专题04 2023浙江首考卷读后续写讲义及满分语料7类60句背默
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目录
真题呈现 1
答案解析 2
研读材料 3
思维拓展 3
谋篇布局 5
满分语料分类背诵60例 5
满分秘诀一、无灵主语（时间、地点、情感、自然现象、动作行为类名词作主语） 5
满分秘诀二、动作链（A and B型，A, B and C 型） 6
满分秘诀三、独立主格结构/with复合结构 6
满分秘诀四、非谓语短语（作主语、宾语、状语、定语、宾语补足语等） 6
满分秘诀五、介词短语位于句首 7
满分秘诀六、环境描写 8
满分秘诀七、主题升华句 8
范文背诵 9
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I was invited to a cookout on an old friend’s farm in western Washington. I parked my car outside the farm and walked past a milking house which had apparently not been used in many years. A noise at a window caught my attention, so I entered it. It was a hummingbird (蜂鸟), desperately trying to escape. She was covered in spider-webs (蛛网) and was barely able to move her wings. She ceased her struggle the instant I picked her up.
With the bird in my cupped hand, I looked around to see how she had gotten in. The broken window glass was the likely answer. I stuffed a piece of cloth into the hole and took her outside, closing the door securely behind me.
When I opened my hand, the bird did not fly away; she sat looking at me with her bright eyes. I removed the sticky spider-webs that covered her head and wings. Still, she made no attempt to fly. Perhaps she had been struggling against the window too long and was too tired Or too thirsty
As I carried her up the blackberry-lined path toward my car where I kept a water bottle, she began to move. I stopped, and she soon took wing but did not immediately fly away.
Hovering (悬停), she approached within six inches of my face. For a very long moment, this tiny creature looked into my eyes, turning her head from side to side. Then she flew quickly out of sight.
During the cookout, I told my hosts about the hummingbird incident. They promised to fix the window. As I was departing, my friends walked me to my car. I was standing by the car when a hummingbird flew to the center of our group and began hovering. She turned from person to person until she came to me. She again looked directly into my eyes, then let out a squeaking call and was gone. For a moment, all were speechless. Then someone said, “She must have come to say goodbye.”
注意：
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A few weeks later, I went to the farm again.
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I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared.
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A few weeks later, I went to the farm again. As my car neared it my thoughts drifted back to the moment when I rescued the hummingbird from the spider’s web. I rushed back to the deserted house. It was a great comfort that the original hole in the window was nowhere to be found. Leaving the house, I couldn’t help wondering how it was getting on now. Had it managed to find its way back home, or was it still out there somewhere struggling to survive
I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared. A flash of movement caught my attention. I turned around to see the same hummingbird hovering in the air. It seemed that the bird was waiting for me, its beady eyes locked on mine as if trying to convey some deep, unspoken gratitude. I felt a surge of relief and awe at the sight of this sound and grateful creature, and I knew that I would always cherish the memories we shared as I climbed into my car and drove away.
【解析】
【导语】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者被邀请去一个农场野餐，发现一个房子里有只蜂鸟被蜘蛛网困住了，作者把蜂鸟救了，把蜂鸟带出去的时候它迟迟不肯走，当作者走到一条布满黑莓的小路时，它开始动了，但是却不肯飞走，徘徊着，后来终于飞走了，当作者准备离开时，蜂鸟又飞到作者面前，好像是在和作者告别。
【详解】1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“几个星期后，我又去了农场。”可知，第一段可描写作者回到农场时所看到的和所想到的。
②由第二段首句内容“我正要离开，这时蜂鸟出现了。”可知，第二段可描写蜂鸟是如何对作者的以及作者的感想。
2.续写线索：想起救蜂鸟的时候——回到那个房子——想到那只蜂鸟——看见蜂鸟——蜂鸟的表现——作者的感想
3.词汇激活
行为类
①思绪回到……：thoughts drift back to/thoughts return to
②匆匆回到：rush back to/hurry back to
③盯着：eyes locked on/eyes staring at
情绪类
①宽慰：feel a surge of relief/feel relieved
②感激：grateful/thankful
【点睛】[高分句型1] As my car neared it my thoughts drifted back to the moment when I rescued the hummingbird from the spider’s web. (由as引导的时间状语从句和when引导的限制性定语从句)
[高分句型2] It was a great comfort that the original hole in the window was nowhere to be found. (由that引导的主语从句)
背景设定：
讲述者受邀参加在华盛顿州西部一个老朋友农场举行的烧烤聚会。讲述者在农场外停车，走过一个显然已经多年未使用的挤奶房。
事件起因：
讲述者注意到窗户处的噪音，于是走进去查看。原来是一只蜂鸟，正拼命地试图逃脱，身上覆盖着蛛网，几乎无法移动翅膀。
情节发展：
讲述者拯救了这只蜂鸟，发现她是通过破碎的窗户玻璃进入的，然后将她带到室外，安全地关闭了门。
事件高潮：
当讲述者打开手掌时，蜂鸟并没有立即飞走，而是坐着用明亮的眼睛看着他。讲述者帮助清理她头部和翅膀上的蛛网。
事件转折点：
在回到车边的路上，蜂鸟开始移动。她先是飞离，然后悬停在讲述者面前，彼此深深凝视。
情节回落：
在烧烤期间，讲述者向朋友们讲述了这次遭遇，他们承诺修理窗户。当讲述者离开时，蜂鸟再次出现，飞到他们中间，并再次直视讲述者。
事件结局：
几周后，讲述者再次访问农场。在同样的路上，他感到一种预期感。农场生机勃勃，一切都比以前更加充满活力。朋友们热情地迎接他，他们共度下午，分享故事，享受宁静的环境。窗户已被修理好，蜂鸟还在附近飞翔。当讲述者准备离开时，蜂鸟再次出现，飞向他并在他面前盘旋，仿佛在与他告别。
这个故事的核心是人与自然的深厚联系，以及生活中简单时刻的美丽和奇迹。讲述者通过与蜂鸟的这些特殊互动，体验到与自然的深刻连接，这将成为他永远珍藏的回忆。
1.cookout：
可以在文章第一段中描述“我”因为另一个cookout而再次访问农场。例如，可以写“我”被邀请参加另一次的户外烧烤，因此有机会再次访问这个地方。例：As I returned to the farm for another cookout with friends, I couldn't help but reminisce about the last visit and the extraordinary encounter with the hummingbird.
