高考英语读后续写技巧与训练18读后续写：综合训练50篇（解析版）（新高考专用）学案（含答案）

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1．“A bad guy just picked Kim up and took her away!”yelled Julie.So shocked were Kim's parents that they jumped up from the sofa and rushed over to Julie.Learning what had happened, they phoned the police without delay. The next moment, they jumped into their car and drove off directed by Julie.By then TJ had reached the alley, but the man was nowhere to be seen.“I must find Kim, ”TJ said to himself.Her an along the alley to the end，where he spotted the man walking towards a white house.“Stop!Stop!”With these words, he charged at the guy fearlessly and held fast to Kim.However hard the guy tried to get rid of TJ, TJ wouldn't give in.
At that very moment Kim's parents arrived.“Help!Help!”TJ shouted.Immediately Kim's father took off toward the guy. Seeing this, the guy hurriedly let go of Kim and broke into a run. Kim's father dashed up, caught hold of him and pressed him to the ground.Kim ran crying into her mother's arms. Minutes later, the police arrived and arrested the guy.TJ breathed a sigh of relief and smiled happily.TJ's quick thinking and bravery saved a little girl in the neighborhood from unimaginable consequences.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，11岁的TJ,7岁的Kim和9岁的Julie在安静的街道玩滑板车。一个满头蓬乱长胡子的男人突然出现将Kim抱走。TJ和Julie开始想办法营救Kim。
【详解】
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：Julie大喊道：“坏人把Kim带走了。”所以后面应该写Kim的父母听到这一消息之后的反应以及他们所采取的行动。给出的内容提示当Kim被带走后，TJ唯一的想法就是怎么去营救她。所以本段也应该提及，在Julie去告诉Kim父母期间，TJ是如何行动的。有什么进展。第二段写道在那个时候，Kim的父母赶到了。所以第一段最后应该是提及TJ的营救到了关键时刻。
第二段开头写道正在这时，Kim的父母赶到了。所以接下来应该写他们是如何与坏人斗争，将Kim从坏人手中夺回来。最后要写坏人被警察逮捕，绳之以法。TJ和Julie的勇敢行为得到了大家的赞赏。
最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右，按要求完成写作任务。
【点睛】
本文描写故事完整，逻辑合理。续写文与前文做到了内容上的衔接。时态正确，语言详略得当，心理活动与动作描写生动，如描写Kim的父亲抓坏人使用了一系列动词，dashed up, caught hold of him and pressed him很精彩地描写了当时激烈的场景。
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After reading the diary, the son was filled with tears and began to reflect on the days when he used to sit together with his father. His father would patiently answer the same question all 23 times without feeling irritation while his father asked him the same question just four times! The son thought to himself: If I attain old age, how will my son look at me Will he think of me as a burden Will he shout at me because of my poor sight, poor hearing or poor understanding
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Feeling ashamed, the son got down on his knees before his father. He made an apology to his father, begging his father to forgive him for his bad behavior. He said this aloud, “I promise to see you happy forever, Dad. It is you who have cared for me since I was a little child, showering your selfless affection on me. You worked hard to make money so that I could afford to go to university. I will serve you in the best day.”
【解析】
【分析】
本文属于读后续写。
【详解】
“读后续写”题型的写作步骤 ：1）细读原文。首先要仔细阅读短文，掌握文章主旨和结构，明确各段的大意。本文讲述了父亲问了儿子四次“这是什么”，儿子回答是乌鸦后开始厌烦。父亲拿出以前记录不厌其烦回答儿子23遍同样问题的日记让儿子看。 2）弄清要求。新高考的概要写作是写全文概要，不是写某一部分的概要，或者就某些问题写出要点。3）列出原文要点。分析原文的内容和结构，将内容分项扼要表述并注意在结构上的顺序。在此基础上选出与文章主题密切相关的部分。根据提示词可知，续写第一段要写儿子读完日记后的感受，第二段写读完日记后的做法。
写作注意事项：（1）概要应包括原文中的主要事实，略去不必要的细节。（2）安排好篇幅的比例，概要应同原文保持协调，即用较多的文字写重要内容，用较少的文字写次要内容。（3）注意要点之间的衔接，要用适当的关联词语贯通全文，切忌只简单地写出一些互不相干的句子，但也不要每两句之间都加关联词语，以免显得生硬。（4）不排斥用原文的某些词句，但不要照搬原文的句子，如果不能完全用自己的话语表达，至少对原文句子做一些同义词替换，如果结构上也能有一些转换会更好。 （5）计算词数，看是否符合规定的词数要求。
【点睛】
本文内容完整，层次分明，结构紧凑，表达准确。另外全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。
范文语言地道，语篇连贯，词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级词汇和句式，如be filled with tears，used to do, without feeling irritation , made an apology to, afford to等词语。非谓语动词Feeling ashamed和begging his father to forgive him for his bad behavior.强调句It is you who have cared for me since I was a little child,目的状语从句 You worked hard to make money so that I could afford to go to university. 全文没有语法错误，上下句转换自然流畅。
3．Emily hurried to the school and nervously glanced at the list on the door of the choral room. The fear of being rejected came to strike again. “Jeff Green, Rose Black…” she murmured as her eyes moved upward. “Wow!” Emily abruptly covered her wide-opened mouth, feeling as if her heart would jump out. There, at the top of the list was posted her name. The leading singer! However, whispers around her pulled her back to earth. Just then, she felt a pat on the shoulder. It was Mr. Butler. “We selected you for our faith in your abilities and voice.” Inspired, Emily practiced even harder for the day of performance.
Finally the day for the performance came. Emily’s eyes danced with excitement as she stepped on to the stage. Standing still, she heard noises among the crowd. Obviously not cheers! Emily felt nervous again and even her legs began trembling. At that moment, her eyes parked on Mr. Butler at the corner. He nodded and exchanged a determined glance with her, which timely put her heart back in place. With the music rising, Emily began her singing. Her sweet voice poured and the audience fell into an abrupt silence. When she finished, the auditorium erupted into a sea of cheers. Emily White in tears, with so many birth problems in her body, became the shiniest star!
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，主人公艾米丽 · 怀特17年前来到这个世界，天生身体有许多缺陷但却有一副好嗓音，她的音乐老师欧文斯太太认为艾米丽的缺陷会使她在演唱时让观众注意，所以她未能参加学校去年的圣诞表演，但今年，音乐老师布特勒先生，听说了艾米丽的事之后，建议她试试。在演唱时，虽然有点紧张，但艾米丽还是照巴特勒先生说的做了。完成测试后的当天晚上，艾米丽辗转反侧，无法入睡，因为结果在第二天就会贴在合唱室的门上。
【详解】
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：艾米丽赶到合唱室，焦急地看了一眼门上的名单。所以，在接下来的内容中，要描述艾米丽在阅读名单时候的心情，尤其是和已知内容：欧文斯太太拒绝艾米丽，形成对比，这次被认可后的激动心情进行重点描写。第二段开头是：终于，表演的日子到了。本段要充分描述艾米丽上台后对自我状态由紧张到从容的变化，进而取得成功。文章最后希望更多的老年人去学习，活到老学到老。
续写时要求使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语增加了写作难度，我们要熟悉所给划线词语，恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右；续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。按要求完成写作任务。
【点睛】
文章思路清晰，语言规范，段落整齐，语篇连贯，层次清晰。使用了较为高级的句式: 现在分词作状语Standing still, she heard noises among the crowd. When引导的时间状语从句When she finished, the auditorium erupted into a sea of cheers.
高级句式的应用提升了写作的档次，整个短文显示出了作者高水平的英语表达能力。
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Eventually the shop owner came out and moved to the counter. There, before Bobby's eyes, lay twelve red roses, with leaves of green and tiny white flowers all tied together with a big silver tape. Bobby's heart sank as the owner placed them gently into a long white box. "That will be ten cents, young man." the shop owner said, reaching out his hand for the dime. Slowly, Bobby moved his hand to give the man his dime. Could this be true He wondered.
