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读后续写：环境描写公式（解析版）
通过对环境的描写，能够向读者交待故事的背景，衬托人物，渲染气氛，从而推动情节发展。对环境的描述确实很重要。另外，作家还能通过对周围环境的描述，间接地将小说中主角的心理变化传达给读者。
首先要明确的是，把主旨想清楚，时刻不忘“写景乃为主旨服务”这句话。如果景物与主旨无关，就是为写景而写景，就是无效的写景。
例如，大家看看我要传达出“高兴”与“悲伤”两种不同主旨时，该用下面哪种景物描写。
A. 花儿低着头，杨柳无精打采。
B. 花儿昂着头，杨柳摆动这枝条。
答案一目了然。
所以，景随主旨变。先确定主旨，然后来写景，这样才有效果。
通常情况下，传达出的情感好，则用褒义色彩的美好的、正向的词。传达出情感需要不好，则用贬义色彩的糟糕负面的词。大家看下面三例：
The wind was blowing dreadfully(恐怖地)。
The wind was blowing softly（柔和地）。
The wind was blowing comfortably（舒服地）。
可以看出三句传达出什么样的情感吧。
下面我来具体讲讲写景两种重要的诀窍：
Part 1 写景两种重要的诀窍
第一种方法：“情景交融”法
用一个公式来表达就是：写景+感受
在描述了一个场景后，还要增加一段感情的描述，就是指：有时在景物描写之后，加上一两句自己的情感态度。这样做的整体效果就是：情境交融。当然，如果你想造成“留白启发思考”的效果，那么就没有必要添加这种显性的情感态度描写了。
举个例子，大家记得2017年11月高考《健忘的妈妈》的故事续写吧。
第一段可以用到下面三句：That night we set up our tent in a park.（那天晚上我们在公园里搭起帐篷。）
The moon was held up above the sky, shining her smooth and charming moonlight. （月亮被高举在天空的上方，照耀着她那光滑而迷人的月光。）
Twinkling stars were blinking（眨眼）, and fragrant（芬芳的）breeze（微风） gently blew.（闪烁的星星眨着眼，芬芳的微风轻轻地吹着。）
先来解决5个重点单词。
smooth 光滑的
charming 迷人的
blinking（眨眼）
fragrant（芬芳的）
breeze（微风）
这个景物描写很精彩。但是如果后面在加一句：
Resting beside my mother, with hands held tightly by her, I feel the world is so beautiful.（躺在母亲身边，双手紧紧地握着母亲，我觉得这个世界是如此美丽。）
这样一加，就让“母亲”显现，就让“我与母亲关系和谐”的主旨就显现了。
再比如，下面两句景物描写：
第1句：The wind was howling dreadfully and the rain was pouring from the heaven, whipping against the branches of lined（成排的） trees.
（风可怕地嚎叫，雨从天倾斜而来，拍打着成排的树枝。）
第2句：The world was loaded with a sea of darkness
（世界承载着一片海洋般的黑暗）.
先来解决4个重点单词。
howling(怒吼)
dreadfully（恐怖地
whipping（抽打）
lined（成排的）
这两句的后面，如果再加一句：
I was seized with the roaring power of nature. A sense of horror creeping up on me. （我被自然发怒的力量抓住了。一种恐惧感悄悄爬到我身上。）
这样就进一步强调了自己的情感。
情景描写：Glories of the storm
【原文】The rhythm accelerates; plink follows plunk faster and faster until the sound is a roll of drums and the individual drops become an army marching over fields and rooftops. Now the first bolt of lightning stabs the earth. It is heaven’s exclamation point. The storm is here.
【翻译】雨的节奏在加快。噼啪之声，一声紧接一声，越来越急，最后好似鼓声阵阵。一滴一滴的雨点仿佛汇成了一支大军，行进在田野和屋顶上。就在这时，第一个闪电劈向大地。这是苍天发出的怒吼。暴风雨来了。
【赏析】此段描写了暴雨将至的情景。多处使用了修辞。先是plink和plunk这两个拟声词，形象地描绘出了雨点的噼啪声。然后a roll of drums 采用了比喻的修辞，形容雨声之大，其次an army marching over fields and rooftops 也是使用了比喻的手法， 后面stab使用了拟人的修辞方法，指雨像剑一样劈下来。
【思考】我们在碰到暴雨场景的素材时，可以模仿其写作手法，使用多种修辞，形成很强的画面感。
总之，根据凸显“情感”的需要，我们可以决定是不是该加一句显性的“情感表达”，来决定是不是呈现显性的“情景交融”。
“写景+感受”这个绝招，大家掌握了吗？
第二种方法：比喻法
我们的环境描写还可以用比喻手法，用“like”即可，并交代、突出特点。如果总结成公式，那就是：
写景+比喻+特点
与大家分享的例子是一位美国作家的短篇小说The Whistle (寒笛)中的写景片段：
原文是：
Night fell. The darkness was thin, like some sleazy dress that has been worn and worn for many winters and always lets the cold through to the bones. Then the moon rose.
译文：
夜色降临, 暮色稀薄, 犹如穿过了数个冬季的敝衣, 难以抵御刺骨的严寒。而后月亮升起。
先来解决重点表达：
sleazy 稀薄的
let.. through 让...通过,类似pass through
我们再来做句子分析：
这句话的核心句是：The darkness was thin，即：暮色稀薄。
其他内容都是锦上添花的作用，就是让这个核心句子显得更加完整具体。怎么做到的呢？
首先是用到了比喻：这里的 like.就起到了这个作用：“like some sleazy dress”
像是一条薄薄的裙子，
将darkness比作薄薄的裙子还不够，还穿了好几个冬天(has been worn and worn for many winters),冬天里穿裙子一定非常的寒冷。于是作者又加上了寒冷入骨(to the bones)。如此，一个寒冷的夜晚(cold night)与一件不能御寒的敞衣相联系，内容可以如此丰富。
关于比喻，可能有些同学不是特别熟悉，再给大家一个例句：
A fire still fluttered in the grate (壁炉炉膛), ... like a bird trying to find its way out of the room.
一团火还在壁炉炉膛里舞动着，就像一只挣脱束缚的鸟。
这句话里，把壁炉里跳动的火苗比作想挣脱束缚的鸟（find its way out of the room）。使“火苗”的描写更加生动。
我们再来上面提到的“薄雾”的例子，回忆一下公式：
写景+比喻+特点
如果说详细一点就是：
平平无奇的交代下自然现象+比喻（定语从句或非谓语修饰）+突出特点(冷得不得了)
学习读后续写，最快的方式，就是改编，仿写。我们一起来牛刀小试一下吧：
如果我们要描写“雾”，应该怎么写呢？给大家5秒钟时间思考一下吧。
好，时间到。我们来看一下这位同学的写法：
The wind was blowing. The mist was getting thick, like a huge textured velvet cloak, making what is hidden inside an unclear mystery.