2.I parked my car outside the farm and walked past a milking house
可以在续写的第一段中描述“我”再次停车在农场外，并经过牛奶房的情景。例：I parked my car in the same spot outside the farm, the familiarity of the place bringing a smile to my face. As I walked past the old milking house, now fixed, I wondered if I'd see my tiny friend again.
3.A noise at a window caught my attention
在续写中，可以设置一个类似的声音或事件来吸引“我”的注意，从而自然地将“我”带回到与蜂鸟相遇的地点。例：Just as I was about to walk away, a soft rustling from the milking house caught my attention, echoing the past experience and drawing me towards it with a sense of déjà vu.
4.The broken window glass was the likely answer：可以在故事中提及牛奶房的窗户现在已经修复，这是对原始情节的一个直接联系和更新。例：Passing the milking house, I glanced at the window, now mended, a subtle reminder of how our last encounter began.
5.She was covered in spider-webs and was barely able to move her wings
可以在续写中回忆或提及蜂鸟先前被蛛网缠绕的情形【窗子被修复，但是蛛网有可能再生】。例如，在文章中可以提到“我”在农场散步时注意到蛛网，这让“我”回想起了那只小蜂鸟的第一次遭遇。例：Walking through the farm, I noticed spider-webs glistening in the sun, reminding me of the day I found the hummingbird trapped and helpless.
6.Hovering, she approached within six inches of my face
在故事中可以再次创造一种亲近的交流时刻，比如蜂鸟再次靠近“我”，与“我”进行非语言的交流。例：As I lingered near the milking house, a familiar fluttering sound approached, and there she was, hovering close, as if to acknowledge our shared past.
7.The bird did not fly away; she sat looking at me with her bright eyes
在续写中，可以再次描绘蜂鸟与人物之间的这种深刻的、几乎是理解的眼神交流。例如，在故事的高潮部分，可以让蜂鸟再次静静地坐在“我”的手上，用它那明亮的眼睛直视“我”。例：As I stood silently, the hummingbird settled on my open palm once more, gazing into my eyes with a depth of understanding that transcended words.
8.As I carried her up the blackberry-lined path
可以在故事中重新引入这条布满黑莓的小径，作为一个重要的场景。例如，可以描述“我”在同一条小径上发现或体验到一些新的或有意义的事情。例：Wandering down the blackberry-lined path, memories of carrying the tiny bird along this very route filled my heart with warmth and nostalgia.
段首句一：几周过后我又回到了这个农场。段首句二：我刚准备离开这时候那只蜂鸟出现了。
从段首句二我们可以得知蜂鸟不应该在第一段出现，我们从上文可以得知东道主答应我们会把窗户修补好，所以我这次来的目的大概率可以从对窗户修补的检查来入手，看他们是否履行了自己的诺言；目的也可以是我又来拜访老朋友，顺便看一下是否修补窗户。通常，按照正能量的方向发展，这个窗户应该是被补修好了。由于第一段是我再次来拜访，也可以穿插一些我与朋友之间的互动。第一段可以设置一个小矛盾，即一开始没有见到蜂鸟的失落然后第二段正准备离开时蜂鸟出现。也可以直接表达对东道主的感谢，不提到蜂鸟也可以。
第二段应该主要写我与蜂鸟之间的互动。可以通过对蜂鸟进行细节描写（外貌、动作等），再结合我的情绪与动作进行展开构思。结尾可以围绕好几个点展开，可以写蜂鸟再次与我告别，也可以定格在我与蜂鸟相知相惜。He（happy ending）和Be（Bad Ending）倒也都是可以的。点题可以从我与蜂鸟这段珍贵的相遇与回忆入手，也可以从人与自然的角度切入。
一个小提示点：上文描写蜂鸟用的是she，续写根据内容协同的要求也是要用she，而非it。
满分秘诀一、无灵主语（时间、地点、情感、自然现象、动作行为类名词作主语）
1.一瞬间的动作引起了我的注意。
1.A flash of movement caught my attention.