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With the bunch of beautiful roses in his hands, Bobby backed off and then turned and ran. Within minutes, he was at home, still breathless. “Look, Mother, what have I got for you ” Bobby called out in the backyard. Mother came out from inside the house. She could hardly believe her eyes upon seeing the beautiful flowers in front of her. “Merry Christmas!” Bobby said and began to tell her everything he had experienced in the flower shop. Tearfully, Mother hugged her son in her arms. Standing in the bitter cold air, they somehow didn't feel cold at all.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。
【详解】
通过阅读所给文章可知，生活贫苦的鲍比想在圣诞节送母亲礼物，但他没有钱，就在他在街上走时，他捡到了一角硬币，他很开心，当他走进第一家商店，售货员告诉他一角硬币无法买东西，他很失落，之后他去了一家花店，店主让鲍比等着，说“我看看能为你做些什么”。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：最后店主走出来，来到柜台前。本段应该写店主为鲍比准备了一角硬币的礼物，注重写店主对鲍比的帮助，鲍比简直无法相信。第二段开头是：鲍比手里拿着一束美丽的玫瑰，退后转身跑开了。本段应该写鲍比把花送给妈妈，妈妈很惊讶且开心，之后鲍比把在花店里的经历告诉妈妈，母子俩感受到了冬日的温暖。
续写时要求使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语增加了写作难度，我们要熟悉所给划线词语，恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右；续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。按要求完成写作任务。
【点睛】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：tie together，reach out one’s hand，call out等高级词汇；With the bunch of beautiful roses in his hands ——with复合结构，限制性定语从句everything he had experienced in the flower shop，Standing in the bitter cold air 现在分词短语作状语等高级句式。
5．When I was loading up my backpack, Mrs. Sather asked me to go to her. Mrs. Sather stared into my eyes as if seeing my inner self locked away inside. ''I would love you to give this a try for me. But if you really don't want to, I won’t make you. It is your choice. '' Mrs. Sather wanted me in this role. She shocked me, for I was always a shy person, not even dare to speak loud in public.
Hearing Mrs Sather's words, I realized it was time to make a change. I decided to throw off my shy cloak. I wanted to prove that I also could do something good in public. After seconds of hesitation, I nodded my head, confidently saying ''Mrs Sather I want to, no, I am determined to paly the role. And I will try my best to perform it well.'' Looking at me with a big smile on face, Mrs Sather said ''I believe in you. If you met some problem, you can turn to me.'' ''Thank you! '' I left her office happily.
【解析】
【分析】
这是一篇读后续写。文章主要讲述了作者是一个很害羞的人，从来没有想过自己会在两百人面前表演。可以一天萨瑟老师却让她去表演主角，她很害怕，但最后说服自己同意参加演出。经过自己的努力，她终于成功地进行了表演。
【详解】
续写分为两段，第一段的开头是：当我背上书包时，萨瑟老师让我去她办公室……，所以可以接着写：萨瑟老师看着我的眼睛，好像看到了我被锁在里面的内心。“我想让你为我去试一试，但如果你真的不想去，我也不想强迫你。这是你自己的选择。”萨瑟老师想让我去演这个角色，这让我很震惊，因为我一直都是一个害羞的人，甚至不敢在公开场合大声说话。
第二段的开头是：听了萨瑟老师的话，我意识到是时候做出改变了。我决定脱掉害羞的斗篷。我想证明我也可以在公开场合把事情做好。犹豫片刻后，我点了头，自信地说：“萨瑟老师，我想，不，我决定扮演这个角色，并且我会尽全力把它表演好。”面带微笑地看着我，萨瑟老师说：“我相信你，如果有什么问题，你尽管来找我。”“谢谢你！”我开心地离开了她的办公室。
续写时要注意时态，续写内容要符合人物特点和逻辑。
【点睛】
范文内容完整，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了一些高级表达，例如：I wanted to prove that I also could do something good in public.中that引导宾语从句；Looking at me with a big smile on face, Mrs Sather said ''I believe in you. If you met some problem, you can turn to me.''中使用了现在分词短语作状语。
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Suddenly, the leader notice a small clump of grass. So he was lost in thought: There must be water here. If there wasn’t water, the grass couldn’t live in the desert. Therefore, he asked his fellow travelers to dig up the ground on that very spot where the grass was. They dug and dug, and gradually they found a large stone. The guide jumped into the hole, put his ear to the stone, and heard the sound of flowing water.
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A spring (泉源) was found at last. All the people were extremely cheerful. They expressed their thanks to the leader. And then they hurried to drink water and cooked their food with it. Before they left, they raised a high flag so that other travelers could see the new spring in the hot-sand desert. Then they continued traveling safely to the end of their journey.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。要求考生根据所给内容续写两段。
【详解】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，一个商人带领着商队去另一个国家售卖商品。他们来到一个沙漠的边缘，这个沙漠白天沙石烫的像木炭一般，无法行走。于是他们找到一个懂得星象的导游，晚上等沙子冷却下来再前行。有一天晚上，导游发现他们离沙漠的另一边非常近了，他非常疲惫，于是他在放松的时候睡着了。骆驼不识方向，它们转向另一边，绕着大圈走，停在了他们出发的地方。第二天早上人们发现他们在回到了原地，他们开始哭泣、担忧，甚至指责领队和导游。但是领队并没有灰心，开始和导游一起想办法解决问题。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：突然，领队注意到一小团草。于是接下来应该写：领队看到草，想到草生长的附近一定是有水的。于是领队让大家在草所生长的地方挖土，最后他们发现了一个大石头，导游靠近石头，听到了流动的水声。第二段开头是：最后他们找到了一个泉源。那么接下来就应该写：大家都很高兴，对领队表示了感谢。喝过水、吃完饭后，在启程之前，他们在此立了一面大旗，为了让其他的旅行者看到这个沙漠中的泉源。然后他们继续旅程，最终安全地到达了终点。
（注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右。）
【点睛】
本文描写详略得当，情节生动，内容完整，符合题目要求。范文中使用的一些词汇和句型值得我们学习。高级词汇/短语，如：be lost in thought，dig up，express one’s thanks to sb.，hurry to do sth.等；高级句型：虚拟语气。时间状语从句和目的状语从句 Before they left, they raised a high flag so that other travelers could see the new spring in the hot-sand desert. 定语从句，Therefore, he asked his fellow travelers to dig up the ground on that very spot where the grass was.彰显了作者高水平的英语驾驭能力。
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Every summer, we would visit Mr. Donovan and talk to him. We shared with him our colorful experiences at school while he kept giving out his luscious fruits to us as usual. As time went by, we seemed to be more a family than good friends. But one summer, we were informed that he was seriously ill and we were anxious and restless, so we rushed straight to the hospital. It was from his family that we knew that he had fell from a tree while looking after the fruits and his head was seriously hurt and needed a dangerous operation.
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The next winter, word got around that Old Man Donovan had died. Hearing the bad news, I felt a lump in my throat and tears welled up in my eyes. I realized gone were the days when we sat together chatting with each other. I realized gone were the days when we were lucky enough to have a taste of the luscious fruit grown by him. However, he left us a hidden treasure—his kind heart, which shall never die away with the passage of time.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写，要求根据所给情节续写两段。
【详解】
第1步：根据提示可知，本文要求续写两段：阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事，时态应为一般过去时。
第2步：根据写作要求，确定关键词（组），如； colorful（多姿多彩的），luscious（甘美的），inform（通知），anxious（担忧的），restless（不安的），gamble（冒险），hidden（隐藏的）及treasure（财富）等。
第3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持卷面的整洁美观。
【点睛】
范文语言地道，语篇连贯，词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级词汇和句式，高级词汇有give out（分发），as usual（像往常一样），rush to （火速赶往），die away (消失)，look after（照顾），well up（涌出）以及get around（消息传开），而且还使用了状语从句“As time went by, we seemed to be more a family than good friends.”，宾语从句“But one summer, we were informed that he was seriously ill and we were anxious and restless”，同位语从句“The next winter, word got around that Old Man Donovan had died.”，倒装和定语从句“I realized gone were the days when we sat together chatting with each other.”及“I realized gone were the days when we were lucky enough to have a taste of the luscious fruit grown by him.”，强调句型“It was from his family that we knew that he had fell from a tree while looking after the fruits and his head was seriously hurt and needed a dangerous operation.”，非限定性定语从句“However, he left us a hidden treasure—his kind heart, which shall never die away with the passage of time.”，非谓语动词“Hearing the bad news, I felt a lump in my throat and tears welled up in my eyes.”，全文没有语法错误，上下句转换自然流畅。
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I stared. “Really There’s no purchase required ” “None at all. These are free. Go and see.” I thanked him and went to the store with my brother and sister, where colorful balloons still announced the grand opening. We walked inside and showed our cards to the nearest clerk. “It says these are gift cards,” she said “These items are absolutely free.” We could hardly believe it. We thanked God for caring and picked up the goods and left the store with broad smiles.
