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Unit 11
Sad movies make me cry.
人教新目标版 九年级上
Section B3a-Selfcheck
写作优质公开课课件
Learning objectives
1. To think of and talk about some experiences that made you feel very happy or sad;
2. To know the structure of narration;
3. To learn how to write a narrative composition similar to the one in 2b.
4. To have an optimistic attitude towards failure or disappointment
Warming-up
It makes us feel relaxed.
How does this song make you feel
feelings(感觉)
bored
comfortable
angry
moved
unhappy
sleepy
uncomfortable
sad
nervous
worried
excited
surprised
confident
happy
relaxed
…
Expressions about feelings.
Positive
Negative
Besides movies, sports, music, pictures
and books can also affect our feelings.
Revision
3a
Think of some experiences that made you feel very happy or sad. Tell your partner about them. Use the following ideas to help you.
● winning/losing a competition
● getting good/bad grades on an exam
● performing something well/badly in front of a big group of people
● getting into a fight with your best friend
● your first trip outside your hometown
What
How
happy
excited
jump up and down with joy
be on cloud nine（欣喜若狂）
Why
winning a competition
helping others
getting good grades on an exam
make me confident
one of the greatest things in life
inspire (激励) me to keep studying hard
素材
What
losing a competition
getting bad grades on an exam
getting into a fight / arguing with your best friend
How
sad
unhappy heartbroken
uncomfortable
Why
make me embarrassed（尴尬的）
make my parents angry
lose my best friend
素材
3a
Write a story similar to the one in 2b using your notes in 3a.
In your story, try to explain the following:
What happened
When did it happen
Where did it happen
How did it make you feel Why
What did you learn from the experience
事情的起因（Para.1）
Peter was worried.
事情的经过（Para.2-6）
Peter’s father had a talk with him.
事情的发展和结果
（Para.7-11）Peter talked to his teammates.
missed scoring that goal
let his whole team down
his team had lost the game
his coach might kick him off
Peter: I lost the game. → I failed my team. → They’ll probably never let me play again.
Father: don’t be too hard on yourself. → team effort → support each other → winning or losing is only half the game → (the other half) learning how to communicate with your teammates and learning from your mistakes
Teammates: (nodded in agreement) don’t worry about it → be never just one person’s fault → think about how we can do better next time
Peter: really sorry → so close to winning → pull together, win the next one
smiled, felt lucky, he was on a winning team
Let’s review the passage.
The Winning Team
本单元2b课文按照什么样的逻辑线索来讲述别人的经历？
叙述自己或别人的经历时，一般用什么时态？
事情发展顺序
过去式
本单元的话题是“Emotions and feelings(情感与情绪)”，要求能根据文字提示或实际情况，简单描述某事物对人们的生活及情感所产生的影响。写作首先要把此事物介绍清楚，然后描述这件事对你情感或情绪的影响；最后也可得出结论，总结经验或表达自己的观点。
单元写作话题
初中三年的校园生活精彩纷呈, 总有一些经历是令你难以忘怀的。学校英语报 English Learning 正在以 “My Unforgettable Experience” 为主题向应届毕业生征文。
请写一篇80—100词的英语短文，叙述你的一次难忘的经历，并谈谈你在其中的感悟和收获。
Sample writing
How to write
Step 1---审
内容：谈论初中三年难忘的事情
文体：记叙文(narration)
人称：以第一人称和第三人称(first/third person)为主
时态：以一般过去时(simple past tense)为主
逻辑顺序：事情的发展顺序
审清题目
Step 2---列
My Unforgettable Experience
What happened
用过去时写出发生的事
When did it happen
last month/year/term,
时间段+ago,
in+过去的年份
Where did it happen
at home/school
on the school soccer field
How did it make you feel Why
1)It made me feel.../I felt/was...
2) Because+从句，because of+sth, as a result of
What did you learn from the experience
From the experience, I know/realize that______.
It's important/necessary to _____.
We should do sth. rather than do sth.
介绍经历
表达感受
经历对自己的影响
What happened
When did it happen
Where did it happen
How did it make you feel Why？
What did you learn from
the experience
经
历
与
感
受
How did it happen
5 “W” 1 “H”
Step 3 ---构
开篇点题，交代过去某个难忘的经历。
然后具体描述事情发生的时间、地点、人物、经过、结果、感受等等
总结观点，谈论收获。
I will never forget the days when I…
It was a Monday morning. On my way to school… I felt upset.
I was worried about…
I think I can succeed if I try my best to do everything.......
My Unforgettable
Experience
Writing outline
Step 4 ---连
连句子
Beginning (1)My unforgettable experience was arguing with my best friend Li Hua(我难忘的一次经历是和我最好的朋友李华发生争吵).
Body 时间及地点 One Saturday last term, Li Hua and I were studying together at his home.
