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读后续写：如何描写对话（解析版）
“对话”何时用？如何写？写多少？写哪里？听完今天的讲解，你会有一个比较明晰的答案。
首先注意下面几个要点：
1）对话的描述一定要以推进剧情为目的，是情节发展的一个环节，每段出现一两句即可；
2）对话描写必须反映人物的心理与情感，展现人物的性格；
3）对话描写不宜过长，要侧重口语化词汇，避开生僻词汇；
4）对话描写要尽可能结合动作描写，明确对谁说，具有画面感；
5）对话描写中要学会使用几个感叹词，加强表示说话人的喜、怒、哀、乐等情绪；
Part 1对话标签的三个位置
她说，“我想和你一起去，但我还没有完成家庭作业。”这句话用英语，从句式结构的角度来看，怎么表达呢？特别是对话标签she said的位置变化。
1. 对话标签在前
She said,“I would like to go with you, but I haven’t finished my homework.”
2. 对话标签在后
“I would like to go with you, but I haven’t finished my homework.”She said.
这两句是最常见的形式，大家写出来，应该问题不大。我们来看第三种形式。
3. 对话标签在句子中间
“I would like to go with you,”she said, “but I haven’t finished my homework.”
注意：对话标签在后或者在句子中间时（第2,3种情况），如果主语是名词，则可以倒装。而代词不可以倒装，said she是错误的。
“I would like to go with you, but I haven’t finished my homework.”said Emily（或者Emily said.）
“I would like to go with you,”said Emily/ Emily said, “but I haven’t finished my homework.”
Part 2 读后续写对话"四大误区"
1. 废话连篇，对情节发展和刻画人物性格没有帮助。
“Hey, how are you ” “I’m fine, how are you ”
“How is the weather ” “Terrific! Nice day for a walk, isn’t it ”
这样的对话在现实生活中很真实，但是小说毕竟是艺术加工，无助情节推动的，不能刻画人物性格的日常寒暄和偏离文章主线的对话绝对不用。
2.追求花哨，过度使用对话标签
“That is fantastic news,” he said happily.
此句中完全没有必要加上一个happily来表达说的方式，因为句中的fantastic一词足以说明说话人了表情，过度强调 会让读者的注意力集中在“说话的方式”而不是“说话的内容”。
建议改为：“That is fantastic news！” he said/screamed/exclaimed. 一个感叹号和一个fantastic已经足以让读者想象当时的情景。适当的“艺术留白”也是需要的，这样会留给读者想象的空间。
还有一种避免过度的dialogue tags的方法是运用“动作描写”，尤其是表情上动作来取而代之。如：
Her eyes reflected the candlelight as she smiled at her son. “Everyone is unique. Just follow your heart and be yourself!”当她对儿子微笑时，她的眼睛反射着烛光。 “每个人都是独一无二的。 只要跟随你的心，做你自己！”
3 用词不当，错误使用对话标签
"I can't believe it," Emma gasped. (gasp意思为“喘气”)
"That's funny," Henry chuckled. (chuckled.意思为“轻笑”)
评析：以上两句话也是在大量的学生习作中发现的。这里把动作描写和动作标签 混淆了，试想谁能gasp（喘息）、chuckle（轻笑）出一句话？除非他或她有特异功能。纠正方法如下：
"I can't believe it," Emma said with a gasp.
（对话标签Emma said+ with介词短语）
Emma gasped. "I can't believe it."
（动作描写+句号）
"I can't believe it." Emma gasped.
（对话句+动作描写,注意对话句式句号）
"That's funny!" Henry chuckled.
（感叹句结束+动作描写）
"That's funny," Henry said, chuckling.
（Question tag+ 分词做伴随状况）
请特别关注以上对话的标点符号。
4 对话标签多此一举：对话对象十分明确，仍使用对话标签
“I told you already,” I said, glaring.
评析：此句貌似豪华，其实对话中的主语“I”已经清晰地说明了说话者，完全没有必要用对话标签“I said” 来说明说话对象。纠正方法：加上一点动作描写就可以避免这种错误，并且提升语言的生动性。
I glared at him. “I told you already.”
Part 3 让你的对话标签不平庸四个小技巧
在对话标签中加入语气，嗓音，情感让你的描写更生动传神。
①第一种：加语气
“I would love to,” said Emily in a pleasant tone. “我很乐意这样做，”艾米丽用一种愉快的语气说。
这里用到了“in a pleasant tone. ”，即“用一种愉快的语气”，基本结构为：in a/an+形容词+tone
如： in a pleasant愉悦的/firm坚定的/rude粗鲁的/sad悲伤的 tone
也可以用 in a tone of +名词的搭配，如：
in a tone of surprise用一种惊讶的语气
in a tone of curiosity用一种好奇的语气
in a tone of impatience用一种不耐烦的语气
in a tone of command用一种命令的语气
② 第二种：加嗓音
“I didn’t mean to,” she murmured in a low voice. “我不是故意的，”她低声说。
这里用到了“ in a low voice”，即“小声地说道”或者“用一种...声音”，基本结构是： in a/an+形容词+voice
如： in a high /low / sweet/loud/soft /weak voice 用一个高/低/甜/响亮/软/弱的声音
③第三种：加情感
“I...I.. don’t think I’m right for the part,”I replied with embarrassment.“我...我..认为我不适合这个角色，”我尴尬地回答。
这里用到了“ with embarrassment”，即“（伴随着）难堪”，基本结构是： with +情感名词。如with excitement （伴随着）激动。
④加副词
“我再也不会那样做了，”我回答。如何丰富这句话里的对话标签呢？
“I will never do that again,” I answered firmly. 加上了副词firmly（坚定地）
这句话也可以这么写：可将副词提到句首。
Firmly，I answered，“I will never do that again.”