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When Mom returned, we had food on the table. “Where did you get this ” Mom asked. “I prayed,” I said. And then I showed her the ice cream in the fridge. She had her eyes wide open. “Where did all this come from ” she asked. I told her about the man who gave me the cards and the new grocery store as we had our meal. She shook her head again, this time with a sense of wonder. I could see tears of relief welled up her eyes.
【解析】
【分析】
这是一篇读后续写。文章主要讲述了一个单亲妈妈的家庭，因为妈妈要出去挣钱，家里的孩子没有晚饭可以吃。后来，来了一个好心的人给他们送来了商场的礼券，让他们可以免费购物，解决了燃眉之急。
【详解】
续写分为两段，第一段的开头是：我看着他说：“真的吗？不需要购买吗？”根据提示，可以接着写：他告诉我“一分钱都不需要。都是免费的。走去看看。”我谢过他，然后和弟弟妹妹一起去了那家商店，那里的彩色气球预示着商场刚开业。我们走进去，把我们的卡片给商场的职员看。“据说这些是购物卡，”她说：“这些商品都是免费的。”我们简直不能相信。我们感谢上帝的眷顾，然后去挑选商品，最后带着微笑离开商场。
第二段的开头是：当妈妈回来时，我们已经有食物在桌子上了。“你们从哪儿来的食物？”妈妈问。根据提示，可以接着写：“这是我祈祷的。”然后我把冰箱里的冰激凌给她看。她把眼睛睁得大大地，问“这些所有东西都是从哪儿来的？”吃饭时，我告诉了那个给我购物卡的男人和那家刚开的商场。她再次摇头，这次带着惊奇的感觉。我看到泪水涌上了她的眼睛。
续写时要注意时态和人称的转换。
【点睛】
范文内容完整，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了一些主从复合句，例如：I thanked him and went to the store with my brother and sister, where colorful balloons still announced the grand opening.句中where引导非限制性定语从句。I told her about the man who gave me the cards and the new grocery store as we had our meal.句中who引导定语从句，as引导时间状语从句。
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Andrew put Gordon down and they looked under the bush. There was Pecky, a half-naked chicken, still alive though. She looked a mess, with almost half of her feathers gone, but she was absolutely fine. Andrew gently gathered her up and returned her to the coop. Our kids hurried to gather around, closely watched and gently stroked her feathers.
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The next day Andrew had a discussion with the kids about what to do with the chickens. The kids believed that the chickens should be shut in, safe from any dangers in the world. But Andrew disagreed. He believed that we should be more careful when letting the chickens out in the yard. He encouraged our kids to take risks. He explained that love isn’t a coop which restrains them but something that can both provide adequate protection and allow more freedom of living a happy life. Finally, the kids understood their father and they together fenced a bigger area, providing the chickens with the maximum freedom and safety.
【解析】
【分析】
这是一篇读后续写作文。通过阅读所给文章可知，文章主要讲述了作者的丈夫Andrew是一位睿智的父亲，他通过养鸡、一起做鸡笼并教导孩子如何平衡冒险和自由。
【详解】
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：Andrew把Gordon放下，他们在灌木丛下看了看。后文可以描写还有他们找到了Pecky，半裸着，但还活着。她看起来很糟糕，几乎掉了一半的羽毛，但她绝对很好。Andrew轻轻地把她抱起来，放回了鸡舍。我们的孩子们急忙围拢过来，仔细观察着它，还轻轻地抚摸着它的羽毛。第二段开头是：第二天，Andrew和孩子们讨论了如何处理这些鸡。后文可以描写孩子们认为鸡应该关起来，这样就不会有任何危险。但Andrew并不赞同。他认为我们把鸡放到院子里时应该更加小心。他鼓励我们的孩子去冒险。他解释说，爱不是束缚它们的笼子，而是既能提供足够的保护，又能让它们更自由地过上幸福的生活。最后，孩子们理解了他们的父亲，他们一起围了一块更大的区域，给鸡提供了最大限度的自由和安全。注意要使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语。
【点睛】
续写内容详略得当，使用了固定短语和高级句型。如：put down，gather up，do with，encourage sb. to do等固定短语；He believed that we should be more careful when letting the chickens out in the yard.该句使用了现在分词作状语；He explained that love isn’t a coop which restrains them but something that can both provide adequate protection and allow more freedom of living a happy life.该句使用了宾语从句和定语从句。
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I entered the shop, and one of the salesmen came to me. What surprised me most was that the salesman was the husband from the older couple who had ever helped me years ago. Never had I met them since we met last time, which made me genuinely sorry. Fortunately, I came across them and knew the shop was run by them. I was in trouble again and needed them to give me a hand once again. I told them what was wrong with my car.
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After a while, they quickly drove a pickup truck to my car and started it. They solved my trouble once again, but when I tried to pay for it, they would not accept my money. They told me that when they ran the shop at first, no one had ever taken time to write to them and say “Thank you”, but now they received an increasing number of thank-you notes from people, which they were really happy about.
【解析】
【分析】
这是一篇读后续写作文。通过阅读所给文章可知，文章主要讲述了“我”有一次开车时遇到了故障得到了一对夫妇的帮助，“我”给他们写了一封感谢信。后来，我的车子再次遇到了故障，于是“我”走进了一家汽车店。
【详解】
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：我进入汽车店，其中一位推销员来到我面前。后文可以描写“我”进入汽车店后，发现这个推销员是几年前曾经帮助过“我”的那对夫妻中的丈夫，这家店竟然是由他们经营的。“我”又一次遇到了麻烦，需要他们的帮助。第二段开头是：过了一会儿，他们迅速将一辆皮卡车开到“我”的车前并启动了。后文可以描写当“我”尝试付款时，他们并不接受“我”的钱。他们说刚开始经营这家店时，他们收到了“我”的感谢信，后来他们收到了越来越多的人的感谢信，他们对此感到非常高兴。注意要使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语。
【点睛】
续写内容详略得当，使用了固定短语和主从复合句。如：come across，in trouble，give me a hand once，an increasing number of等固定短语；Never had I met them since we met last time, which made me genuinely sorry. 该句使用了倒装结构和which引导的非限制性定语从句；They solved my trouble once again, but when I tried to pay for it, they would not accept my money.该句使用了when引导的时间状语从句。
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But not a word came out. Sally had been so excited about putting on a dog show for her class. She had been quite familiar with the hand signals and had practiced for weeks. Now her eyes found mine. I nodded encouragingly. She took a deep breath and opened her mouth. But then her whole body seemed to close in on itself in defeat. Sally stood off to the side, head down. I felt awful. Sally returned to her seat, not looking at anyone, not even Bella.
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The next week, she told me she wanted to try again, looking up at me with determination.”Are you sure ” I asked. “You don’t want to wait till next year ”“No,” she said,”Today, I can do it.” Then we headed to Sally’s classroom. The kids were sitting in a circle on the floor listening to the teacher. We walked to the front of the room. I shook Sally’s hands and stepped back. For a few seconds, she stood silently, staring at her classmates. Finally she whispered,”This is Bella.” Then a little louder with more confidence.”Bella.”