2.在似乎是永恒的事情之后，我意识到我必须走了。
2.After what seemed like an eternity, I realized I had to go.
3.一瞬间的动作引起了我的注意。一定是他！
3.A flash of movement caught my attention. It must be HIM!
4.这场神奇的邂逅让我周围的每一个人都肃然起敬。
4.This magical encounter left everyone around me in awe.
5.当我离开农场时，与蜂鸟的邂逅在我的脑海中挥之不去。
5.As I left the farm, the encounter with the hummingbird lingered in my mind.
6.这件事给我留下了深刻的影响，使我想起了生活的美丽
6.The incident had left a profound impact on me, reminding me of the beauty of life.
7.然而，当我一整天都没能见到这个可爱的生物时，一股悲伤的涟漪涌上了我的心头。
7.However, a ripple of sadness surged through me when failing to see the lovely creature the whole day.
8.当我的车靠近它时，我的思绪又回到了我救出这个可怜的小家伙的那一刻。
8.As my car neared it, my thoughts drifted back to the moment when I had rescued the tiny poor creature.
9.她的眼睛闪烁着好奇的光芒，她四处飞掠，以充满活力的优雅探索着周围的环境。
9.Her eyes sparkled with curiosity as she darted around, exploring her surroundings with an energetic grace.
10.当我走近房子时，一种好奇心席卷了我，不知道那只小鸟是否还在身边。
10.A sense of curiosity swept over me as I approached the house, wondering if the little bird was still around.
11.几周前，我偶然发现了这只蜂鸟，它被困在废弃的房子里，孤立无援。
11.A few weeks had passed since I stumbled upon the hummingbird, trapped and helpless in the abandoned house.
12.蜂鸟那细腻的翅膀和好奇的目光在我的脑海中徘徊，如同一曲甜美的旋律。
12.The memory of the hummingbird, with its delicate wings and curious gaze, lingered in my mind like a sweet melody.
满分秘诀二、动作链（A and B型，A, B and C 型）
13.她在我周围飞行，在我面前几英寸的地方盘旋。
13.She was flying around me and hovering just a few inches in front of my face.
14.她转过身来，直视着我，几乎就像在说“谢谢”。
14.She turned and looked directly at me, almost as if she were saying "Thank you".
15.我环顾四周，竖起耳朵，寻找蜂鸟的踪迹，但徒劳无功。
15.I looked around and pricked up my ears, tracing the signs of the hummingbird, but in vain.
16.我的朋友们热情地迎接我，我们整个下午都在分享故事，享受宁静的环境。
16.My friends greeted me warmly, and we spent the afternoon sharing stories and enjoying the serene environment.
17.我把车停在农场外，直奔挤奶房，希望破碎的窗户已经修好。
17.I parked outside the farm and went straight to the milking house, hoping that the broken window had been repaired.
满分秘诀三、独立主格结构/with复合结构
18.这只鸟似乎想引起我的注意，它那双圆睁的眼睛盯着我。
18.It seemed as if the bird was trying to capture my attention, its beady eyes settling on mine.
19.我转过身来，看到同一只蜂鸟在空中盘旋，它小小的翅膀飞快地拍打着。
19.I turned around to see the same hummingbird hovering in the air, its tiny wings beating rapidly.
20.这只鸟好像在等我，它的眼睛紧紧地盯着我，好像在试图表达一些不言而喻的感激之情。
20.It seemed as if the bird was waiting for me, its eyes locked on mine as if trying to convey some unspoken gratitude.
21.当我走过挤奶房时，我忍不住想起了那只小蜂鸟。
21.As I walked past the milking house, now with its window fixed, I couldn't help but think of the little hummingbird.
满分秘诀四、非谓语短语（作主语、宾语、状语、定语、宾语补足语等）
22.我感到一种敬畏和自豪感涌上心头。
22.I felt a sense of awe and pride washing over me.
23.离开家后，我忍不住想知道现在情况如何。
23.Leaving the house, I couldn’t help wondering how it was getting on now.
24.它是设法找到回家的路了，还是还在外面挣扎求生？
24.Had it managed to find its way back home, or was it still out there somewhere struggling to survive
25.当我走近房子时，一种好奇驱使着我，想知道小鸟是否还在身边。
25.I was driven by a sense of curiosity as I approached the house, wondering if the little bird was still around.
26.听到一声微弱的嗡嗡声，我立刻转过身来，看到那只熟悉的蜂鸟优雅地在空中盘旋。
26.Hearing a faint buzzing sound, I instantly turned to see the familiar hummingbird hovering gracefully in the air.
