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fireworks
Hong Kong
shopping
4-D film
a parade
The day finally arrived. My parents and I left for the airport in the early morning. It took us about three and a half hours to fly to Hong Kong.
The next day, we went to the most famous theme park–(1) __________. I loved watching the interesting(2)_________ of Disney characters, and the Space Mountain ride was very (3)__________.
On the third day, we visited another famous theme park in Hong Kong—(4)____________.We watched the (5)_____________ and the bird show there. They were great fun.
On the fourth day, we visited some museums, and then we went (6)__________. My mother enjoyed that day most. She bought a lot of presents for our relatives and her friends.
We went to a seafood restaurant on the fifth day and had a (7)__________ meal. The food in Hong Kong was really nice.
We enjoyed this trip very much, and I hope I can visit it again some day.
Disneyland
parade
exciting
Ocean Park
dolphin show
shopping
delicious
Kitty’s best holiday
Writing is a step-by-step process.
Before writing
What to do before writing
While writing
After writing
My best holiday
How to write the narration (记叙文)
Think
narration (记叙文)
A trip on a holiday
Organize her ideas
Write about her trip
When, where, who,
what, how
Main points
Details
Kitty’s trip to Hong Kong
Organize
Main points Details
When The winter holiday
Where Hong Kong
Who My parents and I
What Visiting places of interests Disneyland —parade of Disney characters
—exciting Space Mountain ride
Ocean Park —dolphin show and bird show
Other activities Visited museums
Went shopping
Eating Delicious seafood
How Enjoyed the trip Interesting, exciting, fun, nice
Want to visit it again
Organize her ideas
Tip 1 : Fact file
Make structure clearer
(结构清晰)
Organize
Structure of Kitty’s article
The day finally arrived. My parents and I left for the airport in the early morning. It took us about three and a half hours to fly to Hong Kong.
The next day, we went to the most famous theme park–Disneyland. I loved watching the interesting parade of Disney characters, and the Space Mountain ride was very exciting.
On the third day, we visited another famous theme park in Hong Kong—Ocean Park. We watched the dolphin show and the bird show there. They were great fun.
On the fourth day, we visited some museums, and then we went shopping. My mother enjoyed that day most. She bought a lot of presents for our relatives and her friends.
We went to a seafood restaurant on the fifth day and had a delicious meal. The food in Hong Kong was really nice.
We enjoyed this trip very much, and I hope I can visit it again some day.
Para. 1
Para. 2
Para. 3
Para. 4
Para. 5
Para. 6
Introduce the time, the place and the character.
The key words & the topic sentences can be helpful.
When, Where, Who
Para. 2--5 Main body
Main
point
Details
Details
Main
point
Details
Main
point
Talk about the places to go, the activities to do and the food to eat.
What
Main
point
Write about the feelings.
How
Details
1. Introduction
When, Where, Who
2. Main body
What
3. Conclusion
How
Define
Writing is a step-by-step process.
Before writing
What to do before writing
Organize
Define
While writing
After writing
What to do while writing
When, where, who, what, how
用事实档案构思(Main points,Details)
确定段落结构
Think
The day finally arrived. My parents and I left for the airport in the early morning. It took us about three and a half hours to fly to Hong Kong.
The next day, we went to the most famous theme park–(1) __________. I loved watching the interesting(2)_________ of Disney characters, and the Space Mountain ride was very (3)__________.
On the third day, we visited another famous theme park in Hong Kong—(4)____________.We watched the (5)_____________ and the bird show there. They were great fun.
On the fourth day, we visited some museums, and then we went (6)__________. My mother enjoyed that day most. She bought a lot of presents for our relatives and her friends.
We went to a seafood restaurant on the fifth day and had a (7)__________ meal. The food in Hong Kong was really nice.
We enjoyed this trip very much, and I hope I can visit it again some day.
Disneyland
parade
exciting
Ocean Park
dolphin show
shopping
delicious
Write about her trip
The day finally arrived. My parents and I left for the airport in the early morning. It took us about three and a half hours to fly to Hong Kong.
The next day, we went to the most famous theme park–(1) __________. I loved watching the interesting(2)_________ of Disney characters, and the Space Mountain ride was very (3)__________.
On the third day, we visited another famous theme park in Hong Kong—(4)____________.We watched the (5)_____________ and the bird show there. They were great fun.
On the fourth day, we visited some museums, and then we went (6)__________. My mother enjoyed that day most. She bought a lot of presents for our relatives and her friends.
We went to a seafood restaurant on the fifth day and had a (7)__________ meal. The food in Hong Kong was really nice.
We enjoyed this trip very much, and I hope I can visit it again some day.
Disneyland
parade
exciting
Ocean Park
dolphin show
shopping
delicious
Tip 2:
正确的时态
Tip3:
时间状语
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Tip4:
形容词和副词
The day finally arrived. My parents and I left for the airport in the early morning. It took us about three and a half hours to fly to Hong Kong.
The next day, we went to the most famous theme park–(1) __________. I loved watching the interesting(2)_________ of Disney characters, and the Space Mountain ride was very (3)__________.
