【2022·浙江省金华十校高三上学期11月一模】
When my husband Randy died in late fall, deciding what to do with his garden was way down on the list of necessary tasks. During the first few months, I cried with our daughters, planned a memorial, cried with my family, celebrated a quiet Thanksgiving, and panicked over not having bought Christmas presents.
As the calendar turned to a new year, the often rainy days and long nights deepened my sorrow. I found myself exhausted at the end of February, both physically and mentally.
Then the daffodils(水仙) bloomed（开花）in the garden.
Years before, Randy had planted dozens of these lemon-yellow flowers. To him, they served as a reminder of hope, a promise that light and warmth would soon replace cold and dark. Looking at those daffodils, I thought about how Randy had considered our garden a living work of art, carefully choosing plants so we’d see new blooms every month.
Then I noticed all the weeds that had taken root and spread everywhere. The neglect (疏于打理) showed, for Randy’s illness had lasted a couple of years, a time when he didn’t have energy for yard work the way he had before.
Faced with the neglected garden, I felt overwhelmed in the beginning. My daughters suggested I hire a service to clean everything up. I didn’t respond.
Every time I sat in the garden alone, the memories of the lively garden came flooding, like the numerous scenes in an unforgettable film. Many days Randy came home from work, changed into old clothes, and headed out the door to mow or prune(修剪). Orange dragonflies followed him around the yard as he worked. Honeybees buzzed among the flowers, birds sang beautiful songs, and gentle breezes carried the sweet smell of dirt. No matter how cold or wet it was, the fresh air and physical activity made him energized and refreshed. For Randy, the work was quiet and comforting, which was a relief, as well as a pleasure.
注意：
1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卷的相应位置作答。
P1: The days grew warmer and lighter, and I started the work myself. ______
P2: Weeks later, my daughters returned to visit me. ____________________
5R解读故事：
Read for the background
Read for the characters
Read for the emotional changes
Read for the plot
Beginning：
Development:
Climax:
Resolution:
Ending:
Read for the theme
TPT模式
Paragraph 1：The days grew warmer and lighter, and I started the work myself. Paragraph 2: Weeks later, my daughters returned to visit me.
Transition Step2(第4句)：______________________________________ Step2(第2句)：___________________________________
The Plot （Actions+Emotions) Step3 Mini-plot1: ________________________________ Mini-plot2: _________________________________ Mini-plot3: _________________________________ Step3 Mini-plot1: ________________________________ Mini-plot2: _________________________________ Mini-plot3: _________________________________
Transition Step2(第3句)：______________________________________ Step1(第1句)：___________________________________【2022·浙江省金华十校高三上学期11月一模】
When my husband Randy died in late fall, deciding what to do with his garden was way down on the list of necessary tasks. During the first few months, I cried with our daughters, planned a memorial, cried with my family, celebrated a quiet Thanksgiving, and panicked over not having bought Christmas presents.
As the calendar turned to a new year, the often rainy days and long nights deepened my sorrow. I found myself exhausted at the end of February, both physically and mentally. Comment by Simon: 暗示下文新的一年，我也会有所改变
Then the daffodils(水仙) bloomed（开花）in the garden. Comment by Simon: 本文最重要的意象，象征着希望和新生 Comment by Simon: 暗示Randy也一直陪在主人公身边
Years before, Randy had planted dozens of these lemon-yellow flowers. To him, they served as a reminder of hope, a promise that light and warmth would soon replace cold and dark. Looking at those daffodils, I thought about how Randy had considered our garden a living work of art, carefully choosing plants so we’d see new blooms every month. (回忆1) Comment by Simon: 暗示主人公即使经历了失去和悲伤，生活中仍然会有希望和新的可能性
Then I noticed all the weeds that had taken root and spread everywhere. The neglect (疏于打理) showed, for Randy’s illness had lasted a couple of years, a time when he didn’t have energy for yard work the way he had ment by Simon: 与Randy过去疾病缠身、无法像以前那样照料花园的情况相呼应
同时与水仙花这个希望的象征形成了对比 Comment by Simon: 花园的荒废与水仙花的盛开形成了鲜明对比
Faced with the neglected garden, I felt overwhelmed in the beginning. My daughters suggested I hire a service to clean everything up. I didn’t respond.
Every time I sat in the garden alone, the memories of the lively garden came flooding, like the numerous scenes in an unforgettable film. Many days Randy came home from work, changed into old clothes, and headed out the door to mow or prune(修剪). Orange dragonflies followed him around the yard as he worked. Honeybees buzzed among the flowers, birds sang beautiful songs, and gentle breezes carried the sweet smell of dirt. No matter how cold or wet it was, the fresh air and physical activity made him energized and refreshed. For Randy, the work was quiet and comforting, which was a relief, as well as a pleasure. (回忆2) Comment by Simon: 代表了花园中充满生机的景象
续写词数应为150左右；
The days grew warmer and lighter, and I started the work myself.
_______________________________________________________________________________
Weeks later, my daughters returned to visit me.