27.我花了一下午的时间探索农场，和朋友们聊天，希望能一睹这只小鸟的风采。
27.I spent the afternoon exploring the farm and chatting with my friends, hoping to catch a glimpse of the little bird.
28.我常常陷入沉思，回忆起她翅膀的轻盈拍动和她那深入我眼底的目光。
28.I often found myself lost in thought, recalling the gentle flutter of her wings and the way she looked into my eyes.
29.她悬停在我面前，似乎温柔地点了点头，认出了我，她的小眼睛闪闪发光。
29.Hovering in front of me, she seemed to acknowledge me with a gentle nod, her tiny eyes sparkling with recognition.
30.我赶回那所废弃的房子。窗户上原来的洞找不到了，这是一种极大的安慰。
30.I rushed back to the deserted house. It was a great comfort that the original hole in the window was nowhere to be found.
31.我很欣慰，也很感激我的朋友们把我的警告牢记在心，并采取行动保护蜂鸟。
31.I was relieved and grateful that my friends had taken my warning to heart and taken action to protect the hummingbird.
32.我对这次意外的访问感到惊讶和感动。这只小鸟似乎在感谢我救了她并确保了她的安全。
32.I was amazed and touched by this unexpected visit. The tiny bird seemed to be thanking me for rescuing her and making sure she was safe.
33.我忍不住赶回了那座废弃的房子，它不小心飞了进来，被困在那里，无助而绝望。
33.I couldn’t help hurrying back to the deserted house where it accidentally flew in and was trapped , helpless and desperate.
34.听到微弱的嗡嗡声，我立刻转过身来，看到那只熟悉的蜂鸟优雅地在空中盘旋。
34.Hearing a faint buzzing sound, I instantly turned to see the familiar hummingbird hovering gracefully in the air.
35.她又一次在我面前徘徊了几英寸，看着我的眼睛，把头从一边转到另一边，好像在确认什么。
35.Once again, she hovered a few inches in front of my face, looked into my eyes, and turned her head from side to side as if to confirm something.
满分秘诀五、介词短语位于句首
36.蜂鸟不时地出现在我的脑海中。
36.From time to time, the hummingbird flashed into my mind.
37.有一瞬间，我好像忘记了蜂鸟。
37.For an instant, I seemed to have forgotten about the hummingbird.
38.看到这个声音和感激的生物，我不禁感到如释重负和敬畏。
38.At the sight of this sound and grateful creature I couldn't help but feel a surge of relief and awe.
39.到达后，我走近挤奶房，注意到破碎的窗户已经完全修好了
39.On arrival, I approached the milking house and notice that the broken window had been completely fixed
40.过了一会儿，她发出一声吱吱叫，好像在向我告别，然后飞向远方。
40.After a few moments, she let out a squeaking call as if bidding me farewell and flew off into the distance.
满分秘诀六、环境描写
41.草儿轻轻的沙沙声，远处鸟儿的鸣叫声，构成了一首大自然的交响乐，蜂鸟飞走了，给我留下了一种苦乐参半的思念之情。
41. The gentle rustle of the grass and the distant call of a bird created a symphony of nature as the hummingbird took flight, leaving me with a feeling of bittersweet longing.
42.温暖的阳光和凉爽的微风拂过我的脸，使蜂鸟说再见的那一刻更加美丽，给我留下了一种渴望的感觉。
42.The warm rays of the sun and the cool breeze on my face made the moment even more beautiful as the hummingbird said goodbye, leaving me with a sense of longing.
43.当蜂鸟在我面前盘旋，表达她的感激之情时，蟋蟀的叫声和花儿轻柔的摇摆声更增添了这一场景的宁静。
43.The sound of the crickets and the gentle sway of the flowers added to the serenity of the scene as the hummingbird hovered in front of me, expressing her gratitude.
44.农场的自然美景被蜂鸟飞走的那一刻的情绪所升华，留给我的是一种苦乐参半的渴望。
44.The natural beauty of the farm was heightened by the emotions of the moment as the hummingbird flew away, leaving me with a feeling of bittersweet longing.
45.当我漫步在荆棘密布的黑莓小径上时，蜂鸟振翅的旋律会在我的脑海中回荡，永远与破碎的窗户联系在一起。
45.The melody of the hummingbird's wings would echo in my mind as I strolled down the thorny blackberry-lined path, forever associated to the recollection of the shattered window.
46.夕阳西下,在农场上洒下一片温暖的光辉，蜂鸟飞走了，带走了我的一片心。
46.The sun was setting, casting a warm glow over the farm as the hummingbird flew away, taking a piece of my heart with her.
47.当蜂鸟告别时，微风带着盛开的鲜花的芳香，留给我一种苦乐参半的思念之情。
47.The gentle breeze carried the sweet scent of blooming flowers as the hummingbird said goodbye, leaving me with a feeling of bittersweet longing.
满分秘诀七、主题升华句
48.这是一个真正温暖人心的时刻，永远不会消失。
48.It was a truly heartwarming moment and one that would never vanish.
