高分结尾技巧:主旨升华(解析版)
目录
读后续写13 高分结尾技巧:主旨升华(解析版) 1
Part 1命题解读 2
Part 2思维导图 2
Part 3、出彩收尾设计 3
方法一:首位呼应法写 3
方法二:名言式结尾法 4
方法三:情感升华法 5
Part 4、助人型主旨升华句 8
Part 5、成长型主旨升华句 11
Part 6、脱险型主旨升华句 13
Part 7、高考真题 15
1. 2022.6浙江卷(帮助无家可归的人) 15
2. 2022年新高考1卷 17
3. 2022年1月浙江卷 19
4. 2021年6月浙江卷(第一份工资) 22
5. 2021年6月新高考全国1卷(母亲节的惊喜) 24
6. 2021年1月八省联考(好心家庭帮我修车) 26
7. 2021年1月浙江卷(圣诞节的尴尬) 29
8. 2020年7月山东卷(爆米花救助穷人) 31
9. 2020年7月浙江卷(拍照北极熊遇险) 33
10. 2020年1月浙江卷(小狗Ponny的新玩伴) 35
11. 2018年6月浙江卷(山中遇险) 39
12. 2017年11月浙江卷(健忘的妈妈) 41
13. 2017年6月浙江卷(狼口脱险) 44
14. 2016年10月浙江卷(森林遇险) 47
15. 浙江卷样题(银行抢劫) 49
Part 8、模拟演练 51
1. (2022·辽宁实验中学模拟预测) 51
2. (2022·广东广州·三模) 54
3. (2022·湖北·荆州中学三模) 56
4. (2022·湖南师大附中三模) 58
5. 读后续写模拟专练01 61
6. 读后续写模拟专练02 65
Part 1命题解读
结尾句是全文的收尾处,需要起到点睛的作用,给读者留下深刻的印象。怎么做到呢?今天老师就带着你灵活运用首尾呼应、直白叙述、应用名言等多种方法进行结尾,对故事主题进行深化,使人物情感得到升华,让你的文章的结尾更加出彩!今天分享三个常见的方法:收尾呼应法;名言结尾法和情感升华法。
Part 2思维导图
Part 3、出彩收尾设计
方法一:首位呼应法写
请看第一例子,2017年高考真题,讲述的是与健忘妈妈一块去旅游的故事。
文章的开头,是这么写的:I had an interesting childhood. It was filled with surprise and amusements, all because of my mother--loving, sweet, yet absent-minded and forgetful. 我有一个有趣的童年,充满了惊喜和娱乐,都是因为我的母亲——可爱,却心不在焉,健忘。
那么续写结尾的时候可以回到文章的开头再次重申妈妈的性格,来深化主题。
文章结尾可以用首尾呼应的写作手法,请看这一句:Despite mom's being absent-minded and forgetful, she was still a kind and nice mom. 尽管妈妈总是心不在焉,健忘,但她仍然是一个和蔼可亲的妈妈。
再来看第二个例子,2018年高考真题 ,讲述的是爸爸带儿子去朋友家农场游玩迷路的故事。
文章的开头,是这么写的:It was summer and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West. 那是夏天,我爸爸想像以前一样请我去度假。 他决定带我去西部荒野之旅。
文章结尾可以用首尾呼应的写作手法,请看这一句:Never had I had such a thrilling yet dangerous vacation before. The special trip to the Wild West was deeply engraved in my mind. 我从来没有过这么刺激又危险的假期。那次去西部的特别旅行,深深地印在我的脑海里。
再来看第三个例子,2016年浙江高考样题
开头:A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day.一天,亚瑟在上班的路上发生了一件有趣的事情。
结尾:What a funny day. Arthur couldn't stop laughing whenever he looked back on this hilarious experience. 多么有趣的一天啊,每当亚瑟回想起这次欢乐的经历,他就忍不住笑个不停。
方法二:名言式结尾法
使用名言结尾往往能给文章增添文采,同时也能起到凝炼中心,深化主旨的作用,这样的结尾可以引出结论,即时抒情,凸显主旨渲染氛围等,合理使用名言可以为续写文章画龙点睛,因此在平时我们不仅要多加积累,也要明白名言蕴含的道理,以便使其用在合适的语境中。需要注意的是:不可生搬硬套名言警句,一定要具体文本具体分析。
例1:Don't judge each day by the harvest you reap but by the seeds that you plant.
(不要根据你每天的收获来判断每一天,而是根据你每天播种了多少。)
这则名言采用了比喻的手法,将人的付出和回报比作耕种和收获。本质上,是过程和结果之间的比较,强调过程的重要性大于结果,可以用于习惯养成类和或者长期活动类叙事的结尾,提升思想境界。
例2:It is during our darkest moments that we must focus to see the light.
(越是在最黑暗的时刻,我们越要寻找光明。)
这则名言通过前后反复概念的对比,突出光明的重要性,引申为在困境中保持积极乐观的生活态度,可以用于主要人物经历重大坎坷,最后凭借乐观心态度过艰难岁月的文章。
例子3:Tell me and I forget. Teach me and I remember. Involve me and I learn.
(告诉我,我会忘记。教给我,我会铭记。让我参与,我会掌握。)
这则名言通过排比和对比,揭示了学习的规律,阐明了实践出真知的道理,可以用于总结学习经历,反思技能掌握的过程等。
例4:In the end, it's not the years in your life that count. It's the life in your years.
(最后,重要的不是你生命中的岁月,而是你如何度过这些岁月的。)
这则名言通过巧妙的词汇调换,改变句意,揭示了生活的真谛:只有认真对待生活,人生才不会留下遗憾,由于本句涉及的时间跨度较大,写作中最好有最好从长者的视角提出。
我们来看下面的实战演练,故事里,主人公在柔道比赛中,通过向对手暴露自己的弱点,充分发挥自己的力量,最终赢得了比赛。故事结尾,借用教练对他的鼓励,完成了升华,其中就用到了名言警句。我们以前来看一下。
It is your biggest weakness that makes you win the match. As a proverb says, ‘Every coin has two sides.’ 是你最大的弱点让你赢得了比赛。正如谚语所说,“每枚硬币都有两面性。”Making full use of your strength is your achievement. Please remember that in no case will you give up especially in trouble. God is fair to everyone.”充分利用你的力量就是你的成就。请记住,无论如何你都不会放弃,尤其是在麻烦中。上帝对每个人都是公平的。”
方法三:情感升华法
每一个故事的创作不止为了讲清楚一件事情的来龙去脉,还要包含作者想要表达的寓意,想与读者分享的感悟,这种思想往往贯穿全文,并在故事结尾时得到升华,在读后续写的结尾部分可以采用情感升华的方式,让读者产产生情感上的共鸣,激发读者思考。
情感升华的结尾要求,要有较高的立意,它是故事的灵魂所在,这样的结尾能够产生强烈的艺术感染力,通常我们可以通过表现人生感悟、生活真谛、生活哲理、人生观或价值观来达到结尾部分的情感升华。
请看第一例子,仍然是2017年高考真题,讲述的是与健忘妈妈一块去旅游的故事。刚才我们用“首尾呼应”法,现在我们试一试用“情感升华”法:在结尾处,表达母爱对我的深远影响。
Everyone has one person they look up to as a role model. To me there is none other than my mom. 每个人都有一个榜样。对我来说,不是别人,正是我妈妈。She has beauty, brains, and one of the best hearts I know. 她很漂亮,很聪明,而且是我认识的最用心的人之一。Without her in my life, I would have no idea whether I can be a famous dancer. Someday, when I am older and have children of my own, I hope I can be just as great a parent as my mom.如果没有她,我不知道我能不能成为一个著名的舞者。有一天,当我长大了,有了自己的孩子,我希望我能成为像我妈妈一样伟大的母亲。
我们来看看第二个例子,主人公在故事的结尾处,表达自己对价值观:“幸福”的理解。来看看下面的表达:
【举例2】I am extremely unhappy about it. I think money doesn’t equal happiness. 我对此非常不高兴。我觉得金钱不等于幸福。And free life style also doesn’t equal happiness. 自由的生活方式也不等于幸福。 The real happiness is that everyone loves each other, and does everything useful for our society. Most of my classmates support me.真正的幸福是每个人都有“爱”,为我们的社会做一切有益的事情。大多数同学都支持我。 But some of them think money is everything. In my opinion, money can’t take the place of everything, such as your life, your time and your happiness.但有些人认为钱就是一切。在我看来,金钱不能代替一切,比如你的生活,你的时间和你的幸福。
情感升华万能句:
Seeing sth , I felt as if it had been doing and saying,”........”
看到某物,感觉某物好像在做某动作,并且说“(突出主题的话)”。
这个句子的亮点在于:首先该句是虚拟语气句型结构,需要注意,动词时态需要用had been doing,其次seeing sth是非谓语动词做伴随状语,另外句型中加入对话;最后,从修辞的角度,使用了“拟人”的手法。
需要明确的是seeing sth.中的sth.到底是什么呢?我们知道,在故事发展中,一般都会有一两个线索词。这些线索词要么贯穿始终,要么是在推动故事发展过程中,起到非常重要的作用。比如2020年新高考卷中,描述的是万圣节尴尬事:主人公的头卡在了南瓜中。于是南瓜就是整个故事的线索词。八省联考中,主人公的车在路上坏了,遇一家人的热心帮助。在主人公即将开车离开时,热心的小女孩还递给他一个纸袋,纸袋里有食物。那么“纸袋paper bag”在推动剧情发展中,就起到了的重要作用。所以,“南瓜”和“纸袋”可以用在seeing sth中。
我们先看第一个例子。
主人公“我”是老年人,想回到学校学习识字,但是连字母表都不会读。最终战胜了自我怀疑,成功能识字看报纸。升华主题的时候,我们怎么用这个万能句型来表达呢?请看这句:
Seeing the alphabet again, I felt as if it had been encouraging me and saying, ” it’s never too late to learn”.再次看到字母表,我觉得它好像在鼓励我并说,“学习永远不会太晚”。
看第二个例子。
主人公“我”是个颓废少年,无意中通过自己的专长“扔标枪”,找到了自信,并成功逆袭。我们怎么通过万能句型来升华呢?
Seeing the javelin, I felt as if it had been encouraging me and saying, “You’ve found your talent and I’ve found you”看到标枪,我觉得它好像在鼓励我,并说,“你找到了你的天赋,我找到了你”。这句话中,javelin是“标枪”,talent是“天赋”
第三个例子。
2016年高考真题,讲述了夫妻俩野外露营,因小事发生争执,女主人独自走进森林迷路的故事。最后如何用万能句升华呢?
Seeing the helicopter, Jane felt as if it had been comforting her with its thunderous voice, “Your waiting pays off.”看到那架直升机,简觉得它好像在用雷鸣般的声音安慰她,“你的等待是有回报的。”
第四个例子。
2016年高考样题,讲述了主人公亚瑟遇到了银行抢劫,他巧妙把可能藏有赃款的行李箱 suitcase运到了警察局的故事。最后的升华句,能不能借用我们今天用到的句型呢?我们一起来看看
Seeing the suitcase, Arthur felt as if it had been praising him , “Your did great job!”看到手提箱,亚瑟觉得好像在称赞他,“干得好!”
这个句型,我们主要讲解的是它能起到情感升级的作用,主要用在故事结尾处,如果在故事发展中,你感觉用上这个句型也比较合适,完全也是可以的。
比如2017年高考真题,讲的是主人公“我”与健忘妈妈一块去旅游的故事。途中妈妈忘记了帐篷tent,妈妈执意要返程寻找。看到帐篷的那一刻,你就可以用上这一句
Seeing the tent, I felt as it had been sighing and saying, “I want to experience the outside world.看到帐篷,我感觉它一直在叹息着说,“我想体验外面的世界。”
相信同学们对这个万能句型的用法或多或少有感悟,你可以把这个句型多默写几遍,直到百分百能用出来。
需要强调的是,我们学的“万能句”其实是把双刃剑。可以让起到化繁为简的作用,但是如果长期依赖,也可能让你的表达过于单一。所以说,对于基础暂时不太好的同学而言,学会后,可以救急用。从长远看,我们还是需要积累不同的素材,丰富我们的表达。
此外,需要强调另外一点是,当你你在写作中,觉得某个故事的立意和这个句型有不太一致时,也不要强行使用该句型。其实,在这个系列课程中,我讲了很多出彩的句式结构,你都可以进行仿写。
Part 4、助人型主旨升华句
自己帮助别人或者自己受到他人帮助,一直以来是我们读后续写的一个重要主题,我们今天分享的就是“助人型”的主旨升华句。一共有两个。
我们先来看第一种句型,句式结构比较简单,也很容易仿写。算是一个入门级的升华句子。这个句型就是:from then on +行动。
我们先看例句:
From then on, I would try my best to help sb like sb.Only in this way, could more and more people help each other in the future.