分析对话实例
Example 1
原文内容：作者爸爸在阳台种植康乃馨，悉心呵护，作者一家都非常喜欢这些花。爸妈再三强调不允许作者和他姐姐触碰这些花。
To our surprise, Dad was mad about it, yelling at us,“Don't you know touching is not allowed What on earth have you done "
赏析:反意疑问句和on earth的使用加强了语气，凸显了父亲的生气。
Example 2
原文内容：母亲去世，哥哥外出。父女相约吃饭，引发了女儿对母亲和哥哥的思念，父亲读懂了女儿内心的想法，安慰女儿:母亲在天堂一定希望他们过得快乐，现在他们需要做的就是珍惜身边的人。
Seeing this, my father lovingly held my hands and said to me,“Sweetheart, I believe your mother must want you to live happily, so say goodbye to the past and embrace the present. Your brother and I will always be with you."
赏析:情感类的对话要求感人，触及内心，这点此对话做得不错。但是小编也要对此对话提出两点建议:①文中的and said to me可删去，因为对话对象非常清楚，肯定是和我说。②文中的your mother显得太疏远，亲人间相互称呼用Mom即可，这样更真实，贴近生活。
Example 3
原文内容：作者家里突然停电，虽然弟弟觉得停电期间非常无聊，但是作者却非常享受停电的时间，享受“没有现代电子科技带来的干扰的”宁静片刻。
Buzz! The lights return.“Yeah, no more candles!" My mother yells, pulling me away from my fantasy.
赏析:对话简洁自然，表达了说话者恢复用电时候的兴奋，对话外的词汇用得也很出色，分词的使用既丰富了语言也推动了情节的进一步发展。
Example 4
原文内容：主人公Jenny通过自身的劳动获得了心爱的项链，形影不离。父亲每日给她讲睡前故事。父亲故意试探女儿，问是否可以把项链给他。Jenny深爱爸爸但不舍得自己努力得来的项链。
A week later, her father once again asked Jenny after her story.“Jenny, you love me, don't you Give me your pearls, okay " "Daddy, why must you ask for the pearls " Jenny refused again.“Not only did I finish all those chores, but also I spent the dollar bill given for my birthday just to pay for it." They both fell into silence. Then her father smiled, comforting her with a warm hug.“That's okay, darling. Good night.'
Several days later, when Jenny's father came in to read her a story as usual, he was surprised to find something under the story book, which turned out to be the necklace.“Daddy, now you can have it." Jenny raised her head,“You know, I love you." Her father was moved beyond words. Slowly, he pulled something out of his pocket. It was a pretty necklace with real pearls shining.“The more you are willing to give, the more you are likely to receive. That's the real meaning of sharing and giving." Her father helped Jenny put on the necklace.
“You know, I love you, little one."
赏析:此文运用了大量的对话，主要是考虑到与前文的协同。大量的父女间的对话穿插一些旁白或动作描写很好地刻画了人物之间的冲突，细腻生动地刻画了人物心情。一般的读后续写不建议用太多的对话。适当的对话可以打破单调，推动情节，刻画人物性格。
对于此文中的对话，小编也想提出一些建议:①"Not only did I finish all those chores, but also I spent the dollar bill given for my birthday just to pay for it."此句似乎为了使用not only...,.
but also的倒装句型而写对话，显得很不自然。语句太长反而不能表达小女孩当时的生气。建议改为“It's mine! My efforts!"会显得更加简洁自然，同样起到了表达效果，符合人在生气时候的说话方式:短句、不完整句!②"Jenny raised her head,"此处的逗号要改为句号。此句只能作为动作描写，而不能当作用来引出对话的句子。
Part 4 素材积累：好词好句赏析
He stiffened(僵硬) for seconds and then shuffled (拖曳、慢慢走) his feet forward, eyes red with fury(愤怒) but without any fear or hesitation.
2. George and I stood there dumbfounded(哑然失声的，发楞的) watching him finishing the whole job, gratitude and admiration rushing in my heart（感激和仰慕涌入我心）.
3. Hearing the bad news, Mary fainted away on the spot and fell into unconsciousness.(当场晕倒，陷入昏迷)
4. His eyes widened further and his mouth opened. He took a huge breath as if winded（喘不过气）. He looked tortured-vulnerable. 他的眼睛瞪大了，嘴巴张开。他深深地吸了一口气仿佛呼吸困难，他看起来饱受折磨，非常脆弱。
5. Approaching me with a great deal of obvious discomfort, Tommy looked up at me with pleading（乞求的）eyes.
6. There was a light touch on my hand; looking down, I saw my son looking at me, curious.我感觉到有人轻轻碰触我的手；低头一看，是我的儿子好奇地在看我。
7. Every knock on the door fills me with expectation(让我充满期待). I immediately picture him walking through(想象某人做某事) the door.
8. He looked out of the window, biting his lips, as if thinking.他一边看着窗外，一边咬着嘴唇，仿佛在思考。
9. At the sight of the ferocious wolf, I was seized by a strong sense of horror and my palms were sweating. (被深深地恐惧感所控制，手心出汗)
10. Upon hearing the bad news, her heart ached, tears streaming down her cheeks. (心痛，眼泪直流)
积累相关的said 的词汇来避免过度使用said，比如：
愤怒时说可以用:shouted, yelled, barked, warned etc.；
羡慕地说admired；
安慰地说comforted；
激动地说可以用: shouted, yelled, exclaimed etc.；
坚定地说 declared；
坚持说insisted；
命令说 commanded；
警告说warned etc.
高兴地说可以用:smiled, screamed, cheered, laughed etc.；
悲伤地说可以用: cried, mumbled, sobbed, sighed etc.；
嘲笑说sneered；
责备说scolded；
要求说demanded；
威胁说 threatened；
开玩笑地说: teased, joked；
笑着说可以用:laughed, giggled, roared etc.；
继续说: continued；
强调说emphasized；
回忆说remembered, recalled；
最后说/总结说concluded。
Part 5综合演练：
（2022·广东·汕头市聿怀中学模拟预测）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
On a bright, warm July afternoon, Mac Hollan, a primary school teacher, was cycling from his home to Alaska with his friends. One of his friends had stopped to make a bicycle repair, but they had encouraged Mac to carry on, and they would catch up with him soon. As Mac pedaled (骑行) along alone, he thought fondly of his wife and two young daughters at home. He hoped to show them this beautiful place someday.
Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him. “Man, that's a big dog!” he thought. But when he looked to the side, he saw instantly that it wasn’t a dog at all, but a wolf, quickly catching up with him.
Mac’s heart jumped. He found out his can of hear spray. With one hand on the bars, he fired the spray at the wolf. A bright red cloud enveloped the animal, and to Mac's relief, it fell back, shaking its head. But a minute later, it was by his side again. Then it attacked the back of Mac's bike, tearing open his tent bag. He fired at the wolf a second time, and again, it fell back only to quickly restart the chase (追赶).
Mac was pedaling hard now. He waved and yelled at passing cars but was careful not to slow down. He saw a steep uphill climb before him. He knew that once he hit the hill, he’d be easy caught up and the wolf’s teeth would be tearing into his flesh.
At this moment, Paul and Becky were driving their car on their way to Alaska. They didn’t think much of it when they saw two cyclists repairing their bike on the side of the road. A bit later, they spotted what they, too, assumed was a dog running alongside a man on a bike. As they got closer, they realized that the dog was a wolf. Mac heard a large vehicle behind him. He pulled in front of it as the wolf was catching up fast, just a dozen yards away now.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头已为你写好；
Paragraph 1:
The car abruptly stopped in front of him.
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A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived.
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（2022·江苏·南京市第一中学一模）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Henry got on his bike and began to deliver copies of the March 8,1970,issue of The Gazette. Half an hour later,he threw the last newspaper onto the porch（门廊）at 35 Oak Street and cycled to The Gazette offices. There must be something important for the editor in chief to meet with an 11-year-old paperboy.
"No good way to deliver bad news,"Mr. Trotta greeted him when Henry stepped in.Henry's smile faded.
"We're closing shop,Henry. Advertising is down.Television is how people get their news today. Local papers are the first to close."Mr.Trotta shrugged.
Henry couldn’t believe his ears, frozen to the spot.He thought of all hose people he had met on his route. They wouldn't get their neighborhood news anymore!
You were great,Henry—always dependable"Mr. Trotta said.Henry forced his head up to say good-bye.
As he rode past the houses he knew so well he saw Mr.Grady on his porch,holding a broom（扫帚）. Henry led him to a chair and cleaned the porch.They sat for a while as Mr.Grady recalled how happy he'd been moving his family to 10 Oak. He sounded lonely.
A week after his last deliveries, Henry wondered if his customers missed The Gazette as much as he did. He thought of a way to find out. He started out on his old route with a notebook
Henry stopped at Mrs.Burke's. She opened the door, holding the two babies.She asked him if he knew any neighbors with experience of looking after children.
Mr. Simon was next door, carrying his violin out."Hey, Henry. My band is having à concert in the park this Friday. Tell all your friends."
As Henry made more notes, an idea started forming in his head. Maybe he could create a newsy page（小报）for the neighbors.
注意∶
1. 续写词数应为 150 左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Neighbors cheered Henry's idea,ready to offer information.
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Henry's first Oak Street News then produced desired effects.
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（2022·重庆市育才中学一模）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Chris Dykstra hadn’t expected what began as a casual walk around the neighborhood with the family one night led to a journey of friendship.
Chris Dykstra, a traffic manager in Shorewood, Illinois had noticed a few raccoons (浣熊) wandering around his garbage. However, he didn’t think too much of it. One night when his wife Julie was taking their four children for a walk after dinner, they tracked the raccoons back to their neighbor’s roof. A further investigation showed that the raccoons had chewed a hole in the neighbor’s roof and were living in her attic (阁楼).
The couple had lived in their current home for five years. Yet they had very little contact with the neighbor. They knew her first name was Dorene and that she liked to watch their children play in the backyard, and that’s about it.
Concerned for their neighbor’s well-being, Julie decided to knock on the door to make their neighbor aware of the raccoons living in the attic. Julie knocked on the door and rang the doorbell, but no one answered. She decided to ask the local police department to do a wellness check on their neighbor.
Two police officers and an animal control officer visited the neighbor’s home to conduct a wellness check. This time the neighbor — Miss Dorene Shock — opened the door. Miss Shock was surprised to see someone check in on her. The officers made her aware of the raccoons in her attic.
Having been told the whole thing, Miss Shock welcomed Julie into her house. After touring the house, Julie learned that Miss Shock lived a poor life. Her home barely had any furniture, and she even didn’t have a TV set. Besides, her house was in need of additional repairs and updates including new light bulbs.
注意：1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Chris and his wife knew this was an opportunity to help a neighbor in need.
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Several days later, Chris and his wife came across Miss Shock and had a chat with her.
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读后续写模拟专练
读后续写 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
One Sunday last year, eight of us hiked for a couple of hours through the desert near San Diego to reach Thunder Canyon Cave. We had to abseil(沿绳滑下)through an icy waterfall to get inside, so we put on our wet suits and lowered ourselves 30 feet down. By 11:00 a.m. we were inside. After we climbed further, we reached a nine-inch crack. Having moved for four hours, I was tired and wet.
The group leader, Luca, was guiding three cavers. One of them, Steve got stuck in the crack. There was 10 minutes of pulling and pushing until Steve was free. He was tired and needed to leave. Luca, assuming I’d been through the crack before, guided Steve through the cave for another 15 minutes to an exit. I was second from last to go through. I didn’t realize that Luca wasn’t there — if I’d known, I wouldn’t have attempted the crack, as I needed an experienced guide.