49.这也使我懂得珍惜那些时刻的重要性，不管这些时刻多么微小。
49.It also taught me the importance of cherishing those moments, however small.
50.当我开车离开时，我知道那次相遇的记忆将永远伴随着我。
50.As I drove away, I knew that the memory of that encounter would stay with me forever.
51.当我不情愿地走向我的汽车时，这些问题压在我的心头。
51.These questions weighed heavily on my mind as I unwillingly made my way to my car.
52.当我爬上车开车离开时，我知道我会永远珍惜我们的回忆。
52.I knew that I would always cherish the memories we shared as I climbed into my car and drove away.
53.这次意外的重逢，就像是自然界关于所有生物相互连接的温柔提醒。
53.This unexpected reunion felt like a gentle reminder from nature about the interconnectedness of all living things.
54.那时我就知道，我有幸与一个美丽的生物有了一次非同寻常的邂逅，这是我永远不会忘记的。
54.I knew then that I had been blessed with an extraordinary encounter with a beautiful creature, one I would never forget.
55.在农场的神奇时刻让我意识到生命是多么的微妙和珍贵，以及我的行动是如何产生影响的。
55.The magical moment on the farm made me realize how delicate and precious life is, and how my actions can make a difference.
56.当我和蜂鸟道别，爬上我的车时，我知道我将永远珍藏那次特殊邂逅的记忆。
56.As I said goodbye to the hummingbird and climbed into my car, I knew that I would always treasure the memory of that special encounter.
57.同情心和同理心可以在所有生物之间建立一种联系和理解。
passion and empathy can create a connection and understanding between all living things.
58.蜂鸟最后的告别是一个苦乐参半的时刻，但我们相遇的记忆将永远存在。
58. The hummingbird's final goodbye was a bittersweet moment, but the memories of our encounter would live on forever.
59.蜂鸟的归来提醒我们，所有的生物都应该受到仁慈和同情的对待。
59. The hummingbird's return was a reminder that all living creature deserve to be treated with kindness and compassion.
60.这个故事告诉我们，小小的善举可以产生很大的影响，可以被生物所感激。
60. The story teaches us that small acts of kindness can have a big impact and can be appreciated by living things.
满分范文一
A few weeks later, I went to the farm again. On arrival, I approached the milking house and notice that the broken window had been completely fixed, with no sign of the danger that had once threatened the small bird. I was relieved and grateful that my friends had taken my warning to heart and taken action to protect the hummingbird. I spent the afternoon exploring the farm and chatting with my friends, hoping to catch a glimpse of the little bird. However, a ripple of sadness surged through me when not seeing the lovely creature the whole day. The night screen was to hang down.
I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared. She was flying around me and hovering just a few inches in front of my face. I was amazed and touched by this unexpected visit. The tiny bird seemed to be thanking me for rescuing her and making sure she was safe. I stood there, entranced by her beauty and grace as she flew circles around me. After a few moments, she let out a squeaking call as if bidding me farewell and flew off into the distance. As I said goodbye to the hummingbird and climbed into my car, I knew that I would always treasure the memory of that special encounter.
满分范文二
A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news. My social studies teacher burst into the classroom with an excited expression on his face, holding a piece of paper in his hand. “You won the writing contest!” he exclaimed, “And you're required to attend the award presentation this Friday afternoon!”I couldn't believe what I was hearing. Overwhelmed with joy and pride, the feeling of accomplishment washed over me, and I couldn't help but smile from ear to ear. All those hours of hard work, revisions, and self- doubt had paid off.
I went to my teacher's office after the award presentation. He greeted me with a warm smile and congratulated me on my well- deserved victory. I express my gratitude to him for pushing me out of my comfort zone and encouraging me to explore my writing abilities. Then when we were talking about my writing journey, he was so proud of my progress. From that day forward, I became more confident in my writing abilities. Looking back, that writing contest transformed my perception of writing and opened doors to a world of possibilities. It was a journey of self-discovery, growth, and the realization that I could excel in something I once thought was impossible.专题04 2023浙江首考卷读后续写讲义及满分语料7类60句背默
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目录
真题呈现 1
答案解析 2
研读材料 3
思维拓展 3
谋篇布局 5
满分语料分类背诵60例 5
满分秘诀一、无灵主语（时间、地点、情感、自然现象、动作行为类名词作主语） 5
满分秘诀二、动作链（A and B型，A, B and C 型） 6
满分秘诀三、独立主格结构/with复合结构 6
满分秘诀四、非谓语短语（作主语、宾语、状语、定语、宾语补足语等） 6
满分秘诀五、介词短语位于句首 7
满分秘诀六、环境描写 8
满分秘诀七、主题升华句 8
范文背诵 9
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I was invited to a cookout on an old friend’s farm in western Washington. I parked my car outside the farm and walked past a milking house which had apparently not been used in many years. A noise at a window caught my attention, so I entered it. It was a hummingbird (蜂鸟), desperately trying to escape. She was covered in spider-webs (蛛网) and was barely able to move her wings. She ceased her struggle the instant I picked her up.
