01-2023安徽中考英语真题作文评讲 How to protect eyesight(共24张PPT)

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How to protect eyesight
2023安徽中考作文评讲
2019安徽英语中考作文
假定你是李华，你的英国笔友Mike最近因视力减退而感到不安，请你用英文给他写封电子邮件，谈谈你在保护视力方面的一些做法。要点如下：
1 经常做户外活动
2 很少用电子产品
3 坚持做眼保健操
4 ……
注意：
5.词数80-100
6.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
7.文章开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数
How to protect eyes
审题
定调
本篇文章属于咨询建议的写作范畴。介绍如何保护眼睛，人称为第一人称 I 或 we 时态以一般现在时为主
谋篇
布局
组织
语言
P1: Here are some ways …on how to …
P2: First of all…
Besides, …
The best way to …
P3: I hope …
Part 1: 表达遗憾和同理心
Part 2: 介绍保护眼睛的方法
Part 3: 总结全文并祝愿
Wrting outline
HOW
HOW
HOW
@首段--说明建议的主题
@首段--说明建议的主题
首段框架
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2
3
同理心理解：
Actually, it is very common for everyone to be worried about it.
引出建议：As your friend,
here I'd love to share with you some useful advice.
安慰表达:
I am extremely sorry to learn that your eyesight is getting weaker.
@首段--说明建议的主题
正文部分
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2
3
use electronic products less
do eye exercises
do outdoor activities
做户外运动
少用电子产品
做眼保健操
@正文部分--提出建议
动宾搭配，写作不累
@正文部分--提出建议
At school, I often go out of the classroom to play with my classmates or do physical exercise during the breaks, which is an effective way to help reduce the risk of getting short-sighted.
做户外
运动
@正文部分--提出建议
On weekends, I often do some outdoor activities. For example, I prefer to look far into the distance to relax my eyes, for it is beneficial to my health, especially my eyes.
少用电 子产品
@正文部分--提出建议
In my free time, I also try hard to avoid using the mobile phone or the computer. You know, the light they give off is harmful to our eyes. So we are supposed to cut short the time we spent on them.
Undoubtedly, playing video games for a long time also does harm to our eyes. The more games we play, the weaker eyesight we will get. So we’d better use electornic products reasonably and learn to control the time.
坚持做眼保健操
@正文部分--提出建议
Additionally, we should realize the importance of relaxing our eyes. On the one hand, we’re required to keep doing eye exercises on time so as to prevent short sight. On the other hand, we can watch some green trees and grass far away after long time work and study.
What’s more, doing eye exercises plays an important role in relaxing my tired eyes.
……
@正文部分--提出建议
Do not read in a dark place.
Do not read for a long time.
Do not rub our eyes with dirty hands.
eat some healthy food rich in vitamin A
have my eyes examined every term
@尾段--表达希望
Without good eyesight, we will have nothing. I hope what I’ve told you will be of some help to you.
表达希望：
@尾段--表达希望
结尾部分
Common mistakes
advise
outdoor activities
vitamin A
Common mistakes
advice
eye exercises
habit
as your friend,
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Common mistakes
cut the time you spent on phones or computer games short
Common mistakes
worried
at the same time
Not only can it help you feel relaxed but also it can be good for your body
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Spending
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protecting
worth
eye exercises
Common mistakes
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王梓睿
进 步
周子涵
进 步
汪君毅
优 秀
邱莫
小贝
优 秀
Sample writing
Dear Mike,
I’m extremely sorry to learn that your eyesight is getting weaker. Actually, it is very common for everyone to be worried about it. As your friend, here I’d like to share with you some ways on how to protect eyesight in my daily life.
At school, I often go out of the classroom to play with my classmates or do physical exercise during the breaks, which is an effective way to help reduce the risk of getting short-sighted. In my free time, I also try hard to avoid using the mobile phone or the computer. You know, the light that they give off is harmful to our eyes, so we are supposed to cut short the time we spent on them. Besides, doing eye exercises plays an important role in relaxing my tired eyes as well as preventing short sight. Lastly, I usually have my eyes examined every term to make sure my eyes stay healthy.
Without good eyesight, we will have nothing. I hope what I’ve told you will be of some help to you.
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