风正在吹。雾越来越浓，像一件巨大的有质感的天鹅绒斗篷，把一切隐藏在模糊的神秘之中。
这句仿写的句子很好的get到了比喻的精髓，非常好的运用了“like”，textured velvet cloak（有质感的天鹅绒斗篷），形象具体。非谓语making做状语，也着实炫了一下语法。既简洁描绘了景色，又营造了一种神秘、紧张的氛围。
Standing beside the empty road, they looked up into the sky, feeling the precious peace from within.
站在空旷的道路旁，他们抬头仰望天空，从内心感受到珍贵的平和。
1. 人物动作的画面定格
They stood there for a moment, side by side, waiting for the rushing holiday current and for their place in it. Then the daughter glanced over and momentarily regarded her mother. And slowly, almost reluctantly, she placed her arm with apparently unaccustomed affection around her mother’s shoulders and gently guided her back into the deluge. 她们并肩站在那里，等待着节日的浪潮，等待着她们在浪潮中的位置。 然后女儿扫了一眼，立刻注视着她的母亲。 慢慢地，几乎是不情愿地，带着明显不习惯的爱她把胳膊放在她母亲的肩膀上，轻轻地引导她回到洪水中。
His hard work paid off! Holding the soda tin firmly, Reuben rushed for the shop to buy the brooch. The moment he got the beautiful brooch, he burst through the front door and placed it in Dora’s hand. Never had Dora received such a gift. Speechless and happy, she held her son tightly into her arms, with tears welling up in her eyes.他的努力得到了回报！鲁本紧紧地握着汽水罐，冲向商店去买胸针。他一拿到那枚漂亮的胸针，就冲进前门，把它放在朵拉的手里。多拉从来没有收到过这样的礼物。她高兴得说不出话来，紧紧地把儿子抱在怀里，眼泪涌了出来。
The butterfly cleaned her tears on the face，“No.” God felt a bit relieved and said，“Tomorrow you can become human again.” Bu
2. 特殊寓意的写景画面
The sky was a billion pure eyes of light and the grass green underfoot, it was as if night and day had become one beautiful moment. Dawn had come. 天空像是一亿只纯净的眼睛拼接在一起，脚下是青草，仿佛黑夜和白昼已成为一个美丽的时刻。黎明已经来临。（黎明到来的画面）
Dawn sent shimmering rays over the placid ocean, bestowing a golden path from the shore to the horizon.黎明在平静的海面上放射出出闪闪发亮的光线，留下一条从海岸到地平线横亘而过的金色道路。（黎明到来的画面）
The crystal and cerulean water was gentle as I waded through it, the sunset like orange paint on a blue canvas.当我涉过水晶般天蓝色的轻柔的水时，日落就像蓝色画布上的橙色颜料。（美好日落时的画面）
The lingering sunlight was obliterated by the rapidly falling night，resembling a pitch-black curtain draped over the sky.逗留在天际的最后一缕阳光被迅速落下的夜幕擦除，就像是天空被一层漆黑的幕布覆盖。（日落时的画面）
The moon under siege by stars seemed to lighten the night bringing forth stars that shone and hung in the blackness. The never ending blackness consumed everything.被群星围困的月亮似乎照亮了黑夜，带来了在黑暗中闪耀和悬挂着的群星。无尽的黑暗吞噬了一切。（描写夜空的画面）
Looking up, I saw the sun shine brighter than I ever knew before. I saw a tree in the distance glisten gently as it reflected the sun's rays. My consciousness ebbed away with the heat. I took a few blinks before I landed with a thud. 抬头一看，我看到太阳比我以前所知道的还要明亮。我看见远处有一棵树反射着太阳光，发出柔和的光辉。我的意识随着热度而衰退。我眨了眨眼，然后摔倒在地才猛然回到现实中，恢复了知觉。（特殊寓意）
Dotted with glittering stars, the sky, midnight blue, gave the scene a fairytale quality. 缀满星光的天空，午夜的蓝色，给了这一场景一个童话般的质量。（神话般美丽的夜空画面）
The rain drummed on the window, bidding farewell to the last beam of sunlight.雨水打着窗户，向最后一缕阳光告别。 （雨水来临的画面）
Kissed by the rain and glistening, the wet ground is cold under foot. A dense earthly sweet smell rises from the ground, enveloping everything within its soft embrace.潮湿的地面走起来很冷，被雨水亲吻后闪闪发光。一股浓郁的泥土般的香味从地上升起，把一切都包裹在它柔软的怀抱里。（雨后清新的画面）
The leaves crunched beneath my feet as I strolled down the street. Occasionally, one would fall past me, lightly swaying as the air gently carried it to the ground. 我在街上漫步时，树叶在我脚下嘎吱作响。偶尔，有叶子会从我身边掉下来，轻轻地摇晃，缓缓落到到地面。（描写落叶的画面）
Part 2 素材积累：
1、描写疯女人：摘自Charlotte Bronte《简爱》
疯人场景
【原文】It was a woman, tall and large, with thick dark hair. She threw my veil over her head and looked in the mirror, and I saw-oh, the most horrible face! Discolored, almost purple, and savage! She had bloodshot eyes and swollen lips, and she glared into the mirror.
【翻译】这是一个又高又大的女人，长着浓密的黑发。她把我的面纱扔到头顶上，照着镜子。然后我看到，最可怕的脸！几乎成了紫色，很凶恶！双眼充血，嘴唇肿大，愤怒地瞪着镜子。
【赏析】本段描写了罗切斯特受骗娶的疯女人。从全局到局部进行描写，先是身形，头发（tall and large, with thick dark hair），然后从脸部，眼睛、嘴唇（the most horrible face! Discolored, almost purple, and savage! bloodshot eyes and swollen lips）。将一个不同于常人的人物形象刻画的淋漓尽致。
【思考】在读后续写中，假如遇到有发疯的场景描写，可以尝试模仿运用，先写大，再写小。不仅可以写人，也可以写愤怒的动物。如2020.7浙江高考读后续写描写被喷了辣椒水的熊回来后的场景：With two bloodshot eyes, the bear let out a deafening roar and violently struck the fence with his full strength.
With eyes swollen, the bear let out a deafening roar.