With the bird in my cupped hand, I looked around to see how she had gotten in. The broken window glass was the likely answer. I stuffed a piece of cloth into the hole and took her outside, closing the door securely behind me.
When I opened my hand, the bird did not fly away; she sat looking at me with her bright eyes. I removed the sticky spider-webs that covered her head and wings. Still, she made no attempt to fly. Perhaps she had been struggling against the window too long and was too tired Or too thirsty
As I carried her up the blackberry-lined path toward my car where I kept a water bottle, she began to move. I stopped, and she soon took wing but did not immediately fly away.
Hovering (悬停), she approached within six inches of my face. For a very long moment, this tiny creature looked into my eyes, turning her head from side to side. Then she flew quickly out of sight.
During the cookout, I told my hosts about the hummingbird incident. They promised to fix the window. As I was departing, my friends walked me to my car. I was standing by the car when a hummingbird flew to the center of our group and began hovering. She turned from person to person until she came to me. She again looked directly into my eyes, then let out a squeaking call and was gone. For a moment, all were speechless. Then someone said, “She must have come to say goodbye.”
注意：
1. 续写词数应为 150 左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。
A few weeks later, I went to the farm again.
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I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared.
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【解析】
【导语】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者被邀请去一个农场野餐，发现一个房子里有只蜂鸟被蜘蛛网困住了，作者把蜂鸟救了，把蜂鸟带出去的时候它迟迟不肯走，当作者走到一条布满黑莓的小路时，它开始动了，但是却不肯飞走，徘徊着，后来终于飞走了，当作者准备离开时，蜂鸟又飞到作者面前，好像是在和作者告别。
【详解】1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“几个星期后，我又去了农场。”可知，第一段可描写作者回到农场时所看到的和所想到的。
②由第二段首句内容“我正要离开，这时蜂鸟出现了。”可知，第二段可描写蜂鸟是如何对作者的以及作者的感想。
2.续写线索：想起救蜂鸟的时候——回到那个房子——想到那只蜂鸟——看见蜂鸟——蜂鸟的表现——作者的感想
3.词汇激活
行为类
①思绪回到……：thoughts drift back to/thoughts return to
②匆匆回到：rush back to/hurry back to
③盯着：eyes locked on/eyes staring at
情绪类
①宽慰：feel a surge of relief/feel relieved
②感激：grateful/thankful
【点睛】[高分句型1] As my car neared it my thoughts drifted back to the moment when I rescued the hummingbird from the spider’s web. (由as引导的时间状语从句和when引导的限制性定语从句)
[高分句型2] It was a great comfort that the original hole in the window was nowhere to be found. (由that引导的主语从句)
背景设定：
讲述者受邀参加在华盛顿州西部一个老朋友农场举行的烧烤聚会。讲述者在农场外停车，走过一个显然已经多年未使用的挤奶房。
事件起因：
讲述者注意到窗户处的噪音，于是走进去查看。原来是一只蜂鸟，正拼命地试图逃脱，身上覆盖着蛛网，几乎无法移动翅膀。
情节发展：
讲述者拯救了这只蜂鸟，发现她是通过破碎的窗户玻璃进入的，然后将她带到室外，安全地关闭了门。
事件高潮：
当讲述者打开手掌时，蜂鸟并没有立即飞走，而是坐着用明亮的眼睛看着他。讲述者帮助清理她头部和翅膀上的蛛网。
事件转折点：
在回到车边的路上，蜂鸟开始移动。她先是飞离，然后悬停在讲述者面前，彼此深深凝视。
情节回落：
在烧烤期间，讲述者向朋友们讲述了这次遭遇，他们承诺修理窗户。当讲述者离开时，蜂鸟再次出现，飞到他们中间，并再次直视讲述者。
事件结局：
几周后，讲述者再次访问农场。在同样的路上，他感到一种预期感。农场生机勃勃，一切都比以前更加充满活力。朋友们热情地迎接他，他们共度下午，分享故事，享受宁静的环境。窗户已被修理好，蜂鸟还在附近飞翔。当讲述者准备离开时，蜂鸟再次出现，飞向他并在他面前盘旋，仿佛在与他告别。
这个故事的核心是人与自然的深厚联系，以及生活中简单时刻的美丽和奇迹。讲述者通过与蜂鸟的这些特殊互动，体验到与自然的深刻连接，这将成为他永远珍藏的回忆。
1.cookout：
可以在文章第一段中描述“我”因为另一个cookout而再次访问农场。例如，可以写“我”被邀请参加另一次的户外烧烤，因此有机会再次访问这个地方。例：As I returned to the farm for another cookout with friends, I couldn't help but reminisce about the last visit and the extraordinary encounter with the hummingbird.
2.I parked my car outside the farm and walked past a milking house
可以在续写的第一段中描述“我”再次停车在农场外，并经过牛奶房的情景。例：I parked my car in the same spot outside the farm, the familiarity of the place bringing a smile to my face. As I walked past the old milking house, now fixed, I wondered if I'd see my tiny friend again.
