Unit1 解透单元写作
主题写作——正确看待自我
1.写作任务
假设你是晨光中学的高中生李华。你校拟选拔一批优秀学生,利用暑期到晨曦希望小学为学生辅导英语,你希望参加此活动。请根据以下提示,用英语给校评选组写一封申请信。
(1)对此活动的认识(如对本人、学生及社会的益处等);
(2)个人优势(如性格、独立生活能力、语言能力等);
(3)你的计划(如怎样进行辅导等)。
注意:
(1)词数80左右;
(2)可适当增加细节,以使内容充实、行文连贯;
(3)信的开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。
参考词汇:晨曦希望小学 Chenxi Hope Primary School Dear Sir or Madam,
I am Li Hua from Class One, Senior Two. I’m so excited about the news that our school will hold an activity to help the students in Chenxi Hope Primary School.____
__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Please reply soon. I’m eager for the chance to come.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
2.写作构思
(1)一审:确定写作体裁和主题
体裁:应用文
主题:申请到晨曦希望小学辅导学生
(2)二定:确定时态和人称
时态:以一般现在时态为主,也会用到一般将来时
人称:以第一人称为主
(3)三明确:明确写作要点
内容要求:
a.简要自我介绍、阐述对此活动的认识并提出去辅导学生的申请;
b.结合写作要点介绍个人优势(如性格、独立生活能力、语言能力等);
c.结合写作要点阐述你的计划(如怎样进行辅导等);
d.结束语。
词数要求:80左右。
(4)四分段
结合要点分为四个段落。
3.素材整理
(1)关键词语
①申请做某事 apply to do sth
②从……中受益 benefit from
③促进社会和谐 promote social harmony
④提高某人的能力 improve one’s ability
⑥熟练掌握英语 have a good command of English
⑥独立的 independent
⑦乐意沟通的 communicative
⑧热心的warm-hearted
⑨被招收 be accepted
⑩加倍努力地做好……double one’s efforts to do...well
(2)重要句型
①这不仅会使那里的学生受益,还会让我们自己和整个社会受益。
Not only will the students there benefit from it,but(also we and the whole society will.
②我毫不犹豫地向你推荐我自己。
I recommend myself to you without hesitation.
③独立、乐意沟通的能力也是我的突出优点,而且我有和七至十二岁小孩相处的经验。
Independent and communicative abilities also make/let me stand out among others. And I also have experience of working/getting along with children aged from 7 to 12.
④如果我有幸被招收,我将会加倍努力帮助更多贫穷的孩子们。
a. If I’m luckily accepted,I'll double my efforts in order to do more favor to the poor children.
b. If luckily accepted,I’ll double my efforts in order to do more favor to children in need.
4.满分作文
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am Li Hua from Class One, Senior Two. I’m so excited about the news that our school will hold an activity to help the students in Chenxi Hope Primary School.Not only will the students there benefit from it, but (also) we and the whole society will. Moreover, it can offer a good opportunity to improve our ability and promote social harmony. Hopefully, I recommend myself to you without hesitation.
As a warm-hearted person, I’m ready to help those in need. Independent and communicative abilities also make me stand out among others. More importantly, I have a good command of English and have experience of working with children aged from 7 to 12.
If I’m luckily accepted, I’ll double my efforts in order to do more favor to the poor children.
Please reply soon. I’m eager for the chance to come.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
亮点点评
①内容要点简洁全面,结构清晰,分段合理。
②人称、时态运用恰当。
③高级句式和复杂句表达精准,如状语从句和倒装句的运用,为文章提升了档次。
5.佳作背诵
(1)佳作一
假定你是李华,得知你的外国笔友 Peter获得了“汉语桥”中文演讲比赛一等奖。你为他感到骄傲,请给他写一封祝贺信。内容如下:
①取得成就的原因(努力与坚持);
②继续努力;
③希望见面和交流。
注意:①词数80左右;
②可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;
③开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。
参考词汇:“汉语桥”中文演讲比赛the “Chinese bridge” Chinese speech contest
Dear Peter,
How is everything going with you recently ______________________________
__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Sincere congratulations to you again!
Yours ,
Li Hua
One possible version:
Dear Peter,
How is everything going with you recently I am more than delighted to hear that you won first prize of the “Chinese Bridge” Chinese speech contest. Please accept my sincere congratulations on your achievement.
As we all know, it is your hard work and persistence that lead you to the current success. In the past few months, you have been devoting time and efforts to practicing Chinese every day, because of which you have made great progress. But in order to achieve more in your study and embrace a better future in your life, you’d better go on studying Chinese harder. I feel like seeing you and communicating with you soon.
Sincere congratulations to you again!
Yours ,
Li Hua
(2)佳作二
一家英语报社向中学生征文,主题是“十年后的我”。请根据下列要点,以李华的名义给报社编辑写一封电子邮件,谈一谈你的畅想。
①家庭;②工作;③业余生活。
注意:①词数80左右;
②可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;
③开头和结尾已为你写好,不计入总词数。
Dear Editor,
I’m writing to you to tell about what my life will be like in ten years.__________
__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Yours ,
Li Hua
One possible version:
Dear Editor,
I’m writing to you to tell about what my life will be like in ten years.
I think my life will be very different in ten years. I will be twenty-eight years old by then. I will have my own family, probably with lovely children. I’ll work in a computer company as a program designer. I’ll enjoy my work and get along well with my colleagues. I’ll do a good job in whatever I do in my free time. I’ll continue to take regular exercise, such as swimming, running and various ball games. On my holidays, I’ll travel around the world.
In a word, my life will be much richer and more colorful.
Yours ,
Li Hua