The challenge is to put your feet first down the length of the crack, and then move your body sideways to swing along, before dropping five feet to the floor of the next space. On my first attempt, I knew I wouldn’t make it through, but the group encouraged me to try again. I didn’t want to inconvenience anyone by having to make the long trip back through the cave, so I backed out and took off my wetsuit. In just my T-shirt, I tried to slide through again but my hips(屁股)were trapped. My feet were hanging on the other side and my left arm supported my body. My hand rested on a wooden board that had been left covering boulders(大圆石) to protect cavers from slipping. Luca returned and the team tried everything to shift me as I mentally focused on escape.
After two hours my arm weakened, so I slid further into the crack, where the gap was only 8.5 inches wide. My body weight was on my left hand, my back and chest touching the cold stone walls. The guy behind me, Jim, tried unsuccessfully to pull me back. Of course, I was blocking his escape, too.
注意：
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph1:
With the risk of the low body temperature, the group supplied me with their own jackets.
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Paragraph2:
After eight hours, Luca found the rescue team.
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翻译小练习：
1. 然而，它们毫无用处。我又惊又累，在梦幻般的状态中忽进忽出。
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2. 吉姆想开玩笑让我睡不着觉。
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3. 随着时间的流逝，我能让它活下来的信念逐渐消失。
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4. 注意到这一点，卢卡决定求助于救援队。
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5. 他们一到，队伍就开始检查现场。
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________6. 他们试图抬高我手旁边的木板把我拉出来，但没有成功。
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________7. 卢卡不停地鼓励我，而救援队则用特殊的工具钻孔，甚至摩擦岩石的一部分来使我的臀部自由。
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________8. 在他们的帮助下，我设法移动了脚步，爬出了缝隙。
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________9. 当我被送到最近的医院时，我激动得差点忘了感谢所有的人。
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读后续写：如何描写对话（解析版）
“对话”何时用？如何写？写多少？写哪里？听完今天的讲解，你会有一个比较明晰的答案。
首先注意下面几个要点：
1）对话的描述一定要以推进剧情为目的，是情节发展的一个环节，每段出现一两句即可；
2）对话描写必须反映人物的心理与情感，展现人物的性格；
3）对话描写不宜过长，要侧重口语化词汇，避开生僻词汇；
4）对话描写要尽可能结合动作描写，明确对谁说，具有画面感；
5）对话描写中要学会使用几个感叹词，加强表示说话人的喜、怒、哀、乐等情绪；
Part 1对话标签的三个位置
她说，“我想和你一起去，但我还没有完成家庭作业。”这句话用英语，从句式结构的角度来看，怎么表达呢？特别是对话标签she said的位置变化。
1. 对话标签在前
She said,“I would like to go with you, but I haven’t finished my homework.”
2. 对话标签在后
“I would like to go with you, but I haven’t finished my homework.”She said.
这两句是最常见的形式，大家写出来，应该问题不大。我们来看第三种形式。
3. 对话标签在句子中间
“I would like to go with you,”she said, “but I haven’t finished my homework.”
注意：对话标签在后或者在句子中间时（第2,3种情况），如果主语是名词，则可以倒装。而代词不可以倒装，said she是错误的。
“I would like to go with you, but I haven’t finished my homework.”said Emily（或者Emily said.）
“I would like to go with you,”said Emily/ Emily said, “but I haven’t finished my homework.”
Part 2 读后续写对话"四大误区"
1. 废话连篇，对情节发展和刻画人物性格没有帮助。
“Hey, how are you ” “I’m fine, how are you ”
“How is the weather ” “Terrific! Nice day for a walk, isn’t it ”
这样的对话在现实生活中很真实，但是小说毕竟是艺术加工，无助情节推动的，不能刻画人物性格的日常寒暄和偏离文章主线的对话绝对不用。
2.追求花哨，过度使用对话标签
“That is fantastic news,” he said happily.
此句中完全没有必要加上一个happily来表达说的方式，因为句中的fantastic一词足以说明说话人了表情，过度强调 会让读者的注意力集中在“说话的方式”而不是“说话的内容”。
建议改为：“That is fantastic news！” he said/screamed/exclaimed. 一个感叹号和一个fantastic已经足以让读者想象当时的情景。适当的“艺术留白”也是需要的，这样会留给读者想象的空间。
还有一种避免过度的dialogue tags的方法是运用“动作描写”，尤其是表情上动作来取而代之。如：
Her eyes reflected the candlelight as she smiled at her son. “Everyone is unique. Just follow your heart and be yourself!”当她对儿子微笑时，她的眼睛反射着烛光。 “每个人都是独一无二的。 只要跟随你的心，做你自己！”
3 用词不当，错误使用对话标签
"I can't believe it," Emma gasped. (gasp意思为“喘气”)
"That's funny," Henry chuckled. (chuckled.意思为“轻笑”)
评析：以上两句话也是在大量的学生习作中发现的。这里把动作描写和动作标签 混淆了，试想谁能gasp（喘息）、chuckle（轻笑）出一句话？除非他或她有特异功能。纠正方法如下：
"I can't believe it," Emma said with a gasp.
（对话标签Emma said+ with介词短语）
Emma gasped. "I can't believe it."
（动作描写+句号）
"I can't believe it." Emma gasped.
（对话句+动作描写,注意对话句式句号）
"That's funny!" Henry chuckled.
（感叹句结束+动作描写）
"That's funny," Henry said, chuckling.
（Question tag+ 分词做伴随状况）
请特别关注以上对话的标点符号。
4 对话标签多此一举：对话对象十分明确，仍使用对话标签
“I told you already,” I said, glaring.
评析：此句貌似豪华，其实对话中的主语“I”已经清晰地说明了说话者，完全没有必要用对话标签“I said” 来说明说话对象。纠正方法：加上一点动作描写就可以避免这种错误，并且提升语言的生动性。
I glared at him. “I told you already.”