从那时起,我会尽我最大的努力帮助某些人,就像某人一样。 只有这样,将来才能有越来越多的人互相帮助。
从这个句型的内涵上看:自己被别人帮助后,主动把这种助人的行为进行“传递”,即:去积极帮助他人。这种精神的升华具有正能量,是值得鼓励的。从句式结构来看,该句用到了倒装,属于高分亮点句。
下面我们举一反三:
【示例1】
2020年山东卷中,讲述了主人公和孩子们想出在社区卖爆米花的主意,来帮助穷人的故事。我们可以借鉴这个写作公式,可以这么写。
From then on, Bernard made up his mind to help someone who needs help . Only in this way, could more and more people help each other in the future.从那时起,伯纳德决定帮助需要帮助的人。只有这样,将来才能有越来越多的人互相帮助。
【示例2】
我们再来看八省联考的作文,作者讲述一次吉普车爆胎和维修经历。先是路边标语求助无果,失望之际墨西哥人伸出援手。续写的第一段,主要要写帮助的细节。第二段就可以升华主题:
From then on, I placed a jack and some common tools in my car.When meeting people in need on the road ,I would try my best to help them like the family.Only in this way, could more and more people help each other in the future.
从那时起,我在我的车里放了一个千斤顶和一些常见的工具。当我在路上遇到需要帮助的人时,我会尽力像家人一样帮助他们。只有这样,将来才能有越来越多的人互相帮助。
我们再来看第二种句型:动作+感动+感悟
这个“动作”可以是:看到了某情景,或者拿着一样东西。“感动”很好理解,别人帮助了自己,产生的情绪就是“感动”,最常见的就是“眼泪往下流”。“感悟”这一句,往往是“爱”“善行”“付出”等关键字的励志句。
比如我们来看这一句:
sb looked at sth / held sth, tears rolling down without control. It is love that makes the world go around,which sb felt deep in one’s heart.
某人看到了某物或者拿着某物,眼泪毫无控制地流了下来。 正是爱让世界转动,在某人的心里深深地感受到了这一点。
这个句子从句式结构上:用到了一个独立主格tears rolling down without control,眼泪毫无控制地流下来;以及一个强调句It is love that makes the world go around(正是“爱”让世界转动),还有一个定语从句:which sb felt deep in one’s heart.这三个语法现象都是我们作文中的高分亮点。
我们来实战演练一下,
【示例1】
首先看一下八省联考的试题。在续写第二段开头,文章提到那一家墨西哥人递给作者一个纸袋,里面有食物。我们可以这么来写主旨升华句。
I held the paper bag tightly, tears rolling down without control. It is love that makes the world go around,which I felt deep in my heart.
我紧紧地握着纸袋,眼泪毫无控制地流了下来。 正是爱让世界转动,在我心里里深深地感受到了这一点。
【示例2】
我们再来看山东卷“卖爆米花帮助穷人”的故事,我们借鉴这个写作公式,可以这么写。
He held the coins tightly, tears rolling down without control. It is love that makes the world go around,which Bernard felt deep in his little heart.
他紧紧地握着硬币,眼泪毫无控制地流了下来。 正是爱让世界转动,伯纳德在他的心里深深地感受到了这一点。
同学们刚开始,可以比较生硬的模仿,毕竟能先写出来才是最重要的。随着同学们积累的素材越来越多,我们就可以在“感悟”部分,加上更灵活的一些表达,下面我就提供三句比较不错的句子给大家。
第一句:It dawned on me that a moment of kindness could mean so much to another,and that a simple act could make the world so much better.
我恍然大悟,那一刻的善良对另一个人来说意义重大,而一个简单的行为可以使世界变得如此美好。
第二句:Whether rich or poor, we should be happy to do something for society. Thus we can learn that giving is the source of happiness.无论贫富,我们都应该为社会做点什么。 因此,我们可以学会给予是幸福的源泉。
第三句:Sometimes, a small act of kindness may be powerful enough to make a huge difference.有时候小小的善行,可能足以带来巨大的改变。
Part 5、成长型主旨升华句
“改变”和“成长”是我们读后续写一个重要主题。在第二段的结尾处,我们怎样写“改变成长”型的主旨升华句呢?我们可以根据“改变”的因素来学习不同的表达。比如克服困难,克服自卑等。今天我们要学习七类不同的改变模式。
第一类:学习知识促“改变”
知识就是力量!在改变的过程中,学习不同的知识,然后才能面对各种困难和挑战。比如屏幕前的你,不就是在学习读后续写的技巧吗?请看下面的例句,也是我送给正在学习的你。
It's never too late to learn. Each individual has the right to accept more challenges and make more attempts.学习永远为时不晚。每个人都应该并且有权利去接受更多的挑战,做更多的尝试。
【分析】individual这里表示“个人,个体”。make more attempts 做更多尝试。
第二类:发挥天赋促“改变”
认识自身天赋,并且发挥天赋,这是改变我们的现状的一个重要条件。请看下面的例句。
Actually, every individual possesses talent. Be brave when you find it and also make efforts. You can create miracles in the end.
事实上,每个人都有天赋,发现它的时候要勇敢,也要付出努力,最终你会创造奇迹。
【分析】possess 拥有。create miracles表示创造奇迹。
第三类:追逐梦想促“改变”
永远不要忽视了梦想的力量!“做人如果没有理想,跟咸鱼有什么区别呢”。请看下面两个例句。
It's never too late to go for your dream. As long as you grasp every opportunity and take full advantage of it, you will stand a chance to realize your dreams.追梦永远不晚。只要你抓住机会,充分利用机会,你就有机会实现梦想。
As long as we dare to dream and don't let difficulties get in our way, anything is possible.只要我们敢于梦想,不被困难所阻挡,一切皆有可能。
【分析】take full advantage of 充分利用, realize your dreams表示“实现梦想”
第四类:克服困难促“改变”
只有克服各种苦难,才能改变现状。请看下面的例句。
The journey to success is not smooth. It is full of challenges and difficulties. We should be brave to face them. As long as we don’t give up hope and make every effort to overcome all the difficulties, we will surely achieve our goal (success) finally.
通往成功的路不会平坦,充满挑战和艰辛。我们要勇敢面对。只要不放弃希望并竭尽全力克服所有困难,我们最终会实现我们的目标(成功)。
【分析】smooth 表示“平坦的”overcome all the difficulties 表示“克服困难”;make every effort 表示“做出努力”;as long as,表示“只要”,引导条件状语从句。
第五类:战胜恐惧促“改变”
我们在改变的过程中,经常需要克服自己内心的恐惧。请看下面的例句:
Determination and optimism are what it takes to conquer your fear and accomplish your goal.战胜恐惧和实现目标,需要决心和乐观。
【分析】Determination 表示“决心”; optimism表示“乐观”。conquer your fear表示“克服你的恐惧”;accomplish your goal表示“完成目标”
第六类:战胜自卑促“改变”
我们在改变之前,可能会有一些自卑的心理阻碍着我们成长,比如自己的外貌的缺陷,性格内向等,如何克服自卑,实现人生逆袭?请看下面的例句。
I smiled as I eventually realized the real source of confidence.Now, I am proud of what I look like and much happier, because I have realized it is your personality that decides who you truly are.
我笑了,因为我最终意识到了自信的真正来源。现在,我为我的样子感到骄傲,而且更快乐,因为我已经意识到,决定你真正是谁的是你的个性。
【分析】eventually表示“最后,终于”;personality 表示“个性”。
第七类:战胜消极促“改变”
积极的心态像太阳,照到哪里,哪里亮。“积极”思维,最终让我们成长改变,这种主题,是读后续写中比较常见的。请看下面的例句。
Attitude is more important than facts for us. We cannot change our past; we cannot change the fact. However, the only thing we can do is hold a positive attitude.
态度对我们来说比事实更重要。 我们不能改变我们的过去;我们不能改变事实。 然而,我们唯一能做的就是保持积极的态度。
【分析】Attitude表示“态度”;positive attitude.就是“积极的态度”。
Part 6、脱险型主旨升华句
读后续写中会遇到火灾,水灾,森林迷路等内容的故事,如果涉及到对生命造成了一定的威胁的情节,我们就把这种类型的文章归为“脱险”型。在往年高考真题中,曾经就考过三次:拍摄北极熊遇险;父子骑马迷路;骑车游玩遇狼脱险。
主旨句一:入门句
That day was so unforgettable that it would stay in my memory forever.
那天是如此难忘,它将永远留在我的记忆。
遇到危险并且最终成功脱险的经历,想必对我们每个人来说一定是一生中难忘的经历。所以这个句子使用的场合还是挺多的。句子中使用了so...that的句式结构:如此......以至于。unforgettable是一个形容词,表示“无法忘记的”。
主旨句二:中级句
Only then did I realize that it was bravery that can conquer whatever difficulty came in the way. 直到那时,我才意识到,正是勇敢才能克服一切困难。
遇到危险后,勇敢面对,才能解决问题。这个句子突出了“勇敢”这个核心,这在“脱险型”的故事里,是非常恰当的。这句话使用了倒装的结构和强调结构结合的方式,也属于高分亮点句。
主旨句三:高级句
It was this unique experience that made me understand whatever difficulty we are faced with (= we may face), we mustn’t give up our hope.
“正是这种独特的经历使我理解了我们所面临的任何困难,我们不能放弃我们的希望。”
这个句子也是把强调句,定语从句,宾语从句结合在一起,句式结构比较高级。同学们不妨挑战一下?
主旨句四:综合型
即把前几种方式进行组合,我们可以记住这个组合公式:结果+难忘的经历+体悟
我们再说具体点儿,“结果”指的是获救的结果,如走出森林,获救后见到家人等。“难忘的经历”就是我们刚刚学到的第一个主旨句。“体悟”在这种“脱险型”里,无非就是突出冷静,勇敢,不放弃希望等信念的重要性。
我们来一个例句:
Finally, we did sth. What an unforgettable experience! It turns out that there’s always a way out of any plight as long as we stay calm.
最后,我们做某事。(这里写结果) 多么难忘的经历啊! (这是一个万能句)事实证明,只要我们保持冷静,就总有办法摆脱困境。(作者的体悟,可以把“保持冷静”,换成“不放弃希望”等。)
我们看2018年高考英语浙江卷的读后续写,爸爸带儿子去朋友家农场游玩迷路的故事。文章的最后,我们可以用这句:
Finally, we went out of the forest that trapped us. What an unforgettable experience! It turns out that there’s always a way out of any plight as long as we stay calm.
最后,我们走出了困住我们的森林。 多么难忘的经历啊! 事实证明,只要我们保持冷静,就总有办法摆脱困境。
我们也可以把第一句改成:Finally, we arrived home safely just in time for supper(我们安全回家,正好赶上吃晚饭),也就是说,不管怎么写,第一句是脱险后的结果。
我们再看2016年10月高考英语浙江卷的读后续写,夫妻俩野外露营,因小事发生争执,女主人独自走进森林迷路的故事。文章最后,我们也可以用上这句:
Finally, she saw her husband. As tightly as possible, she hugged him and was too thrilled to say anything.What an unforgettable experience! It turns out that there’s always a way out of any plight as long as we never give up our hope. 最后,她看到了她的丈夫。 她尽可能地紧紧地抱着他,激动得说不出话来。 多么难忘的经历啊! 事实证明,只要我们不放弃我们的希望,任何困境都有出路。
2017年高考英语的读后续写,和朋友一起骑车游玩,途中遇狼的故事。我们可以这样写:
Finally, the wolf ran away off the road and disappeared in the distance .“We are safe!”Mac said in a pleasant tone. What an unforgettable experience! It turns out that there’s always a way out of any plight as long as we stay calm.最后,狼从路上跑开,消失在远处。“我们很安全!”麦克以一种愉快的语气说。 多么难忘的经历啊! 事实证明,只要我们保持冷静,就总有办法摆脱困境。
Part 7、高考真题
2022.6浙江卷(帮助无家可归的人)
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
I need to do something in my community(社区)in order to complete the community service hours required to graduate from high school. Some of my friends had signed up to spend time at a soup kitchen, so I did, too. It seemed like a good thing to do.
