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读后续写： 出彩收尾设计（解析版）
Part 1 出彩收尾设计方法
今天我要分享的主题是：如何设计读后续写中的结尾。
结尾句是全文的收尾处，需要起到点睛的作用，给读者留下深刻的印象。怎么做到呢？今天老师就带着你灵活运用首尾呼应、直白叙述、应用名言等多种方法进行结尾，对故事主题进行深化，使人物情感得到升华，让你的文章的结尾更加出彩！今日与大家一起分享三种常用的手法：结尾呼应；引言收尾和情绪提升法。
方法一： 首尾呼应法
请看第一例子，2017年高考真题，讲述的是与健忘妈妈一块去旅游的故事。
文章的开头，是这么写的：I had an interesting childhood. It was filled with surprise and amusements, all because of my mother--loving, sweet, yet absent-minded and forgetful. 我有一个有趣的童年，充满了惊喜和娱乐，都是因为我的母亲——可爱，却心不在焉，健忘。
那么续写结尾的时候可以回到文章的开头再次重申妈妈的性格，来深化主题。
文章结尾可以用首尾呼应的写作手法，请看这一句：Despite mom's being absent-minded and forgetful, she was still a kind and nice mom. 尽管妈妈总是心不在焉，健忘，但她仍然是一个和蔼可亲的妈妈。
我们再来看第二个例子，2018年高考真题 ，讲述的是爸爸带儿子去朋友家农场游玩迷路的故事。
文章的开头，是这么写的：It was summer and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West. 那是夏天，我爸爸想像以前一样请我去度假。 他决定带我去西部荒野之旅。
文章结尾可以用首尾呼应的写作手法，请看这一句：Never had I had such a thrilling yet dangerous vacation before. The special trip to the Wild West was deeply engraved in my mind. 我从来没有过这么刺激又危险的假期。那次去西部的特别旅行，深深地印在我的脑海里。
我们再来看第三个例子，2016年浙江高考样题
开头：A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day.一天，亚瑟在上班的路上发生了一件有趣的事情。
结尾：What a funny day. Arthur couldn't stop laughing whenever he looked back on this hilarious experience. 多么有趣的一天啊，每当亚瑟回想起这次欢乐的经历，他就忍不住笑个不停。
方法二：名言式结尾法
使用名言结尾往往能给文章增添文采，同时也能起到凝炼中心，深化主旨的作用，这样的结尾可以引出结论，即时抒情，凸显主旨渲染氛围等，合理使用名言可以为文章画龙点睛，所以，在日常生活中，我们不但要多进行知识的积累，还要了解其中所包含的道理，这样才能将它们运用到恰当的场合。
需要注意的是：不可生搬硬套名言警句，一定要具体文本具体分析。
例1：Don't judge each day by the harvest you reap but by the seeds that you plant.
（不要根据你每天的收获来判断每一天，而是根据你每天播种了多少。）
这则名言采用了比喻的手法，将人的付出和回报比作耕种和收获。本质上，是过程和结果之间的比较，强调过程的重要性大于结果，可以用于习惯养成类和或者长期活动类叙事的结尾，提升思想境界。
例2：It is during our darkest moments that we must focus to see the light.
（越是在最黑暗的时刻，我们越要寻找光明。）
这则名言通过前后反复概念的对比，突出光明的重要性，引申为在困境中保持积极乐观的生活态度，可以用于主要人物经历重大坎坷，最后凭借乐观心态度过艰难岁月的文章。
例子3：Tell me and I forget. Teach me and I remember. Involve me and I learn.
（告诉我，我会忘记。教给我，我会铭记。让我参与，我会掌握。）
这则名言通过排比和对比，揭示了学习的规律，阐明了实践出真知的道理，可以用于总结学习经历，反思技能掌握的过程等。
例4：In the end, it's not the years in your life that count. It's the life in your years.
（最后，重要的不是你生命中的岁月，而是你如何度过这些岁月的。）
这则名言通过巧妙的词汇调换，改变句意，揭示了生活的真谛：只有认真对待生活，人生才不会留下遗憾，由于本句涉及的时间跨度较大，写作中最好有最好从长者的视角提出。
我们来看下面的实战演练，故事里，主人公在柔道比赛中，通过向对手暴露自己的弱点，充分发挥自己的力量，最终赢得了比赛。故事结尾，借用教练对他的鼓励，完成了升华，其中就用到了名言警句。我们以前来看一下。
It is your biggest weakness that makes you win the match. As a proverb says, ‘Every coin has two sides.’ 是你最大的弱点让你赢得了比赛。正如谚语所说，“每枚硬币都有两面性。”
Making full use of your strength is your achievement. Please remember that in no case will you give up especially in trouble. God is fair to everyone.”充分利用你的力量就是你的成就。请记住，无论如何你都不会放弃，尤其是在麻烦中。上帝对每个人都是公平的。”
方法三：情感升华法
每个故事的创作，不仅仅是要把一件事的前因后果说清楚，同时也要把作者想要表达的含义、想要跟读者一起分享的感受都包括进去，这些思想经常会在整篇文章中出现，并在文章的结尾处得到了升华。在读后续写的结尾处，可以使用情感升华的方法，让读者在情绪上产生共鸣，从而引发他们的思考。
情感升华的结局，需要有很高的立意，是整个故事的灵魂，这样的结局具有很强的艺术感染力，一般情况下，我们可以用表现人生感悟、生活真谛、生活哲理、人生观或价值观等方式，来实现结尾部分的情感升华。
请看第一例子，仍然是2017年高考真题，讲述的是与健忘妈妈一块去旅游的故事。刚才我们用“首尾呼应”法，现在我们试一试用“情感升华”法：在结尾处，表达母爱对我的深远影响。
Everyone has one person they look up to as a role model. To me there is none other than my mom. 每个人都有一个榜样。对我来说，不是别人，正是我妈妈。
She has beauty, brains, and one of the best hearts I know. 她很漂亮，很聪明，而且是我认识的最用心的人之一。
Without her in my life, I would have no idea whether I can be a famous dancer. Someday, when I am older and have children of my own, I hope I can be just as great a parent as my mom.如果没有她，我不知道我能不能成为一个著名的舞者。有一天，当我长大了，有了自己的孩子，我希望我能成为像我妈妈一样伟大的母亲。
我们来看看第二个例子，主人公在故事的结尾处，表达自己对价值观：“幸福”的理解。来看看下面的表达：
【举例2】
I am extremely unhappy about it. I think money doesn’t equal happiness. 我对此非常不高兴。我觉得金钱不等于幸福。
And free life style also doesn’t equal happiness. 自由的生活方式也不等于幸福。
The real happiness is that everyone loves each other, and does everything useful for our society. Most of my classmates support me.真正的幸福是每个人都有“爱”，为我们的社会做一切有益的事情。大多数同学都支持我。
But some of them think money is everything. In my opinion, money can’t take the place of everything, such as your life, your time and your happiness.但有些人认为钱就是一切。在我看来，金钱不能代替一切，比如你的生活，你的时间和你的幸福。
情感升华万能句：
Seeing sth , I felt as if it had been doing and saying,”........”
