2023年初中学业水平考试 -英语书面表达备考课件（40张PPT）

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2023年初中学业水平考试
英语书面表达备考
目 录
01 真题回顾
02 常见错误
03 改进方法
04 练习
《义务教育英语课程标准（2022年版）》对九年级学生的写作提出了以下要求：根据所读语篇内容和所给条件，进行简单的书面改编、创编；根据写作要求，收集、准备素材，独立起草、修改和完成语篇；为所给图表或图片写出简单的说明；围绕相关主题，用所学语言，以书面语篇的形式描述和介绍身边的人或事物，表达情感、态度和观点；在书面表达中使用常见的连接词表示顺序和逻辑关系，联结信息，做到意义连贯；在书面表达中进行适当的自我修正，用语得当，沟通与交流得体、有效。
课标要求
近年云南省中考书面表达题目
中考时间 作文题目 类别
2015年 Growing up with ... 写人叙事
2016年 I Have Learned a Lot in Junior High School 写人叙事
2017年 A Special Day 写人叙事
2018年 Doing Something Nice to ... 写人叙事
2019年 A Weekend to Remember 写人叙事
2020年 My After-school Life 写人叙事
2021年 Doing Housework Makes Me ________ 观点看法
2022年 I Learned How to ________ 写人叙事
常考话题
话题 内容
人物故事 自己、家人、朋友、老师、个人变化、个人感受等
假日旅行
校园生活 春游、校规、科目、学习困难等
课外生活 家庭生活、家务劳动、个人爱好等
计划愿望
节假日活动 志愿者活动、过去的经历
环境保护
健康生活 疾病、食品健康等
情感表达 与人分享、乐于助人、关爱他人
安全问题
常见错误
写作维度 错误类型1 错误类型2 错误类型3
结构 层次不清
语言 词句单一 语言逻辑不清 语法结构混乱
内容 单薄、干瘪 套作
书写 书写差
改进方法
一、语法结构混乱
写好每一个简单句
S+V I dance.
S+V+O I like apples.
S+V+P I am a student.
S+V+O+O I teach her English.
S+V+O+C It makes me happy.
语言问题
我叫李梅，我今年13岁了。 我来自光明中学。
这些老头每天在这条河里游泳
我喜欢英语， 我也喜欢打篮球。
我妈妈给我买了一件毛衣
这个警察告诉这些男生不要在街上踢球。
I am Li Mei. I am 13 (years old). I am from Guangming Middles School.
These old men swim in the river every day.
I like English, and I like playing basketball, too/
My mom bought me a sweater/ My mom bought a sweater for me
The policeman told the boys not to play basketball on the street.
二、词句单一
改进方法
丰富词类、短语和句型
加词
单词 短语
整合简单句
丰富句式 感叹句、强调句、倒装句、It作形式主语
adj.
adv.
加连接词 并列复合句
加从句 主从复合句
巧用with作后置定语
宾从
状从
定从
语言问题
改进方法1:加词(adj.)
(1) He always helps others.
He is kind/helpful/warm-hearted and always helps others.
(2) She gets on well with her classmates.
She is friendly and gets on well with her classmates.
改进办法1:加词(adv.)
(1) We should support the idea of low-carbon life.
We should actively/strongly/firmly support the idea of low-carbon life.
(2) I don’t drink coffee.
I seldom/hardly (ever) drink coffee.
(3) I got used to speaking English in class.
I gradually got used to speaking English in class.
改进办法2:单词 短语
(1) We should support the idea of low-carbon life.
We are supposed/expected to actively/strongly/firmly support the idea of low-carbon life.
(2) I’ve loved this city since I came here for the first time
I’ve fallen in love with this city since I came here for the first time.
改进办法2:单词 短语
(3) Alice likes English.
Alice is crazy about/is fond of/is interested in English.
(4) I hope to see you soon.
I am looking forward to see you soon.
(5) Don’t eat junk food, it’s not good for your health.
please stay away from junk food ,it’s bad for/harmful to/does harm to your health.
改进办法3:整合简单句(加连接词)
(1) I like Ella very much. She is both lively and lovely.
I like Ella very much because she is both lively and lovely.
(2) I have many hobbies. I like traveling and playing tennis.
I have many hobbies such as traveling and playing tennis.
改进办法3:整合简单句(变宾语从句)
(1) How to write a good composition Mr. Bates gave a lecture.
Mr. Bates gave a lecture about/on how to writre a good composition.