I thought that we would just be passing our dinners to those in need, but I found out we would be doing everything from preparing to serving the dinner. We began preparing the food, from mixing salad dressing to separating frozen meat. Much still needed to be done before dinner was served, but already outside the building many homeless people were gathering. It wasn’t until a couple of hours later that we opened the doors and began serving dinner.
As the line of people came toward me, I got a little scared. I’d come face to face with the homeless: How should I act How would they treat me Would they hate me for having more than they did While some of the people looked very friendly, some of them looked so dangerous, I didn’t have too much time to worry about it. I was assigned (分配)to serve the salad with the lady next to me. She smiled at me and said if I needed help, she’d be right there, which I found quite comforting.
I had never seen so many people wanting food. They were of all ages and nationalities. Most of them wore clothes that were torn and dirty. Some looked like they had totally given up on life, while others seemed to be making the best of the situation, smiling and joking. Some were better off than others, but they all needed a good meal and a warm place to eat. It saddened me to think of how many people there were who didn’t have a place to call home and the only food they got came from a soup kitchen.
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As they came in my direction, I put on my brightest and happiest smile.
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I was so happy that I had earned my service hours in this way.
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参考答案:
As they came in my direction, I put on my brightest and happiest smile. Nervous as I felt, I did my utmost to keep myself calm and hand out the delicately-wrapped meal to those in need, with my hands trembling. Upon seeing it, every one of them beamed with smile, gently murmured “Thank you” and bowed to me sincerely, which brought warmth straight into my heart. The passing time witnessed the smooth process of this event. It was not until the night wiped out the last ray of sun that we finished our community service hours.
I was so happy that I had earned my service hours in this way. Not only did I clear my previous prejudice against those who seemed to be dangerous and unamiable, but also I extended a helping hand to those who wanted food. I suddenly came to realize that not everyone was blessed with fortune and born to be wealthy, therefore, we should always keep grateful for what life blessed us with. However, we did have the power to share our happiness with others, that is, spreading love. Love is everything, like the clear moon hanging high in the sky, spreading its mild moonlight selflessly to everyone.
2022年新高考1卷
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route(路线)through thick evergreen forest.
I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and asked him why he wasn’t with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run.
What was wrong He had worked so hard for this event!
I quickly searched the crowd for the school’s coach and asked him what had happened. “I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him,” he explained uncomfortably. “I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide.”
I bit back my frustration(懊恼). I knew the coach meant well—he thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.
David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team. It just took him longer—that’s all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination.
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答.
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me.
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I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
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参考答案:
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me. I said gently and quietly, “No one can change your mind, except yourself. If you desire to challenge yourself, there is nothing to do with others’ thoughts.” He sat still with a deep breath. “You have a full preparation before this event, which is the most important reason why you show up here”, I added with a sincere tone. Hearing my words, David turned to me tremblingly with tears spilling out of his eyes and expressed he had made a firm determination to finish the cross-country run. His coach heard what David said and gave me a look—the kind that was more determined than anyone else’s.
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. The race started. It seemed that the runway was extremely long for young children, not to mention a child with a heart disease. David insisted on running as if he had forgotten all his weaknesses, though he was tripped over within the a few kilometers. It didn’t take long before he picked himself up again and continued his mission. Classmates all appeared on the racing track, cheering for him. “Come on! You can make it! We are proud of you!” they shouted enthusiastically. To everyone’s joy, he reached the final line and ranked the 20th. It was no more important whether he won the first place or not. It was his brave heart and strong faith that could make something unusual happen finally.
【解析】
【导语】本文以赛跑为线索展开。作者是一名特殊教育教师,在大型越野赛跑那天,发现患有大脑疾病的大卫独自站在一旁。作者问其原因,他说准备放弃比赛。从教练口中得知,因为担心同学们会嘲笑大卫,所以教练想让大卫自己去决定是否参加赛跑。作者让大卫追寻自己的内心,不理会别人的看法,大卫最终参赛,尽管遇到困难,他战胜了自己,这已经无关名次,而是他的勇敢和坚定让这一切成为可能。
【详解】1.段落续写:
①由第一段首句内容“我们挨着坐着,但大卫不愿看我一眼。”和第二段首句内容”我看着大卫和其他选手一起走到起跑线上。”可知,第一段可描写作者鼓励大卫继续完成比赛,大卫经过强烈的心理斗争,最终决定参加比赛。
②由第二段首句内容“我看着大卫和其他选手一起走到起跑线上。”可知,第二段可描写大卫开始参赛,虽然中途遇到困难,仍然坚持到最后,完成比赛。
2.续写线索:鼓励大卫——心理变化——决定参赛——克服困难——加油助威——完成比赛
3.词汇激活:
行动类:
①深呼吸:with a deep breath/breathe deeply
②坚持做:insisted on doing/be stick to doing
情绪类:
①热情:enthusiastically /with great passion
②骄傲:be proud of/take pride in
【点睛】[高分句型1]. You have a full preparation before this event, which is the most important reason why you show up here. (由which引导的非限制性定语从句和 why引导的限制性定语从句)
[高分句型2]. Hearing my words, David turned to me tremblingly with tears spilling out of his eyes and expressed he had made a firm determination to finish the cross-country run. (现在分词作状语和省略that的宾语从句)
[高分句型3]. It was his brave heart and strong faith that could make something unusual happen finally. (含有It was…that结构的强调句型)
2022年1月浙江卷
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事
When Dr.Henderson was assigning(指定) project mates for his psychology class, I secretly hoped that he would pair me with my best friend or at least a classmate I could have some fun with. Above all, I hoped he wouldn’t assign me to work with the fiercely competitive and extremely serious fellow who always wore dark clothes and apparently had a personality to match. As fate(命运) would have it, Dr. Henderson very deliberately matched everyone in class and announced that I would be working with the one person in class I wanted to avoid.
I went up to my new teammate and introduced myself. He looked at me as though I weren’t there. I felt he treated me as though I would hold him back and probably make him fail to get an A in the course. He wasn’t mean or abusive.He just gave me the impression that he could do whatever project we dreamed up better if he did it alone.
Needless to say, I didn’t look forward to an entire term of being brushed off, but I tried to make the best of it and didn’t say anything for fear that I would make things worse.
The project required each team to develop a hypothesis(假说), set up an experiment to test the hypothesis, do the statistical analysis and present the findings. Whatever grade the team received would be shared by both students.
When my teammate and I met to discuss our project, I was uneasy. Here was this challenging student who had a reputation for single-mindedness and good grades—the exact opposite of me. I actually wanted to drop the class at one point, but stopped short because I didn’t want to give him the satisfaction of my chickening out. I decided to stick to it no matter what.
After long discussions, we somehow agreed to do a study on the psychological well-being of teenagers. I wasn’t sure what it meant exactly, but at least we had a topic.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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参考答案1:
We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans. At first, it seemed that he dominated our discussion for he was familiar with the topic, but I was the opposite. However, as days passed, I gradually got involved because he started to encourage me to explain my views! I could feel his icy shell gradually melting away and eventually I could discuss with him looking straight in his eyes. We finished the hypothesis and experiment procedure, in great harmony actually. Things came out that he was serious, indeed, but he seemed icy because he was lonely. We parted the day before analysis discussion with confidence for our project. But when I returned the next morning, he was nowhere to be found. The fact struck me feeling desperate. He didn’t come either in the following days.
One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious disease. It was the day before deadline and I drowned myself doing analysis and preparing for the presentation. Hearing the word, I dashed to the hospital and found him, my dear teammate, lying on the bed, face pale. His eyes sparkled as he saw me. Beside him I managed to finish the last tasks with his guidance---his fingers pointing at certain figures. Then next day I went for the presentation in class.
参考答案2:
We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans. Serious as my teammate was, we gradually grew in good tune with each other. He had a way with technical things and approached every detail with a clear purpose. And I spared no effort to do my bit, collecting data and recording results carefully, so as to make up for my academic disadvantage. I fully discussed my ideas and shared my insights with him, who was once indifferent but later listened to me with close attention. We were making steady progress with our project.
One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious disease. The moment I saw him lying helplessly in bed, I decided I had to act alone and do my best. I assured him I would not let him down and he should concentrate on recovering. I poured more time and energy into that project than ever before, and finally presented our findings to the class, which surprisingly earned us an excellent grade! When I told him about our shared success, he smiled. It had to do with trust and the joy of sharing a common prize.
2021年6月浙江卷(第一份工资)
My dad, George, only had an eighth grade education. A quiet man, he didn't understand my world of school activities. From age 14, he worked. And his dad, Albert, took the money my dad earned and used it to pay family expenses.
I didn't really understand his world either: He was a livestock trucker, and l thought that I would surpass(超过) anything he had accomplished by the time l walked across the stage at high school graduation.
Summers in the mid, 70s were spent at home shooting baskets, hitting a baseball, or throwing a football, preparing for my future as a quarterback on a football team. In poor weather, I read about sports or practiced my trombone(长号).
The summer before my eighth grade I was one of a group of boys that a neighboring farmer hired to work in his field. He explained our basic task, the tractor fired up and we were off, riding down the field looking for weeds to spray with chemicals. After a short way, the farmer stopped and painted at a weed which we missed. Then we began again. This happened over and over, but we soon learned to identify different grasses like cockleburs, lamb's-quarters, foxtails, and the king of weeds, the pretty purple thistle. It was tiring work, but I looked forward to the pay, even though I wasn't sure how much it would amount to.
At home, my dad said, "A job's a big step to growing up. I'm glad you will be contributing to the household." My dad's words made me realize that my earning might not be mine to do with as wished.
My labors lasted about two weeks, and the farmer said there might be more work, but I wasn't interested. I decided it was not fair that l had to contribute my money.
注意:
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1: The pay day arrived at last.
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Paragraph 2: I understood immediately what my parents were worried about.
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题型解读
这是一篇记叙文的读后续写,要求考生在所给短文的基础上续写,并且结合划线词,构成一篇合理的完整故事。读后续写对学生学习语言知识的综合运用能力有着较高的要求。同时也考查学生们的发散思维能力和创造性思维能力。续写故事时,要求考生读懂文章,然后明白故事的发展进程、前因后果、人物特征和情感等。在此基础上,考生必须沿着文章的思路,根据提供的线索,恰当进行发挥,并且要使用给出的至少5个词语等。故事的结尾也必须符合原文的主题意义。
写作分析
本文以人物为线索展开,讲述了作者高中毕业后,参加农场工作,辛辛苦苦挣到的钱,不情愿贡献给家庭,后来在看到父亲的辛劳之后,理解了父母担心的是自己太过自私而不知奉献,终于想通,并自豪地将自己劳动所得交给父亲的故事。
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The pay day arrived at last. I was glad that I finally got the payment after working hard for two weeks. While walking back home with an excited mind. I conceived many plans about how to dispose of it. I needed a new football because the old one we played had already worn out. I intended to purchase my favorite chocolates. Upon approaching the house, I noticed my dad and mom standing beside the old truck, looking sadly. It seemed as if something unpleasant happened. “How much do we still need to pay for a new truck ". asked my mother. Three hundred dollars, but we just had two hundred left.”
发薪日终于到了。我很高兴,在我努力工作了两周后,我终于得到了报酬。一边兴奋地走回家。我构思了许多关于如何处理它的计划。我需要一个新的足球,因为我们踢的旧足球已经用坏了。我打算买我最喜欢的巧克力。走近房子,我注意到我爸爸和妈妈站在旧卡车旁边,悲伤地看着。似乎发生了一些不愉快的事情。“我们想买一辆新卡车还得付多少钱?”。我妈妈问。300美元,但我们只剩下200美元了。”
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I understood immediately what my parents were worried about. Really, the truck my dad drove often broke down on the way, which made my dad in trouble. My parents had intended to buy a new truck but couldn't afford it. Suddenly, I realized what I should do. Stepping forward, I said, “Dad, here is what I received for my work. I think it would help you a little.” A little surprised at what I said, my mom hugged me tightly. That night, before I went to bed, l thought I would tell the farmer the next day that I would continue my work, after all l grew up.