看到某物，感觉某物好像在做某动作，并且说“（突出主题的话）”。
这个句子的亮点在于：首先该句是虚拟语气句型结构，需要注意，动词时态需要用had been doing，其次seeing sth是非谓语动词做伴随状语，另外句型中加入对话；最后，从修辞的角度，使用了“拟人”的手法。
需要明确的是seeing sth.中的sth.到底是什么呢？我们知道，在故事发展中，一般都会有一两个线索词。这些线索词要么贯穿始终，要么是在推动故事发展过程中，起到非常重要的作用。比如2020年新高考卷中，描述的是万圣节尴尬事：主人公的头卡在了南瓜中。于是南瓜就是整个故事的线索词。八省联考中，主人公的车在路上坏了，遇一家人的热心帮助。在主人公即将开车离开时，热心的小女孩还递给他一个纸袋，纸袋里有食物。那么“纸袋paper bag”在推动剧情发展中，就起到了的重要作用。所以，“南瓜”和“纸袋”可以用在seeing sth中。
我们先看第一个例子。
主人公“我”是老年人，想回到学校学习识字，但是连字母表都不会读。最终战胜了自我怀疑，成功能识字看报纸。升华主题的时候，我们怎么用这个万能句型来表达呢？
请看这句：
Seeing the alphabet again, I felt as if it had been encouraging me and saying, ” it’s never too late to learn”.再次看到字母表，我觉得它好像在鼓励我并说，“学习永远不会太晚”。
看第二个例子。
主人公“我”是个颓废少年，无意中通过自己的专长“扔标枪”，找到了自信，并成功逆袭。我们怎么通过万能句型来升华呢？
Seeing the javelin, I felt as if it had been encouraging me and saying, “You’ve found your talent and I’ve found you”看到标枪，我觉得它好像在鼓励我，并说，“你找到了你的天赋，我找到了你”。这句话中，javelin是“标枪”，talent是“天赋”
第三个例子。
2016年高考真题，讲述了夫妻俩野外露营，因小事发生争执，女主人独自走进森林迷路的故事。最后如何用万能句升华呢？
Seeing the helicopter, Jane felt as if it had been comforting her with its thunderous voice, “Your waiting pays off.”看到那架直升机，简觉得它好像在用雷鸣般的声音安慰她，“你的等待是有回报的。”
第四个例子。
2016年高考样题，讲述了主人公亚瑟遇到了银行抢劫，他巧妙把可能藏有赃款的行李箱 suitcase运到了警察局的故事。最后的升华句，能不能借用我们今天用到的句型呢？我们一起来看看
Seeing the suitcase, Arthur felt as if it had been praising him , “Your did great job!”看到手提箱，亚瑟觉得好像在称赞他，“干得好！”
这个句型，我们主要讲解的是它能起到情感升级的作用，主要用在故事结尾处，如果在故事发展中，你感觉用上这个句型也比较合适，完全也是可以的。
比如2017年高考真题，讲的是主人公“我”与健忘妈妈一块去旅游的故事。途中妈妈忘记了帐篷tent，妈妈执意要返程寻找。看到帐篷的那一刻，你就可以用上这一句
Seeing the tent, I felt as it had been sighing and saying, “I want to experience the outside world.看到帐篷，我感觉它一直在叹息着说，“我想体验外面的世界。”
相信同学们对这个万能句型的用法或多或少有感悟，你可以把这个句型多默写几遍，直到百分百能用出来。
需要强调的是，我们学的“万能句”其实是把双刃剑。可以让起到化繁为简的作用，但是如果长期依赖，也可能让你的表达过于单一。所以说，对于基础暂时不太好的同学而言，学会后，可以救急用。从长远看，我们还是需要积累不同的素材，丰富我们的表达。
此外，需要强调另外一点是，当你你在写作中，觉得某个故事的立意和这个句型有不太一致时，也不要强行使用该句型。其实，在这个系列课程中，我讲了很多出彩的句式结构，你都可以进行仿写。
Part 2 助人型主旨升华句
自己帮助别人或者自己受到他人帮助，一直以来是我们读后续写的一个重要主题，我们今天分享的就是“助人型”的主旨升华句。一共有两个。
我们先来看第一种句型，句式结构比较简单，也很容易仿写。算是一个入门级的升华句子。这个句型就是：from then on +行动。
我们先看例句：
From then on, I would try my best to help sb like sb.Only in this way, could more and more people help each other in the future.
从那时起，我会尽我最大的努力帮助某些人，就像某人一样。 只有这样，将来才能有越来越多的人互相帮助。
从这个句型的内涵上看：自己被别人帮助后，主动把这种助人的行为进行“传递”，即：去积极帮助他人。这种精神的升华具有正能量，是值得鼓励的。从句式结构来看，该句用到了倒装，属于高分亮点句。
下面我们举一反三：
【示例1】
2020年山东卷中，讲述了主人公和孩子们想出在社区卖爆米花的主意，来帮助穷人的故事。我们可以借鉴这个写作公式，可以这么写。
From then on, Bernard made up his mind to help someone who needs help . Only in this way, could more and more people help each other in the future.从那时起，伯纳德决定帮助需要帮助的人。只有这样，将来才能有越来越多的人互相帮助。
【示例2】
我们再来看八省联考的作文，作者讲述一次吉普车爆胎和维修经历。先是路边标语求助无果，失望之际墨西哥人伸出援手。续写的第一段，主要要写帮助的细节。第二段就可以升华主题：
From then on, I placed a jack and some common tools in my car.When meeting people in need on the road ,I would try my best to help them like the family.Only in this way, could more and more people help each other in the future.
从那时起，我在我的车里放了一个千斤顶和一些常见的工具。当我在路上遇到需要帮助的人时，我会尽力像家人一样帮助他们。只有这样，将来才能有越来越多的人互相帮助。
我们再来看第二种句型：动作+感动+感悟
这种“动作”可能是：看见某个场景，或握住某个物体。“感动”这个词，其实很容易理解，只要有人帮你，你就会有“感动”的感觉，其中最多的一种，就是“泪流满面”。“感悟”这个词经常被一些关键词所激励，比如“爱”、“善行”、“付出”。
比如我们来看这一句：
sb looked at sth / held sth, tears rolling down without control. It is love that makes the world go around,which sb felt deep in one’s heart.
某人看到了某物或者拿着某物，眼泪毫无控制地流了下来。 正是爱让世界转动，在某人的心里深深地感受到了这一点。
这个句子从句式结构上：用到了一个独立主格tears rolling down without control，眼泪毫无控制地流下来；以及一个强调句It is love that makes the world go around（正是“爱”让世界转动），还有一个定语从句：which sb felt deep in one’s heart.这三个语法现象都是我们作文中的高分亮点。
我们来实战演练一下，
【示例1】
首先看一下八省联考的试题。在续写第二段开头，文章提到那一家墨西哥人递给作者一个纸袋，里面有食物。我们可以这么来写主旨升华句。
I held the paper bag tightly, tears rolling down without control. It is love that makes the world go around,which I felt deep in my heart.
我紧紧地握着纸袋，眼泪毫无控制地流了下来。 正是爱让世界转动，在我心里里深深地感受到了这一点。
【示例2】
我们再来看山东卷“卖爆米花帮助穷人”的故事，我们借鉴这个写作公式，可以这么写。
He held the coins tightly, tears rolling down without control. It is love that makes the world go around,which Bernard felt deep in his little heart.
他紧紧地握着硬币，眼泪毫无控制地流了下来。 正是爱让世界转动，伯纳德在他的心里深深地感受到了这一点。
同学们刚开始，可以比较生硬的模仿，毕竟能先写出来才是最重要的。随着同学们积累的素材越来越多，我们就可以在“感悟”部分，加上更灵活的一些表达，下面我就提供三句比较不错的句子给大家。
第一句：It dawned on me that a moment of kindness could mean so much to another,and that a simple act could make the world so much better.
我恍然大悟，那一刻的善良对另一个人来说意义重大，而一个简单的行为可以使世界变得如此美好。
第二句：Whether rich or poor, we should be happy to do something for society. Thus we can learn that giving is the source of happiness.无论贫富，我们都应该为社会做点什么。 因此，我们可以学会给予是幸福的源泉。
第三句：Sometimes, a small act of kindness may be powerful enough to make a huge difference.有时候小小的善行，可能足以带来巨大的改变。
Part 3 成长型主旨升华句
“改变”和“成长”是我们读后续写一个重要主题。在第二段的结尾处，我们怎样写“改变成长”型的主旨升华句呢？我们可以根据“改变”的因素来学习不同的表达。比如克服困难，克服自卑等。今天我们要学习七类不同的改变模式。
第一类：学习知识促“改变”
知识就是力量！在改变的过程中，学习不同的知识，然后才能面对各种困难和挑战。比如屏幕前的你，不就是在学习读后续写的技巧吗？请看下面的例句，也是我送给正在学习的你。
It's never too late to learn. Each individual has the right to accept more challenges and make more attempts.学习永远为时不晚。每个人都应该并且有权利去接受更多的挑战，做更多的尝试。
【分析】individual这里表示“个人，个体”。make more attempts 做更多尝试。
第二类：发挥天赋促“改变”
认识自身天赋，并且发挥天赋，这是改变我们的现状的一个重要条件。请看下面的例句。
Actually, every individual possesses talent. Be brave when you find it and also make efforts. You can create miracles in the end.