【解析】
【分析】
本文考查读后续写类的书面表达。
【详解】
文章主要讲述莎莉患有焦虑症，我用训练过的狗贝拉帮助莎莉张嘴说话的故事。短文应包含以下内容：(1)所续写短文的词数应为150左右；(2)至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；(3)续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好；(4)续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。写好这类作文要注意几个步骤：1.认真审题，找准提示语中的关键词或句，确定中心思想；2.依据关键句，草拟提纲，梳理文章的脉络；3.准确定位人称、时态。注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次；4.最后还要认真查验是否有漏写情况，有无拼写错误及标点误用等。
【点睛】
本书面表达要点齐全，上下文连贯，使用一定数量的句式结构，让句子更加生动丰满，同时运用了许多高级词汇和固定短语，提高文章的档次，体现了对英语的熟练的驾驭能力。例如: Sally stood off to the side, head down. 运用了独立主格；Sally returned to her seat, not looking at anyone, not even Bella.运用了非谓语动词；The kids were sitting in a circle on the floor listening to the teacher.运用现在分词做状语。
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After two hours of searching, I finally gave up and returned to the car. Then I found my wife relaxing in a chair, drinking a cup of coffee. She was really smart. The next challenge was to get a new key. Luckily, another family came through the campsite, so I asked them to send out a locksmith. They promised they would. Five hours later, the locksmith showed up and he charged me twice the normal amount for making a new key.
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The next day, we stopped at a service centre for lunch. I pulled out the cup holder and the missing key was sitting right there. Imagine my embarrassment.It was the only place we didn't look. And guess who put it there My wife! We actually both made mistakes because I had pushed the cup holder back without noticing the key. I got out of the car, looked up at the sky and said, “Bird, I was wrong about you. I'm sorry.”
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读文章可知，大约十年前，作者和妻子去亚利桑那州的大峡谷旅行，回来的时候不知道把车钥匙放哪里了，并怀疑可能是被一只鸟偷走了，于是开始寻找丢失的钥匙。
【详解】
续写第一段开头为：找了两个小时后，我终于放弃了，回到了车里……后面应该写寻找别的办法，启动车子。
续写第二段开头为：第二天，我们在一家服务中心停下来吃午饭……后面应该写我们却意外的找到车钥匙，作者冤枉了那只鸟。
续写要求至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语，所以，考生应熟悉所给划线词语，恰当的时候使用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右；续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。按要求完成写作任务。
【点睛】
文章主题部分选用的是一般过去时，续写部分也用一般过去时，通篇时态把握准确；所给关键词使用的恰当并且高级，显示出较高的英语能力；文章中还使用了复合句，现在分词作宾补等高级语法，为文章增加色彩和高级感，如Then I found my wife relaxing in a chair, drinking a cup of coffee .We actually both made mistakes because I had pushed the cup holder back without noticing the key. 这里原因状语从句，显示高级的英语水平，精准掌握了从句使用的要领；续写部分构思巧妙，衔接自然，思路清晰自然，表达完整，为一篇优秀的作品。
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The day was not spent on self-pity-it was really fun and unforgettable. They rode bikes around the school’s hallways, took photos, and played hide-and-seek. Trashaun taught Jayce how to slam dunks. He even gave Jayce a shirt as a gift. He talked about their left arms. He told Jayce he was perfect the way he looked. He encouraged him not to let anyone drag him down and shake his confidence.
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After the meeting, Jayce learned to accept his disability. He began to understand that there are many people like him. He came to adapt himself to his disability. He recently started practising shooting basketball every day and he really loves it. Jayce often chats with Trashaun on the Internet about basketball skills as well as some school issues. He is really motivated by this role model and has a positive attitude to his future life. As for Trashaun, he never dreamed that his videos would have such an impact. His relationship with Jayce made him look forward to helping more kids.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。
【详解】
通过阅读所给文章可知，Jayce左臂残缺，受到同学的嘲笑，母亲不知如何向他解释，同样左臂残缺的Trashaun在网络上上传了自己扣篮的视频，很快受到欢迎，Jayce和他的母亲看完视频，信心大增。Jayce与Trashaun见面后很快成为朋友。Jayce意识到世界上还有和他一样的人，他对自己的未来充满信心。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：这一天不用再在自怜中度过，所以接下来写的内容是这是一个难忘的日子，因为这一天Jayce见到Trashaun及他们所做的事情，如在学校的过道里骑自行车、照相、玩捉迷藏等；同时要详细描述Trashaun如何鼓励Jayce，如告诉他看起来很好，不要因为任何人而沮丧且要对自己有信心。第二段开头是：Trashaun与Jayce会面之后，所以接下来写的内容是Jayce在见到Trashaun之后受他鼓励之后的改变。要详细描述Jayce具体改变，如Jayce开始接受自己的残疾，开始练习投篮并对未来的生活充满积极乐观的态度。文章最后也谈到Trashaun认为他应该帮助更多的像Jayce一样的孩子。
【点睛】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇。如：adapt oneself to，positive attitude，look forward to，drag down等高级词汇。
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Suddenly, I didn’t feel quite so sorry for myself. She seemed sad, now that I’d taken the time to notice. I decided to do something to cheer her up. “I have a better idea,” I said enthusiastically. “Come on — let’s start back.” “OK,” agreed Jen, and a little smile caught at the corner of her mouth. Ten minutes later, Jen and I put our skates on the front porch, and I told her we can make a big snow turkey. “This is going to be great,” Jen said, grinning at me with rosy cheeks.
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We were so busy making it that we didn’t hear our parents come outside. “It’s the biggest snow turkey I’ve ever seen.” said Mom with a grin. A moment later, we were all busy working on our giant creation. When our snow turkey was finished, Mom said to me, “Thanks for cheering Jen up. You’re a good brother, and you come up with great ideas.” A happy feeling spread through me. I said, “I guess we make a good team.” The snow turkey helped me remember that everything could still work out even if it had to change.
【解析】
【分析】
这是一篇记叙文。前文主要讲述我习惯了和爸爸两个人的生活，家里突然来了继母和继母带来的妹妹，我很不习惯。特别是在圣诞节，以往爸爸都带我去堆大雪人，但是今年的圣诞节爸爸却在帮继母做火鸡。我感觉继母和妹妹的到来改变乐我生活中的一切。但是当我和妹妹对话时，我突然发现妹妹的生活改变了更多。我从没有考虑过她怎么想。题干中已经给出了续写的每段首句，同学们按照首句将内容展开即可。
【详解】
第一步：审题：由续写第一段给出的首句“Suddenly, I didn’t feel quite so sorry for myself.(突然，我觉得自己没有那么委屈了)”可知，这一段主要围绕作者开始关注妹妹的感受展开论述。由第二段首句We were so busy making it that we didn’t hear our parents come outside.(我们一直忙着制作雪人，没听到父母出来了)可知，这一段围绕我们在一起也可以很开心展开论述。
第二步：列提纲（重点词组）
taken the time to notice(花时间注意)；cheer her up(让她高兴)；a little smile caught at the corner of her mouth(嘴角露出了点笑容)；giant creation(杰作)；come up with(想出)；be all busy working on…(忙于做……)；grinning at me(朝我咧嘴笑)等。
第三步：遣词造句：同学们在写作时不能逐句翻译，可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯，同时要点表述要完整，文章要通顺，准确使用时态和语态。
第四步：连句成文：写作时要适当使用连词、过渡词和插入语，使文章浑然一体。同时恰当而合理地使用一些高级词汇和句型，如定语从句等，以提高文章档次。
【点睛】
范文内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了较多句式，如：第一段第二句使用了now that引导的状语从句；第一段第八句使用了宾语从句，第九句使用了现在分词作状语。第二段第二句使用了省略了that的定语从句；第二段第四句使用了时间状语从句；最后两句都使用了宾语从句；最后一句还使用了even if引导的让步状语从句。此外本文还使用了一些高级词汇，如taken the time to notice；cheer her up；a little smile caught at the corner of her mouth；giant creation；come up with等。全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。
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“All right, that’s all we can do,” David told Sara. Then they went back to the beach where they’d had lunch. They made a fire and laid out a tarp. As the evening wore on, they placed a headlamp with a flashing light on a ledge. By about 10:30 p.m.，they decided they probably weren’t going to get rescued that night, so they pulled out their sleeping bags. Before sleeping， David added more wood to the fire to keep the mountain lions away.
Then, just after midnight, David suddenly woke up because he dreamed that they heard a helicopter hovering above them and they heard the magic words: “This is Search and Rescue. You have been found. “Unfortunately, looking around, he could see nothing but endless darkness. He then fell into sleep again.
