2023-2024学年高二上学期期末读后续写专项课件(共22张PPT)

(共22张PPT)
阅卷反馈：（读后续写）
A.故事线：
1、学生对已给故事内容理解不到位，导致后面续写出现前后矛盾现象：1）把鸭子挖出来煮熟吃了。2）鸭子受伤，被带回家。3）把鸭子重新挖出埋掉。
2、没有设置故事的矛盾冲突和高潮，平铺直叙，缺少过程描述，直接陈述结果。
3、没有理清故事中的人物，出现了第一人称I的叙述。
4、人物主次不分，强化了sister这一角色。
5、故事场景缺失或不准确：例如在奶奶的卧室，在农场等，没有和前文场景进行呼应。
6、故事节外生枝，没有突出主干。
7、故事的主题偏题或没有揭示主题：honesty，而写成了和睦的家庭关系等。
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B. 情感线
1、情感线缺失，多数学生没有用到形容词、副词来描述人物的心理活动。
2、一些学生用到了下列的表达：
Tears filled his eyes.
Tears were welling up in his eyes.
With his eyes filled with tears. His face turned red.
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C. 语言运用
1、时态错用：一般现在时，过去完成时。
2、多数学生使用过多的简单句，缺少较高档的句式，例如，状语从句、定语从句，非谓语动词短语等。
3、太多的无意义的对话。
4、动词过去时的变形错误太多：hug、give、hide、tell等
5、动词搭配错用：knock at the door at 的漏写；say to sb sth;
6、抄写前一段文字，没有新的语言表达。
D.试卷整体情况
1、多数学生的书写潦草，有涂改过多现象。
2、少数优生作文从卷面到内容都体现出较高水平，只是占比太少。
During that hot summer, little Sammy and his sister Marie spent their vacation at their grandparents' farm. The farm was filled with fun and adventure, but one day, an unfortunate accident occurred. While playing, Sammy accidentally shot his grandmother's beloved pet duck with a slingshot(弹弓).Panicked,he quickly hid the duck behind a pile of old wood in the yard. He was afraid to tell his grandmother the truth, worried about being punished.
However, what he didn't know was that his sister Marie had seen the entire event. The next day, when Grandma asked Marie to wash the dishes, Marie seized the opportunity to shift the responsibility onto Sammy. She said, "Sammy told me he wanted to help in the kitchen today, Grandma." Sammy was shocked and confused because he had not said such a thing. Marie approached him and whispered threateningly, "Remember the duck " It was then that Sammy realized Marie had seen his secret and was now using it to make him do the housework she didn't want to do.
This situation continued for several cay.. Whenever there were household chores to be done, Marie would threaten Sammy with "Remember the duck ". Sammy felt an increasing burden of guilt and responsibility.
注意：续写词数应为80左右。
Finally, he couldn't bear the secret and pressure any longer and decided to tell everything to Grandma.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Continuation Writing II
A Duck
2024年2月19日
While writing
Prewriting
Post writing
Content
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行业PPT模板http:///hangye/
Prewriting
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1. Read for main idea
when
who
what
why
where
During that hot summer
Sammy, Marie, Grandma
a duck
Sammy shot the duck and hid it.
At a farm
in the yard
2. Read for main characters
Marie
Sammy
Grandma
3. Read for plots
What happened to the pet duck
para. 1
What happened to Sammy
Para. 2
4. Read for the theme
Solution
Theme
Ending
Conflict
Sammy killed a duck accidentally.
He hid the duck immediately.
Marie threatened him to do house chores several days.
He decided to tell everything to Grandma.

Honesty
While writing
02
Finally, he couldn’t bear the secret and pressure any longer and decided to tell everything to Grandma.
What would Sammy do next
What was Grandma’s reaction
What changes happened to Sammy
衔接
过渡
结局
Qs
When I take off my wig and my red nose, I’m still wearing a big smile, as I remember all the fun and laughter of the day.
When...(did), Sammy was...., as Sammy (did)...
When Sammy walked towards Grandma, Sammy was sobbing(抽泣), as Sammy was afraid of being punished for the accident.
衔接
Sentence structures
“What did you say to my animals ” said the emperor, astonished.
“What.... ” said Grandma, (adj.).
“What happened to my pet ” said Grandma, confused.
过渡
With tears of gratitude rolling down his cheeks, Peter said thankfully, “You’ve saved me today. I couldn’t thank you enough”.
With tears of ______rolling down his cheeks, Sammy said______, “ .....”
With tears of worry rolling down his cheeks, Sammy said in a low voice, “I shot the duck accidentally.”
过渡
It was along this road that Stephen’s grandfather built a simple basket by attahching a piece of plastic to a telephone pole.
It was.... that Sammy (did).
It was in the yard that Sammy (did)....
It was in the yard/farm that Sammy learnt the importance of honesty.
主题
After all, it really is true that “laughter is the best medicine.”
After all, it really is true that “honesty is the best...”
After all, it really is true that “honesty is the best gift.”
主题
Finally, he couldn’t bear the secret and pressure any longer and decided to tell everything to Grandma.
What would Sammy do next
What was Grandma’s reaction
What changes happened to Sammy
衔接
过渡
结局
Qs
When Sammy walked towards Grandma, Sammy was sobbing, as Sammy was afraid of being punished for the accident. Taking a deep breath behind Grandma, Sammy said in tears, “Grandma... I want to tell you something about your duck.”
“What happened to my pet ” said Grandma, confused. With tears of worry rolling down his cheeks, Sammy said in a low voice, “I shot the duck accidentally.” Then, all that they could see behind a pile of old wood was a rotten dead body with some white feather.
To Sammy’s surprise, Grandma comforted him with a warm hug. Sammy got relief. It was in the yard that Sammy learnt the importance of honesty.
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Post writing
03
Riew the rules
高级好用的句型
非谓语动词短语，+完整的句子
Looking at the polar bear’s bloody mouth, she nearly fainted with fright.
Knowing what had happened, his mother shed tears of joy and gratitude.
Touched deeply, the crowd clapped their hands violently.
Walking onto the stage, I could feel my palms sweating, heartbeat racing.
Extremely frightened, I felt my legs were trembling and my palms were sweating.