事实上，每个人都有天赋，发现它的时候要勇敢，也要付出努力，最终你会创造奇迹。
【分析】possess 拥有。create miracles表示创造奇迹。
第三类：追逐梦想促“改变”
永远不要忽视了梦想的力量！“做人如果没有理想,跟咸鱼有什么区别呢”。请看下面两个例句。
It's never too late to go for your dream. As long as you grasp every opportunity and take full advantage of it, you will stand a chance to realize your dreams.追梦永远不晚。只要你抓住机会，充分利用机会，你就有机会实现梦想。
As long as we dare to dream and don't let difficulties get in our way, anything is possible.只要我们敢于梦想，不被困难所阻挡，一切皆有可能。
【分析】take full advantage of 充分利用， realize your dreams表示“实现梦想”
第四类：克服困难促“改变”
只有克服各种苦难，才能改变现状。请看下面的例句。
The journey to success is not smooth. It is full of challenges and difficulties. We should be brave to face them. As long as we don’t give up hope and make every effort to overcome all the difficulties, we will surely achieve our goal (success) finally.
通往成功的路不会平坦，充满挑战和艰辛。我们要勇敢面对。只要不放弃希望并竭尽全力克服所有困难，我们最终会实现我们的目标（成功）。
【分析】smooth 表示“平坦的”overcome all the difficulties 表示“克服困难”；make every effort 表示“做出努力”；as long as，表示“只要”，引导条件状语从句。
第五类：战胜恐惧促“改变”
我们在改变的过程中，经常需要克服自己内心的恐惧。请看下面的例句：
Determination and optimism are what it takes to conquer your fear and accomplish your goal.战胜恐惧和实现目标，需要决心和乐观。
【分析】Determination 表示“决心”； optimism表示“乐观”。conquer your fear表示“克服你的恐惧”；accomplish your goal表示“完成目标”
第六类：战胜自卑促“改变”
我们在改变之前，可能会有一些自卑的心理阻碍着我们成长，比如自己的外貌的缺陷，性格内向等，如何克服自卑，实现人生逆袭？请看下面的例句。
I smiled as I eventually realized the real source of confidence.Now, I am proud of what I look like and much happier, because I have realized it is your personality that decides who you truly are.
我笑了，因为我最终意识到了自信的真正来源。现在，我为我的样子感到骄傲，而且更快乐，因为我已经意识到，决定你真正是谁的是你的个性。
【分析】eventually表示“最后，终于”；personality 表示“个性”。
第七类：战胜消极促“改变”
积极的心态像太阳，照到哪里，哪里亮。“积极”思维，最终让我们成长改变，这种主题，是读后续写中比较常见的。请看下面的例句。
Attitude is more important than facts for us. We cannot change our past; we cannot change the fact. However, the only thing we can do is hold a positive attitude.
态度对我们来说比事实更重要。 我们不能改变我们的过去；我们不能改变事实。 然而，我们唯一能做的就是保持积极的态度。
【分析】Attitude表示“态度”；positive attitude.就是“积极的态度”。
Part 4 脱险型主旨升华句
读后续写中会遇到火灾，水灾，森林迷路等内容的故事，如果涉及到对生命造成了一定的威胁的情节，我们就把这种类型的文章归为“脱险”型。在往年高考真题中，曾经就考过三次：拍摄北极熊遇险；父子骑马迷路；骑车游玩遇狼脱险。
主旨句一：入门句
That day was so unforgettable that it would stay in my memory forever.
那天是如此难忘，它将永远留在我的记忆。
遇到危险并且最终成功脱险的经历，想必对我们每个人来说一定是一生中难忘的经历。所以这个句子使用的场合还是挺多的。句子中使用了so...that的句式结构：如此......以至于。unforgettable是一个形容词，表示“无法忘记的”。
主旨句二：中级句
Only then did I realize that it was bravery that can conquer whatever difficulty came in the way. 直到那时，我才意识到，正是勇敢才能克服一切困难。
遇到危险后，勇敢面对，才能解决问题。这个句子突出了“勇敢”这个核心，这在“脱险型”的故事里，是非常恰当的。这句话使用了倒装的结构和强调结构结合的方式，也属于高分亮点句。
主旨句三：高级句
It was this unique experience that made me understand whatever difficulty we are faced with (= we may face), we mustn’t give up our hope.
“正是这种独特的经历使我理解了我们所面临的任何困难，我们不能放弃我们的希望。”
这个句子也是把强调句，定语从句，宾语从句结合在一起，句式结构比较高级。同学们不妨挑战一下？
主旨句四：综合型
即把前几种方式进行组合，我们可以记住这个组合公式：结果+难忘的经历+体悟
我们再说具体点儿，“结果”指的是获救的结果，如走出森林，获救后见到家人等。“难忘的经历”就是我们刚刚学到的第一个主旨句。“体悟”在这种“脱险型”里，无非就是突出冷静，勇敢，不放弃希望等信念的重要性。
我们来一个例句：
Finally, we did sth. What an unforgettable experience! It turns out that there’s always a way out of any plight as long as we stay calm.
最后，我们做某事。（这里写结果） 多么难忘的经历啊！ （这是一个万能句）事实证明，只要我们保持冷静，就总有办法摆脱困境。（作者的体悟，可以把“保持冷静”，换成“不放弃希望”等。）
我们看2018年高考英语浙江卷的读后续写，爸爸带儿子去朋友家农场游玩迷路的故事。文章的最后，我们可以用这句：
Finally, we went out of the forest that trapped us. What an unforgettable experience! It turns out that there’s always a way out of any plight as long as we stay calm.
最后，我们走出了困住我们的森林。 多么难忘的经历啊！ 事实证明，只要我们保持冷静，就总有办法摆脱困境。
我们也可以把第一句改成：Finally, we arrived home safely just in time for supper（我们安全回家，正好赶上吃晚饭）,也就是说，不管怎么写，第一句是脱险后的结果。
我们再看2016年10月高考英语浙江卷的读后续写，夫妻俩野外露营，因小事发生争执，女主人独自走进森林迷路的故事。文章最后，我们也可以用上这句：
Finally, she saw her husband. As tightly as possible, she hugged him and was too thrilled to say anything.What an unforgettable experience! It turns out that there’s always a way out of any plight as long as we never give up our hope. 最后，她看到了她的丈夫。 她尽可能地紧紧地抱着他，激动得说不出话来。 多么难忘的经历啊！ 事实证明，只要我们不放弃我们的希望，任何困境都有出路。
2017年高考英语的读后续写，和朋友一起骑车游玩，途中遇狼的故事。我们可以这样写：
Finally, the wolf ran away off the road and disappeared in the distance .“We are safe!”Mac said in a pleasant tone. What an unforgettable experience! It turns out that there’s always a way out of any plight as long as we stay calm.最后，狼从路上跑开，消失在远处。“我们很安全！”麦克以一种愉快的语气说。 多么难忘的经历啊！ 事实证明，只要我们保持冷静，就总有办法摆脱困境。
Part 5 综合模拟演练
2023届福建省高三12月份适应性检测卷
题目：阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It took place in a teacher’s family. One day, Ben was playing basketball in the living room after school, when he accidentally threw the ball at a vase sitting on the shelf. The vase dropped to the floor and a large piece broke off. What made Ben more upset was that the vase was not a common decoration but an antique, which was handed down through generations from the 18th century. It was also his mother’s favorite possession. To cover his terrible action, the terrified boy glued the pieces together quickly and put the vase back to its place.
As the mother herself dusted the vase every day, she naturally noticed the cracks that evening. To her surprise, the repair work was actually very good. At dinner time, she asked her boy if he broke the vase. Fearing punishment, the suddenly inspired boy said that a neighbor’s cat jumped in from the window and he couldn’t drive it away no matter how hard he tried. It raced round the living room and finally knocked the vase off its shelf. His mother was quite clear that her son was lying, for all the windows were closed before she left for work each morning and opened after she returned. However, in the face of her son’s nervous eyes and the suspicious looks of the other family members, Ben’s mother remained calm. She realized she shouldn’t just simply blame and punish her son for lying. She came up with another idea.
Before going to bed, the boy found a note from his mother in his room, asking him to go to the study at once. The boy thought he would now be punished, but as he had already lied, he was determined to deny everything to the end, no matter how angry his mum became.
In the study, calmly bathed in the light, his mother’s face showed no sign of anger. On seeing her son push open the door and cautiously enter, she took a chocolate box out of a drawer and gave him one.