On the third day, we visited another famous theme park in Hong Kong—(4)____________.We watched the (5)_____________ and the bird show there. They were great fun.
On the fourth day, we visited some museums, and then we went (6)__________. My mother enjoyed that day most. She bought a lot of presents for our relatives and her friends.
We went to a seafood restaurant on the fifth day and had a (7)__________ meal. The food in Hong Kong was really nice.
We enjoyed this trip very much, and I hope I can visit it again some day.
Disneyland
parade
exciting
Ocean Park
dolphin show
shopping
delicious
leave sp 离开某地
leave for sp 动身去某地 leave Binhai for Nanjing
lt takes sb some time to do sth / sb spend time doing sth
three and a half hours / three hours and a half 三个半小时
enjoy ... most / ... is the best part of the day
Tip5:好的词组和句式
What to do while writing
Writing is a step-by-step process.
Before writing
Look
Organize
Define
While writing
After writing
What to do after writing
Add
Choose
Compare
选择正确的时态
时间状语,形容词副词
进行比较,选用好词好句
The day finally arrived. My parents and I leave for the airport in the early morning. It took us about three and a half hours to fly to Hong Kong.
The next day, we went to the most famous theme park– Disneyland. I loved watching the interesting perade of Disney characters, and the Space Mountain ride was very excited.
On the third day, we visited another famous theme park in Hong Kong—Ocean Park.We watched the dolphin show and the bird show there. They were great fun.
On the fourth day, we visited some museums, and then we went shopping. My mother enjoyed that day most. She bought a lot of presents for our relatives and her friends.
We went to a restaurant on the fifth day and had a delicious meal The food in Hong Kong was really nice.
We enjoyed this trip very much, and I hope I can visit it again some day.
Check and correct
1. grammatical mistake
(语法错误)
2. spelling mistake
(单词拼写错误)
3. missing word
(漏词)
4. word usage mistake
(单词使用错误)
5. punctuation mistake
(标点符号错误)
left
parade
seafood
exciting
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Writing is a step-by-step process.
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Compare
Organize
Define
While writing
After writing
What to do after writing
Add
Choose
Look
Check
Correct
Copy
To be a good writer!
检查
改正
誊写
Last month, my family and I had a trip to Wuxi.
Can you help me write a narration(记叙文)to record my experience
A trip to Wuxi
Make your fact file
Main points Details
When
Where
Who
What
How
Before Writing
last month
Wuxi
my family and I
went to Nanchan Temple
Xihui Park
went to Taihu Square
went to the centre of the city
went boating
climbed the hills
had lunch
watched the views
took many photos
go shopping
enjoyed the trip
exciting
A Trip to Wuxi
My family and I went to Wuxi by coach last weekend. We stayed there for two days.
On the first day, we went to Nanchan Temple by bus, and then we went to Xihui Park. here, we went boating, climbed the hills and had lunch.
After lunch, we went to Taihu Square to fly kites there. We watched the views of the famous Tai Lake and took many photos.
On the second day, we went to the centre of the city on foot to go
shopping. We bought some souvenirs.
We enjoyed ourselves. We'll never forget this exciting trip.
Add some details
It took us about four and a half hours to get there..
We enjoyed ourselves..
The views there were really fantastic!.
We also tasted some delicious food..
we took a bus to a famous Temple called Nanchan Temple ,.
We had a fantastic time in Wuxi.
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Writing
Items Comments Marks 自评
结构 (2’) 结构清晰 (introduction, main body and conclusion) 2 分
内容 (6’) 包含所有要点 (when, where, who, what and how) 6 分
语言 (8’) 好词好句 5 分
时间顺序清晰(first, second, ...) 1 分
语法正确 2 分
其他 (4’) 正确拼写, 字母大写 ,标点 2 分
书写整洁 2 分
总分 20 分
Assessment table
Preparations
search for information, book train tickets and the hotel;
Things to do
The first day, Shanghai Wildlife Zoo…
The next day, the Oriental Pearl TV Tower…
The last day, shopping on Nanjing Road, local food…
Feelings ……
假如你是李明,上周你和父母去了上海。根据表格提供的信息,
以My trip to Shanghai为题,介绍你的上海之行。80词左右。
开头已给出,不计入总词数。
My trip to Shanghai
Last week, I visited Shanghai with my parents for the first time.
Last week, I visited Shanghai with my parents for the first time.
Before the trip, I searched some information on the Internet. We booked the train tickets and the hotel too. We went there by train.
On the first day, we visited the Wildlife Zoo. I saw many wild animals, such as tigers, bears and zebras. I couldn’t stop taking some photos.
The next day, we went to the Oriental Pearl TV Tower. We climbed to the top of the tower. At the top of the tower, I enjoyed the beautiful views of Shanghai.
On the third day, we went shopping on Nanjing Road. My mother enjoyed the day most. I bought some presents for my friends. At last, we tried the local food there. It was delicious.
Shanghai has changed a lot over the past eight years. The roads are wider and the air is fresher than before. I want to visit it again some day.