我立刻明白了我的父母在担心什么。真的,我爸爸开的卡车在路上经常坏了,这给我爸爸惹上了麻烦。我父母本来打算买一辆新卡车,但买不起。突然,我意识到我应该做什么。我走上前去,说:“爸爸,这是我工作的回报。我想这会对你有帮助。我说的话有点惊讶,妈妈紧紧地拥抱着我。那天晚上,在我睡觉之前,我想第二天我会告诉农夫,在我长大了之后,我将继续我的工作。
2021年6月新高考全国1卷(母亲节的惊喜)
第二节(满分25分)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
A MOTHER'S DAY SURPRISE
The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother's Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.
The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jema found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jef turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jef to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff's hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear!The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.
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As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.
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The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.
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参考答案:
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. One look and he knew what they were up to. Seeing their discouraged faces, he told them to clean up the kitchen while he helped them make breakfast for Mother. The twins cheered up and did as told. Within an hour, the kitchen was cleaned, and Father had successfully made some French toast and chicken porridge as the children wished. Then he sneaked back to bed. The twins prepared the breakfast tray, added a card they had made, and then headed for their parents' bedroom.
当这对双胞胎失望地环顾四周时,他们的父亲出现了。他看了一眼,他就知道他们在做什么。看到他们沮丧的脸,他让他们打扫厨房,同时帮他们为母亲做早餐。这对双胞胎高兴起来,照做了。不到一个小时,厨房就打扫干净了,父亲按照孩子们的意愿,成功地做了一些法式吐司和鸡肉粥。然后他偷偷溜回床上。双胞胎准备了早餐托盘,加了一张他们做的卡片,然后前往他们父母的卧室。
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. "Happy Mother's Day, darling Mummy!" thrilled voice yelling from their throat, the twins hugged their mom tightly. Moved and excited, mother held the twins with her warm arms as well. Her eyes widened at the sight of the breakfast tray. She shook father who was pretending to snore. He whistled in astonishment when seeing the breakfast. Mother bit into a sandwich and said she had never tasted a better one. Jeff immediately wanted to have a bite. Jenna caught her father's eye and they winked at each other secretly.
这对双胞胎把早餐带到楼上,叫醒了他们的母亲。“母亲节快乐,亲爱的妈妈!”激动的声音从他们的喉咙里叫喊着,双胞胎紧紧地拥抱着他们的妈妈。母亲感动而激动,也用她温暖的胳膊抱着这对双胞胎。一看到早餐托盘,她就睁大了眼睛。她摇着假装打鼾的父亲。当他看到早餐时,他惊讶地吹着口哨。妈妈咬了咬三明治,说她从来没有尝过比这更好的三明治过。杰夫立刻想咬他一口。詹娜抓住了她父亲的目光,他们偷偷地互相眨了眨眼。
2021年1月八省联考(好心家庭帮我修车)
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During this past year, I’ve had three instances of car trouble. Each time these things happened, I was sick of the way most people hadn’t bothered to help. One of those times, I was on the side of the road for close to three hours with my big Jeep. I put signs in the windows, big signs that said NEED A JACK (千斤顶), and offered money. Nothing. Right as I was about to give up, a Mexican family in a small truck pulled over, and the father bounded out.
He sized up the situation and called for his daughter, who spoke English. He conveyed through her that he had a jack but that it was too small for the Jeep, so we would need something to support it. Then he got a saw (锯子) from the truck and cut a section out of a big log on the side of the road. We rolled it over and put his jack on top, and we were in business.
I started taking the wheel off, and then, if you can believe it, I broke his tire iron. No worries: He handed it to his wife, and she was gone in a flash down the road to buy a new tire iron. She was back in 15 minutes. We finished the job, and I was a very happy man.
The two of us were dirty and sweaty. His wife prepared a pot of water for us to wash our hands. I tried to put a $20 bill in the man’s hand, but he wouldn’t take it, so instead I went up to the truck and gave it to his wife as quietly as I could. I asked the little girl where they lived. Mexico, she said. They were in Oregon so Mommy and Daddy could work on a fruit farm for the next few weeks. Then they would go home.
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续写词数应为150左右;
请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
When I was about to say goodbye, the girl asked if I’d had lunch.
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After they left, I got into my Jeep and opened the paper bag.
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参考答案1:
When I was about to say goodbye, the girl asked if I’d had lunch. I shook my head and said no, wondering why she asked such a question — was she going to treat me to lunch or something “Wait a minute,” said the girl, and then she went back to the truck. After a few minutes she came back with a paper bag. “Here are some Mexican snacks and you can have some when you are hungry,” the girl smiled. I was so surprised and touched that words almost failed me. I just said a “WOW!” instead of a “Thank you!” when I took the bag.
After they left, I got into my Jeep and opened the paper bag. When I saw what was in the bag, I was overcome with a mixture of respect and gratefulness. In addition to the snacks, there was the $20 bill. What a kind and respectable family! They are a perfect example of what kindness really means. And I’m sure I will pay it forward. (145)
当我正要说别时,女孩问我是否吃过午饭。我摇摇头,说不,不知道她为什么会问这样一个问题——她会给我吃午饭什么吗?“等一下,”女孩说,然后她回到卡车上。几分钟后,她带着一个纸袋回来了。“这里有一些墨西哥小吃,你饿的时候可以吃一些,”女孩笑着说。我很惊讶,也很感动,那句话几乎让我失望了。我只是说了一声“哇!”而不是一声“谢谢你!”当我拿起包的时候。
他们离开后,我上了吉普车,打开了纸袋。当我看到包里有什么东西时,我被一种尊重和感激所征服了。除了这些零食,还有$20的账单。一个多么善良、值得尊敬的家庭啊!它们是善良真正意义的完美例子。我相信我会提前付钱的。
参考答案2:
When I was about to say goodbye, the girl asked if I’d had lunch. Of course not, for I had been trapped there for quite a few hours. She then had a word with her parents and went back to their truck. A few minutes later she came back with a paper bag. “That’s Mommy’s hand-made taco,” explained the girl. “It’s so yummy that you must love it.” I was starving to death after all that exhausting work so I took the Mexico-originated food, grateful and deeply moved. Then we waved goodbye to each other.
After they left, I got into my Jeep and opened the paper bag. Inside the bag was a chicken taco. The next few minutes saw my wolfing down the delicious food. Tears welled up as I was chewing. It was awesome to know that while many people tend to ignore those in need, there are some kind-hearted ones who go out of their way to lend a hand. The good deed the foreign family did will never escape me. I am going to pass it down to create a much friendlier world. (163)
当我正要说别时,女孩问我是否吃过午饭。当然不是,因为我已经被困在那里好几个小时了。然后她和父母说了句话,回到了他们的卡车上。几分钟后,她带着一个纸袋回来了。“那是妈妈手工做的墨西哥玉米卷,”女孩解释说。“这太美味了,你一定喜欢它。“在干了那么累的工作之后,我饿死了,所以我吃了墨西哥风味的食物,感激和感动。然后我们互相挥手道别。
他们离开后,我上了吉普车,打开了纸袋。袋子里有一个鸡肉玉米饼。接下来的几分钟,我狼吞虎咽地吃了美味的食物。当我在咀嚼时,眼泪涌了起来。虽然很多人倾向于忽视那些有需要的人,但有些善良的人会特意伸出援手,这真是太棒了。这个外国家庭所做的好事永远无法逃避我。我要把它传下来,创造一个更友好的世界。
2021年1月浙江卷(圣诞节的尴尬)
第二节 读后续写(满分25分)
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
Pumpkin (南瓜)carving at Halloween is a family tradition. We visit a local farm every October. In the pumpkin field, I compete with my three brothers and sister to seek out the biggest pumpkin. My dad has a rule that we have to carry our pumpkins back home, and as the eldest child I have an advantage — I carried an 85-pounder back last year.
This year, it was hard to tell whether my prize or the one chosen by my 14-year-old brother, Jason, was the winner. Unfortunately we forgot to weigh them before taking out their insides, but I was determined to prove my point. All of us were hard at work at the kitchen table, with my mom filming the annual event. I’m unsure now why I thought forcing my head inside the pumpkin would settle the matter, but it seemed to make perfect sense at the time.
With the pumpkin resting on the table, hole uppermost, I bent over and pressed my head against the opening. At first I got jammed just above my eyes and then, as I went on with my task, unwilling to quit, my nose briefly prevented entry. Finally I managed to put my whole head into it, like a cork (软木塞) forced into a bottle. I was able to straighten up with the huge pumpkin resting on my shoulders.
My excitement was short-lived. The pumpkin was heavy. “I’m going to set it down, now,” I said, and with Jason helping to support its weight, I bent back over the table to give it somewhere to rest. It was only when I tried to remove my head that I realized getting out was going to be less straightforward than getting in. When I pulled hard, my nose got in the way. I got into a panic as I pressed firmly against the table and moved my head around trying to find the right angle, but it was no use. “I can’t get it out!” I shouted, my voice sounding unnaturally loud in the enclosed space.
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1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
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I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer.
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That video was posted the day before Halloween.
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I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. Growing more panic, I began to cry. Fortunately, hearing me crying, dad came and helped me lay my head on the table, so my neck could rest for a while. Then he said to me “Listen, honey. I have to cut this pumpkin in half. ” I had no choice but to keep still with my eyes tightly closed and listening to the knife moving on the pumpkin. Moments later, my head was finally released from this horrible pumpkin cage. Then mom told me she had just filmed me managing to pull my head out of the pumpkin.
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That video was posted the day before Halloween. Actually my mom had asked whether she could post it on the Internet, because after all I was so embarrassed and looked so silly in it. Anyway, I nodded and supported her idea. It turned out that people liked and forwarded it crazily on the Internet, only to make me an Internet celebrity. (续写152词)
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我被困了五六分钟,虽然感觉要长得多了。我越来越恐慌,我开始哭了起来。幸运的是,听到我哭了,爸爸过来帮我把头放在桌子上,这样我的脖子就可以休息一会儿了。然后他对我说:“听着,亲爱的。”我得把这个南瓜切成两半。“我别无选择,只能闭上眼睛,听着刀在南瓜上的移动。过了一会儿,我的头终于从这个可怕的南瓜笼子里被释放出来了。然后妈妈告诉我,她刚刚拍下了我设法把头从南瓜里拉出来的照片。
第2段
那个视频是在万圣节的前一天发布的。实际上,我妈妈问她是否可以把它贴在网上,因为毕竟我很尴尬,看起来很傻。不管怎样,我点了点头,支持她的想法。结果,人们疯狂地喜欢并转发它,却让我成为了网络名人。
2020年7月山东卷(爆米花救助穷人)
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The Meredith family lived in a small community. As the economy was in decline, some people in the town had lost their jobs. Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet. People were trying to help each other meet the challenges.
Mrs. Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman. She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor. She knew they had problems, and they needed all kinds of help. When she had time, she would bring food and medicine to them.
One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, who took care of him and could not go out to work, and their little boy. The little boy — his name was Bernard — had interested her very much.
“I wish you could see him,” she said to her own children, John, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help to his mother. He wants very much to earn some money, but I don’t see what he can do.”
After their mother left the room, the children sat thinking about Bernard. “I wish we could help him to earn money,” said Clara. “His family is suffering so much.”
“So do I,” said Harry. “We really should do something to assist them.”
For some moments, John said nothing, but, suddenly, he sprang to his feet and cried, “I have a great idea! I have a solution that we can all help accomplish (完成) .”
The other children also jumped up all attention. When John had an idea, it was sure to be a good one. “I tell you what we can do,” said John. “You know that big box of corn Uncle John sent us Well, we can make popcorn (爆米花), and put it into paper bags, and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.”
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When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good one, too.
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With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business.
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参考答案:
When Mrs. Meredith heard of the idea, she thought it was a good one, too. Then Mrs. Meredith searched the internet and ordered a household popcorn machine. After that, Mrs. Meredith, together with her three children, paid another visit to the family and told them about the popcorn plan. Needless to say, they were deeply moved, especially Bernard who finally found a way to make money for his family. A few days later, the machine was delivered to Mrs. Meredith’s doorstep. And it wasn’t long before they got the hang of using the machine to make popcorn.
With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. Although it was a hard time and things were tight for everybody, Bernard’s business worked out quite well. He carried the popcorn on his small bike, going from door to door to sell it. People were surprised to see such a little, poorly-dressed boy selling popcorn at their doors, but eventually almost all of them would buy a bag or two. It is love that makes the world go round and Bernard felt it deep in his little heart.