注意：
1. 续写的词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
The mother said, “This chocolate is a reward for your imagination: a window-opening cat!”________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Now with some chocolates in hand, a sense of guilt welled up inside the boy. ____ ______
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2022-2023年江苏省百校联考高三年级第一次测试卷
题目：阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I’m from the fishing town of Kinsale, in Ireland. Life is pretty good there, but Dubai caught my attention when I was 18. I moved there myself 10 years ago as a 30-year-old film-maker. It’s been a wild ride, full of chaos and wonder.
My wife, Christine, lives here with me; when her sister Angela came to visit in April this year, the three of us set off in my pickup truck. It was a cloudless day, touching 40 ℃. The heat and humidity were violent, so we had to sightsee from the car.
We took the scenic route between Dubai and Ras al-Khaimah, a charming city in the north. A year earlier, while off-roading with a friend, I got stuck at a water crossing there, at the only inlet on the coast, where the sea flows into a swampy lagoon (咸水湖). I had to be rescued, and learned how quickly the tide (潮水) could come in.
Christine spotted what looked like the Loch Ness monster stuck in the sand. We decided to investigate and drove up to where the sand met the lagoon. It was a camel, not moving.
Since relocating here, I have always kept a shovel, rope, torches and knives in my car—getting stuck in the desert can be debilitating (耗费体力).
I got out my shovel and approached the camel. It was a female; we nicknamed her Stucky. It looked as if she had been trapped for hours—she was in quite deep. I’ve been around camels a lot in Dubai; they are massive. They can be friendly, but they can also be fierce. I approached Stucky slowly and started to gently dig away the sand around her. I kept patting her. I knew if she swung her head around quickly, she could injure herself, or me.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
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Christine filmed my rescue attempt and posted photos on social media.
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Luckily, at that point, a pickup arrived carrying 7 guys with all sorts of apparatus(装备).
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2023届广东省广州市高三上学期调研测试卷（一模）
题目：阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I met the Man of the Trees in summer ten years ago, when I was visiting Uncle Jita.
Those were difficult times.People were cutting down our forest,and there was often flooding. Sometimes our water supply was dirty. When our pump（水泵）did have clean water， we had to wait in line for ages. When the pump wasn't working,we had to walk five kilometres to the closest stream.
But I was happy. I was going to see my favorite uncle. When the day finally arrived, dad drove me to Uncle Jita's house and left.Once he saw me, Uncle Jita announced, "Tomorrow we're going to explore a magical place.Here is my camera,Amy.You can take photos of what you see."
The following day, we woke up and left early on a boat. The trip was exciting.But when we got off,there was...nothing in front of us."I don't want to take pictures of this,"I complained.
Uncle laughed,"Start walking,Amy.I promise you'll be surprised."After some time,I could see the outline of a forest in the distance. A little closer, there was a man waving to us.
"That's Kabir. The forest you see is his. He planted every single tree."As we walked towards Kabir, Uncle explained that thirty years ago, the whole area was a wasteland.But one day Kabir decided to change all that and started planting trees. Thanks to him, part of the wasteland is now a paradise（天堂）.
Uncle introduced me to Kabir, who had gray hair and a determined face.“Jita told me you like animals. Are you ready to see some "he asked."Of course!"I replied. We continued walking and soon were under the trees. I turned my head and was amazed at the difference between the two places. All because of the efforts of one man.
Like Uncle said,Kabir's forest was magical.We saw deer,rhinos,and even tigers.During lunchtime,Kabir explained how,by planting trees,it was possible to stop the land from eroding（侵蚀）.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Hearing this,I turned to my uncle, “I think we can plant trees too ”
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In the years that followed,people in our village worked hard to carry out our plan.
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Part 6 高考真题再现
2022.6浙江卷（帮助无家可归的人）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
I need to do something in my community(社区)in order to complete the community service hours required to graduate from high school. Some of my friends had signed up to spend time at a soup kitchen, so I did, too. It seemed like a good thing to do.
I thought that we would just be passing our dinners to those in need, but I found out we would be doing everything from preparing to serving the dinner. We began preparing the food, from mixing salad dressing to separating frozen meat. Much still needed to be done before dinner was served, but already outside the building many homeless people were gathering. It wasn’t until a couple of hours later that we opened the doors and began serving dinner.
As the line of people came toward me, I got a little scared. I’d come face to face with the homeless: How should I act How would they treat me Would they hate me for having more than they did While some of the people looked very friendly, some of them looked so dangerous, I didn’t have too much time to worry about it. I was assigned (分配)to serve the salad with the lady next to me. She smiled at me and said if I needed help, she’d be right there, which I found quite comforting.
I had never seen so many people wanting food. They were of all ages and nationalities. Most of them wore clothes that were torn and dirty. Some looked like they had totally given up on life, while others seemed to be making the best of the situation, smiling and joking. Some were better off than others, but they all needed a good meal and a warm place to eat. It saddened me to think of how many people there were who didn’t have a place to call home and the only food they got came from a soup kitchen.
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As they came in my direction, I put on my brightest and happiest smile.
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I was so happy that I had earned my service hours in this way.
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读后续写： 出彩收尾设计（解析版）
Part 1 出彩收尾设计方法
今天我要分享的主题是：如何设计读后续写中的结尾。
结尾句是全文的收尾处，需要起到点睛的作用，给读者留下深刻的印象。怎么做到呢？今天老师就带着你灵活运用首尾呼应、直白叙述、应用名言等多种方法进行结尾，对故事主题进行深化，使人物情感得到升华，让你的文章的结尾更加出彩！今日与大家一起分享三种常用的手法：结尾呼应；引言收尾和情绪提升法。
方法一： 首尾呼应法
请看第一例子，2017年高考真题，讲述的是与健忘妈妈一块去旅游的故事。
文章的开头，是这么写的：I had an interesting childhood. It was filled with surprise and amusements, all because of my mother--loving, sweet, yet absent-minded and forgetful. 我有一个有趣的童年，充满了惊喜和娱乐，都是因为我的母亲——可爱，却心不在焉，健忘。
那么续写结尾的时候可以回到文章的开头再次重申妈妈的性格，来深化主题。
文章结尾可以用首尾呼应的写作手法，请看这一句：Despite mom's being absent-minded and forgetful, she was still a kind and nice mom. 尽管妈妈总是心不在焉，健忘，但她仍然是一个和蔼可亲的妈妈。
我们再来看第二个例子，2018年高考真题 ，讲述的是爸爸带儿子去朋友家农场游玩迷路的故事。
文章的开头，是这么写的：It was summer and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West. 那是夏天，我爸爸想像以前一样请我去度假。 他决定带我去西部荒野之旅。
文章结尾可以用首尾呼应的写作手法，请看这一句：Never had I had such a thrilling yet dangerous vacation before. The special trip to the Wild West was deeply engraved in my mind. 我从来没有过这么刺激又危险的假期。那次去西部的特别旅行，深深地印在我的脑海里。
我们再来看第三个例子，2016年浙江高考样题
开头：A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day.一天，亚瑟在上班的路上发生了一件有趣的事情。
结尾：What a funny day. Arthur couldn't stop laughing whenever he looked back on this hilarious experience. 多么有趣的一天啊，每当亚瑟回想起这次欢乐的经历，他就忍不住笑个不停。
方法二：名言式结尾法
使用名言结尾往往能给文章增添文采，同时也能起到凝炼中心，深化主旨的作用，这样的结尾可以引出结论，即时抒情，凸显主旨渲染氛围等，合理使用名言可以为文章画龙点睛，所以，在日常生活中，我们不但要多进行知识的积累，还要了解其中所包含的道理，这样才能将它们运用到恰当的场合。
需要注意的是：不可生搬硬套名言警句，一定要具体文本具体分析。
例1：Don't judge each day by the harvest you reap but by the seeds that you plant.
（不要根据你每天的收获来判断每一天，而是根据你每天播种了多少。）
这则名言采用了比喻的手法，将人的付出和回报比作耕种和收获。本质上，是过程和结果之间的比较，强调过程的重要性大于结果，可以用于习惯养成类和或者长期活动类叙事的结尾，提升思想境界。
例2：It is during our darkest moments that we must focus to see the light.
（越是在最黑暗的时刻，我们越要寻找光明。）
这则名言通过前后反复概念的对比，突出光明的重要性，引申为在困境中保持积极乐观的生活态度，可以用于主要人物经历重大坎坷，最后凭借乐观心态度过艰难岁月的文章。
例子3：Tell me and I forget. Teach me and I remember. Involve me and I learn.
