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Unit 2 I'll help clean up the city park
writing
volunteer
job
Clean up the city parks
Work in an old people’s home
Give out food for homeless people
Help kids learn to read/ with homework
What volunteer activities do you know
Pre-writing
…
volunteer
Jobs/activities
visit sick children in the hospital
Clean up the city parks
volunteer in an after-school study program
help to care for animals
I volunteer to visit sick children in the hospital.
What do you volunteer to do
(want to/hope to/would like to/volunteer to)
Pre-writing
Pre-writing
Why do you want to do the volunteer job
Because I want to see the look of joy on these children's face.
How could you do to help them
Pre-writing
I could
cheer them up
play games with them
tell stories to them
Pre-writing
Writing Topic
If you have a chance to be a volunteer,
which volunteer job do you want to do
Why do you want to do the volunteer job
How could you do it
Please write a passage within 80 words.
Person(人称）
The first person
Tense(时态）
The simple present/future tense
Text(文体）
A passage
Details(细节）
1.write a passage
（what, why, how）
2.80 words
What should we think about
Pre-writing
Structure
(结构)
Body:
Ending:
What should we think about
Pre-writing
Beginning:
Lead to the topic.
Make a conclusion
What do you volunteer
Why do you want to do it
How could you do it
Beginning:
As the saying, the everyone is I, I is an everyone. I really want to help others.
As a saying goes “Many hands make light work.” It reminds us that we can try to help others in need.
in our daily life, everyone should help each other.
Body:
if I have a chance to be a volunteer, I will volunteer to/ would like to/want to /hope to…
Because …
How could we do First… Then…
Ending:
I think helping others can bring happiness not only
to others but also to ourselves.
If everyone helps each other，the world will be
better and better.
I will keep on helping others. Because true happiness
comes from giving.
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Write a passage in 15 minutes
While-writing
Correction codes:
Spelling and punctuation mistakes
Wrong sentences
Beautiful sentences
Transitional sentences
Conjunction words
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For you to consider Objectives-focus on structure ,content,grammar &language Self-check Group check Teacher’s assess-ment
Structure and content I have organized my writing into_________ paragraphs.(1 point)
Para : I have led to the topic:to show the importance of volunteering. (1 point)
Para : I have written what I could do(1) I have written why I do it(1) I have written how I could do it(2)
Para : I have made a conclusion to call up people to do volunteer jobs(1 point)
My writing is tidy and clear. (1 point)
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Grammar and language I have used the modal verbs correctly. For example. I could…. (3 points)
I have used some linking words and transitional sentences to make my passage fluent. (1 point)
I have checked the spelling of the uncertain words by using a dictionary or asking my teacher.(1 point.)
I have used some beautiful sentences and some clauses. (1 point)
I have checked my word count is around .(1 point)
Total score
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80
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Sharing Time
Evaluate(评价) your group members’ compositions, then show them to the class.
Focus on: 1. structure(结构)
2. handwriting(书写)
3. points(要点)
4. grammar(语法)
5. language(语言)
6.fluency( 流畅）
Show Time
Post-writing
Summary
1.Person
2.Tense
3.Text
4. Details
5.Structure
Before writing
Focus on
Summary
Evaluation
1. structure
2. handwriting
3. points
4. grammar
5. language
6.fluency
Focus on
Think about how to improve your writing in the second draft.
Finish the second draft.
Post-writing
As a saying goes “Many hands make light work.” It reminds us that we can try to help others in need. I like helping people.
If I have a chance to be a volunteer, I would like to cheer up sick kids in the hospital. Because the children suffer from(遭受) illness a lot. And I’m good with children.I’m always ready to help others.How could I help them First of all, I like singing, I want to sing for them. What’s more, I would like to tell stories to them. Finally, I could volunteer my time to help with their schoolwork.
All in all,If everyone could share a little love, the world will be better and better!
Sample
Thank you
Goodbye !As a saying goes “Many hands make light work.” It reminds us that we can try to help others in need. I like helping people.
If I have a chance to be a volunteer, I would like to cheer up sick kids in the hospital. Because the children suffer from(遭受) illness a lot. And I’m good with children.I’m always ready to help others.How could I help them First of all, I like singing, I want to sing for them. What’s more, I would like to tell stories to them. Finally, I could volunteer my time to help with their schoolwork.
All in all,If everyone could share a little love, the world will be better and better!Unit 2 I’ll help to clean up the city parks
Section B 3a-3c Writing
Name
Ⅰ.Writing topic
If you have a chance to be a volunteer,which volunteer job do you want to do Why do you want to do the volunteer job How could you do it Please write a passage within 80 words.
Ⅱ.Analyse the topic
Person: Tense：
Text: Details：
Structure：
Beginning:
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Body:
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Ending:
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Ⅲ.Finish the First draft
Ⅳ.Finish the second draftMarking Ladders
Name
For you to consider Objectives-focus on structure ,content, grammar &language Self-check Group check Teacher’s assess-ment
Structure and content I have organized my writing into_________ paragraphs. (1 point)
Para : I have led to the topic:to show the importance of volunteering. (1 point)
Para : I have written what I could do(1) I have written why I do it(1) I have written how I could do it(2)
Para :I have made a conclusion to call up people to do volunteer jobs. (1 point)
My writing is tidy and clear. (1 point)
Grammar and language I have used the modal verbs correctly. For example. I could…. (3 points)
I have used some linking words and transitional sentences to make my passage fluent. (1 point)
I have checked the spelling of the uncertain words by using a dictionary or asking my teacher. (1 point.)
I have used some beautiful sentences and some clauses. (1 point)
I have checked my word count is around . (1 point)
Total score
What can I do to improve my composition next time
