2015年湖北高考最后冲刺作文提高策略+33张

课件33张PPT。How to Polish Your Composition?黄石二中 胡瑞明 　如何算是一篇好文章？
－覆盖了所有的要点。
－应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。
－有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑，行文连贯，条理清楚。要点全词汇,句型 （高级）和语法多样化（较复杂）连接词一、How to select words 遣词 good，
nice,
excellent(一）避免使用简单、笼统的词语
terrific, distinguished
splendid
extraordinary
incredible
outstanding
amazing
awesome
brilliant1. Last year, I visited Beijing with my father.
2. After considering it carefully, I chose science as my main subject.
3.Suddenly I thought out a good idea.
4.The students there needn’t pay for their books.

5. As a result the plan was a failure.The plan turned out to be a failure.Last year, I paid a visit to / toured Beijing with my father.（二） “语”众不同，避免人云亦云After careful consideration, I selected science as my main subject.A good idea occurred to me./ A good idea suddenly struck me.Books are free for the students there.6. Immediately actions should be taken to protect the environment.
7. She went to Austria in order to study music.
8. When he spoke, he felt more and more excited.
9. The interesting teacher knows how to make an interesting class.
10. The text is so difficult that I can’t understand it.She went to Austria for the purpose of studying music.Immediately actions should be taken to better the environment．The more he spoke, the more excited he felt.The humorous teacher knows how to make his class vivid.The text is so difficult that I can’t make sense of it.
The text is so difficult that I can’t figure it out.（二）使用自然、和谐、富有逻辑性的过渡词表转折：however, on the other hand, whereas, nevertheless, on the contrary, anyhow, anyway…
表对比：in contrast, in comparison, in relation to, likewise, similarly…
表递进：besides, furthermore, in addition, also, worse, still, moreover, let alone…
表因果：as a result, consequently, therefore, thus, hence, so, thanks to, due to, since, because（of）…
表顺序：first...next..，and then..，finally, first…then.., after that.., finally…
表推理：otherwise, if not, in that case…
表让步：though, although, in spite of, despite, now that，considering…
表目的：for this purpose, in order（to）that, in view of this…
表解释：in other words, that is, namely…
表总结：in all, in short, in brief, in conclusion, to sum up, in summary, finally… The demand has increased. It follows that the prices are higher.
The demand has increased. Therefore, the prices are higher.
The demand has increased. So, the prices are higher .
The demand has increased. As a result, the prices are higher.
The demand has increased. Accordingly, the prices are higher.
The demand has increased. Because of this, the prices are higher.
The demand has increased. Thus, the prices are higher.
The demand has increased. For this reason, the prices are higher.二、How to write sentences 造句（一）长短句结合，增加段落的节奏感；
（二）使用倒装句、强调句等，改变句子单调性，增强修辞效果；
（三）运用各种从句来丰富句式，增强句子的表达力；
（四）使用非谓语动词，使句子更加紧凑、严谨；
（五）使用成语、谚语，使语言更显魅力；
（六）使用拟人修辞手法，使句子更具生命力、感染力。（一）长短句结合，增加段落的节奏感I don’t have time to watch T.V. or enjoy music. I don’t even have time to read books or play football.
I can’t follow my interests such as watching T.V. or enjoying music. To make things worse, I don’t even have time to read books or play football.
There are many trees on both sides. There is a river in the center of the city. There are many fishes in it.
There are many trees on both sides. A river flows in the center of the city, in which live many fishes.（二）使用倒装句、强调句等，改变句子单调性，增强修辞效果
I did not realize the importance of learning English well until then.
Not until then did I realize the importance of learning English well.
It was not until then that I realized the importance of learning English well.（三）运用各种从句来丰富句式，增强句子的表达力
1. To our surprise, the little girl knows so many things.
What surprises us is that the little girl knows so many things. （名词性从句）
2. It was quite an experience for us both, I will never forget it for the rest of my life.
It was quite an experience for us both, which I’ll never forget for the rest of my life. （定语从句）
3. I won’t believe what he says.
Whatever/ No matter what he says I won’t believe him. （状语从句）（四）使用非谓语动词，使句子更加紧凑、严谨
1. When she heard the news, she began to cry.
Hearing the news, she burst out crying.
2.The woman carried a baby in her arms and got on the bus.Carrying a baby in her arms, the woman stepped onto the bus.