Part 3 让你的对话标签不平庸四个小技巧
在对话标签中加入语气，嗓音，情感让你的描写更生动传神。
①第一种：加语气
“I would love to,” said Emily in a pleasant tone. “我很乐意这样做，”艾米丽用一种愉快的语气说。
这里用到了“in a pleasant tone. ”，即“用一种愉快的语气”，基本结构为：in a/an+形容词+tone
如： in a pleasant愉悦的/firm坚定的/rude粗鲁的/sad悲伤的 tone
也可以用 in a tone of +名词的搭配，如：
in a tone of surprise用一种惊讶的语气
in a tone of curiosity用一种好奇的语气
in a tone of impatience用一种不耐烦的语气
in a tone of command用一种命令的语气
② 第二种：加嗓音
“I didn’t mean to,” she murmured in a low voice. “我不是故意的，”她低声说。
这里用到了“ in a low voice”，即“小声地说道”或者“用一种...声音”，基本结构是： in a/an+形容词+voice
如： in a high /low / sweet/loud/soft /weak voice 用一个高/低/甜/响亮/软/弱的声音
③第三种：加情感
“I...I.. don’t think I’m right for the part,”I replied with embarrassment.“我...我..认为我不适合这个角色，”我尴尬地回答。
这里用到了“ with embarrassment”，即“（伴随着）难堪”，基本结构是： with +情感名词。如with excitement （伴随着）激动。
④加副词
“我再也不会那样做了，”我回答。如何丰富这句话里的对话标签呢？
“I will never do that again,” I answered firmly. 加上了副词firmly（坚定地）
这句话也可以这么写：可将副词提到句首。
Firmly，I answered，“I will never do that again.”
分析对话实例
Example 1
原文内容：作者爸爸在阳台种植康乃馨，悉心呵护，作者一家都非常喜欢这些花。爸妈再三强调不允许作者和他姐姐触碰这些花。
To our surprise, Dad was mad about it, yelling at us,“Don't you know touching is not allowed What on earth have you done "
赏析:反意疑问句和on earth的使用加强了语气，凸显了父亲的生气。
Example 2
原文内容：母亲去世，哥哥外出。父女相约吃饭，引发了女儿对母亲和哥哥的思念，父亲读懂了女儿内心的想法，安慰女儿:母亲在天堂一定希望他们过得快乐，现在他们需要做的就是珍惜身边的人。
Seeing this, my father lovingly held my hands and said to me,“Sweetheart, I believe your mother must want you to live happily, so say goodbye to the past and embrace the present. Your brother and I will always be with you."
赏析:情感类的对话要求感人，触及内心，这点此对话做得不错。但是小编也要对此对话提出两点建议:①文中的and said to me可删去，因为对话对象非常清楚，肯定是和我说。②文中的your mother显得太疏远，亲人间相互称呼用Mom即可，这样更真实，贴近生活。
Example 3
原文内容：作者家里突然停电，虽然弟弟觉得停电期间非常无聊，但是作者却非常享受停电的时间，享受“没有现代电子科技带来的干扰的”宁静片刻。
Buzz! The lights return.“Yeah, no more candles!" My mother yells, pulling me away from my fantasy.
赏析:对话简洁自然，表达了说话者恢复用电时候的兴奋，对话外的词汇用得也很出色，分词的使用既丰富了语言也推动了情节的进一步发展。
Example 4
原文内容：主人公Jenny通过自身的劳动获得了心爱的项链，形影不离。父亲每日给她讲睡前故事。父亲故意试探女儿，问是否可以把项链给他。Jenny深爱爸爸但不舍得自己努力得来的项链。
A week later, her father once again asked Jenny after her story.“Jenny, you love me, don't you Give me your pearls, okay " "Daddy, why must you ask for the pearls " Jenny refused again.“Not only did I finish all those chores, but also I spent the dollar bill given for my birthday just to pay for it." They both fell into silence. Then her father smiled, comforting her with a warm hug.“That's okay, darling. Good night.'
Several days later, when Jenny's father came in to read her a story as usual, he was surprised to find something under the story book, which turned out to be the necklace.“Daddy, now you can have it." Jenny raised her head,“You know, I love you." Her father was moved beyond words. Slowly, he pulled something out of his pocket. It was a pretty necklace with real pearls shining.“The more you are willing to give, the more you are likely to receive. That's the real meaning of sharing and giving." Her father helped Jenny put on the necklace.
“You know, I love you, little one."
赏析:此文运用了大量的对话，主要是考虑到与前文的协同。大量的父女间的对话穿插一些旁白或动作描写很好地刻画了人物之间的冲突，细腻生动地刻画了人物心情。一般的读后续写不建议用太多的对话。适当的对话可以打破单调，推动情节，刻画人物性格。
对于此文中的对话，小编也想提出一些建议:①"Not only did I finish all those chores, but also I spent the dollar bill given for my birthday just to pay for it."此句似乎为了使用not only...,.
but also的倒装句型而写对话，显得很不自然。语句太长反而不能表达小女孩当时的生气。建议改为“It's mine! My efforts!"会显得更加简洁自然，同样起到了表达效果，符合人在生气时候的说话方式:短句、不完整句!②"Jenny raised her head,"此处的逗号要改为句号。此句只能作为动作描写，而不能当作用来引出对话的句子。
Part 4 素材积累：好词好句赏析
He stiffened(僵硬) for seconds and then shuffled (拖曳、慢慢走) his feet forward, eyes red with fury(愤怒) but without any fear or hesitation.
2. George and I stood there dumbfounded(哑然失声的，发楞的) watching him finishing the whole job, gratitude and admiration rushing in my heart（感激和仰慕涌入我心）.
3. Hearing the bad news, Mary fainted away on the spot and fell into unconsciousness.(当场晕倒，陷入昏迷)
4. His eyes widened further and his mouth opened. He took a huge breath as if winded（喘不过气）. He looked tortured-vulnerable. 他的眼睛瞪大了，嘴巴张开。他深深地吸了一口气仿佛呼吸困难，他看起来饱受折磨，非常脆弱。
5. Approaching me with a great deal of obvious discomfort, Tommy looked up at me with pleading（乞求的）eyes.
6. There was a light touch on my hand; looking down, I saw my son looking at me, curious.我感觉到有人轻轻碰触我的手；低头一看，是我的儿子好奇地在看我。
7. Every knock on the door fills me with expectation(让我充满期待). I immediately picture him walking through(想象某人做某事) the door.