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David’s dream became true! The helicopter circled as the pilot looked for a good place to land. Finally the helicopter landed safely and it was a moment of pure happiness as the three chatted with the officers who had rescued them.When the officers dropped them back at the Finch Campground, the family learned more about the long shot events that had saved them: Some hikers had seen the water bottle in the water. When they picked it up, they noticed the writing on it — “Help!”. Then they realized there was a note inside. After they read it, they hightailed it to the campground, turned the bottle in. David is planning on having a big barbecue to meet the hikers — and thank them.“I imagine it’s going to be one of the greatest moments of my life.” he says.
【解析】
【分析】
这是一篇读后续写。
【详解】
前文主要讲述了David一家去野营，大雪和春雨把通常可以控制的瀑布变成了水流汹涌的瀑布，使得他们一家困在了山上，他们听到瀑布另一侧有人的声音，下决心要把信息传递给这些人，最后他们在所携带的绿色水壶上刻下了“帮助”两个字，并用所带的纸笔写下了“ 6- 15-19我们被困在瀑布了。 请寻求帮助”，然后将纸条塞入瓶子。根据给的第一段开头This time, his throw over the waterfall was perfect.（这次，他完美地将水壶扔过了瀑布。），可知本段是续写水壶被扔过瀑布之后，David他们等待救援的过程。第二段是以The next morning. they heard a helicopter hovering (盘旋) above them.（第二天早上。 他们听到一架直升机盘旋在他们上方。）开头，由此可知他们最后获救了，所以这段重点写他们是如何被救以及被救之后的事情。
【点睛】
续写范文语言地道，句型多变。比如Then they go back to the beach where they’d had lunch.中使用了where引导的定语从句；he dreamed that they heard a helicopter hovering above them and they heard the magic words使用了that引导的宾语从句；The helicopter circled as the pilot looked for a good place to land.使用了as引导的状语从句。
16．Clearly Mercy's self-control had failed. After midnight when everyone was asleep, she'd silently carried one package after another out of the living room so that she could enjoy in private. Anything eatable was gone, including cookies, chocolates, candy canes, and four pounds of Milk-Bones. She enjoyed her midnight snack in her comfortable nest. My parents were so grateful instead of being angry, they laughed off the ruined presents. Only one problem remained. With all the gift tags destroyed, how could they send out thank-you cards
As for Thank-you cards, Mercy provided the answer. A few days later, Polly returned to her easy chair to find Mercy guiltily cleaning a plate with her tongue where a cookie had just been. Polly took a picture of the shamefaced dog and used it to make thank-you notes. The title read. "Thank you for the mercy." Inside, the whole story was explained. We all laughed and began to know why Polly had the dog named Mercy. And everyone shared the sweet moment Mercy and Polly gave us!
【解析】
【分析】
这是一篇续写。文章叙述的是，作者的继母，波莉，建议给宠物狗起一个最甜蜜的名字:Mercy。孩子们不知道她为什么会起这个奇怪的名字。但很快就知道这个名字正是这只新狗所需要的。当他们弄回一棵圣诞树时，他们希望一切都井井有条，然而，令他们惊讶的是，Mercy似乎一点也不在乎。她对突然长在她客厅里的那棵树毫无兴趣。她对盒子下面那些精美的礼物也没有反应，圣诞节前几天，波莉像往常一样一大早就醒了，她回头看了看房间，发现所有的礼物都不见了。只有那棵树还在那儿，波莉发现是Mercy干的。
【详解】
1.第一段给出的首句是Clearly Mercy's self-control had failed.这一句是故事发展的转折点。可以从“午夜过后，大家都睡着了，她悄悄地把一个又一个包裹搬出了客厅，这样她就可以独自享用了。”入手扩展开去。紧接着应该是“所有可吃的东西都不见了，包括饼干、巧克力、拐杖糖和4磅牛奶骨头。她在舒适的窝里吃夜宵。我的父母对此非常感激，他们没有生气，反而对毁坏的礼物一笑置之。只有一个问题。”——无论从何角度拓展，需注意与续写第二段首句呼应，所以该段最后一句“所有的礼物标签都被销毁了，他们怎么能寄感谢信呢 ”与第二段首句呼应。
2.第二段所给首句As for Thank-you cards, Mercy provided the answer.这一句呼应前文，紧接着可以从“几天后，波莉回到她的安乐椅上，发现莫茜正在内疚地用舌头清理刚放饼干的盘子。”入手续写。接下来故事情节应该是这样的“波莉给这只害羞的狗拍了一张照片，用它做了感谢便条。标题阅读。“谢谢你的仁慈。”里面解释了整个故事。我们都笑了起来，开始明白为什么波莉要把狗叫Mercy。每个人都分享了Mercy和Polly给我们的甜蜜时刻!”
【点睛】
这是一篇续写。文章符合续写要求，段落与段落之间衔接紧密，环环相扣，层次清晰。同时文中使用高级句子。After midnight when everyone was asleep, she'd silently carried one package after another out of the living room so that she could enjoy in private.句中when引导时间状语，so that引导目的状语从句；With all the gift tags destroyed, how could they send out thank-you cards 句中使用with的独立主格结构；A few days later, Polly returned to her easy chair to find Mercy guiltily cleaning a plate with her tongue where a cookie had just been.句中where引导定语从句；the whole story was explained.一般过去时态的被动语态用在句中。
17．After a well-placed kick, the man was done, and attempted to release her and run. But Granny wouldn’t stand for that. It was now her turn to grab onto him, her hands made strong from hours and hours of farm work. That poor fool didn’t have a chance. She shouted for help to bystanders, and they rushed to her aid. With Granny leading the charge, a group of strangers came together and pinned the man to the sidewalk, holding him there until the police came. A silver-haired woman had just made a citizen’s arrest.
Later, we asked “Granny, don’t you realize you could have got yourself hilled ” Granny’s answer was surprisingly amusing and simple: “I wasn’t scared of that little idiot. I’d had my brand-new van for less than two days and a pack of good sandwiches for my office. And there was no way he was going to get either of those!” But we all learned an important lesson from her that day- the same lesson that had been building through the years. She encouraged us to push boundaries and expectations. But even more so, she taught us fearlessness.
【解析】
【分析】
本文是一篇读后续写。
【详解】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，作者的奶奶开车上街。在停车等红绿灯的时候遇到了拦路抢劫犯。作者的奶奶没有被吓到，反而在路上和抢劫犯做斗争。抓住了抢劫犯，并因此上了电视。续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：在踢了一脚后，这名男子被击倒，并试图放开她并逃跑……，所以这一段应该写歹徒试图逃跑而奶奶伙同其他人制服歹徒，并因此上了电视。要详细写奶奶是如何抓住那个歹徒的。第二段开头是：后来，我们问:“奶奶，难道你没有意识到你会被人盯上吗 ” 本段应该写奶奶不畏惧任何坏人。并且通过奶奶的事迹，教会了我们一些人身哲理：我们要无所畏惧。
续写时要求使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语增加了写作难度，我们要熟悉所给划线词语，恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右；续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。按要求完成写作任务。
【点睛】
文章思路清晰，语言规范，段落整齐，语篇连贯，层次清晰。使用了较为高级的句式:with的复合结构With Granny leading the charge, a group of strangers came together and pinned the man to the sidewalk, holding him there until the police came；定语从句：But we all learned an important lesson from her that day- the same lesson that had been building through the years等。高级句式的应用提升了写作的档次，整个短文显示出了作者高水平的英语表达能力。
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Approaching (走近) the doorway, Jenny took a deep breath. When she knocked at the door, she found the door was locked and her mother was not in. Tired and sad, she sat down in front of the house. “Where could my mother be ” she wondered, “Was she still angry with me ” Again, the scene of the quarrel appeared in her mind. She remembered her rudeness to her mother. Realizing that all the scolding from her mother was due to the fact that her mother really cared a lot about her, she felt rather ashamed, and tears began to roll down her cheeks.