当梅雷迪思太太听到这个想法时,她认为这也是件好事。然后,梅雷迪思太太在网上搜索了一下,订购了一台家用爆米花机。在那之后,梅雷迪思太太和她的三个孩子又去拜访了他们家,并告诉了他们爆米花的计划。不用说,他们非常感动,尤其是伯纳德,他终于找到了为家人赚钱的方法。几天后,机器被送到了梅雷迪思太太的家门口。没过多久,他们就掌握了用机器做爆米花。
一切都准备好了,伯纳德开始了他的新生意。虽然这是一段艰难的时期,事情对每个人来说都很紧张,但伯纳德的生意还是很顺利。他骑着小自行车拿着爆米花,挨家挨户地卖。人们惊讶地看到这样一个衣着不良的小男孩在门口卖爆米花,但最终几乎所有人都买了一两个包。是爱使世界四处运转,伯纳德深深地感受到了他的小心灵深处。
2020年7月浙江卷(拍照北极熊遇险)
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One fall, my wife Elli and I had a single goal: to photograph polar bears. We were staying at a research camp outside “ the polar bear capital of the world ” — the town of Churchill in Manitoba, Canada.
Taking pictures of polar bears is amazing but also dangerous. Polar bears — like all wild animals — should be photographed from a safe distance. When I’m face to face with a polar bear, I like it to be through a camera with a telephoto lens. But sometimes, that is easier said than done. This was one of those times.
As Elli and I cooked dinner, a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby lake sniffed, and smelled our garlic bread.
The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp, which was surrounded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the wire. He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts.
Terrified, Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew. We yelled at the bear, hit pots hard, and fired blank shotgun shells into the air. Sometimes loud noises like these will scare bears off. Not this polar bear though — he just kept trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws (爪子).
I radioed the camp manager for help. He told me a helicopter was on its way, but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived. Making the best of this close encounter (相遇), I took some pictures of the bear.
Elli and I feared the fence wouldn’t last through 30 more minutes of the bear’s punishment. The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray. The spray burns the bears’ eyes, but doesn’t hurt them. So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and, through the fence, sprayed him in the face. With an angry roar (吼叫), the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes.
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1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. __________ _________
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At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. ____________________ _________
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参考答案:
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A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. Then we realized that the spray had only angered him even more, for he seemed much fiercer this time and violently pushed the fence like mad. My heart raced wildly, not knowing what to do. At this critical moment, Elli grabbed several pieces of garlic bread and threw them over the fence. It worked! The bear stopped the attack and ran to the bread. But it wasn’t long before he ate up all the bread and came back again.
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At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. “Thank goodness we are saved!” Elli cried out. Once the helicopter landed, we got onto it in no time, excited and relieved. When we were safe on the helicopter up in the air, I was amazed to spot that the bear had finally torn down the fence and ran towards the food we left behind. I quickly took out the camera and photographed the rare scene — we were robbed by a polar bear!
几分钟后,这只熊回到了我们的营地。然后我们意识到,浪花只是更激怒了他,因为这次他似乎更凶狠了,而且像疯了一样猛烈地推了推篱笆。我的心狂狂,不知道该怎么办。在这个关键时刻,埃利抓起几块蒜蓉面包,扔过了栅栏。它已经成功了!熊阻止了进攻,跑到面包边。但没过多久,他就吃完了所有的面包,又回来了。
第2部分:
就在那一刻,直升机来了。“谢天谢地,我们得救了!”埃莉喊道。直升机一降落,我们很快就上了飞机,兴奋而松了一口气。当我们安全地坐在直升机上时,我惊讶地发现这只熊终于撕掉了栅栏,向我们留下的食物跑去。我迅速拿出相机,拍摄了这个罕见的场景,我们被一只北极熊抢劫了!
2020年1月浙江卷(小狗Ponny的新玩伴)
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
“I’m going to miss you so much, Poppy,” said the tall, thin teenager. He bent down to hug his old friend goodbye. He stood up, hugged his parents, and smiled, trying not to let his emotions (情绪) get the better of him.
His parents were not quite able to keep theirs under control. They had driven their son several hours out of town to the university where he would soon be living and studying. It was time to say goodbye for now at least. The family hugged and smiled through misty eyes and then laughed.
The boy lifted the last bag onto his shoulder, and flashed a bright smile. “I guess this is it.” he said. “I’ll see you back home in a month, okay ” His parents nodded, and they watched as he walked out of sight into the crowds of hundreds of students and parents. The boy’s mother turned to the dog, “Okay, Poppy, time to go back home.”
The house seemed quiet as a tomb without the boy living there. All that week, Poppy didn’t seem interested in her dinner, her favorite toy, or even in her daily walk. Her owners were sad too, but they knew their son would be back to visit, Poppy didn’t.
They offered the dog some of her favorite peanut butter treats. They even let her sit on the sofa, but the old girl just wasn’t her usual cheerful self. Her owners s高分结尾技巧:主旨升华(原卷版)
目录
读后续写13 高分结尾技巧:主旨升华(原卷版) 1
Part 1命题解读 2
Part 2思维导图 2
Part 3、出彩收尾设计 3
方法一:首位呼应法写 3
方法二:名言式结尾法 3
方法三:情感升华法 5
Part 4、助人型主旨升华句 8
Part 5、成长型主旨升华句 10
Part 6、脱险型主旨升华句 13
Part 7、高考真题 15
1. 2022.6浙江卷(帮助无家可归的人) 15
2. 2022年新高考1卷 16
3. 2022年1月浙江卷 17
4. 2021年6月浙江卷(第一份工资) 19
5. 2021年6月新高考全国1卷(母亲节的惊喜) 20
6. 2021年1月八省联考(好心家庭帮我修车) 21
7. 2021年1月浙江卷(圣诞节的尴尬) 23
8. 2020年7月山东卷(爆米花救助穷人) 24
9. 2020年7月浙江卷(拍照北极熊遇险) 25
10. 2020年1月浙江卷(小狗Ponny的新玩伴) 27
11. 2018年6月浙江卷(山中遇险) 28
12. 2017年11月浙江卷(健忘的妈妈) 30
13. 2017年6月浙江卷(狼口脱险) 31
14. 2016年10月浙江卷(森林遇险) 33
15. 浙江卷样题(银行抢劫) 34
Part 8、模拟演练 35
1. (2022·辽宁实验中学模拟预测) 35
2. (2022·广东广州·三模) 37
3. (2022·湖北·荆州中学三模) 38
4. (2022·湖南师大附中三模) 39
5. 读后续写模拟专练01 40
6. 读后续写模拟专练02 42
Part 1命题解读
结尾句是全文的收尾处,需要起到点睛的作用,给读者留下深刻的印象。怎么做到呢?今天老师就带着你灵活运用首尾呼应、直白叙述、应用名言等多种方法进行结尾,对故事主题进行深化,使人物情感得到升华,让你的文章的结尾更加出彩!今天分享三个常见的方法:收尾呼应法;名言结尾法和情感升华法。
Part 2思维导图
Part 3、出彩收尾设计
方法一:首位呼应法写
请看第一例子,2017年高考真题,讲述的是与健忘妈妈一块去旅游的故事。
文章的开头,是这么写的:I had an interesting childhood. It was filled with surprise and amusements, all because of my mother--loving, sweet, yet absent-minded and forgetful. 我有一个有趣的童年,充满了惊喜和娱乐,都是因为我的母亲——可爱,却心不在焉,健忘。
那么续写结尾的时候可以回到文章的开头再次重申妈妈的性格,来深化主题。
文章结尾可以用首尾呼应的写作手法,请看这一句:Despite mom's being absent-minded and forgetful, she was still a kind and nice mom. 尽管妈妈总是心不在焉,健忘,但她仍然是一个和蔼可亲的妈妈。
再来看第二个例子,2018年高考真题 ,讲述的是爸爸带儿子去朋友家农场游玩迷路的故事。
文章的开头,是这么写的:It was summer and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West. 那是夏天,我爸爸想像以前一样请我去度假。 他决定带我去西部荒野之旅。
文章结尾可以用首尾呼应的写作手法,请看这一句:Never had I had such a thrilling yet dangerous vacation before. The special trip to the Wild West was deeply engraved in my mind. 我从来没有过这么刺激又危险的假期。那次去西部的特别旅行,深深地印在我的脑海里。
再来看第三个例子,2016年浙江高考样题
开头:A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day.一天,亚瑟在上班的路上发生了一件有趣的事情。
结尾:What a funny day. Arthur couldn't stop laughing whenever he looked back on this hilarious experience. 多么有趣的一天啊,每当亚瑟回想起这次欢乐的经历,他就忍不住笑个不停。
方法二:名言式结尾法
使用名言结尾往往能给文章增添文采,同时也能起到凝炼中心,深化主旨的作用,这样的结尾可以引出结论,即时抒情,凸显主旨渲染氛围等,合理使用名言可以为续写文章画龙点睛,因此在平时我们不仅要多加积累,也要明白名言蕴含的道理,以便使其用在合适的语境中。需要注意的是:不可生搬硬套名言警句,一定要具体文本具体分析。
例1:Don't judge each day by the harvest you reap but by the seeds that you plant.
(不要根据你每天的收获来判断每一天,而是根据你每天播种了多少。)
这则名言采用了比喻的手法,将人的付出和回报比作耕种和收获。本质上,是过程和结果之间的比较,强调过程的重要性大于结果,可以用于习惯养成类和或者长期活动类叙事的结尾,提升思想境界。
例2:It is during our darkest moments that we must focus to see the light.
(越是在最黑暗的时刻,我们越要寻找光明。)
这则名言通过前后反复概念的对比,突出光明的重要性,引申为在困境中保持积极乐观的生活态度,可以用于主要人物经历重大坎坷,最后凭借乐观心态度过艰难岁月的文章。
例子3:Tell me and I forget. Teach me and I remember. Involve me and I learn.
(告诉我,我会忘记。教给我,我会铭记。让我参与,我会掌握。)
这则名言通过排比和对比,揭示了学习的规律,阐明了实践出真知的道理,可以用于总结学习经历,反思技能掌握的过程等。
例4:In the end, it's not the years in your life that count. It's the life in your years.
(最后,重要的不是你生命中的岁月,而是你如何度过这些岁月的。)
这则名言通过巧妙的词汇调换,改变句意,揭示了生活的真谛:只有认真对待生活,人生才不会留下遗憾,由于本句涉及的时间跨度较大,写作中最好有最好从长者的视角提出。
我们来看下面的实战演练,故事里,主人公在柔道比赛中,通过向对手暴露自己的弱点,充分发挥自己的力量,最终赢得了比赛。故事结尾,借用教练对他的鼓励,完成了升华,其中就用到了名言警句。我们以前来看一下。
It is your biggest weakness that makes you win the match. As a proverb says, ‘Every coin has two sides.’ 是你最大的弱点让你赢得了比赛。正如谚语所说,“每枚硬币都有两面性。”Making full use of your strength is your achievement. Please remember that in no case will you give up especially in trouble. God is fair to everyone.”充分利用你的力量就是你的成就。请记住,无论如何你都不会放弃,尤其是在麻烦中。上帝对每个人都是公平的。”
方法三:情感升华法
每一个故事的创作不止为了讲清楚一件事情的来龙去脉,还要包含作者想要表达的寓意,想与读者分享的感悟,这种思想往往贯穿全文,并在故事结尾时得到升华,在读后续写的结尾部分可以采用情感升华的方式,让读者产产生情感上的共鸣,激发读者思考。
情感升华的结尾要求,要有较高的立意,它是故事的灵魂所在,这样的结尾能够产生强烈的艺术感染力,通常我们可以通过表现人生感悟、生活真谛、生活哲理、人生观或价值观来达到结尾部分的情感升华。
请看第一例子,仍然是2017年高考真题,讲述的是与健忘妈妈一块去旅游的故事。刚才我们用“首尾呼应”法,现在我们试一试用“情感升华”法:在结尾处,表达母爱对我的深远影响。
Everyone has one person they look up to as a role model. To me there is none other than my mom. 每个人都有一个榜样。对我来说,不是别人,正是我妈妈。She has beauty, brains, and one of the best hearts I know. 她很漂亮,很聪明,而且是我认识的最用心的人之一。Without her in my life, I would have no idea whether I can be a famous dancer. Someday, when I am older and have children of my own, I hope I can be just as great a parent as my mom.如果没有她,我不知道我能不能成为一个著名的舞者。有一天,当我长大了,有了自己的孩子,我希望我能成为像我妈妈一样伟大的母亲。
我们来看看第二个例子,主人公在故事的结尾处,表达自己对价值观:“幸福”的理解。来看看下面的表达:
【举例2】I am extremely unhappy about it. I think money doesn’t equal happiness. 我对此非常不高兴。我觉得金钱不等于幸福。And free life style also doesn’t equal happiness. 自由的生活方式也不等于幸福。 The real happiness is that everyone loves each other, and does everything useful for our society. Most of my classmates support me.真正的幸福是每个人都有“爱”,为我们的社会做一切有益的事情。大多数同学都支持我。 But some of them think money is everything. In my opinion, money can’t take the place of everything, such as your life, your time and your happiness.但有些人认为钱就是一切。在我看来,金钱不能代替一切,比如你的生活,你的时间和你的幸福。
情感升华万能句:
Seeing sth , I felt as if it had been doing and saying,”........”