8. He looked out of the window, biting his lips, as if thinking.他一边看着窗外，一边咬着嘴唇，仿佛在思考。
9. At the sight of the ferocious wolf, I was seized by a strong sense of horror and my palms were sweating. (被深深地恐惧感所控制，手心出汗)
10. Upon hearing the bad news, her heart ached, tears streaming down her cheeks. (心痛，眼泪直流)
积累相关的said 的词汇来避免过度使用said，比如：
愤怒时说可以用:shouted, yelled, barked, warned etc.；
羡慕地说admired；
安慰地说comforted；
激动地说可以用: shouted, yelled, exclaimed etc.；
坚定地说 declared；
坚持说insisted；
命令说 commanded；
警告说warned etc.
高兴地说可以用:smiled, screamed, cheered, laughed etc.；
悲伤地说可以用: cried, mumbled, sobbed, sighed etc.；
嘲笑说sneered；
责备说scolded；
要求说demanded；
威胁说 threatened；
开玩笑地说: teased, joked；
笑着说可以用:laughed, giggled, roared etc.；
继续说: continued；
强调说emphasized；
回忆说remembered, recalled；
最后说/总结说concluded。
Part 5综合演练：
（2022·广东·汕头市聿怀中学模拟预测）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
On a bright, warm July afternoon, Mac Hollan, a primary school teacher, was cycling from his home to Alaska with his friends. One of his friends had stopped to make a bicycle repair, but they had encouraged Mac to carry on, and they would catch up with him soon. As Mac pedaled (骑行) along alone, he thought fondly of his wife and two young daughters at home. He hoped to show them this beautiful place someday.
Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him. “Man, that's a big dog!” he thought. But when he looked to the side, he saw instantly that it wasn’t a dog at all, but a wolf, quickly catching up with him.
Mac’s heart jumped. He found out his can of hear spray. With one hand on the bars, he fired the spray at the wolf. A bright red cloud enveloped the animal, and to Mac's relief, it fell back, shaking its head. But a minute later, it was by his side again. Then it attacked the back of Mac's bike, tearing open his tent bag. He fired at the wolf a second time, and again, it fell back only to quickly restart the chase (追赶).
Mac was pedaling hard now. He waved and yelled at passing cars but was careful not to slow down. He saw a steep uphill climb before him. He knew that once he hit the hill, he’d be easy caught up and the wolf’s teeth would be tearing into his flesh.
At this moment, Paul and Becky were driving their car on their way to Alaska. They didn’t think much of it when they saw two cyclists repairing their bike on the side of the road. A bit later, they spotted what they, too, assumed was a dog running alongside a man on a bike. As they got closer, they realized that the dog was a wolf. Mac heard a large vehicle behind him. He pulled in front of it as the wolf was catching up fast, just a dozen yards away now.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头已为你写好；
Paragraph 1:
The car abruptly stopped in front of him.
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A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived.
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参考答案：
The car abruptly stopped in front of him. Seeing Paul wave at him kindly and open the car door for him, Mac jumped off his bicycle and rushed into the car without any hesitation. No sooner had the poor man got in than Paul closed the door instantly. The wolf walked around the car and howled furiously at them, but just in vain. Realizing it couldn’t catch Mac any more, the wolf ultimately gave up and walked away gloomily. On spotting the wolf swallowed by the road, Mac, bathed in perspiration, sighed with relief and sank down to the back seat. Paul handed a bottle of water to Mac, who managed a weak smile, murmuring something like “Thank you”.
A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived. Knowing that Mac had been chased by a wolf, they were stumped for words and paralyzed with fear. The two friends extended their earnest gratitude to Paul for rescuing Mac and then took Mac back home. After such a terrible experience, the splendid landscape of Alaska seemed no longer to be a temptation to them. On the way back home, feeling the light breeze through his hair, Mac felt what happened just now was just a nightmare, but a warm glow flooded into his inner heart as he thought of Paul’s unselfish assistance. The most precious part of humans is their care for each other.
【解析】
【分析】
本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了小学教师麦克·霍兰和朋友们从家里骑车去阿拉斯加。途中他的一个朋友停下来修理自行车，麦克继续骑行，结果突遇一只狼，在最后，被正开车去阿拉斯加保罗和贝基救下的故事。
【详解】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“汽车突然停在他面前。”可知，第一段可描写保罗救了麦克。
②由第二段首句内容“几分钟后，另外两个骑自行车的人来了。”可知，第二段可描写朋友感谢保罗。
2.续写线索：骑行——遇狼——恰逢——援救——感谢
3.词汇激活
行为类
①说不出话：stump for words/words fail sb/be speechless
②回家：go back home/return home
情绪类
①感谢：thank sb for/show one’s appreciation/gratitude/be grateful
②吓呆了：paralyze with fear/be overcome with fright
【点睛】
[高分句型1]：No sooner had the poor man got in than Paul closed the door instantly.这句话运用了no sooner…than的部分倒装结构。
[高分句型2]：Realizing it couldn’t catch Mac any more, the wolf ultimately gave up and walked away gloomily.这句话运用了现在分词作状语的结构。
[高分句型3]：Paul handed a bottle of water to Mac, who managed a weak smile, murmuring something like “Thank you”.这句话运用了who引导的非限制性定语从句。
（2022·江苏·南京市第一中学一模）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Henry got on his bike and began to deliver copies of the March 8,1970,issue of The Gazette. Half an hour later,he threw the last newspaper onto the porch（门廊）at 35 Oak Street and cycled to The Gazette offices. There must be something important for the editor in chief to meet with an 11-year-old paperboy.
"No good way to deliver bad news,"Mr. Trotta greeted him when Henry stepped in.Henry's smile faded.
"We're closing shop,Henry. Advertising is down.Television is how people get their news today. Local papers are the first to close."Mr.Trotta shrugged.