3.A noise at a window caught my attention
在续写中，可以设置一个类似的声音或事件来吸引“我”的注意，从而自然地将“我”带回到与蜂鸟相遇的地点。例：Just as I was about to walk away, a soft rustling from the milking house caught my attention, echoing the past experience and drawing me towards it with a sense of déjà vu.
4.The broken window glass was the likely answer：可以在故事中提及牛奶房的窗户现在已经修复，这是对原始情节的一个直接联系和更新。例：Passing the milking house, I glanced at the window, now mended, a subtle reminder of how our last encounter began.
5.She was covered in spider-webs and was barely able to move her wings
可以在续写中回忆或提及蜂鸟先前被蛛网缠绕的情形【窗子被修复，但是蛛网有可能再生】。例如，在文章中可以提到“我”在农场散步时注意到蛛网，这让“我”回想起了那只小蜂鸟的第一次遭遇。例：Walking through the farm, I noticed spider-webs glistening in the sun, reminding me of the day I found the hummingbird trapped and helpless.
6.Hovering, she approached within six inches of my face
在故事中可以再次创造一种亲近的交流时刻，比如蜂鸟再次靠近“我”，与“我”进行非语言的交流。例：As I lingered near the milking house, a familiar fluttering sound approached, and there she was, hovering close, as if to acknowledge our shared past.
7.The bird did not fly away; she sat looking at me with her bright eyes
在续写中，可以再次描绘蜂鸟与人物之间的这种深刻的、几乎是理解的眼神交流。例如，在故事的高潮部分，可以让蜂鸟再次静静地坐在“我”的手上，用它那明亮的眼睛直视“我”。例：As I stood silently, the hummingbird settled on my open palm once more, gazing into my eyes with a depth of understanding that transcended words.
8.As I carried her up the blackberry-lined path
可以在故事中重新引入这条布满黑莓的小径，作为一个重要的场景。例如，可以描述“我”在同一条小径上发现或体验到一些新的或有意义的事情。例：Wandering down the blackberry-lined path, memories of carrying the tiny bird along this very route filled my heart with warmth and nostalgia.
段首句一：几周过后我又回到了这个农场。段首句二：我刚准备离开这时候那只蜂鸟出现了。
从段首句二我们可以得知蜂鸟不应该在第一段出现，我们从上文可以得知东道主答应我们会把窗户修补好，所以我这次来的目的大概率可以从对窗户修补的检查来入手，看他们是否履行了自己的诺言；目的也可以是我又来拜访老朋友，顺便看一下是否修补窗户。通常，按照正能量的方向发展，这个窗户应该是被补修好了。由于第一段是我再次来拜访，也可以穿插一些我与朋友之间的互动。第一段可以设置一个小矛盾，即一开始没有见到蜂鸟的失落然后第二段正准备离开时蜂鸟出现。也可以直接表达对东道主的感谢，不提到蜂鸟也可以。
第二段应该主要写我与蜂鸟之间的互动。可以通过对蜂鸟进行细节描写（外貌、动作等），再结合我的情绪与动作进行展开构思。结尾可以围绕好几个点展开，可以写蜂鸟再次与我告别，也可以定格在我与蜂鸟相知相惜。He（happy ending）和Be（Bad Ending）倒也都是可以的。点题可以从我与蜂鸟这段珍贵的相遇与回忆入手，也可以从人与自然的角度切入。
一个小提示点：上文描写蜂鸟用的是she，续写根据内容协同的要求也是要用she，而非it。
满分秘诀一、无灵主语（时间、地点、情感、自然现象、动作行为类名词作主语）
1.一瞬间的动作引起了我的注意。
2.在似乎是永恒的事情之后，我意识到我必须走了。
3.一瞬间的动作引起了我的注意。一定是他！
4.这场神奇的邂逅让我周围的每一个人都肃然起敬。
5.当我离开农场时，与蜂鸟的邂逅在我的脑海中挥之不去。
6.这件事给我留下了深刻的影响，使我想起了生活的美丽
