一、原文读析
When I was in Grade 10, my family had a tough time. My parents lost their jobs during the Depression. Dad was to work outside, while mum had a hard time raising us kids on her own in our small community. We relied on our community assistance to keep us clothed, and although our clothes were second-hand, we thought they were beautiful.
Looking back, I realize what Mum went through for sending us kids to school. Every morning she would put a new piece of cardboard in our shoes, because our shoes were worn out. Constant moving was typical for my family in these times. Rent was twenty-five dollars a month, but Mum couldn’t pay it. These were hard and sad years, but we never complained.
New Year was approaching, and we were entitled to a twenty-five dollar fund for social services. Mum said that instead of buying food, she would use the money to pay back rent, assuring us all of a roof over our heads for a little while longer. She told us then there would be nothing for New Year.
Unknown to Mum, I had been shoveling snow and doing odd jobs to earn enough money to buy a new pair of gloves. I knew exactly which gloves I wanted. They were made of genuine leather and they had a price of twenty-three dollars. Well, the big day came on the last day of that year. I was very excited, as I hurried to catch the bus. It was only a half-a-mile walk, but on the way I noticed a house with lights and decorations. It was then that I realized at our house, we had no lights, no decorations, nor any money for goodies. I knew then that we would have no delicious food for New Year, and I felt sad.
As I continued walking, I began to feel bewildered(困惑的). I was sixteen years old, and I was feeling a strange sense of guilt. Here I was going to buy a new pair of gloves while Mum was home in tears. She would be trying to explain to us why there were no presents.
The bus drove off without me. __________________________________________________
二、读写思路
1. 理清脉络,明晰主线 (plots)
Elements of the story
Who:
When:
Where:
What:
Why:
How:
2. 发现细节/冲突,把握线索 (clues)
Clues Supporting details
Although the family was very poor, the kids ________________________ their poor life.
When thinking of the upcoming New Year, I was ______________.
3. 构思情节,确定主题 (theme)
Your designs:
开篇句→ _____________ → _____________ → _____________ → _____________
The theme: ________________________________________________________________
三、佳句建构
1. 想到我将给妈妈一个惊喜,我朝不远处的杂货店大步走去,内心激动。(非谓语与独立主格)
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2. 眼里含着激动和泪水,我抱着一大堆物品,敲了敲家门。(with结构)
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3. 妈妈是如此地激动,以至于用手掩住了嘴,眼眶里盈满了泪水。(so…that)
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四、参考范文
The bus drove off without me. Standing there silently, I made a choice. Across the street from the bus stop was a big grocery store. Then I entered. After spending every dollar of my hard-earned money, I carried all goodies we needed in my arms. Thinking I was to give Mum a big surprise, I knocked on the door, my heart throbbing with excitement. The door opened, some of the groceries fell inside onto the ground, and I beamed, “Happy New Year!” Mum slapped up a hand to contain the overjoyed gasp, tears glistening in her eyes and a smile shining on her face. Although I failed to get a new pair of gloves, the smile on Mum’s face made it all worthwhile.
教师版
二、读写思路
1. 理清脉络,明晰主线 (plots)
Elements of the story
Who: Mum, I
When: around the New Year
Where: a block near our house, home
What: I wanted to buy a pair of gloves with the money earned by myself
Why: my family was poor
How:
2. 发现细节/冲突,把握线索 (clues)
Clues Supporting details
Although the family was very poor, the kids ____never complaine about____________ their poor life. Although our clothes were second-hand, we thought they were beautiful.
These were hard and sad years, but we never complained.
When thinking of the upcoming New Year, I was ___guilty/sad_____. I knew then that we would have no delicious food for New Year, and I felt sad.
I was sixteen years old, and I was feeling a strange sense of guilt.
3. 构思情节,确定主题 (theme)
Your designs:
开篇句→ I bought goceries for my family → I went home → mother's reaction → my thought
The theme: _____Love for family is the most important.__________
三、佳句建构
1. 想到我将给妈妈一个惊喜,我朝不远处的杂货店大步走去,内心激动。(非谓语与独立主格)
Thinking I was to give mom a surprise, I strode towards the nearby grocery store, my heart throbbing with excitement.
2. 眼里含着激动和泪水,我抱着一大堆物品,敲了敲家门。(with结构)
With great excitement and tears in my eyes, I knocked on the door.
3. 妈妈是如此地激动,以至于用手掩住了嘴,眼眶里盈满了泪水。(so…that)
Mum was so overjoyed that she slapped up a hand to cover her mouth, tears glistening in her eyes.