Henry couldn’t believe his ears, frozen to the spot.He thought of all hose people he had met on his route. They wouldn't get their neighborhood news anymore!
You were great,Henry—always dependable"Mr. Trotta said.Henry forced his head up to say good-bye.
As he rode past the houses he knew so well he saw Mr.Grady on his porch,holding a broom（扫帚）. Henry led him to a chair and cleaned the porch.They sat for a while as Mr.Grady recalled how happy he'd been moving his family to 10 Oak. He sounded lonely.
A week after his last deliveries, Henry wondered if his customers missed The Gazette as much as he did. He thought of a way to find out. He started out on his old route with a notebook
Henry stopped at Mrs.Burke's. She opened the door, holding the two babies.She asked him if he knew any neighbors with experience of looking after children.
Mr. Simon was next door, carrying his violin out."Hey, Henry. My band is having à concert in the park this Friday. Tell all your friends."
As Henry made more notes, an idea started forming in his head. Maybe he could create a newsy page（小报）for the neighbors.
注意∶
1. 续写词数应为 150 左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Neighbors cheered Henry's idea,ready to offer information.
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Henry's first Oak Street News then produced desired effects.
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参考答案：
Neighbors cheered Henry's idea, ready to offer information. Besides Mrs. Burke who longed for a baby sitter and Mr. Simon who desired a large audience for his concert. Henry also collected six other neighbors' appealing and needs, including Mr. Grady who yearned for his children's coming back for a short reunion. Information in hand, Henry knocked at Mr. Trotta's door and pleaded for his support in publishing his first Oak Street News, who approved almost immediately. Soon, Henry's tabloid was in circulation, which he cheerfully delivered from door to door as before.
Henry's first Oak Street News then produced desired effects. Neighbors applauded the idea of sharing their needs in a communal newspaper, which really addressed their immediate concern in a practical and efficient way. As Mrs. Burke successfully found an ideal baby sitter, Mr. Simon secured a large following for his concert and Mr. Grady who happily reunited with his kids, Henry realized, from his deep heart, that The Gazette was far from gone in this TV era, but transformed into Oak Street News that connected, bonded and tied the Oak neighbors in a cozy fabric.
【解析】
【分析】
本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了因为科技的发展，Henry送的报纸《公报》不再营业，想到了那些等待着报纸看新闻的人，Henry决定自己办一份小报给邻居的故事。
【详解】
1.段落续写：
由第一段首句内容“邻居们为亨利的想法欢呼起来，准备提供信息。”可知，第一段可描写邻居们都给小报提供信息，小报出版了。
由第二段首句内容“亨利的第一个橡树街新闻随后产生了预期的效果。”可知，第二段可描写小报给邻居们带来了益处，将邻居们联系在一起。
2.续写线索：邻居提供信息——出版报纸——报纸达到了预期后果——报纸给邻居们带来好处——邻居更团结
3.词汇激活（一个词汇要写出相近的表达）
行为类
①收集：collect/ gather/accumulate
②.支持：approve/accept
③.改变：transform/change
情绪类
①.舒适的：cozy/comfortable.
高兴：happily/ gladly/merrily
【点睛】
[高分句型1]. Besides Mrs. Burke who longed for a baby sitter and Mr. Simon who desired a large audience for his concert.（使用了who引导的定语从句）
[高分句型2]. Soon, Henry's tabloid was in circulation, which he cheerfully delivered from door to door as before.（使用了which引导的定语从句）
[高分句型3]. . Neighbors applauded the idea of sharing their needs in a communal newspaper, which really addressed their immediate concern in a practical and efficient way.（使用了which引导非限制性定语从句）
（2022·重庆市育才中学一模）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Chris Dykstra hadn’t expected what began as a casual walk around the neighborhood with the family one night led to a journey of friendship.
Chris Dykstra, a traffic manager in Shorewood, Illinois had noticed a few raccoons (浣熊) wandering around his garbage. However, he didn’t think too much of it. One night when his wife Julie was taking their four children for a walk after dinner, they tracked the raccoons back to their neighbor’s roof. A further investigation showed that the raccoons had chewed a hole in the neighbor’s roof and were living in her attic (阁楼).
The couple had lived in their current home for five years. Yet they had very little contact with the neighbor. They knew her first name was Dorene and that she liked to watch their children play in the backyard, and that’s about it.
Concerned for their neighbor’s well-being, Julie decided to knock on the door to make their neighbor aware of the raccoons living in the attic. Julie knocked on the door and rang the doorbell, but no one answered. She decided to ask the local police department to do a wellness check on their neighbor.
Two police officers and an animal control officer visited the neighbor’s home to conduct a wellness check. This time the neighbor — Miss Dorene Shock — opened the door. Miss Shock was surprised to see someone check in on her. The officers made her aware of the raccoons in her attic.
Having been told the whole thing, Miss Shock welcomed Julie into her house. After touring the house, Julie learned that Miss Shock lived a poor life. Her home barely had any furniture, and she even didn’t have a TV set. Besides, her house was in need of additional repairs and updates including new light bulbs.
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2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Chris and his wife knew this was an opportunity to help a neighbor in need.
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Several days later, Chris and his wife came across Miss Shock and had a chat with her.
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参考答案：
Chris and his wife knew this was an opportunity to help a neighbor in need. They decided to do something for the neighbor. They agreed to pay for raccoon removal and roof repairs. Julie took notes of all the light bulbs in the home that needed replacing and purchased new ones. Chris installed the new light bulbs on the weekend. They even purchased a television for Miss Shock, who was very grateful.
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Several days later, Chris and his wife came across Miss Shock and had a chat with her. They learned that Miss Shock almost had no family or friends and was very lonely. She spent nearly all of her spare time in a spare bedroom sitting on a couch and listening to the radio. The couple thought they could be Dorene’s friends and it was convenient for them to visit each other often since they were neighbors. So they became regular visitors to Dorene’s house. The children brought Dorene great joy. “It is a great thing to help someone in our community,” they said.
