Unit5 What were you doing when the rainstorm came
Section B 3a-3c Writing
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Ⅰ.Writing topic
根据下列问题提示，用英语写一篇短文，讲述一件在你人生成长中记忆深刻的或具有重要意义的事件。词数80词左右。
问题提示：1. What was the event 2. When did it happen
3. Where did it happen 4. What were you doing
5. What were your friends doing 6. Why was it important
7. Why do you remember this event
Ⅱ.Analyse the topic
Person: Tense：
Text: Details：
Structure：
Beginning:
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Body:
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Ending:
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Ⅲ.Finish the First draft
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)Ⅳ.Finish the second draftMarking Ladders
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For you to consider Objectives-focus on structure ,content, grammar &language Self-check Group check Teacher’s assess-ment
Structure and content I have organized my writing into_________ paragraphs. (1 point)
Para : I have led to the topic to introduce the event (1 point)
Para : I have written the process including what, where, why, when and how (3 points)
Para :I have showed the feelings (1 point)
My writing is tidy and clear. (1 point)
Grammar and language I have used the simple past tense correctly. (3 points)
I have used some linking words and transitional sentences to make my passage fluent. (1 point)
I have checked the spelling of the uncertain words by using a dictionary or asking my teacher. (1 point.)
I have used some beautiful sentences and some clauses. (2 points)
I have checked my word count is around . (1 point)
Total score
What can I do to improve my composition next time (共20张PPT)
Unit 5
Writing
What's the most unforgettable event in your life
When did it happen
Where did it happen
What were you and your friends doing
Why was it important
How did it make you feel
An event
What were you and your friends doing
Where did it happen
Why was it important
How did it make you feel
What happened
When did it happen
When we write an event, what should we think about
Writing Topic
根据下列问题提示，用英语写一篇短文，讲述
一件在你人生成长中记忆深刻的或具有重要意义的
事件。词数80词左右。
问题提示：1. What was the event
2. When did it happen
3. Where did it happen
4. What were you doing
5. What were your friends doing
6. Why was it important
7. Why do you remember this event
Person(人称）
The first person
Tense(时态）
The simple past tense
Text(文体）
A passage
Details(细节）
1.write a passage
（what, where, when, why）
2.80 words
What should we think about
Structure
(结构)
Body:
Ending:
What should we think about
Beginning:
Lead to the topic.
Show the feelings
(show opinions)
Beginning:
1.The most important thing that I will never
forget is that...
2.An important event that I remember well was...
3.It happened in/on...
Body:
1.When..., I was...
2.While I was doing..., ... was/were doing...
He/She/ My friend was... when...
3.At first, then, next ,at last ...
Ending:
1.I will never forget ... because...
2.The event is meaningful to me because...
3.I remember this event well because...I will always
remember it.
Write a passage in 15 minutes
While-writing
Correction codes:
Spelling and punctuation mistakes
Wrong sentences
Beautiful sentences
Transitional sentences
Conjunction words
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For you to consider Objectives-focus on structure ,content,grammar &language Self-check Group
check Teacher’s assess-ment
Structure
and
content I have organized my writing into_________ paragraphs. (1 point)
Para : I have led to the topic to
introduce the event. (1 point)
Para : I have written the process including what, where, how, when and why
(3 points)
Para : I have showed my feelings (1 point)
My writing is tidy and clear. (1 point)
3
1
1
1
2
4
3
1
1
1
Grammar and language I have used the simple past tense correctly. (3 points)
I have used some linking words and transitional sentences to make my passage fluent. (1 point)
I have checked the spelling of the uncertain words by using a dictionary or asking my teacher.(1 point.)
I have used some beautiful sentences and some clauses. (1 point)
I have checked my word count is around .(1 point)
Total score
3
1
1
1
15
80
1
Sharing Time
Evaluate(评价) your group members’ compositions, then show them to the class.
Focus on: 1. structure(结构)
2. handwriting(书写)
3. points(要点)
4. grammar(语法)
5. language(语言)
6.fluency( 流畅）
Post-writing
Summary
1.Person
2.Tense
3.Text
4. Details
5.Structure
Before writing
Focus on
Summary
Evaluation
1. structure
2. handwriting
3. points
4. grammar
5. language
6.fluency
Focus on
Think about how to improve your writing in the second draft.
Finish the second draft.
Post-writing
Sample
The most important thing that I will never forget is last term's soccer
competition in our school. Let me tell you something about it.
At first, my best friend Li Lei was in the team. I was going to cheer him up.
Because I woke up late, the competition started when I left home. But I was still
making my way to school. Unluckily, when I got to the bus stop, I realized that my
bag was still at home! While I was running back home. I saw an old woman by
the side of the road and she was lost. Then I asked her where she was going, she
said she would visit her son in the city and couldn't find the way. Finally I gave
her the directions and took her there. When I got back to school, the competition
had ended.
Although I missed the great soccer competition, I was happy because I did the
right thing. What a meaningful day I had!