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A gentle touch on her hair called her mind back. She raised her head and saw the familiar face of her mother. “Here you come! I’ve been looking for you,” she said, tired and relieved. Jenny couldn’t help throwing herself into her mother’s arms. “Mum, I’m so sorry and thank you for all you have done for me.” She expressed her sincere apology and great gratitude. Hearing this, her mother smiled patting her back gently.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇考察的作文类型是读后续写。
【详解】
前文主要讲的是Jenny听到店主的话后，想起了母亲熟悉的面孔和饱经风霜的双手。想起自己从来没有感谢过妈妈为自己所做的一切。于是Jenny打算回家，在回家的路上，Jenny一到家就决定为她的粗鲁向她妈妈道歉。在给的第一段开头Approaching the doorway, Jenny took a deep breath.中doorway意思是“门口”，是此句中的关键词，因为后文都围绕着Jenny回到家后的事情展开。第二段开头A gentle touch on her hair called her mind back.中touch意思为“触碰”，是此句中的关键词，因为后文都围绕着这个词展开。
【高分句型1】
She realized that her mother scolded her because her mother really cared a lot about her. 她意识到她妈妈骂她是因为她妈妈真地很关心她。运用because引导的原因状语从句。
【高分句型2】
After she raised her head, she saw the familiar face of her mother. 她抬起头，看见了她母亲那熟悉的面孔。运用after引导的时间状语从句。
19．参考范文一 (Simple version)
Paragraph 1: The boy headed back down to the old man's house with the figurine. He knocked on the door again and the old man opened the door. "Boy, I told you no magazines." "No, sir. But I want to give you a gift." The boy handed him the figurine and the man's face lit up. " This is for you." The old man was amazed. No one had ever given him such a gift and shown him kindness. (63words)
Paragraph 2: From that day on something changed inside the old man. He started coming out of the house and meeting people. He and the boy became friends. The boy even brought his dog to visit him . Gradually, he developed the habit of smiling at everyone and showed his precious collections to children actively and warmly. (44words)
参考范文二 (Complex version)
Paragraph 1: The boy headed back down to the old man's house with the figurine. Afraid as he felt, he still knocked on the door, waiting breathlessly. Finally, it opened and out came the old man. Seeing the boy holding a well-wrapped dog figurine, he looked very astonished but still glared at him without a word. Determined to break the ice, the boy gave the old man the gift with a card attached, expressing his care. The old man was so moved by all the boy did that words failed to convey his emotions. “Thank you so much!” he said to the boy gently and kindly. (91words)
Paragraph 2: From that day on something changed inside the old man. The neighborhood always found the old man hanging out and smiling at everyone. He showed his precious collections to children actively and warmly. He used to collect figurines in memory of a real live dog which had kept company with him for a long time before it died. But now, he wasn’t drowned in the sorrows and loneliness anymore. He had realized the true spirit of life. (67words)
【解析】
【分析】
这是一篇记叙文。文章讲述的是小男孩和一个孤独的收藏老人的故事。在小男孩的感化下，老人走出了自己的家门，渐渐地养成了对每个人微笑的习惯，并积极、热情地向孩子们展示他收藏的珍贵藏品。
【详解】
1.第一段给出的首句是The boy headed back down to the old man's house with the figurine.这一句是故事发展的转折点。可以从“他又敲了敲门，老人打开了门。”入手扩展开去，接下来故事应该这样发展:“孩子，我告诉过你不要看杂志。”“不，先生。但我想送你一件礼物。”男孩把雕像递给他，那人的脸亮了起来。“这是给你的。”老人很惊讶。——无论从何角度拓展，需注意该段最后一句“从来没有人给过他这样的礼物，并对他表示友好。”与续写第二段首句呼应。
2.第二段所给首句From that day on something changed inside the old man.这一句呼应前文，紧接着可以从“他迫不及待地想见到他的妹妹，分享这个好消息。”入手续写。接下来故事情节应该是这样发展：他开始走出屋子去见人。他和那个男孩成了朋友。男孩甚至带着他的狗来看望他。渐渐地，他养成了对每个人微笑的习惯，并积极、热情地向孩子们展示他收藏的珍贵藏品。
【点睛】
本文是一篇续写。文章结构严谨，续写思路清晰，环环相扣，同时句中使用高级句子。But I want to give you a gift.并列连词表示转折；The old man was amazed.句中使用一般过去时态的被动语态；He started coming out of the house and meeting people.句中动名词作宾语；He used to collect figurines in memory of a real live dog which had kept company with him for a long time before it died.定语从句和时间状语从句用在句中。
20．Paragraph 1: Once, after the nurses had gone for the day, I heard the sound of Mom’s voice coming from her room. I found her with the head of the bed raised, reading from the newspaper, with Otto in her arms, listening adoringly. I will forever cherish the memory of Otto’s touching her face. Eventually, using a walker, Mom began to take walks through the house, followed by Otto. Where she rested, Otto rested. Where she moved, Otto shadowed. Somehow, Otto knew that during those days he became her dog child, giving her life purpose.
Paragraph 2: Three years later, Mom together with Otto is still here, medicines and nurses long gone. When we saw the doctor a while ago, “I can’t believe it, Lula,” he said. “I can’t find your cancer and your heart is strong. When your daughter brought you to me, I thought you were a ship that had sailed.” Mom gives the credit to Otto, who continues to share his gift of love―a medicine more powerful than any drug a doctor could prescribe.
【解析】
【分析】
这是一篇续写。
【详解】
1.第一段给出的首句是Jatin looked up and he saw the other boys rushing ahead.这一句是故事发展的转折点。可以从“我发现她抬起床头，读着报纸，怀里抱着奥托，崇拜地听着。”入手扩展开去，——无论从何角度拓展，需注意与续写第二段首句呼应，最后一句应该用“不知道为什么，奥托知道在那些日子里，他成了她的狗孩子，给了她生活的目标。”与第二段首句相呼应。
2.第二段所给首句Filled with pleasure, Jatin walked home in no time.这一句呼应前文，紧接着可以从“不久前我们去看医生时，他说:‘我真不敢相信，卢拉。’”入手续写。
【点睛】
这是一篇续写。符合续写要求，段落之间衔接紧密，句子环环相扣，层次清晰。同时文中使用高级句子。I found her with the head of the bed raised, reading from the newspaper, with Otto in her arms, listening adoringly.句中现在分词作伴随状语；Eventually, using a walker, Mom began to take walks through the house, followed by Otto.过去分词作方式状语；Where she moved, Otto shadowed.句中where引导地点状语从句；When your daughter brought you to me, I thought you were a ship that had sailed.句中when引导时间状语从句。
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Ali looked up and saw the other boys rushing ahead. Refusing to give up at this point, he jumped to his feet and ran as fast as he could. He dashed across the finishing line and won the fourth prize. Thinking he would let her sister down, Ali couldn’t help sobbing. Just then he suddenly heard the announcement from the broadcast that he won the third prize as the runner who collided with Ali was disqualified for breaking the rule. Holding the shoes close to his chest during the award ceremony, Ali felt overjoyed and relieved as he eventually won the shoes for his sister.
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Filled with delight, Ali walked home quickly. He could not wait to see his sister and share the good news. On his arrival, Ali found Zahra was waiting outside. Nervous and anxious, Zahra wondered whether her brother had brought her what she was expecting. “Zahra, see what I have got for you.” Ali said excitedly, taking the prize out of his bag with his trembling hands. The instant Zahra saw the shoes, her face lit up. So thrilled was she that she threw herself at Ali. “Thank you! Ali.” Tears of joy welled up in their eyes as the brother and the sister hugged tightly together.