看到某物,感觉某物好像在做某动作,并且说“(突出主题的话)”。
这个句子的亮点在于:首先该句是虚拟语气句型结构,需要注意,动词时态需要用had been doing,其次seeing sth是非谓语动词做伴随状语,另外句型中加入对话;最后,从修辞的角度,使用了“拟人”的手法。
需要明确的是seeing sth.中的sth.到底是什么呢?我们知道,在故事发展中,一般都会有一两个线索词。这些线索词要么贯穿始终,要么是在推动故事发展过程中,起到非常重要的作用。比如2020年新高考卷中,描述的是万圣节尴尬事:主人公的头卡在了南瓜中。于是南瓜就是整个故事的线索词。八省联考中,主人公的车在路上坏了,遇一家人的热心帮助。在主人公即将开车离开时,热心的小女孩还递给他一个纸袋,纸袋里有食物。那么“纸袋paper bag”在推动剧情发展中,就起到了的重要作用。所以,“南瓜”和“纸袋”可以用在seeing sth中。
我们先看第一个例子。
主人公“我”是老年人,想回到学校学习识字,但是连字母表都不会读。最终战胜了自我怀疑,成功能识字看报纸。升华主题的时候,我们怎么用这个万能句型来表达呢?请看这句:
Seeing the alphabet again, I felt as if it had been encouraging me and saying, ” it’s never too late to learn”.再次看到字母表,我觉得它好像在鼓励我并说,“学习永远不会太晚”。
看第二个例子。
主人公“我”是个颓废少年,无意中通过自己的专长“扔标枪”,找到了自信,并成功逆袭。我们怎么通过万能句型来升华呢?
Seeing the javelin, I felt as if it had been encouraging me and saying, “You’ve found your talent and I’ve found you”看到标枪,我觉得它好像在鼓励我,并说,“你找到了你的天赋,我找到了你”。这句话中,javelin是“标枪”,talent是“天赋”
第三个例子。
2016年高考真题,讲述了夫妻俩野外露营,因小事发生争执,女主人独自走进森林迷路的故事。最后如何用万能句升华呢?
Seeing the helicopter, Jane felt as if it had been comforting her with its thunderous voice, “Your waiting pays off.”看到那架直升机,简觉得它好像在用雷鸣般的声音安慰她,“你的等待是有回报的。”
第四个例子。
2016年高考样题,讲述了主人公亚瑟遇到了银行抢劫,他巧妙把可能藏有赃款的行李箱 suitcase运到了警察局的故事。最后的升华句,能不能借用我们今天用到的句型呢?我们一起来看看
Seeing the suitcase, Arthur felt as if it had been praising him , “Your did great job!”看到手提箱,亚瑟觉得好像在称赞他,“干得好!”
这个句型,我们主要讲解的是它能起到情感升级的作用,主要用在故事结尾处,如果在故事发展中,你感觉用上这个句型也比较合适,完全也是可以的。
比如2017年高考真题,讲的是主人公“我”与健忘妈妈一块去旅游的故事。途中妈妈忘记了帐篷tent,妈妈执意要返程寻找。看到帐篷的那一刻,你就可以用上这一句
Seeing the tent, I felt as it had been sighing and saying, “I want to experience the outside world.看到帐篷,我感觉它一直在叹息着说,“我想体验外面的世界。”
相信同学们对这个万能句型的用法或多或少有感悟,你可以把这个句型多默写几遍,直到百分百能用出来。
需要强调的是,我们学的“万能句”其实是把双刃剑。可以让起到化繁为简的作用,但是如果长期依赖,也可能让你的表达过于单一。所以说,对于基础暂时不太好的同学而言,学会后,可以救急用。从长远看,我们还是需要积累不同的素材,丰富我们的表达。
此外,需要强调另外一点是,当你你在写作中,觉得某个故事的立意和这个句型有不太一致时,也不要强行使用该句型。其实,在这个系列课程中,我讲了很多出彩的句式结构,你都可以进行仿写。
Part 4、助人型主旨升华句
自己帮助别人或者自己受到他人帮助,一直以来是我们读后续写的一个重要主题,我们今天分享的就是“助人型”的主旨升华句。一共有两个。
我们先来看第一种句型,句式结构比较简单,也很容易仿写。算是一个入门级的升华句子。这个句型就是:from then on +行动。
我们先看例句:
From then on, I would try my best to help sb like sb.Only in this way, could more and more people help each other in the future.
从那时起,我会尽我最大的努力帮助某些人,就像某人一样。 只有这样,将来才能有越来越多的人互相帮助。
从这个句型的内涵上看:自己被别人帮助后,主动把这种助人的行为进行“传递”,即:去积极帮助他人。这种精神的升华具有正能量,是值得鼓励的。从句式结构来看,该句用到了倒装,属于高分亮点句。
下面我们举一反三:
【示例1】
2020年山东卷中,讲述了主人公和孩子们想出在社区卖爆米花的主意,来帮助穷人的故事。我们可以借鉴这个写作公式,可以这么写。
From then on, Bernard made up his mind to help someone who needs help . Only in this way, could more and more people help each other in the future.从那时起,伯纳德决定帮助需要帮助的人。只有这样,将来才能有越来越多的人互相帮助。
【示例2】
我们再来看八省联考的作文,作者讲述一次吉普车爆胎和维修经历。先是路边标语求助无果,失望之际墨西哥人伸出援手。续写的第一段,主要要写帮助的细节。第二段就可以升华主题:
From then on, I placed a jack and some common tools in my car.When meeting people in need on the road ,I would try my best to help them like the family.Only in this way, could more and more people help each other in the future.
从那时起,我在我的车里放了一个千斤顶和一些常见的工具。当我在路上遇到需要帮助的人时,我会尽力像家人一样帮助他们。只有这样,将来才能有越来越多的人互相帮助。
我们再来看第二种句型:动作+感动+感悟
这个“动作”可以是:看到了某情景,或者拿着一样东西。“感动”很好理解,别人帮助了自己,产生的情绪就是“感动”,最常见的就是“眼泪往下流”。“感悟”这一句,往往是“爱”“善行”“付出”等关键字的励志句。
比如我们来看这一句:
sb looked at sth / held sth, tears rolling down without control. It is love that makes the world go around,which sb felt deep in one’s heart.
某人看到了某物或者拿着某物,眼泪毫无控制地流了下来。 正是爱让世界转动,在某人的心里深深地感受到了这一点。
这个句子从句式结构上:用到了一个独立主格tears rolling down without control,眼泪毫无控制地流下来;以及一个强调句It is love that makes the world go around(正是“爱”让世界转动),还有一个定语从句:which sb felt deep in one’s heart.这三个语法现象都是我们作文中的高分亮点。
我们来实战演练一下,
【示例1】
首先看一下八省联考的试题。在续写第二段开头,文章提到那一家墨西哥人递给作者一个纸袋,里面有食物。我们可以这么来写主旨升华句。
I held the paper bag tightly, tears rolling down without control. It is love that makes the world go around,which I felt deep in my heart.
我紧紧地握着纸袋,眼泪毫无控制地流了下来。 正是爱让世界转动,在我心里里深深地感受到了这一点。
【示例2】
我们再来看山东卷“卖爆米花帮助穷人”的故事,我们借鉴这个写作公式,可以这么写。
He held the coins tightly, tears rolling down without control. It is love that makes the world go around,which Bernard felt deep in his little heart.
他紧紧地握着硬币,眼泪毫无控制地流了下来。 正是爱让世界转动,伯纳德在他的心里深深地感受到了这一点。
同学们刚开始,可以比较生硬的模仿,毕竟能先写出来才是最重要的。随着同学们积累的素材越来越多,我们就可以在“感悟”部分,加上更灵活的一些表达,下面我就提供三句比较不错的句子给大家。
第一句:It dawned on me that a moment of kindness could mean so much to another,and that a simple act could make the world so much better.
我恍然大悟,那一刻的善良对另一个人来说意义重大,而一个简单的行为可以使世界变得如此美好。
第二句:Whether rich or poor, we should be happy to do something for society. Thus we can learn that giving is the source of happiness.无论贫富,我们都应该为社会做点什么。 因此,我们可以学会给予是幸福的源泉。
第三句:Sometimes, a small act of kindness may be powerful enough to make a huge difference.有时候小小的善行,可能足以带来巨大的改变。
Part 5、成长型主旨升华句
“改变”和“成长”是我们读后续写一个重要主题。在第二段的结尾处,我们怎样写“改变成长”型的主旨升华句呢?我们可以根据“改变”的因素来学习不同的表达。比如克服困难,克服自卑等。今天我们要学习七类不同的改变模式。
第一类:学习知识促“改变”
知识就是力量!在改变的过程中,学习不同的知识,然后才能面对各种困难和挑战。比如屏幕前的你,不就是在学习读后续写的技巧吗?请看下面的例句,也是我送给正在学习的你。
It's never too late to learn. Each individual has the right to accept more challenges and make more attempts.学习永远为时不晚。每个人都应该并且有权利去接受更多的挑战,做更多的尝试。
【分析】individual这里表示“个人,个体”。make more attempts 做更多尝试。
第二类:发挥天赋促“改变”
认识自身天赋,并且发挥天赋,这是改变我们的现状的一个重要条件。请看下面的例句。
Actually, every individual possesses talent. Be brave when you find it and also make efforts. You can create miracles in the end.
事实上,每个人都有天赋,发现它的时候要勇敢,也要付出努力,最终你会创造奇迹。
【分析】possess 拥有。create miracles表示创造奇迹。
第三类:追逐梦想促“改变”
永远不要忽视了梦想的力量!“做人如果没有理想,跟咸鱼有什么区别呢”。请看下面两个例句。
It's never too late to go for your dream. As long as you grasp every opportunity and take full advantage of it, you will stand a chance to realize your dreams.追梦永远不晚。只要你抓住机会,充分利用机会,你就有机会实现梦想。
As long as we dare to dream and don't let difficulties get in our way, anything is possible.只要我们敢于梦想,不被困难所阻挡,一切皆有可能。
【分析】take full advantage of 充分利用, realize your dreams表示“实现梦想”
第四类:克服困难促“改变”
只有克服各种苦难,才能改变现状。请看下面的例句。
The journey to success is not smooth. It is full of challenges and difficulties. We should be brave to face them. As long as we don’t give up hope and make every effort to overcome all the difficulties, we will surely achieve our goal (success) finally.
通往成功的路不会平坦,充满挑战和艰辛。我们要勇敢面对。只要不放弃希望并竭尽全力克服所有困难,我们最终会实现我们的目标(成功)。
【分析】smooth 表示“平坦的”overcome all the difficulties 表示“克服困难”;make every effort 表示“做出努力”;as long as,表示“只要”,引导条件状语从句。
第五类:战胜恐惧促“改变”
我们在改变的过程中,经常需要克服自己内心的恐惧。请看下面的例句:
Determination and optimism are what it takes to conquer your fear and accomplish your goal.战胜恐惧和实现目标,需要决心和乐观。
【分析】Determination 表示“决心”; optimism表示“乐观”。conquer your fear表示“克服你的恐惧”;accomplish your goal表示“完成目标”
第六类:战胜自卑促“改变”
我们在改变之前,可能会有一些自卑的心理阻碍着我们成长,比如自己的外貌的缺陷,性格内向等,如何克服自卑,实现人生逆袭?请看下面的例句。
I smiled as I eventually realized the real source of confidence.Now, I am proud of what I look like and much happier, because I have realized it is your personality that decides who you truly are.
