2024届高考作文复习专项亲情类读后续写导学案

亲情类读后续写指导案例导学案
语言学王初明教授指出，“内容要创造，语言要模仿，创造与模仿要紧密结合”。为了加强读后续写在主题与情感方面与原文的融洽度，分为两个步骤进行：第一步就是读：读懂六要素和主题、读通情节和感情发展并读精、读深；第二步就是续写：首先要关注衔接，其次就要关注构思。读后续写原文文本一般为记叙文。基于文本特点，续写内容的丰富性取决于情节的发展（冲突构造--冲突化解--亲情升华）。因此，要基于前文的阅读、围绕主题，对故事的情节进行合理的预测和构造，进而发展为续写的内容。可以按照每段三个层次，构思每一段的情节。
续写第一段 基于段首句，延续文章的发展
预测可能的故事情节
根据第二段段首句，预测第一段的结束
续写第二段 基于段首句，延续文章的发展
故事的结局
升华：呼应主题——受到教训，得到启发，获得灵感
亲情（Family affections）是世界上每个人与生俱来的第一份最宝贵的感情，尤其是亲子感情，更是亲情中的核心，如父子、母子、父母与子女等。这类故事题材的读后续写，学生有着天然的熟悉与亲近感，续写起来并不难，但是在续写环节的故事构造中要注意坚持这三原则：（一）冲突构造（误会、犯错等）；（二）冲突化解（解释、道歉、弥补、回忆等）；（三）亲情升华（诚实、珍惜等）。本文以生病的Mike即Ill Mike读后续写为案例，尝试运用G-N and Q-A策略高效的指导学生展开亲情类文章的读后续写。在本案列的续写部分，教师基于原文本信息的解读以及围绕两段首句中hurried;drive to;hospital，realized,admit等关键信息以what,how,why等6个问题串进行提问，最后修改、润色、整理成文。
（一）原文文本：阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Ill Mike
When Mike was a seven-year-old kid, his parents usually didn't give him money because he liked to buy junk food. They knew such food would be harmful to kids’ body.
But one day Mike strongly wished to buy such food. He knew he couldn't persuade his parents to give him money to buy it, so he was upset. At noon that day, his mom was having a nap in the bedroom while his dad was working out of the home. Mike suddenly found his mom's wallet on the sofa in the living room. Usually, his mom would put the wallet close to her-not this time.
Mike found a good chance to get money. He thought he could secretly take some from his mom’s wallet without letting her discover it. Then, he slowly walked towards the wallet and opened it. There was lots of money. Mike took a few coins and walked out of the house, going directly to a store in his community.
He bought a bag of food that was very peppery and a bottle of iced Coca-cola. Instead of returning home, he hung around outside to enjoy the food and the drink in case his mom discovered it. When he opened the food bag, a strong, hot and sweet smell rushed into his nose. He tasted some: it was delicious. But it was too hot and his mouth seemed to be on fire. However he didn't take notice of it. Minutes later, he ate up the bag of junk food and finished the drink. Then he returned home. His mother was still sleeping.
In the afternoon that day, Mike began to feel uncomfortable and wanted to vomit. He felt pain in his stomach. At first, he could stand it. However, finally, he couldn't bear it anymore and told his mom that he felt sick. But Mike didn't tell his mom the truth that he had some hot junk food. Not knowing what was wrong with Mike, his mom was worried.
Para1: She hurried to drive him to the hospital. _____________________________________
Para 2: Mike realized he should admit what he had done. ______________________________
1.Text type: ( )Narration记叙文;( )Argument议论文;( )Exposition说明文
2.Read for theme:Healthy e and h ;
3.Read for conflict：Parents’ and kid’s to unhealthy food;
Detailed information:
(1)Parents:didn't give to buy ;
(2)Mike:strongly wished to buy junk food; secretly take some from his mom's wallet; bought a bag of food...; hung around outside to enjoy the food..;didn't take notice of it.
4.Read for basic elements:5w+1H，you need to fill in the chart below.
时态 一般过去时（past tense）
六要素 When
Where
Who
What
why
how
(
Climax
（高潮）
Mike felt
and told his mother his uncomfortable
problems.
)5.Read for plot:
(
Build-up
（
发展
）
Mike secretly
without letting her discover it.
)
(
Resolution(
解决
)
Paragraph1
:
She
hurried to drive him to the hospital.
)
(
Opening(
介绍
)
Mike
’
s parents usually didn
’
t
give
,
because
)
(
Ending(
结尾
)
Paragraph 2: Mike realized he should admit what he had done.
)
6.运用Q-A策略解题：引导学生抛出问题、思考并回答。
Continuous writing Questions series Possible answers
Para1:She hurried to drive him to the hospital.
Para2:Mike realized he should admit what he had done.
把这些问题的答案整理成文：（另附纸）