2、描写狂喜场景：摘自Animal Farm 动物农场
【原文】The animals rushed to the top of the farm and gazed round them in the clear morning light. Yes, it was theirs—everything that they could see was theirs! In the ecstasy of that thought they gambolled (/ ɡ mbl/ 雀跃)round and round, they hurled(用力投掷)themselves into the air in great leaps of excitement. They rolled in the dew, they cropped mouthfuls of the sweet summer grass, kicked up clods of the black earth, and snuffed its rich scent. Then they made a tour of inspection of the whole farm and surveyed with speechless admiration the plough land, the hay field, the orchard, the pool, the spinney. It was as though they had never seen these things before, and even now they could hardly believe that it was all their own.
【翻译】动物们冲到小山顶上，在清新的晨光中四处凝望。是的，这是他们的一他们所看到的一切都是他们的！想到这里，他们一阵狂喜，兜着圈子雀跃耍闹，在极度兴奋中，他们猛地蹦到空中。他们在露水上打滚，大口大口地咀嚼甜美的夏季牧草；他们踢开黑黝黝的土块，吮吸泥块中浓郁的香味。然后，他们巡视了整个庄园，在无声的赞叹中参观了耕地、牧草地、果树林、池塘和树丛，好像他们之前从来没有见过这些东西一样。即便是现在，他们还是很难相信这一切都归他们所有。
【赏析】本段描写动物们看到属于他们自己的庄园后激动兴奋的情景。主要通过一系列的动作描写突出动物们的喜悦之情，they gambolled / ɡ mbl/ 雀跃round and round；hurled(用力投掷)themselves into the air in great leaps of excitement等在后面描述中作者还写到了sweet summer grass，rich scent也侧面描写出了动物们当时愉悦的心情，生动形象地向读者展示了当时的画面场景。
【思考】在读后续写中，假如要描写出乎意料的喜悦，激动之情，可以尝试模仿运用。可以从主人公的一系列动作描写，环境描写，心理描写出发，丰富细节内容，重点突出他们激动兴奋的情绪。
Part 4 综合模拟演练
（2023秋·广东·高三校联考期末）
阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Morty was checking out his library books when it caught his eye-a poster for Adventure Rocks Kids Camp. “Check this out!” Morty called to Ben and Fred as he grabbed three brochures and dashed to catch up with his best buddies. They all stopped, books in hands, to stare at the pictures of kids flying above canyons suspended from zip lines. They instantly believed the brochure’s headline: Summer won’t be complete until you Take it to the Limit at Adventure Rocks Kids Camp.
Ben broke the silence, “We have less than two weeks until registration opens, and it says the camp fills up fast.” Then an idea popped into Morty’s head. “Why don’t we sell lemonade and snacks by the side of the road We can pool our allowance savings for the camp.” “That’s a great Idea,” Ben said.
The sun had barely come up on Saturday morning when the kids set up their business. They chose a spot, asked permission from the homeowner, and then asked to use her garden hose for water to make lemonade.
Their business went smoothly until Ben announced that they had a comparatively small stock of lemons shortly after noon. Morty decided to make their stock go further. “Fred, when the jug gets down to one-fourth full, just fill it to the top with the water hose.” Morty was thinking out loud, “I’ll change the sign and charge 30 more cents for each cup of lemonade.” Their business went on and the three were secretly proud of the little tricks they had done.
Just as Morty finished refilling the jug with water for the third time, a vehicle rounded the comer. Morty saw the minivan with his father at the wheel and his family inside. They pulled up to the sidewalk, and his brothers and sisters jumped out, each clutching a coin or two. They were eager to support their brother’s bustling business. Morty’s family bought the last of the brownies and drank the last drop of watered-down lemonade.
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Morty’s father frowned at the sip of the lemonade.
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They decided to fix their wrongdoings the next week.
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（2023春·湖北·高三校联考一模）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
When Aiden asked me to accompany him on a camping trip to the mountains, I envisioned a log cabin with a crackling fireplace, hot cocoa, and bunk beds. Imagine how my rustic, yet comfortable image of camping became a nightmare when Aiden and his older brother, Lebron, showed up with a truck filled with camping supplies-tents, rolled-up sleeping bags, and canteens! I did pack a backpack, as instructed, but I had no idea we were going on survival training!
Lebron, ever so efficient, had a schedule to keep, and he hurried me to get in so we could leave the city hustle and bustle behind us. Ahead, the mountains loomed bigger than I had remembered them; the trees were larger, and the environment was much more dangerous. At least the weather was amazing — cotton-candy clouds dotted the deep blue sky.
At the trailhead, Lebron strapped a sleeping bag onto my pack and lectured Aiden and me about hiking etiquette.
The first part of the trail looked more like a wooded road that led up the mountains than a hiking path. Soon, the path became narrower and steeper, forcing me to focus on the task at hand and to talk less. As we gained elevation, we moved above the tree line, and I could see the trail zigzagging up the mountain.
“It looks closer than it is,” Lebron said, reading my facial cues. “This is the most difficult part … watch the trail, not the view. Loose rocks and tree roots make the trail dangerous, and we have no shade.”
Finally, we reached the summit. My legs aching, I dropped my pack and groaned.
“No time to rest,” Lebron said, looking up at the sky. The weather had been warm all day, and it felt good to relax in the cool breeze. “The weather up here changes quickly, and that cool air means a storm is brewing. We need to set up camp.”
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I thought he was kidding, but Lebron was quite serious.
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Just as quickly as the storm came rushing in, it stopped, allowing us to exit the tent.
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（2022秋·重庆长寿·高三重庆市长寿中学校校考阶段练习）
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
As I began to wade through thirteen pages of the credit-card company’s new policy, I wasn’t sure how it was going to affect me personally. As I waited to be connected to a customer service rep, I considered whether I should even write the fifth novel in my Old Cape House series. Did my readers really enjoy the mysterious historical stories I told Should I take on more debt to buy my paperback books I thought about all the author events, book signings, and book fairs that might be canceled because of the virus. When would normal life return
“Hello, Ms. Struna, this is Thomas. May I have your account information ”
After repeating the information he needed, I explained my dilemma in trying to understand the new policy and asked how it would affect my future purchases.
“Please, do not worry. You will have no change.”
“Are you sure I am an author and travel frequently. I need to have access to my card at all times for big or small purchases.” I laughed to myself, thinking I wasn’t going anywhere for a while, at least until there was a vaccine.
