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Unit 11 How was your school trip
Name
Ⅰ. Teaching procedures
Step1 Pre-writing
Talk about Tom’s school trip
Step2 While-writing
Students write the composition about their school trips for eight minutes.
Step3 Post-writing
1.Students check their own compositions. Then check with their partner.
2.Students work in groups to correct the mistakes and appreciate their group members’ compositions.
3.Students show their classmates’ compositions and evaluate them.
4.The teacher shows the sample composition and guide the students to analyse it.
5.Students finish their second draft according to the suggestions.
Ⅱ、Analyze the topic
假如你是Peter, 你的英国笔友Jack想了解你们班参加的一次学校郊游，特地写信询问你有关你们班郊游的情况，请你给他写一封回信告诉他你们郊游的经历和感受。
写作要求：1. 字迹清楚，语言流畅，表达准确，逻辑清晰；
2. 词数70词左右.
参考词汇：活动activity 名胜古迹 place of interest
捡垃圾pick rubbish
Person(人称)： Tense（时态）：
Style（形式）： Details（细节）：
Structure(结构)：
Ⅲ. Finish the first draft
Dear Jack,
I’m writing to you to tell you my school trip.
Best wishes!
Yours,
Peter Ⅳ. Finish the second draft
Dear Jack,
I’m writing to you to tell you my school trip.
Best wishes!
Yours,
Tom中小学教育资源及组卷应用平台
Marking ladders
How to improve learning efficiency
For you to consider Objectives-focus on structure, content, grammar & language Self-check Peer check Teacher’s assessment
Structure and content I have organized my writing into paragraphs. (1 point)
Para : I have led to the topic. (1 point)
Para : I have introduced the school trip including who, when, where ,what and how,etc. (4 points)
Para : I have showed the feelings. (1 point)
My writing is tidy and clear. (2 points)
Grammar and language I have used the simple past tense correctly. For example, we went to…. We took some photos. We felt…. We were... (3 points)
I have used some conjunction words and transitional sentences to make my passage fluent. (1 point)
I have checked the spelling of the uncertain words by using a dictionary or asking my teacher.(1 point.)
I have checked my punctuation. For example, I used full stops at the end of each complete sentence. (1point)
I have checked my word count is around . (1 point)
Total Score
What can I do to improve my composition next time 中小学教育资源及组卷应用平台
Unit 11 How was your school trip
Writing
Teaching Objects:
Write a passage about school trip.
Teaching Methods:
1. Communication Teaching Method.
2. Marking Ladders Teaching Method.
Teaching Steps:
Step 1 Pre-writing
Lead in
T: Hello, boys and girls. Nice to meet you.
Ss:
T: First, let’s watch a video.(The teacher plays the video)
T: What’s the video about
Ss: School trip.
T: Yes, it’s about the school trip. It’s about Tom’s school trip.
T: Who is Tom
Ss: …
T: Who are they
T: So who went on a school trip
Ss:Tom’s classmates and he went on a school trip.
T: When did they go
Ss: Last year.
T: Where did they go
Ss: They went to Fule Mountain.
T: How did they go there
Ss: They walked there ./ They went there on foot.
T: How was the weather
Ss: It was warm and sunny.
T: What did they do there
S1:…
T: Anymore
S2:..
T: Anything else
S3:…
T: They did many interesting activities. How did they feel
S1: They felt…
S2:…
S3：…
Analyse the topic
T:We have talked so much about Tom’s school trip. If we write a composition about our school trip. What should we think about (稍作停顿)
学生回答
First , I think we should think about who went on a school trip. Anything else (如果学生不知道， 就说Discuss in groups)
S1…S2…S3.
最后老师出示PPT， Outline. 学生齐读。
T: Now , your friend Jack wants to know something about your school trip. Let’s write a letter to him.
T: Before writing, what else should we think about Please read the topic carefully. Finish the task.
After three minutes：
Do you need to discuss in groups
T: It’s easy. Let’s share your ideas.
T: Which person should we use
S1.
T: What tense should we use The simple present tense or the simple past tense
S2: The simple past tense. Eg: sb did sth
T: How about the text
S3:
T: Can you list some details
S4: word count/ some information about the school trip, such as who, when, where, what and how
T: The last point. Structure . How many paragraphs should we write
S5:
T : Para1, what should we write beginning:
Para2 Body
Para3 ..Ending Can you give us an example
Step 2 While-writing.
T： Boys and girls, do you know how to write now
It’s time for you to write! How many minutes do you need
Ss:
T: So eight minutes for you. Please go!
Step 3 Post-writing:
Check the compositions
T:Look at the Making Ladders. Check by yourselves.
Ss:
T:Secondly, let’s have a peer check.Exchange your paper with your partners. When we check, remember to use some correction codes.
