Module 2 My family Writing 讲义 外研版八年级英语上册

八年级上册 书面表达 作文 范文（二）
八年级上英语 Module 2 写作稿 (第一稿)及分析
“My hometown and my country”
学习目标：
学会有条理、述因果的写作策略，掌握积累相关语言；
能根据所学和自身理解向他人介绍自己的家乡大连或是自己熟悉的一个地方；
能准确运用描述家乡的的语言；
能在教师的帮助下或以小组讨论的方式起草和修改作文。
写作任务：
北京有有悠久的历史和灿烂的文化，广州有丰富的特色美食，大连有优美的自然风光——这些无不吸引着众多外国友人。假设你是Lingling，你的英国笔友Lily打算来中国晚，她发邮件向你询问游玩的去处。请根据下面的内容提示给她回一封电子邮件，向她推荐一个游玩的地方。
内容提示：（1）Where is a good place to visit in China (2)When is the best time to go there Why (3)What can she do at that time
要求：1.中心突出，语意连贯、层次清晰，书写规范；
2.文中不得出现真实的姓名和校名；
3.70词左右（开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数）。Dear Lily，It’s great to hear that you are coming to China.
写作思路及策略：
一稿作文：
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[审题分析]
语篇类型：应用文—书信（电子邮件）
主题语境：人与自然——旅游胜地
写作要点：（1）Where is a good place to visit in China (2)When is the best time to go there Why (3)What can she do at that time
写作素材：游览北京的名胜古迹、品尝广州的特色美食、欣赏大连的自然美景等
语篇结构：三段式 总-分-总
注意事项：推荐的游览活动应与建议游览的时间一致
[作文支撑句]：
来自课文：
1.我来自剑桥，一座位于英格兰东部的美丽城市。
2.我的家乡尤其以它的大学而闻名。
3.那里的夏天从来不很热，冬天也不是很冷。
4.那里有许多古老的建筑和教堂可以参观。
5.无论所处何地，你都会发现英格兰的乡村是那么郁郁葱葱。
6.所以每年的任何时候都可以来看英格兰，但是记住要带一把雨伞。
拓展：
1.我来自大连，一座位于中国东北部的美丽城市。
2.我的家乡尤其以它的海边而闻名。
3.大连的夏天从来不很热，冬天也不是很冷。
4.大连有许多美丽的广场可以参观。
5.无论所处何地，你都会发现大连是那么郁郁葱葱。
6.所以每年的任何时候都可以来看大连，但是记住要带一副太阳眼镜。
[解决方案]：
1.开头段好句子：Now let me introduce my hometown to you.
So I wants to tell you a lot about it to share my furthest love to my hometown.
结尾好句子：
As a Chinese, I am always proud to my motherland. I am sure that China will become the strongest country in the world.
范文1：
It’s great to hear that you are coming to China. My hometown Dalian is a good place to visit.
My hometown , Dalian, is a beautiful city in the northeast of China, with a population of about 6 million. It’s especially famous for its beautiful seaside. There are lots of things to do and to see here. Tourists can enjoy themselves on the beaches or in the sea. They can enjoy the sunrise or find joy in swimming. The best time to come here is in summer, it’s very cool. Bring your sunglasses and swimming suit because you may need them most days.
In a word, Dalian gives a warm welcome to everyone from all over the world, so come here and enjoy yourself.
逻辑性 句式丰富性 选材新颖性 书写美观性
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范文2：
Dear Lily,
It’s great to hear that you are coming to China. In my opinion, Xi’an is the best place to visit.
Xi’an is an old city in the northwest of China and the best time to visit it is in Autumn. At that time the weather is neither hot nor cold and there are lots things to do there. You can visit the Terracotta Army and I’m sure you will be surprised at it. Also, you can walk along the Ancient City wall or even ride a bike in it. What’s more, you can enjoy the special food of Xi’an, such as roujiamo and youpomian.
Anyway, it is a great place. You can learn about the history of China and taste the delicious food at the same time. I hope you can enjoy yourself there.