“Let me reassure you. There will be no change to your card, but Ms. Struna, may I ask you one more question Are you the author of The Old Cape House ”
My jaw dropped. He was talking about my first novel of suspenseful historical fiction, The Old Cape House, published in 2013. I was stunned and I stammered, “Why, yes I am.” I was still skeptical about what he wanted from me.
Thomas kept talking. “I thought it was you. I recognized your name, and when you told me you were an author, I knew it was you.”
“Oh, my goodness.” My heart started to beat faster with delight at the connection I was making with an unknown foreign reader.
“Ms. Struna, your book changed me. It changed how I look at the world. It showed me ways to be more adventuresome and to be open to new things. Thank you so very much.”
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I was stunned at the idea that I had made a difference in someone’s life.
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I hung up, ending this coincidental connection to a fan reader in a faraway place.
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Part 5 高考真题再现
（拍照北极熊遇险）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
One fall, my wife Elli and I had a single goal: to photograph polar bears. We were staying at a research camp outside “ the polar bear capital of the world ” — the town of Churchill in Manitoba, Canada.
Taking pictures of polar bears is amazing but also dangerous. Polar bears — like all wild animals — should be photographed from a safe distance. When I’m face to face with a polar bear, I like it to be through a camera with a telephoto lens. But sometimes, that is easier said than done. This was one of those times.
As Elli and I cooked dinner, a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby lake sniffed, and smelled our garlic bread.
The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp, which was surrounded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the wire. He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts.
Terrified, Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew. We yelled at the bear, hit pots hard, and fired blank shotgun shells into the air. Sometimes loud noises like these will scare bears off. Not this polar bear though — he just kept trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws (爪子).
I radioed the camp manager for help. He told me a helicopter was on its way, but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived. Making the best of this close encounter (相遇), I took some pictures of the bear.
Elli and I feared the fence wouldn’t last through 30 more minutes of the bear’s punishment. The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray. The spray burns the bears’ eyes, but doesn’t hurt them. So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and, through the fence, sprayed him in the face. With an angry roar (吼叫), the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes.
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A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp.
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At that very moment, the helicopter arrived.
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读后续写：环境描写公式（解析版）
通过对环境的描写，能够向读者交待故事的背景，衬托人物，渲染气氛，从而推动情节发展。对环境的描述确实很重要。另外，作家还能通过对周围环境的描述，间接地将小说中主角的心理变化传达给读者。
首先要明确的是，把主旨想清楚，时刻不忘“写景乃为主旨服务”这句话。如果景物与主旨无关，就是为写景而写景，就是无效的写景。
例如，大家看看我要传达出“高兴”与“悲伤”两种不同主旨时，该用下面哪种景物描写。
A. 花儿低着头，杨柳无精打采。
B. 花儿昂着头，杨柳摆动这枝条。
答案一目了然。
所以，景随主旨变。先确定主旨，然后来写景，这样才有效果。
通常情况下，传达出的情感好，则用褒义色彩的美好的、正向的词。传达出情感需要不好，则用贬义色彩的糟糕负面的词。大家看下面三例：
The wind was blowing dreadfully(恐怖地)。
The wind was blowing softly（柔和地）。
The wind was blowing comfortably（舒服地）。
可以看出三句传达出什么样的情感吧。
下面我来具体讲讲写景两种重要的诀窍：
Part 1 写景两种重要的诀窍
第一种方法：“情景交融”法
用一个公式来表达就是：写景+感受
在描述了一个场景后，还要增加一段感情的描述，就是指：有时在景物描写之后，加上一两句自己的情感态度。这样做的整体效果就是：情境交融。当然，如果你想造成“留白启发思考”的效果，那么就没有必要添加这种显性的情感态度描写了。
举个例子，大家记得2017年11月高考《健忘的妈妈》的故事续写吧。
第一段可以用到下面三句：That night we set up our tent in a park.（那天晚上我们在公园里搭起帐篷。）
The moon was held up above the sky, shining her smooth and charming moonlight. （月亮被高举在天空的上方，照耀着她那光滑而迷人的月光。）
Twinkling stars were blinking（眨眼）, and fragrant（芬芳的）breeze（微风） gently blew.（闪烁的星星眨着眼，芬芳的微风轻轻地吹着。）
先来解决5个重点单词。
smooth 光滑的
charming 迷人的
blinking（眨眼）
fragrant（芬芳的）
breeze（微风）
这个景物描写很精彩。但是如果后面在加一句：
Resting beside my mother, with hands held tightly by her, I feel the world is so beautiful.（躺在母亲身边，双手紧紧地握着母亲，我觉得这个世界是如此美丽。）
这样一加，就让“母亲”显现，就让“我与母亲关系和谐”的主旨就显现了。
再比如，下面两句景物描写：
第1句：The wind was howling dreadfully and the rain was pouring from the heaven, whipping against the branches of lined（成排的） trees.
（风可怕地嚎叫，雨从天倾斜而来，拍打着成排的树枝。）
第2句：The world was loaded with a sea of darkness
（世界承载着一片海洋般的黑暗）.
先来解决4个重点单词。
howling(怒吼)
dreadfully（恐怖地
whipping（抽打）
lined（成排的）
这两句的后面，如果再加一句：
I was seized with the roaring power of nature. A sense of horror creeping up on me. （我被自然发怒的力量抓住了。一种恐惧感悄悄爬到我身上。）
这样就进一步强调了自己的情感。
情景描写：Glories of the storm
【原文】The rhythm accelerates; plink follows plunk faster and faster until the sound is a roll of drums and the individual drops become an army marching over fields and rooftops. Now the first bolt of lightning stabs the earth. It is heaven’s exclamation point. The storm is here.
【翻译】雨的节奏在加快。噼啪之声，一声紧接一声，越来越急，最后好似鼓声阵阵。一滴一滴的雨点仿佛汇成了一支大军，行进在田野和屋顶上。就在这时，第一个闪电劈向大地。这是苍天发出的怒吼。暴风雨来了。
【赏析】此段描写了暴雨将至的情景。多处使用了修辞。先是plink和plunk这两个拟声词，形象地描绘出了雨点的噼啪声。然后a roll of drums 采用了比喻的修辞，形容雨声之大，其次an army marching over fields and rooftops 也是使用了比喻的手法， 后面stab使用了拟人的修辞方法，指雨像剑一样劈下来。
【思考】我们在碰到暴雨场景的素材时，可以模仿其写作手法，使用多种修辞，形成很强的画面感。
总之，根据凸显“情感”的需要，我们可以决定是不是该加一句显性的“情感表达”，来决定是不是呈现显性的“情景交融”。
“写景+感受”这个绝招，大家掌握了吗？
第二种方法：比喻法
我们的环境描写还可以用比喻手法，用“like”即可，并交代、突出特点。如果总结成公式，那就是：
写景+比喻+特点
与大家分享的例子是一位美国作家的短篇小说The Whistle (寒笛)中的写景片段：
原文是：
Night fell. The darkness was thin, like some sleazy dress that has been worn and worn for many winters and always lets the cold through to the bones. Then the moon rose.