【解析】
【分析】
本文为续写作文。首先要认真读懂给作提供的材料，弄清整篇文章的中心是什么。根据中心，补续事情的发展和故事的结局。想象要符合原文的发展，人物和事物要与原文保持连续性和一致性。要有明确的中心，重点突出，有详有略。故事情节的向后延续发展要合乎情理。
【详解】
前文主要讲述的是阿里家境贫穷，一天阿里给妹妹修鞋的路上，把妹妹的鞋弄丢了，他准备通过参加学校的长跑比赛，获得三等奖的奖品——一双鞋子，给妹妹作补偿，但在终点的时候发生一点意外。在给的第一段开头中，Ali looked up and saw the other boys rushing ahead.(阿里抬头一看，看到其他男孩冲在前面)，可知本段是续写比赛中阿里被撞后是如何做的，这一段是文章的关键。第二段是以Filled with delight, Ali walked home quickly.(Filled with delight, Ali walked home quickly.)开头，此句中的delight是关键词，阿里为什么高兴，是因为他达到目的了，上一段已经指出他获得了三等奖，本段重点讲述他回家后发生的事情。
【点睛】
[高分句型]
Ali couldn’t help sobbing because he didn’t want to disappoint his sister. 阿里忍不住哭泣，因为他不想让妹妹失望。运用because引导的原因状语从句。
22．A Texas woman asked a photographer to take her pictures and heavily photoshop them. However, her husband emailed the photographer and showed his disapproval of these pictures because he loved his imperfect wife. (33)
As far as I am concerned, even though I agree that there is nothing wrong with longing for beauty and seeking perfection, I do not approve of photoshopping personal pictures. For one thing, no matter how attractive a photoshopped picture looks, the person it shows isn't the real self. To some extent, to heavily photoshop personal pictures is an act of cheating, which cheats not only others but also ourselves. For another, if we really want to become better-looking, it is not photoshopping personal pcitures but working out regularly to keep fit or putting on some makeup that really makes sense. In addition, I believe those who truly love us just accept us as we are, in which case there is no need to show them fake pictures.
To conclude, stop trying to be somebody else in photoshopped pictures. Only when we are tolerant of our imperfections can we really become more confident and beautiful.
【解析】
【分析】
【详解】
本文是一篇任务型写作。共分两个任务：1. 用约30个单词概述上述信息的主要内容；
2.用约120个单词说明你对使用图像处理软件修改个人照片的看法，并用2-3个理由或论据支撑你的看法。注意完成第一任务时，语言使用应简练、准确、到位。在第二个任务中，应涵盖题目所列出的三大要点。本文应主要使用一般现在时态。写作过程中注意使用平时学到的短语和句型，注意行文的连贯和逻辑性。
【点睛】
本文是一篇任务型写作。概括简明扼要，自己观点明确，理由充分，文章结构布局合理，文中使用高级句子。because he loved his imperfect wife.句中使用because引导的原因状语从句；even though I agree that there is nothing wrong with longing for beauty and seeking perfection, I do not approve of photoshopping personal pictures.句中even though引导让步状语从句；no matter how attractive a photoshopped picture looks, the person it shows isn't the real self.文中no matter how引导的让步状语从句非常经典；which cheats not only others but also ourselves.句中which引导非限制性定语从句；Only when we are tolerant of our imperfections can we really become more confident and beautiful.部分倒装运用巧妙；另外，As far as I am concerned, For one thing, To some extent, For another, In addition, To conclude,等的运用为文章增色添彩。
23．Mel froze as there wasn’t any mixup.She realized she was the one who’d made a mistake.Her little sister had earned the first chair through efforts—and she hadn’t even congratulated her.Mel walked down the hall.Most days，she spent her time thinking about softball，her classes and her friends.Every day was so full that she didn’t always practice her violin while Abbie played every day.Determined to make a change，Mel decided to have a talk with Abbie.
After school，Mel found Abbie on a bench outside，playing the violin.Mel made up her mind to apologize to Abbie after a brief inner struggle.She cleared her throat and started，“I’m so proud that you’re concertmaster.I’m sorry I’ve been so mean.I guess I was jealous.” Abbie was surprised.“But you’re popular，Mel.You get better grades.You’re better at sports.You can do everything.” Mel shook her head.“I can’t make a trill like you can.”“You can if you keep practicing.” Abbie smiled and asked if Mel would like to play with her.Mel agreed delightedly.
【解析】
【分析】
这是一篇读后续写。短文叙述了 Abbie获得了首席小提琴手，而看到这时，姐姐Mel获得了第二小题提琴手的席位，Mel认为是Mr Benson搞错了，而第二天Mel与Mr Benson却证实了Abbie的确获得了首席小提琴手，Mr Benson还夸奖了Abbie。
【详解】
短文叙述了 Abbie获得了首席小提琴手，姐姐Mel获得了第二小题提琴手的席位，而看到这时，Mel认为是Mr Benson搞错了，而第二天Mel与Mr Benson的谈话却证实了Abbie的确获得了首席小提琴手，Mr Benson还夸奖了Abbie。短文由此展开续写，第一段After school, Mel found Abbie on a bench outside, playing the violin.这时要续写Mel意识到是她犯了一个错误，因为平时Abbie和努力的在练习琴而自己确在想着垒球、她的课和她的朋友。Mel决定改变一下，决定和 Abbie谈一谈。以此引出第二段续写内容。第二段After school, Mel found Abbie on a bench outside, playing the violin.这时要续写Mel将心理的想法告诉了Abbie，以及Abbie是怎样回答的。最后二人和好如初。
续写是需要注意对时态的把握。高级词汇和句式以及句子连贯性的把握。
【点睛】
文章思路清晰，语言规范，段落整齐，语篇连贯，层次清晰。使用了较为高级的句式:so...that 引导的结果状语从句Every day was so full that she didn’t always practice her violin while Abbie played every day. 非谓语动词的运用After school，Mel found Abbie on a bench outside，playing the violin. who引导的定语从句She realized she was the one who’d made a mistake.
高级句式的应用提升了写作的档次，整个短文显示出了作者高水平的英语表达能力。
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He asked me to sit down and what he told me still moves me these decades later. Lying on the hospital bed, he told me about his life on the farm, his family, his loves, and his heartbreaks. Although he was tortured by the cancer, his inner self rushed out to me in a great flood as if a pipe had burst all of a sudden. He had been speaking for maybe an hour or more and mentioned that he actually felt regretful about being so strict with us.
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At that moment, I realized that he was doing more than telling. He was asking to be forgiven. All it took was to understand that was what he needed, and I forgave everything, immediately. The thought of my father being an enemy disappeared, with tears rolling down on my face. I held my father's hands tightly, enjoying this deep but quiet love. Although he has gone for a long time, I still always remember that moment and the realization that I love him.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。
【详解】
通过阅读所给文章可知，作者在一个小农场长大，他的父亲整天忙于工作和农活。父亲对作者和弟弟一直比较严格，因此有时作者感觉父亲对他来说就像一个远处的敌人。这种情况直到父亲身患癌症也没有发生改变，直到有一天父亲把作者叫到病床前，和作者敞开了心扉。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：他让我坐下来，说了一些几十年后仍让我感动的话。可知，接下来第一段续写的内容应该是父亲和作者说话的具体内容，应该是与他生活息息相关的内容，也会有对孩子的些许愧疚等。第一段开头是：在那一刻，我才意识到父爱无言。可知，第二段应该侧重讲了作者对自己与父亲之间关系的感悟或对父亲离去的不舍等内容。
【点睛】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：sit down；as if；all of a sudden；be strict with；roll down；for a long time等高级词汇；由although引导的状语从句和as if引导的虚拟句Although he was tortured by the cancer, his inner self rushed out to me in a great flood as if a pipe had burst all of a sudden.；由and连接的并列句和that引导的宾语从句He had been speaking for maybe an hour or more and mentioned that he actually felt regretful about being so strict with us.；省略that的定语从句和what引导的表语从句All it took was to understand that was what he needed, and I forgave everything, immediately.；with的复合结构The thought of my father being an enemy disappeared, with tears rolling down on my face.等高级句式。
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I was wondering what to say when I heard the sound of footsteps out of the tent. Following the sound we caught sight of the man in the photo. The woman introduced to us that the coming man was her son. Learning that our car had broken down, he asked whether he could help us for free. Hearing what he said, we got moved by his generosity. “Why don't we go to change the wheel right now ” suggested the young man, striking his chest and showing a pair of powerful arms with strong muscles as hard as iron.
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Together we walked back to the car. The boy pulled out our flat tyre as easy as blowing off dust. Surprised at how our car got repaired, George and I was wondering how we should thank him when we heard him saying to us,” Well, everything is OK with your car! You can set off again on your journey. Have a pleasant journey!” Finally, we continued our travel in the distance. Wherever we went, we would be always encouraged by the spirit from somewhere in the jungle.