（告诉我，我会忘记。教给我，我会铭记。让我参与，我会掌握。）
这则名言通过排比和对比，揭示了学习的规律，阐明了实践出真知的道理，可以用于总结学习经历，反思技能掌握的过程等。
例4：In the end, it's not the years in your life that count. It's the life in your years.
（最后，重要的不是你生命中的岁月，而是你如何度过这些岁月的。）
这则名言通过巧妙的词汇调换，改变句意，揭示了生活的真谛：只有认真对待生活，人生才不会留下遗憾，由于本句涉及的时间跨度较大，写作中最好有最好从长者的视角提出。
我们来看下面的实战演练，故事里，主人公在柔道比赛中，通过向对手暴露自己的弱点，充分发挥自己的力量，最终赢得了比赛。故事结尾，借用教练对他的鼓励，完成了升华，其中就用到了名言警句。我们以前来看一下。
It is your biggest weakness that makes you win the match. As a proverb says, ‘Every coin has two sides.’ 是你最大的弱点让你赢得了比赛。正如谚语所说，“每枚硬币都有两面性。”
Making full use of your strength is your achievement. Please remember that in no case will you give up especially in trouble. God is fair to everyone.”充分利用你的力量就是你的成就。请记住，无论如何你都不会放弃，尤其是在麻烦中。上帝对每个人都是公平的。”
方法三：情感升华法
每个故事的创作，不仅仅是要把一件事的前因后果说清楚，同时也要把作者想要表达的含义、想要跟读者一起分享的感受都包括进去，这些思想经常会在整篇文章中出现，并在文章的结尾处得到了升华。在读后续写的结尾处，可以使用情感升华的方法，让读者在情绪上产生共鸣，从而引发他们的思考。
情感升华的结局，需要有很高的立意，是整个故事的灵魂，这样的结局具有很强的艺术感染力，一般情况下，我们可以用表现人生感悟、生活真谛、生活哲理、人生观或价值观等方式，来实现结尾部分的情感升华。
请看第一例子，仍然是2017年高考真题，讲述的是与健忘妈妈一块去旅游的故事。刚才我们用“首尾呼应”法，现在我们试一试用“情感升华”法：在结尾处，表达母爱对我的深远影响。
Everyone has one person they look up to as a role model. To me there is none other than my mom. 每个人都有一个榜样。对我来说，不是别人，正是我妈妈。
She has beauty, brains, and one of the best hearts I know. 她很漂亮，很聪明，而且是我认识的最用心的人之一。
Without her in my life, I would have no idea whether I can be a famous dancer. Someday, when I am older and have children of my own, I hope I can be just as great a parent as my mom.如果没有她，我不知道我能不能成为一个著名的舞者。有一天，当我长大了，有了自己的孩子，我希望我能成为像我妈妈一样伟大的母亲。
我们来看看第二个例子，主人公在故事的结尾处，表达自己对价值观：“幸福”的理解。来看看下面的表达：
【举例2】
I am extremely unhappy about it. I think money doesn’t equal happiness. 我对此非常不高兴。我觉得金钱不等于幸福。
And free life style also doesn’t equal happiness. 自由的生活方式也不等于幸福。
The real happiness is that everyone loves each other, and does everything useful for our society. Most of my classmates support me.真正的幸福是每个人都有“爱”，为我们的社会做一切有益的事情。大多数同学都支持我。
But some of them think money is everything. In my opinion, money can’t take the place of everything, such as your life, your time and your happiness.但有些人认为钱就是一切。在我看来，金钱不能代替一切，比如你的生活，你的时间和你的幸福。
情感升华万能句：
Seeing sth , I felt as if it had been doing and saying,”........”
看到某物，感觉某物好像在做某动作，并且说“（突出主题的话）”。
这个句子的亮点在于：首先该句是虚拟语气句型结构，需要注意，动词时态需要用had been doing，其次seeing sth是非谓语动词做伴随状语，另外句型中加入对话；最后，从修辞的角度，使用了“拟人”的手法。
需要明确的是seeing sth.中的sth.到底是什么呢？我们知道，在故事发展中，一般都会有一两个线索词。这些线索词要么贯穿始终，要么是在推动故事发展过程中，起到非常重要的作用。比如2020年新高考卷中，描述的是万圣节尴尬事：主人公的头卡在了南瓜中。于是南瓜就是整个故事的线索词。八省联考中，主人公的车在路上坏了，遇一家人的热心帮助。在主人公即将开车离开时，热心的小女孩还递给他一个纸袋，纸袋里有食物。那么“纸袋paper bag”在推动剧情发展中，就起到了的重要作用。所以，“南瓜”和“纸袋”可以用在seeing sth中。
我们先看第一个例子。
主人公“我”是老年人，想回到学校学习识字，但是连字母表都不会读。最终战胜了自我怀疑，成功能识字看报纸。升华主题的时候，我们怎么用这个万能句型来表达呢？
请看这句：
Seeing the alphabet again, I felt as if it had been encouraging me and saying, ” it’s never too late to learn”.再次看到字母表，我觉得它好像在鼓励我并说，“学习永远不会太晚”。
看第二个例子。
主人公“我”是个颓废少年，无意中通过自己的专长“扔标枪”，找到了自信，并成功逆袭。我们怎么通过万能句型来升华呢？
Seeing the javelin, I felt as if it had been encouraging me and saying, “You’ve found your talent and I’ve found you”看到标枪，我觉得它好像在鼓励我，并说，“你找到了你的天赋，我找到了你”。这句话中，javelin是“标枪”，talent是“天赋”
第三个例子。
2016年高考真题，讲述了夫妻俩野外露营，因小事发生争执，女主人独自走进森林迷路的故事。最后如何用万能句升华呢？
Seeing the helicopter, Jane felt as if it had been comforting her with its thunderous voice, “Your waiting pays off.”看到那架直升机，简觉得它好像在用雷鸣般的声音安慰她，“你的等待是有回报的。”
第四个例子。
2016年高考样题，讲述了主人公亚瑟遇到了银行抢劫，他巧妙把可能藏有赃款的行李箱 suitcase运到了警察局的故事。最后的升华句，能不能借用我们今天用到的句型呢？我们一起来看看
Seeing the suitcase, Arthur felt as if it had been praising him , “Your did great job!”看到手提箱，亚瑟觉得好像在称赞他，“干得好！”
这个句型，我们主要讲解的是它能起到情感升级的作用，主要用在故事结尾处，如果在故事发展中，你感觉用上这个句型也比较合适，完全也是可以的。
比如2017年高考真题，讲的是主人公“我”与健忘妈妈一块去旅游的故事。途中妈妈忘记了帐篷tent，妈妈执意要返程寻找。看到帐篷的那一刻，你就可以用上这一句
Seeing the tent, I felt as it had been sighing and saying, “I want to experience the outside world.看到帐篷，我感觉它一直在叹息着说，“我想体验外面的世界。”
相信同学们对这个万能句型的用法或多或少有感悟，你可以把这个句型多默写几遍，直到百分百能用出来。
需要强调的是，我们学的“万能句”其实是把双刃剑。可以让起到化繁为简的作用，但是如果长期依赖，也可能让你的表达过于单一。所以说，对于基础暂时不太好的同学而言，学会后，可以救急用。从长远看，我们还是需要积累不同的素材，丰富我们的表达。
此外，需要强调另外一点是，当你你在写作中，觉得某个故事的立意和这个句型有不太一致时，也不要强行使用该句型。其实，在这个系列课程中，我讲了很多出彩的句式结构，你都可以进行仿写。
Part 2 助人型主旨升华句
自己帮助别人或者自己受到他人帮助，一直以来是我们读后续写的一个重要主题，我们今天分享的就是“助人型”的主旨升华句。一共有两个。
我们先来看第一种句型，句式结构比较简单，也很容易仿写。算是一个入门级的升华句子。这个句型就是：from then on +行动。
我们先看例句：
From then on, I would try my best to help sb like sb.Only in this way, could more and more people help each other in the future.