译文：
夜色降临, 暮色稀薄, 犹如穿过了数个冬季的敝衣, 难以抵御刺骨的严寒。而后月亮升起。
先来解决重点表达：
sleazy 稀薄的
let.. through 让...通过,类似pass through
我们再来做句子分析：
这句话的核心句是：The darkness was thin，即：暮色稀薄。
其他内容都是锦上添花的作用，就是让这个核心句子显得更加完整具体。怎么做到的呢？
首先是用到了比喻：这里的 like.就起到了这个作用：“like some sleazy dress”
像是一条薄薄的裙子，
将darkness比作薄薄的裙子还不够，还穿了好几个冬天(has been worn and worn for many winters),冬天里穿裙子一定非常的寒冷。于是作者又加上了寒冷入骨(to the bones)。如此，一个寒冷的夜晚(cold night)与一件不能御寒的敞衣相联系，内容可以如此丰富。
关于比喻，可能有些同学不是特别熟悉，再给大家一个例句：
A fire still fluttered in the grate (壁炉炉膛), ... like a bird trying to find its way out of the room.
一团火还在壁炉炉膛里舞动着，就像一只挣脱束缚的鸟。
这句话里，把壁炉里跳动的火苗比作想挣脱束缚的鸟（find its way out of the room）。使“火苗”的描写更加生动。
我们再来上面提到的“薄雾”的例子，回忆一下公式：
写景+比喻+特点
如果说详细一点就是：
平平无奇的交代下自然现象+比喻（定语从句或非谓语修饰）+突出特点(冷得不得了)
学习读后续写，最快的方式，就是改编，仿写。我们一起来牛刀小试一下吧：
如果我们要描写“雾”，应该怎么写呢？给大家5秒钟时间思考一下吧。
好，时间到。我们来看一下这位同学的写法：
The wind was blowing. The mist was getting thick, like a huge textured velvet cloak, making what is hidden inside an unclear mystery.
风正在吹。雾越来越浓，像一件巨大的有质感的天鹅绒斗篷，把一切隐藏在模糊的神秘之中。
这句仿写的句子很好的get到了比喻的精髓，非常好的运用了“like”，textured velvet cloak（有质感的天鹅绒斗篷），形象具体。非谓语making做状语，也着实炫了一下语法。既简洁描绘了景色，又营造了一种神秘、紧张的氛围。
Standing beside the empty road, they looked up into the sky, feeling the precious peace from within.
站在空旷的道路旁，他们抬头仰望天空，从内心感受到珍贵的平和。
1. 人物动作的画面定格
They stood there for a moment, side by side, waiting for the rushing holiday current and for their place in it. Then the daughter glanced over and momentarily regarded her mother. And slowly, almost reluctantly, she placed her arm with apparently unaccustomed affection around her mother’s shoulders and gently guided her back into the deluge. 她们并肩站在那里，等待着节日的浪潮，等待着她们在浪潮中的位置。 然后女儿扫了一眼，立刻注视着她的母亲。 慢慢地，几乎是不情愿地，带着明显不习惯的爱她把胳膊放在她母亲的肩膀上，轻轻地引导她回到洪水中。
His hard work paid off! Holding the soda tin firmly, Reuben rushed for the shop to buy the brooch. The moment he got the beautiful brooch, he burst through the front door and placed it in Dora’s hand. Never had Dora received such a gift. Speechless and happy, she held her son tightly into her arms, with tears welling up in her eyes.他的努力得到了回报！鲁本紧紧地握着汽水罐，冲向商店去买胸针。他一拿到那枚漂亮的胸针，就冲进前门，把它放在朵拉的手里。多拉从来没有收到过这样的礼物。她高兴得说不出话来，紧紧地把儿子抱在怀里，眼泪涌了出来。
The butterfly cleaned her tears on the face，“No.” God felt a bit relieved and said，“Tomorrow you can become human again.” Bu
2. 特殊寓意的写景画面
The sky was a billion pure eyes of light and the grass green underfoot, it was as if night and day had become one beautiful moment. Dawn had come. 天空像是一亿只纯净的眼睛拼接在一起，脚下是青草，仿佛黑夜和白昼已成为一个美丽的时刻。黎明已经来临。（黎明到来的画面）
Dawn sent shimmering rays over the placid ocean, bestowing a golden path from the shore to the horizon.黎明在平静的海面上放射出出闪闪发亮的光线，留下一条从海岸到地平线横亘而过的金色道路。（黎明到来的画面）
The crystal and cerulean water was gentle as I waded through it, the sunset like orange paint on a blue canvas.当我涉过水晶般天蓝色的轻柔的水时，日落就像蓝色画布上的橙色颜料。（美好日落时的画面）
The lingering sunlight was obliterated by the rapidly falling night，resembling a pitch-black curtain draped over the sky.逗留在天际的最后一缕阳光被迅速落下的夜幕擦除，就像是天空被一层漆黑的幕布覆盖。（日落时的画面）
The moon under siege by stars seemed to lighten the night bringing forth stars that shone and hung in the blackness. The never ending blackness consumed everything.被群星围困的月亮似乎照亮了黑夜，带来了在黑暗中闪耀和悬挂着的群星。无尽的黑暗吞噬了一切。（描写夜空的画面）
Looking up, I saw the sun shine brighter than I ever knew before. I saw a tree in the distance glisten gently as it reflected the sun's rays. My consciousness ebbed away with the heat. I took a few blinks before I landed with a thud. 抬头一看，我看到太阳比我以前所知道的还要明亮。我看见远处有一棵树反射着太阳光，发出柔和的光辉。我的意识随着热度而衰退。我眨了眨眼，然后摔倒在地才猛然回到现实中，恢复了知觉。（特殊寓意）
Dotted with glittering stars, the sky, midnight blue, gave the scene a fairytale quality. 缀满星光的天空，午夜的蓝色，给了这一场景一个童话般的质量。（神话般美丽的夜空画面）
The rain drummed on the window, bidding farewell to the last beam of sunlight.雨水打着窗户，向最后一缕阳光告别。 （雨水来临的画面）
Kissed by the rain and glistening, the wet ground is cold under foot. A dense earthly sweet smell rises from the ground, enveloping everything within its soft embrace.潮湿的地面走起来很冷，被雨水亲吻后闪闪发光。一股浓郁的泥土般的香味从地上升起，把一切都包裹在它柔软的怀抱里。（雨后清新的画面）
The leaves crunched beneath my feet as I strolled down the street. Occasionally, one would fall past me, lightly swaying as the air gently carried it to the ground. 我在街上漫步时，树叶在我脚下嘎吱作响。偶尔，有叶子会从我身边掉下来，轻轻地摇晃，缓缓落到到地面。（描写落叶的画面）
Part 2 素材积累：
1、描写疯女人：摘自Charlotte Bronte《简爱》
疯人场景
【原文】It was a woman, tall and large, with thick dark hair. She threw my veil over her head and looked in the mirror, and I saw-oh, the most horrible face! Discolored, almost purple, and savage! She had bloodshot eyes and swollen lips, and she glared into the mirror.