(2) English is interesting.
I think English is very interesting.
English is interesting, so I like it very much.
I think English is so interesting that I like it very much.
改进办法3:整合简单句(变状语从句)
(3) I visited Beijing. I had a great time there last year.
I had a great time when I visited Beijing last year.
(4) Science and technology develop. We can enjoy more conveniences.
As science and technology develop/With the development of science and technology, we can enjoy more conveniences.
改进办法3:整合简单句(变定语从句)
(5) She is a nice girl. She has long curly hair and a round face
She is a nice girl who has long curly hair and a round face.
(6) I like English. Learning English helps to open up my mind .
The reason why I like English is that it helps to open up my mind.
改进办法3:整合简单句(巧用with)
(1) She is a nice girl. She has long curly hair and a round face
She is a nice girl with long curly hair and a round face.
(2) I’m a near-sighted girl. I wear a pair of glasses.
I’m a near-sighted girl with a pair of glasses.
改进办法4:丰富句式(感叹句)
(1) She is friendly to help others.
How friendly she is to help others!
What a friendly girl she is to help others!
(2) The advice is useful.
How useful the advice is!
What useful advice it is!
改进办法4:丰富句式(强调句)
(1) I will never forget my valuable junior high life!
Never will I forget my valuable junior high life! (强调时间)
(2) I grow up happily and healthily becasue my mom looks after me well.
It’s because my mom looks after me very well that I grow up happily and healthily.
(强调原因)
改进办法4:丰富句式(强调句)
(3) I met an old friend in the park.
It was in the park that I met an old friend.
(4) I wanted a tennis ball.
What I wanted was a tennis ball.
(主语从句+be+强调部分)
改进办法4:丰富句式(倒装句)
(1) Not only do I help others, but I also learn a lot. (Not only （放在句首）
(2) In the east of China lies Shanghai.
（介词短语放在句首位于句首）
(3) Only with more practice can we study English well.
(only+状语位于句首)
(4) The harder we work, the luckier we will get.
(the+比较级, the+比较级
改进办法4:丰富句式(It作形式主语)
(1) Preview and review is important to study.
It is important to preview and review when we study.
(2) Helping parents with housework can develop children’s sense of responsibility.
It is clear/believed that helping parents with housework can develop children’s sense of responsibility.
改进办法5:丰富句式-好词佳句的收集
有目的背诵一些佳句；丰富写作内容：
Not only do I feel good to help others, but also I get chances to do what I love .
If you give up in winter, you will miss the hope of spring, the beauty of summer, the fulfill of autumn.
If I were you , I would say “ Don’t give up, if you hold on to your dream, it will come true one day!”
I like reading, it can help me to go wherever I want, do what I like and be who I expect.
背诵一些格言，谚语：
Practice makes perfect;
A friend in need is a friend indeed;
There is a will, there is a way.
模仿一些排比句，增加句子的气势：
We should thank people who hurt us, because they teach us something; We should thank people who give us up because they let us be independent; We should thank people who are selfish because they let us know the importance of sharing; Of course, we should thank people who help us.
二、语言逻辑不清
使用逻辑关联词
表起始: first of all, to begin with, to start with
表时间: at first, then, later, in the end, at last,finally
表因果: because (of), thanks to, due to, for, as, since
表转折: but, however, while, after all, in fact, as a matter of fact
表列举: for example, such as, like, and so on
语言问题
二、语言逻辑不清
使用逻辑关联词
表递进: what’s more, on one hand…on the other hand,
not only…but also…, besides, in addition, moreover
表总结: in short, in a word, in general, generally speaking
语言问题
书写问题
结构问题：层次不清
改进方法
三-四段式，着重练开头和结尾
段落 功能 注意
Beginning 引出主题 点题
Body 中心叙述 观点之间层次分明
Ending 总结全文 点题
My dream
Par1：What is my dream
Par2：Why I want to be a doctor （所有句子都在解释Why ）
Par3： How can I achieve my drem (手段与方法)
Par4: Although it’s difficult ...
表达方式正确：
1. 不要用中国式的表达；如：
错误：I very like you.
正确：I like you very much.
错误：Good good study, day day up.
正确：If you study harder, you will be better.
The harder you study, the better you will be.
Study harder, and you will be better.
检查时态是否正确
主谓语人称是否一致
代词使用是否正确
单词拼写是否正确
词数是否符合要求
认真誊写，干净整洁，书写规范。
感谢观看
Practice makes perfect!