从那时起，我会尽我最大的努力帮助某些人，就像某人一样。 只有这样，将来才能有越来越多的人互相帮助。
从这个句型的内涵上看：自己被别人帮助后，主动把这种助人的行为进行“传递”，即：去积极帮助他人。这种精神的升华具有正能量，是值得鼓励的。从句式结构来看，该句用到了倒装，属于高分亮点句。
下面我们举一反三：
【示例1】
2020年山东卷中，讲述了主人公和孩子们想出在社区卖爆米花的主意，来帮助穷人的故事。我们可以借鉴这个写作公式，可以这么写。
From then on, Bernard made up his mind to help someone who needs help . Only in this way, could more and more people help each other in the future.从那时起，伯纳德决定帮助需要帮助的人。只有这样，将来才能有越来越多的人互相帮助。
【示例2】
我们再来看八省联考的作文，作者讲述一次吉普车爆胎和维修经历。先是路边标语求助无果，失望之际墨西哥人伸出援手。续写的第一段，主要要写帮助的细节。第二段就可以升华主题：
From then on, I placed a jack and some common tools in my car.When meeting people in need on the road ,I would try my best to help them like the family.Only in this way, could more and more people help each other in the future.
从那时起，我在我的车里放了一个千斤顶和一些常见的工具。当我在路上遇到需要帮助的人时，我会尽力像家人一样帮助他们。只有这样，将来才能有越来越多的人互相帮助。
我们再来看第二种句型：动作+感动+感悟
这种“动作”可能是：看见某个场景，或握住某个物体。“感动”这个词，其实很容易理解，只要有人帮你，你就会有“感动”的感觉，其中最多的一种，就是“泪流满面”。“感悟”这个词经常被一些关键词所激励，比如“爱”、“善行”、“付出”。
比如我们来看这一句：
sb looked at sth / held sth, tears rolling down without control. It is love that makes the world go around,which sb felt deep in one’s heart.
某人看到了某物或者拿着某物，眼泪毫无控制地流了下来。 正是爱让世界转动，在某人的心里深深地感受到了这一点。
这个句子从句式结构上：用到了一个独立主格tears rolling down without control，眼泪毫无控制地流下来；以及一个强调句It is love that makes the world go around（正是“爱”让世界转动），还有一个定语从句：which sb felt deep in one’s heart.这三个语法现象都是我们作文中的高分亮点。
我们来实战演练一下，
【示例1】
首先看一下八省联考的试题。在续写第二段开头，文章提到那一家墨西哥人递给作者一个纸袋，里面有食物。我们可以这么来写主旨升华句。
I held the paper bag tightly, tears rolling down without control. It is love that makes the world go around,which I felt deep in my heart.
我紧紧地握着纸袋，眼泪毫无控制地流了下来。 正是爱让世界转动，在我心里里深深地感受到了这一点。
【示例2】
我们再来看山东卷“卖爆米花帮助穷人”的故事，我们借鉴这个写作公式，可以这么写。
He held the coins tightly, tears rolling down without control. It is love that makes the world go around,which Bernard felt deep in his little heart.
他紧紧地握着硬币，眼泪毫无控制地流了下来。 正是爱让世界转动，伯纳德在他的心里深深地感受到了这一点。
同学们刚开始，可以比较生硬的模仿，毕竟能先写出来才是最重要的。随着同学们积累的素材越来越多，我们就可以在“感悟”部分，加上更灵活的一些表达，下面我就提供三句比较不错的句子给大家。
第一句：It dawned on me that a moment of kindness could mean so much to another,and that a simple act could make the world so much better.
我恍然大悟，那一刻的善良对另一个人来说意义重大，而一个简单的行为可以使世界变得如此美好。
第二句：Whether rich or poor, we should be happy to do something for society. Thus we can learn that giving is the source of happiness.无论贫富，我们都应该为社会做点什么。 因此，我们可以学会给予是幸福的源泉。
第三句：Sometimes, a small act of kindness may be powerful enough to make a huge difference.有时候小小的善行，可能足以带来巨大的改变。
Part 3 成长型主旨升华句
“改变”和“成长”是我们读后续写一个重要主题。在第二段的结尾处，我们怎样写“改变成长”型的主旨升华句呢？我们可以根据“改变”的因素来学习不同的表达。比如克服困难，克服自卑等。今天我们要学习七类不同的改变模式。
第一类：学习知识促“改变”
知识就是力量！在改变的过程中，学习不同的知识，然后才能面对各种困难和挑战。比如屏幕前的你，不就是在学习读后续写的技巧吗？请看下面的例句，也是我送给正在学习的你。
It's never too late to learn. Each individual has the right to accept more challenges and make more attempts.学习永远为时不晚。每个人都应该并且有权利去接受更多的挑战，做更多的尝试。
【分析】individual这里表示“个人，个体”。make more attempts 做更多尝试。
第二类：发挥天赋促“改变”
认识自身天赋，并且发挥天赋，这是改变我们的现状的一个重要条件。请看下面的例句。
Actually, every individual possesses talent. Be brave when you find it and also make efforts. You can create miracles in the end.
事实上，每个人都有天赋，发现它的时候要勇敢，也要付出努力，最终你会创造奇迹。
【分析】possess 拥有。create miracles表示创造奇迹。
第三类：追逐梦想促“改变”
永远不要忽视了梦想的力量！“做人如果没有理想,跟咸鱼有什么区别呢”。请看下面两个例句。
It's never too late to go for your dream. As long as you grasp every opportunity and take full advantage of it, you will stand a chance to realize your dreams.追梦永远不晚。只要你抓住机会，充分利用机会，你就有机会实现梦想。
As long as we dare to dream and don't let difficulties get in our way, anything is possible.只要我们敢于梦想，不被困难所阻挡，一切皆有可能。
【分析】take full advantage of 充分利用， realize your dreams表示“实现梦想”
第四类：克服困难促“改变”
只有克服各种苦难，才能改变现状。请看下面的例句。
The journey to success is not smooth. It is full of challenges and difficulties. We should be brave to face them. As long as we don’t give up hope and make every effort to overcome all the difficulties, we will surely achieve our goal (success) finally.
通往成功的路不会平坦，充满挑战和艰辛。我们要勇敢面对。只要不放弃希望并竭尽全力克服所有困难，我们最终会实现我们的目标（成功）。
【分析】smooth 表示“平坦的”overcome all the difficulties 表示“克服困难”；make every effort 表示“做出努力”；as long as，表示“只要”，引导条件状语从句。
第五类：战胜恐惧促“改变”
我们在改变的过程中，经常需要克服自己内心的恐惧。请看下面的例句：
Determination and optimism are what it takes to conquer your fear and accomplish your goal.战胜恐惧和实现目标，需要决心和乐观。
【分析】Determination 表示“决心”； optimism表示“乐观”。conquer your fear表示“克服你的恐惧”；accomplish your goal表示“完成目标”
第六类：战胜自卑促“改变”
我们在改变之前，可能会有一些自卑的心理阻碍着我们成长，比如自己的外貌的缺陷，性格内向等，如何克服自卑，实现人生逆袭？请看下面的例句。
I smiled as I eventually realized the real source of confidence.Now, I am proud of what I look like and much happier, because I have realized it is your personality that decides who you truly are.
我笑了，因为我最终意识到了自信的真正来源。现在，我为我的样子感到骄傲，而且更快乐，因为我已经意识到，决定你真正是谁的是你的个性。
【分析】eventually表示“最后，终于”；personality 表示“个性”。
第七类：战胜消极促“改变”
积极的心态像太阳，照到哪里，哪里亮。“积极”思维，最终让我们成长改变，这种主题，是读后续写中比较常见的。请看下面的例句。
Attitude is more important than facts for us. We cannot change our past; we cannot change the fact. However, the only thing we can do is hold a positive attitude.
态度对我们来说比事实更重要。 我们不能改变我们的过去；我们不能改变事实。 然而，我们唯一能做的就是保持积极的态度。
【分析】Attitude表示“态度”；positive attitude.就是“积极的态度”。
Part 4 脱险型主旨升华句
读后续写中会遇到火灾，水灾，森林迷路等内容的故事，如果涉及到对生命造成了一定的威胁的情节，我们就把这种类型的文章归为“脱险”型。在往年高考真题中，曾经就考过三次：拍摄北极熊遇险；父子骑马迷路；骑车游玩遇狼脱险。
主旨句一：入门句
That day was so unforgettable that it would stay in my memory forever.
那天是如此难忘，它将永远留在我的记忆。
遇到危险并且最终成功脱险的经历，想必对我们每个人来说一定是一生中难忘的经历。所以这个句子使用的场合还是挺多的。句子中使用了so...that的句式结构：如此......以至于。unforgettable是一个形容词，表示“无法忘记的”。
主旨句二：中级句
Only then did I realize that it was bravery that can conquer whatever difficulty came in the way. 直到那时，我才意识到，正是勇敢才能克服一切困难。
遇到危险后，勇敢面对，才能解决问题。这个句子突出了“勇敢”这个核心，这在“脱险型”的故事里，是非常恰当的。这句话使用了倒装的结构和强调结构结合的方式，也属于高分亮点句。
主旨句三：高级句
It was this unique experience that made me understand whatever difficulty we are faced with (= we may face), we mustn’t give up our hope.