【翻译】这是一个又高又大的女人，长着浓密的黑发。她把我的面纱扔到头顶上，照着镜子。然后我看到，最可怕的脸！几乎成了紫色，很凶恶！双眼充血，嘴唇肿大，愤怒地瞪着镜子。
【赏析】本段描写了罗切斯特受骗娶的疯女人。从全局到局部进行描写，先是身形，头发（tall and large, with thick dark hair），然后从脸部，眼睛、嘴唇（the most horrible face! Discolored, almost purple, and savage! bloodshot eyes and swollen lips）。将一个不同于常人的人物形象刻画的淋漓尽致。
【思考】在读后续写中，假如遇到有发疯的场景描写，可以尝试模仿运用，先写大，再写小。不仅可以写人，也可以写愤怒的动物。如2020.7浙江高考读后续写描写被喷了辣椒水的熊回来后的场景：With two bloodshot eyes, the bear let out a deafening roar and violently struck the fence with his full strength.
With eyes swollen, the bear let out a deafening roar.
2、描写狂喜场景：摘自Animal Farm 动物农场
【原文】The animals rushed to the top of the farm and gazed round them in the clear morning light. Yes, it was theirs—everything that they could see was theirs! In the ecstasy of that thought they gambolled (/ ɡ mbl/ 雀跃)round and round, they hurled(用力投掷)themselves into the air in great leaps of excitement. They rolled in the dew, they cropped mouthfuls of the sweet summer grass, kicked up clods of the black earth, and snuffed its rich scent. Then they made a tour of inspection of the whole farm and surveyed with speechless admiration the plough land, the hay field, the orchard, the pool, the spinney. It was as though they had never seen these things before, and even now they could hardly believe that it was all their own.
【翻译】动物们冲到小山顶上，在清新的晨光中四处凝望。是的，这是他们的一他们所看到的一切都是他们的！想到这里，他们一阵狂喜，兜着圈子雀跃耍闹，在极度兴奋中，他们猛地蹦到空中。他们在露水上打滚，大口大口地咀嚼甜美的夏季牧草；他们踢开黑黝黝的土块，吮吸泥块中浓郁的香味。然后，他们巡视了整个庄园，在无声的赞叹中参观了耕地、牧草地、果树林、池塘和树丛，好像他们之前从来没有见过这些东西一样。即便是现在，他们还是很难相信这一切都归他们所有。
【赏析】本段描写动物们看到属于他们自己的庄园后激动兴奋的情景。主要通过一系列的动作描写突出动物们的喜悦之情，they gambolled / ɡ mbl/ 雀跃round and round；hurled(用力投掷)themselves into the air in great leaps of excitement等在后面描述中作者还写到了sweet summer grass，rich scent也侧面描写出了动物们当时愉悦的心情，生动形象地向读者展示了当时的画面场景。
【思考】在读后续写中，假如要描写出乎意料的喜悦，激动之情，可以尝试模仿运用。可以从主人公的一系列动作描写，环境描写，心理描写出发，丰富细节内容，重点突出他们激动兴奋的情绪。
Part 4 综合模拟演练
（2023秋·广东·高三校联考期末）
阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Morty was checking out his library books when it caught his eye-a poster for Adventure Rocks Kids Camp. “Check this out!” Morty called to Ben and Fred as he grabbed three brochures and dashed to catch up with his best buddies. They all stopped, books in hands, to stare at the pictures of kids flying above canyons suspended from zip lines. They instantly believed the brochure’s headline: Summer won’t be complete until you Take it to the Limit at Adventure Rocks Kids Camp.
Ben broke the silence, “We have less than two weeks until registration opens, and it says the camp fills up fast.” Then an idea popped into Morty’s head. “Why don’t we sell lemonade and snacks by the side of the road We can pool our allowance savings for the camp.” “That’s a great Idea,” Ben said.
The sun had barely come up on Saturday morning when the kids set up their business. They chose a spot, asked permission from the homeowner, and then asked to use her garden hose for water to make lemonade.
Their business went smoothly until Ben announced that they had a comparatively small stock of lemons shortly after noon. Morty decided to make their stock go further. “Fred, when the jug gets down to one-fourth full, just fill it to the top with the water hose.” Morty was thinking out loud, “I’ll change the sign and charge 30 more cents for each cup of lemonade.” Their business went on and the three were secretly proud of the little tricks they had done.
Just as Morty finished refilling the jug with water for the third time, a vehicle rounded the comer. Morty saw the minivan with his father at the wheel and his family inside. They pulled up to the sidewalk, and his brothers and sisters jumped out, each clutching a coin or two. They were eager to support their brother’s bustling business. Morty’s family bought the last of the brownies and drank the last drop of watered-down lemonade.
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2. 请按如下格式在答题卡得相应位置做答。
Morty’s father frowned at the sip of the lemonade.
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They decided to fix their wrongdoings the next week.
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【答案】Morty’s father frowned at the sip of the lemonade. As to him, it tasted more like water. Overwhelmed with confusion, he asked directly, “What’s wrong It tastes just like cold water.” The moment Morty heard his father’s doubt, he stood awkwardly, not sure what to say. Fred and Ben were also speechless. A moment later, they admitted what they had done. Although Morty’s father was disappointed, he said, “You still have time to correct your wrongdoings.” Hearing this, they nodded immediately.
