02--2023安徽中考英语真题作文评讲Journey to the west(共20张PPT)

(共20张PPT)
Journey to the West
2023中考作文评讲
2022 年安 徽 中 考 作 文
假定你是李辉，你的英国朋友Mike想阅读中国经典名著。 请你回一封电子邮件，向他推荐西游记。要点如下：
1 风趣幽默，深受喜爱；
2 团队合作，历险克难；
3 追逐梦想，永不言弃；
注意：参考词汇：character (人物) overcome(克服)
4.词数80-100词
5.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
6. 邮件的开头和结尾已给，不计入总词数
(语言)
(人物)
(主题)
Journey to the West
审题
定调
本篇文章属于课标“人与自我”主题范畴中 “中国文化”这一主题。体裁：应用文;
人称：第三人称; 时态：一般过去/ 现在时
谋篇
布局
组织
语言
第一部分:
第二部分:
第三部分:
第一部分：风趣幽默，深受喜爱；（语言）
第二部分：团队合作，历险克难；（人物）
第三部分：追逐梦想，永不言弃； (主题)
Wrting outline
HOW
The book, …, is one of the four
great classics in Chinese Literature.
In the book, the writer shaped
many vivid characters…which
describes…It also shows…
After reading the book, you will
not only learn…but also learn to…
首段框架
作者
语言
原因
1
2
3
You will find it so humorous that you won’t want to miss any part of the whole story.
That is why it is beloved by many people at home and abroad. (原因表语从句)
The book, written by Wu Chengen, a novelist who was born in Ming Dynasty, is one of the four great classics in Chinese Literature.
@第一部分--(语言)
@第一部分--(语言)
1 风趣幽默，深受喜爱；
The book, written by Wu Chengen, a novelist who was born in Ming Dynasty, is one of the four great classics in Chinese Literature. You will find it so humorous that you won’t want to miss any part of the whole story. That is why it is beloved by many people at home and abroad. (Language)
@第一部分--语言
太棒了
正文部分
1
2
3
The book describes how they experienced different kinds of difficulties during their journey to the west.
It also shows how they work together and managed to overcome the difficulties one after another.
In the book, the writer shaped many vivid characters like Sun Wukong--the Monkey King, Zhu Bajie -- the pig, Monk Sha as well as Monk Tang
人物 形象
克服 困难
团队 合作
@第二部分--人物
2 团队合作，历险克难；
@第二部分--人物
In the book, the writer shaped many vivid characters like Sun Wukong--the Monkey King, Zhu Bajie -- the pig, Monk Sha as well as Monk Tang, which describes how they experienced different kinds of difficulties during their journey to the west. It also shows how they work together and managed to overcome the difficulties one after another. (Character)
@第二部分--人物和精神
太棒了
@第二部分--人物和精神
太棒了
影响
读后感
期望
1
2
3
After reading the book, you will not only learn something about Chinese culture but also learn to chase your dreams, work as a team and never give up.
I hope you can read it yourself and I am sure you will love it.
This book has witnessed the growth of Chinese people from generation to generation and become the sweet memories of our childhood.
@第三部分--(主题)
结尾部分
@第三部分--主题
This book has witnessed the growth of Chinese people from generation to generation and become the memories of our childhood. After reading the book, you will not only learn something about Chinese culture but also learn to chase your dreams, work as a team and never give up. I hope you can read it yourself and I am sure you will love it. (Theme)
3 追逐梦想，永不言弃；
@第三部分--主题
太棒了
Common mistakes
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进 步
曹梦思
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Sample writing
Dear Mike,
Since you want to read Chinese classic works, I’d like to recommend Journey to the West to you.
The book, written by Wu Chengen, a novelist who was born in Ming Dynasty, is one of the four great classics in Chinese Literature.You will find it so humorous that you won’t want to miss any part of the whole story. That is why it is beloved by many people at home and abroad. (Language)
In the book, the writer shaped many vivid characters like Sun Wukong--the Monkey King, Zhu Bajie -- the pig, Monk Sha as well as Monk Tang, which describes how they experienced different kinds of difficulties during their journey to the west. It also shows how they work together and managed to overcome the difficulties one after another. (Character)
This book has witnessed the growth of Chinese people from generation to generation and become the memories of our childhood. After reading the book, you will not only learn something about Chinese culture but also learn to chase your dreams, work as a team and never give up. I hope you can read it yourself and I am sure you will love it. (Theme)
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