我笑了,因为我最终意识到了自信的真正来源。现在,我为我的样子感到骄傲,而且更快乐,因为我已经意识到,决定你真正是谁的是你的个性。
【分析】eventually表示“最后,终于”;personality 表示“个性”。
第七类:战胜消极促“改变”
积极的心态像太阳,照到哪里,哪里亮。“积极”思维,最终让我们成长改变,这种主题,是读后续写中比较常见的。请看下面的例句。
Attitude is more important than facts for us. We cannot change our past; we cannot change the fact. However, the only thing we can do is hold a positive attitude.
态度对我们来说比事实更重要。 我们不能改变我们的过去;我们不能改变事实。 然而,我们唯一能做的就是保持积极的态度。
【分析】Attitude表示“态度”;positive attitude.就是“积极的态度”。
Part 6、脱险型主旨升华句
读后续写中会遇到火灾,水灾,森林迷路等内容的故事,如果涉及到对生命造成了一定的威胁的情节,我们就把这种类型的文章归为“脱险”型。在往年高考真题中,曾经就考过三次:拍摄北极熊遇险;父子骑马迷路;骑车游玩遇狼脱险。
主旨句一:入门句
That day was so unforgettable that it would stay in my memory forever.
那天是如此难忘,它将永远留在我的记忆。
遇到危险并且最终成功脱险的经历,想必对我们每个人来说一定是一生中难忘的经历。所以这个句子使用的场合还是挺多的。句子中使用了so...that的句式结构:如此......以至于。unforgettable是一个形容词,表示“无法忘记的”。
主旨句二:中级句
Only then did I realize that it was bravery that can conquer whatever difficulty came in the way. 直到那时,我才意识到,正是勇敢才能克服一切困难。
遇到危险后,勇敢面对,才能解决问题。这个句子突出了“勇敢”这个核心,这在“脱险型”的故事里,是非常恰当的。这句话使用了倒装的结构和强调结构结合的方式,也属于高分亮点句。
主旨句三:高级句
It was this unique experience that made me understand whatever difficulty we are faced with (= we may face), we mustn’t give up our hope.
“正是这种独特的经历使我理解了我们所面临的任何困难,我们不能放弃我们的希望。”
这个句子也是把强调句,定语从句,宾语从句结合在一起,句式结构比较高级。同学们不妨挑战一下?
主旨句四:综合型
即把前几种方式进行组合,我们可以记住这个组合公式:结果+难忘的经历+体悟
我们再说具体点儿,“结果”指的是获救的结果,如走出森林,获救后见到家人等。“难忘的经历”就是我们刚刚学到的第一个主旨句。“体悟”在这种“脱险型”里,无非就是突出冷静,勇敢,不放弃希望等信念的重要性。
我们来一个例句:
Finally, we did sth. What an unforgettable experience! It turns out that there’s always a way out of any plight as long as we stay calm.
最后,我们做某事。(这里写结果) 多么难忘的经历啊! (这是一个万能句)事实证明,只要我们保持冷静,就总有办法摆脱困境。(作者的体悟,可以把“保持冷静”,换成“不放弃希望”等。)
我们看2018年高考英语浙江卷的读后续写,爸爸带儿子去朋友家农场游玩迷路的故事。文章的最后,我们可以用这句:
Finally, we went out of the forest that trapped us. What an unforgettable experience! It turns out that there’s always a way out of any plight as long as we stay calm.
最后,我们走出了困住我们的森林。 多么难忘的经历啊! 事实证明,只要我们保持冷静,就总有办法摆脱困境。
我们也可以把第一句改成:Finally, we arrived home safely just in time for supper(我们安全回家,正好赶上吃晚饭),也就是说,不管怎么写,第一句是脱险后的结果。
我们再看2016年10月高考英语浙江卷的读后续写,夫妻俩野外露营,因小事发生争执,女主人独自走进森林迷路的故事。文章最后,我们也可以用上这句:
Finally, she saw her husband. As tightly as possible, she hugged him and was too thrilled to say anything.What an unforgettable experience! It turns out that there’s always a way out of any plight as long as we never give up our hope. 最后,她看到了她的丈夫。 她尽可能地紧紧地抱着他,激动得说不出话来。 多么难忘的经历啊! 事实证明,只要我们不放弃我们的希望,任何困境都有出路。
2017年高考英语的读后续写,和朋友一起骑车游玩,途中遇狼的故事。我们可以这样写:
Finally, the wolf ran away off the road and disappeared in the distance .“We are safe!”Mac said in a pleasant tone. What an unforgettable experience! It turns out that there’s always a way out of any plight as long as we stay calm.最后,狼从路上跑开,消失在远处。“我们很安全!”麦克以一种愉快的语气说。 多么难忘的经历啊! 事实证明,只要我们保持冷静,就总有办法摆脱困境。
Part 7、高考真题
2022.6浙江卷(帮助无家可归的人)
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
I need to do something in my community(社区)in order to complete the community service hours required to graduate from high school. Some of my friends had signed up to spend time at a soup kitchen, so I did, too. It seemed like a good thing to do.
I thought that we would just be passing our dinners to those in need, but I found out we would be doing everything from preparing to serving the dinner. We began preparing the food, from mixing salad dressing to separating frozen meat. Much still needed to be done before dinner was served, but already outside the building many homeless people were gathering. It wasn’t until a couple of hours later that we opened the doors and began serving dinner.
As the line of people came toward me, I got a little scared. I’d come face to face with the homeless: How should I act How would they treat me Would they hate me for having more than they did While some of the people looked very friendly, some of them looked so dangerous, I didn’t have too much time to worry about it. I was assigned (分配)to serve the salad with the lady next to me. She smiled at me and said if I needed help, she’d be right there, which I found quite comforting.
I had never seen so many people wanting food. They were of all ages and nationalities. Most of them wore clothes that were torn and dirty. Some looked like they had totally given up on life, while others seemed to be making the best of the situation, smiling and joking. Some were better off than others, but they all needed a good meal and a warm place to eat. It saddened me to think of how many people there were who didn’t have a place to call home and the only food they got came from a soup kitchen.
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As they came in my direction, I put on my brightest and happiest smile.
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I was so happy that I had earned my service hours in this way.
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2022年新高考1卷
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route(路线)through thick evergreen forest.
I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and asked him why he wasn’t with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run.
What was wrong He had worked so hard for this event!
I quickly searched the crowd for the school’s coach and asked him what had happened. “I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him,” he explained uncomfortably. “I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide.”
I bit back my frustration(懊恼). I knew the coach meant well—he thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.
David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team. It just took him longer—that’s all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination.
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答.
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me.
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I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
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2022年1月浙江卷
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事
When Dr.Henderson was assigning(指定) project mates for his psychology class, I secretly hoped that he would pair me with my best friend or at least a classmate I could have some fun with. Above all, I hoped he wouldn’t assign me to work with the fiercely competitive and extremely serious fellow who always wore dark clothes and apparently had a personality to match. As fate(命运) would have it, Dr. Henderson very deliberately matched everyone in class and announced that I would be working with the one person in class I wanted to avoid.
I went up to my new teammate and introduced myself. He looked at me as though I weren’t there. I felt he treated me as though I would hold him back and probably make him fail to get an A in the course. He wasn’t mean or abusive.He just gave me the impression that he could do whatever project we dreamed up better if he did it alone.
Needless to say, I didn’t look forward to an entire term of being brushed off, but I tried to make the best of it and didn’t say anything for fear that I would make things worse.
The project required each team to develop a hypothesis(假说), set up an experiment to test the hypothesis, do the statistical analysis and present the findings. Whatever grade the team received would be shared by both students.
When my teammate and I met to discuss our project, I was uneasy. Here was this challenging student who had a reputation for single-mindedness and good grades—the exact opposite of me. I actually wanted to drop the class at one point, but stopped short because I didn’t want to give him the satisfaction of my chickening out. I decided to stick to it no matter what.
After long discussions, we somehow agreed to do a study on the psychological well-being of teenagers. I wasn’t sure what it meant exactly, but at least we had a topic.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1: We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans.
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Paragraph 2: One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious disease.
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2021年6月浙江卷(第一份工资)
My dad, George, only had an eighth grade education. A quiet man, he didn't understand my world of school activities. From age 14, he worked. And his dad, Albert, took the money my dad earned and used it to pay family expenses.
I didn't really understand his world either: He was a livestock trucker, and l thought that I would surpass(超过) anything he had accomplished by the time l walked across the stage at high school graduation.
Summers in the mid, 70s were spent at home shooting baskets, hitting a baseball, or throwing a football, preparing for my future as a quarterback on a football team. In poor weather, I read about sports or practiced my trombone(长号).
The summer before my eighth grade I was one of a group of boys that a neighboring farmer hired to work in his field. He explained our basic task, the tractor fired up and we were off, riding down the field looking for weeds to spray with chemicals. After a short way, the farmer stopped and painted at a weed which we missed. Then we began again. This happened over and over, but we soon learned to identify different grasses like cockleburs, lamb's-quarters, foxtails, and the king of weeds, the pretty purple thistle. It was tiring work, but I looked forward to the pay, even though I wasn't sure how much it would amount to.
At home, my dad said, "A job's a big step to growing up. I'm glad you will be contributing to the household." My dad's words made me realize that my earning might not be mine to do with as wished.
My labors lasted about two weeks, and the farmer said there might be more work, but I wasn't interested. I decided it was not fair that l had to contribute my money.
注意:
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1: The pay day arrived at last.
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Paragraph 2: I understood immediately what my parents were worried about.
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2021年6月新高考全国1卷(母亲节的惊喜)
第二节(满分25分)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
A MOTHER'S DAY SURPRISE
The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother's Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.
The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jema found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jef turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jef to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff's hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear!The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.
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As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.
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The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.
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2021年1月八省联考(好心家庭帮我修车)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
During this past year, I’ve had three instances of car trouble. Each time these things happened, I was sick of the way most people hadn’t bothered to help. One of those times, I was on the side of the road for close to three hours with my big Jeep. I put signs in the windows, big signs that said NEED A JACK (千斤顶), and offered money. Nothing. Right as I was about to give up, a Mexican family in a small truck pulled over, and the father bounded out.
He sized up the situation and called for his daughter, who spoke English. He conveyed through her that he had a jack but that it was too small for the Jeep, so we would need something to support it. Then he got a saw (锯子) from the truck and cut a section out of a big log on the side of the road. We rolled it over and put his jack on top, and we were in business.
I started taking the wheel off, and then, if you can believe it, I broke his tire iron. No worries: He handed it to his wife, and she was gone in a flash down the road to buy a new tire iron. She was back in 15 minutes. We finished the job, and I was a very happy man.
The two of us were dirty and sweaty. His wife prepared a pot of water for us to wash our hands. I tried to put a $20 bill in the man’s hand, but he wouldn’t take it, so instead I went up to the truck and gave it to his wife as quietly as I could. I asked the little girl where they lived. Mexico, she said. They were in Oregon so Mommy and Daddy could work on a fruit farm for the next few weeks. Then they would go home.
注意:
续写词数应为150左右;
请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
When I was about to say goodbye, the girl asked if I’d had lunch.
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After they left, I got into my Jeep and opened the paper bag.
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2021年1月浙江卷(圣诞节的尴尬)
第二节 读后续写(满分25分)
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
Pumpkin (南瓜)carving at Halloween is a family tradition. We visit a local farm every October. In the pumpkin field, I compete with my three brothers and sister to seek out the biggest pumpkin. My dad has a rule that we have to carry our pumpkins back home, and as the eldest child I have an advantage — I carried an 85-pounder back last year.
This year, it was hard to tell whether my prize or the one chosen by my 14-year-old brother, Jason, was the winner. Unfortunately we forgot to weigh them before taking out their insides, but I was determined to prove my point. All of us were hard at work at the kitchen table, with my mom filming the annual event. I’m unsure now why I thought forcing my head inside the pumpkin would settle the matter, but it seemed to make perfect sense at the time.
With the pumpkin resting on the table, hole uppermost, I bent over and pressed my head against the opening. At first I got jammed just above my eyes and then, as I went on with my task, unwilling to quit, my nose briefly prevented entry. Finally I managed to put my whole head into it, like a cork (软木塞) forced into a bottle. I was able to straighten up with the huge pumpkin resting on my shoulders.