Step 4 ---连
连句子
Body 起因及经过 (2)________________________________________________
(李华和我对一道数学题有不同的看法).
The little thing caused an argument(争论) between Li Hua and I.
Li Hua and I didn’t talk to each other.
(3)_________________________(我知道那是我的错), but I refused to say sorry to him because I didn’t want to lose face(丢脸).
(4)_____________________________________________(我没有意识到我们不会再见面) until I heard that Li Hua would move to another city with his parents.
Li Hua and I had different opinions about a math problem.
I knew that it was my fault
I didn’t realize we wouldn’t see each other anymore
Step 4 ---连
写句子
Body 结果 I said sorry to Li Hua.
Li Hua and I became friends again.
(5)____________________________________________ (这使得我如释重负/开心).
Ending (启示） Everyone makes mistakes.
(6)__________________________________________
(我们不应该害怕犯错).
When we realize our mistakes, we should correct them at once.
This made me feel a sense of relief/This made me feel happy.
We shouldn’t be afraid of making mistakes
Step 5 ---添
记叙难忘经历发生的起因、经过及结果时，可以使用表示时间的词语from then on和two days before / on the day he left with his family/ two days later...来连接上下文，这样文章的脉络会更清晰。
添连词
添佳句
No one is perfect and everyone makes mistakes. (人无完人,每个人都会犯错)
Who has experienced much,who knows much. (谁经历得多，谁知道得多)
The best way to escape your problem is to solve it.(逃避你的问题最好的方法就是解决它。)
My Unforgettable Experience
My unforgettable experience was arguing with my best friend Li Hua.
One Saturday last term, Li Hua and I were studying together at his home. We had different opinions about a math problem. The little thing caused an argument between us. From then on, we didn’t talk to each other. I knew that it was my fault, but I refused to say sorry to him because I didn’t want to lose face.
时间
地点
连词
My Unforgettable Experience
I didn’t realize we wouldn’t see each other anymore until I heard that Li Hua would move to another city with his
parents. Two days before he left with his family, I said sorry to Li Hua. We became friends again. This made me feel a sense of relief.
No one is perfect. Everyone makes mistakes. We shouldn’t be afraid of making mistakes. When we realize our mistakes, we should correct them at once.What an unforgettable thing it is in my life!
连词
启示
An experience that made me very happy was winning the nationwide English speech competition last year.
At first, I didn’t know what to write for my speech, but after talking to my teacher and reading some books, I had some ideas and started writing. Then I practiced my speech many times.
Sample writing
主题是谈论事物对人的影响
时态用一般过去时，人称以第一人称为主
按照事情发展的顺序
范文赏读
On the day of the competition, I saw many people there. This made me feel very nervous! I started to worry that I would forget my speech. Then I remembered what my teacher told me — close my eyes and take deep breaths. I did that and it made me feel much better. When my turn came, I gave my speech with confidence.
用本单元目标语言：sth. makes sb. + adj. / do
按照事情发展的顺序
I waited anxiously for the results, and when I heard that I was the first prize winner, I jumped up and down with joy.
This experience taught me that being well-prepared is very important. It helps to read a lot, and also to ask people around you for advice. Most importantly, have confidence in yourself!
事情的结果
表达感受
Step 6 ---查
Rich content and complete frame(内容丰富结构完整)）
Content and frame
Correct tense (时态）
Spelling words （单词拼写）
Punctuation （标点符号）
Correct grammar
Clean and neat （干净整洁）
Content and frame
1. Put the words in the appropriate place in the chart.
nervous unhappy uncomfortable worried comfortable relaxed angry awful happy uneasy Positive Negative
comfortable
relaxed
happy
nervous
unhappy
uncomfortable
worried
uneasy
awful
Self Check
2 Write sentences using the words given.
1. sad movies / cry
____________________________________
2. speaking in front of many people / nervous
____________________________________
____________________________________
Sad movies make me cry.
Speaking in front of many people makes me nervous.
3. money and fame / not always happy
_________________________________________
4. soft piano music / relaxed
____________________________________
5. rainy days / stay at home and watch TV
_________________________________________
_________________________________________
Money and fame don’t always make you happy.
Soft piano music makes me relaxed.
Rainy days make me want to stay at home and watch TV.
3 Number the things[1-6](1=least important,
6=most important). Write a reason for each choice.
____fame ____power ____friendship
____wealth ____health ____family
1
2
5
3
4
6
e.g. Fame is not very important. It can make me nervous if too many people follow me around.
Power is not important to me. I don’t like to control others.
Wealth is not very important. I prefer to live a simple life.
Health is important. A healthy body makes it possible for me to do many things in life.
Friendship is very important. Spending time with friends makes me happy.
Family is the most important to me. My family makes me feel comfortable and happy.
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