3. Mr. Smith was invited by Nanjing University, Mr. Smith went to make a speech on DNA.
Invited by Nanjing University, Mr. Smith went to give a lecture on DNA.（五）使用成语、谚语，使语言更显魅力
Time and tide wait no man. 岁月不等人。
Many hands make light work. 人多力量大。
/ 众人拾柴火焰高。
No cross, no crown. 不经过磨难，得不到王冠。/ 不经风雨，怎能见彩虹。
No pain, no gain. 没有付出，就没有收获。
Noting venture, noting gain. 不入虎穴，焉得虎子。
Actions speak louder that words. 事实胜于雄辩。
A fall into the pit, a gain in your wit. 吃一堑，长一智。（六）使用拟人修辞手法，使句子更具生命力、感染力
1. The 29th Olympic Games was successfully held in Beijing in 2008.
The year 2008 saw the success of the 29th Olympic Games held in Beijing.
On 25th April，2015 a destructive earthquake shook Nepal.
Nepal witnessed a destructive earthquake on 25th April，2015.Eventually all my efforts paid off as I can speak and write English fluently now.
Words failed me.
Tears came to her eyes.
A sense of failure wept her.
A good idea occurred to me when I woke up this morning.
The bad weather prevented us from coming.
Sooner or later happiness and success will come.
其它
达到句式多变的最佳途径是把关键词或短语放于开头。
Mark graduated last summer. He found a job in Wuhan soon after graduation. He received an engineering degree from his college.
1. 介词结构+主语+谓语
After graduating last summer with an engineering degree, Mark soon found a job in Wuhan.
2.主语+同位语+谓语+状语
Mark, an engineering degree-holder, found a job in Wuhan last summer soon after graduation.
3. 状语+主语+谓语
Having graduated with an engineering degree, Mark found a job in Wuhan last summer. 三、How to organize the passage谋篇Organization 开头部分
(Opening paragraph)
Paragraph 1正文部分
(Body paragraph)
Paragraph 2
结尾部分
(Concluding paragraph)
Paragraph 31. 第一段：开头部分（Opening paragraph）：写出文章的核心要点即主题句。用 2－3个句子完成，其中要有一个漂亮的过渡句。
2. 第二段：正文部分（Body paragraph）：围绕主题展开论述。用言简意赅的语言叙述一个结构完整、思想意义饱满的事例。注意所讲的事例一定要能突出话题的中心，可用6—10个句子完成。
3. 第三段：结尾部分 （Concluding paragraph）：用概括性的语言来总结全文主题，得出结论，回归话题。Paragraph
2Paragraph
1
Paragraph
3
四、How to Examine the Topic 审题理解关键词语；
挖掘隐含条件，排除干扰条件；
把握内涵,理清寓意；
关注提示语，选好切入点。How to Examine the Topic
请根据以下提示, 并结合生活学习实际, 用英语写一篇短文。
There is a crack in everything; that’s how the light gets in. What’s a crack? A crack is a very narrow gap between two things, or between two parts of a thing or a line that appears on the surface of something when it is slightly damaged.裂缝；裂纹Is a crack bad or good?What’s your understanding of “that’s how the light gets in”?A fall into the pit,
a gain in your wit.attach a moral to the “crack”A crack
A loss The light
A gain (lesson)如何开头1. 直接法：开门见山，直截了当地提出自己对要讨论的问题的看法。Contrary to the common belief that wrong behaviors have nothing to do with self-improvements. I hold the standpoint that cracks are of great significance as they can help us reflect on our behaviors.
2. Nothing is flawless, therefore, it’s the imperfection that makes life colorful, and most importantly, the cracks in life can help you examine how you grow up. 2. 引用法：先引出名人名言或者有代表性的看法，来引出文章要展开论述的观点。 As the saying goes , “A fall into the pit, a gain in your wit,” the crack in our life can serve as nutrition to help us grow up.
Just as Mark Twain once said, “the best time for you to find out the positive sides of yourself is when you’re in trouble.” When trapped in cracks, we are also given an opportunity to test our quality at the same time. There is a crack in everything; that’s how the light gets in.
It was the “crack” that reminded me …. With the light through the “crack”, I could seen … clearly. 写作实战训练
请根据以下提示，并结合具体事例，用英语写一篇短文。
There is a crack in everything; that’s how the light gets in.
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and Wish You All the Best!