7.然而，当我一整天都没能见到这个可爱的生物时，一股悲伤的涟漪涌上了我的心头。
8.当我的车靠近它时，我的思绪又回到了我救出这个可怜的小家伙的那一刻。
9.她的眼睛闪烁着好奇的光芒，她四处飞掠，以充满活力的优雅探索着周围的环境。
10.当我走近房子时，一种好奇心席卷了我，不知道那只小鸟是否还在身边。
11.几周前，我偶然发现了这只蜂鸟，它被困在废弃的房子里，孤立无援。
12.蜂鸟那细腻的翅膀和好奇的目光在我的脑海中徘徊，如同一曲甜美的旋律。
满分秘诀二、动作链（A and B型，A, B and C 型）
13.她在我周围飞行，在我面前几英寸的地方盘旋。
14.她转过身来，直视着我，几乎就像在说“谢谢”。
15.我环顾四周，竖起耳朵，寻找蜂鸟的踪迹，但徒劳无功。
16.我的朋友们热情地迎接我，我们整个下午都在分享故事，享受宁静的环境。
17.我把车停在农场外，直奔挤奶房，希望破碎的窗户已经修好。
满分秘诀三、独立主格结构/with复合结构
18.这只鸟似乎想引起我的注意，它那双圆睁的眼睛盯着我。
19.我转过身来，看到同一只蜂鸟在空中盘旋，它小小的翅膀飞快地拍打着。
20.这只鸟好像在等我，它的眼睛紧紧地盯着我，好像在试图表达一些不言而喻的感激之情。
21.当我走过挤奶房时，我忍不住想起了那只小蜂鸟。
满分秘诀四、非谓语短语（作主语、宾语、状语、定语、宾语补足语等）
22.我感到一种敬畏和自豪感涌上心头。
23.离开家后，我忍不住想知道现在情况如何。
24.它是设法找到回家的路了，还是还在外面挣扎求生？
25.当我走近房子时，一种好奇驱使着我，想知道小鸟是否还在身边。
26.听到一声微弱的嗡嗡声，我立刻转过身来，看到那只熟悉的蜂鸟优雅地在空中盘旋。
27.我花了一下午的时间探索农场，和朋友们聊天，希望能一睹这只小鸟的风采。
28.我常常陷入沉思，回忆起她翅膀的轻盈拍动和她那深入我眼底的目光。
29.她悬停在我面前，似乎温柔地点了点头，认出了我，她的小眼睛闪闪发光。
30.我赶回那所废弃的房子。窗户上原来的洞找不到了，这是一种极大的安慰。
31.我很欣慰，也很感激我的朋友们把我的警告牢记在心，并采取行动保护蜂鸟。
32.我对这次意外的访问感到惊讶和感动。这只小鸟似乎在感谢我救了她并确保了她的安全。
33.我忍不住赶回了那座废弃的房子，它不小心飞了进来，被困在那里，无助而绝望。
34.听到微弱的嗡嗡声，我立刻转过身来，看到那只熟悉的蜂鸟优雅地在空中盘旋。
35.她又一次在我面前徘徊了几英寸，看着我的眼睛，把头从一边转到另一边，好像在确认什么。
满分秘诀五、介词短语位于句首
36.蜂鸟不时地出现在我的脑海中。
37.有一瞬间，我好像忘记了蜂鸟。
38.看到这个声音和感激的生物，我不禁感到如释重负和敬畏。
39.到达后，我走近挤奶房，注意到破碎的窗户已经完全修好了
40.过了一会儿，她发出一声吱吱叫，好像在向我告别，然后飞向远方。
满分秘诀六、环境描写
41.草儿轻轻的沙沙声，远处鸟儿的鸣叫声，构成了一首大自然的交响乐，蜂鸟飞走了，给我留下了一种苦乐参半的思念之情。
42.温暖的阳光和凉爽的微风拂过我的脸，使蜂鸟说再见的那一刻更加美丽，给我留下了一种渴望的感觉。
43.当蜂鸟在我面前盘旋，表达她的感激之情时，蟋蟀的叫声和花儿轻柔的摇摆声更增添了这一场景的宁静。
44.农场的自然美景被蜂鸟飞走的那一刻的情绪所升华，留给我的是一种苦乐参半的渴望。
45.当我漫步在荆棘密布的黑莓小径上时，蜂鸟振翅的旋律会在我的脑海中回荡，永远与破碎的窗户联系在一起。
46.夕阳西下,在农场上洒下一片温暖的光辉，蜂鸟飞走了，带走了我的一片心。
47.当蜂鸟告别时，微风带着盛开的鲜花的芳香，留给我一种苦乐参半的思念之情。
满分秘诀七、主题升华句
48.这是一个真正温暖人心的时刻，永远不会消失。
49.这也使我懂得珍惜那些时刻的重要性，不管这些时刻多么微小。
50.当我开车离开时，我知道那次相遇的记忆将永远伴随着我。
51.当我不情愿地走向我的汽车时，这些问题压在我的心头。
52.当我爬上车开车离开时，我知道我会永远珍惜我们的回忆。
53.这次意外的重逢，就像是自然界关于所有生物相互连接的温柔提醒。
54.那时我就知道，我有幸与一个美丽的生物有了一次非同寻常的邂逅，这是我永远不会忘记的。
55.在农场的神奇时刻让我意识到生命是多么的微妙和珍贵，以及我的行动是如何产生影响的。
56.当我和蜂鸟道别，爬上我的车时，我知道我将永远珍藏那次特殊邂逅的记忆。
57.同情心和同理心可以在所有生物之间建立一种联系和理解。
58.蜂鸟最后的告别是一个苦乐参半的时刻，但我们相遇的记忆将永远存在。
59.蜂鸟的归来提醒我们，所有的生物都应该受到仁慈和同情的对待。
60.这个故事告诉我们，小小的善举可以产生很大的影响，可以被生物所感激。
满分范文一
A few weeks later, I went to the farm again.
I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared.
满分范文二
A few weeks later, I went to the farm again.
I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared.