“正是这种独特的经历使我理解了我们所面临的任何困难，我们不能放弃我们的希望。”
这个句子也是把强调句，定语从句，宾语从句结合在一起，句式结构比较高级。同学们不妨挑战一下？
主旨句四：综合型
即把前几种方式进行组合，我们可以记住这个组合公式：结果+难忘的经历+体悟
我们再说具体点儿，“结果”指的是获救的结果，如走出森林，获救后见到家人等。“难忘的经历”就是我们刚刚学到的第一个主旨句。“体悟”在这种“脱险型”里，无非就是突出冷静，勇敢，不放弃希望等信念的重要性。
我们来一个例句：
Finally, we did sth. What an unforgettable experience! It turns out that there’s always a way out of any plight as long as we stay calm.
最后，我们做某事。（这里写结果） 多么难忘的经历啊！ （这是一个万能句）事实证明，只要我们保持冷静，就总有办法摆脱困境。（作者的体悟，可以把“保持冷静”，换成“不放弃希望”等。）
我们看2018年高考英语浙江卷的读后续写，爸爸带儿子去朋友家农场游玩迷路的故事。文章的最后，我们可以用这句：
Finally, we went out of the forest that trapped us. What an unforgettable experience! It turns out that there’s always a way out of any plight as long as we stay calm.
最后，我们走出了困住我们的森林。 多么难忘的经历啊！ 事实证明，只要我们保持冷静，就总有办法摆脱困境。
我们也可以把第一句改成：Finally, we arrived home safely just in time for supper（我们安全回家，正好赶上吃晚饭）,也就是说，不管怎么写，第一句是脱险后的结果。
我们再看2016年10月高考英语浙江卷的读后续写，夫妻俩野外露营，因小事发生争执，女主人独自走进森林迷路的故事。文章最后，我们也可以用上这句：
Finally, she saw her husband. As tightly as possible, she hugged him and was too thrilled to say anything.What an unforgettable experience! It turns out that there’s always a way out of any plight as long as we never give up our hope. 最后，她看到了她的丈夫。 她尽可能地紧紧地抱着他，激动得说不出话来。 多么难忘的经历啊！ 事实证明，只要我们不放弃我们的希望，任何困境都有出路。
2017年高考英语的读后续写，和朋友一起骑车游玩，途中遇狼的故事。我们可以这样写：
Finally, the wolf ran away off the road and disappeared in the distance .“We are safe!”Mac said in a pleasant tone. What an unforgettable experience! It turns out that there’s always a way out of any plight as long as we stay calm.最后，狼从路上跑开，消失在远处。“我们很安全！”麦克以一种愉快的语气说。 多么难忘的经历啊！ 事实证明，只要我们保持冷静，就总有办法摆脱困境。
Part 5 综合模拟演练
2023届福建省高三12月份适应性检测卷
题目：阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It took place in a teacher’s family. One day, Ben was playing basketball in the living room after school, when he accidentally threw the ball at a vase sitting on the shelf. The vase dropped to the floor and a large piece broke off. What made Ben more upset was that the vase was not a common decoration but an antique, which was handed down through generations from the 18th century. It was also his mother’s favorite possession. To cover his terrible action, the terrified boy glued the pieces together quickly and put the vase back to its place.
As the mother herself dusted the vase every day, she naturally noticed the cracks that evening. To her surprise, the repair work was actually very good. At dinner time, she asked her boy if he broke the vase. Fearing punishment, the suddenly inspired boy said that a neighbor’s cat jumped in from the window and he couldn’t drive it away no matter how hard he tried. It raced round the living room and finally knocked the vase off its shelf. His mother was quite clear that her son was lying, for all the windows were closed before she left for work each morning and opened after she returned. However, in the face of her son’s nervous eyes and the suspicious looks of the other family members, Ben’s mother remained calm. She realized she shouldn’t just simply blame and punish her son for lying. She came up with another idea.
Before going to bed, the boy found a note from his mother in his room, asking him to go to the study at once. The boy thought he would now be punished, but as he had already lied, he was determined to deny everything to the end, no matter how angry his mum became.
In the study, calmly bathed in the light, his mother’s face showed no sign of anger. On seeing her son push open the door and cautiously enter, she took a chocolate box out of a drawer and gave him one.
注意：
1. 续写的词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
The mother said, “This chocolate is a reward for your imagination: a window-opening cat!”________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Now with some chocolates in hand, a sense of guilt welled up inside the boy. ____ ______
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【One possible version:】
The mother said, “This chocolate is a reward for your imagination: a window-opening cat !” Hearing her sincere appreciation, Ben’s face became red, lowered his head and said a thank-you in a low voice. Surprisingly, the mother took out another chocolate and pressed it into his hand. “This one is for the delicate repair work you did to the broken vase.” She also added that she was moved by how much the boy cherished the family possessions. At these remarks, Ben felt much ashamed, and had to duck his head even lower. The mother then calmly encouraged Ben to reward himself more chocolates for any other merits he had displayed in this event.
Now with some chocolates in hand, a sense of guilt welled up inside the boy. After what seemed a long time, he looked up at his mother and admitted that it was not the cat but he that had broken the vase accidentally. He then asked for punishment. “I’m sorry I lied to you, mum. Please take back the chocolate.” Feeling so ashamed, Ben couldn’t hold back his tears. He opened his palm wide, ready to return the chocolates. To his surprise, however, his mother placed the whole bag of chocolate in his hand, smiling. “Honesty deserves the best reward, my dear.”
【导语】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了Ben放学后在客厅里打篮球，不小心架子上的花瓶打碎了，虽然他为了掩饰把花瓶拼接好了，但还是被细心的妈妈发现了。Ben因为害怕收到惩罚，撒谎说是猫进来打碎的，结果母亲没有责备Ben，而是通过良好的引导让Ben认识到了自己的错误。
【写作指导】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“妈妈说：‘这巧克力是对你想象力的奖励：一只会开窗户的猫！’”可知，第一段可描写母亲是如何“夸奖”Ben的所作所为的，以及Ben的心理。
②由第二段首句内容“现在手里拿着一些巧克力，一种罪恶感在男孩心里涌了出来”可知，第二段可描写Ben感到羞愧，选择和妈妈道歉。
2.续写线索：奖励——Ben羞愧——承认错误——道歉——感悟
3.词汇激活
行为类 ①珍惜：cherish/treasure ②鼓励：encourage/inspire ③归还：return /give back
情绪类 ①真诚的：sincere / heartfelt ②感动：move/touch
【点睛】
[高分句型1] Hearing her sincere appreciation, Ben’s face became red, lowered his head and said a thank-you in a low voice. (运用了现在分词作状语)
[高分句型2] She also added that she was moved by how much the boy cherished the family possessions. (运用了that引导宾语从句)
2022-2023年江苏省百校联考高三年级第一次测试卷
题目：阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I’m from the fishing town of Kinsale, in Ireland. Life is pretty good there, but Dubai caught my attention when I was 18. I moved there myself 10 years ago as a 30-year-old film-maker. It’s been a wild ride, full of chaos and wonder.
My wife, Christine, lives here with me; when her sister Angela came to visit in April this year, the three of us set off in my pickup truck. It was a cloudless day, touching 40 ℃. The heat and humidity were violent, so we had to sightsee from the car.
We took the scenic route between Dubai and Ras al-Khaimah, a charming city in the north. A year earlier, while off-roading with a friend, I got stuck at a water crossing there, at the only inlet on the coast, where the sea flows into a swampy lagoon (咸水湖). I had to be rescued, and learned how quickly the tide (潮水) could come in.
Christine spotted what looked like the Loch Ness monster stuck in the sand. We decided to investigate and drove up to where the sand met the lagoon. It was a camel, not moving.
Since relocating here, I have always kept a shovel, rope, torches and knives in my car—getting stuck in the desert can be debilitating (耗费体力).