【解析】
【分析】
【详解】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，在丛林里，作者他们的车轮胎出了故障，无法换轮胎，这时来了一位老妇人，作者他们跟着老妇人来到她的帐篷，老妇人请作者他们喝茶并拿出一张年轻男子的照片。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：当我听到从帐篷里走出的脚步声时，我在想该说些什么。本段应该写照片里的年轻男子是老妇人的儿子，老妇人的儿子提议免费帮助作者他们修轮胎，这让作者感动，然后他们去修轮胎。第二段开头是：我们一起走回车旁。本段应该写老妇人的儿子帮作者他们修好了车胎并祝作者他们旅途愉快，作者他们开车离开，并感慨无论他们走到哪里，他们都会被丛林中某个地方的精神所鼓舞。
续写时要求使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语增加了写作难度，我们要熟悉所给划线词语，恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右；续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。按要求完成写作任务。
【点睛】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：catch sight of，get done，blow off等高级词汇；宾语从句George and I was wondering how we should thank him when we heard，非谓语动词结构做状语Learning that our car had broken down等。
26．The father asked, ''Did you find the treasure '' ''The journey was fantastic. But forgive me for I wasn't able to find the treasure,'' the son said. ''There wasn't any treasure my son,'' the father answered smiling. ''But why did you send me to find it then '' the son asked. ''I will surely tell you why, but first you tell me, how was your journey Did you enjoy it '' ''Of course not father! I was worried someone else would find the treasure before I did.''
The son continued, ''But I did enjoy the journey on my way back home.'' He was excited. ''I made many friends. I learned so many different skills. There was so much to learn that I forgot the pain of not finding the treasure. ''The father said to him,'' Exactly my son. Everyone wants a goal in life. But if you pay too much attention to the goal, then you will miss out on the real treasures of life. The truth is, life has no goal at all, other than to just experience it and grow with it every single day.''
【解析】
【分析】
这是一篇读后续写。本文讲述了一个小故事。一位明智的父亲通过让懒惰的儿子去“寻宝”给他留下了珍贵的遗产。
【详解】
续写分为两部分。第一部分的开头是：他的父亲问：“你找到宝藏了吗？”……所以可以接着写：儿子回答：“旅程很棒。但请原谅我没有找到宝藏。”父亲听后笑着说：“其实根本没有宝藏。”“那你为什么要让我去找呢？”儿子追问道。“我一定会告诉你原因，但首先你要告诉我，你的旅程怎么样？你喜欢吗？”“当然不了。我担心别人在我之前找到宝藏。”第二部分的开头是：儿子继续说：“但我很享受回来的旅程。”……所以可以接着写：说到这儿，他非常兴奋。“我交了很多朋友。我学到了很多不同的技能。有很多要学的东西，以至于我已经忘记了没找到宝藏的痛苦。”父亲说：“正是这样。每个人的人生都有一个目标。但如果你过去关注这个目标，那么你就会错过生命中真正的宝藏。事实上，生活根本没有目标，除了每天去体验它，和它一起成长。”
续写时要注意情节要符合逻辑，还要注意人称之间的转换。考生应熟悉下划线的关键词，以便在适当时候加以运用。写作完成后，按要求将关键词下划线。
【点睛】
范文内容完整，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。
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Emily listened to her mother carefully and followed her mom’s suggestion. The next day, she began to practice singing outside. Gradually, her courage became greater and greater, and the sound of her singing was also louder and louder. Months later. She could sing as she was walking. A naughty boy who had laughed at her before cried to her, “Emily, coward! Emily, coward!” However, she chose to ignore his behavior.
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Going on singing, she walked into the park, where many people were singing and dancing. Hearing her beautiful voice, some stopped to listen to her singing and clapped for her. Emily felt pleased that she could sing confidently in front of strangers. The second year, the neighborhood held the singing competition again. This time, Emily walked onto the stage bravely, and her loud and beautiful voice of singing moved all the people. They all cheered for her, including those who had laughed at her. Her mother was delighted to see the timid girl had been a brave one.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达属于读后续写。要求考生阅读所给情节后续写两段内容，每段第一句都已给出。
【详解】
通过阅读所给文章可知，Emily唱歌很好听，但是她没有勇气在人前唱歌。一年夏天，Emily在朋友Lucy的邀请和妈妈的鼓励下，参加了一个歌唱比赛。由于太紧张，歌唱声音很小，甚至忘记了歌词。淘气的男孩们嘲笑她是胆小鬼。Emily哭着跑回了家。妈妈知道后，鼓励她要克服不敢在人前歌唱的问题，并相信她一定会有收获。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：Emily认真地听妈妈讲话，并听从了妈妈的建议。那么接下来应该接着写：第二天Emily就开始在外面练习唱歌。慢慢地，她开始变得勇敢，唱歌的声音也变大了。后来，当她练习的时候，碰见嘲笑她的男孩再次嘲笑她，她也不理睬。第二段开头是：她继续歌唱着，她走进了公园，这里有很多人在唱歌、跳舞。接下来应该接着写：公园的人都被Emily美妙的声音吸引了并为她鼓掌，这时Emily感觉到自己可以在陌生人面前勇敢地唱歌了。第二年，Emily再一次参加了那个歌唱比赛，所有人都为她的表演欢呼。Emily的妈妈很高兴看到女儿如今变得这么勇敢。
注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右。
【点睛】
本文描写详略得当，情节生动，内容完整，符合题目要求。范文中使用的一些词汇和句型值得我们学习。高级词汇/短语，如：gradually，ignore，go on doing，in front of，be delighted to do，stopped to do等；高级句型。非谓语动词作状语：Hearing her beautiful voice, some stopped to listen to her singing and clapped for her. 非限制性定语从句：Going on singing, she walked into the park, where many people were singing and dancing.
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Ali looked up and saw the other boys rushing ahead.Refusing to give up at this point, he jumped to his feet and ran as fast as he could. He dashed across the finish line and won the fourth prize. Thinking he would let her sister down, Ali couldn’t help sobbing. Just then he suddenly heard the announcement from the broadcast that he won the third prize as the runner who collided with Ali was disqualified for breaking the rule. Holding the shoes close to his chest during the award ceremony, Ali felt overjoyed and relieved as he eventually won the shoes for his sister.
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Filled with delight, Ali walked home quickly. He could not wait to see his sister and share the thrilling news. On his arrival, Ali found Zahra was waiting outside. She was really nervous whether her brother had brought her what she was expecting. “Zahra, see what I have got for you.” he took the prize out of his bag with his trembling hands. The instant Zahra saw the shoes, her face lit up. So thrilled was she that she threw herself at Ali. “Thank you! Ali.” Tears of joy welled up their eyes as the brother and sister hugged tightly together.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。文章主要讲述Ali和他的妹妹Zahra生活在贫困的家庭里，他们共用Ali的跑鞋。因要拿到跑鞋后才能去学校，Ali经常晚到并且被学校警告。为了让妹妹能有一双新鞋，Ali决定参加长跑比赛，在比赛最后一刻，被另外一名赛跑者撞倒。
【详解】
读后续写要求考生首先要读懂已有信息，不仅能读懂字面含义，还要理清文章的脉络。续篇这篇短文时，考生要搞清楚故事的发展进程、前因后果、地理位置、人物思想情感的变化等。在此基础上，考生要顺着文章的思路，根据线索，发挥想象，对其后的情节进行合理预测，并用语言表达出来，续写时注意词数应为150左右。
这篇短文续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：Ali抬起头来看见其他男孩快速向前冲。由前一段的最后一句Ali本保持着第三名的状态，但是被另外一名赛跑者碰倒在地，以及后一段给出的段首句Ali带着开心快速地走回家可知，本段是赛跑比赛的一个转折点，接下来要详细写Ali如何处理和解决这个问题，使得Ali能够夺得第三名，开心地回家。第二段开头是：Ali带着开心快速地走回家。由给出的段首句可知，Ali是实现了他对妹妹赢得新鞋子的承诺，那么接下来本段应该写Ali回到家中，如何和妹妹Zahra分享他的喜悦和成果，妹妹是如何做出反应的。
【点睛】
本文作者所续写内容符合文章的发展进程，情节合理，字数符合要求。作者在文中较多的使用非谓语动词结构，复合句，倒装句等句式，使得文章句式灵活多变，也展现了作者较高的英语高级句式驾驭功底。如“Refusing to give up at t