人做某事
（2）高分句型二：
Dear classmates， you've helped me a lot in my studies since I came to this school．亲爱的同学们，自从我来这里以来，你们在我的学习中帮了我很多忙．
since自从，引导时间状语从句，主句用了现在完成进行时，从句用了一般过去时．