They decided to fix their wrongdoings the next week. Ben suggested to use the money earned to prepare enough lemons first and then reduce the price. They all agreed. When they restarted their business, they even stood a sign, saying, “We send a cup of lemonade to customers who bought it last Saturday afternoon for free.” They made over 50 cups of lemonade for a constant stream of customers with a low price and over 20 cups were for free. As you can imagine, they didn’t get enough money for the camp. But they learned a valuable lesson that one should always be honest.
【导语】本文以故事情节发展为线索，讲述了Morty，Ben和Fred三个孩子因为想去参加夏令营，在路边摆摊卖柠檬水赚报名费。随着柠檬越来越少，他们打起了歪主意：往柠檬汁里兑水并提价。后来，Morty的家人开心地来照顾生意。他的爸爸喝出了柠檬水的问题，不禁发出疑问。几个孩子沉默片刻，还是承认了错误。在Morty爸爸的鼓励下，他们决定第二周弥补错误。随后，他们用赚到的钱购买了足量的柠檬，降价，并主动声明给上周周六下午购买柠檬水的顾客免费送一杯柠檬水。可想而知，他们最终没有钱参加夏令营，但是他们懂得了珍贵的一课：做人要保持诚信。
【详解】1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“Morty的父亲喝了一口柠檬水，皱起了眉头”可知，第一段可描写Morty的爸爸发现了柠檬水的问题后，几个孩子很尴尬地承认错误的场景，以及Morty爸爸建议他们怎么做。
②由第二段首句内容“他们决定下周改正他们的错误”可知，第二段可描写他们如何改正自己的错误。
2.续写线索：发现夏令营传单——想参加——摆柠檬水摊赚报名费——柠檬水兑水被发现——承认错误——纠正错误——感悟
3.词汇激活
行为类
①纠正：correct/rectify
②建议：suggest/recommend
情绪类
①疑惑：Overwhelmed with confusion/filled with confusion
②尴尬地：awkwardly/embarrassedly
【点睛】[高分句型1]The moment Morty heard his father’s doubt, he stood awkwardly, not sure what to say.（由连词the moment引导的时间状语从句）
[高分句型2]We send a cup of lemonade to customers who bought it last Saturday afternoon for free.（由关系代词who引导限制性定语从句）
（2023春·湖北·高三校联考一模）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
When Aiden asked me to accompany him on a camping trip to the mountains, I envisioned a log cabin with a crackling fireplace, hot cocoa, and bunk beds. Imagine how my rustic, yet comfortable image of camping became a nightmare when Aiden and his older brother, Lebron, showed up with a truck filled with camping supplies-tents, rolled-up sleeping bags, and canteens! I did pack a backpack, as instructed, but I had no idea we were going on survival training!
Lebron, ever so efficient, had a schedule to keep, and he hurried me to get in so we could leave the city hustle and bustle behind us. Ahead, the mountains loomed bigger than I had remembered them; the trees were larger, and the environment was much more dangerous. At least the weather was amazing — cotton-candy clouds dotted the deep blue sky.
At the trailhead, Lebron strapped a sleeping bag onto my pack and lectured Aiden and me about hiking etiquette.
The first part of the trail looked more like a wooded road that led up the mountains than a hiking path. Soon, the path became narrower and steeper, forcing me to focus on the task at hand and to talk less. As we gained elevation, we moved above the tree line, and I could see the trail zigzagging up the mountain.
“It looks closer than it is,” Lebron said, reading my facial cues. “This is the most difficult part … watch the trail, not the view. Loose rocks and tree roots make the trail dangerous, and we have no shade.”
Finally, we reached the summit. My legs aching, I dropped my pack and groaned.
“No time to rest,” Lebron said, looking up at the sky. The weather had been warm all day, and it felt good to relax in the cool breeze. “The weather up here changes quickly, and that cool air means a storm is brewing. We need to set up camp.”
注意：
1. 词数150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题纸上作答。
I thought he was kidding, but Lebron was quite serious.
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Just as quickly as the storm came rushing in, it stopped, allowing us to exit the tent.
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【答案】I thought he was kidding, but Lebron was quite serious. He and Aiden worked expertly, while I stood around and pretended to help, thunder rumbling in the distance. We set up near a boulder outcropping, but the wind, thunder, and lightning were relentless. As the storm rolled in with a vengeance, we took cover inside. Lebron, sensing that I was scared, reached in his backpack for some crackers and peanut butter. Slowly, but methodically, he spread the peanut butter and told stories about his camping adventures. Each time lightning lit up the tent and the thunder echoed, I cringed. “This is just a typical summer storm — they’re short lived, but intense,” Lebron stated. “The campsite might get a bit muddy, but what’s the fun in camping if you can’t get dirty! At least the rain will keep the bears away,” he said with a smile.
Just as quickly as the storm came rushing in, it stopped, allowing us to exit the tent. The view was stunning — I could see for miles, and the rain left a fresh scent of pine and an earthy smell of soil. As darkness set in, l marveled at the multitude of stars in the night sky. I won’t lie — I was yearning for a hot shower and a soft bed, but as I gazed upward at the Milky Way, I knew this was an adventure I would never forget.
【导语】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者跟着艾登和他的哥哥勒布朗一起去露营冒险，一路艰辛，最终到达了山顶，就在作者想要放松休息一下时，勒布朗却告诉她冷空气意味着风暴正在酝酿。他们需要马上搭帐篷。
【详解】1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“我以为他在开玩笑，但勒布朗是认真的。”可知，第一段可描写他们开始搭帐篷和暴风雨来临后的事情。
②由第二段首句内容“就像暴风雨来的一样快，它停了，让我们可以离开帐篷。”可知，第二段可描写暴风雨停息后作者所见所想。
2.续写线索：开始搭帐篷——帐篷里躲雨——欣赏雨后美景——感慨万千
3.词汇激活
行为类
①认为，觉得：think/guess
②帮助：help/aid/give a hand
③躲藏，隐蔽：take cover/find shelter
④停止，结束：stop/cease
情绪类
①认真的，严肃的：serious/solemn
②极有魅力的，绝妙的：stunning/wonderful/beautiful
【点睛】[高分句型1]I thought he was kidding, but Lebron was quite serious.(运用了省略连词that的宾语从句)
[高分句型2] He and Aiden worked expertly, while I stood around and pretended to help, thunder rumbling in the distance.(运用了while引导时间状语从句和独立主格结构作伴随状语)
[高分句型3] As darkness set in, l marveled at the multitude of stars in the night sky.(运用了as引导时间状语从句)
（2022秋·重庆长寿·高三重庆市长寿中学校校考阶段练习）
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
As I began to wade through thirteen pages of the credit-card company’s new policy, I wasn’t sure how it was going to affect me personally. As I waited to be connected to a customer service rep, I considered whether I should even write the fifth novel in my Old Cape House series. Did my readers really enjoy the mysterious historical stories I told Should I take on more debt to buy my paperback books I thought about all the author events, book signings, and book fairs that might be canceled because of the virus. When would normal life return
“Hello, Ms. Struna, this is Thomas. May I have your account information ”
After repeating the information he needed, I explained my dilemma in trying to understand the new policy and asked how it would affect my future purchases.