My excitement was short-lived. The pumpkin was heavy. “I’m going to set it down, now,” I said, and with Jason helping to support its weight, I bent back over the table to give it somewhere to rest. It was only when I tried to remove my head that I realized getting out was going to be less straightforward than getting in. When I pulled hard, my nose got in the way. I got into a panic as I pressed firmly against the table and moved my head around trying to find the right angle, but it was no use. “I can’t get it out!” I shouted, my voice sounding unnaturally loud in the enclosed space.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer.
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That video was posted the day before Halloween.
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2020年7月山东卷(爆米花救助穷人)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
The Meredith family lived in a small community. As the economy was in decline, some people in the town had lost their jobs. Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet. People were trying to help each other meet the challenges.
Mrs. Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman. She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor. She knew they had problems, and they needed all kinds of help. When she had time, she would bring food and medicine to them.
One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, who took care of him and could not go out to work, and their little boy. The little boy — his name was Bernard — had interested her very much.
“I wish you could see him,” she said to her own children, John, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help to his mother. He wants very much to earn some money, but I don’t see what he can do.”
After their mother left the room, the children sat thinking about Bernard. “I wish we could help him to earn money,” said Clara. “His family is suffering so much.”
“So do I,” said Harry. “We really should do something to assist them.”
For some moments, John said nothing, but, suddenly, he sprang to his feet and cried, “I have a great idea! I have a solution that we can all help accomplish (完成) .”
The other children also jumped up all attention. When John had an idea, it was sure to be a good one. “I tell you what we can do,” said John. “You know that big box of corn Uncle John sent us Well, we can make popcorn (爆米花), and put it into paper bags, and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.”
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good one, too.
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With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business.
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2020年7月浙江卷(拍照北极熊遇险)
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
One fall, my wife Elli and I had a single goal: to photograph polar bears. We were staying at a research camp outside “ the polar bear capital of the world ” — the town of Churchill in Manitoba, Canada.
Taking pictures of polar bears is amazing but also dangerous. Polar bears — like all wild animals — should be photographed from a safe distance. When I’m face to face with a polar bear, I like it to be through a camera with a telephoto lens. But sometimes, that is easier said than done. This was one of those times.
As Elli and I cooked dinner, a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby lake sniffed, and smelled our garlic bread.
The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp, which was surrounded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the wire. He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts.
Terrified, Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew. We yelled at the bear, hit pots hard, and fired blank shotgun shells into the air. Sometimes loud noises like these will scare bears off. Not this polar bear though — he just kept trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws (爪子).
I radioed the camp manager for help. He told me a helicopter was on its way, but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived. Making the best of this close encounter (相遇), I took some pictures of the bear.
Elli and I feared the fence wouldn’t last through 30 more minutes of the bear’s punishment. The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray. The spray burns the bears’ eyes, but doesn’t hurt them. So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and, through the fence, sprayed him in the face. With an angry roar (吼叫), the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. __________ _________
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At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. ____________________ _________
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2020年1月浙江卷(小狗Ponny的新玩伴)
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
“I’m going to miss you so much, Poppy,” said the tall, thin teenager. He bent down to hug his old friend goodbye. He stood up, hugged his parents, and smiled, trying not to let his emotions (情绪) get the better of him.
His parents were not quite able to keep theirs under control. They had driven their son several hours out of town to the university where he would soon be living and studying. It was time to say goodbye for now at least. The family hugged and smiled through misty eyes and then laughed.
The boy lifted the last bag onto his shoulder, and flashed a bright smile. “I guess this is it.” he said. “I’ll see you back home in a month, okay ” His parents nodded, and they watched as he walked out of sight into the crowds of hundreds of students and parents. The boy’s mother turned to the dog, “Okay, Poppy, time to go back home.”
The house seemed quiet as a tomb without the boy living there. All that week, Poppy didn’t seem interested in her dinner, her favorite toy, or even in her daily walk. Her owners were sad too, but they knew their son would be back to visit, Poppy didn’t.
They offered the dog some of her favorite peanut butter treats. They even let her sit on the sofa, but the old girl just wasn’t her usual cheerful self. Her owners started to get worried, “What should we do to cheer Poppy up ” asked Dad. “We’ve tried everything.”
“I have an idea, but it might be a little crazy,” smiled Mom. “Without anybody left in the house but us, this place could use a bit of fun. Let’s get a little dog for Poppy.”
It didn’t take long before they walked through the front door carrying a big box. Poppy
welcomed them home as usual, but when she saw the box, she stopped. She put her nose on
it. Her tail began wagging (摆动) ever so slowly, then faster as she caught the smell.
注意:
所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
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That video was posted the day before Halloween. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
2018年6月浙江卷(山中遇险)
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
It was summer, and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West.
We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of New Mexico. We reached Albuquerque in the late afternoon. Uncle Paul, my dad’s friend, picked us up from the airport and drove us up to his farm in Pecos.
His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guestroom of the farm house listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby. Very early in the morning. Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast. “The day starts at dawn on my farm,” he said. After breakfast, I went to help Aunt Tina feed the chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze (吃草). I was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses. They looked really cool.
In the afternoon, I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride, and he said yes, as long as my dad went with me. I wasn’t going to take a horse ride by myself anyway. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats, got on our horses, and headed slowly towards the mountains. “Don’t be late for supper,” Uncle Paul cried, “and keep to the track so that you don’t get lost!” “OK!” my dad cried back. After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out of sight. It was so peaceful and quiet and the colors of the brown rocks, the deep green pine trees, and the late afternoon sun mixed to create a magic scene. It looked like a beautiful woven (编织的) blanket spread out upon the ground just for us.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.
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We had no idea where we were and it got dark.
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2017年11月浙江卷(健忘的妈妈)
第二节 读后续写(满分25分)
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
A vacation with my mother
I had an interesting childhood: It was filled with surprises and amusements, all because of my mother — loving, sweet, yet absent-minded and forgetful. One strange family trip we took when I was eleven tells a lot about her.
My two sets of grandparents lived in Colorado and North Dakota, and my parents decided to spend a few weeks driving to those states and seeing all the sights along the way. As the first day of our trip approached, David, my eight-year-old brother, and I unwillingly said good-bye to all of our friends. Who knew if we’d ever see them again Finally, the moment of our departure arrived, and we loaded suitcases, books, games, camping equipment, and a tent into the car and bravely drove off. We bravely drove off again two hours later after we’d returned home to get the purse and traveler’s checks Mom had forgotten.
David and I were always a little nervous when using gas station bathrooms if Mom was driving while Dad slept: “You stand outside the door and play lookout (放哨) while I go, and I’ll stand outside the door and play lookout while you go.” I had terrible pictures in my mind: “Honey, where are the kids ” “What ! Oh, Gosh… I thought they were being awfully quiet.” We were never actually left behind in a strange city, but we weren’t about to take any chances.
On the fourth or fifth night, we had trouble finding a hotel with a vacancy. After driving in vain for some time, Mom suddenly got a great idea: Why didn’t we find a house with a likely-looking backyard and ask if we could set up tent there David and I became nervous. To our great relief, Dad turned down the idea. Mom never could understand our objections. If a strange family showed up on her front doorstep, Mom would have been delighted. She thinks everyone in the world is as nice as she is. We finally found a vacancy in the next town.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us.
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We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way.
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2017年6月浙江卷(狼口脱险)
第二节 读后续写(满分25分)
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
On a bright, warm July afternoon, Mac Hollan, a primary school teacher, was cycling from his home to Alaska with his friends. One of his friends had stopped to make a bicycle repair, but they had encouraged Mac to carry on, and they would catch up with him soon. As Mac pedaled (骑行) along alone, he thought fondly of his wife and two young daughters at home. He hoped to show them this beautiful place someday.
Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him. “Man, that’s a big dog!” he thought. But when he looked to the side, he saw instantly that it wasn’t a dog at all, but a wolf, quickly catching up with him.
Mac’s heart jumped. He found out his can of bear spray. With one hand on the bars, he fired the spray at the wolf. A bright red cloud enveloped the animal, and to Mac’s relief, it fell back, shaking its head. But a minute later, it was by his side again. Then it attacked the back of Mac’s bike, tearing open his tent bag. He fired at the wolf a second time, and again, it fell back only to quickly restart the chase (追赶).
Mac was pedaling hard now. He waved and yelled at passing cars but was careful not to slow down. He saw a steep uphill climb before him. He knew that once he hit the hill, he’d be easy caught up and the wolf’s teeth would be tearing into his flesh.
At this moment, Paul and Becky were driving their car on their way to Alaska. They didn’t think much of it when they saw two cyclists repairing their bike on the side of the road. A bit later, they spotted what they, too, assumed was a dog running alongside a man on a bike. As they got closer, they realized that the dog was a wolf. Mac heard a large vehicle behind him. He pulled in front of it as the wolf was catching up fast, just a dozen yards away now.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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The car abrubtly stopped in front of him.
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A few minutes later,the other two cyclists arrived.
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2016年10月浙江卷(森林遇险)
第二节 读后续写(满分25分)
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom. “I'm going to find a better spot for us to camp" and walked away.
With no path to follow,Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place. she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost.
“Tom! "she cried. "Help!"
No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.
Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落)somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy,she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now. Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake.
As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.
注意:
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2.应使用5个以上短文文中标有下划线的关键词语:
3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.
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It was daybreak when Jane woke up.
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浙江卷样题(银行抢劫)
A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day. As he walked along Park Avenue near the First National Bank, he heard the sound of someone trying to start a car. He tried again and again but couldn’t get the car moving. Arthur turned and looked inside at the face of a young man who looked worried. Arthur stopped and asked, “It looks like you’ve got a problem,” Arthur said.
“I’m afraid so. I’m in a big hurry and I can’t start my car.”
“Is there something I can do to help ” Arthur asked. The young man looked at the two suitcases in the back seat and then said, “ Thanks. If you’re sure it wouldn’t be too much trouble, you could help me get these suitcases into a taxi.”
“No trouble at all. I’d be glad to help.”
The young man got out and took one of the suitcases from the back seat. After placing it on the ground, he turned to get the other one. Just as Arthur picked up the first suitcase and started walking, he heard the long loud noise of an alarm.
It was from the bank. There had been a robbery (抢劫)!
Park Avenue had been quiet a moment before. Now the air was filled with the sound of the alarm and the shouts of people running from all directions. Cars stopped and the passengers joined the crowd in front of the bank. People asked each other, “What happened ” But everyone had a different answer.
Arthur, still carrying the suitcase, turned to look at the bank and walked right into the young woman in front of him.
She looked at the suitcase and then at him. Arthur was surprised. “Why is she looking at me like that ” He thought. “The suitcase!She thinks I’m the bank thief!”
Arthur looked around at the crowd of people. He became frightened, and without another thought, he started to run.
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As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop, stop!”
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The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur...
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Part 8、模拟演练
(2022·辽宁实验中学模拟预测)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I sat at my desk and stared at the screen. I waited patiently for ideas to come to me as I tried to think up exam questions for a test I would give my English students. My wife was off to a party somewhere, but I was not alone. Meghan, our 22-month-old angel, kept my company. Yet her plans seemed to go against mine.
She followed a daily routine that was both time-consuming and challenging. It included certain basic tasks: watching the fish, sweeping the floor in her room, climbing up and down on her bed.
At first I was able to concentrate on designing my test paper. But I was soon distracted. I had not expected the arrival of the “bib-bibs”—“bib-bibs” were birds. “Bib-bibs!” Meghan screamed excitedly, her eyes alive with expectation. She insisted that I come with her to the window.
“In a minute. Just let me finish this question.” I said. She pulled me by the hand (two fingers, actually) toward the window. I saw myself as a fool, being led to watch the “bib-bibs”. They sang and leaped back and forth on the lawn just outside our apartment window. Meghan was absorbed, but as I watched them, I still thought about my work. With her attention off me, I left the window and went back to my desk.
Five minutes later, she returned. She reached up to my keyboard and pressed a bunch of keys, adding a long line of scrabbled (乱的) letters to my question. I struggled to bring my annoyance under control. “No, thank you, Meghan. Daddy’s seen your work. I’ll do it myself.” She backed off.
注意:1.词数150字左右;
2.按照格式在答题卡相应位置作答。
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A few minutes later, she stood in front of me with her shoes and socks in her hand.
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I finally decided to take Meghan to the park.
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(2022·广东广州·三模)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
People use the proverb “seeing is believing” to describe situations where it’s hard to believe something is possible if you haven’t