【解析】
【分析】
本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了Chris Dykstra和妻子散步时发现浣熊到了邻居的屋顶，随后他们让当地警察局给他们的邻居做一次检查，后来发现Miss Shock家里很贫穷于是救济帮助Miss Shock友爱的故事。
【详解】
1.段落续写：
①.由第一段首句内容“克里斯和他的妻子知道这是一个帮助有需要的邻居的机会。”可知，第一段可描写克里斯主动帮助邻居。
②.由第二段首句内容“几天后，克里斯和他的妻子遇到了Shock小姐，并和她聊天。”可知，第二段可描写Miss Shock与克里斯和他的妻子谈心。
2.续写线索：帮助——相遇——谈心——亲密——感悟
3.词汇激活
行为类
①.同意：agree/approve/consent/subscribe
②.购买：purchase/buy
情绪类
①.感谢：be grateful/thank for/show one’s appreciation/show one’s gratitude
②.感到孤独的：lonely/alone/single/solitary
【点睛】
[高分句型1]. Julie took notes of all the light bulbs in the home that needed replacing and purchased new ones.(运用了that引导的限制性定语从句)
[高分句型2]. They even purchased a television for Miss Shock, who was very grateful. (运用了who引导的非限制性定语从句)
读后续写模拟专练
读后续写 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
One Sunday last year, eight of us hiked for a couple of hours through the desert near San Diego to reach Thunder Canyon Cave. We had to abseil(沿绳滑下)through an icy waterfall to get inside, so we put on our wet suits and lowered ourselves 30 feet down. By 11:00 a.m. we were inside. After we climbed further, we reached a nine-inch crack. Having moved for four hours, I was tired and wet.
The group leader, Luca, was guiding three cavers. One of them, Steve got stuck in the crack. There was 10 minutes of pulling and pushing until Steve was free. He was tired and needed to leave. Luca, assuming I’d been through the crack before, guided Steve through the cave for another 15 minutes to an exit. I was second from last to go through. I didn’t realize that Luca wasn’t there — if I’d known, I wouldn’t have attempted the crack, as I needed an experienced guide.
The challenge is to put your feet first down the length of the crack, and then move your body sideways to swing along, before dropping five feet to the floor of the next space. On my first attempt, I knew I wouldn’t make it through, but the group encouraged me to try again. I didn’t want to inconvenience anyone by having to make the long trip back through the cave, so I backed out and took off my wetsuit. In just my T-shirt, I tried to slide through again but my hips(屁股)were trapped. My feet were hanging on the other side and my left arm supported my body. My hand rested on a wooden board that had been left covering boulders(大圆石) to protect cavers from slipping. Luca returned and the team tried everything to shift me as I mentally focused on escape.
After two hours my arm weakened, so I slid further into the crack, where the gap was only 8.5 inches wide. My body weight was on my left hand, my back and chest touching the cold stone walls. The guy behind me, Jim, tried unsuccessfully to pull me back. Of course, I was blocking his escape, too.
注意：
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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With the risk of the low body temperature, the group supplied me with their own jackets.
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After eight hours, Luca found the rescue team.
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翻译小练习：
1. 然而，它们毫无用处。我又惊又累，在梦幻般的状态中忽进忽出。
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2. 吉姆想开玩笑让我睡不着觉。
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3. 随着时间的流逝，我能让它活下来的信念逐渐消失。
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4. 注意到这一点，卢卡决定求助于救援队。
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5. 他们一到，队伍就开始检查现场。
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________6. 他们试图抬高我手旁边的木板把我拉出来，但没有成功。
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________7. 卢卡不停地鼓励我，而救援队则用特殊的工具钻孔，甚至摩擦岩石的一部分来使我的臀部自由。
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________8. 在他们的帮助下，我设法移动了脚步，爬出了缝隙。
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________9. 当我被送到最近的医院时，我激动得差点忘了感谢所有的人。
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参考答案：
1. 然而，它们毫无用处。我又惊又累，在梦幻般的状态中忽进忽出。
However, they served no purpose. Frightened and exhausted, I was drifted in and out of a dreamlike state.
2. 吉姆想开玩笑让我睡不着觉。
Jim tried to crack jokes to keep me awake.
3. 随着时间的流逝，我能让它活下来的信念逐渐消失。
As time went by, the faith that I could make it alive faded gradually.
4. 注意到这一点，卢卡决定求助于救援队。
Noticing it, Luca decided to turn to a rescue team for help.
5. 他们一到，队伍就开始检查现场。
On their arrival, the team began to examine the spot.
6. 他们试图抬高我手旁边的木板把我拉出来，但没有成功。
They attempted to jack the board near my hand to drag me out, but in vain.
7. 卢卡不停地鼓励我，而救援队则用特殊的工具钻孔，甚至摩擦岩石的一部分来使我的臀部自由。
Luca kept on encouraging me while the rescue team used specific tools to drill and even rub part of the rock to free my hips.
8. 在他们的帮助下，我设法移动了脚步，爬出了缝隙。
With their help, I managed to move my feet and climb out of the gap.
9. 当我被送到最近的医院时，我激动得差点忘了感谢所有的人。
I was so thrilled that I nearly forgot to thank all the fellows when I was sent to the nearest hospital.
参考范文：
With the risk of the low body temperature, the group supplied me with their own jackets. However, they served no purpose. Frightened and exhausted, I was drifted in and out of a dreamlike state. Jim tried to crack jokes to keep me awake. As time went by, the faith that I could make it alive faded gradually. Noticing it, Luca decided to turn to a rescue team for help.
After eight hours, Luca found the rescue team. On their arrival, the team began to examine the spot. They attempted to jack the board near my hand to drag me out, but in vain. Luca kept on encouraging me while the rescue team used specific tools to drill and even rub part of the rock to free my hips. With their help, I managed to move my feet and climb out of the gap. I was so thrilled that I nearly forgot to thank all the fellows when I was sent to the nearest hospital.
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