I got out my shovel and approached the camel. It was a female; we nicknamed her Stucky. It looked as if she had been trapped for hours—she was in quite deep. I’ve been around camels a lot in Dubai; they are massive. They can be friendly, but they can also be fierce. I approached Stucky slowly and started to gently dig away the sand around her. I kept patting her. I knew if she swung her head around quickly, she could injure herself, or me.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
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Christine filmed my rescue attempt and posted photos on social media.
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Luckily, at that point, a pickup arrived carrying 7 guys with all sorts of apparatus(装备).
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话题：救助动物
主要内容：我和妻子、妻妹三人在沙漠旅行途中遇见一只被困的大骆驼。我用工具想把它从沙子里救出来，我的妻子把我救助的视频发到了社交媒体上，希望在附近的人能看到并来救助。
【One possible version】
Christine filmed my rescue attempt and posted photos on social media. Angela gave Stucky water. I focused on digging out her back legs. When I tried to wipe the sweat from my eyes, I would get sand in them. An hour later, we still weren't making much progress—whenever we nearly freed a leg, which took about 20 minutes, she would get sucked back into the sand. And the more she struggled to get free, the more stuck she became. We were worried it would get dark and the tide would come in.
Luckily, at that point, a pickup arrived carrying 7 guys with all sorts of apparatus (装备). Someone saw posted photos of the camel rescue on social media. Word then quickly spread to the small farms a few kilometres away. They joined in and worked super-hard. Everyone was working on all four of the camel's legs at the same time, using different techniques. When we finally got her out, Stucky's legs were effectively dead. The the guys massaged her legs to get the blood flowing. It took about 20 minutes for her to stand. Then she turned, stretched and gave us a wink goodbye.
【高分句型一】 An hour later，we still weren't making much progress—whenever we nearly freed a leg, which took about 20 minutes, she would get sucked back into the sand.
翻译：一个小时后，我们仍然没有取得太大的进展，每次我们耗费20分钟将要释放出一条腿了，她又会被吸回到沙子里。
分析：句中使用了由which引导的非限制性定语从句。
【高分句型二】：Everyone was working on all four of the came I's legs at the same time, using different techniques.
翻译：每个人都在同时使用不同的技术对骆驼的四条腿进行训练。
分析：句中使用了using different techniques现在分词作状语。
2023届广东省广州市高三上学期调研测试卷（一模）
题目：阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I met the Man of the Trees in summer ten years ago, when I was visiting Uncle Jita.
Those were difficult times.People were cutting down our forest,and there was often flooding. Sometimes our water supply was dirty. When our pump（水泵）did have clean water， we had to wait in line for ages. When the pump wasn't working,we had to walk five kilometres to the closest stream.
But I was happy. I was going to see my favorite uncle. When the day finally arrived, dad drove me to Uncle Jita's house and left.Once he saw me, Uncle Jita announced, "Tomorrow we're going to explore a magical place.Here is my camera,Amy.You can take photos of what you see."
The following day, we woke up and left early on a boat. The trip was exciting.But when we got off,there was...nothing in front of us."I don't want to take pictures of this,"I complained.
Uncle laughed,"Start walking,Amy.I promise you'll be surprised."After some time,I could see the outline of a forest in the distance. A little closer, there was a man waving to us.
"That's Kabir. The forest you see is his. He planted every single tree."As we walked towards Kabir, Uncle explained that thirty years ago, the whole area was a wasteland.But one day Kabir decided to change all that and started planting trees. Thanks to him, part of the wasteland is now a paradise（天堂）.
Uncle introduced me to Kabir, who had gray hair and a determined face.“Jita told me you like animals. Are you ready to see some "he asked."Of course!"I replied. We continued walking and soon were under the trees. I turned my head and was amazed at the difference between the two places. All because of the efforts of one man.
Like Uncle said,Kabir's forest was magical.We saw deer,rhinos,and even tigers.During lunchtime,Kabir explained how,by planting trees,it was possible to stop the land from eroding（侵蚀）.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Hearing this,I turned to my uncle, “I think we can plant trees too ”
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In the years that followed,people in our village worked hard to carry out our plan.
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【One possible version】
Hearing this, I turned to my uncle,"I think we can plant trees too."Grabbing the camera in my hand, I added with excitement.“I've got a plan! I'll show them the photos of Kabir's magical forest!"Seeing Uncle and Kabir's encouraging smile,I immediately set down to my work, busily pressing my shutter and capturing the amazing scenes in the forest. When Uncle and I went back to the village several days later and showed these wonderful pictures to my neighbour,they were stunned by the beauty of the forest."It was the trees that turned the place into a paradise!"We then explained our tree-planting plan to the villagers, which was quickly accepted by all of them.
In the years that followed,people in our village worked hard to try out our plan.Instead of cutting down our forest,we started to plant trees,which has eventually helped protect the soil and stopped the land from eroding. Thanks to the trees, the water has been purified and we finally have clean and stable water supply. With our joint efforts, our village is now surrounded by small thriving forests with blooming flowers, lively animals and crystal-clear streams running through. Witnessing the gradual change of our village, we came to realize that only when we live in harmony with nature can we have a brighter future.
【导语】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了十年前，吉塔叔叔带作者去探索一个神奇的地方。那里30年前一片荒地，卡比尔决定改变这一切，开始植树，最终变成了森林，并且带来生态环境改变的故事。
【写作指导】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容"听了这话，我转向叔叔说："我想我们也可以种树。""可知，第一段可描写作者通过宣传森林让更多人参与种树。
②由第二段首句内容"在接下来的几年里，我们村里的人努力工作来实施我们的计划。"可知，第二段可描写植树给村庄带来的变化。
2.续写线索：想到计划——分享计划————接受计划————实施计划——环境改变3.词汇激活行为类
①.抓住：grab/take hold of ②.返回：go back to/return ③.展示：show/display 情绪类
①鼓舞的：encouraging/inspiring ②.兴奋：excitement/thrill
【点睛】
【高分句型1】.We then explained our tree-planting plan to the villagers， which was quickly accepted by all of them. （运用了which引导的非限定性定语从句）
【高分句型2】.Witnessing the gradual change of our village，we came to realize that only when we live in harmony with nature can we have a brighter future.（运用了现在分词作状语以及that引导的宾语从句）
Part 6 高考真题再现
2022.6浙江卷（帮助无家可归的人）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
I need to do something in my community(社区)in order to complete the community service hours required to graduate from high school. Some of my friends had signed up to spend time at a soup kitchen, so I did, too. It seemed like a good thing to do.
I thought that we would just be passing our dinners to those in need, but I found out we would be doing everything from preparing to serving the dinner. We began preparing the food, from mixing salad dressing to separating frozen meat. Much still needed to be done before dinner was served, but already outside the building many homeless people were gathering. It wasn’t until a couple of hours later that we opened the doors and began serving dinner.
As the line of people came toward me, I got a little scared. I’d come face to face with the homeless: How should I act How would they treat me Would they hate me for having more than they did While some of the people looked very friendly, some of them looked so dangerous, I didn’t have too much time to worry about it. I was assigned (分配)to serve the salad with the lady next to me. She smiled at me and said if I needed help, she’d be right there, which I found quite comforting.
I had never seen so many people wanting food. They were of all ages and nationalities. Most of them wore clothes that were torn and dirty. Some looked like they had totally given up on life, while others seemed to be making the best of the situation, smiling and joking. Some were better off than others, but they all needed a good meal and a warm place to eat. It saddened me to think of how many people there were who didn’t have a place to call home and the only food they got came from a soup kitchen.
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As they came in my direction, I put on my brightest and happiest smile.
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I was so happy that I had earned my service hours in this way.
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参考答案：
As they came in my direction, I put on my brightest and happiest smile. Nervous as I felt, I did my utmost to keep myself calm and hand out the delicately-wrapped meal to those in need, with my hands trembling. Upon seeing it, every one of them beamed with smile, gently murmured “Thank you” and bowed to me sincerely, which brought warmth straight into my heart. The passing time witnessed the smooth process of this event. It was not until the night wiped out the last ray of sun that we finished our community service hours.
I was so happy that I had earned my service hours in this way. Not only did I clear my previous prejudice against those who seemed to be dangerous and unamiable, but also I extended a helping hand to those who wanted food. I suddenly came to realize that not everyone was blessed with fortune and born to be wealthy, therefore, we should always keep grateful for what life blessed us with. However, we did have the power to share our happiness with others, that is, spreading love. Love is everything, like the clear moon hanging high in the sky, spreading its mild moonlight selflessly to everyone.
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