“Please, do not worry. You will have no change.”
“Are you sure I am an author and travel frequently. I need to have access to my card at all times for big or small purchases.” I laughed to myself, thinking I wasn’t going anywhere for a while, at least until there was a vaccine.
“Let me reassure you. There will be no change to your card, but Ms. Struna, may I ask you one more question Are you the author of The Old Cape House ”
My jaw dropped. He was talking about my first novel of suspenseful historical fiction, The Old Cape House, published in 2013. I was stunned and I stammered, “Why, yes I am.” I was still skeptical about what he wanted from me.
Thomas kept talking. “I thought it was you. I recognized your name, and when you told me you were an author, I knew it was you.”
“Oh, my goodness.” My heart started to beat faster with delight at the connection I was making with an unknown foreign reader.
“Ms. Struna, your book changed me. It changed how I look at the world. It showed me ways to be more adventuresome and to be open to new things. Thank you so very much.”
注意：1. 续写词数应为150左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
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I was stunned at the idea that I had made a difference in someone’s life.
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I hung up, ending this coincidental connection to a fan reader in a faraway place.
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【答案】I was stunned at the idea that I had made a difference in someone’s life. I murmured unbelievably and excitedly, “I had thought nobody would like this type of novel. I was about to give up when you gave me strength.” At this time, there were so many people standing in line that he had to be busy with his work. Therefore, he didn’t say too much, just giving me a determined look and telling me to call him as he handed me a note with a telephone number. Considering that maybe he was off duty, I called him. He was extremely grateful for my calling and said emotionally, “It was your Old Cape House series that inspired me and people around me with confidence to life. Hoping you can continue writing to bring hope and new things to your loyal fans.”
I hung up, ending this coincidental connection to a fan reader in a faraway place. I sank into thought: because of the outbreak of the epidemic, everyone's life was deeply affected and couldn't go out. Yes, he was right. It may be a good chance for me to bring a new world and something about adventure to their life. What a kind man! His words were like the warm sunshine to sweep away dark clouds overhead and bring me hope and confidence. Now I think it is time to open my computer and continue writing.
【导语】本文以人物为线索展开。讲述了作者在办理业务时遇到自己的书迷。作者在书迷的简短几句话中感觉到了自己的写作的意义，让自己在疫情之下的生活多了几分希望。
【详解】1. 段落续写
由第一段首句内容“我为自己改变了别人的生活而感到震惊。”可知，第一段可描写作者在自己书迷的鼓励下激动的心情以及他们之间的交流和互留电话号码，然后通话。
由第二段首句内容“我挂了电话，结束了这段与远方一位读者的巧合联系。”可知，第二段可描写作者挂电话后的思考以及受到鼓励后燃起希望，对自己充满信心。
2. 续写线索：作者难以置信——留下号码——通话——陷入思考——开始相信自己——继续写作
3. 词类激活
行为类
说：murmur/say
鼓励：inspire/encourage
递给：hand/pass
情绪类
激动地：excitedly/ emotionally
坚定的：determined/firm
【点睛】[高分句型1] I was about to give up when you gave me strength. (运用了be about to do… when…句型)
[高分句型2] It was your Old Cape House series that inspired me and people around me with confidence to life. (运用了强调句型)
Part 5 高考真题再现
（拍照北极熊遇险）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
One fall, my wife Elli and I had a single goal: to photograph polar bears. We were staying at a research camp outside “ the polar bear capital of the world ” — the town of Churchill in Manitoba, Canada.
Taking pictures of polar bears is amazing but also dangerous. Polar bears — like all wild animals — should be photographed from a safe distance. When I’m face to face with a polar bear, I like it to be through a camera with a telephoto lens. But sometimes, that is easier said than done. This was one of those times.
As Elli and I cooked dinner, a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby lake sniffed, and smelled our garlic bread.
The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp, which was surrounded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the wire. He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts.
Terrified, Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew. We yelled at the bear, hit pots hard, and fired blank shotgun shells into the air. Sometimes loud noises like these will scare bears off. Not this polar bear though — he just kept trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws (爪子).
I radioed the camp manager for help. He told me a helicopter was on its way, but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived. Making the best of this close encounter (相遇), I took some pictures of the bear.
Elli and I feared the fence wouldn’t last through 30 more minutes of the bear’s punishment. The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray. The spray burns the bears’ eyes, but doesn’t hurt them. So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and, through the fence, sprayed him in the face. With an angry roar (吼叫), the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Para 1:
A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp.
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Para 2:
At that very moment, the helicopter arrived.
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参考答案：
Para 1:
A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. Then we realized that the spray had only angered him even more, for he seemed much fiercer this time and violently pushed the fence like mad. My heart raced wildly, not knowing what to do. At this critical moment, Elli grabbed several pieces of garlic bread and threw them over the fence. It worked! The bear stopped the attack and ran to the bread. But it wasn’t long before he ate up all the bread and came back again.
Para 2:
At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. “Thank goodness we are saved!” Elli cried out. Once the helicopter landed, we got onto it in no time, excited and relieved. When we were safe on the helicopter up in the air, I was amazed to spot that the bear had finally torn down the fence and ran towards the food we left behind. I quickly took out the camera and photographed the rare scene — we were robbed by a polar bear!
几分钟后，这只熊回到了我们的营地。然后我们意识到，浪花只是更激怒了他，因为这次他似乎更凶狠了，而且像疯了一样猛烈地推了推篱笆。我的心狂狂，不知道该怎么办。在这个关键时刻，埃利抓起几块蒜蓉面包，扔过了栅栏。它已经成功了！熊阻止了进攻，跑到面包边。但没过多久，他就吃完了所有的面包，又回来了。
第2部分：
就在那一刻，直升机来了。“谢天谢地，我们得救了！”埃莉喊道。直升机一降落，我们很快就上了飞机，兴奋而松了一口气。当我们安全地坐在直升机上时，我惊讶地发现这只熊终于撕掉了栅栏，向我们留下的食物跑去。我迅速拿出相机，拍摄了这个罕见的场景，我们被一只北极熊抢劫了！
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