______________________________________________________________________________
5R解读故事：
Read for the background
February(when); a garden in my yard(where)
Read for the characters
I, my husband Randy, my daughters(who)
Read for the emotional changes
cry；sorrow；overwhelmed
Read for the plot
Beginning：my husband Randy died；left his garden
Development: sad to his death; the neglected garden
Climax: daffodils bloomed
Resolution: clean up the garden
Ending: the garden became lively again
Read for the theme
(人与自我): have a positive attitude towards life
TPT模式
Paragraph 1：The days grew warmer and lighter, and I started the work myself. Paragraph 2: Weeks later, my daughters returned to visit me.
Transition Step2(第4句)：I knew if Randy were still here, he wouldn’t bear to witness the garden in a mess. Step2(第2句)：As they stepped into the garden, they were attracted by the blooming flowers and sweet fragrance.
The Plot （Actions+Emotions) Step3 Mini-plot1: the scene in the garden (neglected) Mini-plot2: grow flowers (my actions) Mini-plot3: my responses Step3 Mini-plot1: the scene in the garden (lively) Mini-plot2: daughters’ responses and actions Mini-plot3: my responses
Transition Step2(第3句)：I came to a sudden realization that working in the yard felt like a way to accompany Randy, gifting me a beautiful garden as well as relief and pleasures. Step1(第1句)：The garden enlightened me with the fact that Randy was always with me and brought me hopes and warmth.
Possible version:
The days grew warmer and lighter, and I started the work myself. I knew if Randy were still here, he wouldn’t bear to witness the garden in a mess. Faced with the neglected garden with growing weeds, I put on old clothes and commenced to mow and prune. Following that, I bought some seeds like lemon-yellow daffodils, and sowed and watered them in the garden. After an arduous work, exhausted yet satisfied, I was delighted to witness its transformation with a big smile shining like a diamond. I came to a sudden realization that working in the yard felt like a way to accompany Randy, gifting me a beautiful garden as well as relief and pleasures.(104 words)
Weeks later, my daughters returned to visit me. As they stepped into the garden, they were attracted by the blooming flowers and sweet fragrance. Orange daffodils were blooming energetically, honeybees buzzing busily, birds singing cheerfully, and breeze kissing our cheeks gently. “What a miracle!” they exclaimed with astonishment and questioned with confusion “Is this your masterpiece ” I smiled and explained that working in the garden made me feel as if Randy were always with me. At these words, my daughters enveloped me in tight embraces with tears welling up in our eyes. The garden enlightened me with the fact that Randy was always with me and brought me hopes and warmth.(103 words)
解读：
The days grew warmer and lighter, and I started the work myself. I knew if Randy were still here, he wouldn’t bear to witness the garden in a mess.（承接上句我开始动手打理院子的原因） Faced with the neglected garden with growing weeds, I put on old clothes and commenced to mow and prune.（没有打理的院子，杂草对应原文；旧衣服，动手割草、修剪也对应原文） Following that, I bought some seeds like lemon-yellow daffodils, and sowed and watered them in the garden. （对应原文的水仙花；动作链句式）After an arduous work, exhausted yet satisfied, I was delighted to witness its transformation with a big smile shining like a diamond. I came to a sudden realization that working in the yard felt like a way to accompany Randy, gifting me a beautiful garden as well as relief and pleasures.（对应原文Randy为什么喜欢打理花园——因为可以减压和带来欢乐）(104 words) Comment by Simon: put on 穿上这个动作
wear 描述的是一种状态，或者是你经常做的事情
dress +sb
Weeks later, my daughters returned to visit me. As they stepped into the garden, they were attracted by the blooming flowers and sweet fragrance.（承接上句女儿们走进花园的所见所闻） Orange daffodils were blooming energetically, honeybees buzzing busily, birds singing cheerfully, and breezes kissing our cheeks gently.（对应原文的水仙花、蜜蜂、鸟、微风；独立主格句式） “What a miracle!” they exclaimed with astonishment and questioned with confusion “Is this your masterpiece ” （女儿们做出的actions）I smiled and explained that working in the garden made me feel as if Randy were always with me. （我的responses）At these words, my daughters enveloped me in tight embraces with tears welling up in our eyes. The garden enlightened me with the fact that Randy was always with me and brought me hopes and warmth.（点名文章主旨，要对生活充满希望）(103 words)
官方参考范文
The days grew warmer and lighter and I started the work myself. What I focused on first was clearing away the weeds that had taken root and spread. Following that, I tended all the lively plants carefully on every single day. I mowed and pruned, recalling how Randy took care of the garden previously. Working kept my hands busy and my mind focused on the task in front of me, which gradually offers me a beautiful garden as well as a sense of achievement.
Weeks later my daughters returned to visit me. Hardly had they entered the door when they were deeply struck by the lively garden which Was full of fragrant blooms, with honeybees buzzing busily and birds singing cheerfully. I told them it was completed all by myself and during the process, I felt as if Randy were always with me. Realizing the healing power of the garden work, my daughters hugged me tightly, tears welling up in their eyes. Breathing deeply the grassy scent, I knew I was ready to thrive again just like the garden.