Show some correction codes:
Spelling and punctuation mistakes: O
Wrong sentences:
Beautiful sentences:
Transitional sentences:
Conjunction words:
T: If you have any problem, please put up your hands.
Ss:
Evaluate the compositions
T: Now please share your compositions in your groups.You should focus on structure, handwriting, points, grammar, punctuation, language and fluency. (Before that, I will give them an example. )
Ss:
Show the compositions
T: Time’s up! Now it’s show time!
Ss:
Choose one or two compositions and ask the students to show it to class.
T: You did a good job! Thank you, big hands.
Summarize
T:Today we learned how to write a composition about the school trip. If we write a composition about the school trip,what should we think about before writing
Ss:
T: Wonderful.
Do you know how to evaluate a composition
Ss: Structure, handwriting, points,grammar, punctuation,language and fluency.
T: Good job. So much for today. And your homework is to finish the second draft. Goodbye,everyone.
Ss；
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Unit 11 How was your school trip
Section B 3a-3c
Writing
What’s the video about
It's about the school trip.
It's about Tom's school trip.
Pre-writing
Tom
Who
Tom and his classmates
went on a school trip.
Pre-writing
When
Last year
Pre-writing
They went to Fule Mountain.
Where
Pre-writing
Pre-writing
How did they go there
They went there on foot.
They walked there.
Pre-writing
How was the weather
It was warm and sunny.
Pre-writing
What did they do
……
Pre-writing
How did they feel
Maybe they felt tired but happy.
Pre-writing
What should we think about
I think we should think about _________________________
who went on a school trip.
How to write a passage about the school trip
Pre-writing
School trip
Who went on
a school trip
How the
weather was
How we
went there
Where we
went
When we went
on a school trip
What we did
…
Pre-writing
A letter to Jack
Pre-writing
假如你是Peter, 你的英国笔友Jack想了解你们班参加的一次学校郊游，特地写信询问你有关你们班郊游的情况，请你给他写一封回信告诉他你们郊游的经历和感受。
写作要求：1. 字迹清楚，语言流畅，表达准确，逻辑清晰；
2. 词数70词左右.
参考词汇：活动activity 名胜古迹 place of interest
捡垃圾pick rubbish
Person(人称）
We or I
Tense(时态）
The simple past tense
Text(文体）
A letter
Details(细节）
Introduce the school trip
including who, when, where ,
what and how,etc.
70 words
What else should we think about
Pre-writing
Structure
(结构)
Beginning: Lead to the topic
Body:
Ending: Show the feelings
Introduce the school trip
including who, when, where,
what and how,etc.
What else should we think about
Pre-writing
While-writing
Pay attention to handwriting.
Use some conjunction words such as and, because etc. to make your composition more fluent.
3. Write down all information.
4. Use the simple past tense correctly.
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Write a letter in 8 minutes
While-writing
Correction codes:
Spelling and punctuation mistakes
Wrong sentences
Beautiful sentences
Transitional sentences
Conjunction words
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Marking ladders
For you to consider Objectives-focus on structure ,content,grammar &language Self-check Peer check Teacher’s assess-ment
Structure and content I have organized my writing into_________ paragraphs.(1 point)
Para : I have led to the topic (1 point)
Para : I have introduced the school trip including who, when, where ,what and how,etc. (4 points)
Para : I have showed the feelings.
My writing is tidy and clear. (1 point)
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1
1
1
2
4
3
1
1
Grammar and language I have used the simple past tense correctly. For example, we went to…. We took some photos. We felt…. We were... (3 points)
I have used some conjunction words and transitional sentences to make my passage fluent. (1 point)
I have checked the spelling of the uncertain words by using a dictionary or asking my teacher.(1 point.)
I have checked my punctuation. For example, I used full stops at the end of each complete sentence. (1 point)
I have checked my word count is around . (1 point)
Total score
3
1
1
1
15
70
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Sharing Time
Work in groups, appreciate(欣赏) your group members’ compositions. Then show it to the class.
Focus on: 1. structure(结构)
2. handwriting(书写)
3. points(要点)
4. grammar(语法)
5. punctuation（标点）
6.language(语言)
7.fluency( 流畅）
Show Time
Post-writing
Summary
1.Person
2.Tense
3.Text
4. Details
5.Structure
Before writing
Focus on
Summary
Evaluation
1. structure
2. handwriting
3. points
4. grammar
5. punctuation
6.language
7.fluency
Focus on
Think about how to improve your writing in the second draft.
Finish the second draft.
Dear Jack,
I am happy to hear from you.You want to know something about our school trip. Let me tell you.
Last year, my classmates and I went to the science museum. We went there by bus. It took us fifteen minutes to get there.The weather was sunny. We saw many old things and learned a lot about history from the guide.We took many photos. Also, we had lunch there.
The trip was interesting.We had a great time there. We were tired but happy.
Best wishes
Yours,
Peter
Sample
Post-writing
Thank You!
