2023-2024学年高一下学期英语读后续写植树造林课件(共17张PPT)

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植树造林读后续写
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Learning Objectives:
① Read for the plots, emotion and foreshadowing
② Learn about the grading standard of Continuation
Writing
③ Write the following story
原文呈现
I met the Man of the Trees in summer ten years ago, when I was visiting Uncle Jita.
Those were difficult times. People were cutting down our forest, and there was often flooding. Sometimes our water supply was dirty. When our pump did have clean water, we had to wait in line for ages. When the pump wasn’t working, we had to walk five kilometres to the closest stream.
But I was happy. I was going to see my favorite uncle. When the day finally arrived, Dad drove me to Uncle Jita’s house and left. Once he saw me, Uncle Jita announced,“Tomorrow we’re going to explore a magical place. Here is my camera, Amy. You can take photos of what you see.”
The following day, we woke up and left early on a boat. The trip was exciting. But when we got off, there was ... nothing in front of us. “I don’t want to take pictures of this,” I complained.
Uncle laughed, “Start walking, Amy. I promise you’ll be surprised.” After some time, I could see the outline of a forest in the distance. A little closer, there was a man waving to us.
“That’s Kabir. The forest you see is his. He planted every single tree.” As we walked towards Kabir, Uncle explained that thirty years ago, the whole area was a wasteland. But one day Kabir decided to change all that and started planting trees. Thanks to him, part of the wasteland is now a paradise(天堂).
Uncle introduced me to Kabir, who had gray hair and a determined face.“Jita told me you like animals. Are you ready to see some ” he asked. “Of course!” I replied. We continued walking and soon were under the trees. I turned my head and was amazed at the difference between the two places. All because of the efforts of one man.
Like Uncle said, Kabir’s forest was magical. We saw deer, rhinos, and even tigers. During lunchtime, Kabir explained how, by planting trees, it was possible to stop the land from eroding(侵蚀).
Plots who
what
Emotion
Foreshadowing
Step1: Reading for Plots& Emotion& Foreshadowing
Continuation
Clarify the plots
story mountain
opening
build-up
climax
resolution
ending
Step2: Grading standard of Continuation Writing in NEMT
评分标准 具体要求
内容定档
语言逻辑
续写内容包含全部要点
语言表达具有准确性、画面感
逻辑清晰，结构紧凑，衔接合理
Step3: Writing---Contents& language& logic
Paragraph 1: " Hearing this, I turned to my uncle, “I think we can plant trees .”__________________________________________
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Paragraph2: .In the years that followed, people in our village worked hard to carry out plan.
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高考续写答题卡各9行
字数多≠情节多
谋篇布局 合理分配
一段5/6句 包含要点
语言丰富 衔接合理
注意
要求
第一、二段开头
回应段首句的名词或动词
语篇衔接技巧
根据衔接连贯理论，通过词汇的有效衔接（词汇同现或词汇复现）实现语义连贯和衔接逻辑。
第一段结尾
复现第二段首句的同词或同义词
第二段结尾
体现主题或回应伏笔
语义连贯
无缝衔接
主题升华
主题升华
对话描写
画面定格
动作描写
自然结尾
主题升华
技巧
回应伏笔
首尾呼应
ending
Eg:回应情绪伏笔
One possible version
逻辑---注意时间逻辑词
语言---注意用词表达丰富
语言---注意情绪细节描写
内容
语言
逻辑
Hearing this, I turned to my uncle, “I think we can plant trees too.” Uncle Jita nodded his head, responding me with an approving smile. Later that afternoon, we found ourselves equipped with planting tools, following Kabir to the edge of the forest. Instructed by the master, we learnt quickly to plough the soil, set the baby plant in place and water them with care. it occurred to us that we could use more helpful hands to make a greater difference. To achieve our idea, we decided to encourage more to join us.
In the years that followed, people in our village worked hard to carry out our plan. With the joint efforts, the trees grew bigger, providing home to more animals. Also, the risk of flooding was greatly reduced and the days are gone when people had to suffer from the water shortage. All of these have been pictured in my uncle's camera, since I planned to record the change. Now, at the entrance of Kabir's forest stands a billboard displaying my photos. And at the corner of the board, I wrote "Inspired by the Man of the Trees".
听到这里，我转向我的叔叔，“我想我们也可以种树。” 吉塔叔叔点了点头，对我报以赞许的微笑。那天下午晚些时候，我们带着种植工具，跟着卡比尔来到森林边缘。在专家的指导下，我们很快就学会了犁地plough，把幼苗放在合适的位置，细心地给它们浇水。我们突然想到，我们可以用更多援助之手，来做出更大的改变。为了实现我们的想法，我们决定鼓励更多的人加入我们。
在大家的共同努力下，树木越长越大，为更多的动物提供了家园。此外，洪水的风险大大降低，人们不得不遭受缺水之苦的日子已经一去不复返了。这一切都被我叔叔的相机拍了下来，因为我打算记录下这些变化。现在，在卡比尔森林（kabir）的入口处立着一块展示我的照片的广告牌。在黑板的角上，我写下了“来自种树人的灵感”。
1.Uncle Jita nodded his head, responding me with an approving smile.
2.Instructed by the master, we learnt quickly to
3.it occurred to us that
4.To achieve our idea, we decided to encourage more to join us.
5.With the joint efforts
6.the days are gone when people had to suffer from the water shortage
7.And at the corner of the board, I wrote "Inspired by the Man of the Trees".
8 .Grabbing the camera in my hand , I added with excitement .
9.they were stunned by the beauty of the forest
10." It was the trees that turned the place into a paradise !" We then explained .
美文背诵
11.Instead of cutting down our forest , we started to plant trees , which has eventually helped protect the soil and stopped the land from eroding .
12. With our joint efforts , our village is now surrounded by forests with blooming flowers , lively animals.
13. Witnessing the change of our village , we come to realize that only when we live in harmony with nature can we have a brighter future .
1.叔叔点了点头，面带同意的微笑回应我。
2.被专家指导，我很快的学习到
3.某人突然想到某事
4.为了实现我们的想法，我们决定鼓励更多的人加入。
5.在共同努力下，
6.人们忍受水资源短缺的日子不在了
7.在指示牌的一角，我写到，我被鼓励
8 拿着我手中的相机，我兴奋的添加。
9 他们被森林的美景所震惊。
10 是树把这个地方变成了天堂，我们接着解释。
11 代替砍树，我们种树，这最终保护了土地并且阻止了土地侵蚀
12 在大家的共同努力之下，我们的村庄被带有茂盛的花，生机的动物的森林所覆盖。
13 见证村庄的改变，我们开始意识到只有当我们与自然和谐相处我们才能用一个更明亮的未来。
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What seemingly useless efforts
will make a big difference
as long as you work hard
and never give up.
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